/wg/ - Writing General - Sharing is caring edition.

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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

"Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction?"
Yes.

Previous thread: >>57816079, where the results of the Writing Rumble were revealed!
Congratulations to the winners, and thanks to everyone who participated.
/wg/ rentry: https://rentry.org/wgrentry/

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Story Anchor
Tell Mococo a nighttime story!

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap!
There were 3 stories in last thread!

An Incredible Bitch: The First Year's Meeting>>57829703
tags: Suisei, SFW, Short, Enemies to Lovers

An Incredible Bitch: The First Year's Test>>57881945
Tags: Suisei, Miko, SFW, Short, Enemies to Lovers

A small amount of tomfoolery>>57897783
Tags: NSFW, Baelz, Size Difference

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Let's give it another go around.
Tell me about a specific dynamic or scene from a fic that you would use to shill it to someone else.

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>>57929633
I'm the number one fan of cute shota learning about sex. ALS really played into the ignorant but not innocent angle of a little boy and by god, it made me diamonds at every moment.
The dynamic between the diseased slut and the loner virgin in Our Cures is probably the best example of banter/back and forth
The scenes in Match-Made were Koyori tries to catch Anon's attention
Any smut that includes the Hag's bush is in my eyes, a must read.

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>>57929633
I fucking love the dynamic in Our Cures but man do I have no idea how to pitch that to anyone outside of here given that the joke is reliant on Ayame rrats. Like don't get me wrong it was the best romcom I read last year but man I have no idea how to pitch that to anyone outside of the context of here.

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>>57929633
I very much enjoy the schizo moments in Heartbreak Tokyo. Sora is legit unnerving when she's talking to Anon. I also like the meeting of the Ksons in part 2.
I also love Marine in HF in general. She bounces off everyone really well.

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>>57929633
I really love how Holotursimo somehow manages to capture the thrills of driving hard and fast, Like, I could almost feel the same rush anon was feeling.
The Apple of Her Eye is a lot harder to shill to anyone due to the nature of its topic but I love how uncomfortable it is to read, but I also hate it for the same reason.

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>>57934776
Sakura Summer was better IMO. Specially because of the ending. I was one sniff short of tearing up because of how guttural it was.

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So going by the discussion from the last thread, it seems like we're preferring to have a prompt based contest (with the prompt being something open like "it's up to you to save Christmas").
But what about any other rule amendments? Do we go for an open awards based system or go for more categories? Impose a word count range/limit or stick to a word count minimum but with no maximum?

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Bit the bullet and made and outline spreadsheet for my scenes. I have to admit, it's pretty satisfying completeing a scene and being able to turn the cell green. And you can visually see how much progress you're making day-to-day.

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>>57938202
What fic is this for?

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>>57936785
I think before we do more limitations, we have to sort out the organization.
For starters, there should be different awards based on different genres. As someone pointed out, the hottest piece of smut is NSFW, but so could be a funny shitpost.
I propose sorting them out by category rather just pure SFW or NSFW contents. It's a lot less dark and white.
>Romance
>Fluff
>Shitpost/Comedy
>Horror/Dark
>Smut
>Depressing
>Abuse
>Adventure
>WTF(For weird/shock fics like gravity's rainbow was)
Etc

Then we could decide whether it is imperative to segregate them in SFW/NSFW formats. Hell, maybe the SFW romance could go against the NSFW romances.

On the other hand, adding limiters/conditions could be interesting. Limitation breeds creativity.
>Prompt based
>Under 1k words microfictions
>Poems

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>>57936785
There should be multiple awards, and stories should be eligible for multiple awards. That allows for multiple awards without strict categories spreading the fics too thin.
Since working with a contest-imposed prompt limits creativity and thus motivation, and many people got too ambitious last time, a maximum word count makes sense. It also keeps the entries more comparable.

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>>57938628
Ninisanni Scenario 2: The Harem End
The main route is miniscule, but it has much more freedom of choice about what to do. Triple the length of the original too.
Basically results in a lot of loose scenes floating around in the google drive folder.

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The feds confiscated the latest chapter of my fic

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>>57943950
I got thrown in jail for writing the continuation of my fic....

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Now would you speak of the devil, OP.
https://files.catbox.moe/tocxu4.png

plus a bit of a preview of what I wanted to work on next: https://files.catbox.moe/4mabtw.png

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>>57944318
before you ask, yes. I'm going to draw their tails tomorrow

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>>57944318
Getting futawa'd isn't my thing...

BUT

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>>57944318
So are you planning on making this a fic with those images included or are you just taking inspiration?

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>>57946538
I'm inspired enough so I definitely might use this as an excuse to start writing.

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You guys want another contest already? I’m still recovering…
If you want my two cents I think we should go with multiple awards based on genres like “best comedy” or “best smut” rather than categories that writers must adhere their story to. If it was a themed contest a single award for “best story” would be better but if we’re going with a prompt then multiple awards is better.
As for word limit, 10k max and 500 min is find imo. Maybe we can push the max a little further but we don’t have. The time limit should be increased though, maybe to a month and a half.

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>>57946743
I mean if you went back a thread you would see this is planing for a theoretical Christmas contest.

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>>57942245
Wooo!

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>>57946973
I know, I saw that.

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>>57944318
H-hot...

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Kobo stood over Ollie's sleeping form as she lie in bed. Earlier in the week she'd tried rousing Ollie but the zombie was such a deep sleeper she couldn't get through. Slept like the dead, so to speak. A smile crossed her lips, her breath hot in the cool night air as she looked upon Ollie's dainty face. She was so cute when she was asleep, so unlike the screaming banshee when she was awake. "You're mine, Ollie," Kobo whispered into the night "I'm keeping you." Squatting over the zombie girl's tummy Kobo released her bladder, her piss soaking the sleeping girls skin. Ollie didn't even stir. Kobo bit her lip and began sucking her fingers, watching Ollie's facial expressions shift as whatever dreams she was having begin to fill with warmth or rain or whatnot. It took only a few minutes, but to Kobo it was a lifetime. When she was done she took a bit of Ollie's covers and cleaned herself off, then gently stepped down off the bed and let herself out, the marking of Ollie done.

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>>57942245
I am so fucking pumped for this, the first one was fantastic.

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>>57948917
Wooo!
>>57952399
Thank you, that does mean a lot.
I'm as excited as you are for the release date. I'm having tons of fun writing it.
More time with the girls, more ridiculous antics, and new plotlines for everyone as their relationship evolves.
Harems are surprisingly tricky, but that's what makes them fun to tackle.

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>>57933859
Man HF Marine if amazing. I particularly like the fight everyone gets into in Chapter 7, really shows how much she's come to love Anon. AA come of as Gods Strongest Ichimin, which is funny because he's really a Zain.

I'm glad you like those scenes, they're a lot of fun to write and I have plenty more planned

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>>57956825
>all those spelling mistakes
Jesus fuck alright I'm going to bed

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>>57946743
There could be awards for specific things inside fics with user nominations, like "best paragraph" or "best orgasm".

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>>57959124
>"best orgasm"
>requires a picture of your cum tribute in order to vote

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CLEAR!

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Clear.

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What are you working on? Ask for some advice or simply generate some buzz and excitement for your new literary masterpiece!
Bonus Question: What's a fic you liked but couldn't really think of a good comment to respond with? Just mention it, maybe the writer will be flattered.

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>>57962577
Working on the next chapter of Balsa. Going to be a slow chapter that's going to give a window into everyone's minds before the next big plot point.

I took the feedback from last chapter and it's going to make this all the sweeter. I not only explored a bit more of implications of Civia's mind being occupied by others, but it's also given me a perfect opportunity to slow down and explore Mel's personality when not speaking to Ciyana or her cohorts as well as exploring Civia in far more detail, something I have neglected to do. It's making for an excellent bit of back and forth I think.

I know that anyone who's reading can probably predict the initiation is coming, but I am struggling a bit on what gift would best suit our MC. It needs to be a good counter while also not just being godmode.

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if the girls of hololive had Mortal Kombat styled fatalities, what would they do?

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>>57963123
Your oshi's fatality would be to suck my dick in front of you so that you die of heartbreak and humiliation

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>>57963156
whatever you say, buddy

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>>57963123
Shion would have her kick, except she doesn't miss it like a retard this time.

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>>57927229
You are on a date with Mumei.
Both of you are planning on drug raping the other.
How does this play out?

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>>57962577
I'm working on Kiara fucking Reine while Nerissa has to watch. She likes it though so it is more wholesome than mean. I'm not sure it will really be a full blown smut fic designed to get people off. Maybe it's more about the fun of the scenario and being over the top and comedic.
Bonus: Lion Taming. It's weird but I like it for being different than the usual fare.

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>>57964286
You drug each other and then have consensual sex when you're sober again in admiration of the other's efforts.

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>>57962577
Finished up some important background stuff for TSD yesterday, so now I'm back to work on Cover High. I was stuck for awhile trying to figure out how to handle the start of the next part, but I think I've figured it out. I'll never turn down an opportunity to use yet another of Pekora's alternate costumes.

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>>57962577
i finished my first draft of my fic but sadly looking back through it i sorta did everything wrong and need to rewrite 90% of it. I'm sure that's normal but it bummed me out a little.

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>>57927229
(You) having to be tard wrangled by a chuuba of your choice because you completely lose yourself in lust whenever you spot Miko and you want nothing more than to rape her and make her your onahole.

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>>57964949
Maybe you could ask for beta readers, Chloecuck. Rewriting so much can lead to a vicious cycle where you don't really know what you want and are never satisfied.

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>>57927229
You and <chuuba> have a cursed placed on the two of you, casuing you to share a nervous system with her. Every time you hit your arm, she feels the same amount of pain in the same spot. Every time she gets sick, you feel under the weather too, despite nothing being wrong with your body Every time she cums or you cum... well, you can figure out the rest. Can take any route with this.

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>>57929633
Same old, same old. Writing, rewriting. At least now the damn thing has an outline I'm satisfied with. Just keep on keeping on, and all that.

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>>57964949
Honestly, you should post it for feedback. You might be surprised what things people like (and don't like) about it, but with an emphasis on the former. It's true that once you get a feel for things you're less reliant on posting what I guess we can call 'proto-drafts' but your wording ('pretty sure that's normal') suggests you might be new to writing? If you're not in apologize and just ignore me. But yeah, if you do happen to be, then it's better to get more upfront feedback. Mostly because newer writers are a bit less good at sussing out good and bad, and often revise good things out of their draft.

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>>57966194
>>57966353
if you say so...but im a little nervous, let me give it a once over just to touch up the grammar mistakes.

and to answer your question, yes I'm fairly new to it. I always wanted to write but this is the first time I really pushed myself to do it.

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>>57966627
dw man, all of us were beginners once.

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>>57966627
just rip off the band-aid and release it to be viewed. there's no worse critic than your own mind, and if you keep your story bottled up you'll eventually come to hate it.

its awkward and uncomfortable and scary but you need to let others comb through it and offer criticism.

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talking about beta readers, how do you get one?
I don't want to bother AA........

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>>57968989
Bother the other anons that have shared their email adress, or you know just ask someone you know in real life.

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>>57969104
>Yeah dude can you take a look at my self-insert vchuuba smut fic and tell me what you think?
nta but I'd rather kill myself than do that.

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>>57968989
hit up HJanon. the dude is a fucking machine and will give you honest advice on how to improve and move forward.

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>>57968989
i'll beta read for you if you want, though i'm not sure how that's different from just giving feedback through the thread. i always like sperging out about writing, and it helps me with my own. if you don't mind kinda rambley takes, that is. but i do think i give p good advice

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>>57970641
oh i see it's an email thing.
[e-mail]

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>>57968989
I'd be willing like >>57969778 said, since I do that for a few people I know that write stuff anyway, but I don't really know how to go about putting an email up contact. Do I just put it in a chapter posting temporarily?
Does AA already have my email??? Is his archiving powers that intense!?

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>>57971502
She's a very good archiver HJ-anon.

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>>57927229
A fic about your younger sister Suisei getting jealous because you're smitten by your older cousin Ao.

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>>57968989
The guy who hosted the contest said he's cool with being a beta reader if you use the contest email.

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>>57927172

Shameful Desire

Tags: Sakamata Chloe, NSFW, Netorase, Cosplay, mild humiliation play

Anon's Girlfriend, Chloe got a new job a little while ago. While one part of him is ashamed of his newly found desires, the other side is can't help but lose himself to the dark desires of getting to see a whole new side of his beloved.

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>>57971502
You can do that, yeah. I don't remember if HJ has a landing page but you could also put it there.
>>57971608
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>>57972812
anon the link

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>>57969300
One of my friends who's also into chuubas read one of my fics
He then sent me like 30 messages that were just Fauna crying emojis because he got mindbroken.
Was a pretty good day.

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>>57972812
>Chloecuck cucked us out of his story
Damn bro, you're taking netorare to a whole another level.

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>>57927172
Shameful Desire

Tags: Sakamata Chloe, NSFW, Netorase, Cosplay, mild humiliation play

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRu5He2YlIUbIMmogWoAX7jAlY2zkDjKNxiOD4Sqsbrh2Lux7Hl5S6C2gq753GkMbtl33bBLEWL0SuO/pub

Anon's Girlfriend, Chloe got a new job a little while ago. While one part of him is ashamed of his newly found desires, the other side can't help but lose himself to the dark desires of getting to see a whole new side of his beloved.

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>>57972960
Image?

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>>57972960
this time I cucked myself out of the pic...this is a bad sign...

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>>57973009
Don't worry, Anon. I fuck up my image uploads too.

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>>57973009
It's okay dude, even I still mess up my posts from time to time, and I've been here for little over 2 years.

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>>57968989
I guess I can drop mine as well, for anyone that's interested.
[e-mail]

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>>57973045
>>57973047

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>>57972960
Brave of you to post the story publicly for more feedback, instead of just sending it to a few folks via email first!
Your character arc makes me proud (and makes me want to headpat you while I fuck your girlfriend).

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>>57973138
Will you really? Got any examples?

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>>57972829
Good point. I just updated the series landing page for HJ now with an email at the bottom for any sort of contact purposes. If anyone ever has any questions or would like me to beta read something for them, please feel free to shoot me an email. Also if I haven't responded in a few days, just call my ass out in the thread.

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at this point we may as well just throw everyone's emails together into a single doc for convenience's sake

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>>57973416
And miss out on free advertising? That's not very cash money of you anon.

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>>57972960
It says
>Chloe is getting fucked right now! And I’m sitting here jerking off!
but then a few paragraphs later it says
>Had she not called I probably would have started touching myself…
Is this a continuity error? Because you were touching yourself before she called.

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>>57973416
If that's gonna be the case, then here's mine: [e-mail]

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>>57973626
I mean it wouldn't be just a list of random emails. they'd have to be labeled so people know who's who

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>>57972960
hey anon. i read about... a quarter to a third of the story and i want to say i think you're a pretty damn good writer. i have some bias here because i have a strong preference for a faster rhythm, but i think your prose is breezy and punchy in a way that makes it eminently readable. unironically this is the kind of prose that sells really well, like in young adult novels, though the whole finding a publisher game is kinda fucked up right now. anyway, just know that there are web novels that make loads and loads of cash that are basically very very inferior versions of this prose.

that said, not only do i not only not read nsfw fictions, i also have a really bad time with ntr. an ex of mine cheated on me in a pretty painful way and everytime i encounter it, it still makes me feel like throwing up. i'm not casting shade on the fetish, but i can't personally handle it so i apologize i can't give you more thorough feedback. this is really good though. it's honestly very impressive to me, and i think you should be not just very proud of yourself, but imo you have a basic knack for writing that you should be excited about.

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>>57973416
Ok.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTkOKmppoWTortR1oGdYAmQlML--2QMvi5GN5BunO9hBm-oSQp4mls6zdpr3t5leaP0kczs6744qK11/pub

Anons will be added/removed/renamed at their request.

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>>57974879
Should this be added to the rentry too?

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>>57974607
i guess just to give a short rundown of why i think so, based off what i read

1. you have a good sense of scene length. seems trivial, but it's not. the length of the aquarium and rushing home, and then the progression of the maid cafe stuff to the delinquents coming in is very very tight.

2. an intrinsic sense of escalation. again, good instincts in how you build up the cafe scene, punctuated moment of chloe shriek when she first gets fondled, and the basic rhythm of it being driven by the protagonist's increasingly shameful and excited monologue.
3. good sense of setup payoff, which may be the most important thing. not sure if this was intentional, but when you first hear his mind in italics going "mooore!" i thought he was just trying to peek at more of chloe's cleavage. it's kind of an interesting 'oh shit' moment when you realize what he's hearing in his head. like, for a second you think it might be him thinking about his own sex with her. but then it's not. and uh, fwiw, i did not really read the premise of the story before with the av stuff, so that reaction will be specific to people who didn't know that.

in general though, the contrast of the lovey dovey aquarium date with the salacious and painful job, the dread building up as payoff for the gut punch... it's well done. maybe i'm abusing this word, but i think it just shows really good instincts.

yeah those are basically my impressions. hope this helps

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>>57974271
I suppose a centralized area of the archive that is like "hey! here is a list of emails you can reach out to for any reading related requests or such" isn't a terrible idea. The labeling would also address the idea that if a person wanted, they could reach out to someone for feedback and suggestions based on the type of fic they primarily like to write. Like I ain't gonna know shit about about a lot of different genres, but that doesn't mean I sure as hell won't try to help though.

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>>57973729
somehow seeing an mgs2 reference after all these years makes me smile

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>>57974984
>>57974607
thank you so much! i can't even begin to describe how I appreciate your input.

I'm sorry it had to be towards a subject matter that has such a negative impact on your life. I do have another project in the works that's not only SFW, its a fluff fic so hopefully that'll be easier for you to digest

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>>57972960
This made me feel bad for you and Chloe. Doesn't make it bad, but I thought it would be more about how into the cucking they are

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>>57975383
i'm looking forward to it man. and no prob at all, i need to stop being a pussy about it anyway. but yeah, this is why it's always good for beginners to seek out early feedback. it's not just that oh constructive criticism can make a piece better, but because beginners don't know what they don't know they also don't have a good sense of their own talents. i really do think you're a natural and that, if you wanted, pursuing writing seriously is something worth considering. i mean, i'm basing this off of like 500? words, but whatever, at the risk of looking stupid i'll go out on a limb and say it was enough to give me a sense of you

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>>57973696
>first the author cucks us out of his story
>then he cucks himself out of the picture
>then he, in addition to actually cucking the MC, even retcons his masturbation, thus making him double cucked
This is becoming too meta, we're reaching an overload of post-modernism.

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>>57976711
after that anon pointed it out I fixed it. the timeline has been saved and now he's just single cucked

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>>57972960
You know... I think I understand why actual NTR works avoid subtlety and nuance even outside of the medium of them being porn because fuck this was depressing. Like goddamn this felt like chapter 1 to either the most depressing NTR series ever, a gutwrenching romance, or perhaps both at the same time.
Christ, I expected this to be like domme and cuck play, or even /trash/ style abusive porn relationship. This just feels like two people trapped in a terrible situation caused by their own desires. Because from a narrative point of view this kind of relationship only ends in tragedy.
I know you probably just want to write more fetish stuff but consider making a tragedy fic. I think you unironically have the writing chops to do one.

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>>57973282
Alright, here you go. Something I left in the back of the burner.

>>57927172

The Sheep's Need for Breed: My Lioness friend can’t be this prudish!

https://rentry.org/t5svw

Tags: Tsunomaki Watame, Shishiro Botan, NSFW, impregnation, rough sex.

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>>57964616
A fellow peko princess chad, I would expect nothing less. I can't wait to bust out this outfit as well in my own story, the baking will be worth the wait for it too.
IMAGINE the pekomama herself in her own royal garb.
Now imagine the dress hiked up. Now imagine it on the floor. You're getting the idea now.

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>>57979703
The concept sounds familiar, did you post or discuss this before? It's really hot.

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>>57980384
Yup. Unanchored and banished to the ass end of the WIP folder

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>>57972960
I hope you make a continuation to this, this was very good as a first fic and god does the ending leave me wanting more.

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>>57985211
Who summons me

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>>57972960
Interesting choice to write this in first person? Why did you name the protagonist Anon but decide against a second person self insert?

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>>57986605 (me)
Not meaning to come across as rude, I just want to know.

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>>57973171
>Your character arc makes me proud (and makes me want to headpat you--
Thank you anon, I'm glad to hear you sa--
> --while I fuck your girlfriend).
what?

>>57975619
once again. I appreciate your, an everyone else's words of kindness. once I hone my skills it's definitely something I'd love to pursue.

>>57975489
>>57978311
>>57981106
Thank you for reading. I do have a sequel planned, so please look forward to ti.

>>57986605
>>57986871
the first person angle just made more sense to me when I started writing, the idea was to go into the head of a man who's a cuckold. I originally planned for the mc to be named and the guy in the AV would have been named "anon" but for whatever reason it made more sense in my head to make the mc "Anon"

and no worries, I didn't think it was rude. i hope you enjoyed it none the less

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>>57988251
Sorry, I won't fuck her if you don't like it.

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>>57988312
in all honesty your post got a good laugh out of me, thank you for your kindness

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>>57972960
The end of your fic has a youtube link that only Youtube Premium users can access

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>>57971665
>She even gets her haircut to try and appeal to you

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>>57990071
>"Yeah I saw, but I liked it better longer to be honest"

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>>57990575
Wasn't there a prompt where (You) gaslight Suisei because she has short hair and you only pay attention to her again when it goes back to its normal length?

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>>57990575
That's what she said

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>>57979703
>Another story about a hag making her husband impregnant her coleagues
PLEASE tell me there's gonna be more parts, I loved it

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>>57990859
You mean this >>43841420 ?

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>>57991922
That's the one! I wouldn't mind seeing it as a full on story even if its a one shot because I really want to see Suisei suffer for a bit.

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>>57964432
Yuri-sama, I eagerly await your fic.

[Anonymous No.]

>>57990071
>>57990859
>>57991922
This but in reverse. One chuuba being your bro and then one day treating her like a princess and gaslighting her

[Anonymous No.]

>>57974879
Add me. I don't mind the occasional bit of proofreading.
[e-mail]

[Anonymous No.]

>>57995415
...is that your actual throwaway email?

[Anonymous No.]

>>57996371
Yep, it sure is. Drop me an email saying hi.

Is it so surprising denizens of 4chan would have offensive throwaways?

[Anonymous No.]

>>57991163
>Another
Huh? Where's the first?

[Anonymous No.]

>>57996561
He's probably tlaking about PD;PT

[Anonymous No.]

>>57974879
[e-mail]
i do not command mastery of the english language but i can be a beta reader

[Anonymous No.]

>>57996483
somehow i'd never actually encountered an offensive email name so it caught me off guard. that's really funny though

[Anonymous No.]

Damn Ao is exactly Suisei's type huh? I should keep an eye on Ao, I feel like there's a lot of potential there

[Anonymous No.]

>>57972960
I hope the sequel is the rest of HoloX murdering Anon and saving Chloe.

[Anonymous No.]

>>57997530
She LOVES androgynous characters. I'm pretty sure she's still crazy about Chili/Rika from Pokemon. I also share in her taste so bless you if you're working within that realm

[Anonymous No.]

>>57997630
this but they fail, get caught and turned into cocksleeves

[Anonymous No.]

>>57997530
>>57997820
Sounds like Ao x Suisei, with Miko as the cuck.

[Anonymous No.]

>struggling with scene progression
>over 2k words later, feel like something isn't quite right
>decide to see it through anyway and in the worst case, you save it for a different time and place
>mfw I persevered and now it's looking great
We are so back.

[Anonymous No.]

>>57974879
[e-mail] someone PLEASE send me an email so my inbox isn't entirely protonmail ads

[Anonymous No.]

>>57997960
There's so many permutations you could do.
For smut you could do:
>Yuri
>Futa Suzy fucking Ao or Futa Ao getting reversed raped
>Add in some Miko cuckqueen stuff if you want or some other bonus fetishes.
For a regular fic you could do
>Drama fic about being jealous that Suisei is fauning over Ao
>Comedy fic about having to keep Suisei on a leash around Ao

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>>57999089
>Comedy fic about having to keep Suisei on a leash around Ao
>Be Suisei's manager/boyfriend/brother/all of the above
>Happen to cross paths with ReGloss their first day there before your charge/girlfriend/sister/all of the above, and notice Ao is prime Suisei-bait
>Spend your time trying to prevent Suisei from meeting her because you know she'll go fucking insane and might scare her off

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>>57972960
W-Woah... really impressed with this, Chloecuck. Really conveys that visceral, muddled feeling of anxiety mixed with arousal a sub gets when thinking about their SO getting pounded. Especially loved how Chloe leaned a little harder into the play than she was naturally comfortable with to get her boyfriend off most effectively and returned to normal afterwards. The hottest part of this kind of thing to me is both partners gradually getting more and more used to that slutty and severe side of her, so despair gives way to arousal on the cuck's side and the girl gets more and more comfortable being a tease as she realizes he's not gonna pull away from her. Would love to see the conversation that led to them starting this arrangement in the first place if you ever make a continuation.

[Anonymous No.]

>>57999089
>Futa
Why bother making Suisei or Ao futas. They don't have tits so them having a cock just turns them into femboys.
Though more seriously
>Drama fic about being jealous that Suisei is fauning over Ao
This sounds like love triangle bait where first you get jealous but then find out you're Ao's type and it gets awkward because you find yourself falling for her just like you did for Suisei.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58000329
damn the file name, it matters not

I WANT TO LICK EVERY INCH OF THIS BODY AND GIVE IT THE WORSHIP AND REPSECT IT DESERVES

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>>58000329
nta but for me a good portion of the appeal of futa is the sort of 'hidden predator' appeal, the whole switcheroo thing. Femboys don't have that same charm.

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>>58001258
>Femboys don't have that same charm
If you're short-sighted, maybe.
Most of the appeal of femboys to me is having what should be a weak and submissive partner turning things around and dominating the fuck out of a girl.
Asserting their proper place as a man, despite their appearance suggesting otherwise.

[Anonymous No.]

>>57980384
>>57991163
Thanks for the read!
Dunno about a second part. I thought of Flare and elf-degrading sex but don't feel like it.

[Anonymous No.]

>>57964286

That would be really fucked up, but sort of hilarious. You watch each other intently as you each drink at the same time, then your night slides into chaos as you both quickly become delirious and fall over. You're both furious at each other when you wake, but as neither of you have a leg to stand on, you're forced to let it go.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58004251
>Makeup hatefucking?
>....Hum

[Anonymous No.]

>>57974879
[e-mail]
>>57998781
You are welcome.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58000329
Shit that drama fic sounds real good. Also now that I think about it, there hasn't been much if any love triangle stuff in the archive has there?

[Anonymous No.]

I am cum

[Anonymous No.]

>>57970749
>>57973138
>>57973729
>>57995415
>>57997141
>>57998781
>>58004559
Can I get some labels? Like, stories you've written, or an [x]anon moniker? Without any identifiers I have to just come up with my own dumb names for you

[Anonymous No.]

>>58008355
Do we really need names...? I was thinking it'd just be a list you could just import into your email and send to all.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58009122
I'd imagine someone looking for a reader would want to be a little more selective. Also having an idea of what stories an anon has written can give you a better idea of what experience they might have. Also there will undoubtedly be some diffusion of responsibility if everyone on this list is being asked at the same time to proofread a story for someone without any personalization to the message.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58009122
It's better to know who's who in case you want to contact someone in particular.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58009311
>>58009232
>>58008355
All in favor drop your most prominent works or such.

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>>58009122
Yes? Are you the same person that was earlier advocating for a totally anonymous list for beta reader approval? I understand only being willing to put your hat in the ring with a certain level of distance if that's what you're personally comfortable with, but on a macro scale that's retarded. It very much matters who's giving feedback on what, like, it's silly to pick a random name and expect them to be an accomplished series writer with a lot of experience rather than some literal who ESL lurker. I'd imagine if you join in anonymously, you're going to get a lot less bites than everyone else.

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>>58008355
I wonder who HJ anon is... What has he written?

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>>58005049
I don't think we've ever had any true love triangles (i.e the kind where everyone knows they're in one) closest thing we've gotten would be like the situation between You, Ayame and Aqua in Our Cures but that situation was basically side dressing given that Aqua was basically just motivation who gets rejected. Maybe you can count Foxes over ducks but that's straight up just cheating with only a bit of that split feelings love triangles use.

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>>58012351
Wasn't one of the main points of Sad Genuine Smile how people dealt with loving multiple people?

[Anonymous No.]

>>58008355
>[e-mail]
I'll go with HoloslaviaAnon. I actually dropped my email because I'm also looking for a beta reader who could go over my work once the Egregiously Forbidden Relationship rewrite is done.
>>58009890
https://rentry.org/HSAnon

[Anonymous No.]

>>58008355
[e-mail], Tower of Tattle, Stilted Stellar, call me whatever

[Anonymous No.]

>>58009890
>[e-mail]
I'm Auntieanon, I also wrote FacelessDegenerates for the rumble and quite a handful of SFW and NSFW oneshots.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58012529
I genuinely forgot to count sad genuine smile as a love triangle mostly because it's much more focused on the cuckquean thing... also because Coco makes it a a weird love graph rather than just a triangle.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58008355
>[e-mail]
A Predator's Touch, The Coyote That Packs, Treasure Toils!, Bleeding of Affection
Any nickname is fine.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58014503
Well I doubt you'd like to be called PredatorAnon, would you?

[Anonymous No.]

>>58009890
To help this guy out >>58012340
>[e-mail]
I'm HJAnon, I write holojourneys believe it or not. I like writing, adventures, hags, and overcoming adversity with teamwork and love.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTusE1zMaWb9jlMkAF0bnIlwyqwjXi3MiZGQw6BxcV-EsaU8e3W9IaEImzcrf6c-yQUiIe7Zm7XmkEE/pub

I also wrote Kurokami's errand boy which I'll definitely get back to someday.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58015525
>HJAnon wrote HoloJourneys
....Nah, that's a stretch.

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>>58013743
>Stilted Stellar
I have to ask, even if development on that is on the backburner, have you decided if you're going for magical girl elements or not? Because even at the conceptual stage that kind of determines whether this turns out to be a chuuni fantastical drama or something more grounded and realistic.

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>>58014613
You know, I can't say that I do.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58013065
>>58013904
>>58014503
Updated.
>>58015525
No way. You're shitting me. Got you in there too.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58015525
>[e-mail]
>HJAnon
*GASP*
I never would've guessed!

[Anonymous No.]

>>57974879
[e-mail]

Im the brrat who wrote Lost and Found, Ruffling some Feathers, Moth to a flame,The Canvas, Mio and Anon are two old people in love and a few of short ones.

Im not the best at grammar, but if someone wants help i can lend a hand

[Anonymous No.]

>>58017338
You wrote L&F AND Ruffling some Feathers? And the Mio and Anon fic?
My man, I fucking KNEEL. Those three are my favorite contemporary fics.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58015967
>>58016449
>>58016543
I can prove it! Ask me something only the writer of HJ could know.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58017460
T-thanks, this means a lot, since im always conflicted on if what im writing is good or not.

I wish i could write but i have an exam week coming up.
If someone cares, i will try to write Zeta somehwere in the future...if the sign appear...

[Anonymous No.]

>>58016449
Also added a list of works next to each entry

[Anonymous No.]

Thanks Shiori, you a real one

[Anonymous No.]

>>58018487
Me? I'm already half-shiori.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58018148
I love your characters, your dialogue flows very naturally, and your prose really shone in your smut. I think my favorite scenes from your fics is when you shine a light on mundane things that just reflect as a natural extension from the fic itself.
You're doing a great job.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58017884
Who is the best hag?

[Anonymous No.]

>>58018685
The best hag is the one you love of course. Each hag offers something different and special, but it's all up to who your soul resonates with. We can measure bust and ass sizes, compare hair styles, fetishes and whatnot all day, but it all comes down to who you love.
Now who is currently "best" can vary from night to night if you catch my drift.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58019149
It's him.

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>>58018558
u-uwaaah.
will keep triying to improve then... thanks a lot.

But yes. i do love the mundane elements in writing, in my opinion its one of the most interesting parts on how to show your characters.
I always liked things like, to give one of the most basic examples, the shawarma scene in avengers. A small scene that shows character traits with just actions

[Anonymous No.]

I finally finished the first scene of Shark in the Screen Part 2: The Idol Lie. For those who read the screenplay version for the writing contest but haven't seen the movie version, here is a preview of what it's like. I'm not sure when I'll be done with the full part 2 video, but it will likely be about the same length as Part 1 (~26 min.)

https://youtube.com/watch?v=fG4EKPhWTWQ

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>>58020350
Aside from the usual, "god this still feels held back by the lack of voice acting complaints".
It's an interesting format change. When it was in script form I was kind of imagining it doing that meeting thing where the speaker gets the big highlighted box but this pseudo zoom format still gets the online meeting feeling across.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58020350
It's nice how they're all having a Zoom meeting. Really adds to the pseudo-real life setting of your fic. Like in the previous episodes, your music choices are on point, and your AI-generated images are just... wow.
Other than that, I feel Omega's a bit too cartoonishly villainous for my taste. But I'll reserve further judgement when the full video is out.
More power to your series! I hope it all pans out.

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>>58008355
Put me in there please, I'm always happy to help with writing, VNs, and just generally discuss writing with anybody.
[e-mail]
You can call me VNanon since I put out Ninisanni Scenario, which I believe is the only finished VN on this board.

[Anonymous No.]

writer's block, my old friend...

[Anonymous No.]

>>58024203
Done.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58024303
Thanks!

[Anonymous No.]

>>58008355
>[e-mail]
>Bad Civ
>https://archiveofourown.org/users/valoror

[Anonymous No.]

>>58025150
Was there EVER sex added to that or did you just get bored when you stopped getting feedback entirely?

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>>58025799

[Anonymous No.]

>>57974879
What >>57971724 said. If anyone for whatever reason thinks I’d be a worthy beta reader I’m happy to do what I can. The contest email is basically my burner email, so go ahead and use [e-mail]. I guess Our Cures was my most well received fic, so we’ll roll with that.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58016136
oh yeah i'm going for the magical girl thing. that's what attracted me to it in the first place because i found the idea of AltSui! trying to deal with it so funny. I asked a lot of probing questions, mostly to see if that vibed with everyone.

it's swimming around my mind a lot, as backburner works tend to when you need to focus on what's in front of you. hope i can make something that lives up to everyone's hopes for that story

[Anonymous No.]

>>58026461
Nice.
I hope you make your fucking title drop alt!sui calling out her own magical girl beam in contrast to what suisei calls her's

[Anonymous No.]

>>58026897
that is a based idea and i'm writing it down. if not specifically that, then something in that spirit

[Anonymous No.]

>>57979703
Really good. Love seeing Botan be the submissive one.

[Anonymous No.]

I am going to cum tribute Shiori and send it to AA

[Anonymous No.]

>>58026273
Your name is HolocalypseAnon and you WILL like it.

[Anonymous No.]

Throw out all your WIPs and start new ones about Shion

[Anonymous No.]

>>58029324
The only WIP I'm doing is flying to Japan personally and raping the brat out of that little shit

[Anonymous No.]

>>58028994
俺の黒歴史。。。

[Anonymous No.]

>>58029324
There should be a wholesome romance story with Shion where she turns from a brat into a sweet wife and mother.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58028819

[Anonymous No.]

>>58029324
my next fic is about biboo, so not much would change desu...but no.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58032056
What about making it so that Bijou is cosplaying as Shion and doing a terrible impression of the witch.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58029324
In good time.

[Anonymous No.]

Shion is a happy and kind witch.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58033067
Hmmm... bratty summer-enjoying witch!

[Anonymous No.]

>>58033067
I’d kill for a slow-burn Shion romance fic

[Anonymous No.]

>>58029324
But what if one of my WIPs is a Shion story?

[Anonymous No.]

So many ideas, and so little free time...

[Anonymous No.]

>>58035504
I hear ya, I read ya...
Well, 'read,' but you know.

[Anonymous No.]

live!

[Anonymous No.]

So what fics have you been reading lately anon?
Bonus Question : Do you have any wips that you've dropped because the premise aged poorly? (i.e chuuba graduated, yab made it too weird, central conceit hits too close to what actually happened)

[Anonymous No.]

>>58038828
reading fanfiction in my head of a self-insert romance featuring the girl i like

[Anonymous No.]

>>58038828
I've been going through the contest fics, and the latest I read was Thug Hunter. I liked the jokes, especially the parts where Anon was still looking for Botan.

[Anonymous No.]

CLEAR!

[Anonymous No.]

>>58038828
I've tried to find and read all of the fics featuring collared girls and come to the conclusion that there should be more.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58044198
I can get the pure fetish appeal of the concept but honestly none of the current fics have really done it for me, except for tsundevil. Which I think a mostly from the prose, I didn't really like reading the three 'collarverse' fics tagged with it in the archive but tsundevil actually had writing that made it hot, even if it had a weird perspective.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58044924
i mean, the three collarverse "fics" are just greentexts, which isnt bad per se.
That idea needs a proper fic to be fair

[Anonymous No.]

>>58045106
I mean I gave the fic tagged with collarverse adjacent a second shot but I couldn't really get through it... admittedly it was formatted terribly for mobile and was written with an addiction to using commas. So I guess that also counts as this idea is hot but none of the written prose has done it justice.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58045289
Ill admit to having a soft spot for the Koyori and the Botan ones.
One finally understands that botan is a sub that would accidentally cum before her partner if over-stimulated and the other stuffed Koyori with kids and made her lower the zipper with her teeth
Hard to be mad at those hot scenarions

[Anonymous No.]

>>58045106
>>58045289
To be clear, I wasn't just talking about "collarverse" fics or those tagged as such. There's other fics that feature collared girls, like Extrapedestrial or Lion Taming: A Tsundevil's Mind (which has been mentioned already).

[Anonymous No.]

>>57927229
Fuwawa backseating Mococo on her first time having sex
>You have to be gentle, Moco-chan~
>U-Un un....

[Anonymous No.]

>>58046006
>Extrapedestrial
I know it's pretty well regarded but I never liked this fic. It was just a double whammy of Iofi feeling too 'not her', and the world presented feeling too accepting of the fetish so there's no 'real' exhibitionism in the pet play because it felt accepted in the wacky world of that fic, also because it felt like it tried to edge closer to the real fetish rather than making it fantastical.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58035504
fuck me sideways, I've got one more...

[Anonymous No.]

>>58047516
>I know it's pretty well regarded but I never liked this fic. It was just a double whammy of Iofi feeling too 'not her'
That's valid; I wrote it with Iofi as the pet because of the prompt that requested it, I never really watched her. But the prompter was happy with it, so it worked out in that sense.
As for the worldbuilding, I'm not into exhibitionism or public humiliation. I built the world like it is because I wanted Iofi to grow in the sense that she becomes more confident and loyal - but as her becoming better at fitting into her new role in a society she's alien to. I admit that it can feel weird and clumsy to suddenly have a world where it's normal that women are sometimes treated like dogs are in our world, but I didn't want to write about moral degradation and corrupting Iofi into being a shameless slut. It's a wholesome BDSM scenario about partners trusting each other and overcoming difficulties through their bond.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58038828
Im catching up to the contest entries, starting with tower of tattle. Its pretty nice but a handful to read on mobile

>Bonus question
I had a Gura fic on the works, one about her "showing up" every few years in the shore and you aging while she's still her. It would be something like a melancholic friendship.
This one started production half a year ago, in her 3D stream, back when i thought she would go back to regular streaming.

Of course that didnt happen. In the end, i was looking at both the fic and Gura's content and feeling like it was a fake thing, and i got too sick of both. Deleted my fic and blocked Gura's channel a week or so ago. Picked up Mumei shortly after

[Anonymous No.]

>>58046394
The fucking advent gaslighting getting acknowledged in FWMCmorning is making me imagine (You) and Mococo finally having time to fuck without her sister interfering but... Mococo is still acting like Fuwawa is there backseating her every act . You try to stop, but Mococo's demon dog strength is holding you down as she hears 'Fuwawa' guiding her to ride you cowgirl.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58044924
Thank you for the praise! Are you able to elaborate on how the writing made it hot despite the stream of consciousness style? I never thought about Lion Taming's/Tsundevil's writing separately from that style much, as it was the central aspect of the fic for me.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58044198
Maybe I should try my hand at some petplay smut. Collarr+leash stuff is a favorite of mine, so I could give it a shot.
I don't do 2nd person or "Anon" fics though so that might be disappointing to people. My preliminary thought is some smut with Mori as San's pet.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58033067
That second part is true

[Anonymous No.]

>>57927229
Catching a shrunken down Bae and sucking out her organs through her anus for a tasty snack.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58051991
Is it gonna be rough or soft domination? anyway i will be expecting it unless it has nosehook shit, i find that disgusting

[Anonymous No.]

>>58054263
Rough dom. No nosehook shit, I also hate that.
Not sure exactly how far I want to go. Won't do shibari, that's not really for me. Might tie her arms up. Probably will use a blindfold, maybe a gag, maybe a little hot wax play, and plenty of ass slapping.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58054568
i mean, if you have leash and collar why not go for exhibition and verbal degradation/toys

Personally, dom has a problem where if you try to mix the flavors it comes out as weird, so if you are not doing shibari i'd advise against blindfolds and wax

[Anonymous No.]

>>58054568
>blindfold
yes
>maybe a gag
YES
>maybe a little hot wax play
YEEEEES
>and plenty of ass slapping
YEEEEEEEEEEEEES

[Anonymous No.]

>>58054744
Hm, alright, that's something I didn't think about too much.
Sex toys aren't my thing, but exhibitionism seems like I could roll with it.
I'm getting a LOT of fun ideas with exhibitionism+blindfold though so I'll probably run in that direction.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58054938
if i may suggest, why not play with THE IDEA of exhibitionism? something like Mori thinks she's getting watched piss like a dog in the street, but when she takes off the blindfold there's no one there.
All in all, goodspeed you bastard

[Anonymous No.]

>>58055085
That was the plan, but you just gave me a PHENOMENAL idea that I'm not going to spoil simply because the reveal will be too good.
I'm committed to this now, this is gonna be a delight.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58054744
>>58054938
If you want something thematically appropriate to go with collar and leash, why not more petplay? Tail plug, basic commands, eating and drinking from a bowl on the ground...

[Anonymous No.]

>>58052837
I know, but we're already writing fanfiction. We can imagine a better life for her.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58046394
I've never been in to cuck stuff like this but fuwawa bullying moco-chan as she loses her virginity makes me so beyond erect

[Anonymous No.]

>>58052837
>>58055679
what exactly is she so depressed about? I keep hearing about how she's sad, but never about why

[Anonymous No.]

>>58055798
Her life isn't especially tragic, she just has the mental illness depression.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58055610
>Petplay with commands
ah fuck it, another wip to the neverending queue

[Anonymous No.]

>>58055610
I'll think about it, but I DEFINITELY have the baseline down for what it'll be. Primarily gonna focus on exhibitionist slave play with a blindfold. There could be a couple of extra stuff here and there, but it'll be supplementary. I don't think I'll do public urination, it's not for me.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58056217
>Collar Calli
God please.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58056217
If it's more slave than pet the commands would be different, I guess. I'm a fan of making them work out; it's a good way to make them demonstrate loyalty (and to earn reward or punishment).

[Anonymous No.]

>>58057432
Likely slave with a bit of pet mixed in. I like it when the girl's referred to as "a bitch" in the pet sense, but I don't really care for leaning too hard into the "animal" side, like when you start having her make animal noises and giving her belly rubs. So it'll be like 3/4 slave, 1/4 pet.
Gotta finish my current WIP first, though.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58057432
>>58058893
Animals are lame. Pokemon are where it's at

[Anonymous No.]

>>58055784
>Moco-chan, you're crying! And it's just the tip!
>Look how he kisses, you... That's not your first kiss too, is it?
>You're doing great, Moco-chan, just a bit deeper~!
>Use your legs, Moco-chan! No, no like this! (Fuwawa then grabs Mococo's ankles and locks them behind her boyfriend's back)

[Anonymous No.]

>>58044198
It's not full-on petplay but I've got some collared spanking sex in the works with a very full moon

[Anonymous No.]

>>57927229
Becoming Shion's therapist and trying to get to the root of her depression so you can treat it and make her become a functional member of society.

OR

Same option as the first one but you provide private sessions during off-hours and you may or may not use that opportunity to get into a sexual relationship with her. Maybe the reason you think she's depressed is because she wants to become a mother?

[Anonymous No.]

>sit down, dick hard
>Bang 1001 words in a sitting
so this...this is the power of petplay Mori..

[Anonymous No.]

>>58055798
she's depressed because she doesn't get knotted regularly enough

[Anonymous No.]

>>58061240
Looking forward to it

[Anonymous No.]

>>58061240
>>58063256
Im starting to believe that one of the requirements to be a Holoid is to have a massive Brapper

[Anonymous No.]

>>58063667
please don't call it that

[Anonymous No.]

>>58063995
What are we supposed to call it, Hololive Indonesia member?

[Anonymous No.]

>>58064037
The scientific term is "simiiformes".

[Anonymous No.]

>>58062590
woman moment

[Anonymous No.]

>>58063995
its the scientific name.
Besides Anon, farts are just the female way of telling you that you are doing an adequate job pounding that donut ring

[Anonymous No.]

[Anonymous No.]

What stories from the archive have made you feel something vividly? What emotion was it?

[Anonymous No.]

>>58061240
Something to look forward to

[Anonymous No.]

Bump.

[Anonymous No.]

>>58071659
obese. they need to be spoiled less

[Anonymous No.]

>>58071659
anorexic. they need to be spoiled more

[Anonymous No.]

>>58071659
inaccurate. moco needs to be quadruple fuwa's size

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>>58051477
Despite it being entirely a monologue in the mind with some lines being implied to be said it still managed to create some very hot imagery.
I think it the style is suited for that kind witnessing/experiencing lewd play perspective since it's deeply connected to one character's mind. Even if I'm pretty sure a sex scene written from that perspective would need some really good imagery if it wants to work in a conventionally erotic way.

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I'm so conflicted when it comes to writing about Iroha. I want to write her as a badass talented swordsman, but her personality contradicts her lore so hard. Instead of being cool, she's a cute pon kinda degen sweet hick and I don't know how to balance that.

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>>58074032
You could go for the gap moe of a master fighter who is a dork otherwise.

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>>58074032
How about making her a chuuni over the top edgelord swordman, but she messes up things like her entrance and gets embarrassed, and gets pouty if you interrupt her mid speech?
I think the right way to balance it is that she takes herself super seriously, but in reality, she's just a really sweet, well-meaning girl.

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>>58074032
you can do that fairly easy. In the non-combat scenes you can potrayer her for the lovable, dorky degen that she is, but when its time to throw hands she's all business.

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>>58074032
I think your best bet is to have her possess a "switch" that flips when it's time to battle.

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>>58073829
That makes sense. Maybe some descriptions from an outside perspective could be inserted where appropriate for sex scenes - or there could be parts told from the perspective of another mind.

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>>58074032
The ideas so far are fine, but if you want something out there you could give her an ancient samurai spirit that takes over when she fights. Similar to Yu-Gi-Oh.

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>>58074412
>>58074471
>>58074515
Yeah I'm guessing gap moe is my best bet here, can get best of both worlds with it.

>>58074436
>she takes herself super seriously, but in reality, she's just a really sweet, well-meaning girl.
I'm really feeling this, probably gonna go along with this.

>>58075014
I like the idea but feel like it's a little bit too 'out there' for what I want to write

Thanks for the advice.

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>>58075014
When Iroha fights she calls upon and channels her legendary samurai ancestor.

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>>58075588
>Sensei... Gomene... but I have to go all out, just this onc-
>Y-Yes, I did feed my pets
>...A-And I did my homework too!
>Haaa! Sensei, I'm trying to look cool, please!
KEE
NO

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Clear!

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>>58071659
Fat fucks
Very cute though. Bau Bau

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>>58074032
have you never watched kenshin

https://youtu.be/BFRdNL9Gki8

https://youtu.be/nbtjLbA3jmU

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bake a new thread.

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>>58074626
Yeah pretty much, if any sequel wants to actually go down the route of being a smut/fapfic it would have to sacrifice the full stream of consciousness experience and actually describe things while also having dialogue rather than being a bunch of unbroken monologues.
By the way if you are working on a sequel. Have a scene where after Towa gets fucked and is about to pass out, rurudo pops a collar on her and pats her on the head as she falls to sleep/goes unconscious.

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You know what, I have a question: Which chuuba would realistically be into incest? As a fetish?

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>>58092369
fuwawa...

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>>58092369
Noel, if you pretend to be her brother

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>>58092369
Matsuri, if you pretend to be her brother.

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>>58092369
I think fuwamoco would find the actual thing weird but they've seen enough that they can see the appeal.

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>>58093107
one of fuwawa's favorites is literally yosuga no sora

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>>58092871
>>58093107
Yeah, I can see it. If you pretend to be their brother, it can be a sort of KissXSis dynamic...
>>58092959
>>58093017
>pettanko and literal milktank
Holy fuck. You know what, I'll think about those two.

Thank you, Anons.

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>>58093339
yeah i mean, just know that fuwawa is unironically really into a twincest anime

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>>58093405
Yes...

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>>58093339
Okay, if your actually going for an incest threesome. I think you should go for chuubas that have a pre-existing relationship.
Something like that Bae and Mori incest prompt from a while back.
I think it went with either Mori or Bae being your step sister in order to avoid the problem of making Mori australian.

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>>58094212
They don't necessarily have to be related to the MC; I was looking for chuubas that would actively fantasize about and fetishize incest. Like, incest play turns them on as well as actual incest that's happening between an actual pair of siblings

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>>58091240
I'll get onto it.

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>>58092319
That's a neat idea, but the collaring might be a bit more significant in terms of her changing her mind.

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>>58093282
>yosuga no sora
Hm.... Sora..... Hm. Maybe put Sora-chan alongside Fuwamoco in the fic?

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>>58075486
I'm going to apply a similar logic to Aqua for one of my stories, but crank it up to a thousand. She's an insanely good shot and skilled at dispatcing people with gun-fu, but has severe autism and can't talk to strangers to save her life.

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>>58094793
IRyS seems real quick on the draw to make things incesty when potential siblings show up, and made her Aprils Fool's male version IRyK a massive siscon

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I have the new thread ready for baking once bump limit hits.

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>>58100152
Oooh... I'll look up the vods then.

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>>58102149
No shit? I'll pack mine away for later, then.

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Quick, start gushing about your oshi to get us to Bump limit!

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>>58104911
I FUCKING LOVE TOWA! SHE TRIES TO BE COOL BUT IS CUTE AND DUMB! HER SINGING IS GREAT! SHE ONCE MADE ME LISTEN TO HER STOMACH NOISES FOR A WHOLE HOUR!

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>>58104911
I WILL cum in Ame's space suit.

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>>58104911
I like it when my clown wife reads to me

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Eh, close enough. Baked.

>>58104818

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Die