/wg/ - Writing General - Contest Edition XIV

[Anonymous No.]

This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. We’re currently hosting the /vt/ Writing Rumble, a writing contest for the whole board to get involved in. The info page & contest archive can be found here: rentry.org/WGWC

Check the main archive below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

"Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction?"
Yes.

Previous thread: >>56722745, where we got a new fic, a series update, discussion on chuubas as boss battles as well as who makes for a good cuckquean
/wg/ rentry: https://rentry.org/wgrentry/

[Anonymous No.]

Story Anchor!

Throw them up boys!

[Anonymous No.]

/VT/ WRITING RUMBLE STORY ANCHOR
Reply to this post with your contest submissions.

Submissions are now open, and close on 08/25. Rules, submitted stories and other information can be found at:
rentry.org/WGWC

[Anonymous No.]

Story Recap! There were two stories posted last thread, check them out!

>>56723650 - FacelessDegenerates,com
Tags: Shirogane Noel, NSFW, dark, misery porn

>>56723701 - First Train and Kafka Stop 21: Shelter
Tags: Sora, Choco, Fubuki, Anthology series, dark, NSFW

[Anonymous No.]

Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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>>56863791
Noel and Flare walk in on you having hardcore and degrading pet play with Marine

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>>56864756
Do they join?

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>>56863300
>>56863390
Roboco's new upgrade

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRyVEow1X-vyUArSQ7eGfyLTX3inh3lEx2_L8Qwdy4CGlQnxxmh-nF1nU3H9igpjg1I-LVCvoRX8akI/pub

Tags: Roboco, NSFW, insest-ish but not really

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>>56864756
This, and she's roleplaying as a cow-lingerie wearing elfslut

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>>56865000
After they interrogate Marine about her sex life, they convince Marine to convince you, to let them try it out as a pair (Marine gets to watch)

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>>56868061
Watching is okay, but Marine could also be the top-ranked or bottom-ranked pet. Hierarchies with more than two layers have a lot of potential.

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>>56868894
I think Marine would be top-ranked or bottom-ranked pet depending how she was feeling that day

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Can we like push the contest deadline back by a day? I want to finish my fic but I also want to play AC6.

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>>56871845
We need more breast worship fics

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>>56872109
I agree, so I'll write some scenes for it.

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>>56872109
How about a board being humuliated by being forced to worship big tits?

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>>56873038 (me)
*humiliated
Blimey. It's not even that late yet.

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>>56873445
>humu
Your brain as already thinking of small titted women

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>>56873038
>>56873679

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>>56873038
Best I can really manage to set that up is with pic related, and Suisei at some point. Most of my gals aren't small chested, so I don't have a lot to choose from.

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>>56873679
Hell yea, flat chest supremacy.

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>>56873038
>>56873679
>>56873844
Ina acting mad about having a small chest so big-tittied women will allow her to molest them...

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>>56874390
Pekora's breasts could have a growth spurt towards the end of the breeding season (storing milk for the incoming litter) which she's both proud of because she's been made fun of for being small before, and embarrassed of when her mother and/or Anon comment on it and compare her to her mother.

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>>56874390
>Pekora trying to get you to stop looking at her moms boobs because 'they aren't that good anyway'

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>>56865557
Pretty hot. I have nothing on the prose, you did a great job writing the pov, even if i had my doubts at the start.
The motivation is a bit weak and i do think the "conflict" is a bit unnecesary but nothing jarring.
The smut is well done, the sex in itself is basic but the mood was quite hot and that's hard to pull off, so hats off to you.

Overall, i liked it even if i wanted a bit more...spice? its a bit vanilla for me

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>>56872527
Flare dressing as polka and pretending to be a kemono in heat is such a gold idea
even better if she's whoring herself in a public toilet

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>>56874390
You're not having Shion, Kanata or Lapras? Aww...

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>>56874390
>G
For good pair of tits?

[Anonymous No.]

The lapras playground chuuni shenanigans discussion from last thread really flutters my heart because it could be the setup for the most gut-wrenching lost-love NTR this thread has seen.

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>>56874795
That's easily going to happen in that threesome, or just while the group is out and about in general, since pekomama is gonna lay on the flirting rather thickly because of anon's reaction.
>>56875225
>A scene where Anon is waiting in the tent, hotel room, wherever for the sex he expects with Polka for the night
>Flare just waves her red gloved hand in the doorway, and continuously teases showing parts of Polka's normal clothing in the entryway
>Then its her, practically bursting out of that top
>This wasn't what I expected, but jackpot
>>56876051
Laplus is for platonic loving and guiding towards not being an evil demon! I guess I could pork Shion though, I'm not completely opposed to that. Kanata is a strange one, unless she actually has a fat ass like most of her fanart implies.
>>56874656
I suppose I could even make them go up half a size during heat too.

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>>56874795
>MOM PUT THOSE AWAY FOR FUCK'S PEKO.
>STOP TRYING TO SEDUCE MY FRIENDS!

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>>56877034
Of course Kanata has a fat ass, it'd be a waste of ass/tits gap moe if she didn't!
And she gives the most fear-boner-inducing handjobs when she slowly increases her grip's pressure and you have no idea how far she is going to go.

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>>56863175
>>56863300
>>56863390
>>56863698
mori kills
mori death
thank you mori

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>>56874795
>>56877315
>>56877034
When they're both in heat during breeding season Pekomama would subtly ask Pekora whether she wants to sleep with Anon already or whether mama should take care of him again today - or if she's ready for the pekoyakodon, even.

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>>56872088
Can’t you play AC6 AFTER you write your story?

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>>56877870
Even outside of HJ I can dig the idea of Pekomama coaching her daughters lover before and during the act, but I cant decide if it's hotter with (You) or Migo.

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>>56877870
>MOMMMM MY GOD-PEKO!
I think it'll be even better if it's in the midst of the plotline of the Usada Kingdom. She's just teasing her daughter about SEX when there's more to do for the good of the people.
>MAMA! HOW CAN YOU THINK OF SEX AT A TIME LIKE THIS!? YOU'RE THE QUEEN! THERE'S MORE PRESSIN-
>Anon is gonna press me alright~
>MOM!
>He'll press you too, ya know.
Damn is this gonna be my horniest arc yet? I guess it'll track because it's rabbits I suppose.

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>>56878255
And maybe
>MAMA! HOW CAN YOU THINK OF SEX AT A TIME LIKE THIS!?
>It's not like we can stop thinking about it until we're pregnant, honey~

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>>56878054
I could but I want to play AC6

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>>56865557
Pretty cute, I liked the attention to detail when Roboco was getting upgraded

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>>56879793
Raven, this is your handler. AC6 is great. Finish all the training missions for some good gear. Mission objective achieved. System switched to normal mode.
>>56863791
Chuubas but Armored Core.
>(You) are a mercenary mech pilot who works for the highest bidder.
>Born to die / world is a fuck.
>"Raven, Cover Corp requires your assistance in... 'handling' a new studio put up by our rival, AnyColor. See to it that it is destroyed, and we may have more work for you for in the future."
>You get to customize your Armored Core with emblems of different chuubas.
>The only solace you have in this corporate-ruled hellhole is the few hours you have between contract missions to watch your oshi.

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>>56878255
Will there be some Pekora romance too? I really liked the idea of Pekomama helping her daughter ease into the breeding by explaining everything to her, and by having Pekora and Anon live together like a young couple would - at first it's awkward to share a room and to sleep in the same bed (especially when Pekora goes to the bathroom to masturbate instead of opting for sex), but Pekora gets more and more comfortable and affectionate until she just lets her instincts take over and has Anon breed her all night. It would be so wholesome.

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>>56880515
>Will there be peko romance
Yes. Contrary to how much I sell HJAnon's need to breed, he is at a point still where he only wants to be intimate with those he has a strong connection with. He's also a doofy romantic at heart, and will always take the chance to make his ladies feel loved and special in that respect.

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>>56881033
HJanon I gotta ask, how big is the party gonna be? Is anon just gonna end up having a party of all the talents?

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>>56872088
You have to make sacrifices. This conflict is central to your character arc, we won't hand you a deus ex machina by pushing back the deadline.

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>>56881149
The party will get pretty big, it's not gonna have all the talents since that just wouldn't be reasonable. Most talents will show up in some capacity, maybe as temp allies, or enemies. Some things I'll think up as I get to them. As far as future members go, I think I've said as much that Peko, Lamy, and Mio will end up joining the main journey. While those are easily set it stone, it's possible other chuubas might come along for the longer ride depending on how things turn out. Pomu was originally not slated to be in the long term party when I came up with the initial concept of her arc, but after I experienced how fun she was to write, and the potential she has, I just had to change things up to bring her along. I hope that answers the question for ya.

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>>56881749
damn...

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>>56881813
>The party will get pretty big
Not only the party when you get to the NSFW scenarios youve mentioned already. The anticipation!

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>>56865557
This one really tested my love for robot sex vs. my hatred for daughter-cest. Still it was pretty good. The setup was a bit unconvincing, but once the operation started it was smooth sailing.

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>>56881033
You're making me feel like a yume with how much I want Anon to give Pekora the romantic evening of her dreams before princess carrying her to bed. We might just need more Pekora romance in general since Cover High proves how good it can be.

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>>56882619
I could never hold a candle to how well Cover High does Peko romance, since the author is phenomenal, but I'll give it my best shot. The rabbit princess will be getting a little swept through all sorts of different feelings and emotions she didn't anticipate encountering as part of her country's conflict, but at the same time, Anon will be experiencing his own hurdles as he continues to strive to become someone anyone in need can rely on, but when it's on a royal scale and not exactly a problem he can punch his way through, there will be some growing to do.

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>>56876272
>lost-love NTR
I have to ask, what do you have in mind for that? Because those words with Laplus is making me think of her setting up HoloX as a way to reconnect with you... only for her to find out your dating/married to someone else already.

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>>56874814
Glad to hear you enjoyed it. When it comes to the conflict and motivation, during writing I realized that all these ideas might be too much for such a short fic. Maybe it would've been better if all this stuff got expanded instead of being resolved in one short conversation, but with the contest deadline coming up I kept it short. In its current state, I kinda understand if the conflict seems like just an unnecessary road bump before the smut part of a smut fic.
>>56880471
I'm glad to hear you liked it. Those details just kinda come naturally when imagining how this upgrade should work and its implications.

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>>56883329
A political crisis sounds like the worst time for the princess and the queen to go into heat. Good thing Anon is there to help them in multiple ways.

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>>56884219
>Laplus in the cuckqueeans uniform
Holy fucking shit

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>>56884219
I was thinking of you two growing up together and mutually developing a crush on each other. By the time you're both 14 or so you confess, but Laplus is too stubborn or retarded so she declines.
You take the punch and remain friends, while Laplus second guesses her decission.
A while after she decides she'll take you up on it, but now you're dating someone else, and laplus has to see how you two grow closer and closer, she has to comfort you when you fight, etc
Goes on until you graduate high school, laplus thinks she's moved on, only for her heart to break all over again when you two meet again and you're caring for a baby

[Anonymous No.]

It's funny but not at all surprising that the more competitive part of the competition has been in the NSFW category.

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>>56886021
>graduate high school
>caring for a baby
What happened did the condom break or "break" while you were fucking the school bicycle?

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>>56882397
I guess your conflict was similar to that of the MC's then. He too was torn up between wanting to fuck the sexbot and not wanting to fuck his own daughter.
And I'm happy that the daughter-cest stuff wasn't too much of a turn off for you to enjoy the fic.

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>>56886026
I'm curious, because there's clearly two big types of NSFW in the competition; there's pure, unfiltered erotic smut, and then there's emotion porn where the sex is more of a plot vehicle than the main attraction.
I wonder what will end up being more popular.

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>>56886290
I'd be down for a broken condom story parallel to this one, where you have a shotgun marriage with (chuuba) and receive support from your all-time best friend, Lapsama.
Feeds my connected universe autism.

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>>56886814
For the next rumble there should be sub categories. Nothing too crazy, just make sure that everyone has fair ground

>Shitpost/Comedy
>Dark/Depressing
>Smut/Erotica

etc

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>>56886026
It's a popularity contest, after all.
Sex sells, even when the product is free.

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>>56888235
Ah, the three genres.
Though honestly having tighter categories would probably be better for the contest rather than the n/sfw divide. The natural bias for both of those would be a funny shitpost and a really hot smut fic... Which makes it all the more surprising that my favorites for the contest are neither.

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>>56886026
I'm a little worried because while my entry isn't smut, it's not exactly SFW either. I don't know how to tag it.

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>>56889173
Is there sexo?
Then NSFW
No? Just light nudity?
Spicy SFW

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>>56889173
The sfw/nsfw tag here has always been more about no smut/smut rather than actual appropriateness to read at work.

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Oh my gah! Clear!

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>>56895765
I swear my wordcount gets bigger...

[Anonymous No.]

my creativity has been dead as a doornail for a week now

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>>56896249
Happens.
Take a break, read play vidya, listen to music, etc

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>>56895765
I slowly insert the slice of bacon into my mouth while maintaining eye-contact with her.

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>>56896249
We can't all be full throttle all the time. Sometimes our creative brains just need a break, and that means not being upset about not writing or thinking about your writing. Take a day or two to just chill and enjoy what's going on around you. Once you refresh, you'll feel a lot better.

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>>56897817
>This mindbreaks her so much that she becomes the next Unabomber, sworn enemy of the Meat Industrial Complex.

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>>56898741
>Meat Industrial Complex.
Damn it that's way better than the idea I had

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>>56895765
>>56898741
Fucking Fauna's vegan ass so hard she farts

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>>56899057
What was your idea, anon? A manifesto titled, "Carnivorous Society and its Future?"
>>56899181
>inb4 she says that a naughty Sapling should check their mail during a stream

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>>56899893
Checking my notes
>Financial, Agency, University, and Airline Bomber Agricultural is a better A
>something intentionally pseudo-intellectual about parasocial whatevers
>broke her brain on a Mario Kart tournament

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>>56899893
I WANT HER TO YELL "STOP DONT LOOK" AS MY CUM BUBLES A BIT WITH HER SECOND FART

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>>56900495
>Fauna bombs the offices of Wells Fargo, the Bureau of Animal Industry, Hamburger University, and King Ranch, the biggest cow farm in the United States.
>The FBI investigates these bombings and tie up the first letters of the sectors they affected.
>Amelia Watson crinkles her brow as she lines up the letters on a whiteboard. "F... A... U... N... A..."
>"FAUNAbomber," Agent Gawr says, reading the letters.
>Agent Mumei puts a hand to her chin, in deep thought. "Who could it possibly be...?"
>Meanwhile, Fauna sneezes while she's putting together her newest pipe bomb in the middle of Montana.

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>>56896249
The only way to be creative is to force it out. Set a timer and an empty document and write whatever the hell you comes out of your head, by the end of it it'll be back. Just start writing.

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Goddamn it, why can I only zoom with my writing when there's a deadline.

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>>56906531
You need obvious and immediate psychological pressure to finish tasks, otherwise you let yourself get distracted

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>>56863300
>>56863390
Shark in the Screen

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSXw7JNes4J9Zza3X3xlpshsO_rWifv6_5YMoEANnv4zzmseUFTHUPx2w9EiQH0M28OLnjv3zAGAWE8/pub

Tags: Gura, Kiara, Ina, Omega, Jenma, Gawr, SFW, Drama

"Vtuber Gawr Gura is being counted on by her company, fans, and family to deliver a smashing success for her upcoming 3D showcase. But as expectations pile on and her evil alter ego threatens to take control, the barrier between Gura’s virtual and true selves begins to crack."

I wrote this screenplay for my movie series with AI art. Prologue and Part 1 are on YouTube, I’m still working on the Part 2 video, but I finished the Part 2 script and included it in the doc. For full disclosure, the story is still ongoing with 5 total parts planned.

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Are cyoa threads allowed to be made on this board? As long as it relates to vtubers?

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>>56907734
I don't know, but if I had to guess you'd probably be made to post here, and the last time somebody tried that it didn't really work out too well

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>>56907171
I find AI related stuff to be disgusting and not worth my time, however i have to commend your effort to get it at least presentable. Cheers
>>56907734
The brrat is also making one and last time we talked about it no one argued against it. Just to be sure post it on a google doc instead of pic by pic

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>>56907045
Why am I like this...

[Anonymous No.]

>FINALLY get a Zetasmut idea
>there's 0 (zero, zeto) chance of me making it to the contest
hahahah i sure love my time management skills
>>56907734
>>56908048
hahahah yea, that thing im 100% working and not stuck on hahaha.
jokes aside as the other anon said, no one argued against it and i had some positive feedback about it. Can i inquire what is yours about?

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>>56907734
You mean like CYOA as in quests?. No those go on their own board.
If you mean CYOA like the images/documents where the reader picks stuff off of a list and make up a story in their head/literally writes out a story about those things then they'd be welcome here in this thread. Not sure about the board in general... But hey they let bait threads go by without much problem so as long as your vtuber CYOA is directly vtuber related they might let it slip through.

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>>56863791
Chris-chan's sonichu comic but it's an amalgamation of different fics directly plagiarized and the protag is called veeteechu

[Anonymous No.]

now that we have a fic called gravity's rainbow, we need two more called Infinite Jest and Ulysses that deal with unconventional fetishes

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>>56909030
What are you stuck with on that CYOA anyway? If it's something mechanical/conceptual I'm sure the thread can give some insights even if that's more game design than pure writing advice.

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>>56909463
>the /wg/ Classics series
>it's a bunch of fics about weird-ass fetishes

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>>56909956
The unholy trinity
Vore
Futa
nipple sushi

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>>56909956
>The /wg/ classics
What if we had a /lit/ type chart/doc with must read fics?

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>>56910357
>Hunger
>The Metamorphosis
>Moby Dick
>>56910438
Holy fuck that is a terrible idea I love it.

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>>56907734
I'd write it weekly or once per two weeks and post it here in /wg/. Letting the catalog choose doesn't sound like a good idea.

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>>56909783
Its a general "writers block thingy". a really bad mixture of
>i have no time
college is kicking my ass, throwing me into a locker and also doing korean bully stuff (kissing /punching me in a really gay way). Baldur's gate is the cherry on top. Im on act 3 and loving the game, which leaves next to no time to write since im also watching streams on my free time
>I just cant get LAF to connect. I have 3 and the idea for one scene that barely connect among themselves
i can kinda brush the whole conection aside, since the structure for this chapter is Bae Pov into Bae Pov into Anon Pov into general pol. The last one is the one where im struggling since i cant seem to come with an excuse to unify all of the previous stuff
>Paralized by choice
What little time i have left is usually wasted because i dont know what to work on next.
LAF
CYOA
Cleaning up Moth to a Flame
Kiara smut where you do her butt and she kinda sticks a finger in yours as payback and to perk you up
A Kaela outline
A new series where (YOU) are a SCP foundation-like agent, runnign around with Shiori and then eventually the rest of the Advent gang SPOILER IF YOU ARE INTERESTEDtriying to find Shiori's pre-jail memories, who made the Stone that eventually turned into Bijou, what happened with the original demon guard and who broke Nerissa's horn to depower her
Something with Kaela
This new Zeta idea where you are triying to catch the elusive secret agent who gives you soft femdom once she traps you because she might be an enemy but she's nice

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>>56911433
Sounds like you just need to pick one and stuff the rest into a different folder for now so you only have one idea taking your idle thoughts instead of everything at once.

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>>56911945
Mmm. You seem to be correct. I had a feeling about it but i needed the wake up call.
Will probably decide after Bae's performance on splash party. She always motivates me

Thanks a bunch for answering my rant. For now, i will sleeb

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>>56909030
I meant more like a quest thread haha. And it would have been a story where the player's roommate was a vtuber and just kinda seeing where that went with other people. Gvdtd

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>>56913479
Oh you have two options then either post it here with the votes being done via a poll website at a link in the end of each update if you want each update to be large like they do on traditional forums or go to the quest board if you want to do the normal small update style that's more common for quests on imageboards.

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>>56863698
>FacelessDegenerates,com
Really liked this one, hope to see more in this type of forum format

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>>56913798
Yeahhhhh I'll probably go to the quest board then, thanks for answering the question! :)))

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>>56914246
Don't forget to link your posts here so we don't miss them!

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>>56910438
We should define some weird genres and then give their central works.

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>>56915368
Yeah what's our best Southern Gothic fic

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>>56863300
>>56863390
After watching a Youtube tutorial by an Indian man, you gain the ability to read minds. With your newfound power, you test it out on Hololive members and learn some surprising stuffs

A Cursed Dagger (23 pages, 8420 words)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSQbyKoaRT5ybXTu8N938PibAbQJMKZ2S_ex4cIaKYk6Jc77r02ueP94mNwe9-2XYviS6GfRgyrSOF5/pub
Tags: Anya Melfissa, SFW, Fluff, Comedy, Mind Reading.

Played this a bit fast and loose. Not sure how funny this is, since I've never written a comedy before.
Now if you need me, I'll be prepping for a ranking run in GFL

[Anonymous No.]

Man, I wish there were more HoloID fics.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56917588
I’ll read this after the deadline, but I need to focus on my own story for now.
In fact, I’ll read every submitted story before voting starts.

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>>56917588
Funny, cute. Overall good writing partner.

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>>56917588
Now this is a damn good comedy fic. An actual plot with a nice collection of jokes and gags scattered throughout.
Honestly my only real complaint is that this felt like a romcom concept condensed into a one-shot; i.e I could see this being like a series where you help a bunch of holos like marine and find out they're not into you, all the while Anya chats with you everyday. Rinse and repeat for a few days (chapters) until Haachama breaks your crystal when you try hearing her mind which finally lets you hear into Anya's mind and find out much she really wants you.
Despite that I had a lot of fun reading this. Although this does mean my vote for the sfw category is now split between this and that Ina drama... fuck.
Anyway here's some assorted thoughts while I read it.
>had to let go of Omega...
>Who?
heh
Why is Suisei referring to herself in plural?
That marine scene. Ouch.

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>>56917588
So cute and funny I might just UOOOHHH

Seriously though this was nice. The comedy worked great while the fluff was a nice bonus.

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>>56908048
Thanks. The submission itself is solely a movie script, pure writing. Getting proper artists and animators for the actual movie would be a dream come true though. Perhaps some people would prefer the screenplay as it leaves more to imagination, which is why I wanted to take the time to properly format it for this contest. FYI because of how google docs works, it looks much more readable on a computer than mobile.

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>>56865557
Its okay, could probably use some more spacing out and breaking off of stuff into more paragraphs but I'm gonna be honest the smut just felt way too clinical when the mood seemed more 'losing control'.
Other than that this kind of felt like a fic about the idea of Roboco rather than a Roboco fic with how the dialogue didn't really feel like her... but then again getting that kind of personality without having her chuuba friends to bounce off of would be hard.

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>>56863300
You're dating Fuwa but Moco disguised as Fuwa to go on a date with you. You managed to make her addict to your cock. Then Moco has to glare at her sister in jealously everytime she sees you stay together with Fuwa. Moco masturbated furiously when thinking about you. Her lust becomes higher and higher until she assaults you in bed under disguise again

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>>56863791
Ahhh, look like I made a mistake. Here it is
You're dating Fuwa but Moco disguised as Fuwa to go on a date with you. You managed to make her addict to your cock. Then Moco has to glare at her sister in jealously everytime she sees you stay together with Fuwa. Moco masturbated furiously when thinking about you. Her lust becomes higher and higher until she assaults you in bed under disguise again.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56925781
>Ahhh, look like I made a mistake.
Your mother made a mistake. Keeping you.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56926832
Trying to ruin another thread, nigger?

[Anonymous No.]

>>56927885
Lol, someone's mad.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56864756
I know this image is implying cowgirl play but Marine and pet play just makes me think of her playing a bunny girl and being a caricature of Pekora.
>Stick your peko up me and make me your doe!
How do the fuck do you make pet play dialogue about bunny people?

[Anonymous No.]

>>56929242
I could tell you, but I don’t want to show my hand.

[Anonymous No.]

[Anonymous No.]

1 day remains
https://countingdownto.com/?c=4935176
Can your submission still make it in time anon?

[Anonymous No.]

>>56934918

[Anonymous No.]

>>56863300
Milky way

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTvablsZGbgFZLWNXsUTYC8WOvT8aNd2vZkH0k2lu0PhEeSWp3SBUB_IaX-kppKzofUwCzXYX7-vfZy/pub

Tags: NSFW, Suisei, Noel, Breast Expansion, Lactation

This is my first time writing smut (or writing, in general). I hope someone enjoys reading this unorthodox combination of characters and fetishes as much as I enjoyed writing it.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56935548
Now that's one BIG Suisei there...

[Anonymous No.]

>>56935548
Well this was suprisingly erotic, especially with how the start felt a bit rough... still you write a fine lactation scene anon. Though this does bring to mind a question If cows need to get pregnant in order to start producing milk. Then who is the father?

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>>56935548
This is blasphemy

[Anonymous No.]

>>56917588
Based Shikikan. It was short and sweet like Anya, but i loved it. Its a little...light? on the comedy side but i came for the comedy and stayed for the romance. Nice job!
>>56935548
Imma be honest chief, i thought the moo thing was kinda not it.
And yet i still liked it. I feel like the lactation was well done, but the rest of the scene lacked something to make it more erotic.
All holos should be titcows! huzzah!

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>>56937283
>All holos should be titcows
It's ok to be wrong.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56937484
ok pedos can get their boring flatties if they want
but the actual good and cute girls should be titcows

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>>56937604
Still wrong. The only holo that needs breast expansion is Anya, and that's only to revert her to her correct form.

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>>56937484
Man, it's weird how shion is like the one cutting board I can't see being an oppai loli. Gura, Laplus Kobo? Yeah all of them could fit in with tits larger than their head; but Shion? She is in like a unique case where I can only imagine melons on her if she's 'aged up' to have them fit on her body.

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>>56937732
I don't know, oppai loli Kobo just sounds wrong as well.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56937668
never respond to any post of mine with your dogshit opinions

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>>56937604
You have no taste. A great ass can more than make up for a small chest. But a flat ass is a waste of time no matter how much mammary fat there is.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56937836
Calm down.

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>>56936379
Not the comet, but a whole galaxy now!
>>56936468
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
>the start felt a bit rough
Yeah, justifying the entire premise turned out way harder, than I expected (and brought quite a bit of OOC, as well). But I'm glad that the main part turned out well.
>cows need to get pregnant in order to start producing milk
Wait, they do..?
>>56936470
I am a sinful being, I'm not going to deny that. Though, to be fair, she does go back in the end.
>>56937283
>the rest of the scene lacked something to make it more erotic
That's something to think about it next time. Thank you.

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>>56938681
>Wait, they do..?
Yes. Did you think cows just made milk on their own without any reason just because they're domesticated?
The milk supposed to be for their calves which is why they get pregnant every year while they can still produce milk so they can keep up production.
I know you're probably just ignoring it for pure fetish purposes but this does make me imagine Noel got Suisei impregnated by her bull while she was still knocked out so she could get her to make milk for her. Mostly because that idea just gave me a boner.

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>>56939494
>Did you think cows just made milk on their own without any reason just because they're domesticated
I mean, women can start producing milk with the help of some "supplements". So I wouldn't have found it surprising, if centuries of domestication and breeding would lead to cows being able to produce milk all year round completely on their own.
But it is what it is.

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>>56940122
Yeah I think on some level everyone kind of ignores that part of cow physiology when imagining cowgirls anyway since it's hotter to imagine them spontaneously lactating.
Also are you not gonna enter this into the contest?

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>>56939494
im gonna get booed by this but fuck it horsecock flare

[Anonymous No.]

>>56940628
I kinda got turned off when I saw the word "contest"... But since it doesn't have a theme and overall is in good fun, I guess it won't hurt submitting mine. So...
>>56863390
>>56935548

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>>56941398
Damn elves... stealing the dicks from our horses...

[Anonymous No.]

>>56872088
I also didn't make the deadline. Work has been kicking my ass and i haven't even been able to check this thread, let alone write.
So i'm just going to finish the story and anchor it normally when it's done

[Anonymous No.]

>>56941764
There's still almost a full day left to submit, Anon.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56941764
Submit to the contest or submit to writing correction.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56941764
You still have 22ish hours left anon. Contest time is Anywhere on Earth (UTC-12).

[Anonymous No.]

>>56910794

>Kneeslappers
>Tearjerkers
>Cockmanglers
>Heartcleansing
>Soulsullying
>Whatthefuckers
>Sickosaters

[Anonymous No.]

>>56941764
I have two thirds of my story left to write within the next 20 hours (and I’m about to sleep). I’m going to have to write faster than I ever have to get it in on time, but that doesn’t mean I won’t try. Pushing yourself to the limit can be good training.

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>>56877034
>I suppose I could even make them go up half a size during heat too
Mind if i use this idea? I think it could work nicely on my story

>>56903129
This monday i got out of bed and spent most of the day writing something down in a notebook about anon meeting an unnamed hololive chuuba and bonding over a shared past experience. I should clean it up and write it on the computer and see if something else comes out of it.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56943548
Take it. I don't got full custody over any of these ideas. I'll be happy to read how you work it in and how it goes.

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>>56941892
>>56942109
>>56942204
>>56943152
I appreciate your support anons. Maybe if i have some juice left in me by the end of the day i can try and churn something out. I don't know if i'll get it completed though

[Anonymous No.]

>>56941892
>>56942204
What? God damn it. I thought the contest already ended so I just stopped writing.

[Anonymous No.]

The next 12 hours will put to the test whether or not creativity can be brute forced.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56944848
https://countingdownto.com/?c=4935176

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>>56945729
21 hours actually.

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>>56941398
Im guilty of enjoying it but only if the girl is also fascinated at how it works

[Anonymous No.]

>Ctrl+F3 shrunken troubles in the archive
>No results
Bros??? Where is it? I need my fly fix.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56946288
Shouldn't it still be on ao3

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>>56946288
Yeah pekofag had a menhera moment and had all of his fics be unlisted. I think he was too lazy to have them be hard unpublished so the link should still be live but other than that you can still find it on ao3 via searching on their.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56945916
Thanks. Guess I'm gonna get to work for the next 20 hours then.

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>>56917588
Anya fic! And it's good! What a time to be alive.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56946734
>their

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>>56946288
Someone other than bugfag actually reads that trash?

[Anonymous No.]

13 hours to finish my story (because i'm at work now)... i might just make it

[Anonymous No.]

>>56950163
Yeah, and I nutted to it

[Anonymous No.]

Live!

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>>56923311
I'll be honest I don't watch Roboco so I don't really have her personality down. Also definitely agree about some of the paragraphs being way too long, I kinda have trouble deciding when to end a paragraph on long sequences of actions.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56917588
>Maybe I can do something during the Halloween party… I just want a piece of him, just a little bit…
Kintsugi universe?

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>>56941398
Mori collab when

[Anonymous No.]

I finally have Balsa completely mapped out to the end. I'd say it's about ten to twelve chapters from completion once I release chapter twenty one. Exciting stuff. First adventure story I've ever completed, even if it's far from perfect.

[Anonymous No.]

If your gouing too write, whrite like its the last dday of te writhing rumbl
And brother, the clock is ticking.

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>>56959323
Hey, congrats dude.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56959340
Bijou a cute

[Anonymous No.]

>>56959340
i like biboo, she has retarded speech but you can understand it

[Anonymous No.]

>>56959396
Thanks mate. And thanks for reading (and others who are) if you have been.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56960025
She talks like a kid ToT

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>>56960767
you have gura fuck off, bibou is like luna

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>>56961236
That just strengthens my point?

[Anonymous No.]

>>56960767
We were at a party
His earlobe fell in the deep
Someone reached in and grabbed it
It was a rock loli
Rock loli
Rock loli
We were at the beach
Everybody had matching towels
Somebody went under a dock
And there they saw a rock
It wasn't a rock
It was a rock loli
Rock loli
Rock loli
Rock loli
Rock loli
Motion in the ocean
His air hose broke
Lots of trouble
Lots of bubble
He was in a jam
S'in a giant clam
Rock rock
Rock loli
Down, down
loli rock
loli rock
Let's rock!
Boy's in bikinis
Girls in surfboards
Everybody's rockin'
Everybody's fruggin'
Twistin' 'round the fire
Havin' fun
Bakin' potatoes
Bakin' in the sun
Put on your noseguard
Put on the Lifeguard
Pass the tanning butter
Here comes a stingray
There goes a manta-ray
In walked a jelly fish
There goes a dog-fish
Chased by a cat-fish
In flew a sea robin
Watch out for that piranha
There goes a narwhal
Here comes a bikini whale!
Rock loli
Rock loli
Rock loli
Rock loli

[Anonymous No.]

>>56960767
please do not sexualize children

[Anonymous No.]

>>56961515
Please don't victim blame innocent adults

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>>56961811
Has anyone here read that doujinshi were a gang of lolis do a "semen shakedown" on a regular office worker?
I want something like "Gangs of violent little girls are abducting adults all over the city! If a little girl offers you beer and cigarettes for following her, run away!" But with chuubas.

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>>56962021
>If a cunnychuuba DM's about a joining a potential fan meet-up, DO NOT GO! IGNORE! BLOCK HER! UNSUBSCRIBE!
>AVOID AVOID AVOID

[Anonymous No.]

>>56961458
Based B52s enjoyer

[Anonymous No.]

>>56962460
Poor innocent ugly bastards... These loli gangs are out of control, oji-san can't even try to rape a woman without the little girls raping them back!

[Anonymous No.]

>>56918413
Keep on keeping on

>>56920395
I like that idea, but I would probably end up tuning it down so to speak, and making it more romantic. The original prompt was a bit more lighthearted so I wanted to stick with that
>spoilers
Suisei is talking about herself and one other. Maybe her sister, maybe someone else
Yeah, Marine hides her menhera well, aka behind membership posts. She has it rough sometimes.
Thanks for reading.

>>56921817
>>56918881
>>56948400
Thanks for reading! Glad you guys liked it.

>>56937283
I agree with you actually. I didn't want it to be shitpost-y but at the same time, I didn't really know how to make a fic more in line with my sense of comedy (Absurd/surreal). I even had a really long title in mind. As a consequence, it transformed into a fairly normal fic with the occasional jab. Still a learning experience all things considered. Thanks for reading.

>>56957221
Nah just a shout-out. Kintsugi was the first fic I read here and is a huge inspiration for me.

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>>56914015
What else could be done with the forum format?

[Anonymous No.]

>>56959323
Ganbare on finishing it. Imo, finishing a longform project is very satisyfying and fills you with so much confidence. Rooting for you!

[Anonymous No.]

Today in "making up stories in your head to get mad about"

>Tensions in the south china sea
>Your oshi is on a plane to/from japan for a special event
>The plane gets shot down by chinese SAMs
>The debris crashes in chinese territorial waters
>Death toll unknown, any possible survivors are now political hostages

[Anonymous No.]

>>56965019
NTA, but something cool like a forum dedicated to searching for a missing chuuba could be neat, and you could either make it a HWNDU type shitpost search or an actual thriller sort of thing

[Anonymous No.]

>>56965019
I think more multiperspective stories would be interesting, it doesn't even necessarily need to be lewd. I also liked the other holos' screen names as an extra bit. A pretty simple idea that comes to mind would just be taking the already existing rentry and adding "threads" to the other posts already there.

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>>56959323
Good job bro. Major props for sticking with it till the end. I hope I can say the same someday. In probably 3-5 years. It's almost been a year since I started HoloJourneys and there's still so much to do.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56965683
>actual thriller sort of thing
So what YIIK tried to be.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56965957
She's fucking yiiking out.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56965957
>tried
Oh you didn't like it when Alex YIIKman YIIKed all over the game? Guess you just don't appreciate art

[Anonymous No.]

>>56965730
>Chuuba caught falseflagging on her official account
Lmao, that would be hilarious.

[Anonymous No.]

Clear!

[Anonymous No.]

>>56966315
Sadly, like all gamers I need to self-insert as the character I'm playing as so I couldn't appreciate Alex YIIK plagiarizing a Murakami novel.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56964468
I think your fic is the first Anya featuring story that isn't smut

[Anonymous No.]

what's the most based story in the archive?

[Anonymous No.]

>>56969805
paradise regained, no question

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>>56965019
I think the forum format might be a fun way to do an interlude for a bigger story. Admittedly the format in Facelessdegenerates is pretty much only suited for imitating really small tight knit forums but I could see it being used in tandem with other formats to show 'how the internet is seeing the events of the story' like how the cover job used it for worldbuilding/exposition in a fun in-universe way.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56969805
The one (You) the author wrote of course.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oVkmC1CrpQM

[Anonymous No.]

>>56968672
>the only non-smut Anya story still canonically includes you making her cum 4 times in one night
What does this tell us about the dagger?

[Anonymous No.]

>>56971531
That she's made for getting fucked like all the other IDs

[Anonymous No.]

I wrote a little bit of PekoMari yuri before realizing that yuri doesn't excite me at all.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56970230
>to do an interlude for a bigger story
Call me Roberto Bolaño.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56973236
Yuri makes for cute sfw romances, but as a dude I would much prefer one be a futanari if smut is involved.

[Anonymous No.]

>visits /vt/ for the first time in months while waiting for my recital to start
>"Oh? A contest?"
>Submission ends in 6 hours
>I haven't watched a stream or written anything serious in months
It's joever

[Anonymous No.]

>>56978525
Write a haiku

[Anonymous No.]

>>56978525
Don't come back here, you fool, you were free! RUN!

[Anonymous No.]

>>56978525
The only option left is to write five full-length stories a month to prepare for the next contest.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56978525
Time to bust out that WIP you put in cold storage, you know the one.

[Anonymous No.]

I'm going to have to pull an all nighter to finish this story in 11 hours. It reminds me of university. How nostalgic.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56980447
Oh? You mean THAT one?
Jesus, I don't know... Seems a bit overkill.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56959323
Are we getting any Closure on Fubuki or just a chapter kicking the dog?

[Anonymous No.]

BAMF

[Anonymous No.]

>>56982956
It might be risky, dangerous even, but now is the time to use THAT!

[Anonymous No.]

>>56986006
Gura's futanari cumflation quest... Here we go...

[Anonymous No.]

>>56986344
So, to the people who participated in the writing rumble.
which were new blood?

[Anonymous No.]

I will most certainly not get my fic done in time for the rumble, but I'd rather give it the love it deserves and post it a few days later than rush it. I'm still incredibly stoked to see all the interest and submissions we got so far, and everything currently writing to make the deadline, you're awesome, keep it up.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56988719
I'm new blood! I didn't actually participate in the writing rumble, though.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56986344
Is it Gura's quest to cumflate Holo's or be cumflated by Holo's?

[Anonymous No.]

>>56989887
It's traditional to introduce yourself by writing steamy babymaking sex with this fox

[Anonymous No.]

>>56990013
Both

[Anonymous No.]

>>56989887
Don't listen to >>56990511, it's actually tradition for your first story to be a multi-chapter adventure series with a length of over 100k words, that also DOESN'T star Fubuki.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56990694
Best of luck to her

[Anonymous No.]

>>56990511
>>56990808
I lied. I'm not actually new blood.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56990808
I'm very dissapointed we don't have one of those starring Fubuki
One day I'll fix this

[Anonymous No.]

Thanks for all your support. It's very motivating. I know the story has had its bumps and rough edges, but having people say things like this helps.

>>56965388
Thanks man. And yeah, it's soooooooooooooooooooooo satisfying. I can't wait for the finale. It has been so difficult trying to cultivate it so that it comes off good. Delayed gratification is hard but it's going to be orgasmic when it happens.

>>56965877
Thanks. Especially high praise coming from the guy doing HoloJourneys.

I have never gotten an opportunity to read it but it is on my list though. All I ever see about it is praise.

>>56983090
Oh yes, though if I'm being honest, it will probably be a bit rushed. Both Polka and Fubu are going to have some big parts for what's coming I unfortunately just got two tied up in the many characters I should not have added lol.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56988998
I think I'll have to join you, I greatly overestimated the speed at which I can write. Even if I were to somehow shit out the whole story in the next nine hours it would a horrible mess of awful prose that would look more like dot points for a plot outline rather than a story. The concept I'm trying to write is flawed from the beginning though, so unlike you I think I'll just scrap the whole thing. Good luck to whoever else might be rushing to finish their story though, kudos.

It's really frustrating that I won't be able to participate in this writing contest. I hope we host another one to give me a chance at redemption. I've learnt from this one so I'll go fucking ham next time.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56990808
>>56991134
Okay you fox fuckers, you're getting your damn Fubuki when the Mio arc eventually happens. I'll even give you a bonus and tell you Kurokami is gonna be there too. Gosh, you white kitsune kanoodlers are never satisfied. I wanna get molested by fubuki, I wanna throat bang aunt fubuki, please let me huff Fubuki's shorts. When does it end with you guys?
>>56991479
I try to give praise where it's due, and you've come a long way since you started. Most importantly, you always responded well to feedback and always tried to improve. I hope when HoloJourneys is the next story on your list, you'll enjoy the ride.

[Anonymous No.]

I am imposing a thread ban on fubuki being featured in any new work for the next two years. It's for your own good.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56994444
Sucks to be you, then. There's one in the works right now.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56994444
Blasphemy.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56994444
So uh should I bench this one?

[Anonymous No.]

>>56994955
>Fubu making you make Fugu

[Anonymous No.]

>>56994955
DON'T YOU DARE

LET ME READ IT, ANON

[Anonymous No.]

it is fucking astounding how no matter how ahead of schedule i seem and confident i feel two thirds through the project, this shit is always doomsday countdown, down to the wire bullshit. i seriously think i need to just learn self hypnosis so i can make myself think deadlines are two days before they actually are because it's ridiculous.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56994444
Quads of hate.

[Anonymous No.]

[Anonymous No.]

>>56863300
>>56863390
Sorry for the rushed ending. I wanted to watch the Advent and was afraid of missing the deadline. Enjoy!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRCKf0eRje2c58z0_6Af4KLJNghJVCSTQnbeEfoivUJMrhIUNrI__zhFwsDP0eoUGcI-Pao8IpCZ1RS/pub

Tags: SFW, Shiori, Bijou, Nerissa, Fuwamoco

[Anonymous No.]

>>57001926
its a bit all over the place, and the bloodborne paragraph is kind of disconnected. Is this your first fic?
because despite all of that, its quite decent. You captured the girls quite well and i even had a chuckle at the antics. Work a bit more on how to dress up the scene and how to make scenes end

[Anonymous No.]

>>57002560
>Is this your first fic?
How do you not recognize WAv2's prose yet?

[Anonymous No.]

>>57003064
NTA but maybe because you’re the only person in this thread who actively tracks and analyses all his stories like a possessive girlfriend.

[Anonymous No.]

>>57004239
Or someone with basic pattern recognition, so you're a tourist or a newfag.

[Anonymous No.]

>>56863300
>>56863390
A story about becoming a pirate with a certain woman.

By That Sea - Chapter 1 (23 pages, 9785 words)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSwjUTXwtLshVmmwUFTwPW9q4ybReU3yaNELEqne2klabBxSMCg2Xd6s6qvfgbAZvV6HGM0f_XNSolV/pub
Tags: Houshou Marine, SFW, Adventure, Fantasy, Anachronistic elements

A fic that has been on ice for over a year. My original intent was to do entries of this series between waiting for interesting prompts. Ironically, this got put on ice as I started writing a different short series and I never got back around to it. Ultimately I decided to post this to the rumble as a way to get feedback as I feel that this is contained enough to stand alone if need be. This is like, maybe the second or third thing I have ever written for here, although I have gone and brushed it up. So it might get a remaster or sorts in the far future.
For transparency's sake, I should say that the situation has not changed. I want to do this series, but, I now have a glut of prompts I want to do. So consider this a pilot of sorts.

[Anonymous No.]

>>57005303
A pilot would be more appropriate for an aircraft based story.

[Anonymous No.]

>>57001926
It's definitely one your fics weirdanon2, especially with the barely related rant about Bloodborne in the middle of it.
Still, I liked the character antics since you actually get their voices pretty well, your descriptions could use some work, and maybe having an actual plot (in the English teacher kind of way) could have made this more memorable.
Anyway isn't this like fourth entry into the contest? Admittedly this is your first entry for the sfw part (at least I'm pretty sure none of the other sfw entries are by you).

[Anonymous No.]

>>57005303
Well this was an interesting series opener. It's effectively a one-shot since you kind of closed in a 'The adventure is just beginning' ending but I liked what I read.
Your prose is engaging and the dialogue fits Marine's voice pretty well. Honestly the only thing I can point out is that the way this end is kind of way too open since it doesn't actually tell us what's going to happen in further chapters. Despite that, I do think I'd read more chapters of this since I like how this reads. Though this does ask what you have in mind for further chapters of this given that there isn't any direct plot follow-ups despite having the series having the mystery of her grandmother be a mystery box for future chapters.

[Anonymous No.]

>>57002560
I love Bloodborne
>>57005827
Yeah, I definitely fucked myself in a lot of ways in terms of plot there's no excuse there. I wouldn't say I've written five fics for the contest (I guess I never tagged that shitty Easter Island fic to the anchor) but I like Advent a lot and they've gotten my creative juices flowing. Today's collab was kinda meh but I think that's more so to do with the fic that it's a horror game and all of them are scaredy cats.

[Anonymous No.]

bump

[Anonymous No.]

>>56994955
Is that that fic where you go to school with Kuro / Fubuki?

[Anonymous No.]

What's the best way to incorporate Iroha's de gozaru into English, if at all? I'll write the Iroha cuckquean story, and the setting is the typical pseudo-Tokyo so I'm not sure it'd fit.

[Anonymous No.]

>>57011132
This is archaic keigo. There is no English translation. The closest possible translation would be something like "my lord/liege" because that kind of keigo was reserved for patrons of significantly higher status than your own, but A: that can obviously only be used serving a lord/lady and B: will have her sounding like a chivalric knight. Which... isn't far off, actually, given she's a samurai.

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>>57011132
I daresay?

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>>57011248
Thanks, maybe I'll have her use it a few times as a reference once she's discovered how subservient she likes to be.

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>>57011132
Here's the discussion about it from last time someone asked >>55970855
But to summarize
>Keep it as is
>Replace with "I daresay"
>Go full localization and translate her manner of speaking, maybe have it be like an old formal english

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>>56907171
I'll keep my comments exclusively for part 2 since I already watched the prologue and part 1 (actually I even commented on it in thread >>52107038)
Anyway fundamentally this is still written as a voice drama without voice acting. You can do text tricks to compensate when you actually edit this all together (italicizing, bolding, doing that typewriter effect to literally pace out dialogue) but you're always gonna work around this. Still that's a problem for the finished product not when it's still a script.
Your script is still solid, with strong character voices even through just the text. The only real problem I can see pacing wise is that boyfriend-san probably should have been introduced way back, like in part 1 or even at the prologue; or at least heavily foreshadowed like way harder.
Not really sure how you can insert him more elegantly outside of adding some "when will he call" or loneliness lines in previous scenes to make it more of a foreshadowed twist rather than a suprise twist. Like maybe you can foreshadow this with just art via having scenes with her looking at her phone during in-between scenes maybe the stalker/creeps taking photo scenes? Have her expecting a call that gets cut off (read smash cut to a stalker taking a photograph) before she runs away from stalkers. Because my gut is telling me that, you have to have this foreshadowed in order for it to work as an effective twist to end the chapter.

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>>57011471
>>57011737
NTA, but I personally prefer the "dare I say", since it rolls off the tongue way better.

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>>56863390

I think... I might have to throw in the towel. Idk... Ugh. I hate doing this so close to the finish line. I really do. Here's what I had...

The Tower of Tattle

Tags: mystery, SFW, drama, adventure, comedy

Part I: https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQ2zpVfjL8EUqdmqr-3uJBUGkXBCZQgfirX2vsp4P0td_Mixw8wJU971WIIWHp-bzsu3kSUeWP-2K1j/pub

~3k words

Part II: https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSyPbEN-91TTg-yGJETCeMXN3PuVdfxwhNWRzOb9SS8RyOTePiGnpwZPaBU0vJtF5XAyN0NMyJP2--g/pub

~4.2k words

Part III:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vS9lYT5zQ4XuS9Bzmby2StrmvoR4oQpruHiFIDM8H9v1tElFRpVeQVtSoUADL-mBb6UMj3JYOswzI3N/pub


~10k words

Part IV:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRdYOC2kLATTVIwRpAI0tTW6acTXNDNtZRQa8Ioy15RfosNn6Wbvz4e4oPRYIrHt9svUIB3pelGQXSE/pub
~4.8k words

Part V is gonna be the final part. I really thought I could finish it just working through the evening then through the early morning. I definitely squandered a few hours but... I don't know. I was trying to at least rush something out so I could get a version of it up for the contest, and then fix it for my own uses later.

But there's not much over an hour left, and I've got a whole Phoenix Wright mystery resolution section to write, and then the actual ending to the whole story, and it's reaching the point where whatever I could get done in this last hour wouldn't even be satisfying as a rushed quasi-facsimile. I don't know.

I don't know what the rules are for submitting an incomplete entry. Obviously the issue is that even if I "submit incomplete", I'm still gonna be fixing up my story anyway, which would be practically the same as getting more time. So ugh. I know it was always gonna be a longshot with a 25k-30k submission anyway. It kills me throwing in the towel after all this effort. But I'm kinda at my limit anyway.

Well, whatever. Contest or not, I hope you guys like what I've got. ggs everyone

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>>57014542
sry for a million reddit line breaks and shitty lookingf formatting im tired as fuck

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https://youtu.be/ZbR5WcyWl18?si=yW4Fb1lbuyfc7tB_

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>>57014807
There's no way in hell I'm gonna get my fic done, I still have to write the sexo part.

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>>57014654
I've gotten the impression that Reddit spacing is when you do a line break every time you start a new sentence. Otherwise you'd just be demanding intentionally bad formatting.

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>>57014807
I don't think anyone is going to release something literal last minute. As cool as it would be I'm pretty sure with the concert coming up everyone either does like that novelite and releases it incomplete or they just release it afterwards once it's actually done even if it's not part of the competition. Or they hold it off for another contest, but I'm pretty sure if we ever hold another one in a couple months we're probably going to experiment with length and theme requirements/limitations since it'd be for competition this time rather than a blatant attempt at fishing for new blood.

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>>57015492
i'll probably hang around a lot more if that means anything. i really enjoy talking about writing. but i dont usually do fanfiction, so i felt bad hanging around here like i was LARPing. this'll probably be the last fanfic i ever write tho because i did it for personal reasons

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>>57015672
>i felt bad hanging around here like i was LARPing
Ah, don't worry. I've written well over 10 fanfics and have yet to watch a single stream

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>>56863300
>>56863390
Tainted idol

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQTKj09xYKImeccizLNJq58dqGKIMHq9GoFdA4KuCgYMyCVCAg9s3wCsDIiUzbxfA5OQJs88mXEWIPb/pub

Tags: Tokino Sora, NSFW, fake rape

I managed to make it in time. This was a sort of personal challenge to see if I could get a story out with only the 2 last days of the competition left, so expect it to be rough around the edges. Also I was more inclined to go with passionate vanilla sex for the ending but with the deadline breathing down my neck I decided there wasn't enough time, instead opting for a shorter scene.

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>>57014542
I'm assuming you don't want to submit this to the contest? I'd still recommend continuing to refine it and give it an ending to put it in the regular archive, it looks very promising. You've fought bravely Anon, well done.

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TIME'S

UP!

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>>57020893
HANDS OFF THE DOCUMENT

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So many stories....
/wg/ incline...!

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>18 (or 19 if that novelite still wants to be included in the poll) total entries
More than I expected, Less than I hoped.

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Will we need a new OP template now that submissions are closed?

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>>57022230
Either it switches to the normal version in the rentry or we switch to making it about read the contest fics and pick your favorites for like the 2ish threads before the voting period.

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Aaaand that's it for the Writing Rumble submission period! Thank you everyone for your efforts, even if you were unable to make it in time for your submission. We got OVER THREE stories this contest, so in light of this resounding success, I'm more than willing to host another one sometime in the future. I've uploaded all the submitted stories to the rentry (barring the unfinished WIP that was attached to the contest anchor, I will need a confirmation if the author would like it to be submitted), but please let me know if I've missed any or if I've made a mistake.
The week I've put aside for reading the submitted entries has now begun, and the voting period will begin (around) this time next week.

>>57022230
If nobody else is baking, I can get to making the next thread. I'll just need to take care of a couple things first.

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>>57022005
when do you think you'll start up the next challenge?

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>>57015672
Good points about writing are welcome! No matter if you write yourself.

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I will begin writing my magnum opus for the next contest right now.
I'll have like, thre dozens of stories on the first day!

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>>56973236
https://rentry.org/pekomariabortion
Here's the beginning of the prologue of that aborted PekoMari yuri story I wrote last night. Trying to write a story in English was more painful than I expected, I can't believe it took so many hours to get so few words on the document. I'm posting this to ask if it's painful to read too. The idea was to write several flashbacks of their relationship from different places and points in time; school, work, daily married life etc. Feel free to steal the idea.

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>>57023639
What the hell? Are you actually ESL? This isn't meant as an insult I'm trying to find out this came out?
Though, outside of that gut reaction, you at least how to describe a scene even if it's really rough. Honesty this just feels like comes from a lack of experience. Everyone starts off shit, if you still want to write the best advice is to write some more; set a goal for what you really want to write out and just make it even if it doesn't turn out the best.

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>>57022889
This might be farfetched but would it be possible to get /wg/ pinned to get more people to read and vote in the contest?

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>>57023639
I mean, it is rough in terms of language but the emotion is conveyef pretty well.
You're on the right path, you just need some more experience
Read books and fics, write more and you'll eventually make something great.

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>>57025585
A positively cooperating mod? On /vt/?
Come on anon, were the fanfiction general, not the delusion one.

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>>57024812
I guess I just gotta suck it up and get used to it. I think I'll go for something a bit more shamelessly self-indulgent and self-insertish to keep myself interested.
>Are you actually ESL?
Yes.
>>57025602
Thanks

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We're technically still in contest mode, so I guess the contest edition continues (it's a little early, I know).
>>57026735

>>57025585
I don't even know how we would ask a mod to do that, and getting them to agree would be another story. It'd be cool and all but that seems unlikely.

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>>57023330
You fool, I began a week ago when I realised my WIP wouldn't make it in time! I've already won!

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>>57010568
Yes

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>>57022005
How many were you hoping for? 18’s a decent number.

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Contest's goal was to advertise /wg/ and attract new blood. It failed. It's just a circlejerk.

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Ogey

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>>57027370
Oh yeah?
Well I started working on this WIP since BEFORE this contest was brought up.

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We got plenty of cool stories and I think that matters more.
Forever a niche corner but not neccessarily a bad thing

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>>57028247
Given that the whole point of the contest was to pull the general out of the slow decline it has been in for a whole year now, no. No, 18 new stories does not matter more than new people. 18 stories is a drop in the ocean compared to the archive.

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>>57027715
Kind of hoped we'd get like 2 dozen fics, but given how many writers couldn't finish before the time limit. I think that's more of a testament of our regulars being really fucking slow. That includes me. I failed to write both the shitpost I wanted to make and the smut fic I pivoted to..
>>57028519
Ironically what pulled us out of the slow decline was we were in was ousting the earlyfag and bringing back human made threads combined with Advent being a success. Seriously these contest threads have had some of the most fun discussions we've had in months.

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>>57028519
>>57028050
Assuming you're not baiting, I don't quite understand what you're whining about. For starters we did in fact get tourists coming in and a couple of first time writers. Second, it was a nice change of pace and helped spruce up the thread. What's there to complain about?

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>replying to doomposter

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>>57020553
I'll throw it into the anchor if that's alright. I think what I'll do (if it's ok) is finish part v and hide it away from this thread or something? Just so it isn't like I'm unfairly getting time to finish it. I kinda figure with how huge the archive is, it's better to have my incomplete thing thrown into the contest. I'm glad you're even letting me submit it honestly. That's really nice of you guys. And I'll post part v here after the contest is done. If that's ok...

As for the writing contest or circle jerk or whatever idk it brought me in. I always liked you guys but literally I would never have come if not for it. I dont know if this means anything but I am 100% sincerely trying my best to be a professional writer and am very proud of my skills in general and think I have a lot of good stuff to share with people. I'm just one person but uh. Stuff gets built one brick at a time you know? I wouldn't worry too much about some bucket crabs complaining about the contest

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>>57031239
It's very nice to hear from new blood in the thread as well. Talking about wg to interested folks elsewhere is good too, but them coming here matters most.
It's been a nice few weeks, lads,

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>>57031239
Well you did get it in before the deadline, so I'll put all the chapters you've submitted into the contest archive (but obviously count it as a single entry). Thanks for your participation.
>>57014542
>>56863300
ArchiveAnon will upload your story to the main archive, so you can post part v in the thread sometime later to attach to the rest of your fic. One thing though, I'll need the characters that appear in this story added to the tags as well.

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>>56874568
hot

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>>57030461
>>57035419
A new thread is up, you don't have to keep bumping...

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>>57036138
:(