/wg/ - Writing General - 4kids Edition

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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

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>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.

previous thread:>>53238672

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Story anchor.
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Story recap! There... was one story posted in the last thread.

Electric Soldier Porygon: Tags: SFW, Olivia Felina Okayu , Kimberly Baker Korone , Fionna White Fubuki , Antonio Arururan , Iris IRyS:>>53284939

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Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

Taking a bite out of Laplus' horns and living to regret it.:>>53240848

Having your secretary Suisei preform certain "favors" for you:>>53244768

I want more horror and spooks:>>53270980

Lui, friend of your mother adopts a 5 year old chuuba of your choice because her parents passed. Dedicating her life to her adopted daughter, the days pass her by and she finds herself entering her 30's single.:>>53271960

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>>53319383
Updated version
reddit.com/132yocx

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>>53319431
Lamy's got a terrible addiction, and you help her feed it because the sex while she's high is incredible

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>>53319383
>>53320252
I love and hate this so much.

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>>53319383

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>>53323820
What a suspicious parfait

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>>53320252
Odd choice to change Ame's name.

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>>53324852
It's a reference to how 4kids didn't always leave names unchanged just because they were already English in the original.

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>>53325101
Makes sense.

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>>53326866
>Konkitsune~! I've gambled away all your scrap from Rust!
>Don't worry though, I'll pay you back twice over with something far more valuable...
>One special Fubuwink, directly at you! Here it comes!

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>>53327229
I can't buy food with your fucking winks you autistic fox. Either pay me back for what you stole, or I'm selling you off.

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>>53327229
Reminds me of that one prompt I made many months ago where (You) try and curb Fubuki's gambling addiction because you don't want her getting into debt (and ending up on the streets) and an anon mentioning something like making her pay you in sexual favours in order to get money from you.

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>>53327229
>>One special Fubuwink, directly at you! Here it comes!
i->a

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>>53326866
cute

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>>53330522
What...?

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>>53332431
Fubuwank.

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>>53332790
Yeah, wouldn't mind one of those either.

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Anyone cooking something similar to those collar greentext? that kind of voluntary submission really gets me going

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>>53333378
Good lord there is so much good shit in this image, the foobooty, the fufeet, the fueyes, the foobs...

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>>53335604
No

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>>53335604
I remember an anon saying he was working on a fic with Fauna having a horsepussy but I don't think he's ever come back.

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>>53319431
Sex with Fubuki.

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>>53319431
Sex without Fubuki.

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>>53340189
>>53340585
The duality of man.

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>>53340585
Cuckquean Fubuki??

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>>53342040
Real question for real fuubheads. Would Fubuki be adversarial towards (You) not only sexing Mio, but whisking her away to parts unknown? Even if it's something Mio wants and would ultimately make her happy? Is she a barrier I'm gonna have to write about overcoming?

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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-LUTPIUJUgA
Are you guys watching this?

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>>53345008
Sorry, Bae is streaming. i might catch the VOD tho

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>>53345008
We talked about how the rules were a tad too strict, so there likely isn't gonna be anything substantial or very eye catching in that collection. It's mostly just to feed the warden's ego.

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>Write for hours a bunch of different scenes, paragraphs, etc.
>Realize they don't fit the story
>But! It means that now I know what the story isn't about, or where it isn't headed.
>Put my favorite pieces on a word document where I'll come back to them in the future, maybe for even completely different works.
Inner peace....

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>>53345008
I'm also watching Bae play an eroge.
The lack of spacing between commas is killing me

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>>53342300
Fubuki and Mio are best friends IRL, to the point where I'm confident they would try to compromise as much as possible to avoid damaging their own relationship. If Fubuki was in a relationship with you and found out Mio loved you/wanted to bone you, I'm almost certain she'd try to share.

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>>53345687
That's the good shit bro. I did something similar with an entire conversation that didn't quite fit where I originally made it. I found a good spot to plug it later in the chapter so I was happy about that.
>>53345805
Gotcha that kinda helps. Would Fubuki be alright if the two wouldn't be able to see each other for a while? Or would she try to somehow convince (You) to stay where Mio and her currently live? I'm really just trying to get a feel for if Fubuki is going to try to prevent where the Anon and Mio relationship is going to go. I can't imagine she would try to get in the way of Mio's happiness, but I have to think she would be pretty torn over the fact that her wolf might go away for a while.

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>>53346037
If it's a temporary absence that will make Mio happy, I'm almost certain that she'd be totally okay with it. She's a very selfless person, but with that being said, we haven't seen her madly in love before. I still doubt she'd do a total personality flip even in love, because on reflection, I can't think of a time where I've thought "oh, that's quite a possessive trait."

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>>53346259
Well it's a good thing I don't have to worry about Fubuki being in love.

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>>53346348
What kind of relationship are you going for here...?

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>>53345008
I tried but it's too cringe.

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>>53346469
I'm just going to give my wolf hag the life of adventure of love she's always dreamed of.

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>>53319431
Cheating on your high maintenance GF Suisei with the more agreeable Kurokami.

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>>53319431
Heading to the Fubunker with Fubuki to wait out the Fubocalypse.

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So how does Polka’s vagina lock work? It’s supposed to keep your dick inside her of course, but how does it achieve that while still allowing you to move back and forth? The only way it can keep you locked in place would be by preventing all movement of your penis.

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>>53349310
Never fucked a real fennec but of you want psuedo science it could be some weirdly shaped muscle that traps the head of your cock , the corona or whatever its called, so you can go further in but not back out further than your head

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>>53349670
>Never fucked a real fennec
Strange you feel the need to qualify that, anon.

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>>53349310
Since you don't have a dog penis, just say that the thing clamps down so hard the penis can't move, as if it's sucking him back in constantly, and through hormonic magic, the male begins to desist of his desire to run.

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>>53349310
Her fox magic casts an illusion on your cock to make you think its impossible to move and pull out but in reality it's currently wildly rutting in her pussy. It isn't something she casts willingly but something all fox girls have evolved to do subconsciously in order to catch flightier males.

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>>53349310
>>53349670
>>53350870
>>53351785
how do kemono girls go into heat? that's right, its hormones
i dont have to explain SHIT

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>>53349310
Magnets.

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>>53345008
I submitted one but I don't think she read it.

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>>53352909
Fucking magnets? How do THEY work!?

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>>53338462
i said i was gonna work on something before that, that thing being a Fox kemono Marine story, but its beating my ass

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>>53353043
>Fox kemono Marine
Any reason why, well besides author appeal? Always thought she'd fit more as a dog or pig.

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>>53353043
>really horny mature fox baba marine
I love it. She might be a bit too stupid for the role, but I love it all the same.

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>>53353226
i dont like pig girls, they strike me as odd and there's no fluffy tail. I do love pigs tho, chonky little critters
My logic for Marine is that she's alluring and a ''refined beauty'' but also wacky and silly looking. Also i wanted to put a scene where, despite Marine's blatant attempts to consume every single particle of semen in your body, she puts you in her lap and covers you with her tail because she knows you are in a bad mental state
>>53353295
well that's the problem, i cant seem to find a middle ground inbetween horny and normal, and i've been rewriting all day

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>>53353395
Wait a minute, that fox doesn't look like a lamy.

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>>53353688
I'd still hit that.

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Does the oil/lotion guy want to get a massage or be the massager?

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>>53356816
He wants to be the receiver of many eggs up the butt from a xenomorph queen.

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>>53357823
Ah, a Iofi anilingus eggflation fic. Got it.

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>>53357823
Somehow I doubt that.

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>>53346037
Why can't Fubuki come with? Don't leave the old fox alone...

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>>53319431
Fauna either rapes a bunch of shotas, or she herself gets raped by a bunch of shotas

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>>53349310
What if she had an outer ring of muscles to (somewhat painfully) keep your dick in place, and many spread out muscles inside she can use to milk you? If she could apply pressure at various points inside her vagina she could simulate a jerking-off motion with that, and laugh as she keeps making you moan and squeal.

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>>53348670
What's the Fubocalypse?

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>>53335604
How do you feel about other BDSM fics? I guess they usually start with the chubba already having submitted before.

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>>53358121
On reflection, Iofi's model does kind of resemble a xenomorph, doesn't it?

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>>53360096
The breaking down takes time I guess and most people want that payoff quicker. A slow build up BDSM fic would be great though.

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>>53319431
KFP opens a soap land but instead of soap they use chicken grease and you get to fuck Kiara's fat thighs.

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>>53352972
Was it brutal sex or just something cute?

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To the madman who wrote the 4Kids fanfic, that was perfect. Thank you so much for making it exist. Happy Birthday indeed.
It should be archived

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>>53361085
Often it's not even about breaking them down really, they might just be into it. With BDSM fics like Brat's Punishment and Hedonist Reckoning the chuubas just come across as kinky people who were looking for a partner to dominate and torture them all along. It's a voluntary submission but a planned and enthusiastic outcome from both sides.

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>>53361085
You mean with a holo that is unwilling at first but eventually learns how pleasurable it can be to submit, to get dommed and tortured?

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>>53356816
NTA but if I remember correctly the most important aspect for them was that oil/lotion is applied to a chuuba, so the chuuba would be the massagee.

By the way, I'm ESL and curious: Is the -ee ending for the receiver of an action still commonly understood? I like it a lot personally but I rarely encounter it online.

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>>53364536
It's one of those things where it gets used just enough for people to remember it exists

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>>53364536
>By the way, I'm ESL and curious: Is the -ee ending for the receiver of an action still commonly understood? I like it a lot personally but I rarely encounter it online
It's not used in common conversation much but the ending isn't so unused that no one's going to get what it means.

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>>53364536
You mean like fucker and fuckee? Yeah, it's used, but it's not a commonplace thing. >>53364794 has the right of it.

It's generally kept for situations where you don't have a better way of specifying what or whom you mean.

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Oh, and uhh... I want to have sex with Fubuki.

Goodnight.

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>>53365752
>anon wakes up with a completely spent penis and being unable to cum for a fortnight

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>>53365183
Haha, I love "fuckee" as a word. I'll do my part in keeping this piece of grammatical beauty alive.

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>>53365752
ganbarre

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So how are your wips coming along?
Need help with anything creatively from worldbuilding to characterization just ask here.
Bonus Question: Do you have any dropped wips? Is there anything interesting about them you want to tell? Perhaps someone can get inspired by the concept.

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>>53368370
Still working, as always.

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>>53368370
23k words and still counting. It's getting even longer but I don't care. This will end when I say it should, and not a word sooner.

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>>53369934
Based. It's your own delusion, let it grow as tall as you want.

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>>53369934
That's a huge wordcount, what's the WIP about?

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>>53369934
Wrote a huge chunk of Lost and Found, currently thinking how to progress the plot just so i can end the chapter in a way that i like
>Dropped WIPS
Several variations of "loving this doomer girl until she improves" with several girls, but it just doesnt work

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>>53369975
Damn right brother. And something is certainly "growing" alright.
>>53370118
Current chapter of HJ. Near where my chapters usually reach their end in length, I got onto something that I simply don't want to save for the chapter afterwards, so we're just gonna keep rolling.

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>>53370724
>loving this doomer girl until she improves
Okay I have to ask, why didn't it work from you? Because lacking in any context it sounds like it would be a standard "manic pixie dream girl" plot but with the dream girl being (You) instead.
Though I guess conceptually it doesn't really work if you're going for a traditional Reader-Insert type Anon since a story like that kind of needs contrast with the two main leads so you kind of need to have him to not be your typical Reader-Insert.

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>>53368370
It's getting somewhere, I think; I don't need help, just time - and feedback once it's done.
Bonus: Not sure how interesting it is, but I dropped a smut fic about Towa, after being the bottom to Coco during sex for too long, deciding to give herself a demonic futa cock to assert her dominance in bed. It goes well at first, but an intervention by Kanata reveals that Towa loves CBT which results in her getting made to scream and cum while the dragon and the angel torture her supernaturally sensitive, magical genitals.

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>>53368370
Editing what I have so far. I realized I'd been writing the narration the same way it is in my other WIP, and I wanted to try and change it up for something more brusque. Shorter, more to-the-point sentences.

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>>53370937
In a way it didnt work because i lacked several ways of tiying up everything together
>Why do (YOU) keep going to their house/apartment without coming across as some weird buttsex maniac
Im not big into incest, but the first idea was ''she's your depressed city cousin and you come from the countryside to liven their lifes a bit". I wrote that with Bae, Towa and Mori.
The problem is that its hard to have them FEEL like doomers unless i go hard into the misery and it ended up not being a good read
>Why are they doomers
So naturally i turned to more ''somber'' members, like Polka or Kronii, but i realized that writing their issues was complex and all of the endigs would be about how they ultimately fixed their mentality with minimal imput from you. Every thing i added just felt alien and would realistically make the girl shoo you away
>What story?
So i decided to go with a "Streamer persona is an act and they are doomers behind scenes" setting, picked up Bae again because she's my oshi and i hit the gigantic wall of what even would the plot be
Like sure, make them happy. But HOW? do you just show day to day until the problem goes away? what are the stakes?

It was one of those things where no matter where you pull from, another thing tangles itself around it, so i ended up dropping it

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>>53371439
Okay, that just sounds like the solution for this would be (You) are Bae's younger cousin who has come to live with their relatives for schooling. You inadvertently save Bae from her doomerism by coming over everyday to her cuckshed in order to hang out with your favorite cousin. Insert incest plot here about how you've always admired your cousin and how she saved you when you were a kid here, then tie it all together with a happy smut scene.

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>>53371439
>The problem is that its hard to have them FEEL like doomers unless i go hard into the misery and it ended up not being a good read
I had this problem too, recently. Dropped a WIP at 80% because it was just bringing me down. When I write a fic I usually try to daydream up dialogues for that fic. Ended up filling my head with just depressing shit for a month straight. Who wants to have that be your mindstate?

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>>53372105
Salvage that wip by turning it into a rape correction
>PLAP PLAP PLAP
>Get Happy! Get Happy!

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>>53371922
eeh if i were to write that i would forget about the doomer thing and would make it about making her come out of her shell and help her reach the current state of ''girl living her dream''
>>53372105
I dont mind Doomer media but it has to have a strong backbone for it. No longer human is like a great book that only works because dazai wrote in excessive detail how detached he was from reality and society, but methinks its way too much to cram into a fic where the endgame is to cure the girl
>>53372202

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>>53372202
>GET HAPPY YOU STUPID DEPRESSED BITCH
>TAKE MY LOVE OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

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>>53372202
I wrote the rape scene to be too realistic, and now I have no idea how to resolve it.

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>>53372319
I think at that point it would be an entirely different (though not bad) concept. Maybe fudge the timeline a bit so you can have Haachama and Sana as side characters (Mostly because Holo!Space!Australia is kind of barren for workable side characters. It's either them or abandoning Australia and just having CHADcast be the supporting cast.) Then center the plot around trying to save Bae from her isolation before you have to leave.

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>>53373053
I think at that point you either bite the bullet and go for melodramatic rape/love confession with a big damn kiss... Or go for a making the ending a shitpost via the all caps dialogue and thoughts about making this doomer happy.

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>>53373335
Good ideas.
The basic premise of the rape is that the rapist is the apologetic about it at all, and the victim is mostly confused and unsure.
I'm bouncing between revenge rape of the victim, acceptance as a rapeslave from the victim, or character development of the rapist combined with blue balling lovey dovey behavior from the victim.

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>>53372202
>>53372567
Which chuuba would be best for this prompt?
I'm thinking Polka.

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>>53373722
>*isn't apologetic

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>>53373737
Nene

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>>53373737
Give me shit all you want for this but a rape correction parody like that screams Gura.
... Or Shion now that I think about it. Basically it fits anyone that has the usual rape correction joke about them + a history of depression.

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>>53373737
>>53373898

Seconding Gura, ticks all the boxes

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>>53373898
I'm not a fan of Gura nor do I watch her.
Then again I don't watch Shion but I prefer her and I've always wanted to curb her bratty attitude.

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>>53374402
>EN cunny
:(
>JP cunny
:0

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>Mio plays a rhythm game a few days back
>Looks like character is being hypnotized, watch and all
>Mio makes 'noises' to keep up rhythm

Fuck man.

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>>53319431
Fed up with her yabaIRyS teasing, you give that nephilim ass the pounding it deserves

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>>53376775
I saw that too. You best believe that's gonna be on repeat when I get to eventual mio SEX.

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>>53376775
>Mio quietly panting onto your shoulder as you pound her, all int rhythm of your thrusts
>different movements yield different sounds
>she caps them all off with a whispered "I love you..." in your ear
My.. my heart... my dick!

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>>53377700
Shame her horns would be poor handlebars

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Would IRyS call you daddy or is too wholesome for that?

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>>53381262
IRyS is a total inceststacy so absolutely

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>>53381262
The gap moe between "pull my hair and call me a whore" and "the girl your parents wanted you to get with from day one" is real

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>>53381262
She absofuckinglutely would. She's one of the few EN I can see saying that shit casually.

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>>53381262
>>53381427
>>53382731
the best thing is that irys is also a massive idiot savant so you could easily
>Do as she says and pound her merciless, she bangs her head against the bedframe and gets stuck with the horns, ruining the mood
>do one of the porn poses she likes, five minutes in she's asking for a time out because her leg is cramping like crazy
>Confidently asking for a creampie only to learn that you are supposed to take contraceptives BEFORE the act
>try to do a sexy dance and stumbling over her own feet

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>>53319431
Chadcast as a trio of Femcel succubus triying desperately to fuck you

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>>53381427
I read that as insectstacy at first and am now thinking IRyS could be the next victim of The Fly

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>>53386794
Pls no

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>>53380238
They're pretty suited for horn breaking. Distinct enough to look different after while having a nice handhold.... Too bad she isn't bratty enough to deserve the full ryona treatment.

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>>53384088
Don't we already have two fics about that premise? Not that I would mind a third one...

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>>53389158
them fucking you? yes
Them being slutty demons that feed on semen? not quite

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>>53388998
You could make something like Irys asking you to break her horn (since she saw porn of it) but then in the middle of it she chickens out, but the horn is already cracked so its best to break it so she can regrow it
Cue the biggest and ''scariest'' orgasm of her life, with you comforting her in the aftermath while her legs keep shaking

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>>53384088
That just makes me think of the fic being about CHADcast trying to knock (You), an ace student off of the straight and narrow to corrupt you into being the kind of degenerate they'd like. Basically something like the 'corruption' part of the fujocast prompt but with less hypnosis and more fucked up romance/seduction.

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>>53389569
Fuck
>Impurity is stored in the horns.
>IRyS starts acting much more seiso after getting her horns broken.
>Much more of an angel than a devil.
>Really embarrassed about the whole thing.
>Unfortunately the incident has given you a taste for something degenerate.
>And IRyS seiso act is drawing out all of your weird tastes.
>It's how she regains her horns
>Catering to your tastes and letting her body be ready for your abuse.
>When they pop back up from her skull she'll be twice as horny as you ever were.

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>>53319431
Having your IQ drained at a dangerously low level and having to depend on a chuuba of your choice to take care of you. While she does take care of you and keeps you safe, she also takes advantage of you by fucking you as she needs to release the stress she has by taking care of you and you being unable to say no happily agree with her.

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>>53383587
I like the idea of IRyS getting her horns stuck.

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>>53360081
https://youtube.com/watch?v=ljZwKRVrMps
Recite the chant!

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>>53393692
I like how Sora is the one voicing the tsundere spell.

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While we're on the topic, does anyone have any tips on how to write IRyS? I don't really have a grasp on her personality and didn't notice any specific speech patterns.

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>>53394196
She has a slightly limited vocabulary especially when it comes to words EFL folks her age would only have learned as adults in English-speaking countries, she speaks in a kind of formal and "by-the-book" style compared to the average American, and she says fudge and shiitake instead of fuck and shit. She also backpedals from what she says fairly often by explaining what she meant or interrupting herself mid-sentence.
Basically all symptoms of her living in Japan and using Japanese as a primary language.

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>>53394196
Watch streams.

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>>53394543
I see. I did have a theory that I didn't notice speech patterns because we speak similarly since we're both ESL. So that's probably the case.
Also I might now be tempted to add something along the lines of "fudge the shiitake out of me!" to the dialogue.

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>>53394196
I had made a whole ass essay on IRyS, but taking a second look I realized I had just written 'SEX' 463 times, so...

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>>53395343
Make it
>fudge the...the shiitake out of me!
and it's perfect.

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>>53395436
I want to see it anyways.

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>>53397045
I don't know that seems like a lot of work to retype and I don't know how useful for writing about IRyS it woul-SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX SEX

[Anonymous No.]

>Glance over old WIP
>Suddenly pick it up again, write a couple of sentences here and there.
>Scenarios start popping up.

It's the little things.

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Trying to sketch out some kind of femdom thing with Ollie's new Sallie persona. I don't want to bother explaining why (You) are attracted to her when she's obviously a zombie, but it would feel like a copout to just ignore it and pretend she looks like a normal human (especially when I want to selfishly indulge my makeup fetish and describe her face.) Any ideas for an easy way to get around it without it feeling weird?

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>>53400634
You could state that her beauty overwhelms any of the inherent flaws her zombification brings, or that the contrast actually works in her favour like a hot chick with a cool scar. Alternatively (You) could just suffer from intense, mind-dulling haglust and I don't think anyone would blame you

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>>53401163
Hmm, maybe I could roll with the scar idea to pass off the stitch on her face and just have her wearing something that covers up most of her when (You) first meet. By the time she starts taking her clothes off absolute haglust would be in order anyway.

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>>53403119
Regardless, Anon's cum is gonna have a hell of a time doing anything with those eggs. 32 AND dead? Shit.

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>>53408070
Its funnier to imagine choco and Koyori with dark rings under their eyes, malding because they cant just get how the fuck is ollie pregnant

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>>53408070
If it doesn't work the first time, I guess she'll just need to keep breeding you every day until it does. If she never gets pregnant, well...

[Anonymous No.]

>>53408070
>32 AND dead
No, you see the eggs are dead twice over which means they cancel each other out making Sallie Ollie's second most fertile persona.

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>>53408328
>Holohag discord gossiping about how Sallie apparently scored with some young guy
>Cracking jokes about how hopeless her future is compared to theirs, because at least they all still have some time left
>They all just start seething and ban her when she posts a pic of her positive pregnancy test

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>>53400634
>why (You) are attracted to her when she's obviously a zombie
I never understood why some people get hung up on this. She's a magically reanimated zombie far removed from any conventions of standard biology. The fact that she's walking around after however many years means her flesh isn't actively rotting or anything unpleasant like that. As far as your story goes, you could just describe her as being cool to the touch, having patchwork skin with detachable body parts, and not needing oxygen.

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>>53413833
But anon... The necrophilia is like 1/8 of Ollie's appeal.

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Alright, here's a little draft of the beginning of the Sallie thing.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRvorkth9m_fDFfaVeMXF9zOCXuL6inbLcHkY2ND_O9Rq9PSiweFTWStXAtCsRfRFKIyk3uLLgugIA0/pub

I have plans for much more than this, but this seemed like a good stopping point for a proof of concept first draft. Let me know if you have any feedback. And if you're not into makeup or lipstick, sorry, those are my fetishes and they're definitely going to feature more in the full thing.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53415150
It looks good concept wise. Probably needs a second pass for prose (in particular your using 'you' a bit too much) and length (in terms of adding details) but otherwise it's a good proof of concept.

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Selen Bully guy
Slampig guy
If you are still breathing, please continue to do so

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>>53416087
Thanks for checking it out!
Yeah I could feel how awkward the "you" overuse was as I was writing, but I have basically no experience writing like that. I've written stuff for other fetishes but it was always completely third person, and I hate writing in the first person. Gonna do some research on other fics in here for inspiration on that.
As far as details go, this bit in the car was honestly just to get the story back to her apartment where she can breed the shit out of (You) and do all manner of depraved femdom things but it expanded a bit too much. I wonder if maybe I should just take out most of that and move it to the first apartment scene, and just have a bit of kissing and grinding in the car to build up tension.