/wg/ - Writing General - Kusogaki Edition

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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.
Previous thread:>>26679760

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Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em!

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
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Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
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>>26679771
Story recap! There... was one story posted in the last thread.

Say, Can You See? Epilogue Chapter: Tags: Shion, Okayu, Aqua SFW:>>26721425

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Story recap! There... was one story posted in the last thread.

Say, Can You See? Epilogue Chapter: Tags: Shion, Okayu, Aqua SFW:>>26721425

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Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

Mori getting too drunk for her own good at a bar then gets pumped and dumped.:>>26687821

Sneaking past Anemachi in order to be the one to tuck Suisei into bed every night.:>>26698510

Something with this feels https://youtu.be/FvOpPeKSf_4 >>26703352

Fubuki sold as a slave but her master is a gentle and loving soul.:>>26703383

Fauna accidentally eating a weird mushroom, which causes her to grow a big mushroom futa cock that causes her to have thoughts and urges to fuck and creampie other women. She tries to research a way to remove it while trying to keep the dickshroom a secret as she goes about her usual routine.:>>26748383

Doggy God Korone trashing your date then raping you on your way home:>>26764640

Oh no! You're the resident lion caretaker at the Chuuba Zoo and both Botan and Rurudo have gone into estrus at the same time! You can handle them one at a time usually, but now you're in a pinch!:>>26765836

A fic where you cheat on Botan and she spends her time hunting you down to kill you:>>26773395

(You) caring for your disabled(in a wheelchair, mute and or deaf, diaper-using, your choice) oshi, only to abuse her, either phisically or sexually at the end.:>>26782732

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To the authors of:
Life with a Lion isn't easy, y'know?, To be 17 again, and To Slay A Monster, can you three(??) throw me some series descriptors for the series archive? Thanks.

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What happened to the Lotus High author? And the Footsteps Through Time? So many great stories, stopped dead.

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Man, I really wish I have time to post here more, but between working, vidya, IRL and writng I got almost no time to read through here. I want you guys to know I really appreciate the threads though, helped me become a better writer, I think

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>>26814744
This general unironically made me want to pursue a career in writing stories. Not that I think it’ll be possible but it’s nice to dream.

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>>26811429
A fic about kidnapping chuubas and putting them into Saw-esque death traps where they have to overcome some fear of theirs in order to escape.

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>>26811389
Not exactly a story, but here is a supplementary chapter to Girl-Boss Watson, all about the /k/ stuff I couldn't add to the main story.
Girl-boss Watson and her paramilitary death squad, supplementary material
https://docs.google.com/document/u/1/d/e/2PACX-1vSaz2TaRb9O0KXMVXx1sNHJd4qWaPFp6Qk8AL69kjVZzOhgsYkxzgOkyY4Hz4eevnHU5tAfN6eMbc6J/pub
My last chapter wasn't received too well (although I did write it many months ago and no longer stand by the quality), so I thought I'd whip this up to cool my crippling /k/ autism and not have it affect my actual writing too much. This probably isn't that interesting to most people, but it's better than a main chapter being bogged down by a bunch of military stuff nobody understands. If you guys like it, I'll write more for all the chapters, if not, I won't update this document as frequently.
There is a little bit of world-building and lore in here, but don't expect massive reveals or whatever. I also didn't want to steal SCP's unicode for censorship, but it's so verstile since it can imply word length.
I'm fairly confident all of the information presented here is correct, but if I get something wrong, be sure to let me know. I take accraucy very seriously on this.

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>>26816252
Its a great option for a sideline, at least.

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>>26811429
Meeting a grown up Aqua and befriending her not realising that this is the same girl that you bullied in school until she confesses to you that the reason she's an autistic introvert was because she was bullied in school. You feel immense guilt for it and try to make it up to her while at the same time trying not to make her realise that the bully is you.

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>>26790697
Chuuba Taker anon here, pretty cool to see people still remember a fic I posted an year ago

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>>26819167
I think it's one of the funniest fucking fics in the archive, it'll always be in my personal hall of fame.

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>>26817769
Man, your /K/ autism never ceases to amaze, all that gun stuff I don't understand but don't doubt the legitimacy of. This is probably the most authentic fanfic report for a fictional setting I've seen

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>>26819003
...A silent voice but with Baqua?

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>>26819511
I was thinking the same thing but I guess the difference here is that you didn't know it was the same Aqua you buliied.

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>>26819511
I.. did not even think about that when I wrote the prompt but now that you mention it. Yeah the concept's pretty similar but I just want a sweet romance fic with a little drama with Aqua

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>>26812143
Anon, a completely normal person, travels to Japan for work, but little did he know that he'd meet and become friends with a rather peculiar lion. His relationship with the white-haired predator will become more than just friends as he battles his old life.
The situation may not be optimal but, will Anon be able to achieve a future with her? Join him in this story and find out!

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>>26816190
Damn, Japanese porn is weird. Cheers for the sauce, though.

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>>26811429
Finally getting in bed with Marine only to realize that her ass is so unimaginably gargantuan that your pinprick can barely reach her entrance, much less enter her. Neither of you know who should be more mortified

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>>26821348
Done. Thanks pal.

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>>26817769
No idea or understanding of what you are talking about but really like extra stuff like this to add onto stories

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>>26817769
Honestly, I'm just happy I got to see a picture of a Unica.

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What are you working on? Ask for some advice or simply generate some buzz and excitement for your new literary masterpiece!
Bonus Question: Where do you think you're weakest at when it comes to writing?

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>>26824522

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>>26824522
my extensive backlog of stories I've been putting off of reading
bonus question: writing narration that isn't barebones beige prose

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>>26822708
Anon i don't think the female anatomy works that way

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>>26826607
your mom's does

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>>26826607
It's a story about having a small dick, let them have their fantasy

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>>26811429
A story where anon idolizes his oshi, who is also his very close friend, so much he starts to feel bad about his own life and then refuses to watch the oshis streams, which the idol notices. Cue oshi helping anon in a redemption arc.

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>>26822708
This gives the dumb idea of this being a comedy fic with the narration describing Marine's ass like it's some eldritch thing that's incomprehensibly huge, the comedy coming from the fact that it would just be describing a woman's fat ass.
Too bad my WIP backlog is a bit too filled up.

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>>26824522
It might be an overstatement to say working because I'm pretty busy with other things, but I'm figuring out the plot of a sequel to the Ayame BDSM scenario I wrote (that was kindly archived, as well as given tags and a good title by the anon running the fanfic repository here), as well as working out ideas for the potential Reine caning story that was discussed back in >>26474900. Can't promise anything yet, though - I'll have to see where I end up creatively and time-wise.

Bonus Question: In the context of this (effectively) English-only fanfiction community, probably my English writing skills. I'm good at communicating in it, but being creative and writing prose is different. I feel like I have a hard time with diverse and appropriate vocabulary and sentence structure - and I can't think in English, which can make me feel like I'm writing and translating at the same time. I haven't learned all the rules and norms by speaking and hearing them every day, but by having them spelled out in school; it leads to a less creatively potent, to a less intuitive grasp of the language.

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>>26823699
I like supplementary content in a series. Helps it feel more fleshed out.

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What next?

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>>26824522
working on that peko femboy fic for the one dude who wanted it. Maybe i'll do other prompt later

>Bonus question
Descriptions, I'm editing and adding more as it goes

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>>26828023
BRO THOSE ARE BALLS

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>>26824522
Bonus: Smut, and maybe conveying emotions.

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>>26828023
That really depends on which side of the wall I'm on and just how tightly she's wedged in that altogether loose-looking shrubbery.

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>>26828023
Brother she has a ballsack.

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>>26828023
Okayu spreads Koro-san's pussy. I've seen the next picture

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>>26828023
Kick her in the balls

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>>26827783
>English Proficiency
Yeah, there really is no shortcut here except to consume more Spoken English content in order to expand your grasp on the language. I guess you could do the thing a lot of other anons have done for learning Japanese where watching JP vtubers helped them to get better at learning japanese but for like an English vtuber; but that'd take you getting an EN oshi.

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>>26828057
puffy vulva, dog things

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>>26828156
Then that's the fattest pussy I've ever seen, god damn.

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>>26828155
I listen to many hours of spoken English every week - it definitely helps, but reading good stories is what I feel like helps the most for writing myself; I can mostly write like real people speak at this point, but most of a story isn't direct speech. Apart from some shorter writings, and fanfics, I've read Dune, Animal Farm, LotR and Silmarillion in English so far - there's definitely a ways to go.

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How do you translate the verbal ticks that matter a great deal to the character such as "wagahai" where you can't just slap it on a sentence like "peko" or "degozaru"?

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>>26828216
THAT'S AN ANUS
I REPEAT, WE HAVE AN ANUS
MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOODS

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>>26828306
Maybe it was pumped recently.

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>>26828603
Oh...
Ironically I think you need to read more modern shit. If you're going for something smutty and 'low-concept' then trying to go for bigger words isn't the best idea unless you have really good command of the language.
>>26828664
Unfortunately La+'s Wagahai is kind of in a fucked situation where you can't use it as is, since it's a first person pronoun and using it in place of I in her speech would be fucking terrible. With other chuubas you can get away with just using it as is in speech, but with La+ you kind of need to 'translate' it to an english equivalent if you want to write anything serious involving her.

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>>26828876
>Ironically I think you need to read more modern shit. If you're going for something smutty and 'low-concept' then trying to go for bigger words isn't the best idea unless you have really good command of the language.
That's very true...at least engaging with English-speakers online and sometimes irl keeps my vocabulary somewhat fresh. I wish I read books in English earlier, but I've read a lot in my native language and these were the only (originally English) books I loved so much that I had to go back and read the original.

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>>26828664
make her speak in an unnecessarily old-fashioned and haughty manner

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>>26828603
>25k word count LotR description style smut fic
Might be good for a laugh if it's done right

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>>26828023
good fucking lord, what a view on both ends. that really does look like a suspiciously well-proportioned bulge, but with the benefit of the doubt, i'm turned the fuck on

bugfag, pay for a korone fic next, she needs more love

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>>26829596
a vanilla korone fic, none of that weird shit. almost walked straight into that one.

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>>26828713
>deleted
You fuckers always gotta spoil the fun, don't you?

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>>26830245
Just me being paranoid cause I didn't notice the butthole

https://www.pixiv.net/en/artworks/99278689

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>>26830402
I really hate that it's Okayu's arms in that shot. Can't self-insert into that one.

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>>26830499
I will travel to Japan and insert myself into Okayu for you

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>>26830499
just pretend you stole her jacket

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>>26830626
You're the hero I need

>>26830654
I'd rather pretend I stole Korosan's heart

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>>26824522
A love triangle sort of thing involving subaru, shion, with side appearances from other holos

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>>26827783
You wrote some bdsm stuff? I'd keen to look at it, what is it called?
>>26827838
I have some ideas for suplementary content for "my girlfriend polka", stuff that would happen between the end of the prom night and the epilogue. I have some outlines and ideas i'd like to put in there but haven't had the time to flesh them out and see where they go.
>>26828139
Link it please

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>>26831302
>You wrote some bdsm stuff? I'd keen to look at it, what is it called?
"That's A Paddlin'", though calling it some stuff might be an overstatement - for now it's just a short Ayame spanking/discipline scenario that might get a followup. Hope you like it, though!

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>>26831302
>>26830402

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>>26829596
so, you're turned on by the possibility of korone having a penis under that bulge? kinda sus

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>>26824522
A fic where you win a night with two chuubas while gambling at the HoloCasino. I'm still undecided on who they'll be, but I'm leaning towards Lui and Chloe

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>>26834327
Lui would be nice, specially if she had a bunny girl outfit

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>>26828876
Maybe have her use the royal we? Or just have her go full chuuni and have her refer to herself in the third person like a villain in a Silver Age comic book.

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>>26836654
She will, they all will.

Can't find any Lui bunnysuit art tho :(

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>>26839231
Best I could find

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>>26834327
What if they won a night with you at the casino?

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>>26839548
>You do so poorly at the poker table that you have to offer your body as payment to the house
A good idea for another time

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>>26839652
I was thinking about you being so desirable that they play for the right to spend the night with you...another kind of fantasy I guess.

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>>26828603
Read Moby Dick

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>>26839892
I didn't like that very much, but perhaps it was because of the translation or because I was younger at the time. Maybe I'll look into it again, though the suggestion of reading recent works to help with my own writing makes a lot of sense to me.

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>>26840264
I'd recommend Murakami for recent authors, but you should give Moby Dick another try because it's one of the greatest books in English literature.

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>>26840264
Don’t just read good stuff, though. Reading bad stuff can help you understand why things are bad, and how to avoid them.

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Bump

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if only someone was writing fanfiction about vtubers right now.

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>>26843961
Or posting it even, aye?

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>>26843961
sorry, too busy watching vtubers to write about vtubers

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>>26843961
Heresy

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>>26828053
Femboy fic not yet posted. Permission to call anon a fag?

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>Dream about getting a hard copy of some Anon's fanfic complete with tags on the inner sleeve, illustrations on the inside on some pages, shit's leatherbound and like 250 pages
>Back sleeve has a note that just reads "Finally found where you are. Expect more soon :^)"

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>>26849435
Built for RPR

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>>26838840
I mean listing out the options to 'translating' Wagahai:

1:Royal We, has the same connotations (well close enough) but causes pronouns problems when 'we' needs to get used for normal use.
2:Refer to themselves in the third person, would honestly be the best option... were it not for the fact that a lot of chuubas already use their name as how they refer to themselves which will 'blunt the impact' of using third person if other people use it, "unironically" for how they refer to themselves.

I think comparing them, laplus referring to themselves in third person works best. Especially if she adds something extra to it to make it different to other chuubas doing the same.

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>>26829596
>>26829664
I'll put it in the maybe pile. Korone is unbelievably attractive even before you consider her kind and playful personality, but for some reason I just don't feel aggressively sexual towards her. Maybe if she were to come on to (you)...

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>>26852208
So I take it pekofag isn't gonna be commisioned to make Dog Maggots IV.

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>>26851535
>causes pronouns problems when 'we' needs to get used for normal use.
I think I'd go with the royal we personally, and use capitalization and context to make things clear. But to each their own.

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>>26811389
A Predator's Touch, The Days of Dreams (Part 2)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRaKTANF4ON-qFv7rYp3I9sjNf5tgOE00b4QhniYnp41CwLwMc66mtZnxs3VUOnYBeJ1tuED---zuhK/pub

Tags: Botan, Koyori, SFW

Chapters will get subsequently longer as I get comfortable proofreading. This one was fun to write though.
As always, feedback is helpful.

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>>26852717
Nah, he was never gonna be in the first place.

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>>26851151
I have to ask, what was the 'idea' of the fic you got in your dream?

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>>26853140
It was some sort of other dice based game, I remember that. It had a list of rolls attached to it and apparently it also had some yuri in it, but also tags like 'gore' and 'horror' so I'm guessing at some point shit went really bad. I never even ordered it, it just arrived at my doorstep unannounced. The only thing I remember clearly was one of the illustrations in the book was for a detective agency, so it was also a mystery story

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What’s an actual daughter chuuba? Not even just a daughterwife, just a genuine daughter for wholesome stuff.

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>>26853352
The message is clear then. Fate has decreed that you must create a 250 page dice based CYOA book with elements of gore, horror, and yuri; then bind it in leather to send to AA. (With your own illustrations of course).

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>>26854359
How are you supposed to send it to AA when you don't know his address?

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>>26854451
>Autism, uh, finds a way

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>>26854359
Whenever Reine starts accepting fanmail she'll forward it to him

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>>26854105
I'm only able to think of one that has daughteru vibes, and she's less wholesome, more kusogaki.

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>>26854451
>he doesnt know about the anagram

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>>26854701
Who?

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>>26854105
I don't watch Kobo but she gives off daughter vibes to me.

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>>26839231

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>>26854451
When The Great Work has been accomplished and properly binded together; your dreams will show you where to send it.

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>>26854105
Uruka from Phase Connect

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>>26811429
noel oneeshota

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>>26854105

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>>26834327
A full round of sex where they awkwardly try to speak english for you

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>>26858098
I didn't plan on having a language barrier, and it's a bit too late to change that...but I do like that idea

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>>26811389
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQcIDVlJp54LY7RjkeB0eSXLRe-d4BQOPgK698Nelcr7IqLoZ2mYxnYV5xXSomGRPR33xnz-zgSN4bT/pub

To Slay A Monster, Chapter Six
Tags: (you), Flare, Noel, fantasy, adventure, mystery

I tried to write another fight scene again so tell me how I did on this. I have the least confidence when writing fights so I have no doubt I can improve.

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>>26812143
For "To Slay a Monster"

(you) adopted a young half-elf as your maid, ripping her away from her mother. You guide this young girl through childhood and into adulthood, growing a fatherly affection to her. In the background, however, forces scarcely understood plot the downfall of not just you, but your entire country.

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>>26811429
(You) die, and leave behind your oshi and kids only for the hypnosis on her to wear off once you die

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>>26862526
>Suisei awakening from her hypnosis.
>A dead man was on top of her. The bastard that did this.
>Her breasts were leaking milk, her body was pregnant with triplets, and outside she could hear the cries of her other children.
>She remembers in that instance everything that happened in the years of hypnosis
>The hypnosis, the degrading sex acts, the deliberate ruining of her career.
>She screams.
Hot.

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>>26854779
Chibidoki. Sorry for taking so long to answer.

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>>26861590
I enjoyed the chapter, lots of interesting lorebits to chew on. I especially liked the description of the comet's transformation. As for the fight scene, it was a bit difficult to follow what was happening with the enemy's movements between attacks, but I was able to visualize the action pretty well overall, so I'd say you did a decent job.

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>>26864283
She's killing the children isn't she

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>>26811429
For once I want Kiara to be the one getting cucked by Ina fucking Mori with her feta cock

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>>26870639
If that's where you want to take it next.
In all honesty when I though up that short greentext, the only thing I thought of was suisei in despair after waking up and realizing what has happened.
Thinking about how I'd expand/continue this I can only imagine a short one-shot with this scene being the end to it.
...
I'll write it out. Writing out something in more conventional 3rd person sounds fun.

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>>26828023
Get my ribs broken as this is a trap

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>>26871116
Gives a whole new meaning to dick cheese

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>>26852890
Alright, that was a good read! Thanks anon! Your writing is really good, but there are a few things that I keep wondering about.
For starters, I have no idea where this story is coming from and where it's going. Like, why are you living with Botan? What's your relationship anyways? It almost feels like I opened a book and started reading in the middle - like there are big chunks of the interlude missing.
Then, your pacing seems off a bit. You spend a lot of time setting up scenes that amount to nothing (like the part about not disturbing Botan while streaming).
At the same time, seemingly important plot-points are just shoved in, with no lead-up whatsoever (Polka being your ex, for example).
If you can figure those things out, I think you got a really good thing going!

>>26861590
Good chapter! I really enjoyed it. Not much else I can say. The fight scene was a bit clunky, but made enough sense to get the point across, don't worry about it.
It's up to you if you want to polish up on your fight-writing in the future. Personally, I'd say that your character building and story telling is good enough for the story to work without dozens of 'epic fights', but I'm no fan of those even in professional literature.

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>>26871228
So more focus on the sex before than the tragedy after. I can dig it

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>>26872957
Suppose this does need a sex scene to start this off.
What sex position would be the best while dying and cumming inside the comet? The mating press?

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>>26873701
Sounds like a bit of a thematic mismatch if she's already pregnant. Something like a Sleeping Beauty with the belly to the side might make more sense ergonomically, but ultimately it's up to personal taste.

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>>26871344
Korone as a trap sounds terrifying

>>26871494
yummy feta

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>>26861711
Gotcha. Thanks.

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>>26811429
playing with a chuuba's animal ears

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>>26877322
I'm suprised we don't have more fics focusing chuuba's more animalistic parts. Like play with Towa's tail or fluffing Watame's hair.

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>>26881766
I honestly think it's a symptom of the usual 'grounded' modern day Tokyo setting. It's the default since it's the easiest to envision and doesn't require any setup but it does make stuff trend to the realistic human bits rather than the fantastical parts.

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>P.9 in 40m

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Why do I only ever get inspiration and motivation to write just before I sleep? Fucking hell.

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>>26883616
Anon, don't spit inspiration in the face. If you have the motivation, write even if it turns out to not really push what you really want out of your fics getting the idea out there is better than forgetting it when you sleep.

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>>26883729
Yeah it's better than nothing, but I wish it would strike when I'm sitting at home with nothing to do than when I'm in bed about to sleep.

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>>26883973
The only trick you can do to force it is to have a 'writing time' on your daily schedule where you have a time and a place where you write and only write.
It's not a surefire way to manipulate yourself to have your creative thoughts while you're in a proper time and place but it helps.

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>>26869651
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm especially glad the fight wasn't to terrible. I'll just have to give it some practice. Thanks a lot.

>>26872187
Thank you! And I'm not intending to have to many fights in this. I only intend to add them when they're critical to the scene, such as introducing Comets. Thanks a lot.

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>>26850278
I didn't specify in which Friday I'd post the story, can't call me a fag yet

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>>26886362
have you considered a career as a loan shark?

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>>26886362
As penance you must write Trap!Korone since you've been typecast as the anon that writes Femboy fics.

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Fresh rabbit cunny.
pixiv.net/en/artworks/99330607

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>>26872187
Thank you for the feedback!
I was planning on elaborating more on Polka's history with Anon in the next chapter, so decided to hold back here as it may be redundant. Although I see the problem now. Also the pacing was meant to be a bit slower for some parts as I was trying to emphasize Anon's boredom, but yeah again my b.

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>>26886669
Not tall enough for that, I need to hire some boys to help me intimidate
>>26886799
funny you mention that, I got a sudden inspiration for this scenario yesterday. I wasn't planning on going through with it.....but maybe....

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>>26887000

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>>26887256
Anon I was joking about you getting typecast as the Femboy Writer, but if you keep doing femboy fics that's going to start being your thing.

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>>26887447
A sad fate, alas somebody has to take the fall

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>>26887270
I need clussy

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>>26889258
https://twitter.com/festa11307070/status/1539934276149358592?s=20&t=riITqFhvulqG264tKeM-Ew

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>>26887694
Hero

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>>26811429
A chuuba gets afflicted with a womb tattoo style curse out of nowhere, and doesn't know what it is, what it does, where it came from, nothing. Just that she now has it.
The chuuba then has to try and go about their daily life while being under the effects of the curse, learning about it as she goes, while trying to find a way to dispell it. However the curse overtime gets stronger and there is a risk that the womb tattoo can become permanent or just simply influence and condition the chuuba's thinking, actions, personality and emotions with obvious ramifications.

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>>26811429
The girls review their most popular /vt/ fanfics!

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>>26892089
You know I wonder, if a chuuba had to read one of the fics in the archive, which one would make you guys cringe the least? To make it more interesting, they have to read one of the one-shots and one of the series.

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>>26811389
It's been quite a while since I managed to post a story. Well, you be the judge if I still got it in me.

Here's part 1 of my latest piece: "Match-Made".

Basis was a prompt put up quite some time ago... something along the lines of: "The government forces singles above the age of 25 to marry each other. You get assigned your favorite hag and become a house-husband".
I then started writing and realized that this was getting rather long (longer than the page requirement for the thesis I also should be writing), so I decided to split it into parts. I hope to release the other installments soon-ish. I'm also thinking about putting this up on AO3 once it's finished, but that's in the future.
Feedback (in any form) is appreciated!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRHud6iZPJQrgYUZFgioOr12HjABt5dEYn1aI9H3Xy_-zYXihEfnGXS1Dg7Gr-wInHJFYU0Ondoyodj/pub

Tags: Koyori, Suisei, SFW, Fluff, Drama, Forced Marriage

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>>26893638
For one shots, I think 'The Three Meetings with Mori' and series, 'Say, Can You See?'.

'The Three Meetings with Mori' really plays into a her lore without any extra fluff, plus it's really well written.
'Say, Can You See?' has more a lot of focus on the MC and politics more than the chuubas themselves (more so later on in the story as well). Thomas's interactions with the chuuba's are very platonic, business minded even some of them. Politics and chuubas are an odd mix but I feel it anyone would soon get over it because again it's really engaging.

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>>26894631
This is really really really good and I'm super excited to see where it goes

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>>26894631
>you be the judge If I still got it in me
That was genuinely fun to read anon. Already anticipating the next part.

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>>26894631
My verdict is in anon and I say you definitely still got in you. I don't know what was the last fic you posted here but god damn that was an interesting read start-to-finish!
The premise alone is intresting enough but your writing and dialogue especially did it for me. From the clerk, to Koyori and then Suisei. Chef's kiss. I really enjoyed this and I already can't wait for the next chapter. Mighty fine job.
Also I know you probably have most of the story written out and I don't mean to pressure you, just venting my desires here. please please please please please please please please let Suisei win. That is all.

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For what situtions do you use italics in writing?

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>>26898651
When referencing another work (like a movie or book, which you surround by quotations) or during a charactar's internal monologue.

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>>26898791
Ah thanks.

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>>26894631
Very good writing! I wish I could write comparably at some point. Eagerly waiting for continuation.
Some ideas for the series off the top of my head - /pol/ and tinfoilhattery ahead!

1) The court system is fucking rigged and the feds have all the supposed experts and proof for (you) x Koyori and Suisei x UB chances to make the healthiest, the most intelligent and the most socially adjusted children which, frankly, all this program cares about, or (you) x Suisei incompatibility both in a relationship and in childmaking. Or Takeshi is glowing in the dark - it's so easy to hold him hostage over shit like that
2) Growth in livestreamed suicides of torn-up couples, which despite being suppressed on national news outlets, can't help but become romanticized in the eyes of those who were wronged by the matchmaking system. A phenomenon not entirely unlike school shootings - tragedies, perpetuated by the mass media and romanticized by radicalized crowds with the most radical imitating and completing the cycle.
3) More domestic terrorism over the forced matchmaking! Violent protests outside the building, massacres with makeshift weaponry inside the building, arsons, bomb threats real and false... Makes you wonder what is worth protecting in that building so much.
4) Waves of emigration of the loners who want to be left alone. Couples would escape Japan and get married in another country, then return to Japan to find their assets repossessed or something.
5) The whole matchmaking project is the mother of all money sinks, Jack! and was made by Americans to make Japan completely reliant on their loans, completely squashing whatever financial indepencence they might have had.
6) The whole fucking thing is just some WIKI-level AI tricking human meatbags into breeding the new übermensch "for their own good". Or there is no sentience in the AI but sort of selective breeding is still there, making the occasional anomalies in the matchmaking to preserve some genes.

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>>26811429
Racial abuse towards Flare or Sana

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>>26900569
Racism against elves isn't abuse, it's just a natural reaction to those filthy creatures

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>>26894631
It's been a long while since I got excited for a continuation but I'm really looking forward to the next part! Is this going to be a love triangle or a story where one girl gets dumped for another? I'm really hoping for a harem end but that seems unlikely

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>>26902887
Flare is a kind, beautiful woman and worthy of respect.

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>>26904185
>he's a knife-ear lover
Get out of our sight before we string you up on a lamppost alongside your beloved pets.

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>>26904570
Flare is a beautiful princess and I will protect her, as any decent person would. The word knife-ear is very offensive, you shouldn't use such language.

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>>26904766
lamy hands typed this post

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>>26904766
Based

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>>26900569
Like them being viggers?

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>>26905117
I want her knifey ear up my bum

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>>26894631
Goddamn this is a really good setup, have to echo the other anon here as well to say that your dialogue is really good as well.
please let this be a fic where Suisei wins.

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>>26894631
Good shit, I really love the world-building and setting you’ve created. I’m honestly on team Koyori because I love enemies-to-friends dynamics too much.
I think it’s obvious Suisei will win though because she’s paired up with someone unpleasant

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>>26898651
I usually use it when I need to emphasise a word, like:
“Right,” he sighs, “because you just [italics]had[/italics] to go and punch her.”
Or something.

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>>26898651
Pretty much like any other othographic/text formatting tricks they let you say more with less by using the connotations of the way the text looks to get more out of your words.
The most basic use is to get asides of internal monologue out without adding an "x thought" to the end of the sentence. Outside of that be creative and see what works, it's best to experiment and see what works for your style rather than relying on the words of random anons as what works for how they write may not be so for your writing style.

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>>26811376
ToT

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>>26852890
I'm liking it so far, but at time the dialogue becomes a bit plain. Other than that though, I'd say it's pretty good. Looking forward to more.

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https://youtu.be/_RPkBzv2jYc

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>>26811389
To Slay a Monster: Chapter 7

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSKOcLefY4fAJhIDLsFi6wXdJ0iJ4y63r-t2NkAo0Mti8Hge_raOurFU43OST7jPzF1INFMuqoqFIpM/pub

I'm pretty excited for this next story arc. I hope you'll be to, once you read it. As always, any critique is welcome.

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Brace for impact!

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>>26924335
Ok what the fuck was Gura thinking when she said that? Jesus Christ does she WANT to get fucked by management?

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>>26861590
>>26923704
I went to chapters 4 and 5 before reading these since the whiplash got from the 20 year timeskip kind of overly focused on that rather than on the chapter itself.
Anyway, in regards to chapter 4. You still have that dialogue problem where you jump into the dialogue as two talking heads and have them do nothing while they exchange words. I think this might be because you avoid using 'said' so much that you think only of the dialogue and not of the other aspects of the scene. Which kind of bleeds into your problem of insufficiently describing the scene.
It also has your 'zooming' problem where you're rushing through events way too fast such that it's like a meal with all the fat and flavor cut out. It works in that it holds your plot together but lacking the 'fat' kinds of cuts the enjoyment in reading the prose. Especially since it doesn't really work at conveying how different Flare is after 20 years of growth.
I think the worst part is the fight, it's just actions, things happening without thoughts to build them up or extra words to give them impact. Ironically it's like the ryona in your roboco fic where your laconic prose did not give the things happening the weight it needs for them to really land. It's a fight to the death but the words don't feel like one. It's short and laconic but that's not really a problem, it's lacking in proper weight to make the things happening have impact to it.
For chapter 5, my thoughts haven't changed much since >>26665183 , stuff moves too fast and plot points get thrown away without it properly getting their due. Also now that I'm reading without the whiplash of the transition between 3->4 the contrast between the detail you put into the 2nd person pov and Flare's really clashes. Flare's pov really feels barebones in comparison.
Now for chapter 6, it kind of continues the trend of your 2nd person pov reading much better than your 3rd person flare pov. Like for some reason, (perhaps your familiarity in using it), it just has more details and shit that makes it a better read than your 3rd person stuff. As for any critiques, it basically still has the same problems the other parts of the fic have (talking heads and lack of impact in your actions.)
Finally for chapter 7, you misspelt iroha in there twice as iorah. The talking head problem is still here but with characters you have more experience in writing it's less of a problem since the dialogue is more interesting that the lack of detail cuts in lessAlso I have to ask but was the offbrand witcher stuff part of your initial idea for this or something added in later?

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>>26926511
You'll need to clarify a bit. You keep saying it's moving to fast and lacks detail where it needs more but I'm not really understanding where or why.

I know that there can always be more elaboration to any scene of course but I felt that (mostly) I elaborated enough to set a clear scene. In my eyes, elaborating more is just belaboring a point. A pet peeve of mine in fiction has always been over describing. I'm someone who only really gives heavy description to objects of major importance or heavy fantasy elements that aren't found irl.

I also don't get what you mean by moving to fast without examples. Excluding the timeskip chapter which was a stupid idea, I think most of it has been pretty tightly paced. Like I said, I'm not really someone who spends a lot of pages belaboring the mundane. I'd rather it be tight and focused than overly indulgent. I'm someone who believes less is usually more.

As for the fight, maybe. The other two readers enjoyed it and you didn't so maybe it's just different tastes, though I definitely won't claim it was great. It's something I need to just have practice writing.

As for the talking heads, again, I think this is down to taste. I don't enjoy reading work where every character has a reaction or movement after almost every sentence. I like to write movement only to convey emotion and to signify importance, otherwise, to me, it feels like I'm adding action for the sake of adding action. I'm not saying you're wrong for liking that, but the reason mine work is a bit bare bones with that is because I only put in actions to signify importance or tone.

It's not offbrand witcher stuff, just fantasy elements. It's going to play into the stars and comets and what not. It does feel a hit to samey though now that you say it so I'll try to make it more unique. Flare's perspective does feel barebones and I'm hoping to flesh her out in this arc. Am realizing now she's got no interesting traits.

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>>26811564
This picture reminds me that I need to work on the "Shion is a terrible wingwoman" prompt

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>>26924335
What happened now

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>>26811389
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTMxr8BlyTnt51MMd8BJjhK-ENyFFj_0cpCpO_fQuSKsm9PM_0g1AkoOKIBp1j0F6M0SqB9FpQTOR8x/pub

Here it is: the sequel that no one asked for. This didn't really turn out as funny as I thought it would be. This was also the hardest thing I've had to write, nothing ever quite felt right, so let me know how it compares to the original.

Death Before Dishonor

Summary: It's a good day to die. Life has been good between Selen and Anon, but he has a bad habit of fucking up. Now it's up to him and Elira to avoid ruining their lives.

Tags: Selen, Elira, SFW, Comedy, Drama, Cheating, Sequel to Victory or Death

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>>26927924
Oh sorry, I guess this had to do with me just writing rough notes while reading a chapter into note pad then crunching it all into one post.
In order
>detail
This is a reoccurring issue in your works where the setting (overall) is honestly rather vague. It works for your stuff set in modern day since the reader can assume 'as reality unless otherwise stated' but since this is a fantasy work the 'as reality' part is honestly rather hard to pin down that I can't really envision the setting (specific places) that the conversations you like writing happen in. Suppose this also contributes to the talking head problems but I'll go over that in its own section.
>pace
You call it a tight pace because it's going through the events you're envisioning for the arc at a good pace per chapter. The problem here that I'm seeing is that your less is more approach is less is less when it comes to exploring and growing the dynamics between your characters in terms of their relationships (specifically when it comes to flare's given that for the most part she's the key that holds this story together) where you're basically just skipping through the days where such character growth could occur (i.e. Flare and Anon getting closer, or the fucking Anon initially wanting Flare as a sex slave thing). Basically I think you're rather starved when it comes to growing the keystone relationship of this fic that it's hurting the plot since a part seems reliant on Anon treating Flare special.
>fight(s)
I suppose it could be a matter of taste but from what I read, it reads like a transcription of a more visual work in that the writing tries to describe the events but fails at capturing the mood and emotion behind it. Which naturally leads to the stuff happening not really having the impact needed to make the reader feel it and 'be satisfied'. It's like your ryona work in 'Let me feel your pain' where the events depicted lack the needed emotional weight behind it in order to actually make it hit with the reader.
>talking heads
I guess this could be a matter of taste, but I'm just going to say it straight to you; your dialogue is not good enough to support the talking heads as is. I'm not saying you need to put in action for every line of dialogue, but some internal monologue of emotion, thoughts, asides or anything else would help to add more flavor to it and make it better to read. Especially since it would contribute to the problem you've also spotted of Flare lacking in interesting characteristics. That and putting 'said' to indicate the speakers but at this point that's absolutely a taste thing

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>>26932093
It's definitely more dramatic than VoD, but that's not a bad thing because A.) It's still hilarious and B.) The drama is done quite well and it's overall a (not memeing) cute and funny story.

Elira was overdue for some love around here anyway.

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Goddamnit, my fucking autistic scope creep is popping off again while I'm outlining this fucking suisei prompt.

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I'm trying to write a Suisei dubcon smutfic but I'm having a hard time writing out how she would behave in such a scenario. Any Hoshiyomis here that can recommend me some references?

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>>26939179
What's the prompt?
>>26939224
What's a dubcon?

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>>26939281
Dubious consent.
In my fic, the premise for the sex is that Suisei made a bet, lost, then has to have sex.

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>>26939281
>What's the prompt?
This one, >>26862526 and the greentext I made after reading the prompt >>26864283 .
I'm expanding the thing into a fic, but my autism is having me think up some fucked up worldbuilding to subtly insert to this since I'm going in the direction of horror rather than something smutty.

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>>26939810
Ah ok thanks. As for how she'd act, I don't think there's anyone within Holopro that hates to lose more than her. She would keep at it until she can win. There are also times where she can be emotional to loss, when her effort and hardwork just isn't enough (See here https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4__r2UexEwc)) but I don't think it's too relevant to this prompt it's good to I guess.

Of course you can't re-do a bet and it would be shameful for her to run away from it all so she would accept the terms but VERY begrudingly, making it known that she's only having sex with (you) only because those were the terms of the bet. Also she's very stubborn, so even if she does come to enjoy the sex, it would go against her pride and previous stance, so it would be really hard to get her to admit to the pleasure. Overall she'd would put up a very strongfront for such a headstrong woman she is but there will also be the fewest of cracks in that front. Another tidbit that I don't know if relevant or not but she doesn't perform the best under pressure. She can maintain a somewhat steady composure but her performance can dip if the pressure is too much. I hope this helps.

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>>26941040
Man, Suisei has the exact kind of prideful nature that's perfect for an instant loss scenario.

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>>26939810
>>26941040
>she would keep at it until she can win.
So she keeps trying, despite losing repeatedly and being forced into more and more humiliating acts? And she keeps telling herself she is trying again just to win, while she's actually slowly getting into the consequences of losing?

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>>26942976
or maybe she finally wins only to realize that she would prefer your cock in her ass again rather than whatever prize she won

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>>26942976
Yeah I believe so. As long as she isn't utterly defeated and there is a sliver of hope for her to win, she won't yield. I do think the whole scenario would work better if the bet was on placed on something that is determined by skill rather than chance.

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Hey AA it seems you archived the dead link for To Be 17 again's chapter 5.

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Goddamnit I come here to sperg out about AZKi Black flexing up infinity dwarfing pecs and everyone else is sperging about Mori, what the fuck did she do now? Am I just gonna have to totally recast the holodeath juice request?

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>>26944383
What you're gonna have to do is stop these posts because everyone already knows. You're not even trying to attention whore for your own fics, its a fucking prompt.

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>>26811429
Laplus going to the Emergency Room after she injures herself masturbating when she tries to use her tail for it.

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>>26944646
... Ok now that we've heard from the seething deflecting cuckbeat, what actually happened?

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ignore the tourist

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>>26944646
Just let the autist keep trying to pitch their retarded muscle prompt. I think at point they're half motivated by spite anyway so just hide them and stop giving them (you)s.
Eventually they'll either wise up and write their fic with their own hands or get bored and leave.

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>>26942976
>>26943593
Actually what I had in mind was that it was just a single bet that she lost to a friend and now Suisei has to submit to what ever sex requested by the POV char without resistance for one entire night, which was not like the previous times where Suisei had some say in what was and wasn't allowed.
Its also sex between friends, rather than some stranger being coercive.

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>>26944895
Mori let her sister throw a rager with a bunch of druggie friends at an airbnb that was supposed to be where all the girls were gonna have an off collab, leaving Gura to hide in a fucking room.

Now PLEASE stop being an annoying autistic dipshit and stop bringing up your stupid fucking gross prompts when everyone's already seen them.

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>>26945381
So it's an odd type of friends with benefits thing and this isn't the first time (You) and Suisei had sex?

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>>26945381
So it's starting when there have already been less "extreme" previous times. That works too, though I think the concept of her competitiveness slowly becoming a facade for her desires is worthy of inclusion in some way.

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>>26945381
>Miko rapes Suisei after winning the chance in a bet.
Well that's a based fic you're working on.

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>>26945885
Susei made a grave mistake by joking about wearing bunny ears.

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>>26945775
Yep. Its largely glossed over though since much of the details aren't relevant to the smutfic. Only that Suisei is still prudish.

>>26945885
Sorry to disappoint but its supposed to be a male (you).

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>>26946457
>m*le

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>>26946457
>its supposed to be a male (you).
BASED BASED BASED

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>>26946084
>Miko forcing Suisei into a Pekora cosplay.
>Slowly getting worked up as she takes pictures
>Stops calling Suisei by name after a few minutes.
>Starts thinking she's Pekora.
I mean the fic almost writes itself.

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>>26945885
A real man would be into Tokomachi instead of MiComet.

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>>26946509
>>26946534
The duality of man

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>>26946609
cringe

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>>26946609
>>26946762
the duality of man

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>>26932093
>Victory or Death sequel
>Elira route
RAAAAAAAAAAAAA
LET'S
FUCKING
GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
Man, this was good. I think I still prefer the original even though that was about getting with Selen and not Elira, because I wasn't a huge fan of the angst and agitation between Elira and Anon this time round, but that's just my opinion. Still though, for guy who's borderline gosling for Elira this sequel was damn good. Your writing is as great as I remember, thank you for this.

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>>26811429
yab ritual fic except both (You) and Gura beat up Mori

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>>26944030
Ah whoops. I'll doubleback and get it in a few. Thanks for the heads up.

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>>26946600
Is this some spinoff of /become/?

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>>26948058
It's Miko's horniness making her delusional about the blue girl's identity, /become/ would be the next step (physical transformation).

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>>26948128
>Suisei getting kidnapped and brainwashed into becoming Pekora via Miko drugging her and playing Pekora streams at her like that Anon trying to create a Pekora tulpa.
Well that sounds suprisingly hot... and rather horrifying.

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>>26811429
Dinner date with your girlfriend Laplus

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>>26948326
This but Laplus loses her kusogaki demeanor as soon as you see her in her dress

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>>26854105
This might sound weird considering most people here just want to rape her, but I think Shion would make for a good daughter character. I don't know why, that's just the vibe I get from her. Aqua and Rosemi make for really good picks too.

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>>26951060
Oh and Nene too, she has the mentality of a grade schooler at times.

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>>26951060
An astute observation, but this naturally begs the question as to whether or not a Shion daughterfic would be worth the opportunity cost of a Shion rapefic.

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>>26948760

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>>26947891
Yeah I hear you, I just couldn't find a way to play the cheating for laughs without making everyone seem terrible

[Anonymous No.]

>>26952050
I think you were still able to squeeze enough comedy in for it to be funny. I smiled a lot while reading.

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>>26951198
How about a Shion daughter fic that has a sequel where your life gets ruined and thus due to the stress you rape your daughter Shion in a moment of passion. You know so you get the best of both worlds like Fox Family.

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>>26952581
I think "your life gets ruined" would need some considerable fleshing out, lest you risk completely snapping the reader's suspension of disbelief in half. I can't think of a scenario where considerable personal trauma would naturally lead to me venting my frustrations on my beloved daughter's birth canal, unless she was the cause or involved somehow.

Otherwise, YES. ALL of my yes. That kind of "violation of purity", sullying something that goes against your own personal beliefs to defile - that's such a wonderful concept.

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>>26952862
Maybe your life gets ruined by Miko making you wear a bunny costume, Suisei winning a bet against you and La+ laughing at you after you embarrased yourself while dating her.

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>>26952862
How about in the initial fic, your beloved daughter Shion (adopted or step if you want to be a coward) really wants to go to magic academy. You use your connections to get her in, rest of the fic is a fluffy celebration of her getting to chase her dreams.
The sequel would of course involve you getting caught and fired, with Shion getting expelled from the academy. With emotions running high due to both of your lives getting ruined (maybe because the brat bragged about what you did) you rape her violently.
...
Then it ends with Shion asking for anyone to try and save her. A demon offers a pact. She accepts. She kills her father then and there.
With her father dead and her future academic prospects ruined, she would still be as good as dead. Thankfully the demon offers her a scholarship in the Demon Academy. With this, Shion's path as a magician ends and her path as a witch starts.

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>>26932093
Fantastic sequel, I really liked it! Don’t know how much more than the original, but this was still pretty good. Now write a sequel for millie and enna now that you’ve stolen elira from them

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>>26953641
Whilst certainly not a likely scenario, there is logical reasoning behind it - emotional turmoil is a catalyst for all sorts of bullshit which makes sense neither before nor after the act, but is perfectly understandable during. My counter would then be - why'd he immediately turn to rape? I could absolutely understand the vehement brutalization of Shion until she's a naught but a sobbing mess, the extent of her physical injuries such that the consequences will reverberate throughout the rest of her life.
But why fuck her, too? There has to be a pre-existing desire for Shion's body, because one does not simply rape for the sake of rape itself... or perhaps you could? I could certainly see Shion's father standing over the bleeding, contorted form of the apple of his eye; her clothes torn and ripped and the most private areas of her body fully exposed... running his eyes along her, rage half-satisfied, the lurid sight of his barely-conscious progeny would juxtapose with her sobs and pleas, and trigger a twisted empathy response as Shion's father begins to tenderly caress her body and start fingering her whilst whispering about how it'll all be okay against her ear. Her whimpers would only increase in frequency, but too scared to resist further, she'd simply accept his intrusion into her body, and her submissiveness would only make him harder.

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>>26955239
I spent 20 minutes writing this 226-word comment and it's barely-coherent tripe. I fucking hate writing.

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>>26955239
>>26955388
Don't be too hard on yourself, I at least get your point of 'why would it immediately turn to rape?"
But the author does have some tools to justify it immediately turning into rape such as:
1. Making the incident that caused Shion to inadvertently ruin both your lives all her fault. (i.e making it 'justified' to the mind of the protag
2.Perhaps Shion looks just like her mother but younger. (To make it so that You already hold sexual desire for her)
3. The incident was caused due to somethin sexual, i.e. bragging to a boy she likes, or something similar (Makes her seem less 'pure' in the eyes of her father).

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>>26953290
Kek.

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>>26955854
>Perhaps Shion looks just like her mother but younger.
This instantly clicked in my mind as the most believable option, especially if the mother is estranged or long-passed.

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>>26955388
sounds like you're begging for pity (you)s
if you hate writing, you shouldn't be in the writing general
kill yourself senpai

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>page 10 in 20 minutes

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>>26952581
How about she just gets raped by coloureds instead.

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>>26960616
Blame the reaper.

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>>26960616
this happens every time /vt/ finds something new to sperg out about. give it a day or two.

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>>26811429
A pack of niggers kills Gura during Mori's improptu frat party. Faced with a corpse already going cold and a compromised address, Mori has to find a way to travel with the body across California and reach Nevada so she can hide Gura's remains in the sands of the Mojave.

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Given that the board is zooming right now, anyone want to share story ideas they need brainstorming/extra ideas for? Those are pretty fun to contribute to.

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>>26961564
I'm thinking about writing a fic about pre-dreadnought ironclad warships. Any ideas on who should be the crew?

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>>26961564
Right now, I really want to write a story about Gura being in a surprise EDM party and then unwillingly going along by taking drugs and getting fucked by fratbros, but of course it was going to entirely inflammatory so that would get in the way of the smut and I decided not to. Still, it's quite hard to ignore all these thoughts, dialogue and scenarios popping into my head.

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>>26961694
How about Sora, Fubuki, Matsuri, Mio, Ayame, Shion and Aqua as meta joke since they were the holos that became shipgirls in the Azur Lane Collab.

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>>26961825
just go for a generic gura goes to a party and fuck some dudes scenario, a bit more safe and less riding on the drama rn

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>>26961564
(You) meet a chuuba while you're both hospitalized and the two of you become friends, helping each other cope with the pain of your respective afflictions.

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>>26961825
Honestly kill your sense of "taste" for the moment and write it. Yabs have unfortunately given us some of the best material to work with like how Za Hando gave us Lies Come to Light.
So pour out your fucking heart, have the absolute fucking worst happen to Gura and maybe publish it if it turns out readable... Sometimes shit like this just churns out garbage so apply some common sense and trash the fic if it's not turning out so good.

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>>26962521
I think so long the guy isn't black it shouldn't be too bad

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>>26962351
Which part do you need help brainstorming with?

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>>26961998
That doesn't sound too bad. The only hard part would be figuring out Sora's personality (I only listen to her music).

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>>26962351
For some reason the first thing I thought of when reading this is helping Laplus to walk again after she gets her horns permanently broken off.

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>>26962710
that would make it better, though, because of the audience disconnect. all niggers are evil - this is a universally accepted fact, and so they don't need to be characterized to be accepted as perpetually doing terrible acts. in this respect, niggers are like nazis.

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>>26961564
Throw me some ideas for Holoturismo so I can add it to the pile and see what works with the stuff I already have in mind.

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>>26963082
I haven't decided which chuuba it is or why they're in the hospital

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>>26963124
In all honesty she's a normal girl that became an idol who by virtue of her position is put on a pedestal as Daisenpai of hololive that socially isolates her from her kohais. Outside of that she's an ordinary girl with a bit of a motherly caring personality.
Honestly if you're not doing this as a 2nd person anon insert her plainess would make her perfect as a PoV character since she'd have a normal human point of view that's raised up due to her position.

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>>26961825
Go for it. I want a psuedo-home-invasion story where gura is barricading herself in a guest room, crying in fear, while lean-addicted niggers bang on the door while shouting AYO GIRL GIM SUM THAT SHARK FUCK. Maybe with a small Mori cameo where she awkwardly joins in chanting SHARK FUCK SHARK FUCK - terrified that they'll turn on her if she tries to stop them.

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>>26963278
make one of the cars grow angel wings in the middle of the race
https://youtu.be/t012DteeQCI

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>>26963151
Oh fuck that actually sounds really interesting. Befriending a depressed, disabled Laplus and helping her to regain all her motor functions sounds like a good wholesome fic.

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>>26963278
Have the cars run the race on long, well-sculpted humanoid legs.

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>>26963488
I might do that.

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>>26963278
This not a serious idea, but how about having the 'fight' against Suisei begin with (You) having to race against her in a Steam Locomotive in a race towards the next station... Which of course is just the prelude to her busting out her real car hidden in one of the wagons to start the actual race against her.

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>>26963278
I kinda wanna see a structure similar to NFS carbon or Midnight club 3.

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>>26964049
If you are really dedicated just check out her super old Youtube compilation videos on her channel. She used to be NND only and streamed once a week so the staff would make a compilation video every once in a while. They have English subs and it's worth checking out. You can also check out her official 4Koma, "Tokino Sora records." It's also been officially translated into English too.

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>>26963949
I hate that the first thing I thought of after reading that is, "This, but the ending reveals that you were the one that broke her horns in the first place and the entire fic was actually a lead up to Laplus feeling betrayed as she finds her broken horns in your basement."

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>>26961564
I've been toying with the idea of a fic where you once massaged Flare's ears as a prank and she hated it but eventually she kept "letting" you do it to her because secretlt it feels "comfy" to her and eventually your repeated ministrations turn her ears into erogenous zones that make her cum after a bit of stimulation, because it's somehow an elf biology thing? May or may not involve the other elves in this.

The premise doesn't exactly make any sense but I just wanted an excuse to turn elf ears into erogenous zones.

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Hah, hah. I wanna have sex! sex! sex with the shark!

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>>26964036
Something Haachama would drive...
>>26964121
This sounds like a wacky Metal Gear boss fight to be honest, but the concept of a sprint race from one place to the next regardless of path might be cool; probably difficult to execute in writing though but we'll see.
>>26964126
I don't remember exactly how Carbon was set up but I remember the concept of a turf war and that's more or less what I'm going for.

Essentially, each Gen is given control of a certain territory, and they can fight it out for control of that area; this makes them somewhat specialized to the type of terrain in the area, so if (you) want a chance at facing off versus Gen0, you need to climb up the ladder.

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>>26965876
>Training the elf ears into becoming sensitive erogenous sounds.
Eroi.
Honestly the first thing I thought is making this an abuse thing and have the ear training be part of some pavlovian response training in order to train the elves into better servants/slaves/submissives.

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>>26965876
(You) start doing it when you're both kids and Flare doesn't tell you what you're actually doing even well into adulthood
Aki and Lamy see you doing it one day in public and get really embarrassed

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>>26967761
Fuck that sounds really good.

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>>26962351
>(You) meet a chuuba while you're both hospitalized and the two of you become friends, helping each other cope with the pain of your respective afflictions.
The Fault in our Oshis

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>>26965876
Wait til you find out there are humans out there who get off on getting their earlobes rubbed/nibbled/sucked on

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>>26968432
I mean...It'll definitely be better than anything John Green's written

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>>26969101
Oh, i agree. I just thought the initial premise sounded something like that.
Put both (you) and the chuuba on some really strong pain medication that makes you trip balls and you have "a bridge to hologra"

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>>26965876
>>26968883
Hololive only has half-elves, so that might work well as a weird side effect of the species intermingling.

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>>26811429
Slave Fubuki but her master is a gentle soul who'd never abuse her or rape her.

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>>26972236
Does she want to be abused and raped?

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>>26935138
The whole pacing thing is actually something I noticed just in the last chapter. I think it's less pace, and more development. Even if it were slower, the characters I have don't have much more than a foundation to work with. So that'll be the next goal, giving more complexity to each of them (which I'll warn ahead of time, I am still pretty armature at. I'll give it my best though)

It does read a bit more like a trans scription but, I think for this fight specifically that's a little bit more excusable. Anon and Noel have no connection to Aloe or know anything about her so there won't be much emotional tension or stakes there. The fights that are going to hit harder emotionally will be fights that take place later, but I see what you mean when you say that. It sorta ties back into the development/pace thing.

I can try to put in a bit more internal monologue but it's always been such a pet peeve of mine. I don't know what it is but I just can't stand when authors add in stuff like that without it being expressly important to the story at that moment. It's one of those things that I just dislike immensely. I'll give it a try but this may be one of those things that I just can't bring myself to do out personal taste.

All and all though I see what you mean though. For this arc I'm going to attempt to bring things to a slower pace so we can focus more on Flare and Anon as well as Risu and Kronii but I'm not very experienced with it so it'll probably be rough around the edges.

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>>26972236
Could you elaborate? It sounds interesting, but I'm not seeing what the point is, or the tension/conflict.

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Bump

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>>26932093
End of the thread, so I'm sure no one will mind, here's a list of "themes" I had in mind writing all my fics thus far:

Three Meetings with Mori: Live Again (Mori)
Victory or Death: More than a Feeling (Boston)
Final Chapter: Omega: Unis theme (Black Souls 2)
Out of the Blue: From Out of Nowhere (ELO)
Death Before Dishonor: Disaster of Passion (Guilty Gear)

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>>26976237
God damn I didn't realise you wrote all those stories, you sure are a taleneted writer. Although I can't find death before dishonor in the archive.

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>>26811429
/R/equesting fic of Gura getting raped. Loosely based on the events that have unfolded recently.

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>>26976982
Thank you for saying so, and it's not in the archive because it's not next thread yet

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>>26977054
Ah you're right, i'm stupid.

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>>26972236
Wasn't this already suggested?

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>>26973073
>>26974230
Fubuki is a slave but her new master she's serving is making her do things that her previous master made her do. For example, instead of wearing clothes fit for a slave she's given the choice to wear clothes she's comfortable with (or a maid outfit that's not inappropriate which she has to wear when doing housework / cooking / cleaning). Instead of living in a basement she's given her own room and even her own bed. Instead of having to eat from a cat bowl she's being allowed to sit at the kitchen table for all meals. Instead of getting brutal beatings for no reason she would instead get told she'd never be hurt by her new master and that she's safe here. Instead of getting a even worse beating (this time with a whip across her bare back) if she didn't do her chores in time she'd instead be told that will never happen and that the only punishment she'll get is to sit in the naughty corner to reflect (which lengthens over time depending how severe it is).

Basically anything she'd do (accident or not) what she expects to be delivered to her something else happens instead. The more gentle / caring her new master is with her the more Fubuki gets paranoid that he's only being gentle with her so that he can unleash his sadistic side when her guard is down. But it never comes. It gets to the point that Fubuki would purposely do things that would justify a severe punishment but she'd never get it.

Something like that I guess. And yes she would have been raped by her previous master but she never got pregnant.

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>>26977813
Yeah, by me but I never stuck along to see if it was answered so I added more when this thread popped up.
Sorry.

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>>26976237
Damn, you did Out of the Blue too? You've got good talent.

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>>26961825
Write it. Worst case scenario, you can release it later.

>>26963278
My mind goes to itasha of the girls. Beside that...someone selling there soul demonic chuuba?

>>26966279
>makes them somewhat specialized to the type of terrain in the area, so if (you) want a chance at facing off versus Gen0, you need to climb up the ladder.
Would Gen 0 be the final group who need you to have mastered all the specialties of the others in order to win?

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>>26976987
this, but she gets pregnant and the fic is more about her carrying the pregnancy and eventually raising the child than the rape itself.

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>>26982469
Migo, why are you so big?

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>>26982544
It helps with attracting bi-curious women

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>>26979747
>My mind goes to itasha of the girls. Beside that...someone selling there soul demonic chuuba?

Ha, you know what, La+ driving a car Itasha'd full of her own face just like her kimono outfit would totally fit, so thanks for that idea. Didn't cross my mind.

As far as the other part, I guess I don't really want to invoke any "lore" elements into the story or it can get pretty weird and out of scope.

>Would Gen 0 be the final group who need you to have mastered all the specialties of the others in order to win?

Well, more or less; it's more about growing into a well-rounded driver that learns all the skills necessary to be at Gen 0's level, as well as acquiring the mechanical upgrades and knowledge that comes with the territory.

>>26982469
This picture makes me so insanely horny for Migo you have no idea. TFW will never explore every inch of her fatass, and juicy tits with my tongue...

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>>26982469
Why does she have a tail?

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>>26984991
Why wouldn’t she?

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>>26984991
That’s not a real tail.

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>>26932093
You are my favorite author in this general by a landslide. No one else's prose captures me half as much, causes me to laugh so genuinely, makes me feel so bittersweet. I'm eagerly awaiting anything you ever put out in the future

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>>26985198
Are you gonna blow him next?

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>>26985566
If it got me more romcom kino, sure I guess

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New thread
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>>26984991
Because buttplug tails are the hottest shit and you have terrible taste if you disagree.

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LUNA RAPE

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Luna is shit.

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>>26985675
That's probably not necessary, but I'll definitely be around if I get any other ideas

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>>26989105
NTA, but I'll literally blow you for more content since you're my favourite author as well. Do you have any ideas about what you're going to be working on next?

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>>26988498
Incorrect. On the contrary, your oshi is shit.

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>>26989401
Not yet, but I'm so fickle about ideas and motivation that I hate to tell anyone what I'm working on at all, just in case I drop it partway