/wg/ - Writing General - Fantasy Edition

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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.
Previous thread:>>26266181

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Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em!

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap! There... were seven stories posted in the last thread.

A Predator's Touch (Prologue):Tags: Koyori, Botan, SFW, Vanilla:>>26292814

Girl-boss Watson and her paramilitary death squad. Ch 9:Aqua, Marine, submarine /k/, action, SFW:>>26339725

To be 17 again. Ch. 4.:Tags: Ookami Mio, NSFW, Netori, Haglove, fluff, public sex.:>>26369943

Who corrected who?:Tags: Fallenshadow, Greentext, NSFW, Noncon, UOOOHH:>>26385627

To Slay a Monster: Tags: Flare, You, SFW: >>26412166

Ui raping: Tags: UI, NSFW, Low-quality:>>26320567

Oni BDSM: Tags: Ayame, You, nsfw:>>26341287

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Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

A fic about Aqua getting kidnapped and brainwashed into becoming the ultimate weapon.:>>26271665

After being cucked by the bucket Mori and Reine find comfort (sex) in each other.:>>26336402

I have a mighty need for someone to expand on this:>>26345015

After getting laughed out of the office by her peers one too many times, Aqua reveals that she was, in fact, merely pretending to be retarded this whole time when she reverse pranks everyone who was mean to her with a variety of elaborately constructed traps:>>26353743

Gura having fun in Disneyland alongside a Make-a-Wish kid that requested her, only for it to get awkward when Mori shows up for business in the middle of the trip..:>>26353996

>>26393124 :>>26393124

loving consensual sex with your oshi that ends in a creampie:>>26394894

Playing with Flare Sensitive Elf ears, at first she was hesitant or even annoyed and embarrassed by this but you kept playing with her ears daily until she enjoyed it, after some time her ears developed into something that she can orgasms with.:>>26405929

Kronii having sex with a clone of herself.:>>26407112

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I can’t look at those four without remembering that there used to be five

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amateur writer anon here!
gonna take a hiatus on the fubuki fishing one and write the one where anon is gonna die from a train derailing
sorry for the fubuki fishing anon I get more motivation writing really sad shit

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>>26477657
I read that as fubuki fisting for a second

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>>26477657
That's quite a drastic change.

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>>26478459
im prone to write sad shit, mostly out of the small experience I have and the depression that keeps me up at night.
it helps write some sad shit, helps me vent

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>>26478497
Fair enough. Good luck with your fic anon.

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>>26478532
funnily enough, I'm almost finished.
its a bit ESL, but its comprehensible

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>>26478564
Well I look forward to then.

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>>26478658
wait while you're here, how do I submit it??

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>>26478695
Like how do you publish it? If you're using google docs, click on 'file' in the top left corner and then on share. There should be a 'publish to web' option. Click on that and it'll give you a link to copy. That's the one you wanna put here.

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>>26478766
aight thanks mate!

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amateur anon update! just wanted to write a prompt real quick since I needed a break from school

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRJV2TpJlatej1cMxWUsLz9fArB2O5EXGY86bphbefMq4-nye3ufDv67-LIQAXZ0U4SCcUCM91zR8SA/pub

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>>26479854
shit forgot to put the title in the thread!!

Title is: Beauty in Death

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>>26479897
What about the tags?

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>>26479972
OH SHIT UHHHH
The prompt says its
Tags: Mori, (You), SFW, Fluff
sorry! first time giving out a post here

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>>26474950
A fic about training Aqua's ass to prepare her for anal sex.

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writeanons: what are you working on this time?
bonus question: how many wips do you you have right now?

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>>26484986
Oh crap.
I just counted and realized I have like 10 wips where I'm planning to come back to and work on the concept.
Shit. I need to work on my backlog and actually work on these or drop some of the shittier ones.

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>>26485799
Why drop those? /ringo/ will be dissapointed

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>>26479854
Try being consistent with your paragraphs, sometimes a new paragraph is started on a new line of dialogue, sometimes not. Other than that though I don’t have any huge criticisms, just keep at it and practice. Nice work.
>>26484986
Same old WIP pile. I’ve been meaning to write but just haven’t gotten around to sitting down at my computer.
Bonus: 15, if I count the ones I plan to write but haven’t actually started. If those don’t count, 13.

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>>26474923
To Slay a Monster: Chapter 4

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSULtt_giqjJjkgIHcp0dURnPj5IT4q50ANGqyLAyvHvWlojtYdaCbMxlhGaAhZw_pHnM2fdUDRscMT/pub

Tell me what you think about this. This is my first attempt at writing a time skip and I don't have a lot of experience writing fight scenes so doubtless something in there needs improvement. Do tell me your thoughts.

tags: (you), Flare, Noel, fantasy, adventure, mystery

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>>26487162
>sometimes a new paragraph is started on a new line of dialogue, sometimes not
I’m pretty sure the rule is you start a new paragraph whenever someone else begins speaking.

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>>26484986
going back and tweaking an unfinished thing from ages ago
bonus question: just one. I have a few more ideas floating around in my head, but I'd rather finish what's already on my plate before starting any new projects

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>>26484986
To Slay a Monster. I've been having a real taste for an adventure epic right now so I've put all my WiPs on the side.

Right now I have five WiPs in total, also including TSAM.

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>>26487506
NTA but to be clear it is, as you say, when someone ELSE starts speaking. A long time ago I actually thought it was start a new line every line of dialogue, and occasionally see people making the same mistake I did

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>>26487506
You can also start a new paragraph when the subject of the narration changes. Like if you want to describe the other character's reaction to what was said before they respond verbally.

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>>26487506
Yeah that’s what I meant. Sometimes in the story Mori and Anon would both talk in the same paragraph. Read the story and you’ll see what I mean.

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>>26487478
i'm going to be perfectly honest, i don't think the decision to do a 20 year timeskip at that point in the story was a good one. things were just starting to get going in story, and it was all whisked away for a timeskip. the only real connection this chapter has to the previous three is a throwaway mention of noel and the master. if that was taken out, then this chapter could be released as the first chapter of a completely different fic and no one would notice that it's supposed to be a fourth chapter. it might as well be a new fic.

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>>26475109
Thank you for giving my short Ayame scenario tags, I'm new to this and didn't think to do so.

>>26484986
Not writing anything for /wg/ at the moment, though there's some vague ideas for another scenario floating around in my mind. I'm prone to taking on too many things at a time, so I want to be conscious of limiting my number of projects; I'm developing an RPG (unrelated to chuubas) already, which takes up quite a bit of my hobby time.

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What is the most difficult part when writing a fic about your chuuba?
The personality? the title? the beginning? describing the story in detail?

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>>26489362
Oh I forgot to mention that I'll be going back and forth. I didn't make that clear. Basically the plan is to lace timeskip every so often (so not every other chapter, perhaps every three or four) and return to the point in time where story initially takes place, with the two timelines eventually meeting in the middle. Sorry I didn't say that before.

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>>26490030
writing dialogue that feels natural while also being entertaining to read

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>>26487478
Anon... I have to agree with the other commenter here.
This was the absolute worst time to have a timeskip.
I realize now that you write mostly from passion and not from an outline as evidenced by your work usually taking turns they would not have taken previously had they continued uninterrupted but I think, genuinely if you want to keep releasing 'serialized' works of fiction like you're doing with your chapter releases. There is a need for you need to plan better in terms of tone and plot. Because this isn't how you make a cohesive series.
As for the chapter itself. On first impressions coming fresh from chapter 3 the story has whiplashed me so hard that
I couldn't really digest the events occuring. Like, it reads fine but the whiplash from the 20 year timeskip kind of blunts anything the chapter was trying to do.
Apologies if this isn't the kind of feedback you expected but goddamn does a 20 year timeskip need to be at an arc end not at a beggining of a cliffhanger.
Perhaps it could have been foreshadowed prior if the chapter structure was 'future' and 'past' chapters alternating in your initial 3 chapters but you kind of lost that opportunity structure wise when you made the initial 3 chapters take place entirely in the past. Now you might think this designation is arbitrary but generally in the 'web novel/fiction world' the initial three chapters are often touted as the metric to establish what a reader should expect from further chapters in that story.
I realize you admitted to be a bit creatively deadlocked with all of your fics but a major change in tone and structure after you first three chapters kind of needs buildup.

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>>26490030
Personality for sure.

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>>26490030
describing intimate scenes by focusing on emotions and overall impressions instead of specific sensory information

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>>26490421
I'm super sorry I didn't mention it in the original post that I was going to be flipping between times (possibly, unless people really hate it then it's an easy retcon). I do actually have something of a plan with it I just didn't think to say so. I'm really sorry.

No it's totally expected, I was being dumb. And if it gets to annoying for readers I'll just remove it entirely. Basically my intent is: a few chapters of 10 year old flare timeline, one chapter of time skipped Flare. The timeskips are basically going to be short stories/monster of the weak sort of thing.

Again, I apologize. I feel like such an ass for not thinking to say it or write the next chapter along with this one.

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>>26490030
Typically, it's the setup. Because I do care to write the chuubas at least moderately accurate to their personalities, I tend to do quite a bit of initial setup until I get to the smut. And that tends to get out of hand pretty quickly sometimes until I feel satisfied that "Yeah this is something [X] might do in this situation."

Maintaining their personalities throughout is also challenging but you can usually take some liberties since nobody can really guess with 100% accuracy what they'd be like while completely horny (except Marine I guess).

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>>26490795
While it's nice to know where the story's headed, I for my part didn't think you'd leave the first part unfinished so I wasn't worried. And there's nothing wrong with feeling like a giant ass, anyway

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>>26491279
So in your opinion should I just can the time skip and stick to what the first three chapters or do you (and any others) like the idea of a the time skip short story every so often? I'm ok with either answer.

I do intend a permanent time skip eventually but that'll be may chapters down the road.

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>>26491541
I think you should write it how inspiration comes to you, that way it turns out best motivation-wise. Unless you start feeling like you might not continue the series permanently or at least for a long time, then it's best to finish up an arc least.

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>>26474923
A Predator's Touch, The Days of Dreams (Part 1)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQt40snW-_kZo3ssXToFtkCxXmTPfuX4Pf28Yf5CanL3vRfeRGdj0phhPGNNBaLRuDEHZN9oLVBwvBf/pub

Tags: Botan, NSFW

Tried something a bit different. Hope you guys like it.

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>>26491541
NTA, but honestly I think a prologue set in the 'future' that ends with flare reminiscing about the past solves the problems of 'reader getting whiplash from the unexpected timeskip' and 'timeskip breaks structure' since my main problem was honestly the fucking whiplash of the unforeshadowed timeskip.
Having a prologue fixes that since it makes the future and past all part of the same structure.

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>>26480020
It's okay anon, it happens.

When posting a story, reply to the anchor, al prompts, to the prompt anchor.

Don't forget tags or links and that's about it.

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>>26484986
5th chapter of to be 17 again, I'm done with one portion of the plot so I'm going to focus on sex and fluff now.

>bonus
Marine gets cucked when her boyfriend gets non con'd by her rivals, fluffYris, maybe something chuuni about botan being a secret agent and being (wrongly) sent to kill you.

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>>26492263
Hmm... I'm not especially familiar with Botan, but she feels a little uncharacteristically domestic here. I suppose that's necessary for the fluff set up you were going for, but it was strange to read about her being so saccharine.
The smut was great and so was your grammar.

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>>26484986
Trudging along with the next chapter of PD, PT while bettering the writing from the constructive criticism I've gotten
>bonus question
Four, I think. I'm about a paragraph in for that Gura/Mori/cancer kid fic.

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>>26474950
pekora smothers her bushbaby to death using her juicy, puffy pussy.

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>>26474923

>>26498126
>>26498219

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>>26498447
hot

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>>26498574
jesus fucking christ

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>>26501867
Prompts are supposed to go to 26474950

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>>26490030
I'd say it is the personality and making her sound real but with small changes to make the story coherent

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I want to find one of the writers here and sit on their face until they start writing.

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>>26503818
Unless your name is Omaru Polka, all you'll do is start a fight so cease this instant

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>>26503818
I was slacking but this threat got me writing again. Thanks anon.

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>>26503937
How did his butt smell?

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>>26504802
It's something you should experience youself. I wouldn't want to sully that.

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>>26503937
Well if you ever need motivation again, just know that I eat quite a lot of beans in my diet.

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>>26474923
To be 17 again. Ch. 5.

Tags: Ookami Mio, NSFW, netori, fluff, light chuuba abusecreampie

https://rentry.org/zs3eu

I'm considering ending the series here, but I had so much more planned out for the future, with more of Mio's horny antics and family shenanigansI mean wholesome ones, not oyakodon and some more "drastic" turns.

But before I commit more to it, I want to finish my exams in uni and get my other stories rolling.

It was fun, /wg/.

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>>26510824
Damn, forgot a pic of Mio.

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dead thread?

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>>26515068
Nigga I'm at work

>>26510920
I'll give my thoughts on the chapter when I get home, but I do hope you continue if you have more planned.

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>>26510920
God I wish Mio would pee on me

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>>26490030
Realistic feeling romance. Genuinely the most difficult shit ever.

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>>26510824
Some more wholesome family stuff would certainly be nice, but this is also a good place to end if you’re not up for writing more. I felt like the tension leading up to Mio and her husband attacking each other felt too rushed, and the overall prose of the chapter feels a bit short and abrupt. Other than that though it was another good chapter. I overall very much enjoyed this series, some of it was really great. Do you plan to write something else?

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>>26490030
The middle.

I am someone who can usually write a strong opening and I usually know exactly where I want the story to end. But around 40-60% through the story I definitely start to feel the fatigue and start running out of ideas. this may or may not be what happened with Lazy Oni

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>>26522990
You are right about the chapter being short, it's just that I didn't find anything else that could be in between, in a way I wanted it out of my system because it wouldn't stop bothering me, althought I feel I might regret later and feel like rewriting it.

Well, it's never too late to delete the chapter and sleep on it either. I do feel it could've come out better so that's that.

As for future chapters I actually wanted to make use of old Mio fluff prompts I had laying around, the bathroom scene with the scars was one of them and I actually posted it on one of my older fics which was just a bunch of loose Mio fluff.

>Do you plan to write something else?
I have some ideas that need some time in the oven, but as far as I know, this might be the last of me for now.

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>>26502157
that isn't a prompt, it's a full story

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>>26532744

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>>26533154
GOD I NEED TO BREED HER SO BAD

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>>26510824
>Dead link
Anon please some people want to read your fic.

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>>26533993
Yeah, but I took that anon's criticism at heart.

This chapter needs some more time in the oven, I want it to really feel like a great addition to the story rather than an abrupt bridge, so, it's off the menu for now.

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>>26535097
While there is a part of me that wants to see that chapter even more now. I trust your judgement here, Sad genuine smile did this too for its second chapter and the revised chapter and direction for the story was well worth it, so I hope to see how you go with revising this chapter

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Are there any comfy feel good GFE or reassurance type stories?

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>>26536639
A sheep's warmth

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>>26536639
Uber Sheep

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>>26479854
This is rather cute one shot.
I agree with that other anon in regards to your dialogue formatting, it works for the piece it's in but it would look much better spaced out.

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>>26536639
A Lazy Day with Polka

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>>26474900
>>26474923
>sucking Cover's dick so hard you un-person a talent in fucking fanart
lol
lmao even

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>>26536639
Out of the Blue

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>>26541387
Kanata is so sexy.

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>>26541428
I want her to be the mother of my kids

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>>26474923
Only going to post this because the poem posted lasted thread was so bad I needed to write something to wash the taste of shit out of my mouth. This is an English Sonnet though not every line is in iambic pentameter. I know it's cringy but, hey, at least it's on topic.

With a white brush whose tip is dipped in ink
And two azure orbs that fill one with joy
Smiling gaily with lips glossed in pale pink
It's no wonder you're oft described as coy

A single tuft of braided hair, snow-white,
Is all that's needed to stand out, but you
Decided to be like a star at night
Shining bright for all to see and look to

From a name that invokes the winter cold
Your person radiates a friendly warmth
Which reminds me of a lost loved one's hold
On a cold night huddled around cheap cloth

Fubuki although we will never meet
Thank you for being a friend to a NEET.


Like I said, it's cringy, but I just had to write something better than the shit posted last thread. Feel free to roast this; I'm not going to sperg out like the other guy. Has /wg/ entered the poetry arc? God, I hope not.

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>>26541387
fixed

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>>26474950

mori tries to awaken her inner nigger to become a better rapper, but in the process she has to consume hard drugs and rape her genmates

after all her efforts and sacrifices, the nigger god turns mori into sana and ruins her streaming career

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>>26542064
PROSTATE EXAM

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>>26543795
I like it. It's simple but it does its best within the confines of the format.
Wonder if I should try my hand at writing a chuuba poem as well.

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I want to date Anya and go out on wholesome dates with her until the night where she invites me back home and have sweet and loving sex with her!Until the next morning where I disappear from her life and block her on all social media accounts just to see her crying face wondering where I went or what happened/

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>>26551299
Same, except she's with me and we marry and have one million children

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>>26474950
Ever since you had a bit too much to drink one night at the bar and made the mistake of inviting that blonde girl with the nice rack to your place, you’ve been having to deal with a perpetually-flirty vampire who keeps breaking in whenever she needs to “feed” off of you.
Which is a mild annoyance, but you can’t quite bring yourself to do anything about it.

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>>26490030
Honestly the most difficulty I've faced writing chuuba fic is writing the dialogue for them. There's a certain expectation there that needs to get met that you need to get the 'vibe' of their character right. With EN chuubas you can clip and stream dive in order to get the feel right but as an EOP there's always an element of pure guesswork in terms of getting them right in regards to JP chuubas.

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Arise.

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>>26474950
nene decides to have a night (or day) on the town, completely naked, and constantly masturbating.

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>>26552040
Then you leave her one day with absolutely no signs of where you went. That way her heartbreak will be that much stronger.
How cruel!

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>>26556619
this, but she dives into the ocean and is eaten by a seal

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>>26557092
This but instead of getting eaten, she returns to her true form and gets bred by a seal instead.

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>>26557339
i can't believe you'd hijack my prompt like that. do you have any idea how long i spent thinking that up?

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>>26557339
Time to google seal penises.

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>>26557404
Don't worry I spent as much time as you did hijacking that prompt as well.

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>>26481935
I thought we had something about Aqua anal training?

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>>26560964
The only Aqua anal fic I know of is Onion Layer.

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>>26560964
If we did I don't remember the fic.

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LWALIEYK? thing. Quick question, can I make the narrator interact directly with Anon or should I justify it by saying he hears voices or he's a schizo or something alike? I'd like to let the narrator interact with him even if it makes no sense and the schizo idea just sounds absurd. If none of the ideas are good i can always do something else.

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>>26562382
>LWALIEYK
In English, anon

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>>26562382
Anon have more confidence and try out your wacky ideas first, if it looks good enough to you see how the thread reacts to it when you write it out.

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>>26562382
Hearing voices sounds more interesting than a fourth-wall break, especially if you wove it into the narrative. For example, he could slice up Botan then commit suicide as the ending.

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>>26562382
Go for it. That sounds like a lot of fun.

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>>26562668
>he could slice up Botan then commit suicide as the ending
I'll save that for future fics but I want a slightly more happy ending for this one

>>26562557
Life With A Lion Isn't Easy Y'Know?

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>>26474950
Having a tryst with Sora in a hotel and facefucking her while she masturbates.

https://www.pixiv.net/en/artworks/99208699

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Been a while since this got asked so... What are some WIPs you've abandoned and why? Were they interesting or were they going nowhere? Perhaps you want to share what the initial idea or prompt for it as well?

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Writer of Matsuri's Curiosity here?

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>>26567963
Pretty sure the writer for X's curiosity is confirmed to be pekofag.

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>>26567873
I had an idea for fic where Ayame, charged with crimes against humanity, is forced to fly into MiG Alley, alone, with the objective of shooting down a North Korean triple ace. Some of her crimes include the sinking of the USS Arizona and the slaying of parachuting bomber crews over Europe. She quickly realizes that she's fighting against two identical MiGs and has to return to base where her F-86 is equipped with experimental Sidewinder missles. Also, the two North Korean pilots are Ina and Kronii.

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>>26567873
How about a question in a similar vein?
Writeanons, are there any ideas you had for fics you've already published that ended up getting scrapped, or fics that were originally meant to go in a different direction? Tell us about them.

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>>26570358
So did this wip actually get off the ground, or was it just an idle idea that never got much more than that thought up?

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>>26474923
To Slay a Monster: Chapter 5

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQG1FEkGXZSyQQqQNRMxUqNHEFoNVY5avbJkgp_Iw0JpA1KxlGgJa70D7Ydj6wBFIXrMyXwIDYrLbDn/pub

Like I promised, this takes place in the time where the story started. I hope this chapter turned out better than the last. Tell me your thoughts. The critiques have been very helpful so far.

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>>26570653
Got about 1k into it before abandoning the fic and letting it decaying into digital dust on my hard drive.

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>>26567873
AC: Hololive since it wasn't really landing with people

Defective since it also wasn't really landing and it was a bit to on the nose. I also didn't really know where to go on from that point. That premise is better used as a character arc than a story entirely its own.

Kimagure Mercy as I lost any inspiration for it.

Doubtless others which I'm failing to remember.

>>26570487
Many. The amount of times I've gotten half way through a chapter only to not like it in favor for something else is too many to count. I actually had that just recently in To Slay a Monster but I scrapped it because it would be better saved for a later time, it's too soon for the scene I had in mind.

There have been many ideas in my various ryona stories that I've scrapped for being too dark. Sakura Summer was pushing it pretty far and I actually have darker, grosser stories to tell than that one if you can believe it. It's why I've sorta drifted away from ryona a bit. I don't really have much more content to work with that I haven't already done unless I were to get really pitch black with it. While I know SS preformed fairly well, I can tell it was a bit too much for a lot of people.

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>>26567963
What's up?

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>>26570487
Holocalypse had so many different paths I had in mind (many of which were better) that it could’ve gone down, as well as a completely different cast of characters. I had ideas for Amelia being an actual time traveller in the very early stages, and the whole story being a fantasy story about helping her turn back time to prevent the apocalypse. There were also ideas to make it go full fallout with mutated animals and the like.
When picking which chuubas to star in the story, I pretty much picked one girl from each generation mostly at random, except for Aqua. Thinking back I should’ve chosen my characters more carefully, boxer Ko’one jumping you on your first meeting with her would’ve been pretty cool. Weird art girl Ina who enjoys painting sceneries of destroyed cities or spoilt princess Luna being forced to live like shit and toughen up would’ve been interesting to explore as well.

The Cover Job also had another path it could have taken, with (You) being a common thug rather than a professional assassin. Instead of silently taking targets out, you would go around brutally killing stalkers and the like without being secretive whatsoever, kind of like exposure therapy except they die. But then I thought it’d be a little unrealistic for the holos to accept the fact that Yagoo had openly hired a killer and scrapped it.

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God why is this slut so fucking cute yet sexy at the same time. Time to bust a nut at Festival of Sensations again

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>>26572426
Silly me forgot to link the picture

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>>26474900
>>26474923
uhm, sweetie, you forgot a member

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>>26572653
Like... a new Holomember? Who?

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>>26570487
HF was originally going to be a lot sexier until luck stepped in. Then I started getting more and more into the world building and having fun with it. So what was once a MGQ shitpost excuse to roll some dice and write some sex scenes turned into a full series.

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>>26572653
There has never been more than 4 members in HoloFantasy, anon. Never. You should remember that. Or do we have to put you in the reeducation chamber again?

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>>26571957
Wanted to know if I was talking to the void. That fic was excellent. Well-written, smoothly paced, and ludicrously sexy; ended up busting one hell of a nut to it. Only complaint is that it ends on such a cocktease!

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>>26567873
I briefly dipped into an idea continuing off of the Corrupting Nene series. The gist was that you take Nene out on the night of a lunar eclipse to fight Ayame while her oni powers are at their peak, and then once she's been mortally wounded you force Nene to drink her blood. Then Mio and Fubuki show up for what they thought was going to be another friendly bout with Ayame, and it turns out the whole thing was just a warmup you orchestrated to get the now-demonic Nene ready for the actual fight against both of them at once.
I ultimately decided it was too chuuni and I'd never be able to make the fight scenes land.

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>>26572956
How close is HF to being done? Is it going the One Piece route?

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>>26573540
Difficult question. There's at least five other chapters worth of plots related to the greater world that are sitting on the work desk. I could end HF and write a sequel series that has Anon exploring said wider world and continuing the plot established in Kleinsberg/Argomery 7 if I wanted to say that the 'original' HF story is finished, but I think that's stupid. There's no need for a HF: Next as much as there is a 'Book 2'. I've been setting stuff up for a bit and it's only now starting to surface now that Anon has a party, is coming into his own, and is learning how to communicate better.

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>>26573971
It's good that you have a tangible end goal in mind. Thunderbolt Fantasy is an underrated show.

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>>26570487
The greatest example I can think is sad genuine smile.

It was meant to be a bunch of short smut scenes that lasted around 1.5k words each, after a long and insightful post by a kind anon I realized I could do so much more with it and it ended up turning into the netorare drama it came out as.

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>>26572098
How is Holocalypse going now anyway? If you don't mind me asking. Also that route for The Cover Job might have been unrealistic but it would've been pretty cool at the same time.

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>>26567873
The only one I've abandoned and I've mentioned it before was the reverse "Mouthful of Fox" where it's Foob's turn to rim and milk (you). I'll leave that in the back of the shelf perhaps.

Not a WIP, but I was going to write another "The fight will be your own" installment for La+, where it's up to (you) now that Yagoo has retired, to break her out of the containment facility where she was sealed and give her a new life.

>>26570487
"Sleeping Beauty" actually started out as a Mio fluff/smut fic that I really wanted to write after first watching her "Miso Soup" video, but eventually turned into molesting a sleepy Rushia.

I mulled over taking Holoturismo in a completely different direction where instead of saving (you), Sora actually films and coaxes/goads you into jumping. The main character then switches to the brother in the note left behind, where the goal is to catch her and bring her to justice. I'm not good at drama like that, so I decided against it.

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>>26575905
>where it's Foob's turn to rim and milk (you).
Now, I love butts as much as the next guy - probably more - but when it comes to men's butts, especially the licking thereof, well... I'm running for the hills.

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>>26576606
I mean, it doesn't sound pleasant to me either. But if Fubuki were offering it to me right now I'd say yes...who knows how it turns out?

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>>26474900
Oh hey
>Pekora=Spring
>Noel=Winter
>Flare=Autumn
>Marine=Summer
It werks.

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>>26567873
I had an idea for a superhero story starring Polka where (You) are a legendary thief living a double life as a regular person and as an infamous villain known for managing to get away from, and sometimes besting, the heroes sent by the government agancy C.O.V.E.R. to apprehend you. The story would start with you almost getting everything you need before finally retiring when Polka reveals herself as one of the heroes you have regularly fought against after struggling for months with the guilt of hiding something this monumentous from you. Do you tell her of your own secret identity when you're finally so close to putting it all behind you or do you continue to hide it from her even after she reveals just how much she trusts you by telling you all of this?

I eventually scrapped it and repurposed some of the plot for the future of my other story but I had fun brainstorming that chuuni idea in my head.

>>26570487
To add to the other series writers. The cast for Holoreality was originally a toss-up between Bakatare Circus, Shiraken, and Holofantasy but I decided to go for the third one because it felt the most "Fantastical" compared to the other two especially since this is a story about what happens after your Isekai adventure. I don't regret my decision since I'm having a lot of fun mixing their lore and their personalities for the story but there are definitely moments where I go "I wonder what it would be like if I chose Shiraken instead?" before ignoring that train of thought and focusing more on the actual writing.

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i want a fic that hurts. just one that really really hurts. the kind of fic that knaws at the back of your mind for a few days after you read it.

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>>26580788
Try the two alzheimers fics

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>>26581367
>Forgot Mumei at the Window
Anon...I think you...need to get yourself checked out...

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>>26581384
Wait is there another one besides the marine and mumei one? Not counting the wip

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>>26581706
Marine has two if I remember right, Hidden Sea Buried Deep and Salt and Shadow.

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>>26581706
There's two Marine ones...

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>>26581813
>>26581814
Looks like I... forgot. Ba dum tss.

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>>26581814
There are two things that have to do with Marine that I want (in my face)

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Hey guys, haven't been here in a few months. Could you point me to some good comedy fics from the last 3 months?

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>>26583675
Paradise Lost/Regained, Dammerung, and basically anything else that sounds pretentious and weird are shock fics designed to gross you out

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>>26583675
Juniper Berries, Shrunken Trouble, and Mori Can(not) Be an Idol.

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>>26474900
I've just read "Her name is Polka Omaru and she is simply perfect" and wow... I may be biased because she's my oshi and I really like her roommate too but wow... Everything in that fic was perfect. Can't say much about the format or stuff like that because I know shit about writing but as normal reader that was something that I'll never forget. Thanks to that anon for writing that. Polka love

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>>26576606
And that's more or less the reason I dropped it. I think it's one of those things that is way more erotic in visual media and probably difficult to really capture in text. Probably the most fap-worthy parts would be the cock/ball milking alongside it, so who knows; maybe as a scene in a future story.

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>>26583675
Unironically Paradise Regained was the most I've ever laughed reading a fic here. It's missing the comedy tag in the archive, but it was written as such, and by golly it was written well. There's so many cheeky jokes inside it's clear the author had a lot of fun writing it.

All that being said, though, it IS scat, and it IS really, really gross. This one, at least, isn't written as a fetish fic, which made it more tolerable than the infamous Paradise Lost.

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>>26587547
>cheeky jokes
>scat

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>>26587736
Haha, bums.

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>>26551206
I'd read it.

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>>26583753
>>26583891
Thanks bros

>>26587547
I'm pretty sure I'll find it funny too, but scat is something I don't take risks with. I have enough abhorrent fetishes already

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>>26590747
What kinda weird shit you into, anon? Share with the class.

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>>26590747
If you're actually still looking for a good comedy fic then Death for Death is a pretty good one that I recommend

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>>26570841
Didn’t manage to comment on the last chapter, but the other anons had good points. The time skip felt a little misplaced - maybe your setup is not ideal for time skips overall, as it would make more sense in my mind to flash back to the past, triggered by something, or to skip forward and stay there. Switching around breaks up the otherwise good flow you have and pt. 5 proofed the point for me.
I’m still a big fan of your storytelling and the dialogue feels authentic. The pace at which you bang out new chapters is astonishing as well.
What irritates me a little is that your plot points seem too… convenient at times and therefore inconclusive.
Example: The reason for anon buying Flare. At first he wants her as an exotic sex slave, but then - plot twist! He‘s a good guy now and she‘s basically his daughter, because no-fucking-reason-at-all.
You get what I‘m saying? The resolutions seem to come too easy sometimes.
Otherwise, great job!

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>>26592706
>What irritates me a little is that your plot points seem too… convenient at times and therefore inconclusive.

Fair. I'll devote a bit more time to fleshing it out. This is the first adventure story I've written that has actually had people enjoy it so honestly I wasn't really planning on even getting this far. Now that I see it's got some good reviews I'm trying to take things a little more serious with it. I'll can the time skip thing. I didn't really think it through as much as I thought.

Thank you. That's a helpful critique for me. I'm pretty shaky with adventure novels so this will be a bit wobbly the start. This'll definitely be a learn as I go sorta story.

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HoloEN in a private onsen! Everything is fine, and the girls are having fun soaking in the springs. After some time, their minds begin whiting out, surely because the water is so relaxing. Next thing they know, it devolves into an orgy!
Hentai logic: everything is the fault of one janitor who added some floral concentrate into the water, not knowing that with Fauna's sweat and mucus it would form a powerful aphrodisiac. Fauna would be affected by it, become wet and in turn form even more of the aphrodisiac, eventually affecting everyone else in the bath!
Hentai coincidence 2: janitor comes back to see the exhausted girls, reasonably assumes heatstroke and tries to call for help, but they swarm him, and get him drunk on aphrodisiac as well, with predictable results.

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>>26593153
>HoloEN
stopped reading there

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>>26593153
This, but no Mori.

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>>26593897
>>26594053
based

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>>26578742
I don't know if that superhero idea was supposed to be for smut but I had a fun few minutes imagining it ending with Polka rape correcting (You) into being her sidekick.

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>>26575259
I keep telling myself I’ll get back to it someday but I’ve barely made any progress on the main story for about half a year now. Once I get over the hurdle that is part 7 things should get easier, but it’s just that this is the worst instalment to the series so far so I don’t have a lot of motivation to write it.

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>>26580788
For something recently released, Tsuya is a tragedy that hurts real good.

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>>26474950
Over the course of several months, seducing and breaking down the resistances of all Holos with knife-ears one by one until they agree to anally penetrating you with their misshapen appendages, then cataloguing and rating each experience

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>>26600768
In future, please spoiler such visually unappealing images. We're not all mentally unwell enough to enjoy such nauseating sights.

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>>26600768
This but the fic ends with you becoming a weak effeminate elf that's easily taken advantage of by the elfs you've seduced.

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>>26604747
This but each flower is actually an african-american male in disguise and just before the end of the picture they jump Suisei and rape her

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>>26605512
Her ears are beautiful, precious and one of her most charming features, as are all elven ears. They are made to be cherished and tenderly kissed.

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>>26607638
They're made for slicing bread and dicing onions, dude.

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>>26607716
They're made to be appreciated, loved and kiss. Knife ear is a very offensive term.

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>>26608133
I wanna marry Pekora and take of her fucking weirdo bushbaby pet

and fuck her mom on the sly

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>>26611952
Giving Pekora a sister and a daughter on the same day!

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>>26612797
Imagine the day where they both see each others belly being noticeably larger

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>>26612797
God that's hot

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>>26613037
What is this face

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>>26618077
It is an expression of pain. Pekora begins to display this after realizing why her mother is pregnant.

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>>26474950
Ntring Laplus by fucking her roommate
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zAy2B_t5JqM

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>>26618077
She took a bit too much of her meds

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>>26618487
Honestly the literal roommate sounds like the setup to a perfect ending to a Laplus rape correction fic where it ends with you balls deep cumming in Laplus right as that girl enters the room.

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>>26618487
Don't make the mistake of reading the comments.

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why is archive kill?

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>>26622718
archive has dead?

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>>26622718
Works for me.

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>>26622765
>>26622819
Just came back for me, thank you archive

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Can you guys export the archive using the buttons at the bottom? It's probably good to have a copy of it as a PDF or something to keep all the links sorted.

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>>26622718
The script archive or the rentry one?

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>>26623139
We have a one year cold archive if that’s what you mean

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>>26623139
I mean, yes?
The buttons take you to different pages that display the archive in a way you can store it.
It would just be the links.

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>>26623650
Yeah, but it's probably still nice should the archive ever explode for *some* reason but the links still be kept up, right?

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>>26623981
No. The cargo must go down with the ship and the captain.

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>>26624334
AA has confirmed there's a contingency plan should the unthinkable happen

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>>26624334
Admittedly there is something romantic to the idea of chuuba fic being as ephemeral as the medium it makes fanfiction of...

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>>26624515
As the caretaker, should the archive ever die, AA is honour-bound to commit suicide or else disgrace his family name.

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>>26625036
VODs are archived too. Even if the chuuba is unpersoned, the vault remembers them

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>>26625048
Wait, I thought AA was a collection of nanites overseeing the maintenance of the standalone dedicated server hosting the archive? How would he die?

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>>26625536
Nah, AA was replaced by tapeworm anon months ago. He's long gone.

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>>26625048
I'd be content with a pinky and a minimum 10k word psychological horror fic about Polka in recompense

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>>26625651
AA took the wormpill?

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>>26626104
Yes, but the worm was digital and turned his soul into an AI whose only purpose is to create and archive chuuba fics.
The worm was sent by Reine.

[Anonymous No.]

>>26626552
Reine is in need of cane correction.

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>>26627086
I wanna read a fic with that.

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>>26626552
>Reine has fucking Soulkiller

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>>26622718
huh which archive, i thought wakarimasen dieded few months ago

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>>26474900
something missing in this pic

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>>26632019
what universe do you live in where there are 5 seasons
no, there's nothing amiss in that picture

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>>26632019
In all honesty there probably is room for like one last rushia mystery/drama fic to run wild with the ideas born from her 'passing'.

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>>26632670
This picture...
Something about it makes my head hurt when I look at it. It's a person, right? I can see the shape of their head. It's just so...blurry. It's like squinting underwater. What - *who* - is this, Anon?

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>>26632952
someone who will tell you they love you as an alien runs a train on them

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>>26632952
They are a ghost anon. The shade of a fool whose journey was cut short.

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>>26632670
'I saw them again last night,' You begin, trembling hand carrying the pen across the carefully lined pages of your journal. 'The girl with green hair. She was on the opposite side of a busy street, standing there in the middle of the rain. It was heavy enough to mist up white when it hit the ground - I could barely see her. I couldn't make out any features - I never can - but it felt like she was watching me. Calling out, but without a voice. This--'

Dropping the pen to the table, the sharp pain within your temples flares once more, drawing with it a hiss of pain as your clenches. You *know* this person. You've seen them a dozen times. But at the same time, there's absolutely no recollection of them present. Just a smouldering, gaping hole in your memory that your mind keeps pointing you towards when you try to find answers from within. She - if it even is a she, 'she' just feels *right* - has been there for months now, within the derelict corners of your dreams. Always blurry, out of focus and far away. Like a specter or some sort of revenant. Something that refuses to be forgotten. To stay dead.

The phrase turns sour in your mouth as it crosses your mind. 'Dead'. Gone. No more. Nonexistent. So many terms cross by with a heightening pace, the pain within your skull beginning to intensify. Eyes beginning to water, you take a deep breath and try to focus on something else - anything else - other than the mystery woman skulking throughout your dreams.

'Gone yet desperate to not be forgotten' is the very last thing to cross your mind before the thoughts finally fade for the time being.

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>>26632670
Green is not a creative color.

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>>26633844
I imagine this ends with the ghost eventually possessing your new cat, a male calico.

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>>26634199
>male
Faggots please leave

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>>26634332
But anon...
Mike is a boy's name.

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>>26634484
Good thing her name isn't Mike, it's みけねこ

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>>26625651
Wonder what it was like for a guy to crawl up your ass and take it over...

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>>26634199
>male calico
do you know how rare that kind of cat is? you gonna live a shit life for sure by getting sold there and there

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>>26636275
what did he mean by this?

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>>26636275
Yeah, Mike is a mutant catboy. Which is oddly fitting to her chuuniness.

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>>26636484
>mutant catboy
>her chuuniness

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>>26627086
>>26627750
Reine getting a caning sounds like a neat idea for a short scenario, any further wishes or ideas? Might write it soon

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>>26637844
Personally I'd prefer a fic like that to be sad and about non-sexualized abuse but I would also totally read it if it was a fetish thing.

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My mom just caught me jacking off to porn. I couldn’t even play it off, I was butt fucking naked and the screen was facing the door so she had a full view of the video I was watching. It’s over.

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>>26637844
I was thinking that it would be a punishment after getting caught in a lesbian affair, or perhaps a means of coercing her into accepting an arranged marriage against her will, as a part of a grander scheme in the world of the nobility.

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>>26638725
Does your mom expect you to not do that, or was it just embarrasing that she came in at the wrong moment?

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>>26638725
This is why smut is superior.
This would have been significantly less weird if it was just words on a screen.

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>>26638725
you need to be over 18 to post here

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>>26638725
Hey, if you live with your parents that's more or less bound to happen; your fault for not locking the door.

Now imagine my shock when I get back home after work to find my bedsheets and pilllow covers all freshly washed and neatly folder over my lewd Dakimakura because my mom decided to come visit and do some house cleaning unannounced. I was 33 at the time.

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>>26638053
>>26638899
Oh, my SM brain didn't even think of it that way. A sad and/or complex plot sounds interesting, but it isn't something I'd write...I like Reine, non-consensual violence against her would make me sad.

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>>26639521
What if it's only 'roleplay' reine is doing,in order to cope with the pain of the abuse she suffered in order to be straightened out by her parents.

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>>26639521
I'm also fine with some simple smut. Something like getting punished for failing to get Kiara to be her lover after the Maldives vacation, and has to be disciplined and trained to be more seductive.

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>>26639706
Hm, maybe if it's like that and has a happy/hopeful ending.

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>>26640068
Oh, I didn't see your reply before posting >>26640367. Maybe that could be integrated also, like Reine wanting to train so it doesn't end awkwardly with Kiara the next time. So it's still hard for her, but she wants it.

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>>26636354
Calico cats mostly consists of females due to the gene that gives them their distinctive coloration being found only in pure females. Male calico cats are extremely rare since they need to be XXY in order to have the fur colors.
This is why Mike being a boy would suck for her.

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>>26642367
good thing she is a girl

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>>26642676
Anon please don't deny your wife's fat cock. Mike is already crazy but denying her bitchbreaker's existence is going to make her crazier.

[Anonymous No.]

Why are people here so obsessed with making Mikeneko a guy? Bitch literally admitted she has no interest in girls and is only interested with muscular men.

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>>26643134
Because her name is Mike and it's funny.

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>>26643294
That just means you have the mental maturity of an 11 year old.

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>>26643134
I mean wouldn't it be cute to have a nice gay romance fic with your calico cat boyfriend.

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>>26643402
Fuck off Mike Wazowski is cute

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>>26643402
t. no sense of humor

[Anonymous No.]

>>26643746
It stopped being funny when the same joke kept getting repeated over and over again by the same people. But hey, what do I know? I'm not gay

[Anonymous No.]

I'm going to write that male mike fic just to kill this meme

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>>26644028
Do it

[Anonymous No.]

>>26541387
Where's his bulge? He has a penis right?

[Anonymous No.]

>>26644028
the last person who promised a femboy story never delivered. I'll believe it when I see it

[Anonymous No.]

>>26646092
what story was that?

[Anonymous No.]

>>26646996
the pekora one

[Anonymous No.]

>>26647241
oh, that was me. I saw you guys had some history with some pekofaggot shitposter, so i figured I was getting baited into writing some shitpost. So I abandoned the story.

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>>26647977
fuck. it wasn't bait, but I guess I can't blame you for erring on the side of caution

[Anonymous No.]

>had a bunch of good new ideas to add to a WiP right as a fall asleep
>to tired to write it down
>forget it all in the morning

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>>26648088
I mean I still have the draft. If you can tell me genuinely that somebody, aside from a shitposter, wanted that story. Then yeah, i'll complete it

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>>26643867
>humour is objective

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>>26649394
No one wants the femboy story

[Anonymous No.]

>>26649621
people liked the suisei ones.

[Anonymous No.]

I like femboys if there's CBT

[Anonymous No.]

>>26650457
Whos doing the cbt?

[Anonymous No.]

>>26651305
A very feminine woman or a very masculine man

[Anonymous No.]

I still want to write a filthy homo-breaking story with Tamaki, filled with putting him in his place as a semen container.

[Anonymous No.]

>>26654013
Just go to lgbt

[Anonymous No.]

>>26655470
Anon on his way to lgbt (it is a physical location)

[Anonymous No.]

So I'm stil writing up a draft on this prompt >>26345015 and I feel like I got something good with it so far. However, I'm wondering how I should actually include Suisei into all this. Like what retarted Aqua antics could rekindle Yours and Suisei's marriage? I ask for your thoughts and opinions.

[Anonymous No.]

should i upload my fic rn or wait for the new thread

[Anonymous No.]

>>26656567
Aqua doing something dangerous that would need you and Suisei to work together to get her out of a bind (stuck in the washing machine, hanging from a window because she tripped and her ladder fell from under her)

Aqua setting a table for two and crying when you both want to take food up to your desks/rooms separately. Accidentally folding some of Suisei's underwear into yours, forcing you to give it back to her, etc...

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>>26656708
I don't see why not now.

[Anonymous No.]

Life with a lion isn't easy y'know? Chapter 4
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTrpMx9BERdqiarMYZiPB0v81feF4zWr_k-R5NQ7PqCOm-7AeNwLIjE_q7rN99wp3qNrJp0RipXpF1-/pub

Tags: Botan, Vanilla, SFW

I tried a lot of new things and to be fair I'm not really sure about how good this chapter is but I hope (you) can enjoy it

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>>26474923
This is the Gura Cancer Kid prompt. It's pretty bad but it might get a few cheap laughs out of some people. Pic very related :)


https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRkj_viyvbX9X-gGgUe_X3gDzwqYX1lLC-mSi1LOOc-tIjWNXC__WXZmgLr4mfmI6u8cTEu-4hEDAwg/pub
Tags: Gura, Mori, SFW, Comedy

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>>26474923
>>26658023

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>>26658023
I like the story, your writing has better flow already and is fun to read.
The narrator talking to anon was also a neat concept, although I think anon changed his decision too easily. Maybe the narrator could have alluded more to anon's past and why he's like this now.
Though it was funny when he ripped into him for going to Japan to eat Italian cuisine.

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>>26538848
Gura isn't even my oshi, but I fucking cried, this is the best fluff story I've ever read on /here/.

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>>26659584
Eh it's rather mediocre, half the 'jokes' didn't really have sufficient set up to be funny, while the other half didn't go far enough to make the attempt at shock humor work.
This just seems like a mess of half baked references and half thought out jokes.

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>>26660596
Happy to hear that. I've only mentioned it once before 2 months ago when I first read it, but I cried to that story as well. It's by far my favourite story from here. I'd literally kill for a sequel or anything from the anon who made it.

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>>26570841
I think you need to put the fucking breaks and slow down as well as stop trying to go for cliffhangers since you literally don't have enough plot there to make the cliffhanger worth it.
Take for example the Flare's mom cliffhanger her for chapter 3 and 5, finding her there would have been a powerful moment... If you had sufficient plot and character development to make it have payoff but right now it zoomed to here when in universe it has been like a couple of days at most (hell I think it's literally only been two days since flare got bought from the mines).
That's not even going into the fact that the transition between the past and future is rough as hell.
I think you need to start outlining and planning your arcs, I've seen this exact kind of thing happening to your Roboco fic where you keep setting up interesting cliffhangers at the end of chapters but can't really make the pay off worth it, always either walking back the stakes to status quo or making the cliffhanger not worth it by making the pay off 'mundane'.
I know your writing off of passion but it's like you're writing thinking of only how to make the chapter have an interesting ending rather than how to make it flow smoothly as a series.

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>>26663989
Yeah, I figured as much.

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>>26665183
I've got a bit more of a plan now. I'll admit then when I started this, I didn't really know where it was going to go because I thought people would hate it but now I'm actually starting to get a structure going, I have at least some idea of where I'm going to have this go moving forward.

I'll try to be a bit more sparse with cliffhangers, I am just a sucker for them to the point where now that you bring it up I do use it more than I should. I didn't even realize that I pretty much set every chapter off with one.

I will take it into note and try to take things a bit slower now. Thank you for bearing with me on this one. I'll try to improve it as I go. I've got the first arc roughly planned so all that's left to do is write it out.

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>>26666131
>I'll try to be a bit more sparse with cliffhangers, I am just a sucker for them to the point where now that you bring it up I do use it more than I should. I didn't even realize that I pretty much set every chapter off with one.
In fairness to you, the cliffhangers you make do create some really good chapter endings. The problem you have is that you can't really 'cash in' the tension or change promised by ending your chapters like that. Honestly I'd love to see you properly execute one of those, you write really really compelling setups to them that one with a proper payoff for it sounds like it'd be a great moment to see executed.

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>>26666506
I think what the issue is is that when I set up a cliffhanger, it needs to lead to the bottom of the cliff as it were.

I never actually thought about it until now, I just ended them like that because I felt like that was what you're supposed to do. So I think it's actually not just about less cliff hangers, but using cliff hangers that lead into the suspense I'm trying to create. Actually gives me some ideas on how to set a few things up.

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>>26649394
I do. I was excited for it.

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>>26669244
aight fine. I'll do it.

If it isn't out by friday, you can call me a faggot

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>>26669801
Thanks. Looking forward to it.

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>>26656567
In the spirit of the original post, probably aqua doing something to shake up Suisei's 'soft hate' for idealists by being a new variable that makes her rethink how she's handling you.

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>>26474950
a child-like sapling is excited to finally see mommy again. but when they meet, instead of a nice, loving hug, fauna brutally rapes him while he's too confused by her actions to do anything about it.

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>>26666675
I guess the way you were doing it before was effectively ending every chapter with "a man kicks down the door and points a gun". Which unfortunately you never really followed through with since it would go off course with what you wanted the path of the story to be.
Of course, I could totally see a fic going down that path of constant escalating tension from persistent end chapter cliffhangers but you'd need to have a plot that supports that kind of escalation, i.e something like an action story going at breakneck pace, or a drama about something collapsing rapidly.

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>>26648135
This is why you write down even dumb idle ideas into the fucking note app that's on your phone even if it's something you're not sure off.
Especially since it doesn't even have to be good notes, just the existence of the 'rough' form of the note is probably enough to keep the memory of the idea there unless your house has Carbon Monoxide poisoning your short term memory.

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>>26678637
It’s near the bump limit, what else were you expecting.

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>>26679583
Ignore him, anon, he always does this.

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>>26679593
I know, it gets annoying though.

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>>26679647
Just ignore him, next time.

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>>26679666
Fine, but that won’t solve anything.

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>>26679691
It won't derail a thread.

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>>26679705
You know you talking to yourself is ridiculously obvious, right?

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New thread
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>>26680238
You can stop being a schizo.

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>>26680238
nvm, you’re that anon who accuses everyone who you disagree with you as the earlyfag.

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>>26680238
The earlyfag was never concerned with hiding himself, just with being as much of a nigger as possible. Rangebanning SEA is the only cure

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>>26654013
write then I want to read it