/wg/ - Writing General - Ratna Edition

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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
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>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.
Previous thread:>>15925538

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Story Anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em.

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Do you have a story like you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
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>>16133528
Mumei kidnaps you and forces you to breed with unwilling victims Bae and FBK to spawn more baebies and potential demigods as part of her very unethical scientific experiments.
Possibly a subplot about selling the videotapes.
Eternally grateful to whoever decides to pick this up.

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>>16133528
Whatever happened to that one prompt about Haachama trying to steal away Matsuri’s little brother? Is that still being worked on?

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>>16136024
Someone was working on that one? I know the prequel, which wasn't that good, got posted.

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>>16136024
I mean I know an anon said they were picking it up, and this caused the anon requesting it to stop asking, but we haven't gotten any updates on whether it's still actively being worked on.

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>>16123164
>>16123281
The only reason I was here playing with you is that I couldn't sleep last night. I was (am) planning to leave.
By the way, what is with pekofags? You have to understand stereotypes are retarded and don't really say anything to anyone outside your little bradyphrenic group.

>>16126047
This is better. Look at the people here, complaining a post has too many words and then writing and reading a hundred pages of total crap. This is better.
But allow me:
>from across the dark expanse
>feet apart
First I'm far away, then instantly right before her? A little incongruous, it broke the pace for me just beginning. Also, what place is this? Just a dark space? Nothing wrong with that (it adds to the feeling of loneliness/isolation).
>hazel
I liked this. I didn't know the word, and I like learning new words. You didn't use a dull and generic noun (e.g., "brown"), but a precise and descriptive one. Good. For future reference:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lists_of_colors
>without turning to face... flat on her face.
The previous paragraph was very emotive, yet this was very clichéd (like one of those generic anime scenes), so it became bathetic. Were you going for comedy?
The VOLTA is very important; however, since this is short, personally I think it's better you maintain the mood or don't change it too suddenly, as advised by Horace and Pope ("The Art of Poetry" and "Peri Bathos", very short and recommended readings).
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Volta_(literature)
>pit and pat
This made me chuckle. It sounds like an expression a little kid would use (in fact, I googled "pit and pat" and was shown a bunch of images related to kids). It broke the immersion again; are you going for tragedy or comedy?
>a butcher does a pig
Your similes, man... So you're a pig, and Sora some fat man covered in blood? How romantic.
The burning bridge felt odd as well.

As another said, the mixing of persons. Work on your grammar and orthography.
I like the figures of repetition, and you used a couple of them well. Overall, I liked this short story.

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Still too early to die

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>>16143247
Submit.

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>>16043003
Overall, this one was really great. Title's a little generic but it works with being a threesome fic with the characters having obvious thoughts on the nature of them and all that. The characterization of both girls was done well. I could easily hear the voices in the dialogue. The Anon's relation to Mille and Enna as well as them being wives made was a good and convenient way to for things to happen as well as just a little drinking being involved just to get things going but not enough to make anything questionable. It also came back when it became a concern of Anon's which lead to a sweeter moment of their love for each other being reciprocated. So that set up was done well too. It was pretty romantic, endearing, passionate and sweet through and through and well balanced when it came to giving attention to both girls. The story was long enough and well paced for what it was. I'm also a fan of the tags which you delivered on and I also lost to this fic too so I'd give it 9.5/10. Would love to read more.

I have to say, although it's a very slight grievance, the primal "get pregnant" screaming was a little tonally dissonant to be the point of being a little comical which could take someone out of of the story. If I'm not being too rude to suggest a fix, I think you could still do it in slightly a more tonally consistent way by having them just "say" those lines or moan them and so opposed to loudly screaming them but at the same time, you could also have their screams just be loud moans and/or have it the dialogue just be less comical. A very slight and minute change, I know, but I feel like it can make the difference since it is at both the literal and narrative climax of the story which is probably the last place you want the reader getting taken out of the story. That being said, for someone like me, it didn't take me out and might've (maybe since I'm used to that sort of stuff) made it better in my personal experience. But of course, just about nothing phases me and it's harder to for my immersion into a story to be broken (especially when riled up) but at the same time, I also know I'm the average person so I hope my critique/advise isn't too confusing.

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>>16133502
That conversation about serial killers last thread gave me ideas.

Toy
https://docs.google.com/document/u/2/d/e/2PACX-1vSNiGOayeznRHvCRJx8gJ807S6liXOv0NVY9wxmcebwB-Qa7inMVqKaEhg7wBDMEbDGmoJgNJjCWDE4/pub

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>>16145007
that bonus is hot as fuck, good job anon

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>>16145007
>inspiration for the fic is serial killers
>picture is of suisei
Not even going to bother reading it.

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i just busted the fattest fucking nut to wolfish winds. holy shit the oral smut in that fic is so good. kudos, anon.

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>>16145007
Pretty cool premise, wouldn't mind seeing more.

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>>16145646
Thanks for enjoying it. I'm determined to write about fucking each and every of the holo hags, but in due time.

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>>16133528
Finding a vhs of an old Lulu VOD only for her to come to life through the screen and stalk you.

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>>16145007
Usually not too big a fan of Suipsycho but god damn, I really enjoyed this premise. Good job anon.

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>>16043003
Perhaps it's for the better that something like this was the first, rather than the horrible nonsense I have to show.
Presenting, The Birds.
https://archiveofourown.org/works/36290440
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>>16133528
Suisei x Roberu. I honestly have no clue why people here made this pairing but I do think they kinda look cute together.

Either that or a Bae x Roberu fic, I feel like this one's long overdue.

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>>16150808
Ignore this schizo.

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>>16150808
based
>>16152604
cringe

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>>16133502
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQcayeO3faIlkfMauU28CuvFx4LgUIsDddxmF_s0uWcJRNaIb92lfhZWVyNx_JbiOx5RPkwNV64R4dl/pub

My R

Tags: (you), Tokino Sora, Hoshimachi Suisei, Roboco, Romance, Cute, Sad, Tragedy

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>>16139399
The reason I said feet apart but a world away was because it's a metaphor. They're close together, but there's a subjective distance between the two.

The reason I used childish language was to add a cute, endearing quality to her, though I can accept that some people won't go for it. Completely a matter of preference. Some will like it, other's won't.

That was also another metaphor. IE, a butcher slaughters a pig in a very painful, brutal way and her words cut him in the very same sense. I didn't just want to use the tired phrase of "cut into him like a knife" since that's used so often in literature.

I agree with the rest of it though. That was a fair critique. I hope that when I fit it into My R, it'll have a lot more polish and weight, as well as context.

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>>16157967
>The reason I said feet apart but a world away was because it's a metaphor.
I know you probably meant to use that trite metaphor, but you got it backwards, giving the wrong idea or making it nonsensical. This is what I'm referring to: cacosyntheton.
>The reason I used childish language was to add a cute, endearing quality to her.
That's understandable, but I think it'd be better if you make that language hers (the childish character) rather than yours (the narrator, who looks childish all of a sudden).
>That was also another metaphor.
That was not a metaphor, but a simile. A very bathetic simile: you're comparing the protagonist to a pig, and Sora or her words to a butcher (and butchers never have a good image); do you not see the problem with this?
>I didn't just want to use the tired phrase of "cut into him like a knife" since that's used so often in literature.
You could still use it as inspiration or modify it to make it more interesting or novel. Think about it.

By the way, tell me, did you use the excerpt I shared earlier as inspiration? I see similarities between what I did and what you're trying to do, but you're doing it badly, anon.
I'm still flattered, though, like a pig that has been eviscerated. :)

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>>16161325
Getting a BJ from Chocololi while Chocomama laps on your ass and fondles your balls, uooooohhhh!

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>>16162564
UUOOOOOOH!!

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>>16133528
Fubuki encouraging you to cheat on her and Matsuri convinces you to leave Fubuki for her while you're balls deep inside Matsuri

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>>16157967
>>16162516
By the way, you should avoid hyperbaton if your command of English isn't very good. Hyperbaton may be very common and permissible in some languages (such as German, Spanish, Latin and Greek), but in English, things can go astray real quick. Very easy to fall into cacosyntheton.

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>>16157967
I'm glad you can take that faggot's critique with some measure of sincerity, but he's off the mark on a few things. The "feet apart but a world apart" metaphor is fine, but the initial setting of "across the dark expanse" makes the following sentence redundant or nonsensical, depending on your goal. Also yes, your tenses are confused sometimes: "Every word [cuts] into you as a butcher does a pig". That simile is also a bit confusing, though, because I see your point: that her (seemingly) well-intentioned words are inadvertently callous or cutting to your mental state. However, the additional connotation of a butcher cutting into a pig implies that he's callous because it's his job or because he's inured to the gore.

You have good instincts of trying to avoid cliche phrasing, but when you work with rhetorical devices that require the reader to apply their own experiences to the description, you have to keep a very close watch on how it reads.

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>>16162516
>By the way, tell me, did you use the excerpt I shared earlier as inspiration? I see similarities between what I did and what you're trying to do, but you're doing it badly, anon.
>I'm still flattered, though, like a pig that has been eviscerated. :)

No, I didn't, you smug dick. Good god, maybe give me something with a bit less self absorption you narcissist.

>>16163491
Thank you. That I can work with a lot better. One of the things I've always struggled with as far as details go is something coming off in a way I didn't mean, IE the pig example. I'll try to make sure I word it better something like

"the words cut into you, as if Sora were tearing into you with a butcher's sheers."

Is something like that better?

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>>16157781
>>16157967
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>>16163491
Hold on: your "My R" gives more context. You're protagonist seems to have a very low self-esteem: that makes your simile actually make sense. Sora's character is displayed as childish, which makes your suddenly childish language permissible. I guess it's fine.

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>>16164638
Maybe I would switch gears entirely, maybe bring in some sayings about hearts or stomachs. Something like "she said, her words a cold caress around your heart" or "her words sink to the pit of your gut", something along those lines.

Structurally those are pretty straightforward, and generally relatable directly to how it would feel. That's how I would generally operate as far as similes and metaphors go, because you have to be really purposeful and make sure the more complicated similes/metaphors serve a greater purpose beyond making the text look pretty.

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>>16164638
>Says 'you', 'you', 'you', and wants to make me the protagonist of his story
>Gets mad I'm talking as if it were me in the story, calls me self-absorbed and a narcissist
Ogey.

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>>16145007
God the suicopath written here was so fucking hot. Great work anon.

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>>16133528
Vampire Hunter Fubuki

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>>16133528
Fubuki hunter Vampire

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>>16169341
>>16174504
You're such a stirling beacon of inspiration and creativity.

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>>16174875
The city in Scotland? Or did you mean 'sterling' you passive aggressive, egotistical cunt? Off yourself.

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>>16174875
Cope. Seethe. Dilate. ESL-kun.

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>>16174979
Sarcasm isn't passive aggression, anon.
Is his ego too big for you little one? Aww.
>Off yourself.
What method do you recommend?

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>>16174979
>pointing out typos
I must have hit a nerve, thanks for the laugh.

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I wonder how often does this happen

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>>16175866
All the time. The thread is dead except for arguing.

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>>16175939
That sucks, i remember the thread being more active a few months ago

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>>16176046
Wisely, people tend to avoid the thread when PF is shitting it up

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>>16176046
All generals live their course. Due to being a niche interest in a niche hobby on a (comparatively speaking) niche website, we've got a significant lack of new blood to replace burnt-out old hands.

This thread will be gone soon.

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>>16176046
Lots of folks who hung around here ended up migrating to the Kronii general instead, so since EN Gen2, we've been pretty slow.

Just the last couple of threads that we've seen an uptick on the obvious baitposting.

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>>16176130
what pf means?

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>>16176213
How long have you been saying this?

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>>16176356
That was the first time...? It's just a fact of life.

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>>16176336
Not important.

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>>16176336
This thread's boogeyman. Everything bad that happens is their fault. It stands for Pekofag due to their infamous stories of dressing up as Pekora and taking cock in every hole. Most people felt a sense of betrayal once they realized they nutted to someone who was one of the shitposters of the thread a couple months back, and they refuse to forget. A good lesson was taught from it, at least. To not fall for bait.

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>>16176623
this

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>>16176624
I remember reading that reveal on the bus one morning and having a wonderful laugh.
The green texts weren’t half bad either, they’ve gotten a few nuts out of me

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>>16176624
LOL. Naruhodo.

>>16176046
Do you like philosophy?

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>>16176943
yeah philosphy is cool.

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>>16176882
Ah I see. So when I was called a pekofag, they meant baitposter. They believed that if I destroy them with facts and logic, then I must be that guy or someone like him. The boogeyman. Ah I see.

>>16177057
That's great! What have you read until now? Which is your favorite and why?
Recommendations?

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>>16177295
recently read Marx's historical materialism, that was neat i think, pretty heavy read otherwise.

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>>16177295
NTA but if you're interested in philosophy you should start with Plato and Aristotle.

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>>16157781
Eh, it feels like it's missing a central 'conflict' or plot to connect it all. It just feels like scenes connected chronologically there isn't really any 'want' or 'desire' that's connecting it all.
The short story worked because it was just a gut punch that let the emotions connect, this isn't working becuase it doesn't seem to be going anywhere... and the dialogue is kind of bad. It's realistic, but that isn't what makes good dialogue.

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>>16177425
Anon nooo! You'll be labelled a communist and satanized! Sing after me: capitalism~! ca-pi-ta-lis-m~!
Jokes aside, I applaude you for not being fucking oligophrenic like many others and daring to read and consider different viewpoints for yourself.

>>16177570
Yes, I've read the same elsewhere, and reading articles from SEP has really let me know how greatly influential these two have been. Impressive.
I have downloaded editions of all their works and intend to read them in the future. Thanks.

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>>16178263
Anon I don’t know what world you live in but people reading Marx’s stuff isn’t that uncommon.
Hell I’ve got friends who’ve read Mein Kampf and they’re about as far from nazis as you can get

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>>16133528
why do we get many ntr stories and futanari and scat but no blacked??

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>>16181159
Look, maybe we've got some more disturbing elements, but we're not animals here.

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>>16181681
being racism is not funny

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>>16181159
I would've written one by now but I feel like the requesters are requesting it for shitpost reasons and not because they're into IR.

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Open discussion. Who is the most racism holo?

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>>16181885
Ayame. What she did to those korean tourists was inexcusable, it's a disgrace that cover still keeps her around

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>>16181885
Ayame, duh. Followed by Flare. It was also recently revealed Fubuki is either a racist or incredibly nationalistic after she let slip "gaijin" while talking about an overseas player.

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>>16182067
Send clip or the source stream. Never heard of this one before.

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>>16181842
I'd read it. Can't say the same for anyone else, but you'd have at least one reader.

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>>16182223
https://files.catbox.moe/bsu4ko.mp3

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>>16133528
Watame being moving and nice to you as if she’s your girlfriend or wife. Very comfy, very cute, SFW.

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>>16182440
Sorry I meant Loving not moving hope that doesn’t complicate things.

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>>16182067
I love my cute nationalist fox wife

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>>16182067
Is gaijin really that bad of a word? I feel like it depends on the context but then again I know little about the subtleties of Japanese.

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>>16182568
In fubuki's context I don't think it's racist, she just seems to be jesting and didn't mean anything spiteful or hateful.

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>>16182568
Ehh no not really, but kaigai is a gentler term, translating to abroad or overseas versus gaijin which straight-up means foreigner/outsider.
If you're trying to cultivate a global community or whatever you wanna call it, you would want to avoid using gaijin imo.

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>>16181159
To give a completely baseless analysis.
I think it might be because the primary POV used here is 2nd person, thus the only way to have a sex scene that incorporates those elements while keeping POV (which is generally preferred while writing) would be to have the reader insert in the closet watching their chuuba get fucked or break POV and get a 3rd person sex scene from the chuubas perspective.
Neither option really works for fullfilling the 'make it hot' and 'make it hurt' criteria.
Especially since if you want to make the Blacked thing distinct from NTR you have to integrate raceplay elements that you need a steadier hand to implement compared to normal porn.

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>>16181159
Miko supposedly watches blacked porn so you can write a story about her trying out black dick I guess

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>>16183050
Gonna need a spoon feeding on that one anon
Wasn’t she the one who called a black guy a gorilla

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>>16183146
She admitted to watching a specific JAV actress. One who's done a lot of blacked stuff.

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>>16183146
Miko and Korone had a 24 hour stream where they watched some fan videos. One of the videos was Ai Uehara in cosplay wishing Miko and Korone. Obviously, everyone knew who she was so chat started saying a greeting that's used during AV fan meetups which Miko also knew because she's an otaku. The whole thing about her watching BBC is because Ai (along with other actresses) flew out to Africa and fucked 'villagers'. Pretty funny JAV desu and I'm surprised that so many anons didn't already know about it. It's basically a shitpost.


TL;DR: Famous JAV pornstar who starred in IR porn called into a stream and schizos have been shitposting ever since.

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>>16182568
Gaijin is a wartime corruption of the word gaikokujin, which means foreigner - gai meaning outside, koku meaning country, and -jin referring to citizens of a country.
Gaijin literally means outsider and is racially/nationalistically motivated

You wouldn't accidentally call a black person a nigger or a Chinese a chink (unless they're mainland, in which case I'd do it intentionally)

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>>16183592
There we go. That can be the big IR story. Fubuki calling you a fucking ham sandwich, no good Ritz Bit, unable-to-handle-tobasco whitey while you fuck her brains out.

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>>16185547
Not only does it not sound like Fubuki but come on, really? Grasping at straws so that it can be a Fubuki story AGAIN?

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>>16186564
Sounds like someone doesn't like Fubuki here. Get those pitchforks ready, boys.

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>>16186564
>wtf this rrat doesn't sound like them
shocking

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>>16186564
For my theoretical IR fic the chuuba was gonna be Fubuki anyways :/

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>>16187246
>It's not Miko
Shame

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>>16187606
Just because Miko knows who a famous pornstar is doesn't mean she watches interracial stuff.

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>>16187246
Have to ask, but why? Is it because she's effectively generic vtuber waifu, or was there a deeper reason?

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>>16181745
Yes it is

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>>16187246
(You) stay the fuck away from my Friend

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>>16187246
I'd read the fuck out of that for sure.

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>>16149944
Meh, pretty mediocre edging to bad smut; and a story that's not exactly gripping.
If I had to say a single thing postive about this; at least the underlying premise would be kind of hot if this was a visual medium. As it is this fic's kinda bad

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>>16190332
Three reasons:
1) Fubuki is cute
2) I like Fubuki
3) Fubuki stories are guaranteed (You)s

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>>16192347
Not necessarily; iirc the single futa Fubuki fic got practically ignored

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>>16192479
That story was the exception rather than the rule.

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>>16192479
I mean to play devil's advocate. A controversial tag/theme and fubuki is practically guaranteed to at least get eyes on it.
Whether other Anons will actually comment on it or just to say fuck you to the author because of it's themes is another question.

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>>16180160
Ou lá lá monsieur Le Bourgeoise! The rabble I know is too busy either working mindlessly as wageslaves or mindlessly being prejudicial and odious, wanting to kill each other horribly. Reading or hearing different opinions? That's a no no in our tribe; you outsider, you to the firey stake.

t. third world.

By the way, I've been spending too much time here, so I'll stop coming at least for now. You don't have to reply.
Have a good day/night and take care.

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>>16194449
oh, wonderful. a pseudo-intellectual.

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>>16181159
No one thus far that's written NTR has unironically been into it. It's just the regular writers seeking creative challenge by attempting requests, so they tend to be pretty shallow as far as fetish subgenre goes. Same reason there's no netorase please someone write netorase of Aki or Watame or Matsuri

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>>16194635
don't speak ill of the dead

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>>16196294
Yeah, even if you didn't know that it was the writers writing for a challenge it's kind of self evident by the fact that all of them have just been aping the structure of an NTR erodoujin but not hitting the same kind of emotional feels.

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>>16198248
The NTR fic I'm working on should be more in line with actual NTR. So that's something to look forward to I guess.

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>>16199472
In the structural sense or in the intended audience reaction sense?

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>>16200895
In the intended audience sense. It starts out super fluffy (wink wink) and then the gut punches start coming in.

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>>16192216
>bad smut
I think if you came into this hoping for a story to jerk off to instead of treating it like a story about a fucked up thing that happened to someone terrified of birds, you would be disappointed on principle.

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>>16202530
Don't insinuate that coomers have principles

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>>16202733
I'll have you know we're a very principled bunch.

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dog has some surprisingly ecchi asmr in her membership

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>>16203750
Dog is an underappreciated sex icon

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>>16203750
You don’t say…

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>>16133528
Cumming inside Elira even though she keeps telling you to pull out.

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Mio or Watame?

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>>16210168
Boring taste Mio or boring story Watame.

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>>16210168
Seriously depends on what for

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>>16211172
It's for blacked

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>>16211440
Well, in that case...

Shooting yourself in the fucking head

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>>16211440
Do Mio and Fubuki, the contrast of their white sweaty skin being mating pressed by black sounds hot. Fubuki gives a rimjob of course

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>>16211172
crime drama

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>>16211899
Mio. Watame has done nothing wrong

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>>16211440
Definitely Watame, then. I think Mio is super hot and all but despite being a gentle person, she's not quite as softhearted and naive as Watame.

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Any updates on that one FubuMio fishing fic? I'm currently saving up all of my seed in anticipation for it and I want to know approx. how much am I to suffer.

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>>16213454
I don't think that Anon said he was working on it, just that he'd like too.

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Hey everyone, i'm looking for some small prompts to practice my writing reps, i would've taken one of the old ones but i'm not confident to try those yet. Anyone has a suggestion/ mini prompt they would like to see?

t. drawfriend learning to write

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>>16217833
Try thinking of a scene and just writing that to start. Learn some mechanics and flow before you worry about things like story structure

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>>16217833
Do an easy prompt, like Ayame getting raped by niggers or a Coco/Red Guard gangbang.

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>>16217833
That one scene in Omarun is Cute and Funny where anon is looking through the doorhole and he can only see Polkas ears.

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>>16218918
this but unironically

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>>16217833
(You) are Ayame's long-suffering manager, struggling to get your cute but extremely lazy charge to get up off her ass and do her job.

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>>16217833
Great to see new people pick up the pen to write, but if you really are that new I would strongly advise with a simple story to see your level of writing. As for a prompt, you can start with a simple "going out for a date with your oshi".

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>>16224543
I made the lil' story of mumei feeding berries to kronii a couple of threads ago, i made that one a bit half-assed so i wanna do something properly this time.

Going on a date with Fauna sounds nice, so i'll cook something up and see how it goes.

>captcha H0TAS

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>>16217833
Whenever I write a new story I like to imagine a random scene with a chuuba, and then build a story around that. So I’d recommend going full gosling and think of something you’d like to do with your oshi, and construct a story around that one event.

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>>16226550
Rather than building it around that event, I write a story to try and get to that event, this generally turns into a longer story.

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>>16224906
Looking forward to it. Also, TFW your laptop cable gets fucked so you can't write while waiting for a replacement. Just when I was about to finish my chapter too.

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>>16228333
Of what?

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>>16202530
I'd be dissapointed even if it was just a horror story because the actual horror isn't even that well described such that any fear could occur. As such I assumed that the intent was a 'monster' rape.
If it was just a supposed to be a horror thing it's... not good and fails at actually grabbing any horror.

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>>16229391
Of Watame and the Blackening.

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>>16213454
Hey anon, that was me. I mentioned a couple weeks back that you shouldn't expect this for a while because I already have quite a bit on my plate that I plan to wrap up before I get to it. Don't want to disappoint but also don't want to give false hope. I've got three stories to wrap up now, so we're likely talking months at the rate I've been able to write.

Good news is it looks like things are slowing down again after a hectic start of the year.

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>>16231361
I'm guessing you're also the Anon that's working on Fox Family Christmas? Hope everything's going well for you. Just take your time and finish them at your own pace. Everyone knows you make quality fics so just take it easy man

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>>16226933
Yeah that’s what I meant honestly

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>>16224906
Based, should be nice to see more normal/fluff Fauna fics instead of the degenerate ones I write
t. working on an ASMR-like sex one but slowly

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Quick question for the class.

How much untranslated foreign language bothers you? I'm going out on a limb and assuming not too many people here speak french, but I'm working on this fic where the setting does have a lot of french words and occasional sentences used, and I'm just curious if it'd be viewed more as tacky or annoying than anything.

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>>16236981
Check CocoGura MoriShion for reference, no one seemed to complain how it was used there.

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>>16236981
Depends on context, but generally you can get away with using multiple words as long as you put an in-context explanation somewhere in the narrative if you don't expect the reader to know what it means.

Don't use full untranslated sentences outside of very specific circumstances where you're highlighting the foreign language, eg trying to go through an airport without speaking the language, tourist asking for directions etc.

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>>16236981
If it makes sense in the context of the story then go for it. I like it when stories do that.

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>>16236981
Depends.
>untranslated foreign words
Really doesn't bother me, or probably any readers /here/ due to to this place being filled with weaboos and as such there's a tolerance to using a word in its original language rather than in translated
>untranslated full sentences
Probably depends on how it's used in the narrative. It could be annnoying if it's absolutely necessary to understand them, i.e reader needs to bust out deepl to try and understand the plot; but if it's just something to the side it should be fine.

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>>16237107
I really don't like that fic, and it's usage of Japanese becoming pointless very quickly is part of it. Also nobody really talked about it at all when it was posted.

>>16237171
>>16237464
>>16238189
Alright, thanks for the thoughts. I guess my biggest issue is that (You) in the fic knows what's being said, but for instance Noel not a whole lot and Flare knows none at all. It's treated kind of like how latin was a long time ago, where it's considered a very upper class thing to read and speak. I guess I'll just try my best to avoid it being used for anything important and be a nice bonus for the ones who do decide to translate it.

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>>16239646
Well fuck you too then

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>>16239982
Get owned, scrub.

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>>16239982
3 post comedy

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Baby Bump

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>>16242243

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>>16242243
Built for BBC.

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>>16133528
rape

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>>16242840
What is it with ui fags and rape?

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>>16243294
Ui is a prime instant loss candidate. Almost purpose built for being mating pressed while you choke her

[Anonymous No.]

>>16133528
story based on this drawing.

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>>16245222
>Unlucky Sukonbu raped by passing by samegaki

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>>16245222
F-Fubuki...

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>>16245222
Well, she does do the whole southern thing well I guess it shouldn't be that much of a stretch for someone to write
[spolier]Can't say the same for her cunny[/spoiler]

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>>16245222
Well, she does do the whole southern thing well I guess it shouldn't be that much of a stretch for someone to write
Can't say the same for her cunny

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>>16245222
Country sharks make due...

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>>16231361
Hey anon, thanks for the response. I wasn't here when you mentioned that, I was only around when you said that you're considering writing it, so I might've misremembered and interpreted it as you saying that you'll definitely do it.
That being said, regardless of how long it takes and how much I have to wait, I'll do it. Just take it easy and take care of yourself. However long it takes, I'll wait for it.

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>>16206356
yeah she's very intimate and frequently does soft ear nibbling
this is some serious GFE shit

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>>16243387
So this made think.
The instant loss equivalent in writing would pretty much just be
>Girl acts smug
>Scene/Line break
>Girl moaning as it cuts to the middle of a sex scene
Or am I missing something in how that'd get written.

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>>16251530
Instant loss would be something like immediately bending her over and ripping her panties off into fucking her as she starts screaming about the power of the D or something.

[Anonymous No.]

Random story time! Go to the archive and select a random story to read, say what it was and what you thought of it.

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>>16253987
I thought the appeal of instant loss was that it condenses a longer plot into the two necessary bits, the smugness/arrogance that makes the rape 'deserved' and the actual rape itself, with the instant loss being cutting out the 'unnecessary fluff' of her actually losing to you.

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>>16243387
I would nut incredibly hard to an Ui instant loss story, not gonna lie. Especially if it's not even rape, and more "Ui is just smug and thinks she can control the pace of sex with (you), but little does she know she's very weak to the power of dick".

Cue angry slurring, pushing you away, trying to crawl away from you while moaning her lungs out, crying while her tongue flops up and down with a huge smile on her face and finally goading you on to mess her up even worse after you cum and calm down.

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>>16254254
Paradise Lost. I thought the lead-up was cute, but the execution was flawed. Hilarious, but flawed.

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>Read that AZKi is going to become a full blown member of Hololive and INNK is brown bread.
>See that Buff Ame is now a thing.
>Get curious as to how Gen 0 Gets Buff is coming.
>IP range still blocked so duck into a shit diner
>Sift through several threads worth of talk about ntr, rape and stalking, as well as endless bait and shitposting.
>The pain peko returns
>Remember how amazing Uruka Gets Buff was.
For fuck's sake, /vt/.
Well, while I'm here, what should I order for brunch?

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>>16251530
The PF started with instant loss

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>>16256055
Omelet. (Remember, it's "au fromage", not "du fromage".)

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>>16257839
Close. Ended up with a Cobb salad. I figured, it has bacon and eggs on it so it's kind of like breakfast?

Holy shit am I full of regert. Whose fucking bright idea was it to put eggs on a fucking salad?

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>>16229391
Diary of a New Life.

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>>16254254
Sexy Gura Biting Greens. I'm not super into blood and all that so it would probably hit better for someone who did. But I guess it fine for a 2-3 paragraph fic.

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>>16254254
>Sugar Sweet Nightmare
cute little fic

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>>16254254
Bladed Feelings. Started interesting, quality of dialogue devolved a bit when it turned into a romance, overall felt kind of rushed given what it attempted. I liked the descriptive language throughout the whole thing.

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>Menhera

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>>16254254
>Beating the shit out of Sana because she won't shut the fuck up about astrology
I love the shitposty comedy stories

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>>16262907
I wish there were more

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>>16133528
Matsuri finds sex with you to be one of the best things in the world, and she wants to show her coworkers how great you are. Whether they want to find out or not.

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>>16265654
>keeps sending unsolicited sex tapes
>turns to fucking in their offices so they get conveniently caught

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>>16266716
I had meant rape but that's good too

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>>16265654
>Invites her coworkers to a sleepover at her house, but has sex with (you) in the room next door while they can hear everything through the paper-thin walls, Matsuri moaning and wailing
>In a video call with one of the other girls, visibly flushed and short of breath with beads of sweat running down her forehead while bouncing up and down, and they can just see hints of (you) sitting behind her
>Shows up to dinner with the girls with visible cumstains on her dress, then picks it up and licks it off when pointed out

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>>16268457
Holy shit, that's one HOT picture.

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>>16271083
Matsuri's design feels so boring but she's so fucking hot

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>>16268457
>Story ends with Matsuri getting an NTR video from her coworkers.
>Shows (You) in an orgy with everyone except her
>Cuts to her shlicking to her plans success

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>>16256055
Still being written, sorry for not mentioning much about it. Although, you can expect that to be the status for a while longer with how things are coming along. I'll note down Buff Ame though.

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>>16133528
Taking advantage of Haachama's first drinking experience to unleash the desires for her body you've built up over the last two years.

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>>16133502
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSoLSzk-mLaCJkblLUw3c5juueRMJi5c1_qhRkOiB5YA14WmAlYcUACVd8ecSAYwJwPiO-xTgabxsNG/pub

Hell Hath No Fury like an Elf in Heat

Tags: Flare, Noel, Lamy, futa, NSFW, rape, heat, chain orgasm, masturbation, high fantasy

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Rise!

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>>16254254
>Built to last
I might be retarded but I didn’t quite understand what Ollie was in this story. I get that she was like Theseus’s ship and constantly had her parts replaced, but what did it mean by vital essence? And how was she not undead or using magic to live like that? The writing and vocabulary was good tho.

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>>16133528
Getting into a fistfight with Selen.

Flip a coin to decide who wins

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>>16277161
Heads

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>>16277556
You lost and now have to give head to Selen's massive futa cock and proportionally hairy balls

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>>16275038
I can't tell if it's just me not really being into this fetish or me just not being horny at the moment but I didn't really find this hot.
It's well written mind you, and it is decently compelling enough that I read through it all even if I have mixed feeling about it.
I guess my problem with this is that it's kinda in-between a horny premise and like a comedic story.
If it was intended to be like something to jack off to, it doesn't fullfill that purpose due to being too unfocused on the titilating aspects. If it was intended to be comedic... I didn't find it that funny.

[Anonymous No.]

Where's the write of the amnesiac Flare story, I need more

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>>16279822
He was here last thread, at least try to check.
>>16070665

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>>16277161
beating the shit out of a dragon would force every other animal girl to kneel

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>>16276919
Yeah that story was written by the omelas dude as I recall and if you’ve read any of his stuff (besides omelas) it can get weird and non sensical
I didn’t get it either

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>>16283782
off memory wasn't it basically that ollie is going to continue killing people and harvesting organs to keep herself alive?

[Anonymous No.]

Very interesting... I was trying to see if I could write a story with exclusively dialogue and no actions, but I don't even know when or how to start. Without a physical description I simply can't seem to attach a personality to the chuuba. Certain games have an image of the character and purely dialogue at the bottom, yet they can make it work. I'm trying to figure out if one could just write a story entirely made of dialogue and if people here could guess which chuuba it is, or if attaching an image to that dialogue is absolutely necessary for it to work. Further experiments must be conducted...

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>>16287886
Surely not, right? It certainly sounds hard but I don't think it's impossible. It'll also depend on what kind of story you're going for and if the dialogue will mention anything related to the chuuba's personality I guess.

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>>16266716
>>16268457
>Festival trying to pimp you out to all her friends
w-woah

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>>16271830
this is more than a little hot

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>>16287886
To give my two cents to 'making a story exclusively with dialogue'.
I think you need to either have to distinguish who is speaking, either via dumb typographical tricks like different font/color or via having the two people having the conversation be the kind with such strong personalities that distinguishing them is easy. Since the reader needs to know who is talking otherwise it just gets confusing.
Of course that's if the story was a 'conversation'; if it were just one chuuba monologuing for the entire length of it. You could probably get away with just having the story centered around the audience trying to piece together who the speaker is. Just having the entire thing written out as a single nonstop monologue.

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>>16291066
My stories are dialogue intense but I found it that you don't actually need to clarify who is speaking now, usually one can tell. When they can't or the change is too abrupt then it's good to put in"he said she said" text, but you shouldn't underestimate the reader if you're confident in your own skills. I usually go about 10 switches before I have to clarify something.

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>>16291266
Forgive me if I'm wrong, but I thought the challenge was to write using only dialogue.
In a case like that, the initial challenge is in 'getting the reader on the saddle' since without the benefit of setting it up, you can't actually get that 'back and forth' that lets you get away with not having dialogue tags.
It's why I recommend that the two speaking have strong distinguishable personalities so that the 'back and forth' can actually occur without being confusing.
Also in theory a story told via text messages would fulfill the criteria of being just dialogue... though thinking on it, it does kind of cheat yourself out the initial ddistinguishing challenge since the text app structure you'd have to adapt would make it real easy to tell who is who.

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>>16291066
I think it's easy enough if you point out little things about their personality or maybe give some hints. Something like hair color, eye color, something you observe, etc.

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>>16287886
You absolutely can make a story consisting only of dialogue; I've read one that was like that.
In order to make it work though, the two protagonists of that story were very exaggerated you could say. One was a dour, sour straight man and the other was an emotional, hyperactive genki girl. Physical descriptions took longer and were less frequent than in a regular story because they came from the characters themselves instead of the narration. Like:
>"Huh. Were you in a ponytail mood today?"
>"Yep! I was feeling sporty this morning!"
>"Okay, but did you REALLY have to wear that raggedy old hoodie? Thing's grayer than my grandma's hair."
>"It's to complete the look, duh!"
It's hard to make physical descriptions sound natural when they have to come from the characters' dialogue and not make them sound like robots or paid actors, but it can be done. Similarly, actions follow the same methodology:
>"Yes, yes yes! I passed! I passed!"
>"Did you? What did you pass?"
>"I scraped by in math but I PASSED!"
>"Good for yo- Whoa! Sheesh, warn a man before you launch yourself at him..."
>"Aw, come on! I passed thanks to you and you expect me NOT to give you a hug?"
Of course, this all falls apart when there's more than two characters on the scene, but if that third character also has a defined personality it can still work. Avoid 4+ characters at the same time though.

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>>16294757
I'm not gonna lie that feels like a cop out to the challenge if your just going to use the dialogue to do a normal story but with only dialogue that's been intentionally made more awkward because it's doing the work of the narration as well.
But then again the actual challenge hasn't actually had its 'rules' written out, so I guess it's all just going with gut feeling to see if that approach feels right to how you'd envision doing that challenge.

[Anonymous No.]

So many ideas, so little time...

[Anonymous No.]

>>16297186
Plenty of time while waiting for the thread to die

[Anonymous No.]

Watching Pekora's live and I just came to a realization. Pekora is so goddamn sexy.

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>>16298036
Don-chan and the dress do so much goddamn work at hiding her sexiness normally when she's just in L2D

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>>16297749
Doomposterchama...

[Anonymous No.]

Is the detective watson and inspector anon anon ever coming back?

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>>16298475
Didn't he say he was working on a new story?

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>>16299157
I don't remember him saying that but I'll take your word for it. I just wanted to see the continuation of that story.

[Anonymous No.]

Need more chuuni shit

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>>16301437
This

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>>16275038
That ending sure escalated quickly. I expected Noel to forgive flare and had the typical fell in love after a rape moment, it sure didn't happen kek

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>>16301437
Imagine having a masochistic orgasm from getting beaten up by them.

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>>16298036
This is an objectively correct assessment.

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>>16301437
I wanna write chuuni stuff... Perhaps in due time

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>>16298194
I need to fondle her perfect handful sized boobs

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>>16133528
A fic about the rare, genuine heartfelt moments you have with a kusogaki that nobody would believe if you told them.

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>>16308860
I want to do nothing more than to rail her hard while she begs for my cock peko

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>>16301437
There was actually a prompt a while ago about (You) bullying your chuuni classmates only to find out each one of them was actually telling the truth about their chuuni powers

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>>16311356
So like Netflix's Lucifer?

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>>16312378
Gonna be real, you're probably the only person here who knows if that's accurate

[Anonymous No.]

Live!

[Anonymous No.]

Is that raping Kronii fic out yet? Anyone knows anything about it?

[Anonymous No.]

>>16316878
part one of it has, not into hard BDSM so I can't say much but there's some kinda grating pop culture references in the first like quarter. Otherwise it's well written

[Anonymous No.]

>>16316947
O shit how did I miss that, let me check it out. I was really looking forward to it, it's what I'm into

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>>16310229
>Reconnecting with your childhood friend that still hasn't outgrown their chuuni phase.
>Getting a heartfelt confession where she breaks character and tries to speak with you as equals.
>Learning that their chuuni bullshit, perhaps isn't all bullshit and she does have some broken power after all.

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>>16319377
>she demands that you greet her "properly" every time you run into each other
>you always refuse, partly to not encourage her chuuni bullshit, but mostly just to annoy her
>she becomes so accustomed to you being defiant that the day she actually does get a Yes My Dark out of you, it takes her a while to realize what's happened
>but the smile afterwards is worth the cringe

[Anonymous No.]

>>16133528
getting dommed by pekora

[Anonymous No.]

Ok, need opinions here. I'm torn between the RS4 and the V730 for a track tire, has anybody run either?
I hear the Kumho likes heavy cars and mine is 3700lbs plus my fatass in it, so definitely on the heavy side but I'm more looking for a long lasting tire I can get a whole season out of, which I know the RS4 will do but not a lot of info on the 730 and how it wears just yet. Any thoughts?

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>>16324463
well thats an interest overlap

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>>16324578
How did a guy looking for care tyres end up in a vtuber fan fiction thread?

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>>16325298
Uhh, that's because I'm always here. Due to a series of unfortunate events and high BAC I ended up scrolling to the top when I'm always scrolled down and picked the wrong tab after saving the picture from a different site.

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>>16325643
I see, good luck getting the tyre you need Anon.

[Anonymous No.]

This reminds me of those street racer prompts. It would be cool if someone wrote one.

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>>16325946
I’ve been thinking about it for a while, but even though I played a lot of racing games as a kid I know shit all about cars so I don’t think I’d be able to do a street racing story justice

[Anonymous No.]

>>16325765
Thanks. I was naive to forget nobody at /o/ actually knows anything about cars besides theoretical knowledge or how to fix real old shitboxes, so I don't expect very good info.

>>16325946
I happen to be the guy who wrote the Watame one, but that was a pure shitpost anyway. It was still fun to write.

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>>16326420
You mean watangan midnight? That was a good shitpost, and I wish I had enough knowledge about cars to write like you did in that story

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>>16326368
I've had some ideas as well and most plausible plot I could think of was something like NFS Most Wanted's blacklist. Though I also have the same problem of knowing jackshit about cars but car mechanic simulator is teaching me some stuff.

>>16326420
Oh you wrote that? Even for a shitpost, it was a fun read. It channeled the inner car autism I had when I was younger.

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>>16326793
I was thinking something like NFS carbon’s territory wars where Tokyo city is divided into territories owned by different generations of hololive and (You) are on a quest to conquer all of it.

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>>16327014
I completely forgot about carbon but man that's a real good idea. I guess it would be something like starting with gen 6 and making your way down to gen 0.

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>>16326713
>>16326793
Yeah that's the one.

I think the thing about trying to write a story about racing or just driving in general is that it's one of those very visual-intensive mediums that takes time and effort to really pass the picture onto the reader. So in the end the story would have to rely less on the actual racing and more on everything that goes around it. I can't imagine that a sentence-by-sentence play-by-play of each curve or straightaway would be a very enjoyable read, though of course you would note the big moments to create hype. But they'd have to be pretty well thought out to keep the reader wanting more.

You definitely need some color commentary about at least some intermediate car knowledge. Would be kind of cool in a "main character just wants to have fun but ends up getting wrapped up into more and more serious racing and learning about cars as he goes" setting.

>>16327360
>>16327014
Might be cool. Each gen could have a "Theme" for their cars, all AWD cars, or only different flavor of generations of the same model etc. That would definitely need to borrow from some real car autism to feel genuine though.

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>>16327679
If you could write something like that that would be absolutely sick

[Anonymous No.]

>>16327679
100% agree with >>16327874. It's definitely gonna be one hell of mighty task but I'm sure it would turn sooo good.

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>>16301437
What's /wg/'s opinion on katanas? Too cringe?

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>>16328050
>>16327874
Nah I don't think I have the bandwidth to work on something like that, though it could be fun later down the line if I still have enough juice left in me after things settle down.

>Just checked the JLPT registration date for the mid-year exam
>There won't be one, it'll be in December only again
>I'm sure I'll fail to register just like last year

Pain peko

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>>16328776
>katanas being too cringe
The idea that katanas are cringe is absolutely outrageous.

[Anonymous No.]

>>16328776
Katanas aren't cringe. The katana users, maybe.

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>>16328776
Nothing wrong with the blades themselves. As objects, they're beautiful and representative of skilled craftsmanship (look up their feudal forging process, it's ridiculous), dedication and tradition.

Generally speaking though, I'd never include them outside of an appropriate setting or context. They're comparatively fragile, unwieldy weapons compared to the many variations of European longswords, and so choosing to include them is generally just a sign that the author is a massive fucking weeb.

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>>16330120
Aren’t we all weebs though?

[Anonymous No.]

>>16330790
No.

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>>16330848
You watch anime girls stream Anon, don’t try and pretend you’re not.

[Anonymous No.]

>>16331095
I was going to type a long-winded reply, but then I realized I just can't be assed. Extol the virtues of katanas to your heart's content. Don't forget to mention how fashionable fedoras are while you're at it.

[Anonymous No.]

>>16331223
I’m not that Anon, I just don’t get why you’re trying to deny the fact that you’re a weeb when anime girls streaming is something you watch

[Anonymous No.]

>>16331458
He’s taking extremely high levels of copium, leave the poor guy alone.

[Anonymous No.]

>>16331458
nta but enjoying something of japanese origin is not remotely the same thing as being a weeb. a weeb is someone who idolizes the nation of japan and acts like it's far better than the rest of the world. so no, watching vtubers does not nessisarily make you a weeb.

[Anonymous No.]

>>16332682
This.

[Anonymous No.]

>>16332682
Unfortunately, the term weeaboo and its other forms have lost most of their negative connotations. Blame it on normies.

[Anonymous No.]

So uh... would adding a katana to my story that’s not set in Japan make me a weeb?

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>>16334041
Writing a story about a chuuba already makes you a weeb. Stop caring so much.

[Anonymous No.]

>>16334041
Yeah, but it would still be cool so do it.

[Anonymous No.]

>>16334041
Just do it.

[Anonymous No.]

>>16334041
Only if you mention how many times the blade gets folded.

[Anonymous No.]

>>16334041
Katanas are mori approved

[Anonymous No.]

>>16337072
All the more reason not to use them then

[Anonymous No.]

>>16334041
Yes, but who cares about being a weeb when you make vtuber fanfic.

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>>16335000
Do this but then reveal it to be a shitty mall katana.

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I need your dumbest, most pretentious prompts

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>>16339764
Pretentious?

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AAAAAAHHHH I need inspiration to write a confrontatiom scene between two chuubas but I'm coming up with fucking nothing. AAAAAAHHHH

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>>16340039
Have it end with the larger one trying to eat the smaller one.

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>>16340039
Are they throwing hands or just yelling at each other?

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>>16339764
Gura having a long navel-gazey internal debate with Red Gura over the nature of being a vtuber.
With Red Gura being a stand in for HER

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>>16340444
It's a fight scene between friends where one of them does an obvious betrayal and got smacked sooner than she thought. So now they're gonna yell at each other a bit before getting back to the action

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how does one convey a kansai accent

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>>16341007
In English its probably best to do something close to a southern accent.

It's what I'm doing.

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>>16340811
So what part are you struggling with?

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>>16341007
When I write Roberu I just throw in the occasional "goin'" instead of "going" or something and make his "you"s and "your"s "ya" and "yer" respectively. I don't know if it's over the top but I just want to get the message across that he has an accent.

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>>16341007
>>16341065
Alternative options are using a Brooklyn or a Boston accent... IF you're going for like an accent translation.

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>>16341070
It's more complicated than what I said, i don't wanna describe it in too much detail or I'll just be giving away spoilers to my story. I just wasn't feeling the mood to write, so all the dialouge was coming out forced or uncreative. I'll sleep now and get to it another time.

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>>16341530
Best of luck friend

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>>16133528
Reverse chuuni story where everyone(chuubas) in your class/school acts chuuni with their absurd powers/backgrounds but in reality you're the only one with no powers to the point you can neither see or be affected by their powers so you genuinely think you're surrounded by a bunch of LARPing idiots.

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>>16341965
Good old Imagine Breaker style.

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>>16340811
>>16341530
Well helping without knowing much details is pretty much impossible... but I think giving yourself some time to plan out the scene and what you want to come out of it is probably the best 'high level' advice I can give in this situation since you're struggling with writing it out.
Either that or just saying fuck it and just write it out with the garbage dialogue then rewriting it later after analyzing it afterwards to see what feels wrong to you since sometimes you just need to write it out and see if it really is that wrong..

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>70 posters
We're doing well, huh?

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>>16342467
No, we're dying...s-somehow.

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>>16274519
Then she vomits on you.

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>>16342467
Thread's getting slower and slower. More tourists arriving doesn't necessarily mean a healthier thread. In this case, it means that interest is waning hard. Longer threads mean a lower post frequency, which by extension means less interest in the topic.
This thread finally broke the 3-day barrier and lasted 4 days.

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>>16342759
Ogey

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>>16342759
Doomposterchama is pulling out all the stops...

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>>16342759
You do realize the draw thread is significantly slower than us, right?

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>>16342759
>Wanting a faster thread
Oh god, I almost forgot people like this exist.

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>>16342941
Anon, he’s been at this for months. Just ignore it.

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>>16342874
Wonder what made him do this, recently.

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New thread
>>16343099

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>>16339764
Blood Meridian but replaced the kid with Gura.

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>>16343093
I mean right now it could have just have been the earlyfag trying to get the last few replies to hit the bump limit.

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damn, if any of you writeanons want a chuuba to read, or at least notice, your fanfic, write one about Vox Akuma, and make it gay. ManjisanjiEN fans are hungry for it as well.

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>>16346420
>t. fujo

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>>16346420
All I know about Vox is that he's British and has a cool voice.