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/wg/ - Writing General - Nagi Edition Anonymous Mon Oct 18 01:47:42 2021 No.11596355 [Reply] [Original]

This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://rentry.co/VTCFFCD

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.
Previous thread:>>11462221

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 01:47:57 2021 No.11596362 File: 222 KB, 1590x1360, Nagi 2.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] STORY ANCHOR POST 'EM IF YOU GOT 'EM

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 01:49:01 2021 No.11596406
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Do you have a story like you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 01:56:50 2021 No.11596727 >>11596406 Kson fucking anon would be pretty great

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 02:56:44 2021 No.11599146 >>11596355 Hey isn't that the girl from that one anime! The mom isekai? She became a Vtuber?

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 03:26:46 2021 No.11600329 File: 220 KB, 850x897, PochiUpdate.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11599146 No, but the artist behind Mamako is one

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 04:18:49 2021 No.11602489 >>11596355 >>11596362 Nice to know Nijisanji Korea is getting some love.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 04:20:41 2021 No.11602589 >>11602489 From one guy we have no control over, mind. If you're looking for stories on them, unfortunately, you'll find naught but disappointment in the archive.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 04:21:49 2021 No.11602650 >>11600329 God I want her legs to wrap around my neck and pull me face-first into her snatch.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 04:26:12 2021 No.11602861 >>11602650 Pochi's sexiness is accentuated to the extreme by how seiso she is despite being producing pornography

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 04:44:43 2021 No.11603540 >>11602489 Anon... please don't tag the story anchor without a story...

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 04:58:10 2021 No.11604046

Man, writing a series is fun. I feel like a little girl kicking my feet up in the air in my bed right now (not literally). I just want to keep on writing, but the more I write, the more I get this deep sense of guilt that I'm not doing anything productive. How annoying. Pft, who needs to study for uni anyway?

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:05:19 2021 No.11604253 >>11604046 Don't get burn out, Anon. Series works are really fun, but going too hard too deep too fast can kill you.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:06:59 2021 No.11604296 >>11604253 Or at least make you a premature ejaculator.

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:13:17 2021 No.11604497

>>11596362
man this is a fuckin looong one
props to anon for writing 5.3k words purely in a 4chan post box
and by warned, this is pretty fucked up even compared to some of the stuff in archive. I had trouble reading some parts of it
its... just be warned
im not joking
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQbtMTQBaV0p7dxt3CtmukZVGipcfId9w8UPZyOonJ3_mEFqDbGomt8yK6YskLSZRo6dyjrr5exf_1s/pub

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:14:20 2021 No.11604527 >>11604046 use the energy while you can. But I do advise you to pace yourself so the burnout doesn't hit you too fast.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:14:25 2021 No.11604528 >>11604497 Anon... the story id already archived. Most people already read it last thread.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:16:01 2021 No.11604572 >>11604497 Jesus fucking christ, take your meds you pussy. It's fucking words on a screen, it's not real.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:17:57 2021 No.11604627 >>11604528 oh, didnt see it had been archived already, oh well >>11604572 fuck you too anon

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:19:03 2021 No.11604672 File: 2.54 MB, 1066x1369, 1632269887360.png [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] why are people misusing the story anchor all of the sudden?

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:20:14 2021 No.11604715 >>11602489 >>11604497 Please delete your comments, anons.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:23:24 2021 No.11604794 >>11604497 I think this is a better archiving than the one already on the archive so this should stay.

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:25:25 2021 No.11604852 [DELETED]

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>>11604794
yeah, to uncomplicate things ill unpublish the link since i cant delete the comment

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:26:26 2021 No.11604884 >>11604852 >>11604794 wait shit i missread that

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:35:06 2021 No.11605132 This thread is already a mess...

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:39:23 2021 No.11605237 >>11605132 I apologize anon(s) this is really not my evening but i am gonna go and lay low the next few threads so enjoy folks

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:42:58 2021 No.11605331 >>11605132 Two anons just misused the anchors, what's the big deal? Stop being so dramatic

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:48:35 2021 No.11605454 >>11605331 Ahh, but drama is the lifeblood of the entertainment industry, anon, and by extension - this thread.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:51:10 2021 No.11605521 >>11605454 If we're going to make drama I suggest making it about something other than two anons doing nothing that interesting or harmful.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:54:47 2021 No.11605614 >>11605521 The most interesting stories of war - both historic and mythical - often started over the most insignificant things, though. The Trojan war, for example.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:56:03 2021 No.11605645 >>11605614 or the pekofag saga

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:57:35 2021 No.11605681 >>11605645 Very true! We're telling our own Homeric tribute right now!

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 05:58:35 2021 No.11605710 >>11605614 I hope that there's one crazy writeanon that one day records the events of this thread in epic meter.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 06:05:19 2021 No.11605862 >>11605710 Would need to be someone who's been here since the beginning. I've been here a while but not that long to be honest.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 06:11:08 2021 No.11606000 >>11605862 ArchiveAnon... who would be a better pick than him? It's literally his job after all.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 06:14:48 2021 No.11606083 >>11606000 He's already busy archiving all the stories and writing holofan. I think someone else ought to do it.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 06:17:41 2021 No.11606143 >>11606083 Welp, time to resurrect Homer and Vergil.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 06:19:20 2021 No.11606172 >35 posts >12 Ip jesus fucking christ.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 06:25:08 2021 No.11606325 >>11606172 god forbid regulars talk with one another. off you go, tourist

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 06:26:34 2021 No.11606362 >>11606172 I'm only talking so much because I'm writing and no one is talking about writing itself so keeping the thread alive is the best way to bring in discussion.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 06:27:20 2021 No.11606385 >>11596355 I'm glad this general is still going, I've done some occasional lurking here but I've never really participated.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 06:28:00 2021 No.11606400 >>11606385 I'm glad you're here too, Anon.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 06:34:02 2021 No.11606511 File: 26 KB, 636x358, 1442618206977.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11606385 We're not going anywhere. If the Chocosen author is still around, how is progress on the next chapter? I've got a hankering for some more of your writing

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 07:01:03 2021 No.11607072

>>11596406
Every time a holo has a problem (e.g unable to open a packet of food, suddenly spilling a drink, can't figure out how a certain device works, etc.) an extremely ripped man named Anon barges into their room, fixes their problem (opens the packet for them, cleans up their spill, shows them how the device works, etc.), then runs out before the girl can say anything or report him to the police.
Although he has been helpful and hasn't done any harm, it's worrying that he knows where they all live and always happens to be right outside their house whenever they have a problem. Due to this, all the holos eventually meet up to decide what to do.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 07:04:40 2021 No.11607155 >>11607072 This reads more like a mini story rather than a prompt.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 07:28:33 2021 No.11607604 >>11604572 Tell that to the critics that cried when they read blood meridian kek

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 07:54:05 2021 No.11608047 >>11607604 This second time Blood Meridian's been mentioned here recently. Makes me think. I like the setting of dark, vaguely supernatural Wild West a lot. But aside from Gura I can't imagine who'd fit in something like that

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 07:56:32 2021 No.11608081
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>>11596362
This can't be healthy but here it is. Chapter 3 already. I hope enough things are happening to keep it interesting. Shouldn't be any big errors this time as it was much shorter, I think. I was planning on going through multiple partners but I guess it won't be that simple. Ayame will be the main girl for now, as much as I hate to admit it.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSQZFWluK4_OVbuA3C4ItBp5CQ0C1wJKk1OoT3uLbZV-kUJOak2T-WoNC4b6dHXumqATHdMy_VOWm0f/pub

Tags: Ayame, SFW, post-apocalyptic

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 08:09:51 2021 No.11608347 >>11608047 I just mentioned it because of what anon said about words on the screen not being real and remembered that some critics had trouble reading the book due to its violence. omega as the judge

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 08:40:11 2021 No.11608823
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>>11596362
https://rentry.co/n8wva

Sixth chapter of Anon Finds A Ritual Book! I'll be putting this series on break for a little bit because I wanna write something else for now. There's no smut in here this time around, sorry friends! Instead there's a fight between your girlfriend and someone else because I wanted to try my hand at it and because I'm slightly inebriated.

I was thinking of doing a fic revolving around Gura next since I dropped a short story about it a while back, or maybe homeless Korone.

Criticism is greatly appreciated as always, even if it's stylistic differences!

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 08:59:32 2021 No.11609153

>>11608081
>3 chapters in about a day
Absolutely fucking based.
You have a knack for writing this, and I hope you don't burnout from writing it because this is some good work.
Honestly when you said last thread that Ayame wasn't going to be the main partner, I thought there was no way she was making it past chapter 3 as I thought you were building her up as like the throwaway decoy partner that gets killed early on to establish that the world was brutal or that the shadow monsters were a real legitimate threat which was why you were going out of the way to make her such a bitch so that it was easier to swallow killing her off.
Honestly I do enjoy the interaction Ayame and Anon have so if this series keeps being surviving the post apocalypse with this bitch I would fucking read it... Though at this point you the author are ironically kind of in the same situation as the Anon where you're kind of sunk cost enough in making her live through this that you have to make her death suitably painful, narratively speaking, in order to pay off the investment of chapter time in her meaning that you can't just give her a throwaway death at this point.

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 09:42:08 2021 No.11609995

>>11608081
Damn anon I go to sleep and you've already pumped another two chapters. I'm happy but I hope you don't suffer from burnout.

I know you said that Ayame isn't going to be the main partner but honestly I rather enjoy her character along side her interactions with anon, they're nice to read. Personally I'd like for her to stick around a little longer but like >>11609153, if and when you do decide to kill her off, you got to make it matter.

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 09:52:45 2021 No.11610338

>>11608823
Shit, I don't even watch Baelz that much but you make me want to gosling for her. Another good chapter, although I wasn't too sure about the actions scenes, they were alright but the shift in tone of the story with all of it was a bit jarring. I still enjoy reading every instalment though, can't wait until you're back to writing the next chapter.
This could work as a decent ending though, considering Bae has lost(?) her powers but is still with you and everything seems to be resolved. Up to you though, you might have big plans for the future of this story.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 09:53:50 2021 No.11610371 >>11608823 >There's no smut in here this time around, sorry friends! S-sex..! uoooh...

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 11:14:59 2021 No.11611923 Flip a coin and roll 2D6. First one will be used.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 11:17:30 2021 No.11611961 File: 12 KB, 736x336, 2d6.png [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11611923 no coin handy

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 11:19:07 2021 No.11611998 >>11611961 I flipped a coin for you and got heads.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 11:19:38 2021 No.11612004 >>11611961 shit. i've just realized. next time i should just reset until i get a fail roll much more interesting that way

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 11:20:09 2021 No.11612013 File: 36 KB, 752x375, 1630637456113.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11611961 >>11611998 Alright then

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 11:22:33 2021 No.11612077 >>11608823 I like your series, I'll be looking fowards to when you continue it

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 11:23:54 2021 No.11612109 >>11608823 >since I dropped a short story about it a while back was that the one about the guy trying to kill himself? that was really interesting, at least until gura showed up

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 11:28:53 2021 No.11612223

>>11608823
I think after rereading the series from start to this I get why this series interpretation of Bae is kinda fucking with me.
It's because Bae reads like how someone would try to interpret the concept of 'the council's rat god of chaos' rather than the character of Hakos Baelz. The difference that Bae brings to her own characterization is kind of big enough from how the default interpretation would be that the interpretation you went with clashes enough to how she actually is that it's hitting an uncanniness that means I couldn't really get into it since it wasn't so wildly divergent that I can just say fuck it and go for it but was just close enough that it was fucking with me in enjoying it.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 11:30:15 2021 No.11612257 >>11612223 tl;dr he wrote her how she should have been instead of how she actually is

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 12:11:19 2021 No.11613272 File: 19 KB, 463x453, 3689r.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >Holofantasy part 6 and Holocalypse part 6 are both currently being written

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 12:18:13 2021 No.11613458 >>11613272 Question: are either series going to conclude? Or are they infinite

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 12:23:27 2021 No.11613612 >>11613458 I'd like to have a conclusion at some point. I have a large plot point chapter lined up which could serve as it if I really wanted. I've been thinking about it off and on with nothing concrete

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 12:23:31 2021 No.11613616

>>11613458
I've seen into the future, and I can tell you that no, they never conclude. Archiveanon's death in March of 2026 results in a moderately lengthy gap between Holofantasty chapters, until someone makes a tribute fic in August. After that, Stephen King shows up in the thread, reveals himself to be a longtime follower of the series, and announces he'll be taking up the reigns.

The author of Holocalypse remains dedicated for at least another 30 years, choosing to forego professional and social mobility, romance, and eventually hygiene, all in order to continue his works. I chose not to look into his death because I got bored.

I hope that answers your question.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 12:23:58 2021 No.11613631 >>11613458 ntauthor, but I'm sure they've prepared an ending of sorts, just that their works take longer to make due to their own reasons. Have patience, and enjoy the ride as long as you can.

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 12:28:47 2021 No.11613784

>>11608081
>If not, they’ll bust in and take the shit of our mangled bodies.
Noticed the typo here, 'of' instead of 'off'.
Read all three chapters in one go, really enjoying the story so far. I like setting, it's similar to Alan Wake with the mechanics of light and shadow. Bitch Ayame is nice too, it's a refreshing take that I don't think I've seen in stories. I look forward to her warming up to Anon eventually if you don't kill her off. The writing is competent and doesn't drag, there's enough description of events without feeling too brief or too long.
Something I don't really get though. So there're shadow creatures out there that attack the shadow of people? But they can't interact with physical objects since staying inside a dumpster and a trunk is safe, or is it that they don't actively seek out people to kill? Wouldn't that be very easy for a civilization to survive? Unless I'm missing something here.
Also, did Anon light a fire in the back of an enclosed truck? Don't think that's a good idea at all. And didn't he only pick up Ayame because she can light fire? I thought she was doing that through magic, but if Anon can do it too even without a lighter then I don't really get why he picked her up in the first place, since he doesn't even like her.
Anyway, I don't want you to take these as criticisms, more just things I'm noticing while I read. Most questions I have I assume will be answered soon, these are just some that stood out to me. Doesn't really affect my reading experience though, the details don't bother me. Good work on your story, look forward to more.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 12:46:43 2021 No.11614302 >>11596406 Bullying and physically abusing Luna because of her baby voice.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 12:47:03 2021 No.11614316 >>11613616 >Dark Half but with Anon and his Painting Doppelganger

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 12:57:13 2021 No.11614613

>>11613458
>infinite
I don't know why but this made me crack up. As for an answer, no, Holocalypse is not infinite. I have an ending planned out, and a very rough path on how I'm going to get there. I don't want to say how many more chapters I think it'll take because I don't really know, but it definitely isn't going to keep going for that long.

>>11613616
>choosing to forego professional and social mobility, romance, and eventually hygiene, all in order to continue his works
Are you stalking me? How are you this dead-on? Apart from the hygiene part though, I take a shower every day.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 12:59:16 2021 No.11614674 >>11614613 Please don’t end it too quickly anon...

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 13:05:04 2021 No.11614842 I CANT CONTAIN MYSELF, I NEED MORE FANFIC!!! SO FREAKING GOOD AAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 13:10:33 2021 No.11615029 >>11614842 there's a few of those in the archive, maybe check there

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 13:11:28 2021 No.11615064 >>11614674 Don't worry, I still have a lot left to write for the main story and a shit ton of more light-hearted ideas for the in between chapters. It's not gonna end anytime soon.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 13:15:26 2021 No.11615170 >>11614842 Take the writing pill anon, write about your oshi, write about what (You) want to do to her.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 14:16:57 2021 No.11617142 >>11596406 I want to cum inside

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 14:24:28 2021 No.11617386 >>11617142 I agree.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 14:30:21 2021 No.11617590 >>11617142 Me too bro, me too...

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 14:35:17 2021 No.11617774 >>11617142 Anon died of a brain aneurysm before he could finish his post. May he rest in peace.

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 14:39:21 2021 No.11617923

>>11609153
>>11609995
I actually don't mind keeping Ayame as the partner, I was mostly joking. But I feel like exploring more chuubas for partners can keep things fresh. I suppose if the story goes on for long enough, it can happen. Doesn't even necessarily mean I'd have to kill her off or anything. I know it seems like I'm really in a hurry to change partners but honestly I might end up even going through the entire story without changing once, if it fits narratively.
>>11613784
The shadows are alive, not necessarily as in there are no shadows in the world and just dark creatures roaming around, it's more like those things can only stay and grow in the dark. So when Ayame forgot to use her flashlight to erase her shadow because she was in a hurry, presumably either one of the shadows that was roaming around inside the market went after her and attacked her because she was touching a shadow, or a creature popped up from her shadow itself to attack her. The second case, if given enough time (a couple of seconds, with a sufficiently big shadow) will always happen, that would result in a small, possibly rat sized shadow. They don't go after the shadows of people, they get you when you're in the shadows. They stay inside containers like trashcans and stuff when there's light around because it's dark in there, also under cars, inside buildings, anywhere where it's dark. When the sun goes out, those creatures can get out and roam the streets safely (though there will still be street lamps and the like which they won't walk into).

They don't seek people actively but let's say you're walking around and suddenly your light starts going out. Whenever you step/touch the shadows, the creatures around you start going after you like what was happening to Ayame in chapter 1. Now, I don't know about you but not touching any shadows ever is much harder than it looks, especially if you aren't one of the people who got the unfair advantage of losing their shadows, and remember that the lightening happened suddenly,without warning in a literal flash of light, which I'll go more into later. If you have only one source of light,you're still making a shadow behind you. That shadow also needs to be negated through a second light, which I should've implied more that people with shadows have to always walk around making sure not to slip up and forget about their shadows with a second light source (ex: sun and Ayame's flashlight). It's why Ayame was relaxing on top of a spotlight on chapter 2, so that she could smoke in peace without worrying about her shadow. So long as you have the proper tools for it, say, hanging lanterns or light up shoes, sure, it wouldn't be too hard, but most people don't have that and I do plan on going into that later.

Anon did choose to keep Ayame because of the assumption she had a lighter, and he didn't do it without a lighter inside the truck, in chapter 2 he took it off her as she was lying down in the bench wounded during the "you perv" moment. The fire was a small little dip of alcohol on some rags, but I can or should've mentioned probably that the truck wasn't airtight. The lighter is technically still hers and really, only morality is the thing keeping you from taking it off her and ditching her for good which again, I'll probably explore in more details later. The morality of this anon is a bit complicated, rather than being all "let her die, I don't even like her anyway", now that he's got to known her, it's hard to just let her go like that into what would be certain doom, even if she is a bitch. He doesn't see it as enough reason to let her die.

Anyway, I hope this wall of text doesn't mean I'm a bad writer, having to explain what happened after the fact. I've been focusing on dialogue mostly, which is much quicker to write than descriptions, and that may have left a few things out before I could ponder about them properly. Sometimes I just envision the scenario in my head so vividly that I forget to add the details into the writing for the readers to envision it too.

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 14:57:05 2021 No.11618488

>>11617923
I mean explaining the exact mechanics of the monsters is probably best reserved for like either flawed internal explanations within the work or 'thought of and trying to understand' so that it still remains a mystery, especially since in universe the whole shadow monster thing seems to be something understood by loose experimentation and survival rather than actually fully understood.
Of course having some explanation for them would be good and better than the current barebones understanding we have from the story since without this out of story explanation they would still just be vague shadow monsters that have been explained to have caused the apocalypse and not much else. I think you have an opportunity to try and worldbuild/explain the vague details to make the image clearer to the readers in story as the natural lead up to the next chapter does seem to be leading to a 'lull' where internal monologues, thoughts, exposition and dialogue can take place and thus give an organic place to try and at least internally explain what is going on.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 15:46:02 2021 No.11620277 all these new series and concurrent ones getting updates soon. serieschads how are we feeling?

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 16:10:53 2021 No.11621238 >>11620277 Like I need to get up off my ass and get back to work too.

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 17:39:41 2021 No.11624423

>>11608081
Alright, I've read through the latest two chapters, and I applaud you for the hard work. As for criticisms, I'm still kind of confused over Ayame's characteristics, but perhaps that's more to how the story has yet to develop and my own personal bias. The bigger criticism, is your usage of Indonesian language. It's very clearly google translated, or some other basic translator. I don't want to rail on you because you tried, in fact I admire your attempt, so I'm gonna suggest some changes since I'm a SEAnigger.

“Jelas, tidak ada orang disini!” should be changed to "Selamat, tiada orang disini!" because "jelas" means clear as in "speaking clearly".
“Mereka ada di atap!” should be "Mereka ada di bumbung!". "Atap" is more for slanted rooftops, specifically corrugated zinc sheets, whereas "bumbung" is a catch-all term for roof.
“Mereka gila, mereka pergi ke sarang singa.” This is a bit hard because the term doesn't exactly exist in Indonesian language iirc. The closest would be "Mereka gila. Mereka masuk ke dalam neraka." Which means "They're crazy. They're going into hell."

It's a bit much, and perhaps some other indo-anon could help with further refinement, but I look forward to the next chapters!

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 17:42:26 2021 No.11624495 I’m posting on mobile so I can’t link it but that Moona greentext that was posted last thread was updated.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 18:24:01 2021 No.11625751 >>11620277 Feeling that I need to be working on mine

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 20:11:37 2021 No.11628954 Bump

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 21:29:21 2021 No.11631379

>>11618488
I do dislike expositional dialogue, I think it's cheap and that it doesn't make sense for a character to explain something when the other party already knows, even if it's "remember to do X" "Yeah I know". But I think I can go around it in a way that still gives a clearer picture without being too obnoxious.
>>11624423
First of all, thank you for the help with translating. Using language barriers is actually something I like to do very much in writing because it's rarely ever done, at least here. Your character always somehow manages to learn Japanese within a couple weeks or months for example when in reality it would take years. I google translate, then get the result and google translate it back to make sure it's readable, but I suppose even something like that is still completely broken if you know the language. As for Ayame's characteristics, I'm confused on how you're confused, but if I had to explain it when she first meets someone or wants to manipulate someone, she will put on this cutesy fake act to get what she wants. From time to time her facade slips through, but anon in this story called her out entirely, so she is just a manipulative bitch, which sometimes goes back to her cutesy act when she wants something. That doesn't mean it isn't genuine when says something like "Sorry" or "Thanks", I'm just trying to not make her personality just one thing. Hopefully it doesn't end up being just a tsundere, but there's a lyrics of a song that I like that goes " Even bad girls have tender hearts, even bad girls can fall apart". I think it's important to twll that the characters are human and won't always just be one archetype, but rather a mess of ideologies. This also translates into anon's morality compass, which was already confusing to someone else here.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:24:38 2021 No.11633222 File: 65 KB, 1080x689, 1632161835804.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11596406 MiGo

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:37:33 2021 No.11633717 File: 753 KB, 850x1200, WatameSqueeze.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11596406 Romancing Watame

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:40:56 2021 No.11633861 File: 159 KB, 2000x1430, 2d8071974e60adbba18a53e7ae3b51bc.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11596406 Raping Watame

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:42:41 2021 No.11633928 >>11633861 >>11633717 Why must we fight, gentlemen? Surely there is some sort of compromise that can be reached.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:43:42 2021 No.11633962 >>11633928 Raping Watame until she develops stockholm and ends up loving you?

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:44:17 2021 No.11633989 File: 1.10 MB, 2700x3819, 91052239_p0 (2).jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11633928 And that compromise is... >>11596406 Ignoring Watame and watching insects lay eggs in Mio's dusty womb!

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:47:40 2021 No.11634091 anon no it's a blue board anooooooooooon

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:49:08 2021 No.11634129 >>11633989 You already got your dog worms, buganon, don't get greedy.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:49:13 2021 No.11634132 >>11634091 It’s for the better

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:50:01 2021 No.11634162 >>11634129 That wasn't me, that was pekofaggot. Also, that was like a month ago... also also, that was taken down!

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:55:00 2021 No.11634336 Look, all I'm saying is that having your womb filled with eggs is just... basically an advanced creampie.

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 22:55:22 2021 No.11634343

>>11617923
I feel like I understand more of what you're trying to do now. Like the other Anon said, the exact mechanics of the shadow creatures don't matter that much, like in most horror stories the audience doesn't have to understand the biology of the monster. But I think it'll be smarter to give the audience a clear understanding of what the characters should do or avoid doing to survive. Because at first I thought they can't leave any shadows, but that just seems really impossible to achieve. So I'm assuming some degree of shadow is fine? Otherwise normal people like Ayame will always need at least two light sources of the exact same intensity to keep themselves safe at all times if the creatures can just appear from shadows, since if one light is weaker, the stronger light will cast a very faint shadow. Also, how can the streetlights still be up in a world where abandoned cars litter the streets? You'd think there be no power plants still up providing electricity.
Maybe I wasn't paying enough attention, but do these creatures stay in the shadow casted by regular objects or do they create pits of shadow like in Alan Wake? Or are they like Black Sabbath from Jojo part 4?
Anyway, it doesn't really matter how exactly these creatures work. I just think you should provide more worldbuilding like the other Anon said for the audience to properly understand the stakes and the character' motivations. This is a pretty high-concept story, so it comes with the difficulty of more exposition. Not saying that bad, just harder to write in my opinion. Other stories around the same theme like Holocalypse and girlboss Watson are more simple in their setting. One is just post WW3 and the other is SCP and magic in real life, and girlboss Watson's setting doesn't even affect the characters that much beyond being an extra element in their lives. Holofantasy also needed lots of exposition, but its Anon is an outsider to the monster world so he gets told everything, like a standard isekai. There's also a postscript explaining even more of the world.
Overall, I don't even know what I'm saying at this point. But your story is good has me very interested, otherwise I wouldn't have thought about it this much. I just think some more details on how the world functions scattered over the future chapters will really help me be on the same page as you when I read each scene.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 23:01:30 2021 No.11634551 >>11633989 What's the appeal of insects? What makes that erotic for you?

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 23:05:48 2021 No.11634708 >>11634551 Sometimes, very rarely, I'm an insect enjoyer. It's something about the juxtaposition between something I'm terrified of alongside a cute girl getting fucked. However, I also acknowledge it's giga /d/egen shit.

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 23:09:29 2021 No.11634823

>>11634551
It's not insects specifically - that's just the superficial aspect of it. What is erotic about the whole thing is letting something unknowable and DANGEROUS take advantage of you purely because you're really fucking horny and you know it'll feel really good.

As an analogy, think of the girl willingly walking into the tentacle pit.

Anonymous Mon Oct 18 23:10:41 2021 No.11634865

>>11634551
NTA, but on a surface level reading of the common fetish scenario it's usually some combination of the allure of the bestiality taboo, the inherent disgusting nature of the bugs, and the lack of hope for the future due to becoming a bug nest... Also I think some people find the ovipositor thing hot, so add that to the list along with the egg birthing/multiple births thing.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 23:12:09 2021 No.11634921 >>11634865 >ovipositor thing hot This

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 23:22:10 2021 No.11635308 File: 2.23 MB, 1000x1421, 1473988715930.png [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] God, I wish I was an anime girl. I'd be barely out of the womb before I walked into the nearest forest and got myself turned into a seedbed.

>>	Anonymous Mon Oct 18 23:56:52 2021 No.11636556 >>11634823 i understand this line of thinking, it sounds really hot i don't think it could ever make bugsex anything but nasty to me though

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:15:09 2021 No.11637421
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>>11596406
Watame seducing you to fuck some babies into her but you keep resisting, not wanting to 'taint her purity'. Watame will stop at nothing until you give her a sheep baby and be her husband.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:26:39 2021 No.11638058 >>11634823 Okay but why insects then? If the insects are just superficial, do you also have a thing for tentacles/beasts/monsters or is it purely in the specific feeling you get imagining it with giant insects?

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:29:29 2021 No.11638214 >>11638058 >tentacles/beasts/monsters Yes. >why insects? Because that's what I had an image for.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:31:28 2021 No.11638321 >>11638214 Oh so you're into being fucked by anything?

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:34:43 2021 No.11638482

>>11638321
Well, pretty much, as long as it falls into the category of "unknowable and dangerous", I suppose. Understanding breeds familiarity which takes away from the dangerous element.
Humans, for example, are right out, because they're necessarily relatable.

I like the idea of being pumped full of eggs, though. The feeling of your innards being stretched out to accompany new life, the sensation of fullness, watching an egg descend into your body before disappearing from sight and being replaced by the sensation of it travelling into you...

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>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:37:45 2021 No.11638651 this is the weird degenerate arc of /wg/

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:39:37 2021 No.11638774 Man the duality in this thread sure is something. We have vanilla shit like the recent Watame prompt and extreme fetish shit like insects.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:40:41 2021 No.11638841 >>11638565 It ain't that weird. Like I said - it's like a hardcore creampie....yeah.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:42:30 2021 No.11638954 >>11638482 Doesn't the 'unknowable and dangerous' scare you though? Or is your lust that strong? I know for sure that it scares me.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:44:13 2021 No.11639045 >>11638954 I think it's the same interest that fuels rape fantasies. It's hot in your head and scary in real life. The assailant in your mind will never hurt you...unless you want it to.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:49:34 2021 No.11639349 >>11639045 Ok I think I get it now, thanks for explaining. I always find people explaining their more out-there fetishes mighty intriguing.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:53:08 2021 No.11639547 File: 17 KB, 500x336, 1456419309201.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11639349 No problem.

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 00:57:45 2021 No.11639807 [DELETED]

>>11634921
Say, you wouldn't happen to have the extremely rare version of the animation of two arachnes filling a girl with eggs from both ends with sound, would you? I found it once and never again. I managed to find the Russian woman teaching a bunch of girls how to suck cock with a dildo and the huge cum splatter on a stranger girl's hair in public, but not this one.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 01:21:37 2021 No.11641134 >>11638482 Based. I am of the similar mindset of where it doesn't matter what species the orifice belongs to, if that's where its babies come from, I will stick my dick in it. Maybe our nightmarish hybrid spawn can be friends, xenochama.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 01:22:58 2021 No.11641219 >>11641134 Does it extend to prancing about in cartoonish fur suits?

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 01:30:29 2021 No.11641590

>>11631379
Anon, i think at this point perhaps a little more of "show, don't tell" would help. I genuinely understand you trying to explain the motives of your characters and such, but as mentioned, my confusion of the character(s) is not necessarily a bad thing, just something i am curious of to find out more of as the story develops. There is no need for you to go in depth in explaining the reasons/mechanics of your story outside of the actual story. Let your story do the talking. I know it's hard to balance long-winded exposition with impactful writing, but it's just something you learn as you write. Lastly, rounding back to character personalities, I can see you're trying to go for characters with multi-faceted personalities and depth of character, which is a good thing, but it's a very narrow tightrope to get that character across as well written. To put it shortly, good characters are those that can show their personality traits in a way that makes sense to the reader. It's just something that takes time and a fair number of chapters to get across. You're doing alright so far, it just needs a little more refining(which applies to all of us). I'm in no way a professional author or anything, this is just things I keep in mind while writing. All the best, writeanon.

>>	abusefag !!cb7TwN4DdJ1 Tue Oct 19 01:31:58 2021 No.11641680 Evening mates. I'm a new writefag and was hoping I could spin you a yarn. I'm from the abuse thread but I'm not going to be doing any abuse fics, at least not for a while. In the meantime, care for me to spin you all a yarn?

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 01:33:42 2021 No.11641783 >>11641680 feel free to write whatever you please. you'll always have an audience here for thoughts you want to put to paper with that being said, please lose the trip; all of the authors here are anonymous and we prefer it that way

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 01:34:58 2021 No.11641853 >>11641783 Oh really? Huh, that's most unusual. I'll lose it then. Thanks for letting me know. Will have part one of the story here in a moment.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 01:37:22 2021 No.11641988 >>11641853 cheers, and looking forward to it

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 01:42:47 2021 No.11642286 >>11638651 Ironically this is following a "Return to being an abuse thread' spin off arc on another thread.

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 01:54:34 2021 No.11642899

>>11641590
I'll see what I can do. I suppose it got a little messy when it came to Ayame's constant personality switching and anon's thoughts on her. I'm assuming I need to make her intentions clearer and shine some light on anon's morality compass, as well as explaining how the shadows work without going too much into it to keep the mystery. Shouldn't be... too hard. I think.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 01:57:00 2021 No.11643029 >>11642286 >there needs to be a whole separate thread for abuse because this thread produces so little nowadays Abuse chads, what are we doing?

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:00:10 2021 No.11643180 >>11643029 Sorry, working on Nene moral corruption, forgive me.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:03:36 2021 No.11643347 >>11643029 It's the fault of the fluff fags who refuse to read anything that strays outside their little comfort bubble.

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:12:39 2021 No.11643833

>>11641680
Go ahead dude, always great to have new writers here. Somebody actually compiled your work in a google doc last thread, which was great by the way, in case you didn't know
Also, since you're new here, we usually write our works in a published google doc. If you're gonna continue writing in greentext form, you should compile them in one after you finish writing so AA could archive them properly and so we have a place to reply to to give our thoughts on your work

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:31:14 2021 No.11644755

>>11641680
Despite what >>11643833 says this thread is also still slow enough that you can generally still publish straight to the thread via just posting if you don't want to go through the hassle of going through google docs publishing (which admittedly isn't actually that hard to do it's just that you just want to keep making greentexts written straight to thread, you still can write that way if you want to.)

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:34:58 2021 No.11644943

I made a separate thread about this which I should have just put here :
I'm working on a story/short novel about Holomyth with Ame as the protag. It'll be an adventure mystery and it'll take some inspiration from
>lore
but I'm not planning on trying to adhere to anything that could be considered canon.
I'm just asking here if there is any interest in something like this or if anyone has subplot ideas they want me to do?

I'm not a terribly great writer. It's fun to me but I really only make the story as I'm writing so it can be messy. I'm going to do this story properly though with a lot of planning and development. I got a cool idea in my head for the first part of the story and I want to flesh it out and expand on it.

The story is going to take itself kinda seriously with maybe some jokes/romance but not much. I don't know how gay that sounds to you guys but it's something I would read.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:44:30 2021 No.11645421 >>11604497 What the fuck was that How could anyone write that shit and be proud of it enough to share it

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:48:12 2021 No.11645585 File: 46 KB, 500x349, 1443342712043.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11645421 you're either a colossal retard or a troll and neither are worthy of any attention

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:51:49 2021 No.11645818 >>11645421 As the person who complied (not wrote it), it is genuinely good writing. It pulls at your emotional strings in a really uncomfortable way and keeps you reading.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:53:56 2021 No.11645962 >>11645818 It’s just a schizo trying to scare off a new writer, ignore it. Also were you the one that did the compilation in the archive or at the top of the thread.

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:54:30 2021 No.11645989

>>11644943
Honestly, assuming you're someone that watches streams and 'gets' their overall characterization, you're kind of halfway there in regards to getting it right.
I assume with your spacing you're not a regular and drifted in here to try and find a writing community for chuuba fic, so honestly just write and post your fic; I don't know about the rest of the thread but generally I try to read and comment on everything as long as the concept of it isn't too out there. For the most part the thread is accepting of new writers and fics.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:55:26 2021 No.11646044 >>11604497 >heating up a screwdriver with a lighter to sear flesh that would take forever, if it would even work at all stopped reading there

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:57:07 2021 No.11646138 >>11646044 that IS true, but you should try to look past it at the author's intent and carry on

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 02:58:34 2021 No.11646215 >>11645962 >were you the one that did the compilation in the archive or at the top of the thread. Since I’m not sure what you’re talking about I’m gonna go ahead and say no

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:00:15 2021 No.11646305
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Sorry for the wait. Here's chapter 1. I'm a bit tired so please be gentle.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vS2qzLF4I8kaP4t5u2IsMUAcMWGkTXOCeN9s_eiXUj20LbkRDh2VuO-r1EDtUyfO9OZkN6D7qQYUHIb/pub

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:01:36 2021 No.11646370

>>11645989
I've written a story in the archive already ("Gura SFW romance" if you care to look) and I try to lurk sometimes. Sorry if the spacing is reddit or whatever I just know people don't like reading big blocks of text and I'm looking for some input because I want to write a story that people actually want to read and would enjoy.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:02:35 2021 No.11646410 >>11646215 I believe they mean the one that got posted earlier in thread and the one I believe archive anon compiled themselves when the greentexts got linked last thread.

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:02:38 2021 No.11646413

>>11643833
Thanks a lot. I may or may not continue that Suisei story. Still not sure. But I will put it in a google doc and web publish.

>>11646305
Also do tell me if you'd rather me do greentext. I'm probably better at greentext than I am traditional writing.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:05:18 2021 No.11646538 >>11646410 Oh, in that case, i did the one linked at the top of the thread.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:06:38 2021 No.11646596 >>11643833 https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTtEm3gcVnCbzdQxEOLlAvgIO_hEEXfK1w0FIljjxNrF8AsaIM1NShNMOiEOj7PEm1w7ACoiC-lJjag/pub Here's the Sui-chan story, as requested.

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:06:38 2021 No.11646595

>>11646305
Link it to the story anchor at the top of the thread like so:>>11596362
That way it'll get archived at the end of the thread.

This sort of reminds of the VN Harmonia.

>>11646413
Personally I prefer traditional writing. It is more difficult, and requires more skill than green text, but you're able to do more with the format than greentext.

With that being said, this is a hobby thread, so don't let anyone tell you what or how to write, or even how frequently; if you put other's desires above your own, you will burn out quickly.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:12:27 2021 No.11646898 >>11641219 No it does not. I don't hate the concept of furries because I'm a 90s kid and that was everywhere, but fursuits look incredibly fucking retarded.

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:16:33 2021 No.11647097

>>11646305
There's a couple typos here and there, some misplaced punctuation; the setting could do with a little more expansion, as there wasn't much for me to build a mental image of your universe with. I really liked the description of the dilapidated bridge at the beginning and was hoping this would be written post-modernity, that is, after the decline or fall of civilization as we know it. I love concrete jungles reclaimed by nature.

Your biggest strength here is dialogue, in my opinion. Dialogue is something people usually struggle with but so far yours has been descriptive yet snappy, and fits the high-science profile you've got going on.

Looking forward to seeing more, if you choose to continue it.

>>11646898
Then I think we'll get along perfectly, brother.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:18:17 2021 No.11647181 >>11647097 >high-science profile Hard-science profile, I should say, as opposed to soft-science. I got confused with high and low fantasy for a sec.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:19:05 2021 No.11647214 >>11646898 So your fetish is entirely in the 'Domination' by an unknown and barely understood being that doesn't care for you and somehow sees you sexually?

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:25:53 2021 No.11647561

>>11647214
That's the wrong person, chief, but to elaborate further on your question; yes, that's the short of it. Beasts, insects, monsters of any kind without critical thinking skills, because if something has a thought process, then it can be understood and therefore reasoned with or worked around.
As for "somehow sees you sexually", yes and no; rather, it cares nothing for you beyond seeing you as a potential nursery for its young.
So this is a submissive fantasy, yes.

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:26:09 2021 No.11647583

>>11646305
>>11596362
The link to the Moona robot story.

>>11646595
I'll try to do traditional writing then, I think I'm just nervous. I know it's just 4chan and all but it's been years since I wrote anything and I want to make sure it's good stuff.

>>11647097
Yeah. It's getting close to bedtime for me but I didn't want to just not put something out. I'll be a bit more meticulous with it next time when my creativity is at it's peak again. Sorry for the laziness on my part.

Thanks so much for the compliment. I'm excited to continue this and I hope I get better as time goes along. I'll be sure to be more descriptive.

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 03:27:25 2021 No.11647650

>>11646305
Honestly it's an interesting start, weird that you'd choose Moona for this but eh, an author's privilege is getting to make fanfics for their oshi so I can't really give you any shit for that. I'll keep reading if you post any new chapters for this since it does seem like an interesting concept for a story.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 04:30:07 2021 No.11650169 >>11647583 I believe in you. Thanks for coming to join us, Anon.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 05:38:43 2021 No.11652802 File: 661 KB, 2000x1603, 1634604788578.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] Get motivated!

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 06:09:29 2021 No.11653986 >>11652802 Hololive fighting game

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 06:25:29 2021 No.11654451

>>11606511
I'd been playing out the chapter in my head multiple times, but I've finally gotten around to putting it into words again. I was a bit doubtful about its progress, but it's coming along nicely again. I know I said two or three days last time, so I won't put a timer again. It should be done soon this time though, really.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 06:28:24 2021 No.11654521 >>11654451 I don't mean to put pressure on you. Just happy to know it's still being written. Godspeed.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 06:34:34 2021 No.11654675 >>11654521 KKnona 7 godspeed, my man.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 06:45:37 2021 No.11654953 >>11652802 I'm already motivated and writing. Aren't I supposed to STAY motivated? Honestly, you fucked it up. I don't feel like writing anymore.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 07:08:49 2021 No.11655480 File: 2.25 MB, 1300x2560, olliewife.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11596406 Ollie mistakes (You) for some new popular anituber. You use her sudden adoration to convince her to have sex with you.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 07:15:01 2021 No.11655623 File: 576 KB, 1153x823, 1416718562201.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11655480 >Ollie

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 07:17:40 2021 No.11655692 >>11655623 I want to bring warmth back to Ollie's body by shooting my cum in her womb.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 07:25:09 2021 No.11655866 File: 421 KB, 1556x1870, E88Sb49X0AA_JKp.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11655692 Based >>11655623 Unbased

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 07:26:11 2021 No.11655886 >>11655480 Imagine all the maggots crawling through your pp... Disgusting.

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 07:28:42 2021 No.11655939

>>11655480
you don't even need to pretend to be some semi-popular internet personality. just flex your superior financial prowess. in fact go even further, make her crave your attention and affection, only for you deprave her of it just so you can remind her that zombies aren't supposed to feel anything.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 07:30:13 2021 No.11655970 >>11655480 This is a funny prompt so I might write this even though I can't write smut well

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 07:59:18 2021 No.11656486
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>>11596362
A short inbetween chapter for some more context into the story. Not much on the shadows yet but I'll get there eventually. I think I'm getting a better grasp on the characters by now and so hopefully they can be better understood in chapters to come.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTycuHw8qCG4PYKKdYkEMrMjOeR1yNVyOR67BkUQk4tVctZwcSa56uCHZjopC_cfdJ1iD_abkap1xZg/pub

Tags: Ayame, SFW, post-apocalyptic

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 08:04:03 2021 No.11656551 >>11656486 >filename i find the chapter-by-chapter progression towards a softer attitude towards whoreyame quite foreboding

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 08:10:13 2021 No.11656652 >>11656551 >repetitive usage of 'towards' in a single short sentence Just stop breathing now.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 08:18:14 2021 No.11656804 >>11656551 work on your english skills, friendo

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 08:22:59 2021 No.11656892 File: 220 KB, 400x410, 1429117807600.png [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11656652 >>11656804

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 08:34:03 2021 No.11657079

>>11656486
I think you should really start proofreading your chapters. It’s not a big deal but in all of your chapters there’s at least a couple of errors, whether grammatical or just regular mistakes.
An example from a previous one could be the fact that you said it was 10PM, even when the sun was out and it reached noon a short while afterwards. One from this chapter could be “catched” used instead of “caught”, or the sentence “you decided to keep track of the days now that you had a device to do it for you.”. Shouldn’t he stop bothering counting days now that he has something doing it for him? It’s only small things like these, but I think a quick once-over once you finish writing can’t hurt.

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 09:20:17 2021 No.11657716

>>11656486
Honestly the first thought that came after reading this chapter was, how the hell is everything working, tech wise, I get the maps thing is probably because of local map cache/downloaded but how the heck does everything still have power? Unless this is deliberate foreshadowing that the real monsters are them... or foreshadowing for something else
Anyway these chapters are great, the only thing that's a minor criticism for this is the fact that as a serialized work it's still confusing what the setting exactly is but I'm fine finding out the setting details as they become relevant. You're making a very compelling work to read through and the fact that you're releasing updates so fast is quite admirable. Don't burn yourself out making this anon.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 09:25:14 2021 No.11657782 I’m thirsty for vanilla yuri smut

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 09:30:34 2021 No.11657854 File: 463 KB, 455x600, 1633951043743.png [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11657782 >yuri

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 09:33:48 2021 No.11657911 >>11657782 Check the archive

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 09:33:54 2021 No.11657912 >>11657782 This but without the Yuri part

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 09:38:33 2021 No.11657989

>>11657782
Unironically check ao3, last I checked it was pretty much 80% of the stuff labelled under "Virtual Streamer Animated Characters" is yuri, so you'll probably be better served there... unless you're like a femanon asking for 2nd person yuri with a vtuber in which case I'm not sure that exists.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 09:46:03 2021 No.11658112 >>11657989 Last I checked in ao3 90% of all holofics are HoloEN and its the same boring takamori fics

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 09:51:07 2021 No.11658196 >>11658112 Now I'm wondering if the japs have a holo fanfic scene

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 09:53:12 2021 No.11658245 >>11658196 of course they do there's shitloads on pixiv

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 09:57:15 2021 No.11658339 >>11596406 A fic about helping an awkward, embarrassed Shien through his first sexual encounter with him as the bottom. Boss is cute and retarded and so I need to fuck him.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 09:58:03 2021 No.11658361 >>11658339 one for the pekofaggot

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 10:03:57 2021 No.11658466

>>11658112
Yeah gonna be honest here there isn't anywhere else that has vtuber fanfics that could have the yuri you want.
At this point you're going to have to write it yourself if you want to see more of that... maybe see if /infinity/ has the yuri you want? Haven't actually checked that place for a while and I did see that place having a yuri tag so you might find what you want there.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 10:09:08 2021 No.11658561 >>11658466 >tfw more scat fics than non-takamori yuri fics

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 10:15:41 2021 No.11658706 File: 687 KB, 998x1390, 1631591119365.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11658339 nah i'd rather have one where you have a disney date with Astel and end up with countless hickeys as he power bottoms you.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 10:22:17 2021 No.11658857 >>11658706 also based cowgirl Miyabi NOW

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 10:40:12 2021 No.11659179

You know...
I want to make something cursed. I want to make a fanfiction involving Omegaα. My writing experience is very, very lacking though. I've done two years of online erotic roleplay and that's about it. I did study the Elements Of Style, though, and I have read a couple of books in interest of improving my prose, but I've never really written a short story before.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 10:42:24 2021 No.11659216 >>11659179 >I want to make something cursed Doubt you could top the scat fics

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 10:44:54 2021 No.11659261 >>11659179 Can’t say I’d be very interested in reading about omega, but I nearly failed high school english and pretty much never wrote stories before coming here so I say go for it

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 10:47:20 2021 No.11659302 >>11646596 Ok that pretty hot, you gonna continue this?

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 10:49:06 2021 No.11659323 >>11646596 >>11596362

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 10:58:03 2021 No.11659463

>>11659179
I mean the kronii thread has made a lot of fucking Omega fanfics (relatively speaking) so making a fic about fucking Omega isn't actually going to be that cursed... but then again the concept from what I've seen is pretty much domination loss trap yaoi with Omega being the bottom so there is a bit of room to make something cursed. Doubt you can do anything too cursed involving 'em but I'm willing to be suprised.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 12:19:16 2021 No.11661384 >>11658245 Anything good from their fanfic scene or is it just the same kind of stuff as on our end?

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 12:20:54 2021 No.11661449 >>11661384 NTA but I can't tell ya, I can't read Moonrunes yet

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 12:23:58 2021 No.11661595 >>11661384 can't decipher elder text yet. the fics are there, though

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 13:14:03 2021 No.11664748 >>11661384 Can't say. The alien hieroglyphs continue to elude me for now.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 13:15:33 2021 No.11664826 >>11657782 This but without the vanilla yuri smut I'm just plain thirsty

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 13:17:22 2021 No.11664933 File: 145 KB, 1024x678, istockphoto-657556900-1024x1024.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11664826 Got your back bro

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 13:22:23 2021 No.11665228 >>11664933 Thanks anon, I'm no longer thirsty

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 13:28:12 2021 No.11665514 >>11652802 motivation to write has been dwindling lately but i've been trying to power through by writing a few hundred words or finishing a segment a day.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 15:21:54 2021 No.11669687 Bump.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 15:32:51 2021 No.11670057 >>11658112 Okay have to ask. Given that you seem to be knowledgeable about yuri. Are the Takamori fics there actually decent or is are they all hampered by being well, Takamori?

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 16:40:38 2021 No.11672327

>>11657079
Unfortunately, I am quite the ESL. You'd probably go mad from the first draft cause it had a lot more mistakes. I actually did proofread this and all the other shorter ones, only the 4k words 2nd chapter I didn't. I'll check out that 10PM cause I must've missed it and it is quite big and should never have happened, but that one sentence I do have an explanation. I redid it a couple of times and it ended up messy. At first, the idea was that you somehow didn't know how many days it had been, but I changed that once I realized that the day of the incident was one you could never forget. So that line was kind of originally like "you were going to count how many days it had been since the incident, the Ipad is here with the current date to help you. Look for the last messages and photos in the Ipad to see when it happened" but as I said it didn't make sense at all for you to not know. I should probably scrape sentenced from now instead of redoing them because it ends up messy.
>>11657716
I was supposed to go into it this half chapter but actually erased it because it didn't make too much sense to talk or think about it in the moment. I'll refrain from explaining lore outside of my works from now on but it will be addressed.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 18:33:06 2021 No.11676178 File: 303 KB, 1937x1000, SubaruWiggle.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] Dance to keep the thread alive!

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 19:11:33 2021 No.11677494 >>11676178 Friendzoning Subaru because she doesn't appeal to any of your fetishes!

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 19:13:13 2021 No.11677557 >>11677494 How gay do you need to be to look at that image and not have an insatiable urge to breed the duck?

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 19:21:35 2021 No.11677844 >>11677494 Completely unrealistic. Not a man alive can resist the childhood friend tomboy.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 19:33:11 2021 No.11678229 File: 1.32 MB, 1600x2262, hololive botan 126.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11677557 Like Shuba herself, I like moms. Subaru is most assuredly NOT milf-coded. >>11677844 I prefer Western tomboys.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 20:16:55 2021 No.11680148 >tfw no overly friendly ranch girl chuuba why am i alive

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 20:22:03 2021 No.11680398 File: 239 KB, 850x1569, GuraCA.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11680148 Gura is like 80% there.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 20:23:59 2021 No.11680471 >>11680398 She would be perfect if she wasn’t a whorish coal burner

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 20:49:55 2021 No.11681477 File: 172 KB, 1200x814, GuraFish.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11680471 Don't be mean to the shark

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 21:50:19 2021 No.11684901 Bump

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 22:01:40 2021 No.11685560 >>11680398 Gura holding Ugandan flag VI VON :Zulul: :handshake: :Ayaya:

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 22:01:54 2021 No.11685574 >>11681477 I'm going to bully the shark with my cock while grabbing her ass.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 22:54:58 2021 No.11688672 >>11596406 Cucking Flare by fucking Noel.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 22:59:13 2021 No.11688870 >>11596406 Cucking Noel by fucking Flare

Anonymous Tue Oct 19 23:26:39 2021 No.11690167

Has anyone here ever tried creative writing under a time limit, something like an hour? Not even for this necessarily. I just realised that's exactly what I had to do in school and how shit everything turned out if I had to write something on the spot under time. Of course, they expected everyone to prepare a whole bunch of stories they could just churn out in the exams, but then they also give you prompt or something you have to base the story off of. And if your prepared stories didn't fit? Then either you shit the bed with something on the spot, or you try to shoehorn your drafts into whatever they want as much as possible.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 23:29:48 2021 No.11690291 >>11690167 Yeah. It never works out well and it feels like soulless shit churning for the sake of making a teacher fuck off.

>>	Anonymous Tue Oct 19 23:49:02 2021 No.11691162 >>11690167 I only remember doing this in elementary school but it was dumb nonetheless

>>	Lanomymous Tue Oct 19 23:57:19 2021 No.11691556 >>11678229 imagine milf subaru...

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 00:09:01 2021 No.11692108 >>11690167 I mean I've tried that nanowrimo challenge thing once which is 50k words under a month but I just did not have discipline to cheat myself out of it by just shitting out meaningless garbage. I'm sure it works for some people but not for me.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 00:24:17 2021 No.11692820

>>11692108
Some people really are built different. I even tried to do that MAL light novel thing, and I just could not even put out 50,000 words I was proud of in two months. I consider participating in this thread to be the most productive I've been in years, but it's still not enough.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 00:33:25 2021 No.11693295

>>11690167
Very rarely will time constraints improve your writing. If you take the extra time to properly think about your material & structure, go back and edit it, proofread, etc. the quality of your story will simply increase. I've tried hitting the 50k for the nanowrimo as >>11692108 mentioned and it was a truly miserable experience.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 00:37:19 2021 No.11693510 >>11693295 this friendly reminder that vergil spent a little over a decade writing the aeneid so dont worry about taking a long time to write fics

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 00:38:19 2021 No.11693566

>>11693295
Rather than think of it as a blanket term like "improve your writing", think of it as improving certain aspects of your cognition which are used when writing.
For example: writing under time constraints may not "improve your writing", but it will improve your ability to recall words, phrases and other information, which is a skill used when writing.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 00:43:33 2021 No.11693804

>>11693566
>but it will improve your ability to recall words, phrases and other information, which is a skill used when writing.

Will it? I feel as if I can conjure up interesting words/phrases to use if I take the time and mull things over as opposed to being under any sort of pressure. Different strokes, I guess.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 00:47:47 2021 No.11693984

>>11693804
That's true. I guess it'd be more accurate to say that it'll improve your ability to recall them 'quickly' - which is an extremely useful skill to have when speaking.
But it's also probably true that simply speaking more would improve your ability faster, although daunting

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 00:48:30 2021 No.11694002
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here's chapter two of the Moona Robot story:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vS2qzLF4I8kaP4t5u2IsMUAcMWGkTXOCeN9s_eiXUj20LbkRDh2VuO-r1EDtUyfO9OZkN6D7qQYUHIb/pub

Please forgive me for typos or grammatical errors. I'm fucking shit at editing. Cleaned it up as best I was able.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 00:48:53 2021 No.11694014 For endings, generally how do you enjoy the concept of an ending that isn't necessarily entirely concrete but is more open ended and insinuates that things go on, even if they aren't recorded?

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 00:50:13 2021 No.11694060 >>11694002 >>11596362

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 00:50:58 2021 No.11694098 >>11694014 That sounds a bit like a 'sequel hook' ending. It doesn't sound like it provides definite closure.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 01:35:26 2021 No.11696608

>>11694014
I mean, you have endings where it all doesn't get resolved like Happy Sugar Life and Great Teacher Onikuza that still are a satisfying conclusion. You could alternatively have the "happily ever after" endings that still leave some questions that could be answered like Shrek and Anohana which both got sequels. Either way it's valid. Not sure what you're asking anyway.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 01:37:40 2021 No.11696732

>>11694002
Anon, I know you're new here but the common practice for new chapters is to have them in another published file.
It's good and I do like reading it... it just feels weird that it's Moona because it doesn't feel like Moona, not even in like a conceptual/lore way that some of the fics here do but in the 'why is it Moona?" kind of way.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 01:39:19 2021 No.11696832

>>11696732
>Anon, I know you're new here but the common practice for new chapters is to have them in another published file.
Does it matter? If anything, this'd make it much easier archive series works. Why does every chapter need to be published separately?
I say good on him.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 01:40:27 2021 No.11696903 >>11696608 Don't worry about it. It's stupid, anyway.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 01:40:47 2021 No.11696921

>>11694014
I'm pretty stupid when it comes to interpreting open endings, but I do like them more and reading what everyone else is theorising happens after. It's a nice way of saying that there's the story or characters continue to live on, just that it doesn't fit in this particular narrative.
That said, even though I rarely catch the meaning of an open-ended story, I don't really enjoy concrete endings. I always get a "oh, that's it?' kind of feel, even if things were resolved nicely and even if it's implied the characters can go on to do something else.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 01:59:13 2021 No.11697972

>>11659302
maybe at some point. Right now I feel so filthy for writing it I can't keep doing it. It feels sick to write.

>>11696732
It's intentional. I'm going with the robot becomes human motif. Don't worry, she'll become moona over time. I will publish it in a new file next time though, thanks for telling me.

And on the subject, any more weird rules I should know about?

>>11696832
This is what I was wondering. If we're worried about archiving, it seems far easier to keep it to one document.

>>11596362
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1qPfra9RvLw-VwTAu0A3WnEQoO4FkSK9Lcqjo2DswCUs/edit?usp=sharing

Here's the link towards Moona's Ordeal.

Tags: Ryona, NSFW

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:05:05 2021 No.11698329 >>11697972 moona's ordeal is already in there boss, and published, too

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:07:03 2021 No.11698459 >>11697972 If you keep on misapropriating our anchor like this, we are going to have to shun you and your works.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:07:18 2021 No.11698473 >>11697972 Hang on, I'm confused. You're making a multi-chapter work but keeping it in one doc and it's a sequel to the Moona's Ordeal one?

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:08:35 2021 No.11698546

>>11697972
>And on the subject, any more weird rules I should know about?
Not a rule, more of an observation - some folk here are super autistic, and though you might feel like a guest, not every """rule""" has to be followed.

Publish your docs so we don't get the ugly, slow and annoying editing format, link any stories you're posting to the story anchor so they get archived, and don't try to distinguish yourself beyond "hey, I wrote that."
That's literally it for """rules""".

>>11698459
You're autistic. Kill yourself.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:10:36 2021 No.11698644 >>11698459 >we

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:10:50 2021 No.11698656 >>11698459 >we

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:12:17 2021 No.11698729 >>11698473 No, this other one is an entirely seperate story. Moona's Ordeal is seperate to Sun and the Moon. >>11698329 Gotcha. Sorry. Just making sure. >>11698546 Alright. I will remember that.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:12:21 2021 No.11698736 >>11698459 >we

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:13:52 2021 No.11698816 >>11698459 You're autistic. Kill yourself.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:14:26 2021 No.11698850

>>11698729
Okay, thanks. For archival purposes, don't worry about feeling like you're throwing out too many links. Incredibly long ones can sometimes be hard to navigate if someone doesn't want to read the entire story, but instead revisit a part they liked. Either way, would you want this in the series archive, or just the normal one with the 'LONG' tag?

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:17:27 2021 No.11699015 >>11697972 You didn’t even include the true ending in your own archive

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:30:17 2021 No.11699690 >>11698546 >>11698644 >>11698656 >>11698736 >>11698816 Why are you defending the outsider? I'm just saying what you are all thinking. This is annoying, he used the anchor like 7 times.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:33:12 2021 No.11699883 >>11699690 You're autistic. Kill yourself.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:36:20 2021 No.11700046

>>11699690
Anon that wasn't him that was other people archiving it from another thread because someone made an abuse thread that sorta became a writing thread then the anon just came here because they wanted to not write abuse....
Honestly it's weird that an anon literally went through the entire arc of wg, timeloops are fucking weird.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:51:19 2021 No.11700786 >>11699690 >the outsider? Go back to whatever discord you came from

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 02:54:27 2021 No.11700951 >>11699690 I bet you’re the same person that called his writing dogshit earlier in the thread

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:05:39 2021 No.11701454

>>11700951
First of all, take your meds. Second of all, his story was decent until he listened to the horde of faggots asking for a happy ending which completely changed and ruined the tone of the story so I dropped it after she visited Reine. As far as I had read it that's the only problem I have with the writing itself.Everything was planned for a perfect abuse ending but the fluff fags just went and ruined it IN AN ABUSE THREAD. Goddamn.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:07:46 2021 No.11701587 >>11701454 >IN AN ABUSE THREAD This hasn't been an abuse thread for months. So what you're really saying is you got your hopes up on some retarded notion that only you had and then got angry because you're retarded.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:09:27 2021 No.11701680 >>11701454 He actually made a bad ending in the same thread. No one updated the archive.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:10:03 2021 No.11701708 >>11701680 If it's still the Moona story he owns the document.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:10:45 2021 No.11701743 File: 53 KB, 290x290, 1296900726469.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11701454 lol mad

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:11:52 2021 No.11701805

>>11596406
(You) have memory problems. Marine, being desperate, breaks into your house one night while you are sleeping and begins trying to convince you that you've been dating for some time now. Cue (You) essentially having your memory tampered with by a horny and desperate woman willing to risk it all.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:13:13 2021 No.11701871 >>11701587 nta and he is a faggot but that moona story was not written for this thread, it was written explicitly for a recent abuse thread

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:14:57 2021 No.11701959 >>11701454 wow you seem like a fun person to be around

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:15:51 2021 No.11702012 And y'all wonder why we don't get any new regulars

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:19:23 2021 No.11702189 >>11701454 >>11701680 Here it is >>/vt/thread/S11523138#p11617152

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:24:47 2021 No.11702446 >>11701454 The story was always intended to be happy. I was actually pressured into writing the bad one. I always like my stories to end on a high note.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:24:57 2021 No.11702453 >>11702012 Imagine blaming the whole group because of an autist.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:26:46 2021 No.11702539 >>11702446 The bad ending is better

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:27:16 2021 No.11702575 >>11702446 based

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:30:02 2021 No.11702721 >>11702446 Write whatever you want and fuck anyone who says otherwise. On a positive note, though, the fact that people feel strongly about it means you've gotten them invested in your works.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:33:50 2021 No.11702928 >>11702446 I’m one of the people that asked for the bad ending and it’s exquisite. Thank you for making Moona’s suicide cute and canon.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:49:20 2021 No.11703740

>>11702446
I'm not going to read it either way. The moment you bent the knee and wrote what the people wanted instead of what YOU wanted to write, I lost all respect for you as a writer. If you can't write what you want without falling to peer pressure you should quit while you're "ahead" because you're NGMI

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:50:42 2021 No.11703793 File: 427 KB, 640x481, 1439916857263.png [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11703740 yeah nah you're a troll

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:51:29 2021 No.11703836 >>11703793 Probably the pekofag.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:52:39 2021 No.11703887

>>11703740
I think it's important to listen to audience feedback. In the end, I'll write the story I'm satisfied with. But I'm not a perfect writer and if my audience has suggestions I can make work, I'll try them at the least. It's no personal failing so long as I don't let them write the story for me, which will not be the case. I'll always write what I feel most comfortable with.

>>11702928
>>11702539
I'm glad you think so.

>>11702721
Makes me nervous honestly. I hope my next works can be as good as my abuse fiction. I want to be known for something more tasteful than beating Moona and having Suisei sexually assault a child.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 03:54:52 2021 No.11704004 >>11703887 >I want to be known soz that's genuinely gonna be a problem here

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 04:46:11 2021 No.11706319

>>11694014
Honestly I like it when it feels appropriate but I can see it getting used as a cheap 'ending' to get out of writing a 'final' adventure or from writing continuing adventures like the equivalent of an those anime only endings for works that are still being serialized.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 04:46:49 2021 No.11706353 I've burned out...

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 04:53:04 2021 No.11706638 >>11706319 That's my fear. I have a good thing planned, but I feel like I have a lot of potential for more past it if I wanted to use that as an ending keynote. It's just an odd thing to worry about, I guess. I'll keep it in mind.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 04:55:18 2021 No.11706714 >>11706638 If your ending doesn't involve Marine tonguing my ass while Matsuri and Ayame lick my pepperoni nipples and Suisei sucks my cock while Watame licks my fat nuts, you should drop it. It will be terrible.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 04:57:32 2021 No.11706816 >>11706714 those are some interesting daydreams you have anon

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:00:03 2021 No.11706920 >>11706816 I'll answer you in a second, Mio wants me to nut inside her but Suisei isn't letting go.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:01:07 2021 No.11706965 >>11698459 >>11699690 You need to take your meds.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:01:55 2021 No.11706998 File: 849 KB, 1180x661, 1634128259687.png [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11706965

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:07:43 2021 No.11707262 File: 3.96 MB, 8376x3624, 1625806881697.jpg [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11596406 Fluffy Pekora Romance

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:07:45 2021 No.11707261 >>11706965 Can you please stop replying to me? It's over already. Stop being annoying.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:10:17 2021 No.11707362 >>11707262 I don't think this thread can handle any more pekora

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:12:48 2021 No.11707478 >>11707362 Eating tasty pekopussy after a wonderful date night and spending all your time doting on her! Having her grind her legs together in obvious embarrassment as you kiss and lick at her neck while disrobing her!

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:15:30 2021 No.11707569 >>11707362 Pekora has been completely ruin for me.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:27:12 2021 No.11707903 >>11633717 Romancing Watame until we find out she NTR us?

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:30:42 2021 No.11708018 File: 1.11 MB, 500x500, 1617446279736.gif [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11707903

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:42:50 2021 No.11708352
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>>11694014
The real key behind an "open ended conclusion" is how you build up and execute the ending. There still needs to be a resolution of sorts to the current arc, but whether it proves to be one that is "final", or opens up to other possibilities will be up to the talent of the author. A personal favourite of mine is where a character rushes headlong into what seems to be a suicidal battle, and it is up to us to figure out what happened. there is only war

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:46:40 2021 No.11708442 >>11708352 WH Fantasy? I'm trying to get into it more. Have a source?

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:55:09 2021 No.11708619

>>11707903
God that sounds like part of an idea for a series I had that the thread would probably hate.
A bait and switch series that disguises itself as fluff, which it would have at the initial half, but then it switches into NTR in the second half of the storywith the series itself seemingly disguised as a bunch of one shots but with the implication that the Anon is the person getting cucked in each one.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:57:20 2021 No.11708678 >>11708619 Write it, anon. Do it.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 05:59:46 2021 No.11708726 >>11708619 >I had that the thread would probably hate. Who cares what the thread says. Just write your story.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:16:15 2021 No.11709094 >>11707903 I wouldn’t mind a NTR story.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:18:50 2021 No.11709155 >>11709094 I've actually been thinking of a prompt, but decided not to post it since its unlikely it will ever get picked up by any writer.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:21:31 2021 No.11709206 >>11709155 Don’t let the other anons fool you. Just post Your prompt and just hope.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:23:21 2021 No.11709238 >>11709155 post it, if I can write that fubuki scat story I can write anything as long as it interests me.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:29:17 2021 No.11709350

>>11709238
You and Aqua are a typical middle class newlywed couple with a seemingly ideal home life: You work hard and keep a roof over your heads while Aqua maintains the home in your absence. But the life of a housewife is lonely and boring, and Aqua has deeper needs that You aren't able to provide or satisfy.

When You are called away on a weekend-long business trip, Aqua suddenly has the perfect opportunity to fulfill one of her darkest fantasies, one with an adulterous flavor that could have permanent consequences for her marriage with you.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:29:59 2021 No.11709364 >>11709350 >An Aqua prompt. I’m ready.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:34:31 2021 No.11709458 >>11709350 Why Aqua? Would be better if it was Watame, Ina, Ayame, Gura, Mio, Botan, Subaru, etc.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:36:52 2021 No.11709495 >>11709458 Thought about using one of the hags, but I decided against it.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:38:12 2021 No.11709519 >>11709495 Shame. It would have maximize the NTR potential.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:38:19 2021 No.11709521 >>11709350 >darkest fantasies >72 hours of Apex without even getting up to go to the bathroom

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:40:15 2021 No.11709551 New thread >>11709522

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:41:18 2021 No.11709570 >>11709521 All while using another man as her seat and convincing everyone she's just bit off today.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:42:24 2021 No.11709585 >>11709364 To do nothing?

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:43:28 2021 No.11709601
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>>11709350
Would make for a great opportunity to explore the genre of the woman not being satisfied and faking it for her husband.
> You blow your load 5 minutes in, immediately falling on the bed and wiping the sweat of your brow
> " Whew, that was pretty good wasn't it? I'm wiped. "
> "Y-yes honey, it was... great. "
> You fall asleep shortly after.
> The chuuba considers just masturbating by herself when a message pops up on her phone
> A coworker that had been hitting on her for a while was inviting her to hang out
> She thinks for a moment if she should just decline it as always or not
...
> "Okay, I'll be there soon. But don't tell my husband and no touching, I hate it when you do that. "
> 3 hours later you wake up to your wife gone.
> Not answering her phone.
> You shrug it off and go back to sleep.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:44:43 2021 No.11709617 >>11709570 To be honest, if I came home to find my wife using a swarthy gentleman covered in her piss, shit, and empty red bull cans as a chair I'd probably just set the house on fire.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:50:18 2021 No.11709700 >>11709601 NTR always reminds me of Ulysses and I don't anyone wants to read a shitty knock off with aqua as a character

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:53:06 2021 No.11709726 >>11709700 Ulysses...the greek hero?

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 06:57:47 2021 No.11709801 >>11709726 Nah the book

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:21:50 2021 No.11710202 >>11698459 Who is we, you speaking French?

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:24:51 2021 No.11710242 File: 1.61 MB, 280x296, 1523473461337.gif [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11709601

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:34:06 2021 No.11710372 >>11709601 > 3 hours later you wake up to your wife gone. > Not answering her phone. > You shrug it off and go back to sleep. Suddenly propelling yourself into the ceiling by shitting rainbows would be more believable

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:34:38 2021 No.11710379 >>11710372 >ntr fags live in fantasy land many such cases!

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:34:51 2021 No.11710386

>>11709601
> blow your load and immediately fall asleep
That's just inconsiderate, use your hands if your wiener is weak. No wonder your wife/girlfriend is actively seeking some thrill in her life. She's a piece of shit though - instead of communicating the problem to you, she just gave up on the solution and cheated(?).
Or buy a condom with anaesthetic, there's no shame in that. Talk to a medical specialist. If you have problems and are ashamed of admitting them instead of solving/mitigating them, you are not as mature as you think.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:35:46 2021 No.11710398 >>11710386 >Or buy a condom with anaesthetic Holy shit just cut your fucking penis off at that point

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:36:12 2021 No.11710405 File: 127 KB, 239x372, 1543689008563.png [View same] [iqdb] [saucenao] [google] >>11710386 Chad communication enjoyer Vs. Cuckoldry Fan

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:41:06 2021 No.11710477 >>11710398 If you got into an accident and had your legs amputated, would you rather remain in a wheelchair because you are ashamed of using the prosthetics?

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:41:44 2021 No.11710490

>>11710372
Wdym?
>>11710386
I don't like oral sex on females cause it's gross and having to rub her after you blew your load either way would be pretty soul crushing. Also I hear that those numbing condoms are way stronger than one would think and you'd probably go limp if you aren't s raging sex beast, especially if you are nervous.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:43:55 2021 No.11710517 >>11710490 >not going down on girls NGMI

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:47:15 2021 No.11710578 >>11710517 Honestly when my first gf said that some weird globs came out whenever she became horny, I was turned off from pussy forever.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:49:35 2021 No.11710614 >>11710578 what the fuck

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:51:00 2021 No.11710631

>>11710490
Yeah, if would still feel pathetic, but at least there was some sexual pleasure in it for your partner. You did all you could.
About numbing condoms being too strong... Thanks for informing, will consider that if I ever get any action. The only solution I can think of is mixing your own proportions of lube and anaesthetic and applying it before putting on a regular condom. Would have to be:
- lube that can easily accept water solutions and not fall apart
- lube that won't destroy the condom
- concentration of anaesthetic determined through experimentation by yourself
- be fucking careful about potential allergic reactions and your dick

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:53:48 2021 No.11710669

>>11710631
Anon... if you use anaesthesic lubes you'll numb her pussy too. It's a real thing that happens when people put on numbing condoms the wrong way and it completely negates ALL feeling for her, even small amounts of it. In short, you don't want to involve anaesthesics in any way during sex ESPECIALLY if you're inexperienced.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:55:52 2021 No.11710698 >>11710669 Then...just make sure you put the condom on the right way? >>11710614 Yeah, actually, this is a real thing. Vaginal discharge is kind of silly that way. Could also be a yeast infection.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:58:07 2021 No.11710737

>>11710490
horny women are a totally different breed. just like how they like to accuse men for being creeps, depraved women are extremely vile, more on average compared to men. There's a reason why women can cum multiple times and still thirst for more compared to men who(mostly) nut once and are forced to call it a day. I enjoy fun times with women, but holy shit can there be some absolute freaks out there I wouldn't touch with a 10 foot pole.

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 07:59:04 2021 No.11710750

>>11710669
Maybe I worded it incorrectly,
1. Apply a small amount of custom lube on your reproductive organ
2. Put on a regular condom
The lube inside shouldn't come into contact with the vagina, right? Or is it that sensitive to numbing agents that even a small contamination would ruin the its sensitivity?

Anonymous Wed Oct 20 08:04:09 2021 No.11710828

>>11710750
Given that almost all results when searching about numbing agents for sex turn out for easing discomfort during anal sex, I'd bet that yes, genitals are sensitive to those. I don't know if you realize this but they are mucous membranes which are pretty much the most effective type of surface tissue to absorb shit. Plus it's very likely the lube numbing agent itself is also strong.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 09:17:55 2021 No.11711852 >>11646044 Probably not enough to sear flesh but just enough to make her feel intense pain.

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 09:52:45 2021 No.11712245 >>11711852 The writer suggests that you can get a screwdriver red hot with just a lighter

>>	Anonymous Wed Oct 20 10:55:43 2021 No.11713265 ollie sucks dead dog's nuts

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