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>>84879670
I personally adore the two part doujin "We Used to be Happy" by Nakani, it's one of my favorites.

imagine being Gigi's nemesis. You two meet in an rp circle and buttheads over her shitty goody two shoes MC triying to stop your rogue from limit testing the game.
She's your friend's friend so you can exactly tell her to fuck off and she's always there. she puts shit stuff on movie night an makes shitty comments.

oooooh how mad she makes you. You hate gigi so muuuuch.
You hate her nasal voice, you hate how she takes the piss out of you, you hate her shitty taste on media

you hate how soft her lips are, how easy is to hug her, how she leaves her disgusting fujostink all over your bed every time you two end there

You hate how she brought her own toothbrush to your house, how she cooks meals for you and how she cuddles with you every single night now that she lives here.

Oh loathsome gigi, how i DESPISE YOU

What kind of creature is Gigi? Mammal or reptile? Do grems come from eggs?

>>84890838
nta but man, I liked that one too. I just don't know what to think about Nakani's uh preference for those facial expressions. Half of the time I love them, the other half I find them rather silly
But yes - Suisei and she used to be cool and all but something happened and now you have to take care of your mentally-fragile sister

>>84891333
clearly you didn't watch her lore video
she was a human girl once

>>84890838
genuine classic

>>84891333
Gremlins are usually mammals I think, but considering grems are tiny lizard things I'd wager she might a monotreme

>>84890379
That sounds like a fantastic idea, and much better than the drivel that's been coming out recently.
Imagine Suisei experiencing true American culture by going to the projects and experiencing a union that she didn't know she wanted (at the time) with the local ethnic community. I wonder how much better an opinion she'd have had of America if she experienced the best of what it had to offer, rather than the worst.

>>84889420
It's a classic

>>84891284
what if instead of the usual "grr damn fujo" it was
>You absolutely fall in love with Gigi at first glance
>trip over your words and confess your love
>Gigi's brain explodes. for the first time in years of her life not only is she seen as "a girl" by someone from the otaku scene, she's not only seen as something aside a rotten fujo...She's actually being considered a girl someone would romance and be head over heels for
>so she bolts
>enter the lovely story of lovestruck anon and gigi who cant process love is knocking on her door because she's used to being the bro

>>84891284
I wanna play a horror game with her and tease her for screaming the entire time

>>84890402
>>84890380
this is a very cute Child

>>84891830
>"Sasuga America! The meals are much bigger here!"

>>84891960
This is cute, you can have the both of them being relatively inexperienced, going on their first date together, kissing for the first time. Gigi using her "bro" experiences when she gets embarrassed, slowly coming out of her shell as the two of them do more together and learn about each other...

>>84892906
I laughed

This the most lesbian stuff I've ever read, Jesus. "Do it, a lot."

>>84890444
Myth faces off against Promise in a blowjob competition

>>84895770
IRYs dominates so hard the real competition is for 2nd place. Don't count Mori out yet folks, she may be the dark horse this championship has been waiting for!

>>84892906
>>84891830
>Suisei's culinary journey
>One-shot anthology that's just raceplay to food porn bait and switch
>From her going to the sketchiest part of the hood to get the best wraps in town to witnessing the glories of a 3am waffle house brawl.

>>84895931
>Suisei's Culinary Journey!
>Tasting America's greatest food!
>Baby Back Ribs! Turducken! Giant Oysters! Fried Butter!
>As she progresses from town to town, her life slowly falls apart
>Little by little, she turns into a pig
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PwQns6vGfj4

I love Kobo x Calli stuff

>>84890444
A story where (You) get to assemble a band of chuubas and experience the TRUE rockstar life
>driving to shitty venues
>doing weddings
>someone always carrying guitar strings
>taking out the cat from in side the drums before the show
>changing a flat tire while the bassist rehearses

>>84890380
>>84890402
>>84890444
>gigi is playing enigmatic recolection with everyone
>she gets cucked by irys in the game
>after the stream ends everyone is chatting in discord
>they poke fun at gigi getting cucked, both irys and ame tease her about it.
>"haha very funny everyone"
>gigi has a nightmare where she is tied to a chair
>she is staring at irys and ame making out
>next day she feels sick so she cancels her stream
>gigi sits in her room in silence watching irys pov
>"my pearl..."

>>84891352
Yeah his faces are a bit all over the place. They're fine for me re-reading, but initially they are sometimes a bit off putting.

>>84897116
Kobo is a child

>>84891960
i like how this makes sense with some seeing her as a sex goddess while she looks like she just go out of bed
like the idea of just randomly rolling up in a lazy outfit is what finally gets a guy horny for her

>>84896790
11 years ago, fuck

>>84901985
I look at old content from channels like The Onion and think to myself, "God DAMN the internet's so boring"
I want a whole remake of Sex House but it's full of chuubas. Shit's legendary
>HoloHouse!
>Featuring HoloEN and HoloJP chuubas!
>The girls get along at first, but some minor drama happens then and there
>Cover Corp tries to engineer drama for numbers
>The girls refuse to participate in the skinnerbox any longer it's been 368 days
>Cover Corp. abandons them and they start building a tribal civilization inside the house
>Even when they discover a way out, they refuse to venture outside any further. The HoloHouse is all they've ever known...

>>84902588 (me)
*become so boring

So what fics have you been reading lately anon?
Wanna share your thoughts on them?

>>84904019
Just skimming through the archives for inspiration right now, but Psycho Killer's a personal favorite so far
>t. newfag doing the deathclock footplay fic

>>84905192
>Psycho Killer
What a classic.
I wish the Anon writing the sequel didn't give up on it. It's been years at this point but the concept of Myth investigating yandere Mori still lives rent free in my head.

There's just something about Gigi that makes me want to grab her by the hair and kiss her for somewhere between twenty minutes and an hour.

>>84906547
If you did that, you wouldn't have to hear her speak for that entire duration...

>>84905192
I'm glad you find it holds up! All my old fics seem super dated to me now, so it's nice to know that my start wasn't as bad as I feel it was.

>>84905962
Sorry to have let you down, but at the least that was a very good lesson for me. Having an end in mind really has helped me come up with stories that I feel are much more measured and better paced, as the main reason I was unable to finish it was because I didn't(and still don't) know how I'd end that fucking thing.

live

>>84904019
I read "(It’s Never) Too Late to Say I Love You" yesterday. It was very cute, I liked it. I'm not really good at giving criticism so that's all I can say.
Petty complaints: I feel like the bus scene would've worked better if it was a train instead so that you could completely eliminate all lifelines from Aqua to get back there. Reading that scene I just thought wouldn't the bus driver hear what is being shouted at Aqua too. He would probably ask her if she still has unfinished business. Aqua could also just press the button and get off at the next stop and run back. Well, I guess addressing those points would make it work too. Make Aqua say "no, it's ok" to the bus driver and then have her be tempted to change her mind and press the button before deciding not to.
I also thought why doesn't Anon just call Aqua (well, Anon did remember the existence of mobile phones later) which made my brain go off on a tangent about how mobile phones and the modern internet haved killed a lot of the romance, fun and mystery from the world. I might just follow Ryukishi07's footsteps and have all my stories set in the 80's lol.

>>84909362
>stories set in the 80's
I know this trope isn't that common, but what would be the 80s equivalent of "inexplicably also a vtuber that streams".
>She was a vtuber. A virtual existence running through the phone tubes.
Or like
>She was a vtuber. One of those girls made to lay down the virtual tubes of the future.

>>84910363
Idols with a radio show? Korone was around then, maybe she'd have a good answer.

>>84890380
Nice pits

>>84906811
>how I'd end that fucking thing
Usually it's because I've stopped writing. Time spent without the thought to put anything down anymore. The important thing is that it is finished and can be reviewed later for comparison.

>>84910709
Oh you want some food little puppy? Some kibbles?
Watch "Wave, Listen to Me!" (波よ聞いてくれ)

>Grab my hand Anon, I'm gonna take you back to the summer of 1994

>>84906811
>I didn't(and still don't) know how I'd end that fucking thing.
Not knowing anything other than the general concept of Myth each taking turns to investigate.
There's two (maybe three) ways I can see it ending
1) Truly leaning into the bad end aspect. Mori gets away with everything, every myth member investigating either gets nothing or thinks they're a cute couple. End with Anon in despair and a pregnant Mori having Myth arrange a shotgun wedding
2) Have all the investigations lead into a seeming dead end, then have Ame do a Columbo and "Oh Just One More Thing" out a confession. Cue fights scene and an epilogue with whatever myth girl was the story's heroine.
3)(Horny nonsense) For whatever reason Anon is just a fucking Menhera aphrodisiac for all of Myth. Every investigation just ends with them caught by Mori fucking Anon. Ending is of course Ina doing some eldrith ritual to Wed all of them together that ends in a pregnant orgy.

>>84910337
Lui should NOT be this sexy looking.

>>84892906
What if Suisei did those 'food challenges' in America where she has to eat a certain amount of food within the time limit?

>>84912179
The food? BBC

>>84912231
no anon he said american food not british

>>84912247
>Suisei just devouring BBC's tape archive

>>84912280
Oh my god she's a vtuber.
She's devouring the data.
The Comet is turning into a Star.

>>84912409
She's turning into a cathode-ray tuber

>>84912409
She's turning into a cathode-ray tuber

>>84910709
nice rare korone belly

>>84890380
sex with Gonathan

>>84891830
This but she gets addicted to crack

>>84912231
No anon, American food like what >>84912247 said. Like there was this one person I watched on YT a few days back who travels to certain parts of America to beat certain challenges and I always wondered what would happen if Suisei was doing the challenge instead.
Hell, since I'm a nice person we could also throw in Miko to help Suisei with her food challenges. They may or may not finish it (and have to pay for the whole thing they ordered) and they also might 'fatten up' after the challenge.

>>84890444
A terminally depressed man sells his soul to the Grim Reaper for one day of consequence-free fun before he's taken away. He gets assigned a shinigami to ensure he doesn't try to slip away and to ensure his final requests are granted. He has 24 hours to knock every item off of his bucket list with the help of this cool scythe lady.

>>84913552
>Tag teaming with IRyS
>She goes for the pearl while you strike the diamond.
>Break in Gonathan while IRyS works her magic.

>>84890444
remembering your time as a kid, you decide to do an impulse visit to your hometown. There you meet your old playpartner, a girl that was older than you.

Despite the town being mostly the same as it was years ago, and this older girl being so candid and accomodating with you...somehow...it all looks...different..and feels weird
a fic where you come back to your old town and start unveiling the mistery of what happened after you left can be a demon posession, multiple phenomenons, etc

>>84916108
>Groomed by evil two horn Nerissa as a shota.
>Get defiled in ways you don't dare to remember
>Return years later your heart yearning for revenge!
>She's a broken horn wet cat on parole now.
Will you still take revenge?

>>84916445
if by revenge you mean sex yes.


But also, interesting idea of living for your revenge, preparing for the inminent confrontation and then when you finally go back she's a completely different person that holds no memory or ill will towards you

>>84916587
it's like the twist ending of that fucked up moth timeloop doujin

>>84916445
>>84916587
This prompt sounds familiar yet hot...

>>84916445
>>84916587
>chapters of triying to piece together if she remembers or not
>until finally you stalk her in the dark, assault her and try to break off the other horn
>she screams, cries and begs
>you stop
>she's laying on the floor, sobbing and criying, asking for her mother and for you to please stop
>like you were once

Can I get some feedback on this so far? It's not done yet.

https://pastebin.com/nJVFvgs7

I WILL PREFACE that this story takes HEAVY INSPIRATION from a short story within the VN The House in Fata Morgana: A Requiem for Innocence and can be considered spoilers.

I felt guilty about the story being so similar but I figured I could do whatever I wanted since this is fanfiction.

Does gigi live near nyc?

>>84918274

>>84916857
>>like you were once

>>84895914
IRyS would be terrible at actual sex. She’s a pillow princess who’d expect you to do all the work

>>84918274
I don't know but she's my new favorite singer in Hololive
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1UogVbBWZAk
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=od-R1OvUVuw

>>84918972
That's why IRyS has built-in handlebars so you can go to town on her throat

>>84902588
This but give it a stanislav lem twist

>>84903961
Cute outfits. Bride mori is very pretty

>>84903961
Ina gets to plow Mori like a field every night

>>84920760
this made me realize that Ina's huge futa cock shows up a lot more often in fan arts than in fan fics

>>84918197
There isn't a ton here yet, so there's not a lot of feedback I can come up with. Although it feels like scenes are not properly transitioning from one another. The first segment focusing on Gigi needs a little more of a clean close to it.

The parts with Ame are decent but need a little more omph to her emotions and view of the scene. The parts where you describe her watch are good, I can feel the texture of it if that makes sense.

I think it's a nice start, but I think focusing on each scene will go miles for you. Make them a little more robust.

>>84916445
>>84916857
I want to do this with Mori.
Surely another WIP won't hurt, right?

>>84921833
AZKi will show up in the middle of the night if you have too many unfinished wips at once. Happened to a friend of mine......never saw him again....

>>84921833
What, like mori reincarnating?

>>84922620
Mori molests you while you're a little boy and she's like 5 years older than you, you come home to meet with a young girlfail manchild, stalk her and ready to enact your revenge, and she breaks down begging for her mama, asking her daddy to stop.
You, a 20 something dude, see this girl nearing her 30's have a breakdown like a child.

>>84918274
no she lives on the west coast

>>84922976
>>84921833
I can see it working.
The lack of supernatural elements kind of means this has to be more down to earth and "serious" in both smut and drama but the concept was always going to be on the darker side of tone anyway.

>>84922976
>>84923406
oh i get it. yeah it could work for that dark angle. The nerissa prompt speaks more to me from the angle of "are you really going to turn into what you always grew hating?"
Like, are you SERIOUSLY going to enact your revenge into a lobotomized/alternative innocent version of your tormenter? It could even make a good series for both of you to walk through the path of the abuse and mending it bit by bit

>>84923689
Yeah, for Nerissa the horn angle does make a difference since it shifts it from shotacon onee-san who never grew up to (as you said) crippled weakling who might as well be a different person.

>>84916108
>>84916445
>>84923689
>>84923903

i am NOT commiting to another wip because my writing is fucked ATM and university is raping me so here's a very autistic outline

>Anon's village is terrorized/subservient to Rissa Lacroix, the raven demon
>She's not unnecessarily cruel like other demons, but she does demand worship and constant servitude. it could be so much worse
>That's why, when she becomes infatuated with you, your family gives you up. Its for the greater good
>become her toy. Scars you physically and mentally. she likes playing "hide and seek" (hunting you on the manor) and constantly reminds you that your family left you in her clutches
>Demon hunters assault the manor/ another demon feud. Entire town/village is razed and you wake up in the road, having fled from the demoness
>years go by. Become a terrifiying demon hunter. Finally track down the Raven
>jump her in the night. usually they dont know what hit them, but this time is personal.
>Horn grabbing. she's begging. Get stopped by shiori.
>You have a strict "no human killing" code, so have to comply and listen to her
>Rissa Lacroix is dead. She died when her horn was broken, an Shiori took pity on the broken husk of a woman left behind.
>Peering into the past thanks to her demon powers/contract she sees that Nerissa is its own new entitiy.
>Removing a demon's horn essentially turns them into a cripple. Nerissa needs a prosthesis to keep her balance and is considerably weak and clumsy.
>Breaking the second horn means Nerissa will also die as a concept. A human will be born from the remains of the demon (AKA the "soul" of the demon dies and they become human)
>Talk to Shiori about your story. Nerissa eavesdrops. Feels terrible about the sins of her past life.
>Story about you triying to move past your vengeance and learning to live. Nerissa confronting her past.
>A bit sappy but an ending where Nerissa breaks off her second horn,but due to the love and expiation of her sins she becomes human and does not suffer ego death

>>84916445
confronting your pathetic abuser but now there's someone even worse

>>84924894
>>84924877
...
These posts being next to each other just make me imagine that Shiori isn't just hiding Nerissa's broken horn, SHE IS Nerissa's broken horn taking taking form as/possessing a demon hunter making sure her 'mother' is reunited with her favorite toy out of some twisted sense of filial piety despite also hungering for the power of the other horn.

>>84918197
It looks good, honestly only have some minor nitpicks
>Her friend Ninomae Ina’nis
It feels weird to hard namedrop Ina here. Since this is from Ame's perspective, it just feels weirdly inconsistent with her on stream persona to think of her referring to Ina with her full name.
In fact it's kind of weird that it uses Ame's full name in narration now that I'm reading this out.
...
Actually thinking of this in the context of ENreco is fucking with me harder since the full names and using Ms. Murin I could maybe excuse as a "this is the ENreco timeline Ame not mainline" but... ENreco Ame isn't a time traveler she's just a detective.

>>84925485
>Shiori is the original demon and has groomed you into the ultimate demon hunter, then gave you love just to rip it all away
>Shiori is obssesed with you and broke nerissa's horn and made her a pet for you
So many angles!

>>84925931
>Shiori is your old childhood friend who also grew up to become a demon hunter, but made a faustian bargain for more power in an attempt to get revenge on Rissa for you, only to fall under her new power's corrupting influence, becoming the very thing she sought to destroy
This could also work with your second idea, she thinks every evil thing she's doing is for your sake so it's "okay"

Hear me out: >>84922976, but instead of molestation it's closer to dubcon and it leads to a genuine but ultimately toxic romance

>>84927037
>dubcon
Explain

>>84916445
What if she tracked you down out of guilt and begged you to take revenge to restore justice and relieve her of her moral debt?

>>84923689
Nerissa/mori did those things to you under duress/at gunpoint/was possessed or otherwise forced into it but had to really sell it as part of whatever was going on with her in the background.
She's fully aware of what happened and is just as broken by it as you are when you find her.
Do you plot revenge against the greater evil together?
Do you take it out on each other?
Do you just sit there and be broken next to one another?

>>84927122
dubious consent, ie. not flat-out rape but still questionable

>>84927122
NTA but that's general fanfic term for sex that's kinda rapey aka dubious consent.

>>84927190
>>84927249
... so molestation?

>>84927173
You really dont need the "has to sell it" angle.
Part of the revelation could be the same flashback but recontextualized. Like they were not shaking out of pleasure or were desperate to touch you, they were scared shitless or reaching a breaking point

>>84927531
Not really. Dubcon implies that while the molested person is okay with it, the act is still reprehensible and they kind of know it.
Its different from rape or shotacon for example because it tries to sit on the line of being okay while still keeping the spice

>>84927531
Nah not quite, since molesting still carries the notion that one party isn't consenting. Dubious consent is also big in the romance fantasy novel world since women love to fantasize about being almost raped while depicting that they want the sex at the same time. In dubcon the one being dominated into sex is likely capable of putting up a fight, but either just gives up without even voicing that this isn't something they want, or it was a situation that they themselves made either by prior engagements or baiting the scenario into existence. Also it's good to note that either person can be in the lead in dubcon once it gets going. Molesting is kinda a one way road.

>>84927037
I mean, if you were really young, even the best case scenario is "dubcon"

>>84927173
>Lolie Shiori summoned Nerissa to ruin you in middle school because she read ahead what would happen if she didn't do it.

>>84927551
Good, very good. They were breaking from what they had to do, and seeing your reactions to it, let's go with that

Wet cat this, wet cat that, what if YOU were the helpless wet cat, huh?!?

>>84928301
We were talking about her being cool...

But if i have to be the wet cat can Azki be my owner?

>>84928301
>be Mori's third cat she found abandoned on the streets one rainy night
>she takes you in and spoils you rotten
>become Tutu's rival in nibbling her toes
>life is good now

>>84927173
Gunpoint just makes it infinitely darker.
Like imagine you and your older sister Mori have your house broken in by a fat fuck with a knife and a camera, and Mori is forced to rape you? And you're screaming for your mommy because your boy parts hurt and Mori is crying because she wants to stop hurting you.

After the event passes, you find yourself sneaking into Mori's bedroom, and dry humping her to try to 'rape her back' because you're seeking revenge, and Mori is awake and aware, but doesn't have the heart to stop you.

What if after Mori raped you, the fat fuck throws you inside the closet as you're forced to watch as it's now Mori's turn with Misery?

What if after you two are irredeemably broken, you find a strange comfort in the shared trauma and take comfort in reenacting the event?

What I'm saying is, just have Mori touch your no-no zone because she's traumatized/morbid, because it is somehow infinitely less fucked up and guttural than coercion.

>>84927736
>>84927754
I got very intrusive flashbacks from this.
Time to write.

>>84931952
If it was anyone but CC, they'd have already passed out from the sheer strength of Gigi's concentrated girlfumes in a confined space like that. Or maybe not, does Cecilia actually need to breathe or is it just some vestigial behaviour to make her look more human?

>>84890444
Rescuing a very calm and weirdly enthusiastic Pekora from a death game https://youtu.be/XOByedyIs00

>>84932399
I think cc and Roboco need more robotfucking prompts.

>Cc bragging about not feeling pain or something. Gg gets annoyed and recruits you, the justice mage
>Gg tells cc she's a pussy and convinces her to connect her conciousness so she can feel. cc acepts and you link them with a spell
>GG starts touching herself. CC is inmediatly squirming because its her first time experiencing pleasure on her phantom genitals. Meanwhile GG is a seasoned masturbator and this is nothing
>CC is borderline crashing due to the pleasure and then GG starts edging. cC is desperate for orgasming to the point she's rubbing her chestplate and smooth cunt and criying in frustation over her first experience with orgasm denial
>Get into the fun. Scramble CC's brain so hard she passes out a few time while GG and you have sex
>An epilogue where CC mods herself to have genitals and asks you to dick her down

Live!

>>84933241
In other words,
> giving a normal person heroin and be surprised when they get addicted

Up

>>84890444
Caught by Justice for some small petty crime and they try to extract a confession from you by torturing you- stuck in a cell with Shiori, forced to listen to her nonstop yaps all day long.

>>84935522
CC becoming a roboturbo slut is so fucking hot
>asking you to rewire her pleasuresensors in a fucked up way so when she winds her key it hits all at once and she cums like a fountain
>cumming inside her wirebox and seeing her shortcircuit as she orgasms
>cum leaking from her gears
CLANG CLANG CLANG CLANG CLANG YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEOWCHHH

>>84890444
Getting to sniff Gigismell in return for letting her roleplay as a femboy in bed

>>84938719
>Gigi wearing shorts and letting you fuck her ass while she calls you bro and tells you this is gay

>>84939009
>Full homo
>no hetero

>>84939009
id destroy her bussy then get her boypreggers

>>84938719
>"Anon, have you ever wanted to be the squire of a mere humble knight and use his gullible nature to trick him into thinking that part of the social contract is that he becomes your free-use fuck toy?"
>"Not really, no."
>"Okay, well...can you pretend that you do?"

>>84939870
lies an slander. Gigi wouldnt roleplay as gonathon for the "sex with a knight" idea, she would roleplay as another character it being your squire that is cock crazy

She does not let her fetish compromise her roleplay

>>84938719
She did say on the stream last night she liked all the artists drawing her "so handsome" and she wanted a future outfit with pants.

>>84890444
While drinking with Yagoo as a joke he put breeding stud into your list of responsibilities only for you to find several chuubas at your desk waiting for you to clock in the

>>84940927
Dramatic Miopost

>>84939870
Before you know it she'll make you call you and her faggots as you fuck her girl gremlin ass.

>>84940927
>Come in to work monday morning
>Still tired from the previous night drinking
>Turn on your computer, look at your calendar
>9:00 am - Breeding Raora , 10:00 am - Breeding Fubuki, 11:00 am -
>Schedule is filled with breeding various chuubas for the entire day
>Laugh, assuming your buddy was fucking with you and go back to answering old emails and filing invoices
>An hour later, you hear someone pounding on your office door
>Raora is standing there, face flush as she leans against the door, panting heavily
>"I'm sorry....haah, I'm uh, late...."
>It wasn't a joke after all

>>84941918
Hey, I'm the new intern! I'll handle it, don't worry.

>>84890444
botan sex
holy mother mary, the things i'd do to this lion in the bedroom...

>>84942336
blue board anon...

>>84942050
Sorry pal, the new guys deal with the hags, maybe in a few years and some promotions you can work your way up to some JK manko.

>>84942364
i won't tell anyone if you don't

>>84942432
Give me the oldest one then. I think that's Kronii

>>84942432
fine by me!

>>84943116
>fuck yeah fauna with a big fat fucking brapper bouncing on my dick
>remember she's a vegan
>day ruined

>>84943516
Not true. A thin, boney vegan Fauna is like a blank canvas, waiting for the painter's brush to mold her into a work of art with a couple dozen extra pounds or two

>>84943888
mr architect i like my buildings pre-built. thank you

>>84943516
just google kirin and look at how bottom heavy those weir chinese things are.
Fauna has that wagon even if she feeds it fake cheese

>>84947341
I'm going to me her cheat on her husband with me

>>84947820
You should do something about your stroke first

>>84948091
AZKi's so hot his brain melted a little looking at her....

Back with draft 2 of the DeathClock feet fic https://litter.catbox.moe/0wjwak.pdf

I might've said this before but I'm an amateur at writing smut so I skimmed through the archives to figure out how to write cunnilingus, so my mistake if that section feels too derivative.
Also kinda struggling to figure out how to address the characters besides just "Calli/the reaper" and "Kronii/the Warden" so any help with that would also be appreciated

>>84949023
If your scene has only the 2 in question and that doesn't change, you can be more simple with your references. Simple pronouns can work since the reader will know who it is based on context. You can also get a little more flowery with it in a scene of intimacy like
>Her silken soled goddess
>The shrine of her lust
>That fucking time attuned buttslut
Get cute with it, get creative.

>The smell of coffee and cool morning air lingered in the cabin as Calliope Mori, Hololive’s resident reaper, rummaged through the kitchen. The soft clink of mismatched dishes echoed as she pulled out a well-worn metal percolator and slammed it onto the stove with a bit more enthusiasm than necessary.
>“Alright, Anon,” she said, flashing you a mischievous grin. Her long pink hair, usually immaculate, was tousled - evidence of an early morning. "I'm about to show you something kakkoi as hell. Cowboy coffee. The real deal."
>You watched, somewhat intrigued, somewhat concerned. Mori wasn't exactly known for her culinary prowess. You opened your mouth to say something, but she'd already grabbed an egg from the counter and, to your utter horror, cracked it straight into the percolator. Shells and all.
>“Mori, what the hell are you-”
>“Shush, shush, shush! Trust me on this, Anon!” She wagged a finger at you, looking far too confident for someone who had just committed a breakfast crime. The percolator began to sputter on the stove, the water heating up, dark coffee bubbling with egg whites floating around like misplaced marshmallows in hot cocoa.
>You couldn't tear your eyes away, watching the whole process unfold with a morbid sense of fascination.
>After a few minutes, Mori plucked a fork from the drawer and fished out the now-cooked and blackened egg along with the shattered bits of shell. She tossed them onto a nearby plate and waved her hand over the percolator like a magician at the end of a trick.
>“Ta-daaa!” she said, presenting the concoction with a proud grin. “Clear coffee, my guy. Just like the cowboys used to make.”
>Skeptical, you poured yourself a cup, expecting some kind of... disaster. But when you lifted it to your lips, the coffee was surprisingly smooth, far less bitter than you imagined. The usual bite that came with black coffee was softened, almost mellow. You raised an eyebrow.
>“Huh,” you muttered, taking another sip. “Tastes... decent, actually.”
>Mori crossed her arms, looking smug. “Told ya. Death isn’t the only thing I can handle, Anon. I got coffee *and* bars.”
>You chuckled, staring down into the cup. Maybe Mori was onto something after all. Or maybe you’d just lost your mind along with your taste buds.
>Either way, the morning felt a little less bitter. And, you had to admit, a lot more entertaining.

>>84949023
well i cant speak from the feetstuff angle. that's not something i find hot ever. I think its well written and the scene is...well..good? like i dont find it hot in the slightest but i can see someone doing so.

I think you should add some cooldown inbetween scenes (Calli waking up and instantly engaging in dialogue feels weird) and also paint the canvas a bit more. Describe the ambient they are in, not necessarily spending a lot of time on it but alluding to a few pieces to give the reader something to keep the imagination going.

Aside from that, you can cheat mentions with her, the hair color, the "taller girl". the older one etc. Pick distinctive traits that belong to each one and that's enoughyou can also cycle them and if you space them well enough people dont realize

can someone write fauna with a fat ass sitting on your face? i have like 5 wips and i cant afford to

>>84948091
Sorry I was typing with one hand down my trousers.

I mean to say "I'm going to make her cheat on her husband with me."

So anyone got any chuubas that they are looking forward to writing? Do you think you'll face any challenges in doing so?

Peko promises to be a treat to sink some words into. Funny rabbit.

>>84890402
Ars Amatoria. Vol 2 (21 pages, 8465 words)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/19gF8IWQk0-DNN4_kolES8NkfixImG5StC6GFVrr6Xxw/pub
Tags: Murasaki Shion, Romance, Fluff, Fantasy, School life,Angst

A bit of a shorter entry. Feedback is appreciated as always.

>>84890444
Bijou grows a cock and advent take turns milking it

Alright who took my creativity out back and shot it old yeller style? I want to write but can't.

>>84953976
Some grammar stuff first
There isn't a point where a student or teacher doesn't use it. - Reads a little awkwardly, I get the gist, but maybe something more like "It is near impossible for a student or teacher to avoid using it from the day to day" something that drives home how used it is. You can also bring up how it has to be meticulously maintained by groundskeepers and the like from the wear it likely endures.

Impervious from the outside, it said that thanks to it,- it is said that thanks to it,

You follow behind Shion as she boldly opens the door and enters, a bit nervous about being surrounded by so many magical items.- Is Shion somehow nervous? Or are you? From your general framing of Anon, it sounds like he might be the one nervous about being around all the magic stuff, you just want to convey that in a more colorful way. Make him keep his arms tight to his body, and have him give a wide breadth to anything he might think would explode for no reason.

Minor grammatical nitpick: Using "But" to start sentences is acceptable in dialogue, but in narration it could be considered improper.

Overall this was very enjoyable. I liked the expanding on the school life, and the world building. The scene at the smith is probably a winner for me, I loved the detail you put into the craft and the magical resistant lion's pelt. That sounds awesome. The interactions in this volume were cute and I like Shion's development through them all.
I would probably say there should have been one or two attempts by the warlock trio to bite back at Anon. Something to really make him blow back how he did. I liked how it showed how protective he is, but I feel like for his anger, another jab would have been appropriate.

Very relaxing and fun read.

>>84957484
Juna owes me sex

up

>>84952829
Kiara oughta be a challenge, as I've decided to make her the main heroine. I already rewrote the first act of my story twice. Third time might be the charm, but I'm not counting on it. Funny part is, I haven't even introduced Kiara yet.

>>84952829
Ao seems like a fun character to play around but i feel like my biggest challenge would be a Hajime story.
Jimmy is cool but her aura is way too strong for my current powerlevel

>>84940087
but shes into the drama and tragedy
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UazJBbg5ABA&t=807s
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UazJBbg5ABA&t=2143s

>>84960022
that's what im saying
>cucking gonathan
tragic, fits the storyline, cool
>gonathan being your cockslut
actually not tragic, does not fit the character motive, the gigicunt is dry as fuck

>>84960231
>cockslut
Well obviously it doesn't fit. Gonathan G is a cuntboy.

>>84960650
Shut it woman. No man would dare utter those words.

Guards! Seize her!

>>84959608
Fire chicken is a fun character, I tell you what. She has the ass to back up her sass. Hope things come together for you, keep doing your best.

>>84959943
Regloss chicks all seem fun, but for the life of me I'm not sure where or even how I would incorporate one for a small little interaction.

>>84960231
no I imagine her despairing over her lost purity and saying "My pearl..." like a dying dark souls NPC

>>84960949
>Mindbroken Gonathan G in chains holding their rape baby and calling her "My Pearl..."
Kino.

>>84951115
I might give it a shot if you have a prompt to get started.
Is she a shy vegan girl in your class that's inexplicably carrying a dump truck ass?
Or a bottom-heavy witch residing deep in the forest that you stumble into after dark?
Or a sweaty shut-in streamer working on speedruns that needs a new chair because her fat ass keeps breaking the old ones?
Or an extra thick goth girl that doesn't like the way you've been openly ogling her butt?

>>84961253
Considering pearls are made by forcibly inserting a little ball into a pried open oyster the nickname fits better

>>84960926
Banchou would be a local gang leader you need a translator for.

>>84950329
Expanded the ending section a bit, also tweaked it because my idea was that she was already awake and I wanted to make that more clear. I switched to saying Mori in the narration too but if it clashes too much with Kronii calling her Calli it should be easy to change it back

>>84961454
She's a witch that uses posterior magic, of course. You wouldn't believe the kinds of spells she asspulls

>>84966728
Now THAT'S a Kawaiiope

>>84968089
indeed it is

>>84942336
>shaved

>>84969892
>shaved
is how every woman should be.

>>84921127
I was hoping to keep the transition to the Grassy Field abrupt, so I might add more formatting and some sort of linebreak between the scenes. But I think you're right that the opening scene needs more content. Essentially, I just need to add more to all of the scenes.

>>84925922
I was thinking the namedrop was awkward too, but I wanted to create a sort of "objective/impartial detective Amelia" narrator separate from her stream persona which is why I used the full character names. But Ina is a good friend of Ame so I should probably change it.

I guess this interpretation of Ame is too impersonal? Hence why she is using full names to refer to people. Definitely though for Gigi, I feel like outside of ENreco, Ame hasn't fully gotten to know Gigi and tries to avoid being overly familiar

rise

Scurry through the streets looking for an old bagel
They don't need an invite for a seat down at the table
A piece of pastrami, half eaten wonton
Living in a bar, playing karaoke songs
Chewing on a sludge filled Boston creme donut
They don't give a fuck, and they're making sure you know it
Fighting with a pigeon for a piece of rotten cheese
Waiting on the train down at Christopher Street

Garbage bag, rats eat pizza slices
Garbage can (garbage can), rats, they understand
Garbage Land, ripped in fucked up places
Garbage plan (it's a garbage plan), they don't give a damn

Jumping out the trash like a rodent clown car
Filling up the streets like a drum of spilled tar
Little Italy, all the way to Greenwich village
They stalk at night, they steal, they fucking pillage
Upper class rats with a feather in their cap
A cardboard castle with a moat and mouse traps
A slice from Joe's or a pork soup dumpling
A gift from the dumpster and it's fit for a rat king

Garbage bag, rats eat pizza slices
Garbage can, rats, they understand
Garbage Land, ripped in fucked up places (keep it going)
Garbage plan (how does anyone live here anymore?), they don't give a damn

Couldn't pay the rent 'cause the prices started hiking
And now the MTA approved congestion pricing
The rats had to leave 'cause they couldn't pay their taxes
And New York City became a ghost town
Brooklyn, from the Bronx, all the way to Staten Island
They didn't stay long, but not from lack of trying
They hopped a trash barge to Newark, New Jersey
They tried to start a plague, but they ended up with scurvy

Garbage bag, rats eat pizza slices
Garbage can (garbage cans), rats, they understand (understand)
Garbage Land, ripped in fucked up places
Garbage plan (what a garbage plan), they don't give a damn (uh oh)
Garbage bag, rats eat pizza slices
Garbage can, rats, they understand
Garbage Land, ripped in fucked up places
Garbage plan, they don't give a damn

You have died.
Because she's on vacation, Mori is not available to collect your soul, and due to a clerical error in the Underworld secretariat, Gigi has been recruited as a temp worker (the clerk mistook "grem" for the "grim" in grim reaper).

>>84976265
>>84890444
Trying to force little Korone, only for her to bite of your dick and laugh.

>>84976344
Korone wouldn't hurt me, she would lovingly lick it clean.

Korone owes me cartwheels.

>>84961454
a cute nerd that shares a class with you. She gets a bit annoying so you taunt her, only for her fat bottom to come into play.

maybe you are inmobilized under a pile of books in the library or she "pranks you" but it doesnt need much logic

As bad a writer I may be, I thank the lord each and every day I'm not as bad as the guy who wrote Fairy Tale

>>84978479
Like the one with the musclewizards and dragon slayers? Is that shit still going on?

>>84978800
it is, unfortunately, still going strong. If you ever wanted a contender for the "worst tropes in a shonen all in one place" then you've got Fairy Tale. The only thing we haven't gotten (yet) is Natsu getting cucked but he is writing a brand new arc so who knows, we may have a bingo on our hands.

>>84978479
I can respect it for what it is: the author going "i dont wanna be sad, muscle wizard Time"

I used to dislike it a lot but re-reading it and then reading all the interviews with mashima that hint he was pretty depressed after he made rave and just wanted a whimsy world where the good guys win and everyone has fun made me respect it.

Helps that he doesnt pretend it isnt a dumb meathead shonen

>>84949023
Overall, this is great! Good descriptors and solid prose. Only thing I'd suggest is to always go to a new line when the speaker changes. For example

[“Are you good Calli?” Ouro Kronii asked as she let herself in, shutting the door behind her. “You shouldn’t be leaving the door wide open like that.” The reaper let out a deep sigh. “I’ve been better,” she groaned, “honestly not sure if I can even stand right now.”]

The speaker changes to Calli halfway through, so it should be split up like so

[“Are you good Calli?” Ouro Kronii asked as she let herself in, shutting the door behind her. “You shouldn’t be leaving the door wide open like that.”

The reaper let out a deep sigh. “I’ve been better,” she groaned, “honestly not sure if I can even stand right now.”]

Which chuubas are built to get NTR'd?
I love thinking about Mio losing sleep over me working late when in reality I'm banging one of my younger coworkers in a shady love hotel.

>>84978877
I honestly thought it had an ending already with one of the most hamstrung arcs I ever saw. The power scaling Fairy Tail had was bad, but that last arc just took the cake. Oh here are demon and god slayers glore. Here's Erza's fucking mom, and did I mention there's time travel? Wizards are doing self contained nukes. And it just kinda ends.

Overall I really liked Fairy Tail when it started, Mashima's world building and imagination with powers is pretty high tier, but his problem is that he can quickly go off the rails and make things beyond stupid. All the stupid Zeref shit should have ended at the Tower of Heaven. It was honestly a plot point that brought down the entire series for me because of how fucking badly Mishima wanted Jellal to be around, WHEN THERE WAS A FUCKING MIRROR VERSION THAT WAS 10X COOLER ALREADY. The alt world was also where things clearly took a point of no return narrative wise, since it removed prior consequences and do a major disservice by never really addressing the reunion of two characters which should have had a lot more meaning.

>>84979008
Making a world of whimsy is good, but the problem soon became that the story wasn't so much about exploring that world and all the neat magical things it could have. Meathead shonen is also great, but my problem is that he doesn't spread the meat around enough. He made a lot of really cool characters, but doesn't give anyone besides the focal crew any chance to shine and makes the rest of them jokes. It was really sad to see how things progressed post time skip for everyone else.

One thing though that is tops, the soundtrack. It goes so fucking hard, I use it sometimes when I write action scenes.

ninomae analis

>>84980162
Either the main a heroine or a joke.
Either the cucker or the cucked.

>>84961454
Combine the first and last ones

>>84980162
I'll turn the question upside down and give you the absolute worst chuuba for NTR: Marine.
Marine realizing she's been betrayed by the one she loves the most, her soul getting crushed and heart utterly broken, seeing her reduced to a sobbing mess... I can see the picture in my head and just thinking about it makes me want to play sudoku.

>>84980162
>>84981278
Marine's confidence as a woman is already on shaky grounds so finding out she's being cheated on would irrevocably ruin her. It would ruin her faith in men, it would ruin her faith in love, it would ruin her faith in herself. Marine's biggest fears with romance are rejection and vulnerability. Is there a more harsher rejection than someone you love seeing your vulnerability and deciding they don't want it anymore? And that someone else is supposedly better? Her heart would shatter into a million pieces and they would stay that way for the rest of her life.

>>84980162
Sora and Nene

>>84982629
They'll murder you in your sleep

>>84982629
>cheat on sora with azki
>azki finds out, tells sora
>you wake up, can't move, can only make muffled sounds. Sleep paralysis? Who are those lurking shadows?
>it's not sleep paralysis, you're actually restrained and there's something balled up in your mouth, which feels like it's been taped shut. The shapes come into view, it's the two of them. They smile sweetly, compassionately.
>"anon, you thought i wouldn't find out? Sora asks, her voice as calm and sweet as ever
>"anon, had it been someone other than her it wouldn't have come to this" Azki's voice sounds just as calm
>your panicked eyes dart from one face to the other
>"you're so silly anon, our bond can never be broken"
>"our bond was built to stand the test of time, it will survive this" Azki says as she holds Sora's hand
>"but you won't" Sora giggles and winks at you
>you feel their cold dainty hands hold your wrists down, sharp pain shoots up your arms as they begin to cut you open. You try to scream through your gag but can only whimper.
>"sshhh, it's ok anon. Just relax. You don't have to worry about anything, not anymore"
>"we forgive you, anon"
>the last thing you see is the two of them standing over you, one at each side of the bed. They hold hands and regard you with kind smiles as they watch the light fade from your eyes

>>84983379
What if they filled your mouth with your balls and dick before taping it shut?

>>84983495
I'd expect suisei to do that. Or marine on the warpath, after miko lit a fire under her ass.
Or even pekora as a joke

>>84983693
>I fed you your own genitals as a joke peko

>>84983744
>you thought they call me war criminal for nothing? Next time don't stare at noel's tits so much hahahahaha

>>84984103
Phoneposting ate the unicode arrows in the laugh, fml

>>84983744
Punk'd but it's hosted by Pekora and all the pranks result in some horrible lifelong trauma or serious physical injuries and disabilities

>>84980162
Chloe?
>>84981278
>>84982515
Whatever happened to that story where you cuck Marine for Lui?

>>84985582
>Chloe?
Not the one who cucks you, but the one you cuck.
>cuck Marine for Lui
heartlocker? Pretty sure that got dropped.

>>84985713
Oh then probably what >>84982629 or maybe Suisei?
>Pretty sure that got dropped.
Oh, I see. I assume the author hit a brick wall with that story and just didn't know how to continue with it?

>>84985786
Disregard what I said about Suisei, I think Subaru would fit due to one certain fic that had her heartbroken.

>>84985873
Foxes over ducks?

>>84985897
Yeah.

sex with priestesses

>>84986145
I'd donate to her temple, fight off Yokai trying to rape her, and rape myself her while she's asleep, if you know what I mean

>>84986187
>and rape myself
no! dont!

>>84986187
>and rape myself
yes! do it!

>>84986187
>and rape myself
Perhaps? It's up to you.

>>84986187
>and rape myself
Is that you, Ninomae Ina'nis?
https://gelbooru.com/index.php?page=post&s=view&id=10662010

>>84980499
Lap-sama is the heroine of my heart! But......a few upgrades and maybe she'd win more often.....

>>84987102
>who gives uppies now, anon?

>>84987319
please don't give me a boner for this, I don't want to have my fantasies open to mommy Lap-chan.

>>84987646
>The hero's plans were foiled, and darkness triumphs once again!
>Laplus was unshackled!
>You, her most loyal servant (and childhood best friend of course), expected a demon far beyond comprehension,
>... but instead you were greeted with an absolute bombshell of a woman, the de facto godess of fertility
>Laplus rejoices once returning to her 'real' form
>The hero and his party watch in awe, and instead of desintegrating them, Laplus turns to you with a sadictis grin
>"Anon~!"
>OH SHIT
>"COME HERE, YOU RAT!"
>Laplus grabs you by your pants and pulls you up
>This... She's not going to kill you just to test her power, right?!
>"... always teasing me, 'Oh, Lappy, you're so short... You don't even reach my shoulders!"
>... What?!
>"Well, well, you midget, who the short one now?!"
>Pressing you against her DDDemon titties, Laplus embarasses you in front everyone
>"Uppy uppy, Anon~!" She chuckles. "How does it feel to get uppies, HUH?!"
>... It's actually really, really nice.

>>84987646
You don't want to be held upside-down, your hands and face buried in her giant soft tits as she gives you oral by moving your hips back and forth and using her all-powerful demon tongue?

>>84987957
n-no... o-of course not. I... I would... never... never ever...

>>84987949
No effect on me sir... none... absolutely zero...

>>84987646
im more into a laplus changing her body to appeal to Anon, but still being a big brat

>>84988175
Kind of like the Lapzuri story?

>>84988175
>the whole world domination operation is just a facade for her quest to be able to change her body until she can take her soulmate's giant dick into her pussy and inbetween her tits

>>84960926
A bit late but isnt Ririka a no brainer for a merchant? the whole cute kawaii genius ceo.

Altough the idea of regloss being a traveling trope of juggalos fits their weirdo aesthetic and its funny

>>84890444
Collaring Enemy. Her biting your hand then choking on your dick because hormones.
Her telling you to die then begging for cock because its mating season.

sex with Nemesis

>>84988706
Both are not bad ideas. I kinda like the traveling trope angle a lot more. I'll make a note of that and keep it in my pocket for later. It could make for a fun inbetween major plots kinda thing. Thanks dude.

>>84988222
more of a
>she doesn't know what he means by "mature women" and overcompensates by making herself very tall and busty

>>84987957
Wouldn't it be like, impossible to be held upside-down with your face buried into her soft mounds of flesh while she's giving you a ungodly blowjob to suck your soul straight from it?

>>84990969
How so? She's tall and strong.

>>84991165
Oh sorry, I just had a dumb moment and completely forgot that true La+ means she's like what, a giant and EASILY dwarfs you in height.

>>84991222
The best part is that there's no canon unshackled form, so you can imagine her however you want to. Still kind of small, just as tall as you, strong enough to stick her pinky up your butt and lift you that way, etc.

I want a story of Gigi getting consensually deflowered and mating pressed by Anon please

>>84992611
And what are you willing to trade for this? What is it worth to you?

>>84993003
My anal virginity

>>84991900
To be quite honest I think her being an actual giant when her true form is hard to believe. I would have expected her to be womanly/mature looking at probably standing at 6 ft 3 or something.
Which isn't my cup of tea mind you. Girls aren't suppose to be tall.

>>84890444
Iofi abducts and anally probes (You) and it ruins your marriage because it simultaneously violated your body but also felt better than anything you've done with your wife in bed, leading to you becoming obsessed with aliens because you not only want answers but hope to get probed again

stinky hairy neet unwashed manko.

sex with a slob

>>84993091
Hmm, as much as I'd like to feel your hole closing around my cock, it doesn't quite make up for writing a clingy, melancholic Gigi playing vidya with her childhood friend for the last time before he goes away for college, which leads to her admitting she never got over her puppy love and has wanted to give you her virginity since forever.

Tell you what, you write a story, no matter how good or how bad, and I'll give you the Gigi sex you want.

>>84993630
>Girls aren't suppose to be tall.
Don't let her hear that or she will become 8ft tall, tie you up and use your arm as a dildo.

>>84986308
>Gigi asking if she can roleplay as (You) in bed because she's been writing a selfcest fic about you

>>84996880
> Gigi just pulls out her phone and browses /r9k/ and sadpanda, roleplaying (you) when you first met
Bros, I don't think it's that hot anymore

>>84997270
>Raping Gigi because you're insulted by how OOC she's portraying you
>That was her plan all along

>>84890444
Shrunken Troubles with Nenechi and a beetle gangbang

>>84995834
>use your arm as a dildo.
How would that even work? I thought the whole point of a dildo is that you put it in a hole and thrust it up and down.

>>84997698
And your arm is going to be used as one.

For me it's plug-in type Asacoco

>>84999904
>Is -this-, your card?
>Pulls out a ring.

>>84993630
>Girls aren't suppose to be tall.
A crime against humanity and a massive tragedy against mankind, girls should only be 4 feet tall or 8 feet tall, enough of this tepid, caustic middle ground...

>>84988175
>"uuooohhh bratty anon needs correction"

>>85000294
Now that's a good way to win my heart.

>>84995361
I might got whatcha' need pal, but I'mma need some more deets before I share the good stuff, kapiche? How 'bouta name to start? This is high grade shit you're asking- not the kinda goods every floozy outta here deals in....

>>85002412
Im not showing my hand early so lets start easy:
North and South Korea.

Depressed Kronii and Nino Ina the dope

>>85003039
>depressed Kronii and NEET Ina are your roommates
>easy to live with, but their personal hygiene has taken a dive
>some accidental time fuckery from Kronii creates a time bubble that traps the three of you in one bedroom
>really hot and humid in there, everyone's stripped down to their underwear in no time
>the smell of Kronii and Ina's unwashed unshaved bush slowly fills up the room
and then sex happens for some reason, I don't know

>Open email
>No updates from the anons I BR for
Come on you faggots.
I NEED to know what happens.

>>85003615
Anon, I'm still writing...

>>85003423
>and then sex happens
Oh my God, someone give this man a Pulitzer. No, two of them!
Remember me in your acceptance speech

>>85003423
Two koreas is too much

>>85003615
>t. definitely not AZKi

You guys sleeping on koyosmell.
Sitting all day on her chair...

DeathClock anon again, back once more with draft 3. Any feedback is appreciated https://litter.catbox.moe/7yksey.pdf

>>85004868
I've gotten so used to my secon wife's smell that I don't even notice it anymore....

>>85004868
The smell of Koyori's chair vs Kaela's chair...

>>84890444
You are a fairly handsome lad, the talk of the office as the girls think of sinking their teeth into the new hire.
One thing impedes them, though. You are impossibly autistic.
>One coworker texts you asking what you're doing
>"Taking a bath"
>"Without me :C?"
>"Yes, I'm old enough to do it myself."
>"Can I see?"
>Send her a picture of the bathub with running water.
>"I meant you, seeing you."
>Send her a picture of you in your office clothes, same you used for your curriculum
>Next day, other coworker approaches you, asks if you want her phone.
>"No, I'm happy with this one. It was a nice 128GB of storage and 6Gbs of RAM."
>"No I meant my number."
>"Oh, also no. I don't want to swap my line."

Enter, Kaela.
>She wants you, and has no fucking idea how to get to you
>"Wow Anon. Nice belt."
>"Thanks."
>"Where did you buy it?"
>"I don't know, it was at the mall."
>"How much was it?"
>"9k yen."
>"Want to know how much it woud've costed if you bought 100?"
>"Sure"
>Wips out a calculator, multiplies 9 by 100, realizes it's wrong, then multiplies 9000 by 100.
>"That's how much it would be." She says.
>"Wow, that's expensive."
>"It sure is."
>Later, break time.
>Kaela offers you a pringle, instructs you to eat it with the arch down because it maximizes flavor
>Asks if you want to go over to her house after work
>"Not really. I want to play Elden Ring"
>"Ah, that's fair. Can we play together?"
>"Sure. You installed the seamless co-op mod?"
>"Yes. New characters? Mine is maxed out."
>"Okay. Mine is only at lvl 400 which is still high."

Sex optional. I just want autism interactions.

>>85008721
You should include sex scenes just because I imagine the description of two extreme autists having sex would be hilarious

How did Ninnisanni Anon do it? Did you write script first in story format then port it over? I assume Ren py was used. Does that thing support a visual novel style with only background art?

no dying

>had to do my first major rework of an entire chapter because out of the three tone adjustments to give levity to sad scenes, all of them were the characters getting shit faced drunk

is this a commentary on me?

watching Mori's 4th anni stream, keep the thread alive for me ogey?

>>85014739
IM GONNA BLOW IT UP

>>85014739
rape

>>85014866
Stop right there, Shiori! The only thing you're blowing around here is me! Now leave the thread alone, or else I'm not gonna give you any more of my story for your precious archive.

>>85014994

IM BLOWING THE THREAD UP! AGAIN!

>>85016658
Who will stand up to Shiori's latest unhinged tangent? Will anyone be strong enough?

>>85017183
*dudududududduu du dududududud du du du dududuuu*
>hi! its me shiori!
>Your tangent is pretty good! Can i debate it?

>>85017565
>Anon has faced monsters, strong women, and manmade horrors beyond comprehension, but this time, he may have met his match.
>This is one fight he can't use or fists or dick to win, he will have to use his words. He's fucked, and not in the way he wants to be.

>>85017820
i can defeat her. i played over 10 years of league of legends

>>84955973
Thanks for reading. I'll fix up those examples for clarity when I get the chance. I'm glad you liked the smithy scene. It was one of those scenes I kept returning to because I felt like "it needed more." So hearing it worked is great.

Well, the trio had already snubbed him. To them, Anon is a nonfactor in the moment, so he made himself a factor.

>>85019636
Ceci… what's that pink fluid…?

>>85019945
GERMAN SODA! ITS LIKE SODA! BUT BORING!

>>85021036
I hate how I read that in her voice

>>85022129
There's something amusing about Cecilia being against being turned into a bimbo sex robot while also being extremely earnest and happy to talk about the supplementary functions
>why yes! that's a sperm tray! thanks for noticing! this model here is the SP-34. It is discontinued yet but the airflow is GOOD

>>85021036
Some Germans drink Spezi. Don't look it up. But have Gigi secretly drink it in a fic somewhere.

>>85024641
>Ceci
Fuck, I have too much Gigi on the brain

>>85024641
I was expecting something putrid not just "That thing I'd do at the soda fountain when I was ten"

>>85024758
You looove her!
You're obsessed with her!

>>85025096
No, I will not commit to writing another flat-chested chuuba I had no prior experience with but ended up being quietly obsessed with oh fuck

>>84953976
For some reason this chapter is making me imagine that the setting is fantasy England, like the intent is obviously generic vaguely European jrpg/dragon quest type setting but like it made think of it like that.
Other than that, this chapter feels like it's playing it a bit too safe for how it wants to portray the events leading up to "drama points". Like the other anon said the other witches weren't being bitchy enough, and Miko and wasn't really pushing herself hard enough (in a way that shion can misunderstand).

>>85025600
Finally
>I Have an Egregiously Forbidden Relationship With My Younger Sister, Who Turned Out To Be The Internet Gremlin Gigi Murin!
>Pale Grem

>>85025096
Saying those words like that won't make you more desirable, Gigi. Go back to writing coffee shop AUs and imagining romantic relationships you will never have.

>>85025967
>Pale Grem
That fucking title. I hate it. I love it.
>An alternate universe where Anon doesn't have to deal with pointless drama and Suisei's bullshit
>Just pure, unadulterated Gigi sex

>>85027093
Ah, the secret third route where Anon meets a gremlin girl during his time in America and the Reunion with his sister happens because his girlfriend joins a wacky internet idol group.

>>85026126
Gigi's newest story features a self insert finding her ideal partner, before becoming a willing cuckquean to a cute guy fucking her bf's ass.

Extreme difficulty: describing a striptease in text successfully

>>85028866
Make it like a litrpg/ero rpg and describe it by way of the striptease doing lust damage afflicting arousal.

Limit Cut

>>85028162
>I was smoking outside my apartment in Torrance when my girlfriend began shouting from inside the house.
>"Anoooon! ANOOON!"
>It was so early in the morning, and we'd already gotten three noise complaints. I didn't want to talk with the super to deal with a fourth one. But I didn't want to make Gigi feel too bad either.
>"What?" I said, the cigarette still in my hand. "Keep it down-"
>"I GOT IN!" she yelled, jumping as she did. The carpet hardly muffled the excitement in her jumping. "I GOT INNNN!"
>"Got in where? Gigi, keep it down, will ya?"
>"You gotta look at this!" she said, pointing at my laptop. "You know that Japan thing?"
>"What Japan thing?" There was an email from something called "Cover Corp." It was that agency she applied to.
>"Oh, the guys you told about setting the backyard on fire..." That got me in trouble with the super. And the Fire Department. And the cops.
>"I said I was sorry! But that's not important now - Look there!"
>"'We are pleased to notify you, Gigi, that you've been accepted in our latest Gen...' Oh wow."
>"And they said I'm gonna go to JAPAN!"
>I raised an eyebrow. Japan. Just the mention that place already dredged up certain memories I'd rather forget about.
>"I thought they had an English branch," I said.
>"They do, but they're based in Japan and I'm gonna become an idol! 'Moe moe kyun' and stuff! And they want me to come next next week!"
>"That soon? But what about plane tickets?"
>"They got it covered! And they even said I can bring someone along..." She gasped. "Anon! You should, like, come with me!"
>"Huh? Why?"
>"Because! You're Japanese, right?"
>I tried taking a drag, but my cig had already died out. I was almost tempted to say 'no.' "Just because I am doesn't mean I want to go back there."
>"But I might get lost! They should I should go to Tokyo and I don't know Tokyo! Maybe I can Google Maps it or something, but it might be wrong or something. You guys use kilometers there, right? I don't know how to read kilometers-"
>"What do you mean 'you guys'? I use miles too, what the hell-"
>"And, and, I don't know how to speak Japanese." She paused, putting a hand to her chin to think for a bit. "You speak Japanese, right?"
>"Well, yeah, but-"
>"Come with me then! It'll be fuuun!"
>All I could do was sigh. There was just no arguing with this little gremlin.
>"Japan, huh..."
>I was looking at the laptop. Cover Corp. Hololive. An idol agency.
>My mind lingered on that word like it was some kind of profound quote. Idol.
>"I wonder how she's doing..."
>"What was that, Anon?"
>"Nothing. Alright, I'll go to Japan with you."
>The moment I said that, my girlfriend jumped. "YIP-PEEEEE!"
>"Gigi, keep it down-"
>"YIPPEEE!"

>>85029560
Wonder how this will somehow end up more tragic than Pale Blue.
>gremlin
I love how even in an internet idol (not vtuber) setting it's easier to accept the world having animal ear/fantasy creature minorities rather than stomaching the idea of some chuuba features just being in-universe costumes.

>>85029946
The only thing tragic here is that I haven't finished the fic yet kek
But it's going. For a measure of "going." Holoslavia too. Just gotta get certain things finished on my side. Hopefully the universe hasn't gone into heat death by then...

Baked.

>>85030901

Get the fuck in, NOW!

>>85009855
>Did you write script first in story format then port it over?
Yup. It helps to write it out like a stageplay script, with dialogue tags to save on editing later.
>I assume Ren py was used. Does that thing support a visual novel style with only background art?
Yep, Renpy was used and it absolutely supports that. Renpy can best be compared to a slightly more advanced powerpoint. There's a lot of freedom at the lower levels.
I feel like if people saw how simple and readable an average script file in renpy was, they'd be more inclined to pick it up.
The only time you really have to use your coding brain is if you like making fun menus and bonus content like me. And even then, I've never had to go outside the engine defined functions.

You should live. If not for yourself, then live for AZKi.

>>85032529
bump limit, sunshine