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This is the writing thread, for all things VTuber fanfiction. Our works cover a wide variety of different stories ranging from greentext shitposts, full-length adventure novels and smut that’s been tuned to capture (almost) every fantasy. You can check out the three years' worth of stories we’ve written in the archive below:
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(Where we talked about kids, reading minds, powerlevels, the essence of suisei, fancasting and how much Mococo hates Holosville)

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Story recap!

Two reports were filled last thread:

Feel The Burn
>>76736798
Tags: wedgie, nene, beach, hot day

Numbers
>>76743215
Tags: wedgie, pantsing, polka, achan, sora

>> No.76832207

>>76831993
/wg/ stands for wedgie general

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>>76832207
thought it was wrestling general

>> No.76832394

>>76831769
Man this outfit is so good looking

>> No.76832452

>>76832367
Look at that prime position

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>>76832207
>>76832367
thought it was wanking general

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>>76832394
i love the complete fit. Once you remove the coat is clear that Wada should be whipped and forced to learn how clothes actually work

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>>76832557
Ok yea wtf is going on those trousers?

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>>76832822
Wada loves skin windows and dumb clothes, nothing new there.In my opinion Kronii should take everything off if she's not using the whole fit

>> No.76833057

>>76832557
This image reminds me of Chow Yun Fat

>> No.76833177

>>76832822
It's called "creativity." Anyway, serious answer, it's an attempt to add visual interest to what would otherwise just be a plain pair of straight-front slacks. An interesting experiment, but I'm not sure it works in the context of such a rigid design. I'd have gone with a holster instead.
I think the asymmetrical cut leg design can work really well, but the cut needs to be higher, otherwise it starts to remind people of Tidus, and nobody wants to remember Tidus.

>> No.76833493

>>76833177
I think it could have gone better with a black band or just some flair in the pants, or as you said a holster.
My two cents is that clearly the artist wanted to indulge (like how the fairy tail guy gives everyone a side boob/clevage) and it doesnt make sense here, but since you NEVER see the legs of a chuuba, they thought "ah fuck it"

>> No.76833882

>>76833493
She should be wearing assless pants

>> No.76834101
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>>76831897
Anything involving height difference.
>You are the new manager of one of the taller holos
>You finally get to meet your oshi, but it turns out management fibbed a bit about their talents' heights
>Roboco (or another chuuba who could possibly be given a "new body") gets a new chassis that helps her stand out more on-stage
>you're just a short king and even the average-sized girls are tall compared to you

>> No.76834203

>>76833882
>assless
This reminded me of something that was shown for my class 20 years ago. It was a picture a prisoner's ass, or rather what's remaining of it. The other inmates had forced the guy to sit on hot sauna rocks. Shit was pretty fucked up.

>> No.76834299

>>76834203
What

>> No.76834540

>>76834299
Well, there was talk about saunas in one of the previous threads. Here you go, now you've got more sauna-related inspiration material.

>> No.76834605

>>76833882
She shouldnt wear anything from the waist down and then sit on my face >>76833882

>> No.76835438

>>76834540
Feels like that would be better suited for a different thread. I guess this is a nexus for all kinds of stuff though

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>>76834101
Speaking of height, the matter of Sakamata being only 148cm still weighs heavily on my mind. It's difficult to reconcile that fact with this body. Extremely distressing.

>> No.76835857

>>76835629
You gotta take some artistic liberties with their heights. The most I would say you have to be careful about is a chuubas height in relation to another. Like just remember who is actually shorter than another and maybe by how much.

>> No.76835959

>>76835857
>You gotta take some artistic liberties with their heights.
I guess. Now when I try to picture myself ravaging Chloe it looks like I'm fucking a midget.

>> No.76836041

>be part of the evil military
>Commander Kronii is obsessed with godlike powers.
>Whatever. She's just a flat annoying bitch
>Busts your ass like a slave for an artifact. You get it and She's all clacking and annoying
>Tell her that it might be a good idea to wait until the boys decode it
>She gets the power of a god alright. The power of a goddess of fertility
>She looks like an utter Bimbo and her uniform is bursting at the seams to try and contain her flesh
>Hmm maybe its time for the commander to payback all those abuses You went through

>> No.76836117

>>76835959
If it helps you can emphasize the heels of her boots giving her a boost. It won't matter for a lot of positions, but you got her back to a wall with one leg wrapped around your waist, and the over to the ground, it can probably work better.

>> No.76837155

>>76835959
She might be small, but she still has proper proportions. I think it's hot to have a small girl you can lift and hold easily, you could actually try stuff like reverse suspended congress.

>> No.76837720

>>76836041
>Boob window is due to her tits bursting out
Thats Genius honestly

>> No.76837861

>>76837155
>reverse suspended congress
That does sound pretty epic but I'm not writing a political thriller

>> No.76838151

>>76837861
It's a silly name, but a very hot position.

>> No.76839283

Did power scaling anon get the answer they needed?

>> No.76839295

>>76834101
Nerissa being super tall but she's also her wet cat self...

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The prompt about "(you) and Kiara giving Mori a really unforgettable Valentine's by railing her until she is a complete and utter mess" lives rent free in my brain

>> No.76839741

>>76839374
What ya gonna do about it, punk?

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>>76839374
she needs to be gasping for air by the endand then getting a mouthfull of chicken ass

>> No.76840458

>>76839374
Is mori bisexual or straight in this scenario? Could she be mindbroken into liking pussy too?

>> No.76840887

>>76839805
> kisses and making out with her
> kiwawa presenting mori to (you), locking her legs and arms, and (you) digging in with your tongue
> kiwawa holding mori down while (you) dick her down
> throatfucking a powerless mori while kiwawa is searching for the strap-om
> kiwawa from the front, (you) from the back
How much stamina do you need to have to pull this off...
> smiling at the photos 5 years later when the three of you are going to bed, your kids from both of them in the next room

>> No.76841301

>>76840458
I kinda assumed with this prompt that Mori is torn between (you) and Kiara and this is the way to bring her a very magical realization that she can do both
Or I misread but who cares, solving romantic troubles with a harem ending and double-teaming the indecisive eroge protag feels satisfying

>> No.76842220

>>76840887
>How much stamina do you need to have to pull this off...
Kiara would kiss your balls after every orgasm and little Anon rises from the dead

>> No.76842515

>>76842220
> reforging your dick in the fires of her immortal phoenix snatch to be able to satisfy Mori

>> No.76843102

>>76841301
i like the idea she's on the fence so Kiara can call her a little faggot and blow her mind

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Pet those who praise Ojou!

>> No.76843961
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>>76842220
>Kiara supercharges your balls to get her pregnant even though she's a magical being and you are human
Saving that idea aside

>> No.76845646

Live

>> No.76846604

Need a headpat contest fic where Anons send their best chuubas into battle where the only attack allowed are headpats and verbal praise
If they cum they are out
Last one standing wins

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>> No.76847884

>>76846604
Would many of them cum from those?

>> No.76848252

>>76847884
half the hazard is trying not to slip

>> No.76848477

>>76834101
>Be short guy
>Most girls are your height or taller, even into adulthood
>Get hired at Cover, work your way up to manager
>Most talents are so short you finally feel normal sized for once
>Then you get assigned as Calli's manager
>Tall Calli constantly laying her arms on top of your head
>Teases you about being short (while she's not wrong, she's oblivious to how tall she is for a girl)
>Get lots of hugs with a face full of boob
>Makes you wear her oversized shirts and takes pictures of you wearing them
>Loves 'comparing heights' anytime she has a flimsy excuse to do so
>Constantly grabs your arms, wraps a hand around your waist, playfully manhandling you

>> No.76850580

>>76848477
Then you file a sexual harassment complaint at HR

>> No.76852165

>>76850580
>Kiara's the HR lady
>she barely listens to your complaints and spends most of your visit on her phone
>when you ask if she's going to take action against Calli, Kiara finally looks up and scowls at you
>"For what? Being too tall? I can't believe you're wasting my time with this!"
>Kiara extends one of her stocking-clad legs and starts pressing against your crotch with her foot
>the pressure is right at the brink of pleasure and pain
>"Why should it matter if Calli's being touchy on the job? You should be focusing on your own responsibilities."
>she continues lecturing you with a generous helping of swears and personal insults thrown in
>you manage to excuse yourself before busting a load in your pants and hurry outside her office
>that went poorly, but surely someone at the company is willing to hear you out

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>> No.76854797

>>76829656
Simple, don't worry about it.
You're the author writing the story, not a versus debater coming up with an argument about why X can beat Y given the scenario Z.
So just focus on what'll make a good story and iron out the details in editing.

>> No.76856075

>>76847563
>>76854747
I love making my Enemy angry.

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>>76856075
Despite her insults and cries of indignation, this fox is unbelievably cute when she's mad.

>> No.76860611

>>76858827
bae should be manhandled more

>> No.76864544

>>76858827
God that Bae outfit is the definition of bullyable/ cuckable.

>> No.76867487

>>76847563
My sex enemy

>> No.76867627

>>76864544
those two are not exclusive

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>> No.76867987

>>75941782
If it makes you feel any better, anon, chapter 4 has about 5000 words so far, give or take. I've been taking stabs at it when I get the chance, but it's been a rough and busy patch lately.

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>> No.76873206

>>76867747
What da Noel lookin for?

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>>76831897
Surviving a zombie outbreak with Ririka

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I'll write... tomorrow...

>> No.76875651

>>76873975
wait. we dont have a honest to god zombie fic right?

>> No.76875998

>>76867987
Hey, no problem man. I've read your work and I can already guess just how much work goes into getting the car scenes to feel right, so no rush. I'm just glad to see it's still being worked on, really. Best of luck, Holoturismo anon.

>> No.76876035

>>76875651
Like apocalpytic? If so, Dark Medicine’s pretty close imo.

>> No.76876043

>>76875651
We had that one with Shiori in it, I think, but I don't recall whether or not that's been continued

>> No.76876359

>>76876035
>>76876043
i meant something like the typical "you find yourself in the middle of an outbreak and pick up a survivor".
In this case, i guess ririka would work since i like the idea of a surprisingly capable gyaru that's kind of a ditz

also yeah i samefagged, i will now commit seppuku

>> No.76876840

>>76876359
Make it High School of the Dead-tier horny and we'll be talking

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>>76876840
>Ririka helps you cave in an Abnormal Runner's head, cooks sausages with mayo and then shows you what she got when you two raided from the clothes storeand she hasnt bathed yet

>> No.76877575

>>76877118
>"Eh? Don't look, okay?"
>"I said no peeking!"
>"Ooh, that's... really stinky..."
>"Anon, did you hear that? I think someone broke the window... D-Don't stare at my panties! Go check it out! I'll follow when I find a skirt or something..."

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>>76877575
>Cliche Onsen/public bath scenario where you two split to shower
>There's zombies in both sides so you both jump the fence
>then jump it again
>"DAMMIT RIRIKA! JUMP"
>Battle against zombies while in towels
>Finish, end up bathing together. Water is now cold
>you kinda dont care about the eyecandy, you just want to be clean
>Ririka is mad you are not looking
Id be down for a black comedy slice of life story about the two of you triying to reach the military base where survivors are gathering

>> No.76878057

>>76875651
>>76876359
Isn't shadowlive basically that conceptually? Well sans zombies.

>> No.76878190

>>76878057
NTA but isnt shadowlive all about its expanding/rotating cast and how hopeless the world is?

>> No.76878261

>>76878190
I mean the bits of shadowlive that people liked where more the parts with rrat!Ayame and the shadow monsters.

>> No.76878308

>>76878261
fair enough.
I do think however that people dont appreciate a good zombie these days.
Like, not a super mutated hyper freak. Just a mindless bumbling corpse.

>> No.76878348

>>76878308
nta but I think we're still experiencing the great zombie crash of the 2010s and the genre has not yet recovered

>> No.76878510

>>76878308
Because the world has to bend over backwards for a zombie plague of slow dumbos to work. It forces incompetent characters for the plot to advance, rather than good zombies. Like, make a wall, 3m tall, a watch tower or two. Bam. Safe forever. But with super zombies, the characters have to actually be smart and resourceful and the plot can advance even when the people are actually doing things right.

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>>76878057
I mean the zombies are just there so you two can have adventures around a city that's not utterly destroyed but also has a bunch of stuff that you can use for fun, self defense and sex
Besides, humans are the real monsters yadda yadda
>Ririka gets captured by raiders
>Sneak in to save her because goddamit this stupid gyaru might cause trouble and its gonna get you killed but life just isnt the same if she's not around also pussy game is absurd
>she's tied up. Get to her and remove the tape
>"nyah~"
>look her dead in the eye
>Re-tape her and leave with your tied up gyaru

>> No.76878616

>>76859845
Friend of mine really likes her

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>>76878308
I prefer a Crossed-style apocalypse myself, really.

>> No.76879035

>>76878348
true
>>76878510
Well that's because you are seeing it wrong. Zombies are never meant to be "the ultimate unstoppable threat" in that kind of scenario. All the cliches come from Day of the Dead and similar movies that worked those perfectly: how compliance and human pride/greed fucks you over even when facing a dumb and stupid adversary.
You build the wall. Good. Now how do you feed the people inside? did you build near a river? are the checkpoints strict? is the church going well so the religious crowd doesnt fuck everything up? is the lab running so the cientistis dont fuck up? how do you build the wall?
The beauty of slow zombies is that they dont seem urgent, except they are. I once read a book that was kind of bad but it had the correct idea of taking place at the second outbreak
>rich people see an outbreak and inmediatly wall themselves off. Some of them are not well equiped or dont know what to do with their generators/stuff
>the /k/ crowd generates more deaths because aiming a gun is hard specially if the target moves or people run into you
>poor people are good at surviving, but invade rich peoples houses and overloot/accumulate a lot

Basically it wasnt stupid, but it was the humans fucking up everything in logical ways because "oh its just a slow zombie, i can just prepare". The name is lost on me though

>> No.76879091

>>76878709 (me)
>>76831897
Come to think of it, a HoloCrossed fic would sound pretty neat.
>Dangerous sex maniac Marine
>Sadistic cock-pulling Kanata
>Fubuki specifically targets kids
>Matsuri breaks out a car battery and hooks your nuts to it. Also piss.
>Pekora shoves carrots up your ass I dunno
And then it's the basic "oh fuck oh shit we gotta get outta here" with the chuuba of your choice as the entire Hololive office goes apeshit while some of them shout "HAHAHA FAGGOTS HAHAHA IM COMIN!!" as they chase after you two

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>>76879035
I fucking hate "humans were the real monster all along" tropes so I guess I can't relate at all. I like my fantasy to be centered around the fantasy elements.

>> No.76879338

>>76852165
Then you realize no one is gonna help you so you shoot up your workplace and kill yourself at the end

>> No.76879426

>>76879091
I know this is meant as a violent battle fic kind of deal but... The coombrain is making me imagine something like The Hormoning concept or like a monster girl apocalypse type scenario where all the (non-human) girls go insanely fucking horny.
Now it's up to you to escape with your dignity intact.
With maybe a manipulative girl being your partner whose real goal is to isolate you when you finally make your escape.

>> No.76879461

>>76879227
I think you are missing the tree from the forest here.
The zombies ARE the monster, its just easier to fall into the clutches of the monster if people around you fuck you over or over indulge because the monster is dumb.
Think of it as petsitting a turtle. You go "its a turtle, how fast can it go?" And you fuck it up because you donw know how steady its pace is, how it can actually move at a decent speed, how it blends with the foreground and how it doesnt make a sound and then boom! You lost it because you think a turtle would go to the backyard but the turtle went to the front yard through the dog's hatch.

You didnt get outsmarted. You took everything for granted and failed to properly plan something as simple as "this guy loves to walk in a straight line"

>> No.76879597

>>76879338
>Whoa Anon that was pretty sick
>Don't worry everyone shoots up the Cover Offices every once in awhile
>Though you're going to have to do a little something for me if you want to get resurected~

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>>76879426
>Everyone at the Holo office is starting to become crossed
>Yagoo is fucking a Pekora plushie, A-Chan and Nodoka are taking turns sodomizing a poor intern with a steel pipe, and the rest of the girls are raising all sorts of hell
>But Sora seems fine, so you take her with you
>Fight through the Crossed who do everything and anything to catch you and peel your skin off
>Escape
>Whew, glad we made it outta there huh Sora
>Turns out she was actually a smart Crossed like Beauregard Salt and now she has you all to herself

>> No.76880411

>>76879426
>Helpful, pleasant girl that just so happens to always find you when you're in a pinch but never asks for anything in return was manipulating you the entire time to keep you all to herself
Has this been done before? I love this idea...

>> No.76880592

>>76880411
I think it's never really been done especially since standard yandere girl got fired in 2022 and no one's really stepped up to take that template.
Though on that note, it does sound like a good surprise yandere thing. Could be a good base for a one-shot.

>> No.76880781

>>76879597
>I'm never gonna get out of this loop aren't I?
>well you know what they say
>ain't no rest for the wicked
>music plays and credits roll

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>> No.76881577

>>76881010
Needs a leash on that collar

>> No.76882819

>>76879091
>>Sadistic cock-pulling Kanata
>>Matsuri breaks out a car battery and hooks your nuts to it. Also piss.
>>Pekora shoves carrots up your ass I dunno
All of these at the same time

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>> No.76884668

>>76881577
And my hand will be on that leash.

>> No.76885531

>>76884061
POV: You're sitting in a chair

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>> No.76886648

>>76884668
> and my bow
> and my axe

>> No.76887869

>>76886648
Please don't put your axe on the leash

>> No.76887899

https://youtube.com/watch?v=75toKjnbb2w

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>>76887899

>> No.76888936

>>76887899
>>76888854
when are we getting the "refiring a diying star" with Azki?
When is this hag getting dicked? you guys wouldnt lie and not write about her...would you?

>> No.76889761

>>76888936
Allegedly, someone had done it already

>> No.76891810
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>>76831897
going to a haunted house with Towa and then havingto spend the night comforting her

>> No.76891812

>>76888936
Look man there's a lot of chuubas I'd like to write

>> No.76892697
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Alright, I don't really like doing this because I want to be able to do this on my own but I'm struggling a bit for some reason, and need some advice.

Where I'm at in my fic, the mc went to bed for the night. I had this idea to possibly add a scene between the mc going to sleep and waking up. I'm struggling if it should be a flash back, A foreshadowing of characters tied to an event later in the chapter, or something foreshadowing an event in a later chapter, or if I even need this scene at all and should just have the mc go to sleep then wake up but that seems weird to me too. I'm more than likely overthinking it but maybe someone can give me a nudge or a kick in the ass to help me a little

>> No.76892987

>>76892697
vagueposting does nothing. we need context. Meanwhile have this

If the scene is plot relevant,why is it a dream? is it a prophetic dream? is it a realization? is it a self fullfilling prophecy?

If the scene is not plot relevant but still important, why is it there? character building? foreshadowing? what's its purpose?

If the scene is not plot relevant and not important. Why are you hung up on it? is it part of something else? is it necessary that its there? can it be moved? can it be cut?

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>>76892697
Well I think it largely depends on what you want to convey to the reader at that point in time. Is your MC possibly having some emotional or mental stress over something at the time? If so a dream can be their attempt to work through it, and it doesn't need to be overly complicated or involved either. A simple orchestration of heavy emotions followed by either waking to an epiphany, or a cold sweat. A little sprinkle of foreshadowing is never a bad idea either, but if it's something that happens later in the same chapter, it can be kinda vague since it'll be reached soon.
As for flashbacks, if it's a relevant past event to whatever the MC is experiencing in the present, that could be appropriate, but be careful with how detailed you get with it. Sometimes what can be done with an involved flashback can also be done with a simple recollection and evaluation.

>> No.76893596

>>76892697
Write it then purposefully excise it in the review copy you send to your beta readers. If they think something seems missing then you should re-add the scene you wanted in the first place.

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having slept on it for a while, i think Choco fits a "zombie outbreak" scenario a bit more
>playful and kind of problematic without being a bitch
>high living standards make her annoying. the type to force you to sleep in beds and refuses to do her business in the wild
>sleepyhead that will cuddle you no problem
>capable enough to survive, still needs you to pull her out of binds
>romance avenue where her imposible standards are finally met (not many men can cave in a creature's head AND princess carry her)
>hot as fuck
>dusty eggs

>> No.76894563
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>>76892987
>>76893107
I didn't want to give away too much. I thought it would make more sense to have something there. not so much a revaluating dream as it is a cut away to another character either introducing the conflict of the arc that this character is associated with, or what have you. but then I'm worried I'll give away too much too soon.

forgive me once again if I'm being obtuse

>>76893596
I don't have a person who can beta read sadly. all I got is tossing a dart in the anchor and pray it sticks somewhere halfway decent.

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>>76894563
It's alright to keep the details of the sauce to yourself for now, you're asking a high level enough question that story details aren't super needed. I guess on the topic of the potential cut away being a different character putting the wheels of the conflict in motion, is it a character the reader is aware of already? It kinda sounds like you want to write a brief intermission to help set the stage from behind the curtain while time transitions. I dig that kinda thing. The key is in the early stages you treat it with a very light hand if that makes sense. Don't give away more than you need to at the moment, and keep in mind what you plan to reveal later on.
As for beta readers, you can take a gander at the list we got on the archive and email whoever you might be comfortable with giving your stuff a look over. They're all pretty swell and likely wouldn't turn you away, and your story will benefit greatly from another set of eyes on it.

>> No.76895655

>>76892697
Is it a dream?

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>>76894932
>is it a character the reader is aware of already? this would be the character's first appearance, hence why I'm sort of torn on how to approach it because if I'm too vague the readers will have no idea who it is, but if i give away too much, I accidently spoil something that was supposed to be a reveal for later.

Honestly the thought of asking someone to be a beta reader is giving me cold feet. (just asking advice like is pretty hard for me) But i understand where you're coming from. and I know having a second person give you nudges along the way help in thew long run. I just gotta work up the courage to ask someone on the rolodex.

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>>76894932
>is it a character the reader is aware of already?
this would be the character's first appearance, hence why I'm sort of torn on how to approach it because if I'm too vague the readers will have no idea who it is, but if i give away too much, I accidently spoil something that was supposed to be a reveal for later.

Honestly the thought of asking someone to be a beta reader is giving me cold feet. (just asking advice like is pretty hard for me) But i understand where you're coming from. and I know having a second person give you nudges along the way help in thew long run. I just gotta work up the courage to ask someone on the rolodex.

>> No.76895920

>>76894563
>I don't have a person who can beta read sadly. all I got is tossing a dart in the anchor and pray it sticks somewhere halfway decent.
Look it up in the archive. There's a list of anons with emails ready and willing to beta read /wg/ fics. Just ask and 90% of them will help.

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>>76831897
Oyakodon

>> No.76896286

>>76895927
With aunt and aunt's friend, yes.

Btw, Pochi is older than Reine ye?

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>>76895884
For intermissions that introduce new characters, it helps to use a scene that gives the reader a little bit of knowledge about them, and it can be something unrelated to the thing you're going to foreshadow. If you write them doing a seemingly insignificant task, the way they carry themselves in performing it can help to paint that picture for a reader. If you are going for a conflict orchestrator kind of thing, they don't have to do anything more than show that they're putting their pieces onto the board and making their move. Like they just finished up prepping what they need to kick off their plan, or maybe even finalizing the details of the plan itself. Make the intermission more about the character itself than the plot points that come with them. Those will reveal themselves in time, make your reader intrigued over this mystery dude and the role they will come to play.
If it makes you feel better, emailing someone to take a look at your work only requires slightly more courage than posting your work for anyone to see. You're pretty much there, and like others have said, the readers on that list are there to help. The worst they can say is no, right? Right?!

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>>76896455
>The worst they can say is no, right? Right?!
>the foreboding nature of his sentence made me more anxious somehow
Joking aside, Thanks for the advice. I appreciate it a lot and hopefully will nail this scene if nothing else.

>> No.76897364

>The worst they can say is no, right? Right?!
I should open up a fanfic heckling service and advertise it on the author contact page

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>>76897160
Give it your all.

>> No.76898523
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>>76897364
Ironically, being told I can't do something seems to work much better to motivate my lazy ass than being told I'm doing a good job. I blame that on my upbringing, but maybe I'm just a contrarian bastard.

>> No.76899840

>>76898843
Look at this guy, he can't write hag harems for shit. I bet he'll pull a George R. R. Martin and write slower and slower as he realises he's not up for the task.

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>>76896286
If by friend you mean mother then yes
I believe so

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>>76899840
Did you just take a wild guess or am I that easily recognizable? You're scaring me, anon.

>> No.76901514

If your next story would turn into reality, what would you write?

>> No.76901724

>>76900991
I'm a big fan of your series and your contribution to discussions! I usually can't tell if I'm right or wrong about which posts are yours of course, but I feel like I know your typical image and writing style. Even though I'm ESL.

>> No.76901876

>>76901514
Ayame abducts me into her idyllic oni village where we live a happy life as a couple and she teaches me swordfighting

>> No.76902256

>>76898843
Same. Spite is the greatest motivator.

>> No.76902337

>>76901514
Mio lets me unwind on her bosom as I tell her of all my troubles, and then she just says "It's okay to give up"
I do not wake up.

>> No.76902380

>>76831897
Ayame drives a Honda Civic and accidentally kills a korean

>> No.76902402

>>76901514
gura kills all her fans then retires and lives a happy life

>> No.76902425

>>76902380
'accidentally'

>> No.76902447

How many different works with hag harems are being worked on at the moment?

>> No.76902483

>>76902447
Not enough clearly

>> No.76903840

Survive

>> No.76904119
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>>76902483
It's never enough. I honestly can't for the life of me think of more than 2 in progress at the moment
>HoloFantasy
>my own

>> No.76905434

Stop dying

>> No.76905438

You mustn't die!

>> No.76905450

>>76831897
Having a lazy morning with your girlfriend Laplus before you two go to work, her as the demon king attempting to take over the world with HoloX and you as the hero thwarting them.

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>>76905450
>Lui's face when you and Laplus get a little too cozy on the battlefield and not only does it thwart HoloX's newest scheme, it costs the organization too many financial setbacks.
>Lui has fucking had it with Laplus treating it like some kind of romantic game between the two of you

>> No.76906672

>>76901514
I would first of all upgrade myself into some sort of keiretsu heir straight out of 00's anime with a fancy mansion and all that shit.
Ayame = wife
Chloe = #1 mistress
Marine = secretary/mistress
Suisei = driver/mistress
Fubuki = butler/mistress
Aqua = maid/mistress
Koyori = doctor/mistress (I'm not really a Choco guy sorry)
Roberu = chef
Pekora = friend from university/politician/mistress
Nenechi = friend from university/philosopher/mistress
Lamy = some elf hobo/drinking buddy/mistress
Shion & Laplus = sex slaves in my secret sex dungeon

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>>76831897
Making out with Mori! Frotting with futa Mori! Mori gets so excited and overwhelmed that she starts crying! Mori's cute cries filling your ears as you rub her cute tiny penis against yours! A very pent up Mori cums so hard she covers both yours and her tummy in white!

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>>76906500
>Lui walking in on the "demon king dominates the defeated hero/hero dominates the defeated demon king" role play for the fifth time

>> No.76907856

>>76905450
>Lui watching Laplus berate and execute her lower minions like she didn't just walk in on Anon whispering to her that she was his little princess of darkness afterwards.
>Lui sitting in a strategical meeting looking at Laplus' messy hair knowing Anon just got done rearranging her guts
>Lui wincing at how Laplus says they have to seige a beach that is highly guarded knowing damn well she's going to play in the water with Anon while her troops get slaughtered
>Lui watching Laplus act all unbothered and mighty like she didn't just have a moment with her boyfriend and he had to calm her down.
>Lui watching one of the goons celebrate that he hurt the hero pretty badly knowing that Laplus will have him executed for harming her prince.

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>>76907856
>How did it come to this?
>Lui worked so hard to get this far; Finding the ancient Laplus demon and manipulating her into believing that she needed her executive skills to conquer the world
>Find uniquely talented minds and muscle to help ensure any mission would be a success
>Pour entire fortunes into your organization
>Puppet politicians behind the scenes, plant false rulers, slowly make the message of HoloX known within the shadows for those who want change
>All of it, fucking uprooted by a simple man who wanted to play hero, all because a lapse in judgement allowed Laplus to attempt to deal with the upstart herself
>They fucking fell for each other, like 2 hormonal teenagers
>All you've worked for, is just the stage for a fucking kinky game between the two of them
>Anon won't bend to their side, even though he's FUCKING its leader nightly, and Laplus won't give up her own ambition, but with how half-assed she approaches it now, true world domination is impossible
>Lui was never one to give up, through every relationship, there is a loophole to exploit, evade, or create
>Perhaps it's time Laplus and her hero truly tie the knot.
>An unholy union such as this could have all sorts of rules, preexistence or made specifically for such an occasion
>What's his is hers, and what's hers is his, but more importantly
>What belongs to My Darkness, belongs to Lui

>> No.76909193

>>76906672
And they're all happy with it?

>> No.76909457

>>76909193
Not my problem

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>>76909457
I might have to kill you if you cuck Ayame against her will.

>> No.76909753

>>76909525
There's no such thing as cucking a woman. It's a good and natural thing for a man to gather for himself as many beautiful women as possible.

>> No.76910130

>>76831897
Can someone write a fic of any holo besides Kiara smashing your pelvis with their fat ass to the point of injury. You plead and beg for them to stop but they refuse

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What's important is that the women know who is where on the pecking order. Some positions are absolute, but others are subject to change.

>> No.76910512

>>76909130
>Lui grooms their child to take over the world

>> No.76910651

>Towa puts your dick in her mouth in a non sexual way to calm her nerves and curb her smoking addiction.

I've been doing some thinking, what if you scrubbed that off the face of the earth and replaced it with this:

>To help Towa with her smoking problem you instead buy her things like:

>- Candy cigarette's.
>- lollipop's of all sorts of flavours that she can snack on although it might do a nasty work on her teeth if she becomes a sweet addict.

It would then fit her "dorky dweeb" character would it not? She'd never need to lower herself by putting a DICK in her mouth that may or may not erupt into her unsuspecting mouth.

>> No.76911414

>>76909130
>What belongs to My Darkness, belongs to Lui
Reverse Laplus' bastard hero NTR prompt, where Laplus is the one cucked by her henchmen!

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>>76878261
Shadowlive suffered too much from forcing the plot too much instead of focusing on the stuff people, which was the characters. Pic not related I just like this image

>> No.76912562

>>76910512
>"okay my lord. First we are learning how to introduce excess gold into an economy to make it crash so we can then fund PMCs to take power"
>"dada?"
>"Well yes, we could also do that, but Pump and Dump schemes and paper-based currencies hold different values and that makes it take more time. The gold value is, however, a valid concern for you to have"
>"dada!"
>"No! Last time i gave you uppies we skipped how to pose in a throne! I am NOT letting you end like your mother"

>> No.76912699

>>76910651
That's just a different prompt. I prefer the dick one, as long as Towa and her bf are happy with the arrangement.

>> No.76912763

>>76905450
Sounds like a sequel to the "you finally invade Laplus' base only to be treated to a date by the Darknesss herself" idea.

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>>76831897
irys turns into cheebs and you use it like a onahole

>> No.76913300

>>76912699
>\"That's just a different prompt.\"

Yeah, I know. I probably shouldn't have lingered in that "Explain this behaviour" thread because I blame that for giving me that idea in the first place.

>\"I prefer the dick one,\"

Same (seeing as I was the one that originally made it), I probably shouldn't have said "what if you scrubbed that off the face of the earth" because I REALLY wouldn't have wanted that at all. What I SHOULD have said was probably this:

>"What if you tweaked the original prompt a little?"

>\"as long as Towa and her bf are happy with the arrangement.\"

Oh that would DEFO happen as there's no way in HELL my prompt idea would have it done with Towa doing it against her will. It would have been done with 100% consent but maybe I should have thrown that "sweet" thingy when I originally made that dick prompt, correct?

Sorry typing in the dark is so annoying ya know?

>> No.76913387

>>76893596
My man offers doing A/B testing on beta readers

>> No.76913391

>>76913300
You're so passionate about Towa having your dick in her mouth all the time that I almost have to write about it a bit

>> No.76913455

>>76884061
Why does she look disappointed yet aroused...

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>>76911414
That's not what this is. Stop doing that. Do you want your ass kicked?
>>76910512
That was actually a thought I had while I was writing that section. The idea that Lui shifts her focus to your eventual child with Laplus to be the supreme overlord with her as their guide.

>> No.76913869

>>76913391
Umm... I don't want to be rude when I say this anon but when folk bring that prompt up that's not me. That's other folk who for some reason like my silly prompt even though it makes no sense whatsoever.

>\"that I almost have to write about it a bit\"

I mean, if you REALLY want to I won't stop you ya know? But I honestly think (and again I don't mean that in a rude way) it's best that it doesn't. Like, I only brought the prompt up (because I was curious about what it'd be like if it were tweaked a little) because I happened to linger on "Explain this behaviour" thread and get bombarded with Towa's dorky, dweeb existence.

It'd be like say (and this is just an experiment prompt).

>(You) taking Ayame to the store to get her favourite flavour of ice-cream (strawberry which is also totally not my favourite) and then having to try and calm her down when she throws a massive temper tantrum because they don't have her favourite flavour and you have no means of transport to get her favourite flavour.

And then this prompt sits in your head rent-free whenever you see an Ayame image. its a stupid, silly prompt (that clicks in your head) and it keeps coming back to you when Ayame gets posted.

>> No.76913944

>>76910651
There are some "sugarless" lollipops and cough drops and whatnot, and there are tastless varieties as well (were pretty popular during the 'rona in Japan, when people complained of dry mouth after hours of wearing a mask, so they ate the regular cough drops and quickly got sick of their taste, so they made tasteless varieties)
But constantly looking at Twappi sucking on the drops would drive me nuts. Imagine her rolling the drop around and it making noise when knocking against her teeth, hearing her suck on it and gulp down the excess saliva, seeing as she teasingly sticks her tongue out, covered in spit. I would probably go feral

>> No.76914383

>>76913764
>That was actually a thought I had while I was writing that section. The idea that Lui shifts her focus to your eventual child with Laplus to be the supreme overlord with her as their guide.
Meanwhile, Lappy and Anon fucked off to the middle of nowhere to be the gigglin hormonal teenagers they are.
Just as Anon Jr. matures and gets ready to rule over the world, the kingdom of light has birth a new Heroine to stop him, Iroha!
Which in turn, was raised by one of Anon's advisors, who basically did exactly what Lui does but for the hero. And then Anon Jr. and Iroha fall in love!
Cue Lui and the advisor falling in love, bonding over their massive failures for world domination/protection.

>> No.76914656

>>76913944
I've never heard of tasteless sweets (it came up as "flavourless" when I looked it up on google) and I'm not sure I'd even want to try them. I'm the kind of person who's prefer their stuff having flavour in it (even if its 100% bad for my teeth).

>- Being a demon Towa's teeth NEVER go bad as long as she's eating things like candy / sweets. She has to take care of her teeth if she eats other sugary substance though.

Do you think this would be a good alternative? Or would the flavourless sweet / candy you mentioned be better?

And as for your second part, while it didn't turn me on at all I will admit I didn't think of anything sexual when I brought up the "sweet" part. I was just thinking about her smoking addiction.

>> No.76915314

>>76913944
As someone who was heavily addicted to Marijuana, chewing gum was my salvation. I used to eat 20-30 a day.

>> No.76915368

>>76913869
What prompt are you most passionate about, then?

>> No.76915544

>>76915368
None. I just make prompts (even if they are stupid) and if someone likes it, then it makes me feel a bit happy (although it would make me question why they like it because my choice of prompts are really, really odd).

Am I ungreatful if someone likes my prompt that much that they decide to take a dab at it and write it? heck no! Hell, there was one prompt I made and someone actually "did" write it. But I'm not sure if they actually liked the prompt or they only did it because I said "mio".

>> No.76915637

>>76915544
Come on, you must have a story that you would like to see written.

>> No.76916119

>>76915637
>\"you must have a story that you would like to see written.\"

Before I answer that question, do you mean:

>- Stories of prompts that I made that I'd like written
>- Stoires of prompts that people have made that I'd like written

Because I did have this well thought out reply made but I deleted it before I hit enter because I wanted to know what you meant by your question.

>> No.76916257

>>76916119
I mean both, really. It can make sense to have a favorite among your own prompts, and a favorite among all prompts.

>> No.76916659

>>76916257
Then there's only one I want to see written. Well, a sequel actually, but still written.

>"Remembering how to love her"

It won't happen though and wihle I am kinda gutted (not a lot mind you), I am perfectly fine with it because I'm positive the person who created that behemoth probably got drained dry after they finished it. They also would have no clue how a sequel would work (again, I am perfectly fine with that).

I just really hope that I didn't come off as rude when I said that. Actually, now that I've said this, there's also three others I wouldn't mind seeing get a sequel (but I know is impossible but doesb't bother me).

>- Sequel to "Interrogation".
>- A "maybe" third part of Foxes over Ducks.
>- A "maybe" on that non magical menhera wrangles story with the massive dick MC that everyone on here disliked

>> No.76916748

>>76916659
>the person who created that behemoth probably got drained dry after they finished it.
That'd be AA and all of his creative efforts go towards Holofantasy, for better or worse

>> No.76916946

>>76916748
Wait, its really AA that made it? I honestly thought it was someone entirely different who liked that omelas universe and went "hey, lets give it a go" and then got drained dry after writing it.

>> No.76917096

>>76916946
'Twas indeed AA. Back when we had the /wg/ pastebin, he had it grouped up with the rest of his fics

>> No.76917198

>>76917096
I really hope he doesn't take this the wrong way but hearing that he wrote that behemoth has made me respect him. And that's totally not because he wrote such a hot Fubuki rape story.

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>I'm not gay peko... stop...

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>>76918459
>Unfortunately those words didn't stop Miko

>> No.76919294

>>76905450
>>76906500
>>76907119
>>76907856
>>76909130
absolutely enamored with all of this

>> No.76920455

>>76906672
>Average CYOA image builds be like:

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>> No.76921509

>>76921241
What fic has made you act like this?

>> No.76922978

>>76916946
My personal rrat is that AA left/abdicated to focus on his career as Shiori

>> No.76923380

>>76921509
It’s the final installment of the KFP quadrilogy for me. Femdom isn’t my thing, but I’m starting to appreciate getting (wo)manhandled by stacies

>> No.76923670

>>76831897
Mint sucks doki's cock

>> No.76923861

>>76921241
Our cures when Ayame gets rejected, even if the Aqua parts feel rushed.

>> No.76925368

>>76921509
The Holopocalypse remake

>> No.76925890
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76925890

>>76915368
NTA but those Laplus NTR ideas are weirdly permanently stuck in my head. From the bastard hero revenge one, to more recently that shard of Laplus is in your head and making you think your party is being NTR'd one. It's enough that I've made rough outlines for both of them even if I haven't had the time to actually write.

>> No.76927995

>>76925890
Care to share those outlines or are you planning to ever finish them? Genuinely do want someone to give the NTR Lap prompts a try as well.

>> No.76928670

>Sana and San come to visit
>While Sana is catching up, San is being a shitty brat and walking around
>accidentally walks into a shareholder meeting
>"damn girl, walking into a meetin! correction!"
>All the ojisans gang up on San. He shows his dick and calls them gay with a cheeky smile
>It lasts a solid minute before he's on his knees being forced to suck cocks
>Wreck the boy. Every single ojisan gets multiple rounds in
pounding San and taunting him for being a girl that will never use that dick for anything!

>> No.76929761

>>76927995
The outlines I've made aren't really in a state to be shared. They're more like idea piles I occasionally add on to.
The one I've had the most piled on to is the bastard hero one. Because I want to write the hidden twist version where (You) are actually Laplus' childhood friend Iroha.

>> No.76932158

>>76919294
I like the dichotomy between the romcom part and Lui seething because her plans getting derailed

>> No.76932758

>>76932158
I mean from the sounds of it this seems like it would have to be either primarily a Laplus romcom with occasional Lui interludes about her latest scheme to break the two apart... Or it's entirely a Lui thing with every chapter about her seething as she loses in her attempts to break the couple up again and again in a way that she's pretty sure they have no clue that she's even doing anything.

>> No.76933292

>>76923670
I don't know about futa yuri, but we definitely need some Mint sex in here. There's so many positions that become possible when you're doing it with a ghost. Also she's a cute socially awkward hag.

>> No.76934395

>>76922978
It is strangely funny how the timeline for AA slowly reducing his archiving duties here lines up with Shiori starting training.

>> No.76936419
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76936419

>>76921509
Paradise Lost of course

>> No.76936988

>>76933292
She could blow you while looking in the same direction as you, starting from the base and going to the tip.

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>>76831897
A resident evil spoof where Chuubas are sick and you have to escape the office (that is full of obtuse puzzles because Yagoo invested in some new tech security system) while avoiding getting the flu before the big concert

also Anon is a RE4 leon parody where he'll do backlflips and one liners for no reason

>> No.76938849

>>76936988
Wouldn't that just feel worse since the tip is the best part?

>> No.76939337

>>76938849
Yes, but it's the novelty that makes it fun.

>> No.76939848

>>76938849
Counter argument:rimjob and blowjob at the same time

>> No.76940152
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Tail jobs?

>> No.76941540

>>76831897
Still looking for that story of Anon fixing (x chuuba) who has fallen so deep into despair, their usually bright selves have detoriated (ie Botan becoming nihilistic, Calli/Suisei being doormats, Sora's singing being phoned in, etc)

>> No.76941571

>>76939848
Why would you need a rimjob when she could directly lick your prostate?

>> No.76942075
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>>76941571
>Watching TV with your ghost gf's head in your lap
>Glance down to see if she's sleeping(Or the closest ghost equivalent)
>Make eye contact as she looks smug and her head slowly disappears into your body
>Suddenly feel her tongue press against your prostate
glad she's still capable of silly body shenanigans

>> No.76942599

>>76940152
Risu edging you with her tail until she finishes you off with a blowjob

>> No.76944759
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76944759

>>76831844
Re-anchoring Holoshorts finally.
This one's been a long time coming because there were a lot of words, haha
Additions:
-Hoshimatic Project
-Shiori and Nerissa
-Fuwawa and Mococo

And with that, I believe I've hit every Hololive member I set out to. Do I plan to let this project die? No, I'll probably keep tacking onto it every now and then. I might shove some more recent stuff into it. But for the time being, the goal is accomplished!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTHQNoyNK1_zHfuT4kP0bJdxTCWMilPc6L1eNFwJYbZVcyspsJFyIkCMQfXT58CGVuoA0oixd_PtCoh/pub

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>> No.76949912

>>76942075
We are talking about Minty bringing pleasure to (you) in increasingly mindblowing and deranged ways, but what about reciprocating and making her feel good? How would you >imagine that?
> essentially bondage play with sealing talismans you got from a sketchy-looking shrine maiden you pretty sure was just a cosplayer

>> No.76950735

>>76944759
What holomems are missing?

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76950790

>>76831897
Botan abuse

>> No.76950903

>>76949912
I'd use salt to prevent her from moving, and a magic rune to make my dick ectoplasmic.

>> No.76951272

>>76950790
>anon, this is a really bad idea that's a fully grown lioness. for all we know she could be in heat
>fuck you! I'm going to beat that slut into submission!
>the sounds of a grown man screaming while a lion tears him apart can be heard off screen while Anon watches on in horror. If only he tried harder to stop his companion

>> No.76951993

>>76951272
Okay unrelated but this is just making me imagine some pseudo-intellectual monologue getting interrupted
>"And so the cycle continues, of idols soaked in the blood sacrifice of their faithful, of -
>Anon you literally don't have to keep doing this. I'm not a youkai from gens*kyo, I can just buy meat from the supermarket.

>> No.76953409

>>76951993
> Japa*ese cens*r th*t does*'t cen*or an*thing
Why is this a thing in more ways than one??

>> No.76953716

>>76953409
So they have an alibi if/when they get sued for copyright infringement, though it's also partly done for laughs. You'd be surprised but Japanese people can be litigious as fuck.

>> No.76953976

>>76953409
In more 'realistic' works it helps to keep dialogue realistic if they ever have to refer to real brands since off-brands like Polystation work as sight gags but not when they're said outloud.
Also in written works it is kind of funny to use since it's basically the equivalent of a curse word bleep.

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>>76953976
I love fake brands in media. I want to use SS-Übermarket, but sadly no one outside of Spurdoland would get the reference.

>> No.76954392

>>76831897
an Ultimate Muscle style fic where all the chuba are in a wrestling torment but still have their abilities

>> No.76954563

>>76954392
I was afraid you'd mention Azki for a second.

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76954569

>>76954392
Could be fun if someone made a chuuba scenario for EWR 4.2. Just put all of Hololive and Nijisanji in one promotion, and make holos faces and nijis heels.

>> No.76954679

>>76831897
Chuubas playing poker/mahjong but they're all blatantly cheating using their magical abilities and it's up to you to try and beat them using only your wits (also cheating but like without supernatural assistance).

>> No.76954747
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>>76954679
Who would be the Goddess of Gamblers?

>> No.76956534
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>> No.76957523

>>76950735
Only regloss afaik

>> No.76958105

>>76956534
Not sure if I wanna be Marine or Shion here.

>> No.76958121

>>76956534
If it weren't for the filename saying her name I would have thought that girl on the left was an extremely young looking Lui.

>> No.76959028

>>76956534
2 leechs and marine

>> No.76959086

>>76958121
There's also the red eyes, the skull earring and the butterfly on her panties

>> No.76959187

>>76958105
I would want to be in Lucia's place. That way I don't have to deal with the actual Lucia.

>> No.76959244

>>76959086
Oh, I hadn't noticed that at all. Like, I had the image big (but on hover) so all I was focusing on the hair colour which made me think it was Lui for some reason.

I really need to get my eyes tested one day. Think the last time it was done was like what, 2010?

>> No.76959424

>>76959187
ROFL:ROFL:ROFL:ROFL
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>> No.76959455

>>76959424
That's one of the most mangled Roflcopters I've seen.

>> No.76959519

>>76959455
It’s 4chan, it didn’t like it

Just pretend it was piloted by Bryant if that makes it better

>> No.76959568

>>76959519
I guess it's about as difficult as triforcing.

>> No.76959623

>>76959568
Triforcing my coco into (You)r oshi’s pussy more like heyo!!

>> No.76959669

>>76959623
>coco
cock

This is what I get for trying to be clever while I’m tired

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>>76954747
queen of luckshitters

>> No.76960746
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>>76959873
me 0.1 seconds after i catch her using weighted dice

>> No.76962172
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>>76831897
>Bae oversleeps and misses her stream...again
>this is the third time this month
>she does 40 minutes of dogeza on stream to apologize
>while she's on the ground, she notices someone in the chat calling her a "stupid lazy slut"
>reading that makes her feel strangely good
>Bae's humiliation kink has been unlocked

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>>76960746
What about repeat offenses?

>> No.76963264
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>>76831897
>you dated Suisei from the time you were both 16 (2016) and you supported her idol dream
>she entered a major agency in late 2019
>in the next few years Suisei slowly starts drifting away from you
>she's now on the top of the world and she abruptly cuts you from out of her life
>insider source from the agency who is sympathetic towards you reveals the truth about Suisei
>at one point she was banging her entire backing band (except the bassist of course)
>now she's dating her silver fox producer
>...
>you're drinking your sorrows away
>you meet a girl who looks like a rock star
>she's Sakamata Chloe and she plays bass in a metal band
>"Another musician, huh. Well, she's a bassist so If I date this girl, she probably won't cheat on me" you think to yourself (even though you're operating with a rather small sample size)

>> No.76963622

>>76963264
Sex with suzy's bassist?

>> No.76963680

>>76963622
No, Sakamata plays in a completely different band. Metal band.

>> No.76963752

>>76963264
>insider source from the agency who is sympathetic towards you reveals the truth about Suisei
>at one point she was banging her entire backing band (except the bassist of course)
>now she's dating her silver fox producer
she wouldn't do that

>> No.76963869

>>76963752
Kek, didn't even think about Fubuki while writing that

>> No.76964413

>>76962451
>>76962172
>>76960746
Not saying I'm against the idea, but why is Bae a prime target for humiliation/punishment?

>> No.76964541
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>>76964413
Because she's small enough that most people think they could take her. I don't really get the whole humiliation kink myself. Seems like just a power trip to me.

>> No.76964649

>>76964413
unironically every single one of her streams features one instant loss/her getting embarassed at something said or done

>> No.76964800

>>76964413
Unironically she deserves it and it’s funny to see her humbled

>> No.76964885

>>76964413
The whole "mating press" meme pipeline for some reason featured mostly Bae and it corrupted my image of her a lot
Also that one dropped fic series about summoning and living with Bae which did feature dom loss from her and from you

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>>76964885
Im in a bit of a dilemma with mating press because i might or not have lost the original image that started it all

>> No.76965248

>>76831769
she looks like she's about to declare Exterminatus on my ass.

>> No.76965291

Chloe is shorter than Kanata

>> No.76965310

>>76963869
>>76963752
Ascending the ranks of stardom and having to do sexual favors for Fubuki in order to reunite and get revenge on Suisei?

>> No.76965312

>>76964413
She is just the right amount of bullyable. Submissive and a people pleaser

>> No.76965348

>>76965291
Kanata is better once again

>> No.76966097

>>76965291
Shut up Jesus!

>> No.76966124
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>>76964541
Its a combination of factors
>Prude nice girl. Any thing makes her go "ewwww" or "nyooooo"
>VERY dramatic in her apologies (she makes a big deal of them as a bit) which resulted in things like an entire stream doing dogeza because she overslept for an hour
>VERY dramatic in demanding apologies. Constantly cranks situations to the max (She demands dogeza and death/castration for everything)
>As soon as she latchs onto any form or shape of power she flexes it (mostly for jokes but she loves cool stuff and having lots of money in games)
>She's not very good at keeping that power so she constantly loses it and goes "nyooo"

TLDR she's primer bullying material and that translates into someone who is constantly getting owned, which feeds a humilliation fetish because she's nice, proper and cute and you want her degraded

>> No.76966351
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76966351

>>76831897
Speaking of revenge
I'm pretty sure we've never gotten a proper fic about getting cool and sexy revenge against (Insert group of chuubas the author thinks are hot).

>> No.76966457

>>76966351
There's two likely ways that monkey paw is going to curl for you.
>Wedgiefics
>Holojourneys ch 178 where another Koyori confrontation happens and she's put in her place and bred like the dog she is

>> No.76966770

>>76966351
Like, defeating evil chuubas and making them yours (in some way)?

>> No.76967262

>>76966351
Defeating kurokami and putting a leash on her? Her body asking to be bred while She's still hostile!

I fucking love that prompt, as trashy as it is

>> No.76967700

>>76831897
Mio cheats on you with a younger guy from her workplace.
You are Mio's husband in TB17A

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76967743

>>76966770
Getting rape corrected by a group of evil chuubas you foolishly thought you could fix?

>> No.76967885
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>>76964541
>Because she's small enough that most people think they could take her.
Not at all, the fact that she's an adult and not a loli is very important to me.

More importantly, she's smug, has a tendency for being dramatic and overreacting, and basically her every stream features some kind of instant loss moment.
I don't really want to discipline her into being a proper submissive woman or whatever, that won't work. Just the opposite, i can bully her as much as i want, and it won't influence her behavior at all.

>> No.76968030
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>>76966351
>in order to reunite and get revenge on Suisei?

>you finally get your chance to have a confrontation with Suisei
>she is at first slightly apologetic but as you become angrier she responds with condescension
>you snap and pin her down with a choke hold
>you repeat some sort of cheesy line about being together forever she told you when you were teenagers
>she tells you to fuck off with that cheesy bullshit
>you rape her but she somehow just becomes even more smug and keeps mocking you while you fuck her

>> No.76968087

>>76968030
meant to quote >>76965310

>> No.76968654

>>76967743
This, but it's Fuwamoco, and the whole time you're tied down to the bed while Fuwawa backseats Mococo.
>Okay Moco-chan, now you gotta get his dick hard
>Okaeh! Mococo says as she grips your dick so hard you scream
>Not like that Moco-chan! Be gentle~
>Ha? Mococo lets go.
>Fuwawa gives you the softest, sweetest kiss on your frenulum that risks you shooting your goo immediately.
>Softly~ Fuwawa whispers
>Okaeh! Mococo bites your cock and you scream again.

>> No.76968663

>>76968030
>you rape her but she somehow just becomes even more smug and keeps mocking you while you fuck her
Man Suisei plays the long game when it comes to her fetishes huh

>> No.76970001

>>76966770
It is the inevitable fate for anons to be raped by evil chuubas

>> No.76970743

>>76968654
That's just your typical backseating fuwamoco prompt!

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>> No.76972050

>>76968663
I'd like to see her mock me with my dick in her mouth.

>> No.76972166 [DELETED] 

Live

>> No.76972843

>>76972050
What if she takes a bite? I saw that in a war film (Stalingrad, I think? The 1993 German one) and it forever traumatized me.

>> No.76973189

>>76972843
Any suggestions then, if a gag isnt avaialble? Ryona her with a right hook?

>> No.76973555

>>76973189
Kidnap and think about suppression methods later.

>> No.76973618

>>76973189
>>76972050
If you don't want to use a gag, don't make it physical. Use threats to make her compliant to the point that she doesn't resist but resorts to subtle mockery instead. You could even spin it so that she sucks you off as well as she can to make you cum fast - it makes you look pathetic and gets her out of it faster.

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>>76831897
Chuuba drops her cute anime character act in front of you

>> No.76974376

>>76962451
Special paddle with "brrat" carved into it. rolling her own dice to determine how many strikes

>> No.76974652

>>76974376
I'd go with one r considering she's a rat, and not her fanbase.

>> No.76974660

>>76974376
cringe

>> No.76976568 [DELETED] 

>>76974660
NTA but are you only calling it cringe because it's bae that's getting the paddle?

>> No.76976637

>>76976568
all of it is cringe. from the fetish to the chuuba

>> No.76976690 [DELETED] 

>>76976637
Okay so I'm probably gonna get hell for this but I'm gonna say it anway.

What if it were Ayame? is it no longer cringe?

>> No.76976730

>>76976690
yes but only because she deserves it and it is long overdue.

>> No.76976791 [DELETED] 

>>76976730
Thank you for confirming to me that you're biased and that you only think its cringe because its not Ayame that's getting the paddle.

And like, that's your opinion and I do respect it. But there was nothing wrong with anon's scenario of bae getting the paddle.

>> No.76976928

>>76976791
Ayame deserves it though, really anything ryona related is what she deserves. Bae doesn't deserve it, despite my distaste for her. The fetish is cringe, Bae is cringe, you are too.

>> No.76977353 [DELETED] 

>>76976928
>Ayame deserves it though, really anything ryona related is what she deserves.
And "why" does she deserve it, anon? Is it because her rrat self that's so well liked so learn some discipline? or is it because she's lazy as fuck?

>Bae doesn't deserve it
>Bae is cringe
Why? is it because she supports males or something? I really, really hope that isn't the reason.

>> No.76977374

You all are cringe

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>> No.76977454

>>76977353
she's lazy. Some paddling is as good a correction as any.

Bae is cringe because she's a zoomer and zoomers are cringe. I'm also winding you up.

>> No.76977638
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Baker give me something that promotes alcoholism

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>>76977638

>> No.76977691

>>76977454
>she's lazy.
Ah, that wasn't a reply I was expecting from you, anon. That's a perfectly understandable reasoning but if it were me, I'd go for something even more stupid. What is that reason you ask? well how does something like denying her computer rights sound? I'm sure that'd motivate her no?

Not that I'm against paddling but I'd save that as a last resort.

>Bae is cringe because she's a zoomer and zoomers are cringe.
Oh, I see. Yet another reply I wasn't expecting and while you're entitled to your opinion, I must respectfully disagree with you as I too wouldn't mind correcting the rat.

>I'm also winding you up.
I really, REALLY hate how I fall for such obvious tricks and can't even tell if someone is yanking my leg until its said straight to my face. I also really hope I didn't come off as rude or aggressive in my reply.

>> No.76977773

>>76977691
Poe’s Law, friend. No indication of sarcasm or trickery was given, none should be inferred. I’ve seen people say worse and dumber things for real.

>> No.76977792

I hate this reddit faggot who always fights himself to bump the thread faster when its at the end of its life

>> No.76978436

>>76977454
>Bae is cringe because she's a zoomer and zoomers are cringe
Millennials should replay Life is Strange to remind ourselves of our own generation's cringe

>> No.76978457

>>76974660
NTA but I think it can work, if she is also into it.

>> No.76978499

>>76978436
I'm not going to deny my gen is cringe too. We're just slightly less cringe. It's slight but 2nd place it is.

>> No.76978600

>>76978499
Bijou is gen z and she’s the ceo of sex, so

>> No.76978684

>>76978600
anon that's a child

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>>76978684
No anon that's a rock

>> No.76979183

>>76978684
No that’s what I’m going to put inside her

>> No.76979402

>>76978684
>>76979079
She's a an anthropomorphic rock with childlike features stylized in a manner that follows artistic trends of modern popular Japanese animated media, comics etc.

>> No.76979417

>>76978600
Maybe there's more gen z in this thread than you care to consider

>> No.76979537

>>76979402
>I'm not gay, I just like a vagina that is an anthropomorphic construct that takes the form of a penis

doesn't really work when you do it like that does it

>> No.76979556

>>76979537
Bro what does this mean?

>> No.76979892

>>76979402
She's 1X years old, according to her debut.

>> No.76979967

>>76979537
I'm sorry but I thought this was the Autism Olympics, not Lolicon Debate Hell in a Cell match.

>> No.76979982

>>76979892
Would

>> No.76980706

baker doko

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>> No.76981429

>>76980706
Maybe this is the final episode of /wg/ for real this time...

>> No.76981503

>>76981429
Our bakers have forsaken us...

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>>76981429
Sayonara....friends.

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