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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
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>"Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction?"
Yes.

Previous thread: >>71445668

>> No.71684466
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Story Anchor
Post em if you got em

>> No.71684512
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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
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Story Recap. No stories were posted last thread.

>> No.71684991

>>71684466
Kitanya picked up a block of sand.
She dropped the sand block, and watched it fall deep down into the ocean.
"Me trying to find a home is like a block of sand trying to swim up" kitanya said sullenly as the block of sand reached the bottom of the ocean floor.
Kitanya had travelled far, and seen many worlds. She built, and claimed many houses, but kitanya never seemed to be able to find a home.
The hero who had slain the ender dragon had a fire inside her which yearned to go forth, but now the light which shined so bright sought to find a rock which could reflect at least half of her radiance, and shelter her from the ever weathering winds which she had bitterly bargained with for as long as she had been fighting the ever present darkness of the realms that we all sometimes find ourselves in.

>> No.71685232

>>71682452
Right click to open the menu.
Man, it would be cool to get Ninisanni on android. I think the trickiest bits would be in the main menu.

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Alright, with FES over I believe it's time. Word Count check, post them.
Bonus: Tell me how much father do you think you have until it's done. For me, this is about a third of the way through

>> No.71686825

>>71686246
My father died 5 years ago

>> No.71688259
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>>71686825
Ok but your word count tho???

>> No.71690446
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>>71684512
Anya sex

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Now that fes is over, seriesanons doko?

>> No.71690578
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>>71690461
does the suffering end or does it merely transform?classes are starting soon. im very stressed about finding a job and i havent written in a while because i wanted to finish Unicorn Overlord. Despite all of that, it will get better

>> No.71691024 [SPOILER] 
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>>71690461
I hope to make some decent progress for the first time in a while now that I've got the next week off.

>> No.71691928
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>>71690456
SAG HEX SAG HEX SAG HEX

>> No.71691997

>>71690578
Okay I may be misremembering which writer is which but you were working on an image cyoa about chuubas right? Any updates on that?

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>>71690461
Ready to get back to it! Polka's sultry performance has ignited my desire for fennec sensual kissing and touching.
>>71686246
>Bonus
I think this one has 2-3 more scenes to go before it's done.

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>>71684512
Suisei pleasing old men for endorsement deals

>> No.71696700

Up

>> No.71698789

>>71694273
That image is both hot and sad.

>> No.71699209

>>71694273
Suisei AND Mori should please an old men (me) for a deal.
specially if they have to kiss my cock

>> No.71701456

>>71699209
What deal do you have to offer?

>> No.71701554

>>71701456
oh shit...i can...huuuh...give them persona tetris perms?

>> No.71703028

>>71701554
>Mwehehe, Suisei...Mori... if you want that deal...you two can do me a favor
>"That's it? we fuck you and its done?"
>hehehe ye- wait what
>"oh shit man this is so much simple. So do we do it here or do we go to a hotel?"
>No wait a second
>"Kari-san we cant go to a hotel...maybe lets hit my house"
>"yup. Big ups right there"
And then Ojii san gives them a harsh lecture over underselling themselves as artists and putting out too easily

>> No.71704001

>>71703028
>So, the old fuck pulls his cock out, tells you you have to suck out all your hopes and dreams, what do you do?
>I suck it! Suisei raises her hand, receiving a ruler to the head
>No! You're supposed to tell him that he's disgusting! You have to make him put MORE on the table!
>But, I mean, he's only asking me to suck his dick- Calli says just as her tits get punished by ruler-kun.
>And you think it stops at the fucking blowjob?! NO! He's going to force himself into your ass, just to CONSIDER giving you a chance!
>Calli and Suisei go 'ohhh' together.
>... So I have to let him fuck my ass to ensure he gives me the endorsement? Suisei ponders.
>With a sigh, oji-sanon takes his belt and readies for an overdue correction.

>> No.71704291

>>71699209
You have to work on your English first.

>> No.71704668

>>71704001
>"So...a live isnt worth a blowjob....is sex worth one?"
>NO!
>"Ah gotcha. Blowjob is song, Titjob is live, Sex is brand deal...yeah i get why you are mad. We are totally selling ourselves short here"
>"Is Anal worth more? what about feet?"
>"Oh dude if feet are expensive then we can totally get the budokan"
>*Ojii san sighs and sprays them with water*

>> No.71705637

>>71703028
>>71704001
>>71704668
N U T

>> No.71706725
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>>71684512
Every time you go out "for just a beer" with Lamy it ends with bed breaking sex.
You have to fix that, one way or another

>> No.71707335

>>71706725
>I know how about we just go out for a dinner and a movie.
>Motorcycle chase through Tokyo
>Lamy hanging behind you casting her ice magic while you weave through oncoming traffic.

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>> No.71708968

>>71706725
Fix?

>> No.71709594
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>>71708968
Yeah, the bed obviously

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>>71684512
I am humbly requesting hot, sweaty animal sex with Kanata post-disciplinary spanking

>> No.71711409

>>71690461
I regret trying to serialize my work. Should've just released it all in one go

>> No.71712408
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>>71711409
Why's that? Is there a problem with releasing your work iteratively?

>> No.71713282

>>71709594
Fair nuff.

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>>71712408
>Is there a problem with releasing your work iteratively?
NTA but I've felt it myself in that releasing a thing as just Part 1 can have the opposite intended effect and make you less inclined to actually finish it out, because you still get that hit of publishing.

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>>71711409
If you're going to serialize your fic at least commit to the bit and keep writing until it gets to the point where the unstable foundations start to crack.

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>> No.71718186

Discuss:

Last night, laying in bed, I thought up of how the smut in Goldfeather would begin. Basuki admits to Reine he whacks it to ero fan-art of her. She gets flustered, and then thanks him for finding an older woman like her hot. She then...rewards him for his honesty.


May or may not be inspired by Menhelion.

>> No.71719251

>>71718186
its not a bad premise, but if it were me, its that your protagonist (I assume Basuki) is already jacking off to Rine's erotic art and she finds out. she's awkward about it at first but she eventually confronts Basuki, trying to remain responsible, but Bakusi keeps jacking it to her lewd art. She tries to be composed and firm but the idea of a younger man gawking at her starts turning her on. the longer she thinks about it.

not sure if this helps, this is just how i'd set it up.

>> No.71719776

>>71718186
>>71719251
Reine finds little Basuki jacking it to a Reine cosplayer that looks just like her. She then confronts him about all of the "dirty talk" he was saying while she was eavesdropping.

>> No.71719992

>>71719251
Maybe she'll be all like "da fuq yo?"

>>71719776
Basuki is not so little. He's 17 years old and in his first year of college.

This happens btw after Reine asked Basuki to sleep with her due to her being emotionally hurt after hearing her older sister disparage her work.

(The whole of the extended Pavolia clan is in one place for the Christmas party)

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>>71684512
Towa's womb tattoo keeps glowing every time she's near you and you're trying to figure out the right time to tastefully bring it up.

>> No.71724769

>>71723198
>Towa's womb tattoo isn't actually a sign to show compatibility but a warning.
>A warning built into the magic of every womb tattoo to warn against incest
> Towa is actually your mom/sister

>> No.71725909

so many ideas so little motivation...

>> No.71726562

>>71711220
What did she do wrong?

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>>71724769
>just before penetrating your little sister Towa you spot a neon pink glow out of the corner of your eye
>There's a big pulsating symbol just below her belly button
>Despite having no text, you feel deep in your soul its a warning flashing 'DO NOT BREED DO NOT BREED DO NOT BREED'
>pic related
>impregnate Tower with a demonic hellspawn that will break the seventh seal and plunge the earth into chaos

>> No.71727982

>>71708917
Is this from that one prompt that's like that "deaf girl who got bullied but got together with her bully" manga but (You) instead hook up with Ayame instead?

When will this poor girl get some well deserved happiness in her sad life?

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>>71708968
yes, because its a destructive affair that's negatively impacting everyone around you
>The animalistic pull is making both of you cheat on your spouses
>Botan,your wife, doesnt deserve it. She just doesnt have the apetite nor the thrill of this troublesome woman
>Lamy's husband doesnt deserve this. He's just a nice man triying to make ends meet, he just isnt around a lot
>Polka knows this all and can only watch in silence, too paralyzed by decision by both unrequited love and loyalty to her best friends
>and in the middle of it all
>Nene is slowly eroding, being the one everyone confides in their darkest secrets

we had it good for far too long, its time for the "world is a fuck" fic. Its time we put the troublesome in the woman

>> No.71730091

>>71728557
You know what? Screw this. We have enough fuck in the world to drown in (certainly in my small part of it). But I can't really police what you create so you do you.

>> No.71730526

>>71728557
Ah finally, To be 170 again.
Though more seriously, it's strange how we don't have more "whirlwind romances".

>> No.71731436

>>71730526
>170 again
>Omega elf hag lamy
Jokes aside, its hard to pull it off and not fail on the trap of softening the blows that come with it. If you go too soft its a bit sappy.
I love tb17a but mio's husband being an evil non character kinda robs it of a bigger arc

>> No.71731989

>>71731436
>I love tb17a but mio's husband being an evil non character kinda robs it of a bigger arc
Honestly, I'd have to disagree. Mio's husband being a noncharacter bad guy is kind of the one necessary sacrifice that story has to make in order for it to have a proper ending (even if the Anon writing it can't seem to write it). Since I was one of the few people that saw the version where the husband lets the divorce happen after getting a change of heart while at a hooker (I'm going to be honest I barely remember it) and it just sucked since it stripped the story of its last hurdle before it could satisfyingly end it. As much as the author wanted/wants to go to fluffy Mio stuff afterwards Tb17A is fundamentally a whirlwind romance that needs those dramatic trials and tribulations to work.

>> No.71732367

>>71726562
Too much energy…

>> No.71732378

>>71731989
Not really imo. If the husband was an actual character then he could have his own mini arc of realizing what he let slip away and how Mio herself transformed his life (for better or worse). Maybe he discovers the cheating and confronts her.
Mio could have gotten an entire arc where she comes to terms that shes being selfish and that she cheated on her husband.
Hell, anon himself should be feeling a bit bad about the husband. Of course we are talking hypothetics here but thats why i said the non character robs a bit of depth everywhere, since its okay for him to get cheated on.
I think you can end a whirlwind romance in a happy ending but aside from those trial and tribulations that you mentioned, the story kind of needs things to be caught in the crossfire since it cant be all sunshine and rainbows.
Taking this lamy example here, Nene/Polka being caught in the middle is tragic because if two of your best friends are cheating and you caught wind of it then you two wouldnt know what to do aside from lend an ear and grit your teeth.
Without that... what's the problem aside from cheating? Since the husband is someone we dont know, we wont feel bad and thus we can easily just walk away from the problem

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>> No.71735768

>>71719992
>This happens btw after Reine asked Basuki to sleep with her
Anon, it sounds like you're just throwing dartsat a wall and hoping one sticks.
The relationship between the two isn't developed or established, and if I remember correctly Reine in Ch.1 just drops by after a shower on his bedroom. Not only is it weird, Reine would sleep together with her 17yo nephew, but also Basuki jerks it to Reine, which Reine doesn't find concerning? What led to them having such a high degree of trust?

It's fine for pure smut, I doubt anyone in the mood for a wank would give a shit about consistency but you're hinting at a lot of different plot points that (so far) have only gotten in the way of the aunt plappling.

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I’m going feral, gentlemen

>> No.71736066

>>71706725
Sorry to butt in (heh) but i had a revelation while looking at this image
>After bed breaking sex lamy gets annoyed at You for being a horndog
>Bans sex for a month.
>However after a week, the one who is clearly struggling is Her
>As a troublesome woman,shed rather die than go back on her own word.
>And thus she decides you should be the one to break the promise and starts slutting it up to tempt you
And so, is the story of anon enduring her Barrage of innuendos and sexual gestures until the long awaited naked dogeza asking for sex

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>>71712408
>>71713863
Same, and as someone who fell into that trap, releasing everything in one go is just infinitely better. Picture this.
>You write chapter 1 for your series, it's a hit.
>Everyone loves it. It's all smooth sailing for a few chapters until a major plot point happens..
>and it doesn't work.
>Then you realize you needed to pad out the story so it could breathe
>To reach this plot point you just released, you needed at least two more chapters
>But you already released it
>And editing the previous chapters feels dishonest
>WIP hell

I'd say it's fine to release it periodically if you have your final draft on the table and you're just basically beautifying the whole thing with proper dialogue, prose, descriptions, putting some meat on those bones, you know? Otherwise, it's gonna come back and bite you in the ass one way or another.

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>>71719992
If I may weigh in on this too, it sounds like you haven't been sure what the exact relationship between Reine and her nephew is just yet. Like you know you want them to fuck, but it's almost like you want to just pluck them out of their own rooms while they're masturbating so they are riled up enough to fuck the first thing that has a pulse in front of them, ie their nephew/aunt respectively. So let's go through the parts you got so far that work nicely for their relationship and can foster a codependency / place of comfort between them.
>Shared interests in weeb stuff that is mostly understood by the rest of the family
Great starting point to establish their bonding and spending time together. Pretty much a no brainer and lends itself really well to black sheep grazing together.
>Reine spoils him sometimes with her considerable income
Good for establishing that the MC also views her as a providing figure of sorts and helps strengthen the idea that they are family. This is meant to help fan the flame behind the taboo that will come later. It also gives both parties a sense of purpose, 1 can always find comfort and basic need fulfillment from the other, while the one providing will have a sense of care and responsibility that comes from a desire to see that person taken care of.
>MC is a fan of her streaming content
Potentially a pretty deep and cool dynamic to explore. Is his aunt the exact same as the streamer she plays as? Does it feed further into the desire to commit incest because of a power play to have sex with the one desired by thousands? Does Reine want to be more to someone than just the chuuba?
>Reine is tired of being lezbait
So here implies she has an interest in men, since why else would she fuck her nephew? This can also go back to the streaming lifestyle thing. She might also be receptive to the idea because it could also be a cover up almost of sorts. "Oh it's just her nephew, they aint fucking, my oshi is pure and loves me!" is what fans would likely think, and there's usually no stigma around them spending time with their families. There's a lot of cool stuff I think you can explore with this idea that can help develop the relationship. You ultimately need to really draw out WHAT the relationship is prior to the chapter starting. You don't have to paint it all out at the start, but it will help guide you on your writing if you know these things before hand.

>> No.71736777

>>71685232
Right?
The menu and UI in general seem fucked up when launching the game in Renpy editor => Android => Emulate phone. I expected UI elements to throw lots exceptions, but the only ones I got were in 2 places in script where it expected a staggered line after a colon (there was nothing that warranted a staggered line so I removed them and it ran the next time)

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>>71736095
>>71713863
I think I can see where you're both coming from in that regard. Having the overall draft and plot points mapped out I think helps a lot with managing periodic releases, but I also know that those are subject to complete overhauls just because you thought of something appropriate or cool that's new in the middle of your writing.
Depending on the degree of your edits, I think revising/enhancing previous chapters is alright, but mostly with what you mentioned about beautifying.
Posting the first chapter though can get you some really helpful feedback, which can help make your next chapters a lot better. There's a balancing act for the whole thing, and you ultimately gotta do what feels right for you.

>> No.71736988

>>71736790
Pssst, hey, would you like the best of both worlds? beta readers

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>>71736988
Well that's a given. It kicks ass.

>> No.71737615

>>71735768
>Reine in Ch.1 just drops by after a shower on his bedroom
*Her bedroom. Basuki was the invited one. I admit, I havent got it all together just yet but I wanna strike that balance of story and lewd that ALS struck.

>> No.71737760

>>71735867
That's a cute Kanatan

>> No.71738210

>>71736777
Hold on, can you type out which lines had the staggered line after them? I'll take a look and maybe play around with the menu to try and get it to work on a touch screen.
Aside from the jukebox, the menu is pretty much comprised of imagebuttons and "click to close" screens.
If you're able to get it half working, I'll give it a good college try.
Oh, that said, the ingame menu is right click. But that should be easily resolved by just adding a text button in the overlay.

>> No.71738917

>>71738210
Day 3.4 Enna, line 392
show m done:
Day 5.p Pomu, line 1140
scene dollhouse:
In both cases the exception was "show statement expects a non-empty block"

>> No.71739112

>>71738210
from >>71738917
https://files.catbox.moe/00wgmz.png

>> No.71739320

>>71737615
This might come off as rude but I think you shouldn't just try to make your own version of ALS. That's too tall of an order right now. You're still grasping concepts like showing instead of telling, drafting and pacing, not to mention your english in general needs some work.

I'm not trying to shit on your work, just saying you might want to try simpler, shorter stuff so you can get more direct feedback and work on that.

>> No.71739477

>>71736450
There is some alcohol involved.

>Third point
Yeah, Reine online pretty much is similar to Reine offline, just with a few embellishments.

>Fourth point
People have been very sus of "brothers" lately. Ask Moona. What I plan to do is have MC-kun be Reine's "sexual respite" of sorts. Reine is at least bi here, so she absolutely enjoyed her Maldives escapade with Kiara, but in the end, her biology's call is louder.

>> No.71739566

>>71739320
Like actually finishing that Calli x myself fic kek. Pretty confident with my English, I was tryna be more contemporary because I felt "proper English" is a tad bit stiff and dry for my taste.

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>>71738917
>>71739112
Got it, thanks.
I see that error all the time when scripting. It means I didn't put positional arguments in the image I'm displaying (using a colon necessitates positional arguments).
Since the PC excepts my lazy scripting (putting a tab/space in the midst of a show statement), I figured it didn't matter, but now I'll be more cautious.
I'll take a look, thanks for the help.

>> No.71739817

>>71708917
>>71727982
I haven't been on 4chan for months and then when I come back I see people talking about my old prompt. That's funny.
IIRC I preferred the Aqua romance route but other anons found that too cliche and then someone suggested that Ayame should steal the D from Aqua, AGAIN.

>> No.71739871

>>71739817
I could be wrong but people probably suggested Ayame because of how well she was liked in Our Cures, no?

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>>71739477
Alcohol involved where? Huh?
If Reine online and offline are pretty much the same, you should emphasize the subtle differences there actually are that only the MC gets to experience. You're trying to cook a dish that shows how their relationship is special and that this isn't just picking up or flirting with some new stranger.
Again I think you're letting a strange shitposting hivemind muddle with your characterizations and world building. Your average viewer who just cares about their oshi isn't gonna get rabid off them remarking that they're spending time with their family. Don't paint a world like that if it won't actually impact the story. Now if you wanted it to possibly get leaked somehow that Reine was fucking a man and that her reputation could possibly tank, that would be a tasty bit of drama if handled correctly. It could be something fiendish like one of her family members somehow getting a vid of her getting plowed and threaten to release it if their demands aren't met. Her being bi is fine, but you gotta express that clearly. Like I've dated a few bi women before, and there's a few nuances that should be conveyed. If her biological clock is ticking, that's a major factor that needs its due attention.

>> No.71740127

>>71739871
Our Cures was the culprit, yeah, but I think they just thought it would be funny if Aqua got cucked by Ayame again.

>> No.71740443

>>71740127
>but I think they just thought it would be funny if Aqua got cucked by Ayame again.
I didn't think it was funny. But I'm just one person and I know at the end of the day, Ayame is well liked and it'd be more interesting to see her win than what it would be for when Aqua would win.

...I just think Aqua deserves some happiness for once that's all.

>> No.71740709

>>71740005
While they play games. Reine has some in her fridge and she offers Basuki a can or two.

>spoiler
Ohohoho...you may have just spelled out Reisha's plan...one of her allies in the clan or a hired hand sneaks to record the hanky-panky.

Her bioclock is also defo a factor here too.

>> No.71741370

>>71740443
You should use that desire to write a story about bringing happiness to Aqua's heart and holes.

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>>71740709
Alright, but where the hell did the drinking scene come from? I feel like we're on different talking points. Is the alcohol meant to initiate the sex via a decision they make when they're both inebriated? Does the MC even drink yet? I don't know the rules in Indo land, but even in places where 18 is the legal age, he's still below that. I also know that in most family gatherings those rules are thrown out the window anyway, having experienced it myself, but you need to convey them. Is the MC someone who wants to drink? Is his first drink gonna be with his aunt? That would be an excellent experience to paint.

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>>71684512
You've become a high school teacher but there's a student in your class who's clearly crossing the line with how cheeky she is being with you. It's time to summon your inner Onizuka and give her correction.

>> No.71742085

>>71741905
She's also an orca.

>> No.71742515

>>71742085
Sure, and Marine is a real pirate. Come on.

>> No.71742735

>>71742515
Isn't Marine just dressing like one?

>> No.71742842

>>71742735
That's...that's the joke, anon.

>> No.71743435

>>71741433
That's what gonna happen in chapter 2 while they play games and the rest of the clan is blacking out. MC is open for anything for his dear auntie. It pretty much is.

>>71741905
Mfw I've explored jk Chloe before and then proceeded to sex her...

>> No.71743827

>>71742085
>>71742515
>>71742735
Well that could be a neat idea.
Sensei is down to fuck...except half of the student body can kill him in the blink of an eye

>> No.71744130

>>71742842
>>71742735
Unless she's acting like she's not a pirate to hide the truth that she's really a privateer

>> No.71744523

>>71743827
> Chloe - he followed her behind the shed in gym class thinking he could get her there
> got almost domed by a throwing knife

> Laplus - he left her after class for some "remedials"
> was met with her unchained form trying to file a formal complaint about his existence

> Koyori - she messed up in the lab after class, got some corrosives on her clothes, he beckons her to strip down and go into an emergency shower
> she pours some other compound on herself and neutralizes it

> Lui - he tries to inebriate her enough so he could carry her to his place
> she drunk him under the table instead despite a roofie he slipped to her at some point

> Iroha - offers her body herself in pity as she puts together the stories of her genmates
> sensei's brain is already too fried from all the struggle snuggle fantasies so he declines

>> No.71745249

>>71744523
>Kanata stumbles and crushes his desk
>Marine has loaded flintlocks and sabers liying around
>Lamy sneezes and Nene gets incassed in Ice. Nene can also break said ice with no issue. She sometimes walks through walls
>The lunaitos threathen to execute him when he mentions PE class
>Oh well...at least he could try with the teachers
>Hatotaurus shaking his head if he comes too close
>Miss Reine made it pretty clear that she can castrate him if she so desires
>Miss Azki will probably gut him...but at least he could Score

>> No.71746015

>>71737760
Made for sex

>> No.71746882

>>71743827
So (Doujin) Blue Archive?

>> No.71747565

>>71731989
>>71732378
Noted

>> No.71748012

>>71724769
>momcest
Alright, NOW we're talking.

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>>71691997
sorry im just answering.
Its on indefinite hold. I got a bit of it working, but if im being honest its very low on my priority list

>> No.71750440

>>71684466
10 Inches of Buffpup
tags: futa on male, werewolf, knotting
https://archiveofourown.org/works/54559549

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>> No.71753200

>>71739566
>I felt "proper English" is a tad bit stiff and dry for my taste.
Sounds like a skill issue

>> No.71754461

>>71739566
>felt "proper English" is a tad bit stiff and dry for my taste.
You're an idiot.

>> No.71754941

>>71750440
just curious. was this a comission? the vtuber and the subject matter is just so specific that i have to ask

>> No.71755142

>>71754941
It's Rusty, it's definitely a commission.

>> No.71755208

>>71755142
oh i wasnt aware he was known. I was just asking because i was genuinely curious.
not my cup of tea, but keep earning that money i guess

>> No.71755395

>>71684512
Sniffing sweaty Shiori feet.

>> No.71756685

>>71755208
He's an avatarfag who runs the "ehssex" blog. Hasn't popped up in... what, a year? Longer?
One look at the tags for this story basically confirms I won't be reading it.

>> No.71757100

>>71755395
And then?

>> No.71757821

>>71684512
Botan being flirty and touchy with Anon to make his girlfriend jealous. Bonus points if she tries to steal him from her. Anon and Botan are childhood friends.

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>>71684512
Making Fubuki dress up as other chuubas before sex

>> No.71759780

>>71757821
>Hey Anon, remember when I used to bite your forearm because my teeth were itchy?

>> No.71759951

>>71740127
>/wg/ thought it would be funny if they crammed a previous fics premise into a new one.
Shocker.

>> No.71759992

>>71759780
Now I'm curious where this is going.

>> No.71760400

>>71759780
>>71759992
Anon's girlfriend is Mel?

>> No.71762165

>>71742085
>on all levels except physical, I am an orca

>> No.71762416

>>71760400
I kind of like the idea of Anon's girlfriend being flat while Botan certainly isn't but, anyone would work.

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>> No.71764205

>>71763708
>Taking Shiori to the dentist after she breaks a tooth trying to eat MerBiboo

>> No.71766867

Up

>> No.71767018

>>71757821
>Anon and Botan are childhood friends
Sorry, I can only write about things I at least vaguely know, and I know nothing about being old as fuck.

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>>71767018
You'll know some day. Being hag-aged is pretty great.

>> No.71767286

>>71767018
I am pretty fucking old.

>> No.71768825

>>71757821
This is just making me think of Lamy as your current girlfriend (who stole you from your previous one).
>Childhood Friend Lalion vs Successful Troublesome Woman.

>> No.71768972

>>71768825
That could work although making Lamy sad hurts. I just want Botan to steal me out of a shitty relationship into a loving one, featuring lots of lewd things.

>> No.71771803

>>71750440
I wish strong women with dicks existed irl.

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>> No.71772059

>>71771806
Ru...

>> No.71773212

Relentlessly bullying a hag about her old, dried up womb.....what could go wrong?

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>>71773212
In all honesty I am against the 'super confident sex goddess' type of hag, for the most part. That being said, a hag forcing herself on me after too much teasing about her age and fertility does scratch an itch

>> No.71774161

>>71773523
>Confident sensual hag that constantly teases you gets worn down from your jabs over time until she cracks and is all but begging and forcing herself on you

>> No.71774213

>>71773212
Not realizing that women start going through menopause until like 45 and knocking her up

>> No.71775243

>>71759238
You know I was a huge fan of the outfit swaps and all, but I wish they would've adjusted the color palette to the chuubas.
Don't get me wrong, Marine in Ina's outfit, the SEX outfit, was top tier, but if they had made it reddish to match Marine's palette, it would've made my dick explode.

>> No.71775367

>>71773212
She becomes breaks down and cries her eyes out, admitting defeat.
>Yes! I know!
>I thought I'd get to it, that I'd do it after my career- I didn't!
>I never found my special other!
>I never had my first child!
>Is that what you wanted to hear?! I messed up and no one's going to settle for me now!

>> No.71775954

>>71775367
Then you hit the bargaining stage.
>Well maybe if I get married soon and really try I could get lucky!
>I just need to put myself out there again!
>So what? I'll be fine on my own!
>I still have plenty of time!

>> No.71775990

>>71775367
I will become this hag's weird adult surrogate child.

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If the kemonos age out of fertility, then they’d be hitting…menopaws

>> No.71777139

>>71775990
I had two prompts that revolved around (You) pretending to be a hag's child.
Mio rents you out to pretend she's pampering her kid
You get pulled at the bar by this sexy cougar Lui and you go to her place thinking you're about to get some, then she fixes you a drink, and accidentally calls you Ni-Ni. Then she breaks down and apologizes, you just looked way too much like her dead brother.

>> No.71777537

>>71776125
Damn it, Carlos!

>> No.71779430

>>71777139
>Mio rents you out to pretend she's pampering her kid
This is making me imagine Mio hiring rrat!Ayame for enjo kousai but instead of a date it's having her pretend she's her daughter

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>>71684512
This but with Ao

>> No.71782134

>>71684512
Been on that Jujutsu Kaisen brainrot lately so I wanna see a fic of raid partying unchained Laplus and she slowly kills off the other holo members until its just the two of you left

>> No.71784236

>>71782134
Who would be your party members?

>> No.71786241

>>71784236
NTA but without knowing what they mean with JJK but going by the general concept of "raid against an unsealed Laplus", I can kind of envision like 3 scenarios.
>The screwjob
The rest of the party is HoloX but you don't know what HoloX is and by the time you figure out this was all a mass betrayal they tag team take you out.
>The hero's party
Party of holos vaguely corresponding to vidya tropes, they get taken out one by one until it's a one on one with Laplus, Hero vs Demon.
>Doomed
Party of holos that the author can accept getting violently taken out. Ending is either a hopeless struggle or if it's a smut fic, a really hot rape scene where Big Laplus rapes the viewpoint character.

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>>71781271
INCEEEEEST!
INCEEEEEEEEEEEST!!
I NEED
INCEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEST!!!!

>> No.71787822

>>71787653
Get me a device with Google Docs then, my current WIP is incest.

>> No.71788743

>>71786241
NTA but what chuuba makes a good Doomed party.
Hard mode: no sanseki because I, uhhhh, gonna use them for something else.

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>> No.71791410

>>71788743
Like I said in the original post, it depends on what chuubas you the author like enough that you can write well but don't love enough that you can't imagine writing them getting. violently killed.
But to give "generic" examples of chuubas to pick
>Graduates
Take your pick of chuubas you liked that have graduated/gotten fired. They're significant enough that you can build them up before sending them to their untimely death but the meta aspect of them already being "dead" means killing them off isn't as shocking.
>Indie/cross company cameo
If you want cannon fodder but don't want to throw pure nameless OCs to their doom.

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>> No.71794100

>>71793798
She's going to cut her fingers

>> No.71794345

>>71759238
I conceptually like Fubuki doing BDSM petplay, except she has to pretend to be a cat. Fake cat ears to go along with real fox ears, big obnoxious kitten mittens on her hands, cat tail with a plug under her real tail.

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>>71750440
That was very good...
GIWTWM

>> No.71796185

Concept: Hag gf (Mio for this thought experiment) wants to feel young again. She’s very fond of her school days and even still has the slightly ill-fitting uniform. However she was self-admittedly a bit of a dweeb back in school. The uniform alone isn’t getting her into the youthful mindset. The thing that really brings her back is the schoolyard bullying. Cue anon indulging her requests, feeling it’s crazy and kinda hot that he’s doing this childish stuff to an older woman.

>> No.71797323

>>71784236
I imagine that Laplus would start with fighting the 'strongest' hololive member, could be either Sora or Fubuki and then it slowly goes down the hierachy chain like Ayame and a defected Iroha with you trying your best to assist them until it comes down to a 1v1 with Laplus herself

>> No.71797446

>>71796185
>make her wear twintails
>force her to wear the (poorly fitting) school outfit while you go out
>flip her skirt in the middle of stores, pull her hair
And other requests only a hag would ever come up with ......

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>> No.71800732

azki_survive.jpg

>> No.71801045

>>71796185
>>71797446
>Climax reveals the hag was actually the Oneesan that had moved away who you had harrased when you were a young Shota.
>All those requests were actually because she was trying to make you remember her.

>> No.71803185

>>71800732
(1)

>> No.71804458

>>71800732
(2)

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>>71800732
(3)

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>>71684512
cosplay sex with ririka

>> No.71806375

>>71797446
>pulling her pants down in public
>flushing her head in the toilet (after rigorous cleaning)
>putting a kick me sign on her back in the store
Truly…

>> No.71806977

>>71806375
>Huh? arent you gonna punch my stomach and force me to eat dirt?
>Turns out that Mio's bullying was borderline psychotic

>> No.71807235

>>71806977
>forcing Mio to eat the CHEESE

>> No.71807504

>>71807235
now i want a diary of the wimpy kid but its about Kobo being a borderline sociopath that hangs out with Kaede

>> No.71808837

>>71806375
>>flushing her head in the toilet (after rigorous cleaning)
If you're kind enough to clean it beforehand, you can at least make her lick the bowl too.

>> No.71810127

>>71808837
I feel as though that would be a given.
Man that scene from magical girl site kinda mindbroke me on toilet dunking…

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>>71684512
sharing a class with the exchange student, who seems to be on your case over every little thing turns out she's crushing but she doesnt know how to talk about it

>> No.71811904

>>71810662
Reminds me of the Kaela exceel sheet date

>> No.71814383

>>71811904
if she's on highschool she doesnt know excel yet. She writes it in her notebook

>> No.71815423

>>71814383
Or maybe used Excel at home and printed it...maybe.

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>>71805689
Yandere Ririka except she's roleplaying and fucking it up so much you two cant help but laugh

>> No.71816549

>>71815678
>Ririka tries to do the Near miss stab in the wall
>Lodges the knife
>Cant pull it out
>Puffs her cheeks and stomps her feet until you take it off

>> No.71817474

>>71684512
A 'hagification' virus is amok, and no one is safe from being transformed into a tall busty older beauty! Can you survive a week in your office unscathed when all your coworkers are desperate older women?

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>>71815678
>Ririka goes to slap you
>Sikes herself up for way too long
>Still stops mid-swing and trips over her own feet, starts crying

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>>71817474
>Hag Bae with impossible standards for romance despite her inmense wife powerlevel
HNGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGthat's just choco

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>>71819329
>Hag!Bae being incredibly self-conscious because she's not as fit as she used to be

>> No.71820903

>>71819329
>>71819980
I can't wait for Bae to enter hagdom. She'd make a great wife already, but with time she'll age like a fine wine.

>> No.71821525

>>71819980
I feel like she'd remain lean but not as springy, meaning that she gets excited over stuff and then is panting for breath after a bit because she cant keep up with her own energy.
Mainly, the type to try a new dance routine and end up in the couch groaning and whining

>> No.71822984

>>71796185
I feel like Polka would be a better fit than Mio

>> No.71823407

>>71822984
You think bullying the funny fennec would fit better? Why’s that?

>> No.71823452

>>71823407
NTA but I bet its because Polka has self-confidence issues or something.

>> No.71823931

>>71823452
Didn't Polka also have a bunch of degradation kinks?
Reminds me that Fubuki and Nene have ryona kinks as well.
Holy shit dude, was it with happy-go-lucky chuubas and freaky shit?

>> No.71824227

>>71823931
Oh, does she? That’s interesting to know. I will keep that information in my back pocket for later unless someone tells me it’s wrong

>> No.71824331

>>71823931
She does? I just thought that other than the self-confidence issues that she also use to be fat.

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>>71823407
>>71823452
Well, her being a Menhera is certainly part of it. I think if you're getting off to your past bullying you need a screw or two loose.
But Polka is a sensitive person and combined with her self-confidence issues would make her a target basically. Polka is also into more "nerdy" things like reading so I can see a bookish JK Polka getting harassed. Mio doesn't really give me the vibe of being someone who would let herself get actively bullied.
I say actively cause, for what it's worth, IIRC Mio was a friendless loser before Hololive

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>>71824342
>IIRC Mio was a friendless loser before Hololive
I mean, she definitely at least had Fubuki, though apparently Foobs had nobody but Mio as a friend in high school

>> No.71824480

>>71824457
They are…

>> No.71825270

>>71824457
They only had each other yeah. One could argue that such social isolation constitutes bullying but in any case, it is not active. A lot of high school kids slip through the cracks like that.

>> No.71825696

You want to bully a hag, I want to get bullied by a hag, we are not the same.

>> No.71826070

>>71825270
All I’m saying is this presents the opportunity for twin hags reflecting and commiserating over getting shoved in adjacent lockers back in school, and this amuses me

>> No.71826182

>>71825696
What kind of bullying, anon?

The one that's in "a fistful of love" or the kind of that dropped Selen bully fic?

>> No.71826721

>>71825270
>One could argue that such social isolation constitutes bullying
Not really. Some kids just dont vibe with their class/school and just peter off OR they only vibe with one person. Also having just one friend already kind of clears 80% of bullies because they tend to pick on kids who have no one to help them/call the teachers if you notice, most "full time bullies" only have one or two friends.
Its different with girl bullying though, which can be pretty fucked and obtuse...which then also has the side effect of if you are autistic you wont even notice you are being bullied (Moririn...)

>> No.71826748

>>71826182
If the Sellen bully fic you're talking about is the one where you choke in Apex and she sits on your face, that kind of bullying.

>> No.71827191

>>71826748
>she sits on your face
I think I want to read this kind of fic now ngl. Only problem is (although that's just me) it would have to be a hag chuuba that's known to be a bully, no?

>> No.71828746

>>71827191
It depends. A fic with consistent, minor bullying that builds over time as she tests how far she can push your boundaries? Yes.
Something that's a heat of the moment response to something or some frustrations that you've caused for her being let out in a moment of catharsis, could be almost any hag. Maybe she does something reckless in a fit of passion and finds she enjoys the feeling of bullying you.
Or you can just expand the definition of 'hag' to make it fit a certain chuuba

>> No.71828852

>>71828746
>Or you can just expand the definition of 'hag' to make it fit a certain chuuba
Or set it a few years in the panda's future.

>> No.71829180

>>71828852
Future (hag) Muyu would be a relentless bully if her times messing around with kids in roblox are any indication

>> No.71830622

>romance with characters under 20
kino
>romance with characters 30+
kino
>romance with characters in their 20s
boring

What do you think causes this? Is it the lack of insecurity and/or desperation?

>> No.71831429

>>71799666
>Old enough she won't be reckless and less novel as it's not her first time, may be somewhat jaded
>Young enough she can still get away with being lazy in the relationship, not desperate or flexible with her demands

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>>71830622
Dunno. i dont have that problem.

>> No.71831552

>>71831429
Meant >>71830622 , whoops.
Hag love!

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>>71684512
getting bullied by holoh3ro

>> No.71832074

>>71830622
1. It's cliche, and nerd fantasies lend themselves to the unusal.
2. People who have issues with how women act tend to focus on women in their 20s. They're grown-ups expected to act maturely, but still lack the wisdom that hags tend to acquire.

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>>71830622
I think its because both ends of the extreme experience the limerence of romance differently. On the younger end, romance is a new and scary experience so there are a lot of avenues to explore. Combined with surging hormones, Limerence there is like a forest fire, wild and out of control.
On the older end, the characters are more seasoned in romance and romantic feelings. This means when someone does spark that limerence it comes across as that much more impactful. Limerence there is like a smoldering campfire, constant, hot, and waiting to have its embers stirred. Both ends also communicate a "soul mate" aspect. Youthful innocence in the belief of eternal love, and Older belief in your destined one.
A middle-of-the-age romance is also a middle-of-the-road romance. Seasoned enough to know what to do but not aged enough to be alluring. Young enough to be relatable but not innocent enough to be compelling.
I think a mid-20s romance story can work if it focuses on barriers that mid-20s people have to deal with in terms of romance. Feelings of isolation and loneliness, insecurity in your game, work and school providing opportunities too good to pass up, etc.

>> No.71833464

>>71822984
You could also slowly acquire a harem of hags that want to be bullied by you.

>> No.71835533

>>71831990
that Zeta looks like she will suck my cock in the bathroom for some money

>> No.71835776

>>71833317
I'm going to copy paste this post on my notes.
Thanks friend.

>> No.71837428

>>71835776
No problem, glad my rambling was insightful enough. I can ramble more if need be.

>> No.71838947

>>71837428
Please do

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>>71837428
Continue!

>> No.71842043

>>71833464
How 2 acquire a harem of hags that will bully me?

>> No.71842462

>>71842043
Be sexy but also cute, dumb and timid.

>> No.71842982

>>71835533
That Kobo looks like she’s going to be made to suck my cock in the bathroom for free

>> No.71843034

>>71842982
I want to be a teacher she's sucking in the bathroom.

>> No.71843092

>>71842982
That Kaela looks like she intimidates everyone who sees her, but she doesn't know why.

>> No.71843337

>>71842982
>Mesugaki/Gyaru correction in the bathroom
extremely underrated really. The thrill of being caught pumping loads into a shitty brat who might or not be into it is so fucking good

>> No.71843556

>>71842982
Hey now, be nice, be nice. At least give her a piece of candy for the trouble.

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>>71838947
>>71839364
O-oh okay.

I'll continue by adding that Young and Old romances are two sides of the same coin. Both are beliefs and rewards in the idea of a soul mate. Young rewards the innocence of love with eternity.
The appeal of a Young romance is the universal experience. You root for the main couple to get together because you yourself have been in a similar position to some extent. That first timeness has a purity to it that everyone wants to succeed and continue forever. It is the belief that by holding onto that pure initial feeling, you will have your destined partner. Think the all-American high school sweetheart.

Old rewards the faithfulness of love itself with meaningful love. That if you follow the red string you will find your other half. It's the fateful encounter at an otherwise empty bar. The appeal of Old romance is the reassurance that it's never too late for anyone, even (You), to find love. You root for the couple because you want them to finally find the happiness they deserve. That reward gives you hope in a reward of your own or reminds you of your own fortune. It's a universal appeal rather than an experience. Not everyone leaves Middle School or High School with romantic experiences or even feelings but everyone grows old and has a moment where they assess their life and worry.

Middle romance is neither of these things. It's the dirty work of romance that nobody likes to talk about. It's the flings, the ghosting, the long road of going to bars and hitting on women and rarely getting a third date. It's the learning process of both romance and of yourself. How to dress, how to talk the talk and walk the walk. That age range is more about finding yourself and establishing your presence in the world. Hell, your brain doesn't fully finish developing until you’re 25. If you don't know yourself how can you know someone else?

I think why Young and Old are so horseshoed is because of that establishment of self. Old couples know themselves. Young couples don't but think they do. Middle couples know they are not and are still in that process. Thus, the lack of appeal in Middle romance is because of its normalcy. There's no magical moment. You just asked the cute girl in your English 101 course out and 6 years later you're married. It's fine but not compelling. It doesn't speak to a core emotion because it's such a varied process.

A good romance requires limerence, it requires barriers that need to be hurdled. And like I said, I think you can write a Middle romance if you focus on the broader barriers. Trying to find love while navigating a brand new world of being an adult. The feelings of constant self-doubt about everything, the dissonance between feelings and reality, etc. If both characters are working adults, you can make the barriers the feeling of not being prepared or worthy of their love. Or even social barriers, like, falling in love with a world-class idol.
I actually think that Kanokari, before that manga became irredeemable, brought up some of those same ideas.

I think my ideal Middle romance would be two people self-actualizing with each other, or two people realizing that their pursuit of being adults is blinding them or leading them astray. It would be the Middle ground of the two, so to speak.

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>>71843587
Thanks again!
I'll put some of these to work.

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>>71684512
(You) refuse to give up on courting a lesbian peafowl princess.
Said peafowl princess tried using conventional, but elegant means to repel (You) and (You)r ass, but (You)r dogged determination lets you go on.
The peafowl princess then comes up with the idea that she could literally fuck (You) off and milk (You)r dick hard enough to cause impotence.
Cue a (sexual) battle of attrition. Will (You) lose your manhood? Or will Reine finally learn to appreciate cock?

>> No.71846112

>>71843587
Oh I should add that when writing a Middle romance, you still probably need that "fateful encounter" like you would with the other two. Even if its "You saw a cute girl across the lecture hall." or "You start a new job and your boss is hot." It's fiction there's going to be some contrivance.

>>71844972
Hopefully, it makes sense. My ass could never be a video essayist.
For what it's worth, I consider Cooking and a Comet to be a "Middle" romance since the primary barriers are Suisei's and Anon's careers, Anon's feelings of being out of his league, and Suisei's dissonance. I think it falls into the same "normalcy" trap with the ending but I like to think the process of getting there made it work more or less.
And I rectified the ending in the Epilogue.

>> No.71846625

>>71831990
This Kobo needs to be given bullying correction

>> No.71847446

>>71795622
Sauce?

>> No.71847713

>>71847446
https://files.catbox.moe/sal8so.jpg

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I am rewatching holofes
Kanatan is cute as always!
Good event, I wish I could figure out something to write with her to celebrate

>> No.71848461

>>71847713
Nice

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>>71684512
protecting Lamy from the chinese triad

>> No.71851835

>>71847713
Oh, that's supposed to be an accurate cat cock... I now understand why so many feline kemonos are into humans.

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>> No.71855615

Did The Right Tool For The Job ever get finished?

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