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Story recap. There were four stories posted last thread

Auntie's Little Secret. >>64975481
Tags: Shirakami Fubuki, NSFW, fluff, grooming, dark.

Stacy Pacification(?) >>64990498
tags: NSFW, Suisei, Hoshikawa, Aqua, comedy, greentext, rivalry, seduction, Under 5k

New Holoshorts entries >>64995866

Heaven, Hell and the USDA 2: Divine Intervention >>65055592
Tags: NSFW, Coco, Towa, Kanata, heaven vs hell, domination, under 5k

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For any stories you want to enter into the contest, reply to this post.

>>65118647
But is she funny???

Cooking up something dark

>>65118840
Always.

>>65118655
One of the threads where I read and enjoyed everything that was posted. Good going, authorbros

>>65118500
Only a preview
https://docs.google.com/document/d/17eg-Xj8tMiNr4BCi4d4AkGJgFBvmhveJ1LP44AS0IoE/edit?usp=sharing

>>65119548
anonchama, you should go to file->share->publish to web, then use the pop up window to create the publish link and use that instead.

>>65118977
(Sana's "blackhole")

Polka would be a good fit for a silly-sexy pole dance.

>>65118655
It's "just" a greentext, but I'm happy about fun HSKW content.

>>65118840
shes funky

Rise

caught a bit of a mood swing, how do I cheer up?

Did Cold Air, Hot Blood get any continuation? (I could swear there were 3 stories, not 2)
Or My Summer Memories?

>>65124656
Do something you enjoy, or treat yourself to your favorite dish
>Did Cold Air, Hot Blood get any continuation? (I could swear there were 3 stories, not 2)
Just the two
>Or My Summer Memories?
First Summer Memories and no.

Son of the Fly is up RIGHT NOW on Lord of the Board! And he'll have a tag match later today as well!
https://isthisliv.com/vtleague/

>>65126896
Great match, /wg/! You put up a hell of a fight and I started to think you might win. Mad respect.

>>65126896
Well, at least we weren’t eliminated first. Is this a sign that we need more holoX stories?

>>65118500
>>65118977
Call of the Depths
Tags: Ame, Gura, dark

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vStnbUPr7IbqS9a7mnLZkQcVDq4msxfnu9C3fIPMc-Ap2OO9GXzzXBjcdqzqi-VIOGJbSAWu7S4sqf_/pub

>>65128021
Good fight, /holox/, good fight.

>>65128154
Write ones about Wagahai's power!

>>65118500
Blackbean Chapter Six

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTi-GvGCVahqV3kBTzkMGOSeHyXe_pz0WMkkrFxmD-aFsgyDL-uerOWeJMSQ3CZHB_kFtNjTffKwoxp/pub

tags: Botan, Towa, Watame, Reine, Fubuki, Mio, multiple chuubas, fantasy

>>65128250
I wouldn't call this "dark", it's just slightly sad. I'm mostly struggling to see the endgoal or purpose of this story, since it feels like a prologue or the abridged version of something longer. Like, Gura goes feral, Amelia tracks her down then gets killed and... that's it? I'm not saying it had to be longer but that's how I felt at the end. The basic dialogue didn't really help to make me feel much emotion either. Your prose is good, and I say that honestly, so it almost feels wasted on a concept so similar to ones the thread has seen before. I don't think I can count how many Gura and Ame stories we've had.

>>65126896
Son of the Fly is up AGAIN on Lord of the Board! He lost the singles, but there's still the tag tournament
https://isthisliv.com/vtleague/

>>65128871
There will be a fic about Lapchan early next year, but I'd also like to hear about what an actual Plusmate thinks about fics featuring her that are in the archive (linked in the OP) already. Have you read any of them?

>>65130359
I'm a general HoloXer, not specifically a Plusmate. I haven't read fics, no, but I love people expressing love for characters via writing. There's no greater act than creation.

>>65130151
I think the end goal is just tragedy. Every important character suffers a terrible fate and everything sucks in the end

>>65129654
>Towa and assorted hags
More like chapter sex.
On a more serious note, I like the Monster Hunter vibes. It's a bit difficult keeping track of the characters and the worldbuilding, but that's mostly on me for reading every chapter on release and giving attention to other things inbetween. I still had HHU Towa on my mind

>>65130476
If you ever feel like reading a story involving HoloX, feel free to leave your thoughts about it in the thread! There's nothing wrong with taking creative liberties with characters for good reasons, but there's also value in having an expert on the chuubas weigh in.

>>65130201
Jobber Fly...

>>65130944
If you want some reference material, there exists an official HoloX manga that got released. I don't agree with a considerable amount of the things depicted in the series (such as Laplus taking over the world is actually meant to be just her making everyone happy, since that makes zero fucking sense), but a great chunk of it should be a good guide.
https://mangakakalot.com/manga/pu932166

>>65131113
It's not over yet, sudden death time

>>65130201
>>65131151
NOVELITES I LOVE YOU

>>65128250
>nothing in Gura's apartment looked out of place at first glance
>only with Watson's super special eye ability she could see that the place was, in fact, completely trashed
>there was only a single tiny lead to go by, namely a big fat fucking "X" mark on a massive map
lol. It almost feels comedic in places. Well, besides that... I don't really know what to say. It's inoffensive enough?
Like, there are no glaring errors in spelling or grammar, but there's just nothing else there either. The plot is quite predictable, there is no "dark" turn to speak of. The conversation between Ame and Gura is wooden, with the latter far too communicative for someone feral and the former far too retarded for a detective.
Watson says she knows that Gura wants to protect herself, when she had already established previously that Gura was dangerous when feral. Then she gets eaten. End.
To be quite honest, I don't think I'll remember this by tomorrow.

>>65130640
>towa and assorted hags

It's hag hour every hour. I find hags are just ideal to write in most story

>mh

I'm glad you do. Whenever I write about Abyssal monsters I take some inspirational cues from Monster Hunter since they always get so creative in how each monster behaves and adapts.

>It's a bit difficult keeping track of the characters and the worldbuilding

Unfortunately (or fortunately depending on how you prefer it) there is going to be a lot of worldbuilding in this. One of the other features of this story is taking a deep dive into aspects of the world that I had no opportunity to explore in Balsa (religion, magic, the specifics of the Goddesses, etc.). It won't necessarily interfere with either story not to know/understand those concepts but there's going to be a lot of explanation into these subjects and their effects. I'm going to try to weave these explanations into the episodic chapters as a narrative until Act 2 kicks off.

I'm very glad you're reading though. I hope you keep enjoying it.

>>65131812
Ok

>>65131908
I will, thank you.

>>65128250
Here’s this for >>65111583 by the way. Shittiest I could muster. Hope it’s bad enough

>>65131127
Thanks, I'll check it out. I'm glad LotB is bringing attention to /wg/ - it's the first step towards more readers, and ultimately more authors.

>>65132672
I'm proud of the fact that you managed to get something out, anon. Now you got a solid ground to stand on and have some honest criticism. and look at that, even your shittiest isn't the worst thing ever.

Now try for something you're a little more passionate about.

>>65132672
I wish my shittiest prose would be called good...

>>65135832
Does it matter that the prose is good if the content isn’t pleasing to anyone? Polished turd.

>>65136323
Yes, it does. If your prose is still good at its worst, you don't have to worry about your prose in the stories where you're actually trying.

>>65136489
And what if I was actually trying here? What then?

>>65136984
We'll see! I am looking forward to it.

>>65137183
What do you mean by that?

>>65137382
That I'm looking forward to your next fic.

>>65137414
As soon as I can figure out something that anyone actually cares about, I might write something else at some point maybe.

>>65137653
Wholesome hag impregnation would be a good bet.
Fucking a hag with a condom on will get even more attention, but not the positive kind.

>>65137792
I can’t write sex

>>65137924
I disagree, but you can always start 9 or more months later.

>>65138327
I literally don’t know how. I’d be making it up and it would suck

>>65129654
Nice to see the team A plot moving along a little, that said though, it feels like the B plot moved to a screeching halt in the chapter. It was a very climatic sequence leading up to it, and it smooths out a little too well. Everything just kinda stops when they begin to rest, and while the rest was needed, the idea that no one mentions anything about the events or tries to work through their next steps during that, is a massive tonal shift. It would also be good to try and keep the perspectives of normal people in mind during some of these scenes. Since every gift is essentially unique, it's likely even a seasoned merc wouldn't know what the expect and could still have their blood run cold at the sight or sensation of something unsettling or threatening like Mio's gift. I also feel like Mio folded instantly during her negotiations. Even if she was not willing to follow through, she would have tried to at least haggle. Or to make better on her claim, break a finger or two, she already broke the one dude's arm, using her shadow help her break legs would have been no idle threat. Overall, it's another step in the right direction.

Jesus Christ, what do you want? We are not your therapy dogs. If you came here to get your face licked with meaningless praise, this is literally the worst place an author could come to. People are here for honest opinions (and weird fetishes) - even established writers get shit in their stories pointed out.
Take your feedback and use it, or don't. I don't care. Anons have been far, FAR more considerate of you than some others could've ever hoped for. Obnoxiously so. Get well soon and stop shitting up the thread.

>>65118500
oh boy im pooped. I finished my contest entry the other one will be finished after the contest, shiet, just waiting for the potential beta readers to answer my pleas.

With that being said,
I've updated Holomoms with two snippets. featuring NepoLabo.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRwbjPSqY3I64grZl_y3_V_KnNoinOqObqUZs8Yf4kODT_paFY98wCZOZFlIuQgNLphHgi9I7vOF5o4/pub

Reminder: Found family is great and Young moms are erotic

>>65138715
Only a very small minority here has a child and yet people write about having children decently well, so I don't know where you're coming from. I'm trying to be helpful, but the thread isn't fun to read when the conversation seems to lead scarcely anywhere. Write what you want to write and remember that what matters is enjoying what you do, not some non-representative feedback.
And stop being so negative about yourself, it's a self-fulfilling prophecy. It's the frown that gets you down, as they say.

>>65139535
>Only a very small minority here has a child and yet people write about having children decently well
>>65139497
>high-quality Holomoms content
pottery

>>65139497 (Me)

Forgot to add. If you have any idea for a potential mother/daughter-father daughter dynamic, just let me know, its fun to come up with scenarios.

>>65128250
If this is from the anon in the last thread who was feeling discouraged about their own writing, it's mostly unfounded. It's not bad by any means, the prose is serviceable for the piece. It could use a bit more flowering or different phrasing in some places for example: when she considered the intrusive thought that she might push open her friend’s door and find the shark lying dead on the floor. - for example might flow better with something along the lines like: the thought burrowed into her brain that she would push the front door open only to find the shark's motionless body on the floor
The bit about the apartment doorman needing a government ID could use a little extra to explain to a reader why the hell that's a thing, and there's a lot of points in the fic with background info is given and such that could use 1-2 more lines to add more meat to it.
As for the content itself, I'll have to agree with another anon that this isn't really what I would call "dark". The potential of what Gura could do in her depressive spats or perhaps has done was more dark than the end conclusion. The relationship between her and ame did also feel stiff. I was also questioning why ame was the only one giving a fuck. I think the plot of this would benefit from a bit more buildup and perhaps more interaction between the two. Something like having Ame trace back prior conversations and slowly piece together what might have happened, and to help reach that dark tone you want, go into how Gura is fighting with her very nature and the mental and emotion conflict that comes with that. Your writer's potential is certainly there, so I'll be interested to see what else you can do.

>>65139757
Another obvious switcheroo would be Aqua as Marine's mom.

>>65139959
wait i think i might be stupid. i had an idea for that so will try and update real quick

>>65139497
>more holomoms
Fucking yes! I love this. Your additions with my favorite gen are adorable.

>>65140034
Phew, that's done. good thing i already had the idea liying around

New Entry with Aquamarine added! Bae is playing Yakuza and that's always a great setting to borrow from

>>65140287
Thanks a lot! glad you enjoyed it. I really owe Nepolabo to get me into vtubing, so they have a special place in my heart too

>>65118500
Bloody Knuckles
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRpl_-xzzzd_zKhKHuin1W7yohNSlU5agrvXLvIeClxC94nMtQRUowg8tccojF5Su-t5hApy9QNftqX/pub
tags; gura, oneshot, mental illness, self destruction

>>65138796
Glad to hear I'm getting better with each chapter. The list of negatives seems to be going down with each successive one so I'm all too happy to see it.

>B plot comes to an abrupt hualt

I re-read it and saw what you mean. I think I should've just bit the bullet and wrote the conclusion. I thought it would've made for too long a chapter so I opted to cut it off before the big plunge. The conclusion is (probably) going to be a bit lengthy.

>keep the perspectives of normal people in mind during some of these scenes.

Good point and something I'll keep trying to remember.

>Mio folded to quick

I always felt like that was something she'd be more likely to do. Not that she's a doormat or anything, but she always struck me as someone who doesn't usually try to haggle. Did I get the characterization wrong? With the language barrier it can be difficult to divine what they're really like sometimes.

Thanks for the helpful critique as always.

>>65143687
I'm literally the worst person to ask when it comes to chapter length, so don't trust anything I say when it comes to that. For Mio, she certainly wouldn't fold if she has the advantage. If she loses something, she's the type that can brush it off, but she wouldn't welcome it as the first option. She ain't no chump.

>>65119682
Where.
The F.
Is it???

>>65145323
This. then make the link. Reminder you cant do it from a phone

>>65145664
Gottem, will do once I boot up my battlestation

Bumping with what hit me most in ALS

"I dont wanna hurt you anymore, Anon"

"Then hurt me."

>>65131127
God I fucking hate that manga, entirely for the fact that they made Chloe the audience surrogate, then bungled it up even more by making the mask an important part of her character...
Which is one of those things I can understand from a branding/character design direction but holy fuck manga!Chloe does not feel like she'd be able to be same person as stream!Chloe. Which fucks with me because for every other holoX member they got them (mostly) right.

>>65149845
No...my HoloX oshi...

>>65149721
For me, it was
>"... Can you call me auntie?"

That and the titledrop. It's like the author's fucking signature to use cheese title drops.

>>65151990
Auntieanon's power to title drop is to be respected, and also feared. He titled dropped my own story before I could! I could do nothing but kneel.

>>65151990
Sadly, my title aint as droppable.

Another one that also hit me is her sudden graduation. The only relief is that by then, HoloX was already in and possibly ReGloss, since it mentioned Lui

Title drops are cheesy and weak

>>65158196
ur mum was cheesy when I was banging her last night

>>65158196
It depends on the title and how well done it is.

I'm writing an argument right now, and I'm unsure if I want to bold certain parts for emphasis or leave it up to the reader to interpret/decide where the emphasis is. What are your guy's opinions?

>>65118545
Polka letting you fuck her in any way you want but threatening to crush your balls if you cum anywhere except deep inside her pussy

>>65169145
It's a good tool to use if the character is actually speaking significantly more loudly in those parts.

>>65169145
I've always been one to put italics whenever I want a word or phrase to draw special influence. Bold (to me at least) just seems unfit for a story and takes me out of it. Not saying you shouldn't though.

In my mind italics is for unusual emphasis and bold is for unusual volume (if you don't want to or can't use capslock)

>>65119682
>>65145664
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vT6YnufeirZEGpHAzweDLi58iTtUXSxH-REL2Ba0SD_LuWafVvPl3cnm71GMBRIGJRhnhWduBDb0j0a/pub
Hopefully I got this right

>>65143655
Now I need to read something happy to get back in a Christmas-y mood, so I guess you did the story well.

>>65143655
I don't get it.

>>65177532
nice to see you again, classic Nene

>>65177749
I keep forgetting she was chinese at some point

>>65179084
another thing toxic zhangs ruined

>>65179084
She wasn't just vaguely Chinese she was also supposed to be an alien, at least that's what I'm vaguely remembering.

>>65179343
so not human? bloody hell they really did model her after chinks

>tfw even the schizophrenic hallucinations hate my work

>>65179402
Nobody hates your work, anon. It's just that nobody cares about it. Which is probably worse, to be honest. Especially when you get so mad about it.

>>65179343
That was the lore reason for the China pandering, yeah. I kind of wish they had JP holos with a similar concept, but for other countries. Like one that is not!Dutch who came to Hololive's version of Japan by ship, a long time ago.

>>65179550
Kiara...

>>65179759
She features her Alpine origins on stream, but it's not her official concept.

>>65179759
>>65179488
Probably never gonna Write it but i was gonna do a a joke fic where its framed as NTR but its you eating actual seasoned food in front of Kiara ("whats wrong honey? You didnt touch your poopenfarten sausage with water"), with Nerissa, Ame (mexico stand in), choco for jp and kobo for the muslim. It all hinged on kobo calling you a "a dirty fucking coomer" because you love cumin so much.
At the end, it was all a dream and Kiara wakes up to her husband bringing her unsalted oatmeal and speaking like wallace from wallace and gromit. She sheds a tear as the european values are preserved

>>65180594
Sounds awful.

>>65180794
Yeah like european food

>>65180594
Hah, and then Choco wonders where the bear is.

>>65152989
"You see, Chris, your title drops are mine to control, not yours."

What if you titledropped the title of another fic when it's relevant?

What if you pre-tittle dropped a fic that hasn't been released yet?

What about a titty drop

>>65182631
Fun, but better suited to a visual medium. I'll see if I can work Coco letting her dragon milkers flop out into the next part of HHatUSDA.

>>65149721
The sex scenes of Ch.4. and Ch. 5. Just live rent free in my head, honestly.

>>65183440
In a hard to swallow way or a hard as diamonds way?

>>65182547
That sounds like a beta reader being cheeky and putting the title of a fic they're beta reading for in an innocuous line of dialogue to fuck with future readers/the author they're betaing for.

>>65184075
Both.

>>65118545
Koyori being forced to sell her body after going into debt from horse betting.

>>65176772
Good, that’s vaguely what I was aiming for
>>65177171
Mental illness

>>65175448
Yep, that's how you share files.
So.

Stick to one set of tenses. Either present tense or past tense. Of course, it's not set in stone, but try to make them more consistent.
>everything Basuki can want, Aunt Reine delivered
This for example has them both mixed up, and it really fucks with the flow.

One problem you're facing, and that all amateur writers face, is the problem of showing instead of telling. The first two paragraphs describe the relationship between Basuki and Reine, but instead of that, you can expand on it and do things to show it.
Like, let me put it this way.
>Basuki threw himself on the bed and sighed. The date offered nothing for him to do. School was closed off for the holidays, he was up to date on his homework, and he found no interest in doing anything around the house.
>Being part of a royal family was boring. Ostracized from those 'beneath' him, unfitting with the fancy, stuck up rich kids, and a rather... Unlucky streak with girls, who didn't find his interests attractive.
>There was however, one person who could bring a smile to his face, and a text message from her soon did.
>"Hey" Read a text from his aunt, Reine. "How was your last day of school?"
>"It was meh"
>"I sent you a little money so you could treat yourself"
>Embarrassed, Basuki checked his bank account, and sure enough, his auntie sent him more than just a little cash. He tried to ask her for her bank info to send the money back, but Reine wouldn't budge, insisting that he earned it.
>"You'll come over for the holidays, right???" Reine texted. Basuki jumped to his feet and replied immediately.

Like, take one of your paragraphs, take the concepts that you want to explore or present to the reader, and try to cook up a scene that shows us why that is.
>"Reine spoiled her nephew a lot."
How does she spoil him?
>the two were outliers
How are they outliers? How do their family treat them because of their otaku tendencies? Do they show their distaste for it in front of them, or behind their backs?

Everything else will come after you sort this out.

>>65187354
About the money, it'll be in person, along with the spicy. Everything else I can do.

As for the top point, maybe it could go "everything Basuki wanted, Aunt Reine delivered"

Reine mainly spoils her through material things and bonding over otaku things.

Most of the clan I guess do it behind their backs in a sense that when boasting about the highs of their clan, neither are in the topic.

Also, you ALSanon?

>>65187873
>Reine mainly spoils her through material things and bonding over otaku things.
>Most of the clan I guess do it behind their backs in a sense that when boasting about the highs of their clan, neither are in the topic.

You know that because you're writing the story, what I'm getting at, is how the reader is supposed to learn it.
>Reine spoils her nephew with material things
So she buys him a lot of stuff. Does Anon arrive dressed in clothes that Reine bought him?
>Most of the clan do it behind their backs
So maybe Anon and Reine have a moment for each other, and there Reine sighs. Anon asks what's wrong, and she tells him about some gossip that's flying around.

>Are you ALSanon?
In the flesh.

>>65187873
Pretty sure that anon asked you the questions so you answer them in your story instead of just telling everyone the results.

>>65188095
working on them now.

And merry christmas to yall

>>65189137
Merry Christmas Eve, friend! Be blessed.

>>65188095
Will you be the overseer for all aunt-themed stories from this point forward? You're worthy of the title.

Merry Christmas, /wg/

>>65189935
Merry Christmas, and let's forgive Miko for her sins.

>>65189831
I will, all while I take swigs from my "Designated Aunt Fucker." coffee mug.

>>65189935
merry christmas!

>>65190144
kek

>>65190069
also kek

>>65190144
That's very nice of you! Assistance by respected veterans is something that could help many newbies out.

And now I'm fucking pissed off because pc HAD TO SHAT ALL OVER THE FLOOR WHEN I DONT HAVE MORE TIME FOR IT!

>>65189935
Merry Christmas to you all too!

>>65191869
Poru...save me...

>>65193528
In what way?

Rise

>>65194171
From myself...

>>65118545
That (slightly) Fat selen prompt about pounding her until she loses weight to fit in her new dress

>>65196654
What if you fixed the dress in place and pounded her into it?

>>65196304
That sounds like something she would do in a good story.

>>65197537
i dont have a way to answer that, i just love chubby girls

>>65200414
You can't just post that. It's her little secret.

>>65200414
I may be putting this image into story form later

>>65202869
Tell me more.

>>65202928
Well I'm not sure yet. Gotta think (and by think I mean jerk off) about it first

Son of the Fly is up in Lord of the Board, tagging with Shiori Novella against 3 other teams!
https://isthisliv.com/vtleague/

>>65203817
Nyooo dont make me pick a thread

>>65203817
Well that was a fucking shitshow rigged to hell and back

>>65205464
ACTUALLY live rigged against /wg/ and Shiori Novella. What a load of BULLSHIT

>>65203817
That was embarrassing. Unambiguous one-sided victory flushed down the toilet

>>65205674
first time watching Lord of the board.
Why the fuck did they reset the match? why not just give the win if Ina was basically pulverized

>>65205736
The AI went full retard and wrestlers couldn't toss Ina back in the ring. It was reset to save time, but I still think it's fucking bullshit

>>65205736
To be fair, the original wrestling fed, HolofightZ, also doesn't count matches unless they end properly and that has been the standards across the different feds. The game crashing is sometimes incorporated into the lore but a canon match outcome is generally the one recognised by the game.

>>65205464
>>65205540
>>65205674
>>65205736
I don’t have time to watch it right now, what happened?

>>65206278
Son of the Fly and Novelknight were left 2v1 against Ina. They went full retard and were just beating the shit out of her outside of the ring (pins or submissions can't be scored outside of the ring in that match, only inside). It went on for a while and the host decided to reset it and make it a sudden death 2v2, giving Ina her partner back. /wg/ and Shiori ended up getting dismantled in the sudden death.

>>65206278
All fighters were taken out except for Fly, Novelbro (our partner), and the Takodachi, then they juggled it around one-sidedly for several minutes without being to finish the job since it needed to be inside the ring before finally the announcer called sudden death, which incidentally revived the Takodachi's partner as well. Defeat truly was snatched from the jaws of victory

>>65206394
Damn…
Oh well, it’s all good fun.

>>65206394
that doesnt make it justice.
Novelnigga and the fly were separated from like, 90% of the match and they won their fights/dominated some. They finally regrouped and ganged up on Ina, who lost her partner really early on and was basically dead.

As soon as the match was restarted, Ina went for an inmediate submission and knight tapped out without even fighting, then she spammed submissions to the fly until it surrendered. It was so unfair to watch because Waranon, Ina's partner jobbed super early and Ina was just beating on a jobber before she started losing, so it was a no brainer to give the library the win

>>65179488
What are you talking about? I was making a joke.

>>65118545
Something involving a time loop and resulting insanity

>>65118545
Something involving a time loop and resulting insanity

AAAAAAHHHHGLGL
GROUNDHOOOOOOG DAYYYY

>>65189935
Merry Christmas bros, may your holidays be well and may your future works come to fruition.

>>65209911
POV: You're co-starring with CC's girlfriend in "Christmas Creampie".

>>65175448
Good job

>>65189935
Merry Christmas fellas

>>65194171
Any way...

Also, that was a roundabout way of saying Pol cute

Survive

>>65215799
god I wish my christmas present was Marine's big boobs on my face

>>65220115
Same.
Or Maririn going full Treasure Box on my pelvis

>>65220115
>>65220212
I made these posts

>>65118545
Someone should write an NTR story that's an allegory for switching your oshi. I would do it, but it's too real right now.

>>65200845
Really wish this becomes a doujin later.

>>65118545
Suisei is jealous about Miko having a loving relationship with you while she has to offer her body to ojisans and sponsors. She plans a situation where Miko will replace her as the Ojisan's sex slave instead of her and she'll be the one to comfort you and replace her as your girlfriend

>>64845277
>>64847105
>>64847844
https://files.catbox.moe/7yhan1.png
Dedotated wam. Dunno if this angle was exactly what you wanted but I just kinda let my hand guide me

>>65225099
Thanks for the christmas present

>>65118655
I read ALS now that it's finished. I concur that it is good.

>>65226083
Will Fubuki's throne ever be usurped?

>>65225099
fucking hell man. Ill let you know im wanking it.
Maybe ill write something about fat lamy, my dick is so hard right now

>>65225099
Goddamn that's hot. Love you man.

>>65227121
Mayhap not.
I can only hope that Goldfeather! Reine can be a worthy challenger.

>>65227121
Fubuki Killer when?

>>65118500
>>65118693
(You) are a modern-day street urchin, a stray in a far too big city. No longer a child, but still not quite a man, you spend your days wandering the city. Until one day, you encounter a strange cat in an abandoned parking lot, and the devil girl chasing it. A story about two teenage strays who spend a year loitering around the city and taking care of a fellow stray.

There Are Days That Last Forever.(57 pages, 24210 words)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vR3Fx6WkSppDfdZWvlhPUWiAWMQVgVHqX-ZON4tPr0hBYRsHgWrZLtaT-fiXp-InXFUiRJpg4Hge4mG/pub
Tags: Tokoyami Towa, Fluff, Drama, SFW

Based on that one Anon's dream with some extra of my own added for narrative. A fic that I had a complicated relationship with, but I hope it's enjoyable.
God willing I'll never write something this long again.

>>65233649
Wait was this my dream? It sounds incredibly familiar, would you have the original post? If so, holy shit.
I'll read this in a bit once I'm done rushing to get a story done.

Merry Christmas writing general

>>65233649
The synopsis has me interested for sure! I'll have to give this a read when I get a chance tomorrow. Thanks for the words anon, and merry christmas to all of my writing and reading bros.

>>65236919
Can you beta mine? Its over here: >>65175448

>>65237077
NTA, but you do know we have a list of authors on the archive willing to beta read if you just email them. In fact here's the link
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTkOKmppoWTortR1oGdYAmQlML--2QMvi5GN5BunO9hBm-oSQp4mls6zdpr3t5leaP0kczs6744qK11/pub

>>65118545
Polka forgot to get you a present. She makes it up to you with a footjob under the table at Christmas dinner with the rest of NePoLaBo

>>65233649
oooooh! This was my dream! I haven't had a more vivid one ever since either! Can't wait to read this. I'll get back to you with feedback later - glad my goslingposting inspired you either way though!

>>65237469
Oh, i got one of em already, it seems

>>65118484
nice read

Came on to desktop and I see snow

>>65143655
Thanks!!

>>65243767
Wh-What do you mean by this?

>>65240693
Hope you have productive email exchanges!

>>65244212
It's a compliment from a special kind of vtuber fan.

>>65244843
...meat?

>>65245398
Yes.

>>65246498
You try to write something about mental illness and self destruction one time...

I'll take it. Glad you enjoyed

>>65118500
Every year that I write a Christmas story the time I allow myself decreases for whatever reason. Two days, one day...
Anyway, here's some slop I crashed together in about four hours. It's rushed, there's probably some mistakes I've missed and I'd love to put more meat on the bones but Christmas for me ends in about an hour. I hope you guys can enjoy this all the same. God I fucking love Iroha.

Fractured Night, Salvaged Night - 3.7k words
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSj6yWU8VmUutSSLm15OFv49EnABbYDkis8vYWkH5uEOpiPRBJCnZx_x0Txky2Z6DnN-soxnVpsaLlR/pub
Tags: Iroha, Fluff, Christmas, SFW

>>65248360
Your writing style is familiar.

>>65248360
Oh, and as a bonus here's the Kurokami Christmas fic I was originally writing but ended up dropping because I wasn't sure on where to take it, making me pivot back to the Gozaru:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTLL9O0hV2JGos0JZQqdKYrG3x8xPLTgWivGqKp_ufCQo1u_vkJK4GiCiTcCz5UgBrvX_sJO991Rqyg/pub

Merry Christmas you fuckers, looking forward next year's.

>>65248360
This was very lovely. I'll vote for it if you enter it into the contest

>>65248438
it's mwanon

>>65248360
>>65248532
>MWanon double feature
Christmas is here

>>65226083
Truly I say, sir. Truly.

>>65248360
There's nothing wrong with this writing and it's perfectly functional, it's just not very interesting and I can't give any one concrete reason why. It might do better with more flair in the writing and more humor injected into the narrative.

>>65248532
On the other hand this was very interesting and it seemed to be building up towards this guy getting emotionally flattened in the most brutal way possible, but ended just as it got good.
If I was going to offer a suggestion on how to continue it, I'd keep it simple; Kuro shits on the guy, you both laugh about it and go back to your place (turns out you're something of a hidden delinquent too), you both crack some of your parent's beers because it's Christmas (fuck the rules) and shoot the shit about nothing in particular, then Kuro passes out on the floor because she's a complete lightweight, you toss a cover over her, wish her a merry Christmas and then go to bed.

I just really like the idea of Kuro being something of a 'bro'.

>>65244552
He hasnt replied yet...probably stuffed, drunk and fucking.

>>65248438
You mean my thread posts or my actual prose?
>>65248799
Thank you for your kind words, and while I do appreciate you saying that, I don't think I can be too proud of entering this into a contest. It's possibly my most rushed piece yet, and if I were entering someting into a contest I'd much rather produe something that's spent enough time in the oven.
>>65249099
>>65249930
Sorry to disappoint, but that's not me. That Kuro fic is unfinished too, so don't get your hopes up.
>>65250477
Yeah, I agree with you on both those points. There wasn't too much time to refine the story since I was focused on banging it out in a few hours, but it's been a good learning experience. Thanks for the suggestions.
>>65250872
You know what? That would have been a good idea. I was trying to lean into a romance angle and couldn't think of how to write it, when as you said just having them be bros would've been fine. I might pick it back up if inspiration for my other WIPs runs dry, but it was mostly just there for the obligatory Christmas fic. Thank you for reading.

>>65237077
Wanted to get to this first since I said I would once the publish link was fixed.
To start off, the starting sentence: "It was just another night" is contradicted by the next statements, since the late decemeber time is actually special in the Jarkarta area.
I think it would also help build things up and set a clearer picture if you went into why MC is considered a black sheep in his family. Just saying he likes otaku stuff doesn't really explain why he would be ostracized. Is it more about that he's into vtubers? Or is it more about how he participates in his hobbies? Also on that topic, since Reine is also a vtuber in this story, wouldn't he be glued to his phone watching her stream? Or at least know her streaming schedule?
Grammar stuff
“That’s what happens sitting around for too long…” - If you are trying to showcase a specific accent,that's okay but this would correctly be something like "That's what happens when you sit around for too long.." and then maybe have her give a soft glare or something at maybe her husband? Something to provide a small context clue to the reason she might have lazed around too much, if there is one.
“Heeeeey!” she responded jovially as she hugged her nephews. - don't forget the niece, she's here too.
“Meh, not so much really…”, Basuki mumbled. - This sounds like it was originally written as an answer to a different question and not "How's school?"
Overall I think it's got a good structure for building a story that aunt fuckers and fuckers of women with white hair, can really enjoy. I would also echo auntieAnon's feedback and try to show more rather than tell when giving the family background and Basuki's relationships so far. The scene where he is waiting for Reine to come down would be a good striking point for this to really give a preview of his attachment to his aunt.
>As his siblings were content to watch whatever landed on the TV's play reel, Basuki's eyes constantly traced from the rooms entryway (or if he can see a staircase or something, that's what the angel descending from heaven bit usually implies). to the TV, then to the vase that sits atop an ivory pedestal that has no actual function or meaning.
>His imagination ran wild with images of his aunt, trying to guess how she might dress for the party. Did he look good enough? Was his shirt on straight? Oh crap, there's a mark on his shoe.
Make your readers feel the intensity Basuki has towards his aunt and help them make it your own. I know you can do this and give everyone the peafowl stuffing they crave!

>>65254235
First off, thank you for the Pol.
The "shitting around for too long" was because she works an office job, which indeed involves a lot of sitting down.
He's trying...wait, actually, would he know then that the streamer is his aunt? How would I make a striking background of Reine;s occupation...since I plan a "knew all along" moment later on.
The niece part was a whoops.
As for the "meh: part, it was a take 1. Intended, since Basuki really feels meh about school.

>>65233649
Anon, thank you so, so much for this. I'm going to need a bit of time to process this, but I think you have just written my favourite fic /wg/ has ever produced. I'm not sure where to start, but I'll be reading this again for sure. I know I'm baised since it's a story about my oshi but hey, who isn't?

First off is your characterization of Towa. It is immaculate. She's cute, she's kind, she's goofy, and during their reunion you can tell she's gained a bit of confidence, just like the real Towa. The only problem I might have had with it is how quickly she gets angry and her behavior during the argument scene. She seemed to bristle a little too easily, though this might fall more under the argument itself feeling a bit inorganic rather than any characterization issues. Besides that, I loved her. There were so many lines that just tugged on my heart and made me want to scream "TOWAAAAAAAAAA" at the top of my fucking lungs. One of those was:
>A tug on your shirt distracts you. “...you can look, it's okay… don't ignore me…”
That shit was killer. I really need to take notes because your Towa far exceeds my Towa that I'm currently writing.

I guess we should go to the story next. It's good, very good. The year they spent together was so sweet I nearly got toothache from all the damn sugar. It did occasionally feel like some conversations progressed too quickly and they got comfortable with each other in a kind of rushed way, especially towards the beginning, but this was a minor issue that was hardly noticable at all. As I also mentioned before, the argument felt a bit forced, like everyone was getting angry for no reason. It was later explained that Towa was just bottling up her feelings but even then. I would have liked the reunion and the married life section to last a bit longer too, but I'll take what I can get. One major thing this story is missing however is a kiss. Just one kiss. Goddammit Anon, let me fucking kiss Towa! Overall it was quite the journey and I could feel my emotions running on all cylinders throughout the whole unfolding of the story. The dynamic you created was too damn cute and I really felt it when things fell to a low. Shit, who knows, I might give this another read when my mind is refreshed and give it a second review.

Your writing style/prose is great. There's a lot of words that I vaguely knew scattered throughout the story and I could definitely learn a thing or two about increasing my vocabulary from this fic. Your descriptions of scenery are especially nice and by god the way you were able to set the mood/tone of certain scenes using the surrounding environment was just... spectacular. I would like to point out however that the story could've used a quick once-over to check for missing full stops and commas, because there was a glaring number of sentences that never finished and pauses that just passed by.

There was more I wanted to say before I started writing this review, but I think I've forgotten most of it. All I can really say is bravo. I don't know how much of my Twap bias is speaking right now but this is seriously a next level story. Most of it's charm really does come down to the dynamic between the characters and the drama that comes with the story, so the 24k word length really paid off IMO. You mentioned that you never want to write something this long again but I really hope that doesn't turn out to be the case because as I've said before, I think this is my favourite fic in the entire archive now, and assuming you're also the writer of the Suisei cooking series (another one I really liked) the longer stories do suit your drama buildups. There's more I want to say but I think I've made this review long enough. I love Towa and I definitely love you for making this, Anon. Thank you for the meal.

>>65254618
If the sitting around is from her job, a short little addition other on her sister's end or her own could well establish that.
I figured he knew since the maids told him Reine was streaming and would be down in 30 mins. Also he could hear the stream just barely, most noticeably the closing goodbye.
Alright, for the part where he's asked about school, responding with "meh" is accurate for a teenager who dislikes it, but "not so much really" is confusing as to what it's referring to. Something like this could better show that angst and reluctance to the question.
>Basuki groaned. School was absolutely the last thing he wanted to think about right now, much less talk about, but when faced with that compassionate that adorns the landscape of his aunt's wonderful face, he would talk about anything. "Fine...I guess."
Like I think you want to really lay into how his school life and relationships with his peers blows and that his aunt is the main social outlet for him.
I got Pols for days buddy, and I'm happy to share them.

>>65248360
Super cute!

>>65256198
>"Uh, Anon, do you know if you can get pregnant if it's your first time...?"

Wat do?

>>65256435
Answer the question

>>65196654
A few months later she's having the same problem as she's filled up with your kids

Although she'll definitely go through what looked to be an accelerated pregnancy before she lays her eggs. But the milk won't come in until it's getting close to time for them to hatch

>>65257048
Women laying big eggs and then roosting on them is so cute.

>>65233649
>>65236919
(me)
I was looking forward to this, and it did not disappoint. The way you delivered each day and interaction was relaxing to read through. The seemingly simple interactions between the two was so enjoyable to read progress and heighten over time. Your word choices and descriptors are also really nice. I was really invested in the relationship by the end, and I was really happy with how you concluded the story. I can't really think of any critiques at the moment, since your fic really shows how much polish and effort you put in, so just take my thanks for giving me a good read.

>>65255183
Got the mom additions in.

I'mma think about how to best fulfill those suggestions within my own vision.

Also, compassion, not compassionate. You drunk lol

>>65118545
FuwaMoco Incest. They do everything together so why shouldn't they masturbate together?

>>65118500
Here's a little something I made for Christmas, it's a kinda sorta sequel to the story I made for the first /wg/ contest:

Wait Til Midnight With Me

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSRNFg7ZuBf6MgipmbkfE2fWYGQ6ahobXeXC8iahB--Z5gLvFyE9VrG1scNvh0l9TWQtxykbhQsi40k/pub

Tags: SFW, Ina, Mentioned Mori, Fluff

Merry Christmas, fuckos. Even if I don't really say it much, I love every single one of you faggots.

>>65248360
This was super cute! I love my dorky over-polite samurai. I think you captured Iroha's personality pretty well, and the budding relationship you drew between anon and her was adorable and made the things she was struggling to say even better. I would say that your scenes could use a little more flowering to them. While the subject is easy to grasp and enjoy, there's a lot of potential to have it resonate even more, feel more beautiful, and just whisk the reader into Iroha's apartment for lovey dovey dorky Christmas Eve SEX!

>>65258195
Give it some time to cook, you got this. Yeah, good catch there, I think I meant to write "compassionate smile" but I'm not really proofreading much this morning. Last night was a little long.
>Wife gets some edibles from her cousins
>damn HJanon, these edibles ain't shit
>2 hours later on the drive home: pull over, I'm going to throw up, we're time traveling, how are you such a good time traveler.
>wife does not handle being high well, and this was the first time she ever had a real taste of it

>>65259409
That was...something alright.

>>65233649
>>65240129 (me)
alright time for my totally unbiased review:
For obvious reasons, this hits really close to the heart for me... and honestly, I couldn't have dreamed it better myself. This was an incredible sweet, slow-burn romance and I loved it start to finish. I had a constant smile on my lips while reading, interrupted by wet eyes during the dramatic climax, followed by an even bigger smile for the conclusion.
I do have to second >>65254881 however, that it's downright criminal of you to starve us of any Twappi kisses for 24k words straight. In my humble opinion those would've fitted in well with the reunion, maybe even as the outstanding Christmas present Towa was owing for you stop smoking - she did become even more bold and energetic after all right?
That scene with Anon's colleague asking for a light was a really nice detail, by the way - perfectly showing what a long-lasting and positive impact Towa has had on Anon, despite him pretending that she was just a hazy memory and better off without him.
If I'd had to find any critique to give, I'd say that your eye for details and detailed descriptions is amazing - enough so that you could maybe even tone it down a little on descriptive adjectives, instead leaving those details up to the imagination of the reader. Now that I write that, I feel like I've given this kind of feedback before... CoverHighAnon, is that you? Fucking hand out the Pekosex chapter already if it's so!
Image attached is the one from the original gosling post / prompt in January btw

Stay strong.

>>65233649
>57 pages
>24210 words
Jesus Christ, hope you get some well-deserved rest after that.

>>65260766
Ensure Gold.

...its a commercial here btw

>>65259169
Short and sweet, just the way I like it. Thanks anon

The last 14 months were a great time for stories.

>>65261517
Thank you. I'm gonna be honest, that took me like an hour, tops. It came out much better than I expected.

>>65261631
They sure were