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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>"Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction?"
Yes.

Previous thread: >>61892013 (where there was talk of getting Lamy to drink liquor in a whole new way, Anon figuring out which chuuba he knocked up, and what kind of kemonomimis certain chuubas would be)
/wg/ rentry (for bakers): https://rentry.org/wgrentry/

>> No.62071631
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62071631

Story anchor.
Cough 'em up!

>> No.62071665
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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap!
There were 6 stories posted last thread! Technically four, but yeah. Keep 'em coming!

Apple of Her Eye (Novelization) Chapter One >>61892264
tags: Suisei, Sora, Marine, Anon, sexual abuse

Holoshorts (updated) >>61898929
Tags: Hololive, wedgie, variety, compendium

Apple of Her Eye (novelization) Chapter Three >>61908809
tags: Suisei, Sora, Marine, Anon, sexual abuse

Apple of Her Eye (Novelization) Chapter Four >>61957340
tags: Suisei, Sora, Marine, Anon, sexual abuse

Balsa Chapter 28: An End To Evil >>62032256
tags: (you), fantasy, multiple chuubas

Soft as Lion's Fur >>62045598
tags: fluff, (you), Shishiro Botan, failed pregnancy, feels, romance

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>> No.62072069

A yandere harem would be the end goal, since at that point you have them all figured out and can convince them to share

>> No.62073036

>>62072069
A yandere harem is one of those things that just naturally builds up because you unintentionally build up a harem of mentally unstable women or they get broken while they were already in it.

>> No.62073880

>>62073036
Or maybe they were normal but they got dragged in.
Something like, you are banging Mori and Ame, with Kiara on the side triying to help.
Which ultimately ends with Kiara getting dragged, as she starts corrupting and indulging in toxic behaviour

>> No.62074493

>>62073880
>Yandere Menhera degeneration
God that sounds like the big twist if you run with the amnesia angle, with you recovering your memories. Then it cuts to a montage of you engaging in behaviour to actively make them worse so they're easier to fuck.
Like doing everything for Gura so she grows dependent, spiking more alcohol into whatever Mori's drinking, playing up Kronii's ego and crushing her when she's depressed, etc.

>> No.62074734

>>62071607
Thank you for baking.

>> No.62076142

>>62074493
Oh damn, that is rather fucked indeed. Beautiful.

>> No.62076392

>>62074493
>Some of them love you even more because you "went the extra mile"

>> No.62076878

>>62074493
Slightly off topic but I feel like Gura is one of those people who hides insecurity with humor. Once you got with her, she’d end up being really clingy and desperate, like “please don’t leave me…” “I didn’t do something wrong, did I…?” “I don’t want to be alone…” that kind of thing.

>> No.62077144

is the wedgie writer guy the most popular writer in /wg/?

>> No.62077369

>>62077144
For a "specific fetish writer" he's probably the most liked by way of not having people that actively dislike him.

>> No.62077489

>>62077369
I just can't recall many other writers that get requests or idea suggestions beyond a single stringent one. He's had like 5 in the last two threads alone

>> No.62078038

>>62077489
Well liked series writers asking for advice/help? I remember auntieanon getting loads of response around the time they announced they couldn't make anymore headway in ALS.

>> No.62078771

>>62077489
Probably because he's the only person who will actually take requests. Granted, only a specific kind...

>> No.62079152

Sex with the blue child in an Indonesian hut

>> No.62079660

>>62079152
Sex tourism in Indonesia in which you pay 10 dollars to some woman to let you fuck her daughter.

>> No.62079965

>>62079660
Anon I'm already on board, you don't need to sell it to me

>> No.62082131

>>62074493
Feed Bae's insecurity until she requires validation

>> No.62082986
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>>62071752
Anchoring Holoshorts again!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTHQNoyNK1_zHfuT4kP0bJdxTCWMilPc6L1eNFwJYbZVcyspsJFyIkCMQfXT58CGVuoA0oixd_PtCoh/pub

New update with picrel! This one's a little shorter but has an absurd comedy focus instead of a sexual one, so there was less description needed.

Current index (no word count for old ones because I don't wanna bother):
-Vestia Zeta
-Shishiro Botan
-Amane Kanata
-Kaela Kovalskia
-Hakos Baelz and Mori Calliope (and IRyS)
-Airani Iofifteen
-Omaru Polka
-Nekomata Okayu and Inugami Korone, 7456
-Tokino Sora (and AZKi), 1994

>> No.62083177

>>62077144
Over the last year or so it's definitely the author of HoloJourneys. He's been a brainstorming catalyst and contributor more times than I can count, and if you know his images and posting style you can tell how important he is.
Wedgieanon is like a cute guest that comes around for a while every few months, to do the same in his area of expertise.

>> No.62083289

>>62079660
But her mother lives in Austria.

>> No.62083615

>>62083289
Just use paypal

>> No.62083803

>>62082986
>Tokino Sora (and AZKi), 1994
The sweltering summer of 1994...

>> No.62083836

>>62077144
I guess you could say pekofag is up there as well. Not in a good way but Shruken Troubles still lives rent free in the threads head

>> No.62083869

>>62083803
>‘94… the year of a hundred flagpole wedgies… I remember it like it was yesterday…

>> No.62083946

HJanon is our most precious treasure, even if he's been busy with his family and home recently

>> No.62084094

>>62079660
The only holos I can see pimping out family members are Mio with Subaru and Fuwawa with Mococo.

>> No.62084538

>>62084094
>Reach the Ookami residence
>dogeza
>I WANT TO RAWDOG YOUR DAUGHTER
>Mio looks at you in utter disgust
>"You will NEVER lay a finger on my precious Ayame!"
>I meant the other one
>"Subaru...? Eh, sure, here's 20 bucks for the trouble "

>> No.62086840

>>62084094
>Fuwawa with Mococo.
Good god.
>Check the directions your friend gave you, constantly look over your shoulder thinking a fucking cop will pop out at any second.
>The neighborhood doesn't inspire you any trust, despite being relatively normal. At most there's some graffiti in the alleyways
>This is the place
>Knock on the door, someone is coming
>A long haired blonde kemono opens the door
>Like a sperg, you ask her if she's the 'one' despite the fact her massive tits obviously said otherwise
>She laughs, says she has no idea what you're talking about
>Show her the money, she asks who sent you. It was so and so.
>"Come in." She opens the door. "Last door to your left."
>"How much is it?"
>"25000 yen for 60 minutes, 30000 for the special."
>"What's the... special...?"
>"I'll be there with you two."
>"Two for one?"
>"No, silly!" She laughs. "I'll just watch~"
>Well, it was just 5000 more yen, and you had an exibitionism feitsh anyways.
>Pay the blonde the agreed sum, she lets you into the hall
>"Moco-chan!" She knocks on the door. "You have a visitor!"
>"Come in Fuwa-chan!" A girlish voice replies from inside
>There she is, a girl no older than 10 or 11, sitting in front of an old Super Nintendo.
>"Take a seat~" Fuwawa instructs you as she locks the door behind you.
>Sit, take a look at Mococo. She's almost flat as a board, if it wasn't for the little breasts that protruded out of her shirt like pudding. Her hair is just like Fuwawa's, blonde, with pink stripes and it reaches to her shoulders. She's dressed in an oversized shirt and some underpants.
>Mococo sits on your lap, asks if you want to play. You agree, thinking its just part of the service
>Play Mario Kart, and for the entire time, Mococo grinds on your lap, letting you feel that plumpy, soft butt of hers
>"Ho~" Fuwawa smirks. "Moco-chan, wait, look at what you've done~ Get up, get up. You're distracting our friend! That's not fair..."
>"Ahh..." Mococo sulks. "I-I'm sorry, mister."
>"You little ruffian!" Fuwawa scolds her. "You'll have to make up for it."
>Fuwawa sits behind you, undoes your fly, she then tells Mococo to come closer, who crawls towards you on all fours. As Fuwawa frees your cock from your pants, Mococo blushes and looks nervous.
>"Now, Moco-chan, don't keep him waiting~"
>Mococo opens her mouth slightly, just slightly, and gently nibbles on your head with her lips.
>"The tongue, Moco-chan"
>"Un"
>Feel Mococo's small tongue slide across your head, let out pants of pleasure.
>"Good job, Moco-chan, lick it, lick it until it shines~" Fuwawa whispers, scooting over to her sister. "But you know how to make him feel real good, don't you?"
>Mococo looks away again.
>"U-Un."
>Mococo turns around, lies flat on her back and lifts her shirt up, showing you her bare chest
>"Come on, Onii-chan." Fuwawa whispers in your ear. "Don't be shy, Mococo's waiting for you~"
>Align your hips with Mococo's face, let your hands grab her tiny budding breasts. The girl is so small your dick looks massive by comparasion
>Slide your hand across her tummy, the girl twitches
>"Ah, Onii-chan!" Fuwawa speaks "Moco-chan gets really emotional if you touch her tummy, you have to be careful there."
>Mococo sticks out her tongue, Fuwawa smirks and encourages her from the side
>Tap your cock on her tongue, there's no fucking way you're going to fit inside her
>"Come on, you can use her however you want, mister~" Fuwawa sits behind you, aligning her hips with yours
>"W-Wait" You spurt out, right before Fuwawa grabs your cock and lines it with Mococo's mouth. The poor puppy has tears swelling up in her eyes
>"There you go~!" Fuwawa thrusts through you, sending your cock straight to Mococo's throat. She gags, her hands try to push you back, but Fuwawa goes "Tsch", making all of her complains stop. You can see your bulge on her neck...

>> No.62086978
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I've been watching FMA Brotherhood again for the first time in like 13 years and I'm kinda in the mood for a military story. Not a crossover, just in the mood to write a military story of some sort, super natural or otherwise.

Saying I do, anything you'd like to see?

>> No.62087008

>>62086840
Anon what the fuck

>> No.62087364

>>62086840
>Mococo gags and gags, her throat closes around your cock so violently you have trouble pulling backwards, locked in place by pleasure.
>"Let her breathe." Fuwawa commands, and obeying her orders, you take it out. Mococo has tears running down her face, she's gasping for air
>"Now for the main course~"
>"Un..." Mococo groans, sliding her underpants off.
>"Stand up, pose, give it your best Moco-chan!"
>Mococo turns her behind to you, where you can see her plumpy butt in all it's glory. At Fuwawa's command, she makes it jiggle with her hands.
>"Take a closer look, Onii-chan~" Fuwawa whispers as Mococo takes her cue so walk backwards towards you, smotherin your face with her buttocks
>You grab a hold firm of her legs and her bum, her skin is unbeliabably soft. Then your hand draws further inward. Not a single trace of hair in her pubis.
>"Turn around, Moco-chan, I think he wants to your garden~"
>Mococo obeys, and shows you her smooth, puffy pussy. Hypnotized, you stick your tongue to her clit and look up, seeing Mococo's embarassed eyes
>"Look at you, Moco-chan, you're leaking~!"
>Getting on her knees, Mococo turns around on all fours. By instinct you rub yourself on her folds
>"There you go~"
>Slide it in, Mococo's legs jitter "Ah..." She grunts
>"Hush, Moco-chan."
>It doesn't fit all the way, the girl is too small, so you move with the little room you've got
>"Moco-chan likes it when people are rough with her, you know~" Fuwawa whispers in your ear, and in that second, Mococo's butt looks mightly slapable.
>"I-I..." Mococ grunts, right before your make her behind echo across the bedroom "Uwah..."
>"There, there." Fuwawa smiles. "Can you feel it coming? Let it out inside, the special comes with a free creampie~"
>"F-Fuwa-" Mococo complains, and Fuwawa shuts her by pulling her tail.
>"Come on, shoot a litter of puppies inside her~" Fuwawa whispers
>A few more thrursts, and you shoot your load inside Mococo, her legs twitch and jitter
>"Milk it, Moco-chan! Milk it!"
>Taking her cue, Mococo sways her hips, she moves back and forth on your shaft, taking out every last drop your balls had to offer
>Fall back exhausted, Fuwawa catches you on the way back
>"You did a good job, Onii-chan, you too, Moco-chan! Now, it's time for cleanup."
>Mococo crawls foward with the last of her strength, and with empty eyes she opens her mouth and takes your shaft inside, cleaning all the lines of your sticky white juice running down it. With her tongue, she cleans the spots she couldn't fit inside
>"T-Thank you, for your patronage." Mococo mewls. Fuwawa smiles.
>As she sees you out, she asks you to come back soon.

>> No.62087411

>>62087364
Anon what the fuck 2.0

>> No.62087533
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what do you mean exactly? i think Polka is a military otaku and Bae loves the aesthetic. Maybe Oozora police as military police? making them quite terrifiying despite being seemingly normal

>> No.62087946

>>62087008
>>62087411
What, you've never wanted to bang Mococo while Fuwawa encourages you?

>> No.62088071

>>62087946
Yeah a Mococo who’s like 23 or something. Not into kids at all.

>> No.62088198

>>62088071
Your loss. Mococo's first egg is all mine!

>> No.62088326

>>62088198
…you’re weird

>> No.62088800

>>62086840
>>62087364
You're telling me you just cooked all this up in an hour?

>> No.62088873
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62088873

Hey wedgie guy, what do you think of my new invention? (Patent pending)

>> No.62088875

>>62086978
Holos as knights

>> No.62088908

>>62088800
More like 15 minutes, but yeah.

>> No.62089035

>>62088873
Yo this legitimately looks exactly like something that appeared in my horny fetish fever dreams when I was like 11

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>>62088873

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Seems I was right. Inspiration wasn't flowing because an incomplete Balsa wasn't letting any more through. Just finished half of the chapter of the BBD-like story, who's title I'm still conflicted on.

Look forward to it. I'll be out soon.

>> No.62089413

>>62086840
>>62087364
>>62071631

>> No.62090064
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>>62086978
Depends on what kinda world you're interested in writing about. Also do you want to tackle themes like a corrupt or lax system paving the way for those with the means to bend the rules to their choosing to allow them to exploit others? Or does the topic of military amidst active conflict or war interest you more? There's also the potentially more slice of life route you can take where you follow the training of a chuuba as a new recruit. Different girls might be better suited to deal with different themes, so what cuties were you planning to write?
>>62089167
Good on ya for busting past that wall!

>> No.62090138

>>62090064
I'm honestly not sure. That's why I'm fishing for some ideas. I could probably incorporate all of that into it. Any suggestions are welcome, I'll use them for inspiration if I end up giving it a shot.

>> No.62090155

War anon has made me hunger for chuubas in tactical camo

>> No.62090705

>>62086978
Chuubas in an ancient Elephantry.

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>>62090138
In that case I can toss a few ideas out there. I'm going to try and flesh out things like military and governmental details within my own world as time goes by since that's an interesting thing to write about and can lend itself way to various localized plotlines.
>Suburu can be well suited for a potential navy officer, or just regular higher ranked officer of any branch or subsect
>Lui has sharp tactical skills and aim, good for tactical or management role
>Peko, demolitions expert, has a bad habit and inducing collateral damage but the results are hard to argue with so higher ups usually let it slide with just a slap on the wrist
>Bae as an eager recruit who had always dreamed of joining the core
>Matsuri as a less eager recruit who is in the military since none of her career prospects panned out and she has no discernible skills
>Choco can be your standard nurse or therapist who works within whatever area you are focusing on, there's never a bad excuse for including huge demon sweater puppies
>Miko drill sergeant that no one can really understand fully, can be a perceived center of the story conflict but she is actually as straight and narrow as they come
>Selen actual commander and has the outfit for it, go nuts.
>Rosemi also has a commander outfit, can be more of a "just throw as many rockets at the problem as possible" kinda general. Likes to keep a clean and uncorrupt operation
>Koyori can be the head of military research, pretty cut and dry how to do this one

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>>62090138
Well if you want a FMA magi-tech setting, i think you could easily do a Warring states kind of deal
>Technology has advanced to the point of firearms, but there's still feudal structures in place. Ships are still mostly wood for example, as industrialization is barely peeking in
>The warlords/queens still have to answer to prominent religious figures
>tribes of savages ravage the lands not protected
>Warlords like Luna, Botan, Choco or other chuubas
>retainers (Iroha, Ayame, Flare, Amelia)
>Religious members and figure heads (Ina for the cult of the Ancients,Miko for the new gods of spring and Fertility, maybe the barbarians worship the Blood hound, so dog chuubas go there)
>Merchants and pirates run the economy,

>> No.62091262

>>62086840
>>62087364
Very good. I wish I hadn't read it, but I was absorbed. Fuwawa's encouragement gets me rock hard; you did a great job. Gonna nut to this later.

>> No.62091363

>>62091262
>I wish I hadn't read it,
and spoiled myself*

>> No.62091415

>>62090705
>>62090717
>>62091194
All excellent ideas. I appreciate it.

I still don't know if I do it or not, but if I decide to, I think I know how I'll do it. Thanks for the help.

>> No.62091884

>>62091415
Just remember. Marine and Kiara should run the seas because one is a corsair and the other can do a shitty italian accent, so she's 100% venetian

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>>62071665
San doing his best to impregnate his sister's friends before she catches him and chucks him into a neutron star

>> No.62092392
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>>62091262
>Gonna nut to this later.
Thank you for your patronage.

>> No.62092601

>>62071607
I hope someone make more kobo story

>> No.62092664

>>62092601
what kind of kobo fics?

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>>62071631
Shelter

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQmx13QCZB8R9LeM5edXddbL_MjYi_ST1vGiwdWTWr0R47taCIhBhq8LxW7PpS450i6aB_Malv5bjcv/pub

tags: Tokodori Hajime, Fuwa/Moco, omorashi, ABDL, ageplay

You'll notice spelling mistakes at times when Hajime speaks and that was intentional. If you don't know, she is known for being unintelligible at times.

This is the Building Block Doll-like story I promised. I hope you enjoy.

>> No.62092755

>>62092664
NTA but daughter Kobo comforting her lonely father after a divorce.

>> No.62092937

>>62092369
That one san fic was amazing. We really need that sequel where Sana joins in the correction to stuff him like a cream roll

>> No.62093026

>>62092937
Escaping velocity?
God, that was a fucking fantastic shota fic.

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>>62092601
I can't wait for my own story to reach Kobo.
>Rain shaman magic
>Helping her realize her potential while she becomes your daughterfu
>her fucking shoes let her walk on water
>her general fun attitude and she can hit stuff with an umbrella

>> No.62093299

>>62092749
>she is known for being unintelligible at times.
Unfortunately at a cursory glance that seems to be the only thing you took away from her speech, because the bigger thing is how she likes to talk like a thug and that's pretty prevalent in a lot of what she does. Look the content isn't to my taste I'll admit, but if you have to stretch and cut chuubas personalities down to fit like that you're better off not using them.

>> No.62093378

>>62093026
Yeah that one. I nutted a few times to it. I know the sequel is far far away if its even happening but the idea of San being so mindbroken that he gets an instant raging erection when anon appears is just the best

>> No.62093441

>>62093299
Maybe it's just because I've been watching clips as I don't speak Japanese, but I thought the whole thug thing was loose kayfabe. Because every clip I've seen of her has been nothing but sweet and adorable.

There unfortunately isn't a lot I can do since I don't speak JP. I've only got clips and her various mannerisms to go on for it.

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>>62082986
New entry with picrel, pretty short and comedy-focused yet again

>> No.62094003

>>62092937
I'm not into yaoi, so sadly it was a miss for me, but it seemed well written from what I read. I wish we had a straight shota fic with him.

>> No.62094070

>>62092601
If you have any ideas, you could try writing one yourself :) Either with the help of something like Grammarly, or in your own language.
Writing is awesome, and everybody can do it if they try.

>> No.62094159

>>62092601
There was a wedgie one with her I wrote a long time ago as a commission

>> No.62094253

>>62071665
Can we get a "(You) are a battered boyfriend to a chuuba of your choice where she verbally / physically abuses you for even the slightest of mistakes that you make" kind of story?

>> No.62094398

>>62094003
Hey variety Is the spice of life. I dont jerk of to trap or gay stuff, but that one did it for me.
Then again i know how you feel. Oneshota is truly a thinking mans fetish

>> No.62094633

>>62089035
Sounds like you have a classic case of "experience some vaguely sexual act during your sexual awakening and have it stick around as your fetish for life".

>> No.62094665

>>62094633
Believe it or not it was the fetish art that gave me the fetish. Self-perpetuating cycle.

>> No.62094891

>>62094665
I guess that's not too uncommon when you grow up with browsing the internet freely and frequently enough. Who knows how many youths your content has initiated?

>> No.62095084

>>62094891
The thought makes me vaguely uncomfortable but probably more than a few

>> No.62095125

>>62095084
Hey, nothing wrong with passing on a few memes.

>> No.62095511

>>62077144
How did you come to that conclusion?

>> No.62095635

>>62095511
NTA but not everyone recognizes the other authors, especially if they're new here.

>> No.62095906

>>62095635
Its hard to not recognize the wedgie guy if all hr writes is wedgies

>> No.62095926

>>62095906
Hey, I wrote something different once ):

>> No.62095990

Newfag here, the archive link isn't working. Is there much in the way of poetry written around here or is it all prose? I'm on the hunt for inspiration.

>> No.62096042

>>62093299
NTA, but isn't it also a bit reductionist to reduce Hajime to "she speaks like a thug?"

I didn't read the story so I might be off base, but it seems to be the exact same as reducing her personality to "she speaks incoherently at times"

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>>62095926
do i gotta suck your dick for an a-chan holoshort or what

>> No.62096091

>>62095990
Archive works fine for me.
Any poetry written in this thread tends to be shitposting, but there's a few in there. Not really gonna find any serious poems in here.

>> No.62096127

>>62095990
The google script page tends to break on mobile. Just use the rentry link.
https://rentry.org/VTCFFCD

>Poetry
Everything's welcome as long as it's chuuba related.

>> No.62096162

>>62096078
God the things I'd do to that pent up office lady

>> No.62096172

>>62096078
She wasn’t on the wheel, but I like her so I can put her in after Flare :3
Do you have a particular type of underwear yanking you want to subject her to?

>> No.62096266

>>62096091
>>62096127
Thanks fellas, browser issue, all good now. I'll take a scan through and see.

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>>62096172
if i had a nickel for each panty peek art a-chan had, i'd have two nickels, which isn't a lot but weird to have more than one

since the shorts dont have one yet, what about one focused on ripping her underwear off?

>> No.62096387

>>62096271
You know what, I completely forgot about rippings. I need to add that to the wheel

>> No.62096392

>>62095635
If we’re talking in terms of pure recognisability then weirdanon(v2?) would be the most popular author since his formatting and font immediately give him away.

>> No.62096441

>>62096392
Yup. Guy's incredibly clunky dialogue is like his signature.

>> No.62096597

>>62096387
>forgetting about the most humiliating wedgie
i dont doubt hanging a girl up by her underwear hurts more but i don't think it gets worse than holding her destroyed underwear up in front of her, fresh out of the back of her pants
>ywn rip a-chan's underwear off and get to see her ass crack peeking over the top of her skinny jeans the rest of the day
why even live

>> No.62096762

>>62096042
I wasn't saying that that's all she is, but is an aspect of her that is conspicuous by it's absence.

>> No.62097019

>>62077144
I am the most popular writer in /wg/. Your favorite fic? I wrote that

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Bully Girls is the most disappointing work. It's previews and descriptions should be restructured to indicate what it really is. It's not poorly written, but the prologue chapter and the blurbs on the google page suggest it's more like a femdom/reverse rape/etc fic, but it's really just vanilla with some inconsistent window dressing. Thank you for coming to my ted talk.

>> No.62097406

>>62097019
Holy shit, you wrote Gura's Futanari Cumflation Adventure?

>> No.62098265

>>62097374
Pocket Pibble my beloved

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>>62097374
Every chuuba should have fanart of them wearing Towa's outfit.

>> No.62098391

>>62096597
Just for you I’ll make it a reader POV

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>>62098362
here here.

>> No.62099582

>>62095990
Memoirs of Bunny Cunny is pretty much the one archived poetry fic and it's a short one.

>> No.62100955

>>62095990
There isn't much poetry at all, sadly. About a month ago there was >>59565659 - the poem itself is okay but that the post number ended up being an embracing rhyme (59-56-56-59) makes the post as a whole artistic, in a way.

>> No.62102081

Ill be honest bros, why is JP fanfiction so fucking bad? I've been reading chuuba stuff on Basedetsu and Pixiv and its all so fucking bad.

For some fucking reason half the shit has the MC from oregairu as the protagonist with a shitty ass betrayal past or something. My japanese reading is not the best but holy shit some of these plots are so fucking nonsensical it makes you question if the person that wrote it has a brain. To top it off they copy from each other like crazy, you would think its the same guy writing all of them but its not. Even stuff from other anime and shit is derivative as fuck. I've found a very miniscule amount of stories that can be considered somewhat good.

>> No.62102285

>>62102081
It's the same reason why so many anime and manga etc have all those tropes. It's pure power fantasy, made even worse by the fact that they're not held back by anything. I do wonder what's the worst one you've read so far.

>> No.62103092

>>62102081
>>62102285
Asians cheat off and copy each other to death, yes. Is this the first you’ve heard of it?

>> No.62103225

>>62102285
I think the worst one I saw was where the MC kills himself and reincarnates into a chuubas older brother who had just died from getting ran over while saving a childhood friend who is a different vtuber and is then replaced by the MC that killed himself. This is done in one of the most bizarre scenes I have ever seen, where the MC in his new body just straight up tells everyone who was mourning for the brother that he replaced him, and everyone just moves on. Idk what happens after that because I dropped it immediately.

>> No.62103250

>>62102081
It's partly different cultural norms and expectations, I reckon - heavy trope use and out-there plots aren't inherently bad, and a conservative society encourages the former while also fueling a need for escapism that encourages the latter. But from my limited experience it's also that Japanese nerds just don't engage with (domestic or foreign) literature as much as western nerds do. Light novels are mostly more comparable to stuff like Twilight and Fifty Shades of Grey (which incidentally were bad fanfiction); Manga can be very good, but is bad to draw inspiration from if you're trying to be a writer rather than a mangaka.

>> No.62103312

>>62103092
I didn't truly realize how rampant it was until I delved in.

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>>62103225
I think I'm gonna need a chart to make sense of this one bro.

>> No.62103530

>>62102285
Not him and a bit off-topic, but yeah. The quality of plots in anime and manga have really taken a nose-dive since the 2010s (and maybe even before that). I think it's mainly because the content is now made by otaku for other otaku, rather than something made that's meant to appeal to an either wider or more mature audience. You may notice that during the 1980s (before the economic bubble burst), a lot of shows were made with stories that appeal to a mass audience like Doraemon for example. Then, during the 1990s, you've got stuff that started to appeal more and more to otaku (with some stories that went against the grain like Eva - a show that, ironically, just made more otaku). By the 2000s and 2010s, pandering to otaku was already in full swing, since they were the ones willing to fork over the money.
I imagine that's also the case with JP fanfiction. The stuff is made that way because that's what their audience wants from them, and they themselves are part of that audience. It's kind of sad if you think about it.

>> No.62103550

>>62102081
>half the shit has the MC from oregairu as the protagonist with a shitty ass betrayal past or something.
Haha, yeah, that sounds like such a bad story! Imagine writing something like that.
Oh shit oh fuck what do I do?

>> No.62103719

>>62103312
I figured out how bad it was when the gang of Chinese exchange students in my major back in college literally had one guy figure out the answer to every homework problem or project, and then the rest of them just copied off him. It wasn’t even like a hidden thing, it was done in public and so blatant on paper that the professors literally told them to their faces to stop doing it or they’d get flunked… and *then they kept doing it anyway.*

>> No.62103943

>>62102081
>half the shit has the MC from oregairu as the protagonist
Wait like the actual MC or do you just mean like the archetype?
Because I can vaguely see the thread of logic that would lead to it as a concept
>Guy that wants something genuine
>Girl that's both a vtuber and an idol

>> No.62104170

>>62103530
Doesn't sound too different from nerd culture in many aspects (fantasy writers have been nerds for a long time), but of course otakus tend to be much bigger losers and outsiders.

>> No.62104190

>>62103943
No like the actual character. Its funny because in all of them the other characters from the show never show up or the one time they did they dead ass got fucking murdered.

>> No.62104655

>>62104190
Huh. I guess the specific crossing of wires that would lead to a fic with the concept of "What if Hachiman got involved with vtubers?" would happen more in nipland than in the western fandom.
...
What's the least shitty one you've read of that concept and can you give a link?

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>>62104170
It's really sad. A lot of things could've been more than what they currently are, if only content creators didn't have to pander to a specific audience where most of the money comes from and/or they are part of that very audience. Of course, there are exceptions in anime/manga (especially these days), but Sturgeon's Law is just too strong. For every one unique anime/manga that's out this season, it seems that nine other isekai/wish fulfillment stories come out too. I can't help but feel sorry about it sometimes.
Apologies for the off-topic tangent. Thank you for attending my TEDTalk

>> No.62105493

>>62104877
It feels ironic for you to say this in the fanfiction thread where like half the readers and writers are waiting for/writing reader insert chuuba romance and or harem fanfics.

>> No.62105709

>>62104877
I’ve always been of the philosophy that using an idea that’s been done before isn’t inherently a bad thing, and it can actually be a boon because you’re not going out into uncharted waters. It’s why there are so many Odysseylikes in Western literature.

However if you do plug into an existing archetype, you’re giving yourself two important tasks. 1. Make it your own, which means variation from the source to a significant enough degree that yours provides a different experience from the original. 2. Make it an objectively quality work of literature. Fail at either of these and your product isn’t worth reading.

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>>62105493
Oh, fuck me, you're right.
>>62105709
Definitely. That's why there's the saying, 'nothing's new under the sun.' It's always in the execution. Heck, with isekai alone, there's stuff like Mushoku Tensei. I was railing more against how the specific conventions just keep getting regurgitated over and over again. But now, I realize that I'd been too dismissive.

>> No.62106255

>>62105493
Not too ironic, given that we're fans in a very specific niche and not making the big products. Not even copying those prominent in our cultures.
I reckon plenty of people here read other things too.

>> No.62106416

>>62106130
It depends on how particular the conventions are.
Like you can go pretty fucking granular and still wind up with two totally different plots and themes. Take SAO and boil it down a bit, for example. All you’re looking at is the concept of real people getting stuck in a virtual game world where if they die, they die in the real world too. That’s a really specific set of criteria, but there’s still an insane amount of room to innovate, make different choices, and set up different overarching narrative themes.

However if the level of granularity ends up being that it’s the exact same narrative premise, plot beats, and is basically just the same thing as another work that uses the idea with a few names swapped, then you’ve got an issue.

Hell, even 50 Shades was able to take its knockoff setting and work it into something that only vaguely connects to the world it was based on. As trashy as it is, it still passes the litmus test for originality.

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>>62083177
>>62083946
glad to see HJanon getting some more vocal love, my brother deserves the praise for the work he's put in

also reminder for everyone to get off their asses and start reading HJ, a chapter a day is completely feasible so no backpack about "it's too long"

>> No.62107020

I don't want to reply to too many posts, so I'll say this: the Chinese literally invented the printing press to print nothing but Confucius and did nothing else with it.

>> No.62107060

>>62107020
Confucius say… print my fucking books you faggots… namaste…

>> No.62107394

>>62106416
I agree. It really just goes down to what a creator chooses to do with a premise. Now that you mentioned SAO, I ended up remembering Grimgar of Fantasy and Ash. That was a really good, realistic take on isekai. Shame that I can't read Japanese for shit, though. Now that I think about it, a Grimgar-like fanfic with vtubers might be kino.

>> No.62107997

>>62107394
I know you probably mean this in a dark fantasy, chuubas surviving fantasy world thing... But for some reason this post just makes me imagine chuubas getting isekaied into the overpowered bodies of their parallel selves and having to bullshit and bluff their way through their alternate fantasy world lives while trying to reconnect with other talents in order to find out what the hell is happening.

>> No.62108249

>>62107997
For some of them it’s like, magic spells and shit like that. And for some like Pekora it’s just
>marginally increased jump height

>> No.62108318

>>62107997
So Overlord but chuubas? And then every step of the way, their retarded decisions are actually praised to hell and back as strokes of genius? Combined with this >>62108249 it can be a good comedy.

>> No.62109178

why must ideas for fics be sex but writing the fics be not sex and instead be slow and agony

>> No.62109737

>>62109178
Because that is what creation is, anon. But when you finish it, there's no other feeling like it.

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>>62109178
It hurts because you want to put your all into making it the best it can be. Now use that pain. Let it light a fire in you that burns brighter than the pages you're making. You can get through this and the view from the top will be worth it! Keep doing your best.

>> No.62110024

>>62108249
Suisei
>Stars twinkle more when she's around for some reason.
Luna
>Speech impediment. Everyone thinks she's a child.
Watame
>100% fluffier than normal. Has the ability to talk with watermelons.

>> No.62110449

>>62108318
I was thinking less Ainz and more like them all getting isekaied to positions of power, like Queens, Princesses, Goddesses, National Heroes, Guild Leaders, etc.
But yeah this would absolutely be a comedy.

>> No.62110474

>>62109178
Because you want it to be good.
Don't give up. Keep writing, even if it's shit. Eventually, you'll get there.

>> No.62111150

>>62109178
Two possibilities here, either you really do want to make this good and you're struggling to make it good, or you just want to write the sex and you feel compelled to at least make this a story rather than just a contextless sex scene.

>> No.62113247

To you who enjoys writing descriptive smut, we salute you.

>> No.62114849

>>62113247
We have descriptive smut, but what about inferential smut?

>> No.62115359

>>62113247
It's fun if you're edging

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>>62093485
New entry with picrel, longer this time!
Well, picrel...minus Polka. I've included her in two of these, and I didn't want to do more than four characters for this. Just... imagine she was busy during the plot of this one.

>> No.62119226

>>62118360
oh this one is sex
nice

>> No.62120648

>>62119226
Thanks :3

>> No.62122390

>>62106130
Here's a fun fact: basically the entire isekai genre is fanfiction. I mean there was some stuff in the late 90s early 00s, but after Zero no Tsukaima came out it got hugely popular in Japanese fanfiction circles and there was an enormous amount of stuff that's either ZNT fanfic or a 50 shades kind of deal. Out of recently popular works, Re:Zero specifically started as a ZNT fanfic before being cleaned out.

>> No.62122731

>>62122390
Spy Kids 3 is my favorite isekai

>> No.62123089

>>62122390
What the hell, are you serious? Well, goddamn. I liked Zero no Tsukaima too, but I didn't know it was actually that influential.

>> No.62123254

>>62122390
Honestly the fucking Isekai genre is so incestous (in the idea stealing way not the smut way) that pretty much everything feels like a fanfic with their own spin on an original work that doesn't exist that holds the originals of the tropes of used without irony. I.e the standard route of Truck-kun, meeting with the divine, summoned to an otherworld that's straight out of standard Japanese European fantasy, arriving in that fucking ring city of starting town, gathering a party, and going on a quest to slay the Demon Lord.

>> No.62126225

Imagine 10 years from now and you're watching a really great movie, and you notice something with the plot that makes you go, "Didn't this happen in a scat-piss fetish fanfic I read once on /wg/...?"

>> No.62129821

>>62126225
no

>> No.62129853

>>62126225
>Coming Winter 2028, "I Can't Believe I've Become The Dragon's Queen's Bethrothed and Have to Go To Her Underground City of Monsters!!!(Chika Toshi no Ryūō)" is the new Shonen about a young 'man' who unwittingly becomes involved with Queen of Argomery, and the various adventures they get up to!

>> No.62130231

>>62106678
I tried, and it wasn't my thing.

>> No.62132177

>>62123089
It was big in English circles too, so many mediocre/okayish fanfics of ZnT I have read. Some good ones, but the majority of them hit a wall and the author stops updating.

>> No.62133296

>>62129853
I'd be so honoured if someone adapted my stories. Even if it's just in a video on Iwara or something.

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>> No.62135134

>>62129853
If someone made a HF Anime I'd fucking scream. But then I'd also have to fight Yagoo coming to my house with an army of bat wielding Yakuza to come and shatter every bone in my body to stop me from doing more.

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>>62135134
>Anon-san, I'm sorry
>I cannot let you paint my idols in such a light

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>>62135400
In the original draft of chapter 7, the final fight was supposed to be against a possessed Yagoo who was going to fucking kill Sora to cause a massive civil uprising. I imagine this is how he would've looked without his old warband leader armor.

>> No.62135618

>>62135498
That would have been really awesome and really goofy at the same time. Ripped Yagoo is an underutilised character.

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>> No.62137698

>>62132177
The only time I remember ZnT fics getting big was from Hill of Swords which was basically what if Shirou emiya from FSN instead of Saito which caused a big rush of people making alternate people getting isekaied (and also following stations of canon).
Which, to rerail this train of thought back to chuuba fic. It's interesting how a subgenre of fanfics can crop up from just having an interesting setting and characters to throw a character you like in. I'm pretty sure something like this will never be a real crossover fanfic genre for chuuba fic unless hololive alternative or holoearth actually does make an interesting setting that's not just set dressing to have holomems interact.

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>> No.62138123

>>62094253
So a fic about being Fuwawa's sibling?

>> No.62138358

Reading some recent NSFW fics has made me think about diction a lot. What words are best for describing genitalia? There is a wide spectrum of choices for genitals and secondary sex characteristics (buttocks, breasts), ranging from crass to scientific and everything in between. What words are most optimal, and what purpose should they serve in a NSFW fic?

>> No.62138755

>>62138358
Which words are best is pretty subjective, but you should be aware of their connotations and employ those appropriately. Like an intellectual character using a sophisticated term - until he breaks out the vulgar slang during sex, indicating how much he's lost himself in his lust.

>> No.62139649

>>62138123
Not what I had in mind but sure, we could go with that.

>> No.62139978

>>62134779
Holy shit, is that Aqua from the Visual Novel あくありうむ。?

>> No.62140060

>>62139978
I think it is. No idea who the girl on the right with the purple hair is, though.

>> No.62140112

>>62140060
That's Aqua from the Visual Novel あくありうむ。

>> No.62140638

>>62139978
Is it ever explained how Fubuki, a fox girl is your sister in that game?

>> No.62140898

>>62140638
Well this is just a theory but I think you might have the same parents.

>> No.62141100

>Write singehandedly the greatest piece of vtuber literature known to mankind.
>Wake up the next morning
>It's shit.

>> No.62141599

>>62141100
I sneak into Anon's Google docs in the middle of the night and ruin them.

>> No.62141650

>>62141599
so YOU are the reason my Mori fic stopped being horny huh

>> No.62141741

>>62141599
*GASP*
I knew it!

>> No.62141959

>>62141599
THE GOOGLE GREMLIN IS HERE?!

>> No.62141983

>>62141599
>Remember when you had worked out that major plot point, and you finally believed you we're finishing your fic? Remember when a new unattended plot point popped up and you couldn't ignore it because it messed with the rest of the fic?
>It was me, Anonymous, I ruined your fanfiction!

>> No.62142029

>>62141983
>REMEMBER WHEN YOU WERE WRITING KIARA SMUT AND YOU NUTTED ALL OVER YOUR KEYBOARD??
>IT WAS ME ANON, I JERKED YOU OFF AT LIGHTING SPEED

>> No.62143897

>>62140638
You're a fox boy.

>> No.62144693

>>62143897
Hey now,
You’re a fox boy
Get your kon kon
Go sex

>> No.62146331

>>62143897
Knotted dick that makes it so you can't pull out of Aqua

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>> No.62148664

>>62071607
ganbare /wg/

>> No.62148738

>>62148604
Suisei at the end of that wedgie fic be like

>> No.62149049

>>62071607
can anyone help critique my writing?
even worse bcs standart immediatly drops with ero, i hate writing ero )))

example text i just wrote
zeta rolls out of her bed, wearily leaning on the bedframe. her loose pajamas stick to her skin with sweat, and her face is puffy with makeup residue she failed to cleanse the day prior.
dazed, she reaches for a cigarette, accidentally knocking the alarm clock off the table, causing the battery to fall out. she sighs, and rubs her eyes as she peers out of the window, silently admiring the soft petals of snow fluttering outside.

i want to know what's wrong with what i write and why it's boring, if its too complicated, describes too much / too little, focuses on the wrong things, uses too much effort, etc
anything is helpful

>> No.62149705

>>62149049
There's nothing necessarily wrong with this excerpt. The image is vivid, but there's nothing to really critique either.
The descriptions are nice, they come along as they should. Thing is, this is too short to write any sort of feedback about.

I'd recommend you post something longer so that we can actually look at it.

>> No.62150349

>>62149049
Everything is a run-on sentence, and it reads like I'm listening to someone else describing what happened instead of being able to see it for myself.

>> No.62150621

>>62149049
Like another anon said, with a longer piece we can give more detailed feedback and have a general idea if any of the things you're worried about are happening.
>accidentally knocking the alarm clock off the table, causing the battery to fall out.
Reads a little dry. Maybe let the sounds of the clock breaking and multiple objects pittering against the floor showcase that part?

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>>62149049
ly adverbs read like a 14-year-old's fanfiction, minimize them and create the scene with a more active voice.

>> No.62151804

>>62151583
The road to hell is actually paved sloppily with adverbs. Make sure we all know how it was done ;)

>> No.62152104

>>62149049
People usually prefer their fiction written in past tense, but there's nothing technically wrong with using present tense. I'd say your biggest problem is over use of descriptive language (adverbs mostly), instead of descriptive actions. Here's how I would have written it.

"Zeta rolled out of bed, clinging to to the frame as she searched for her footing. Sweaty pajamas clung to her skin, her face was swollen, still coated with old, forgotten makeup. She fumbled for a cigarette, but her palm only found the alarm clock which she sent toppling to the floor. With a thunk, the battery was sent skittering across the room. She sighed, blinded by the light filtering in through the window. Rubbing her eyes, she took notice of small white flurries dancing across the gray sky outside. It was beginning to snow."

>> No.62153082

>>62152104
Agreed on all counts, however a few minor revisions for legibility, flow, etc.

"Zeta rolled out of bed, clinging to to the frame as she searched for her footing. Sweaty pajamas clung to her skin. Her face was swollen, still coated with old, forgotten makeup. She fumbled for a cigarette, but her palm only found the alarm clock, which she sent toppling to the floor. With a thunk, the battery was sent skittering across the room. She sighed, blinded by the light filtering in through the window. Rubbing her eyes, she took notice of small white flurries dancing across the gray sky outside. It was beginning to snow."

Forgive my inability to highlight them. 4ch could use some kind of markup for that kind of thing.

>> No.62154957

>>62151583
It's funny seeing this after finishing On Writing over a few plane rides last week.

>> No.62157122

>>62151583
Are adverbs that unpopular in English? I'm ESL and didn't know that.

>> No.62157444

>>62157122
More of you don't want to overuse them

>> No.62157536

>>62157122
It's not that they're unpopular, it's more along the lines that people overuse them and make their prose too flowery.

>> No.62157583

>>62157122
Apart from frequent adverb use being associated with English stories for children and youths which gives adverbs a bad reputation, it probably has to do with so many English adverbs ending with -ly also. A high frequency of English adverbs is very obvious compared to other kinds of English words.

>> No.62159154

>>62157122
Adverbs describe actions, but they don't paint a scene. They make effective stage directions in a script, but they won't immerse anyone in your writing. They're the literary equivalent of responding a text message with "k". Sometimes it's fine to respond "k", but no one will want to talk to you if that's all you bring to the conversation.

>> No.62159947

I know it's better to use more specific verbs instead of modifying a generic verb with an adverb (like using "dashed" instead of "ran quickly", for an obvious example), but sometimes I don't know a niche verb that would fit well. It's a problem I wouldn't have in my native language...I guess I should just try and find them online more often.

>> No.62160280

>>62157122
People love to shit talk them but often don’t understand why. Usually it comes down to the fact that if you use them too much, your sentences start to blur. It’s the same type of thing to be cognizant of as breaking up long sentences with shorter, punchier ones. Using a lot of them isn’t bad, but do it with intent.

That one in particular I’m fond of because you can smack someone in the face with a blunt statement right after describing the same thing in purple prose. It’s like a “are you getting it??” thing.

>> No.62161196

>>62159947
wordhippo.com is your friend, my friend. I’m a native English speaker and even I use it.

>> No.62162976

>>62157122
Adverbs are a writing tool like any other. It is cautioned against using them because it's a sign of unconfident writing. "fear is the root of all bad writing" to paraphrase King. Your prose should communicate how someone does or says something, rather than the adverb.

That said, nobody is going to dunk on you for using an adverb, just be mindful.

>> No.62164219

>>62159947
Just don't do this with said, that's generally accepted as the workhorse indicator for keeping track of who's speaking. So don't go tracking down every synonym of that just because you're writing a dialogue heavy fic.

>> No.62164336

You only need two verbs to put next to direct speech: say and ejaculate.

>> No.62164545

>>62164219
But I like using different verbs when possible ):

>> No.62164587

>>62164545
Kill yourself wedgiefag.

>> No.62164676
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>>62164587
Bitch

>> No.62164929

>>62164676
Your writing is shit and your fetish is all you are as a person. Your parents have gotta be so ashamed. Do the right thing and kill yourself. Society deserves it.

>> No.62165309
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62165309

>extremely horny and willing to write
>Professor comes out of nowhere with one last work and my teams wants it done ASAP
t-th-thanks...i guess ill jerk off...

>> No.62165513

>>62165309
I believe in you lost and found anon

>> No.62165613

>>62165309
>"jerk off"
you are a woman, you dont fool me

>> No.62165719

>>62165513
th-thanks. I like taking my time writing, but seems like that wont happen for at least this week
>>62165613
not really but care to elaborate?

>> No.62165915

>>62165719
Only woman like Kiara

>> No.62166067

>>62164929
Maybe

But I have to ask how I managed to get so deep in your head so fast

>> No.62166077

>>62161196
Not him, but I'm liking this site so far. Thank you, anon.

>> No.62166491

>>62166067
you could say, you are...wedged in there....

>> No.62166645
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62166645

>>62161196
NTA but I gotta second this. This is a really neat tool. Thanks for sharing this!

>> No.62166814

>>62152104
>>62153082
revised a little

"Zeta rolled out of bed, leaning wearily on the bed frame. Her sweaty clothing clung to her skin, and her face felt puffy with old makeup. Rubbing her eyes, faint memories of falling face first into bed the night prior began to resurface. It was all too evident by her hair, which was still tied in her signature cat-ear bun."

"She sighed, and rubbed her eyes as her free hand probed across the surface of her nightstand, which sent various toiletries and weapons tumbling to the cold ground. The agent then swept the mess under the bed with her shoe without a second thought. "

"She picked up last night's used cigar off the floor, and fumbled for her lighter from within her coat pocket. With a click, the flame comes to life. Taking a drag out of her cigar, she peered out of the locked window, sunlight filtering between the metal bars. She admired the soft petals of snow fluttering outside, juxtaposed against the inky black sky, a momentary pause from her ongoing mission."

i do actually want to write a fic abt her, it's difficult to continue without defining a setting first
writing takes forever for me since im super self conscious abt everything and all the feedback only proves i wasnt strict enough

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>>62166814
Hey that's a bit better! I'm kinda concerned that she's just letting possible firearms fall to the ground and just kick them under the bed, but Zeta gonna do what she wants I guess.
Try not too absorbed into what your own pace might be. We all write at different speeds and have our own processes. As long as you're having fun and take the constructive feedback you get to heart, you'll keep getting better and make that Zeta story you want really great like it deserves.

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>>62071665
You constantly joke around that bijou isnt sexy in the advent chat. When the meeting of talents and manager occurs in a restaurant, you find yourself in a conundrum.
Bijou giving you a footjob under the table, making you splurge in your pants

>> No.62167521

>>62164587
Hey buddy, how many words have you written today? It's less than the wedgiefag, isn't it?

You have time to whine, you got time to write.

>> No.62167529

>>62166491
Huehuehue

>>62166814
Looking much better anon, good shit

>> No.62167792

>>62167521
>you are no chef? you cannot dislike ze Diapér au Beurre Blanche

>> No.62167811

>>62167193
Rock foot Biboo or raw foot?

>> No.62167869

>>62167521
Anon sounds like he’s got something stuck up his butt

>> No.62167909

>>62167811
rock, so when it rubs against your rock hard erection it makes a grinding sound everyone ignores

>> No.62168129

>>62167133
Zeta always seemed kinda careless to me, at least watching her 3d live
Thank you so much!

>> No.62168257

>>62167792
He ain't feeding it to you, buddy. He's not even making you taste test. Youre coming into the kitchen and bitching and no one asked for your fucking opinion

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>>62168129
I only caught a little bit of her 3d live, but she seems fun. The secret agent thing is always a fun thing to explore, which is why I assumed she might have good weapon discipline in the context of a story where she can actually carry out missions and such. It could also be a fun mirror type of deal where as soon as she puts her game face on, she's super precise and coordinated.

>> No.62170651
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>> No.62173332

survive

>> No.62174414

>>62164676
Why does Snuffy hate having pretty models?

>> No.62174653

>>62174414
Art imitates life?

>> No.62177774
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62177774

sex with wolf

>> No.62178431

>>62177774
what if Mio lost control of her stand and suddenly the beast fucks her within an inch of her life

>> No.62178480
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62178480

>>62177774
Back blowing, mattress breaking, offspring creating, sex with the wolf at the night of the fertility ball.

>> No.62178887

>>62177774
Anon... she's a hag. Her eggs are drying up, she's not suitable as a wife. She's lonely, crazy horny, filled with a longing for a husband she can never have. What guy in their right mind would ever want that?

>> No.62178898
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62178898

>>62096597
Hey anon, new entry with picrel

>> No.62179702

>>62178898
>during a zoom call
that was a fun read, A-chan cute

>> No.62180702

>>62178898
Are you taking suggestions for the next one?

>> No.62181348

>>62180702
Sure, why not?

>> No.62181530

>>62181348
I think it would be good to give Haato a welcome back wedgie, hanging her up bare ass against bare ass with Haachama in a tree

>> No.62181625

>>62181530
As separate entities…?

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>>62181625
It wouldn't be the first fic to do that, but any sort of welcome back hanging for her sounds nice if you don't subscribe to that kind of thing

>> No.62182234

>>62181987
no one cares about wedgie shit except you two.
Write about Hachama's big fat ass and belly instead

>> No.62182415

>>62182234
The wedgie comes with the ass, I think

>> No.62182418

>>62182234
I wasn't the guy who suggesting A-chan so there are at least 3 of us! Three!

>> No.62183278

>>62182234
Half of wedgie writing is spent talking about ass anyway, why are you complaining.

>> No.62184832

>>62183278
NTA but you wedgiefags are incredibly obnoxious.

>> No.62185111

>>62181987
Im surprised there's no Chammers slampig idea floating around. She's chonky and crass enough to be the type of sexy fatty to invite you for a quickie, which leads to you being unable to get it up for slimmer girls

>> No.62185676

>>62181987
Hmm. Sounds a bit malicious of her friends, honestly. I like bullying, but that’s a little mean-spirited

>> No.62185815

>>62185676
You think? I would have thought it friendly because it means they're not treating her any different even after she was gone all that time; no walking on eggshells, just the usual

>> No.62185921

>>62185815
Maybe. It’s just the vibe I get from it. If bullying her is the usual, that’s kind of a rough life to return to, you know?

>> No.62186082

>>62185921
I feel like it's less literally painful than some of the other stuff in the compendium...
You could send her and uh, uhm, Fubuki? with her instead of weird separate entities

>> No.62186573

>>62186082
I guess viewing it with that context I could envision it as a
>thing
that they do to
>people
without any specific targets
So in that case it would be Haachama getting the short end of the stick for some reason, Fubuki feeling bad she has to do it so soon after getting back and offering to take her place, and then Haachama deciding she’ll take it anyway. But since Fubuki was so generous…

>> No.62186861

>>62186573
>tie their underwear together over a branch
>they're counterweights for each other
>Haachama barely feels it because Fubuki is light
>Fubuki is fucking dying because Haachama is a fat fuck
This was supposed to be a Haato idea but the universe aligns to bully Friend

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>>62185111
>calling haachama a pig
>until you absolutely have to unclog your balls since your girlfriend wont put out
>makes you oink and grovel just to "hit with the fatty"
>pelvis breaking mating. Hachaama completely breaks you as you finish with the tank completely empty and her taking pictures

>> No.62188143 [SPOILER] 

>>62186861
>"So, how have things been around here?"
>"Fuckfuckfuckfuckfuc- I m-mean g-great...!"
dialogue is so cringe, I feel like I'm making fanfiction from 2011 every time

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>>62187995
>bucking up into Chama's soft body as she mercilessly rides you, half from pleasure and half from trying to get her off you because she pulled the condom off and is filming you
>Finally get the strength to push your hips up off the bed, only because it's you busting straight into her womb with Haato giggling about how pathetic you look

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>>62187995
>>62189148
>always make fun of "miss piggy" in school
>get money for your birthday, decide you are gonna blow it all on a cosplayer you always jerk off in fantia
>save money and semen for a straight month after convincing her to meet up
>book the hotel, and she shows up
>oh god, its miss piggy
>She however, doesnt seem to care, she just takes your money with a smile and licks her lips
>you kinda wanna back out, but you are so hard that you might as well
>She's fat. There's flesh and pubic hair everywhere, yet your balls feel like bricks
>the second she gets you off with her belly fat and her armpit smell, its fucking over
>turns on the camera and turns you into her piggy
>breaks the bed riding you
>broken, humilliated, the video of you getting utterly milked,and covered of kiss marks as you moan like a bitch and squeal everytime she fingers your prostate to perk you up makes it way to the internet
>"Good piggy" is an instant classic in porn sites

>> No.62190454

There is a striking lack of smell kink stories in the Google thing. For all the talk vtubers do about not showering or whatever, you'd think there would be more

>> No.62190726

>>62190454
Run was a pretty good one.

>> No.62191051

>>62190726
Not him, but I'm still waiting and praying for the sequel...

>> No.62191588

>>62149049
Protip: Never start a story with a character waking up. It's been done to death and is low energy.

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>>62191051
I'll finish it eventually, I promise!

>> No.62192414

>>62192256
Sweaty tits are nice, but when can I bury my face in her sweaty ass

>> No.62192557
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62192557

>Rentry hit its fucking character limit
Oh
I guess we finally use the second page now.

>> No.62192632
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>>62192256
I'm counting on you, RunAnon!

>> No.62193324
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>>62192414
Despite also being an ass-man, I am constantly overwhelmed by a primal desire to lick Ame's tits clean and live in her wakipai

>>62192632
Please continue to look forward to it

>> No.62193381

>>62192557
No. This is the death of /wg/

>> No.62194035

>>62192557
The Google script is a lot more commonly used anyway, so it’s not that big of a deal.

>> No.62195429

>don't know if wedgie anon took the request or denied it

>> No.62196156

>>62178887
Shut the fuck up Taiga.

>> No.62196809

>>62192557
After 2 years and change, and nearly 240k views, the first page of the archive is filled.

>> No.62197251

>>62195429
I’ll probably do it, I was just working on something else.
Shockingly, I have more projects than just wedgieshit. Heckler anon in SHAMBLES (lol)

>> No.62197475

>>62197251
Can't wait for "I'm Addicted To Ayame's Feet!", Volumes 1-14 by Wedgieanon

>> No.62197665

>>62197475
>feet
disGUSting.

>> No.62197765

>>62197665
the wedgies are fine but feet are too far
makes total sense

>> No.62197846

>>62197765
Yes, it does

>> No.62198034

>>62197846
>>62197665
So you'll act disgusted by other fetishes with no regard for how freakish your own is.

>> No.62198095

>>62198034
>wedgies
>freakish
Ok man
Personally I’d be more concerned about the blood kink, because that IS freakish

>> No.62198108

>>62197475
Ayame does have nice small demon feet.
>>62198034
Hey, everybody has their preferences. Let's not make it a competition.

>> No.62198125

>>62197846
Okay. Futa then? You gotta be in to something else depraved.

>> No.62198175

>>62198095
No self awareness either.

>> No.62198249

>>62198125
>>62198095
Blood and also swirlies though that’s under a similar umbrella to wedgies.
Oh, and sharp teeth are neat. I like elongated canines. And bodily injuries that aren’t very severe, like cuts, scrapes, bruises, etc.

>> No.62198289

Oh no... after the political upheaval between hags and zoomers comes the civil strife betwee Wedige Union, Feetfags Anonymous, and the Blood Kinkers...

>> No.62198459

>>62198289
Allow me.
Zoomers are for senseless, nonstop plapping.
Hags are for marriage and impregnation.

>> No.62198537

>>62198249
>giving a girl a wedgie so bad she bleeds a little in front and back
That's vicious, but I respect that more than being a pussy that can't stand hurting the girl a little

>> No.62198559

Once again I am glad that the bugfag keeps to himself.

>> No.62198573

>>62198559
bugfag has no rizz

>> No.62198584

>>62198537
Shit that might be a bit hot. Too mean for me to write but hit nonetheless

>> No.62198688

>>62198584
>too mean for me to write
Do it and inevitably make your fetish for it more intense. I promise it's a real phenomenon. Ripped underwear with a smidge of blood, the bully (think Botan) licking a smear of blood off from under her a nail, her victim bemoaning having to bandaid her snatch in a high-pitched voice. And so on.

>> No.62198773

>>62198459
No, Anon! Think about the children the war you're fomenting will affect!

>> No.62198834

>>62198559
Is he an author?

>> No.62198836

>>62198688
You’re brutal, anon

>> No.62198919

>>62198249
How about consensual swirlies?

>> No.62198955

>>62198836
Says the guy into blood and cuts

>> No.62198970

>>62198919
That idea is super hot, I read a story about that once and it was awesome.

>> No.62199129

>>62198559
It's not like I'd be keeping to myself if I had someone talkative who shared my fetishes. More power to the wedgie guy, I say.

>>62198834
Last time I wrote anything was two and a half years ago. I just don't quite enjoy it. I seem to be unable to let words flow, and instead get caught up on how a sentence sounds to me. Shit sucks, man.

>> No.62199139

how do you pop a boner to slightly longer than usual canine teeth

>> No.62199157

>>62199139
how do you pop a boner to underwear riding up someone's ass

>> No.62199220
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>>62199157
>>62199139
Yeah, how…

>> No.62199256

Ogey time to bake...

>> No.62199273

>>62199256
it's not time to bake until the thread is at page 10

>> No.62199294

>>62199273
Oh snap I already pressed submit

>> No.62199324

>>62199220
give her an atomic wedgie and hook her panties to her teeth

>> No.62199338

>>62199324
Massively sex

>> No.62199427
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62199427

Here's the bread, guys; La+ flavored:
>>62199278
>>62199278
>>62199278

>> No.62199461

>>62199427
it's just another earlyfag...

>> No.62199500

>>62199461
I've been baking these threads for a quite a bit, though I didn't know that threads were supposed to be baked at page 10 over bump limit; my apologies.

>> No.62199528

>>62199500
That's okay, no harm done. Just be aware for the future!

>> No.62199568

>>62199528
Thank you kindly, anon

>> No.62200453

>>62196809
Onto two pages...!

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