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This is the writing thread, for the discussion and enjoyment of vtuber fanfiction. Our writing contest’s submission deadline has passed but the voting period is coming soon, so now’s the time to find the stories you want to cast your votes for. The info page (and contest archive) can be found here: rentry.org/WGWC

Below is the main archive for everything the thread has put out in its existence, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, greentexts and shitposts alike:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>"Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction?"
Yes.

Previous thread: >>57158321 (With large amounts of Suidiscussion.)
/wg/ rentry for bakers: https://rentry.org/wgrentry/

>> No.57299820
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STORY ANCHOR
Show us what you’ve been cooking.

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/VT/ WRITING RUMBLE
/wg/ is holding a writing contest! The submission period has concluded, but you can check out the contest archive to prepare your votes for your favourite entries.

Submitted stories and voting information can be found at:
rentry.org/WGWC

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap!
There were two stories posted last thread – a Suisei VN in the making and another part to Cover High.

Stilted Stellar >>57173373

Cover High/Pekora Finale, Part 1 >>57229597
Tags: SFW, Pekora, Gen 3, Fluff/Romance, Comedy, Chuuni Bullshit

>> No.57301106

>70 posters last thread
Damn, where did that come from?

>> No.57302450

>>57301106
Someone might have been phoneposting while traveling.

>> No.57302584
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>> No.57303661
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>>57302584
What kind of story is there to be done with maid!Suisei? Her attitude and demeanor kind of naturally makes her unsuited for it be her 'natural' place so what kind of situation would fit to make her one?
I vaguely remember an old prompt about her posing as a maid in order to infiltrate (Your) household and manipulate you to assist her goals, only to have you turn it around and break her into truly being a maid. Maybe something in that vein, suisei sees something that needs her to don the disguise and position, plot happens while she's doing it?

>> No.57303943

>>57303661
Umm...she's your sister and you interrupt her maid work to have sex?
Yeah, that's new.

>> No.57303976

>>57303661
She wants to do sexual harassment play for the maid/nobleman dynamic, but she also insists on really getting into character so she actually goes around and cleans/does laundry/cooks for an hour before even letting you pinch her butt

>> No.57304275

>>57303661
I'm sitting on a WIP based of this pic
https://files.catbox.moe/vqt66o.jpg

>> No.57304311

>>57303976
>"Hm...Aqua's is softer."
>Suisei seethes internally

>> No.57304353
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>>57303661
Well her maid outfit is the one that comes with the axe, so maybe she's disguising as your maid but is actually your bodyguard/a secret agent?

>> No.57305013

>>57301106
I really do think it was you guys' contest. It at least brought me here.

>> No.57305664

fuck

>> No.57305916

>>57304353

Suisei vs. Roberta.

>> No.57305924

>>57304353
>Suisei can't cook, clean or do laundry
>follows you around all day
>hear loud thumps and female screams coming from your room at night
>the other servants assume Suisei is a prostitute or geisha disguised as a maid for keeping up pretenses

>> No.57306468

>>57304353
Clearly she's pretending to be a maid while actually teaching you the art of combat in secret so that you can overthrow your evil noble family that wants to kill you so they can get you out of the inheritance.

>> No.57307086

>>57305013
Hey, if we got new readers, we might get new writers too.
The contest was a success!
Unless I lose, in which case is a complete and utter failure

>> No.57308403

>>57307086
i agree completely on all counts

>> No.57309327

Excluding Lamy, who else would become a severe alcoholic?

>> No.57309642
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>>57309327
If you told me that Noel drinks nothing but beer and her own gin all day I wouldn't be terribly surprised

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Clear!
I need 20cc of hag impregnation, right now!

>> No.57312644

>>57312028
Cubic centimeters?

>> No.57312696

>>57312028
Only if it's a virile shota (cocky).

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>>57312028
>I need 20cc of(...)impregnation, right now!
Say no more

>> No.57313326

god fucking damn it i'm so close to finishing this story but my brain is cock-blocking me and i can't get the climax out

>> No.57313389

>>57313326
Perhaps mapping out the story beats would help?

>> No.57313926

>>57313389
there's not much left to map out, just suisei finishing riding (you) into the ground, with a bit of post-sex bantering. trouble is i'm struggling to find the right words to describe the final pop. i will though take a step back and try to figure this out, thank you for the idea.

>> No.57314159

>>57313926
>trouble is i'm struggling to find the right words to describe the final pop
It should be something about a comet. And put in a title drop as well

>> No.57314472

>>57309327
Aki, Mori, Lui and Gura

>> No.57314703
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>>57312758
ZOOMER IMPREGNATION NOW

>> No.57315589

>>57309327
Gura used to drink herself to death on stream in her PL, and it remained a habit in Hololive as well.
She needs saving...

>> No.57316291

>>57315589
Who needs saving? The hololiver or the holo's liver?

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>>57316291
I will shoot you.
Nice pun.

>> No.57319157

Is it acceptable to write Flare as a human for the sake of keeping a strongly history-inspired setting free from fantasy races?

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>>57319157
Depends on how badly you want to suffer before you die

>> No.57319341

>>57319247
I'll gladly suffer between her thighs before I die of old age

>> No.57319361

>>57319157
yes, but she must be moroccan and have a really hairy bush.
its the law

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>>57319157
My first instinct is to threaten you with a painful death for shirking half of Flare's proud heritage, but you can also just not really mention elves in your story, and maybe she just has pointier ears than others. I don't condone such a thing, but it's your story. I'm gonna go back to writing my own story and bringing it closer to writing about diving in between Flare's voluptuous thighs and being content to die in that moment.

>> No.57319620

>>57319534
That's fair, her role is minor enough that her race doesn't really have to be mentioned.

>> No.57319621

>>57319361
so everything is the same except she eats kebabs from time to time?

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I DID IT
IT'S DONE

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRgagALpUns2Wb5KXFi426-GbNW7zFhDw57j0FjmbUdxWKI6l4Qp_pKm2Iee0lYnjYCIApR_ThZwIW7/pub

to be very honest i should have let this bake for several more weeks to iron out some detail and flesh out the sex scenes proper, but i couldn't help myself. if i didn't complete this today i was going to throw the entire story away in a huff.

please accept and enjoy what i've created, and i eagerly await any input.

with love and suisex

-an anon lost in the sauce that needs a blue-haired bitch to dominate me

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>>57320066
anonchama, the tags! The anchor!

>> No.57320427

>>57299820
>>57320066
oh should have probably done this too. my bad.

An Incredible Bitch

tags: Suisei, NSFW, Hate sex,

>> No.57320793

>>57320258
Member when tags weren't standardized and AA had to read every single story to tag them himself?
Member?

>> No.57321372

>>57320793
I 'member. Thems were the good ol' days, they was. Lazy git done gone'n got erryone makin' their OWN tags. I says to 'im, I says, "What's the point o' makin a story if y'ain't gon' read it!?"
But that devil ain't listened t'me.

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>>57305924
Aqua...

>> No.57324988

>>57320066
your prose is pretty decent and you got some clever choices for words and for a quick in and out session of suisex its serviceable. I feel like the beginning started out really strong and when it got to the quick fucking things kinda pittered out a little. it seems like you are already aware of that though, but there is probably more you can add to them elongate the scene. dialogue was nice for the relationship you set up but it might have been nice to have a little more background towards maybe some actions suisei took against you over the years to show that she is capable of just choosing violence so quickly. not bad, not long enough to fap to, but fun and to the point. one other thing as far as smut feedback goes, having your balls grasped firmly is enough to force the air right out and it isn't super comfortable.

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>>57324988
Not everyone has air in their balls.

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"Alright deadbeats, that was an amazing Mario Party tournament! We have a very special announcement- perhaps the biggest thing Hololive will ever do! That's right, we're all going to host the biggest meet & greet ever, where you get to meet every single one of us! I'm sure you prepared your reaper juice in advance, we're passing around a bunch here in the office. On a count of 3, we're all going to take a big sip, and before long, we're going to be together! Are you ready, deadbeats?"

...


*HACK* *COUGH* *RETCH* UGH..... UGH
"Wow, looks like so many of you"
UUUUECH... HAAAAH... C-CAAAAAAAALLIIIIIIIII-
"have already made it to the meet and greet, chat's rather silent! Looks like our co-hosts FUWAMOCO have already made it there"
*COUGH* *COUGH* *LOUD VOMITING*
"and don't worry, Kiwawa's on her way too! We'll all be together"
PLEASE.... PLEE-UUUUUOURGH
"in just a few minutes more, deadbeats!"

>> No.57325772

>>57325415
What the fuck is in that reaper juice?!

>> No.57325937

>>57325772
Mori's pubes. That causes the coughing.

>> No.57326105

>>57325937
I would down the entire stock myself

>> No.57326176

>>57325937
>"Finally, a good fucking drink..."

>> No.57326263

>>57326105
>>57326176
>Turns out it was just great value juice

>> No.57326277

>>57319534
I feel like Flare would enjoy being choked by thick thighs herself at kni... at night.

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>>57326263
>

>> No.57327277

>>57325937
Barf

>> No.57328238

>>57324988
thank you very much for your kind words.

i certainly came out of the gate hard but fell flat at the end. there's a lot i could have done better; very many places i could have explored deeper. i leaned very hard on the concept of the reader having an understanding of suisei and her suicopathy, which wasn't the smart choice.

if/when i go back to rewrite this, or God forbid extend this into an entire series, i'll do my best to properly get into the deep fucking hatred (you) and her share for each other.

year 1: you and the incredible bitch meet each other and spit acid back and forth
year 2: you and the incredible bitch continue to take swipes, both of you learning to love to secretly fall in love
year 3: established with furious hatesex
year 4: slowly mellowing out as this incredible bitch holds your hand, with you finally asking for her hand in marriage
post graduation: building a family of a incredible bitches

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>>57326277
I don't care how much of a brick shithouse Noel is or how her mace could turn me into a fine paste. If she wants to try and cut in between me and my half-elf I will
Fight her
Subdue her
Breed her
Make love to Flare again
In no particular order.

>> No.57330376

last thread i really wanted to say i appreciated this post. but i was kind of hazy and sick and slept through most of the day. this kind of stuff always means a lot to me.

>>57294504

so, for anyone who was reading tower of tattle, if you didn't know, it's incomplete. part v was supposed to be the final, but as i'm working on it right now i'm realizing... part v alone was gonna be as long as all the other parts put together. so i'm kinda thinking actually... probably 1. tower of tattle is gonna be more like 8 parts and 2. the pace is gonna be a lot slower on it as i transition to mostly working on a web novel that i can actually make money off of.

the contest deadline was always supposed to be sort of an intentional thing to make sure i didn't spend too much effort on fan stuff that i couldn't leverage for career stuff. because there are sort of reasons in my life i really need to make writing work for me money wise as soon as i can.

i know it's not like there was anyone in this thread waiting with bated breath but i would feel incredibly stressed unless i made this clear in every possible way and would lose sleep over it. i'm sorry i'm a creative wreck. i'm sorry. you'll be stuck with me for a while.

>> No.57333172

bampu

>> No.57333194
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>>57319157
Wasn't there someone working on an isekai fic for gen 3?

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>>57330376
Glad it spoke to you!
It seems to be a natural progression for later parts to be longer than your previous iterations. I've found myself in that boat with my arc lengths. I think it's really ambitious and admirable that you are working to get your writing to a level where it can be your career. Your pace is gonna be what it's gonna be, so try not to fret to much on it. Best of luck to you bro.

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>>57328845
>no matter how cute Noel thinks you are if you can't defeat her in solo combat and then sex combat then the heavenly garden of NoeFure is closed to you
>Flare cheers you both on from the sidelines wearing a cheerleader uniform, distracting you both through the fight
https://files.catbox.moe/kl11hd.jpg

>> No.57336149

>>57333331
thanks man. we're all gonna make it one day... whether that's writing or other worthy endeavors

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>>57334275
>The ultimate test of anon's battle focus, one false move, one misstep, one wayward twitch, and kablooey! his shins are shattered.
>Flare and Watame are doing this while bedroom eyes at him from the sidelines.
>Watame pulls out a sign that says: "Win so I can grope Noel."
>Can anon fight while having a boner?

>> No.57336900

>>57336483
He will use it to bash them over the head

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>>57336900
Now is Noel the kinda girl who would get turned on by being dick slapped? Or would she just get angrier? I'm leaning towards the later but it might be good to be wrong here.

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>>57299922
You kidnap Shiori and Nerissa, with the intention of raping and mindbreaking them.
However, they are weirdly into it and cant stop fucking flirting, even while you tie them to the torture machines

>> No.57340111

>>57337269
In a honorable 1v1 duel? Probably angrier. Who knows otherwise.

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>>57340111
Was more so asking about otherwise. I'm not nearly silly enough to make anon just drop his pants in the middle of a serious match. At least not against Noel.

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>>57339617
hijacking this post
Incest chads, how do you feel about "fujo little sister Shiori"?

>> No.57341134

>>57337269
Disarm noel, then dickslap her. The moment she smells that dick she'll be helpless

>> No.57341197

>>57340444
Otherwise she might be

>> No.57342458

>>57320066
I think some more build up would’ve been good, since the stapler was a bit sudden. It felt a little too passionate for a hatefuck but besides that this was a decent story. Your prose is pretty good in some parts. Also
>Astrology
Are they studying star signs?

>> No.57345824

>>57340826
g-go on?

>> No.57346615
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>>57345824
>Take care of your cute and sweet but definitely autistic and menhera little sister
>she's a smelly fujo that carries her stink around the house. She barely leaves the house and if she does, you have to be there
>Cook for the two of you, have dinner together while she goes on eternal tangents and rants
>visibly sulks when one of her husbandos or Online friend gets in a relationship
>One day, while cleaning her mess of a room, catch a glimpse of her fat ass
>Instant erection, raging balls
>try to control yourself. Shiori, like the good autist she is, notices your erection and comments on it
>pretty much invites you to use her as an onahole, one of her trademark rants about how "incest isnt bad as long as you are not breeding and even if you do knock her up, its only one generation so the risk isnt as big"
And that's only the iceberg, since she's kind of a freak you can go PLACES

>> No.57346884

>>57320066
Suisei in this story reminds me of Coco. Probably because she's called bitch and swears a lot

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>>57346884
hard to believe it's been more than 2 years now
where does the time go

>> No.57347131

>>57340826
Doesn't interest me in the least. Now, if she was your fujo older sister... that's a heck of a story.

>> No.57347435

>>57346615
I like the idea, though I'd personally make it so sister Shiori is the one who has a crush on (You) first and manipulates certain situations so you can see her in compromising positions

like for the example of you cleaning her room, maybe she offers to help and while you're working when you turn towards her she's bent over shaking her ass pretending she's not doing anything weird.

or perhaps when you ask her to take a bath because she smells too much she plays innocent and responds "It just feels so lonely in the bath without you"

could also do something where she sneaks into your room so she can take notes on all the porn you like or steal your used boxers so she can wear them over her face while she masterbates if you wanna go really out there.

>> No.57347708

>>57347131
>slobby onee san shiori
i like how you think son, drop by my desk in a few hours with a plan
>>57347435
all i ask is that Shiori squirts all over her futon, doesnt matter if she gets the D or not

>> No.57348314

>>57337269
I feel like it depends on how Flare feels about it, too. Noel wouldn't take a dick that Flare wouldn't want to share with her.

>> No.57348371

>Shioricest
>Suicest
Now we just need another chuuba whose name starts with an S, and we can have the Holy Incest Trinity.

>> No.57348512

>>57348371
Subaru? also not an S but you can do >>57347435 with Bijou/Bae, who have great little sister energy

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>>57348371
We technically already have Shioncest because of that Shion niece discussion.

>> No.57348816

>>57348512
>bijou
this could be a really cute fic where she's usually super closed off, the type with glasses and wears a thick hoodie at all times just to make her come out of her shell.
perhaps she closed herself off because she knows her crush on her brother is wrong or she knows seeing you with another woman will devastate her. though this idea I think works better with a romance than a smut

>> No.57348909

>>57348371
One day I'll write my Sana incest fic...

>> No.57348988

>>57348512
>Subarucest
>Your tomboy of a little sister who only really shows her girly side around (You) because she knows you won't laugh at how awkward she can be.
Hmmm... that has potential.
I would say Bae works too. Dunno much about Bijou to say anything, though she does look the part, at least.
>>57348616
>Shioncest
>Your sister drops her daughter, Shion, at your place because she has to go on a business trip.
>Shion does nothing but be a total brat who makes fun of how you're still single and how much of an old man you already are.
>"Huh? You don't have a girlfriend yet, Uncle Anon? Kimoi..."
>The reason she's like this is actually a subconscious attempt to get your attention. She looked up to you from an early age but grew more and more disappointed as you got older. Yet, she still tries to make fun of you in hopes you'll get your shit together.
>To you, though, she's a bratty half-pint who's in dire need of some correction...

>> No.57349332

>>57348816
oh yeah that's even great without the incest
>The "climax" is Bijou finally wearing her magical girl outfit to a con/akihabara and coming out of her shell

>> No.57349443

>>57340826
That feels like the kind of character we would have thought up and added to the theoretical cast of the fujocast prompt when it was being discussed had her character existed at the time.

>> No.57349643

>>57349443
Didnt one of them fics also add nerd fauna to its setting?

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>>57349332
For some reason the words "coming out of her shell" makes me imagine her using her rock powers to literally encase herself in stone whenever she gets embarrassed.

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>>57349669
Like her debut? Yeah that sounds super cute

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>>57347435
I want to bond with my stinky (not blood related) sister over fanfiction then recreate with her physically.

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i was gonna argue that Shiori bathes twice a day, but after today's stream i can fully see her being stinky

>> No.57350390

>>57339617
What kind of machines?

>> No.57350473
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57350473

>>57350222
>(not blood related)
Get outta here with that shit you pussy

>> No.57350762
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>>57350473
Having an actual sister has sort of ruined that approach for me. Just one of those things where I get it but I can't get into it.

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>>57350762
This like the third or fourth time I've said this when the topic comes up, but I have three sisters. Technically four but she was an infant when I stopped all contact with that side of my family so I don't think about her all that much

>> No.57352843

>>57349669
So wait would you be like a living rock too? Or has it gone beyond incest into a normal romance with a nervous Biboo?

>> No.57354268

>>57347115
And in that farm she had a bitch...

>>57347435
She has you sort through her underwear, which so happens to be the kind (You) find hot to see a girl wear. Now how did she find that out?

>> No.57354945
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Contest fic review:
>By That Sea
DAMN, this was some of the GOOD shit. We've got a hidden gem here. First off, your prose is spectacular. The way you describe scenery and the senses is incredible and absolutely something I'm going to come back to for reference. It might have gone too far into purple prose territory at times, where it felt like you were using fancy words for the sake of using fancy words, not because it actually added anything to the strory. This only happened a few times, your wide vocabulary was almost always a merit rather than a demerit.
The speed at which Anon agreed to go along with Marine might have been a bit quick, but the relationship that develops between them from start to end was a joy to read, I think you captured Marine well. Nothing felt awkward or unnatural when they were interacting. As one guy said when this was released, it feels a lot like a one shot since there was nothing implying what will happen next, but in that sense it feels a lot like the opening episode to an anime. If you can keep up this quality in the following chapters, this is going to be one of my all time favourites.
I don't really know how I feel about this being a contest entry since its the beginning to a series, but I guess I can treat it like a one shot. Great job!

>> No.57355255

>>57354268
>all the while Shiori sits in her bed in nothing but her underwear talking about how comfortable it feels
>insert weeks of sexual tension that inevitably ends in (You) snapping and fucking Shiori till she's a drooling twitching mess

>> No.57356220

>>57355255
>Do your sister Shiori's laundry because she never will otherwise
>having to constantly sort through panties soaked in girlcum and often your shirts and a pair of your boxers
>decide to play a prank on her and leave another pair of boxers in her clean laundry, with note that says 'STOP BEING HORNY'
>if she saw it she doesn't say anything
>next time you do her laundry you find those boxers just completely drenched and the notes been written over telling you to come to her room when your parents are asleep

>> No.57357359
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57357359

>> No.57357418
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>>57357359
Love my stinky pon sister

>> No.57358352

>>57333194
There were two actually. I know one of them was being made by the same anon that wrote First Summer Memories.
Though both of those fics have had zero news on them still being worked on, so it's pretty safe to say both of those fics are pretty dead.

>> No.57359750

>>57348988
I think the twist on the Shioncest was that despite being your niece, she’s actually older than you thanks to your parents’ shenanigans.

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>>57359750
If I remember right that was the one where she mocks your poor habits in an attempt to bully you into getting your life together, right? Or was that a different one

>> No.57360019

>>57359750
Yeah, I remember that discussion. It started off with an anon wondering if an uncle/aunt can be younger than their niece/nephew, and it ended with another anon in the next thread saying they're picking up the concept as a wip. >>49371276 this was their last post giving an update about that Older Niece Shion fic.

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>>57354945
I'm very glad you liked it. Once again I am super relieved to hear I got Marine right and her banter with Anon right as well. My goal is to capture the relationship Marine has with her chat.
Anon joining quickly was intentional, Marine and him are/were going to discuss "the topic" in the hypothetical second chapter. Another consequence of truncating chapter 1 into two parts.
> It might have gone too far into purple prose territory at times
You know part of me had a fear of this, but I wanted to really make this hit. Would you mind giving an example for future reference?
Thanks for reading and the kind words. I suppose I should get back to it once this WIP is done.
>The way you describe scenery and the senses is incredible and absolutely something I'm going to come back to for reference.
y-you too

>> No.57360554 [DELETED] 
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Did anyone want to see Suisei impregnated by a horse?

https://exhentai.org/s/76c3c982e6/2658781-10

>> No.57360589

>>57360554
Suisei's been hanging around Mori too much.

>> No.57360622

>>57360589
Does Mori like horse porn?

>> No.57360770

>>57360622
The memes say yes.

>> No.57360775

>>57360622
You must not have been here for very long. I recommend archive reps for /vai/ threads if (big if) you want to know more

>> No.57360802

>>57360775
I was around the time /vai/ still existed... wild times.

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>>57320066
I'm have strangely mixed thoughts for how suisei swears here. On one hand it feels about right for her to swear, but on the other hand it doesn't feel right that she swears like this since it feels too Coco at least for the 'normal' swears, the 'higher' ones feel right.
Anyway I like the narration, even if it doesn't really mix the hate and the attraction too good until the end. As for the smut, it's not even there. It's about as close as you can get to tv style fade to black without actually skipping the action in-between being, instead it's glossed over in a couple of paragraphs without the kind of depth in detail that would make this a smut fic. Still I liked the concept, even if the skipping over of detail in the makeout and sex kind of makes this feel like a burger that has good bread and toppings but little actual burger meat.

>> No.57362364

>>57350762
I have two older sisters and they're cool with me but they really bossed me around when I was still a kid, so I kind of hate them in a 'egh, why am I related to these people' sense.
Now, a younger sister... Best to let sleeping dogs like that lie.

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57362543

Fuc I missed the writing contest didn't I.

I was going to see if I could enter tako time since im sitting on a massive writers block.

>> No.57362706

>>57362543
Yep. Too bad we didn't have someone do a literal last minute submission. Would have been amazing if an anon saw the splash party delay and gave a mad dash to finish to their fic.

>> No.57363172

>>57360261
>Would you mind giving an example for future reference?
It's mostly my opinion, so take it with a grain of salt, but I just felt like there was an absence of regular language. Rather than particular examples, it was more like the purple prose was excessive which made it feel like it was building up. If I had to pinpoint where exactly, I think the first half/third is the worst offender in regards to this. I didn't notice it all that much after they landed on the island. With that said, it's mostly a nitpick. Most of your prose was beautiful.

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>> No.57364639

>>57364370
I still think its a crime she unmasked that early

>> No.57365884

>>57364639
Model-wise, yes. But to me, Chloe's personality and voice work better maskless.

>> No.57366198

>>57364639
It funny how their own manga tried to make the mask a big deal for her character. Then again HoloX Meeting's Chloe might as well be a completely different character due to her needing to be viewpoint character woman.

>> No.57366432

>>57364639
It's alright, it gives me an excuse to banepost.

>> No.57367152

>>57364370
>>57364639
Its fine. That way i can pretend Masked Chloe is a turboslut that hangs around public bathrooms so she can make a quick buck.

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57368452

>>57367152
>That way I can pretend Masked Chloe is a turboslut that hangs around public bathrooms so she can make a quick buck.
...hot

>> No.57368583

>>57368452
You're her boyfriend, you have to pay extra.

>> No.57368585

>>57367152
For some reason this made me vaguely remember a line in greentext that I can't remember the context for
>That can't be, The Masked Orca and My Sister's pussy feel way different.

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>>57368583
> Chloe sucking dick for a quick buck so she can make enough money for a birthday present
>too dumb to realize that she didn't need to buy him anything because he's just happy having her around.

>> No.57368908

>>57368726
Cute slut!
What if both of you are scummy/lowlives and there was no one else who understood you?

>> No.57369039

>>57368585
Holy shit lmao

>> No.57369213

>>57367152
The biggest blow to the slut genre is that guy who lost his WIP (and motivation) about Kson whoring herself for pizza and beer

>> No.57369220

>>57368726
But it's still nice to receive a present, even if you didn't need one. Maybe she got him a new camera.

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>> No.57370965

>>57368726
Yeah, a cage.

>> No.57371592

>>57299922
Story about Fubuki being thrown in prison and (You) being tasked as her jailer to make sure she doesn't get into mischief.

>> No.57372543

>>57371592
The charges, officer?

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>>57372543
She stole the hearts of millions and ate them for power.
She is on death row.

>> No.57372834

>>57372543
Using a machine that de-ages her colleagues.

>> No.57372894

>>57372543
Farted and blamed it on Mio

>> No.57373230

>>57372894
The brap queen of wg

>> No.57373449

>>57372543
Trying to kidnap shotas.

>> No.57373619

>>57373230
Thats Fauna and she's the brap queen of hololive by far.

Chickpeas,for example, make your stomach become a fart factory. Lentils too.

Now imagine a vegan,who has to eat a fuckton of legumes everyday in order to function and You bet your ass Fauna's bathroom breaks sound like a marching band IF She's not a walking fart dispenser

>> No.57373810

>>57373449
Last time she tried that shit she got rocked up and down the block.

>> No.57373859

>>57373810
Who did she try and kidnap?

>> No.57373947

>>57373859
Some kid after a game of dice went crazy.

>> No.57374001

>>57373810
I'm going to assume "rocked up and down the block" is prison slag for sex, no? Well that "would" defo happen... but she would be the one in control doing the sex because (You) just so happen to be weak willed in this story and the slightest bit of sweet talking from her would make you head over heels for her and do her bidding. It also wouldn't help that you have a baby looking face and Fubuki herself becomes smitten with you at first sight.

>> No.57374016

>>57373619
Kek sorry to rain on your fetish parade but i pictured a short fic where from your POV you keep finding Fauna in Nature and being mesmerizef by her beauty.
And in Fauna's POV She's losing her mind because every time she sneaks out to fart you are there

>> No.57374207

>>57356220
>>57357418
>>57368585
I feel like i could probably take a shot at this, however...
Outside of the whole "chloe never showers" thing, i don't really know much about her. And i haven't had the time to watch shiori yet so there's that.
I dig the whole stinky seduction thing, even though incest is not my thing. Maybe she can be adopted or something?
I have a sister, she's 15 years older. She's estranged though, i haven't seen or spoken to her since i was a kid

>> No.57374483

>>57374207
So wait both Shiori and Chloe are your sisters here? I guess hair color-wise I could see Chloe as your step sister and Shiori your half-sister, with (you) having black hair.

>> No.57374983

>>57374483
It would be one or the other. But since the scenarios were kinda similar i figure they could be more or less interchangable?
I don't think i could handle both of them from a writing standpoint desu. I'm having enough trouble writing a threesome of sorts for a current WIP...

>> No.57375359

>>57373619
Im surprised brapping isnt exactly popular here, considering smell and those ID fanfics in the archive.
This is like, the first time in a while i see discussion of chuuba farts

>> No.57375400

>>57362706
I posted Tainted idol within the last hour. Is that not last minute enough?

>> No.57375679

>>57375359
It's partly for historical reasons. This is the chuuba abuse thread that evolved into the general-purpose writing thread, while other fetish threads (ringo, meat/freak) continued doing their own thing.

>> No.57376078

>>57374016
Anon that sounds like it's still a brap fetish thing but like in a humiliation way rather than a 'girl enjoying it' way.

>> No.57376810

>>57376078
Isnt the point of the fart fetish for the girl to be embarassed? If im being honest i have no idea, since for me farts are the apex of comedy and are just gross fumes that make really silly sounds

>> No.57377049

>>57376810
/ringo/ fics would run the gamut. They were embarrassed, happy about it, weaponizing it, you name it

>> No.57377672

>>57375679
Though I'm pretty sure we're the last 'fetish thread' that's still doing writing. Last I checked /ringo/ is on life support in /d/ and freak is basically a chuuba general rather than a chuuba cannibalism/shock fic thread. Though I'm pretty sure we've moved past chuuba abuse outside of occasional flights of horniness.

>> No.57377992
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So what's the current incestfag imouto/neesan tier list look like?

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>>57377992
despite the discussion last night about smelly fujo Shiori, I like the idea of imouto Shiori being a helpless romantic and tries to reenact scenes from her favorite shojo manga on her older brother. often leading to failure to her frustration, but her big brother will usually do something romantic in his own way in the end anyways.

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Seriesanons doko?

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>>57379302
I wrote half of an incredibly rough draft of the thing that's been bothering me that I'll continue tomorrow.

>> No.57379747

>>57379302
That's not my friend, that's my mother!

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>>57379302
What seriesanon ya wanna find?

>> No.57380213

>>57379302
I posted a new chapter in the last thread.

>> No.57380419

>>57377992
Is this part of something or a standalone?

>> No.57380737

>>57379302
Picked up an abandoned WIP and sprinkled a couple hundred words on it.
The hardest part about writing isn't writing well, it's finishing the first draft.

>> No.57381506

>>57377992
Noel is probably A-tier on the list
>>57380419
The artist might do more of her, but their art isn't usually connected

>> No.57381938

>>57377992
I think there should also be a spot for 'same age' in between imoutos and neesans.

>> No.57382693

>>57381938
Who'd fit in that category best? Everyone I can think of kind of has a better edge when they're an imouto or an onee-san... Maybe Suisei if you're going for the Anemachi also exists type Suicest, with you being her twin brother.

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>>57382693
I think big purple fits the deal as well

>> No.57382896

>>57382693
(You) as the male triplet to FWMC maybe?

>> No.57383095
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57383095

>>57382693
I could see Botan being in this category

>> No.57383153

>>57382693
being triplets with fuwamoco...

>> No.57383735

>>57299922

Medical horror with doctor Choco and nurse Kanata? Keeping you in need of medical attention through subtle means at first, but eventually devolving into torture, until your mind degrades or you die. Maybe for the purpose of keeping the clinic's funding up, or maybe just for some twisted form of Munchausen's. They're the hardest-working and most competent medical professionals there, so no one dares mess with them.

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>"Neee, Anoooon"
>"Come play with Nenechi"

>> No.57384241

>>57383735
(You)'re the husband of their favourite former idol and they want to get revenge on her and you by keeping you bedridden and fucking you.

>> No.57384380

>>57379964
He probably wants the newest chapter of a series that has long since been discontinued.

>> No.57384987

>>57384380
Your favorite series here...

>> No.57385857

>>57384987
How do you know? Genuine question

>> No.57385862

>>57373619
Hot

>> No.57385935

>>57383735
franken fran starring choco and kanata basically? how did kanata get her nurse costume anyway? like why that specifically?

>> No.57387439

>>57384241

I think keeping the sex to a minimum would be a good idea. Maybe either just using you as a fucktoy whenever they feel like it, or as an occasional reward for good behaviour. It should probably be very much unwanted by (You), or the story loses its gravity. You probably shouldn't want this in the slightest, and it probably sickens you that they're just treating you like an object. Slowly, though, Stockholm syndrome could start to set in, or your mind slowly breaking.

>> No.57387643

>>57385935

I don't know. There's just a shortage of good stories involving the actual medical aspect of Kanata, when she has a perfectly good nurse outfit. Choco has the whole doctor thing going on as well, and I figured something like this would probably be in short supply. So this it was.

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>>57377992
Maybe a touch controversial, but aside from Mori and maybe Nerissa(I'll have to watch more of her) and even still without too massive leaps in logic, I think all of EN are imouto tier.

>> No.57388196

>>57387653
Nerissa is low key an imouto. Youngest girl in her gen and actually a little sister

>> No.57389812

>>57388196
Oh really?
Will she do handstands trying to impress me?
Will she get jealous when her friends get a crush on me?
Will she tease me when she catches me doing something she thinks is stupid?
Will she ask me for help when a boy in her class steps over the line, and I get an uncontrollable rage to curbstomp that little twerp?
Will we have afternoons in which we watch Barbie movies together because she doesn't like to feel alone?
Will I princess carry her to her bedroom after she falls asleep?
Will she sneak into my room and cuddle next to me while I sleep?
Will I get to pamper her by making her porridge and tea when she gets sick?
Will she let hand me her dolls to comfort me when she sees that I'm feeling unwell?
Will she explode in joy when I invite her to eat McDonalds with my first paycheck?
Will we have a constant back and forth acting like little shits?
Will I have fights with our parents when they're being unfair to her in ways she's not ready to understand?
Will I get to watch her ride a bike for the first time realizing she needs neither her training wheels nor me?
Will I wake up knowing that she won't be like this forever, and that I'll miss her more than she'll ever know?

Will she really be my imouto?

>> No.57390821

>>57389812
No.

>> No.57390997

>>57389812
Yes.

>> No.57391140

>>57389812
Maybe

>> No.57391299

>>57389812
I dont know

>> No.57391667

>>57381938
If i do tackle the shiori/chloe thing i was planning either same age or 1 year difference in either direction at the most

>> No.57392049

>>57387643
Its simple.
Anything that involves Kanata or Choco isn't interesting enough to be picked up.

>> No.57392189

>>57392049

I mean, that's your opinion. Every chuuba has as much potential as anyone else. It's just a matter of the area, and the narrative you're trying to make.

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>>57392049
I don't know about you, but I'm looking forward to writing about going up against Choco and Mel. A lower level demon and a vampire should make for a good match.

>> No.57392517

>>57392049
I like Kanata, but I don't really see her as a prime candidate for any role outside of being a yandere (nurse). And that's just not a very popular thing in this thread.

>> No.57393190

>>57392517
What about being abused by yandere nurse Kanata?

>> No.57393272

>>57393190
There's some amount of femdom discussion, but it seems to focus around being dommed and/or cucked by your girlfriend.

>> No.57394152

>>57379302
Evil Mio be like: get your eggs, fresh and ready, fertile as ever; I'm shaved btw.

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>>57382896
>>57383153
So you'd be the first among the triplets then, because your name would obviously be Chiwawa.

>> No.57394891

>>57392517
It would if the yandere nurse happened to be Suisei

>> No.57395036

>>57394891
Is yandere Suisei that relevant? She's already her regular self, your sister, a maid, a noblewoman, angry and/or in an alternate form.

>> No.57395145

>>57395036
Currently, I don't think so because it kinda ties into suicopath and she hasn't touched that in ages.

>> No.57395212

>>57395036
How long until /wg/ produces the "Into the Suiseiverse"...?

>> No.57395285

>>57395036
>Is yandere Suisei that relevant?
Whether she is or not shouldn't matter no? Suisei is VERY liked in this general (like how Fubuki was in the early days) and I just happened to make that Kanata idea better by replacing her with Suisei which would be well liked.

>> No.57395333

>>57395285
Feel free to write a yandere nurse Suisei story to prove me wrong, I'd like to read it.

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>>57395212
When we reach as many Suisei interpretations as there are Suisei designs.

>> No.57395416

I don't know. I think Kanata's sort of underused in most scenarios. It's definitely possible. She just doesn't get a lot of mileage because no one really tries to do anything interesting with her.

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>>57395374
Now that I'm looking at it, Tenkyuu suisei kinda fits the look of alt!suisei in my head.

>> No.57395801

>>57395333
You'll be waiting a "very" long time then as I don't know how to write nor do I genuinely watch Suisei or only watch certain streamers despite not understanding a lick of Japanese.
If I DID write one though, I'd probably make her so OOC she'd barely be Suisei and just a blue haired girl who happens to have her name. Plus my way of words, writing out scenarios would make people think I'm a ESL despite English being my first language. Lastly, the only thing I like about Suisei is her clothing.

>> No.57395894

>>57395416
I've tried to think of a way she could be involved down the road, but the concept of angels is hard to approach. I think her fallen angel concept is something I could work with. I might make a note of that actually.

>> No.57396111

>>57395894
I mean the fallen angel angle is perfect for her, considering her outfit and stuff. Guess you would just have to come up with a reason as to why she's become a fallen angel.
Also on a side note, I'm still sad that rapture fic was dropped.

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57396110

>>57395894
I love that outfit
Love that the design sheet straight up says do not add jiggle physics

>> No.57396192

>>57395416
I can think of a few concepts that someone could run with, problem is I just don't like her

>> No.57396407

>>57395747
I mean out of everyone in that pic you have the most alternate!Suisei potential is either her original pre-holo design (as a n old history gag), or that jacket, shirt and jeans one at the bottom due to fitting in the most if you imagine her with black hair.

>> No.57396493

>>57396110
The outfight fucking rocks.
>>57396111
Coming up with a reason wouldn't be too tough. I've pulled plenty of stuff out of my ass already. It might be cool to start brainstorming that.

>> No.57397157

What if Kanata became a fallen angel because she helped Advent escape from prison?

>> No.57397304
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57397304

>>57397157
I feel like it would be too roundabout to work in how Shiori managed to convinced her to help while orchestrating the jailbreak.

>> No.57398547

>>57397304
I don't really see Kanata as someone who'd be convinced by someone like Shiori to work with them, given how shy she often is.
Kanata would enable the prison break in the first place and independently because Advent being imprisoned unjustly would weigh on her conscience, eventually overcoming her sense of duty as an angel of the heavenly prison.

>> No.57399180

>>57398547
I could see that, but for my own purposes the idea that Advent were imprisoned wrongfully is something anon would need to figure out for himself, and Kanata preaching that would kinda take away from the story I feel. I rather like that idea that Advent was able to break out themselves, since it at least shows they are formidable in their own right.

>> No.57399393

>>57399180
Hah, maybe Kanata doesn't appear at all until after the prison break to do her rebellion thing - only to find out that she's become a fallen angel for nothing, because they're already free.

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57399476

>>57399393
That would be kinda good. So her own journey is spent trying to find new purpose.

>> No.57399598

>>57395747
Which one is tenkyuu suisei? For reference. The one on top? Because they're in the heavens?

>> No.57399649

>>57397157
>>57397304
>>57398547
>>57399180
My chuuni headcannon is
>Shiori was imprisioned for seeking knowledge of the ancient ones
>Nerissa, a hell general from the old regime, got her horn broken and her memories erased. Probably in her fight against Knight Kiara
>Fuwamoco accidentally heard something they shouldnt have, probably related to the coup. They get thrown
>Shiori organizes the jailbreak, using bijou's gem to break the cells
>The events of New Underworld Order,where Mori takes the Mantle of death, allows them to escape
And from there, they are either tracked by heaven or hell. From there, depending on if Kanata is an antagonist or an ally, she falls from grace in the eyes of god

>> No.57399740

>>57399598
Tenkyuu Suisei is actually the one at the bottom with the jeans and jacket.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zLak0dxBKpM

>> No.57400348

>>57389812
Hey anon, I'm the guy who's going to date and fuck your little sister after she gets out of high school. Yeah, she fell in love with my sweet tats, asked me about 'em on my smoke break and we hit it off. She wanted to meet again, so I took her to a bar after work, put a few drinks in her - total lightweight, could tell she'd never had a drop in her life, one thing lead to another... and she spent the next ten minutes getting her cunt pumped by my 8" uncut rod. Scored another cherry under my belt. Thanks for looking after her for me all those years, anon, and in the future too - she's gonna need you after I peace her ass for someone hotter.

>> No.57400942

>>57400348
Thanks for keeping her entertained dude, and sorry if her breath stank of my dick.
Well, off to visit your mother I go.

>> No.57401203

>>57397157

I don't know about that. I think in order to Fall, an angel might need to do something inherently dark and evil. Going against the will of their creator is one thing, but they'd need to do something so foul otherwise that God himself would forsake them.

>> No.57401249

>>57400942
Tell her I said hi, and to take the fucking bins out already.

>> No.57401263
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57401263

>>57379302
I've hit a bit of a rut with Balsa Chapter 21 despite it containing a lot of ideas that should be more than easy enough for me to write. Just can't make the magic happen for some reason.

However, after a lot of getting drunk, I may have picked up more inspiration for the FuwaMoco saviorfag story I have planned.

>> No.57401306

>>57400348
>>57400942
Hey guys, the project is due tomorrow so can you two send your powerpoints?

>> No.57401641

>>57401306
>Anon thinks anon and anon did their powerpoints
Kek I feel sorry for you anon

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57401965

>>57401306
Did my slides, boss.

>> No.57402450

>>57401965
I think I'm going to be sick...

>> No.57402902

>>57401965
>spic
Not surprised

>> No.57402941

>>57401965
>Mori bad. Laugh
Go back to the catalog pedro

>> No.57403577

>>57401203
You could argue that way, but ultimately HJanon should shape his world's theology around the story he wants to tell.

>> No.57404215

>>57399649
i think the dogs were literally imprisoned because they bau'd too much and were annoying the gods

>> No.57404989

>>57363172
I went back and reread the sections you mean and I can see where you're coming from. It is a bit tryhard at setting up the mood. I wanted that first meeting to come across as fantastical and surreal. A fateful meeting at the witching hour. I agree with you though. I'll keep an eye on that stuff going forward.

>> No.57405706

>>57401965
A-

>> No.57405945

>>57405706
Gura?

>> No.57408438
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57408438

>>57403577
I do thoroughly enjoy shaping the world's grander workings. I need to challenge myself to venture into giving more detail to things like the different religions different cultures practice and how it guides them through life. Maybe I should think up of a deity of sorts for the Usada kingdom residents to revere.

>> No.57409594

>>57408438
if you were talking about looking into religions to give you some food for thought, i always recommend looking into the upanishads. they're vedic, so proto hindu sort of, and they're very different from anything i've ever read. some of them are incredibly uplifting, weirdly enough, and i dont say that as some new agey fag. i think they give a lot of interesting food for thought for making fantasy religions

>> No.57409807 [SPOILER] 
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57409807

>>57408438
What if it was some sort of trickster rabbit god that munches on carrots, makes a fool of hunters, and feuds with a the duck god in their collective pantheon?

>> No.57409915
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57409915

>>57409594
I will give that a shot. I also started watching Mushoku at an irl friend's earnest behest, and I really like how it is doing world building do far. My friend promises me that they go a lot into the various religions in a decent way, so I'm hoping that will give me some insight into how to go about that in an interesting and engaging way.

>> No.57410027

>>57299870
So I remember someone saying instead of one vote, we'll vote for our top three choices. Is it gonna be a point system (like 1st gets 5 pts 2nd gets 3 pts and 3rd gets 1pt), or is it gonna be a true ranked choice voting system where candidates are eliminated until one has >50% (in which case we'd need to rank all the stories, not just our top 3)?

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57410054

>>57409807
The thought did cross my mind to incorporate some primal animal god and create a pantheon from that, since I've already established the duo bears, and an eagle. It might be a decent route to take and explore.

>> No.57410298

>>57410027
>like 1st gets 5 pts 2nd gets 3 pts and 3rd gets 1pt
This is what I had in mind, so you don't have to read every story. Though I was planning to have it be more like 1st gets 3, 2nd gets 2 and 3rd gets 1.

>> No.57410432
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57410432

You wouldn't skew the votes by voting for your own story, would you anon?

>> No.57410481

>>57410054
I was making a joke about making their god bugs bunny.

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57410725

>>57410481
I'm aware pekochungus, but you furthered the idea of adding more primal gods into my head anyway.

>> No.57410756

>>57410432
For me, it'd be pointless then. Because I'd still know that I won just because I voted for myself.

>> No.57410834
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57410834

Would it be strange to post a drawing from drawthread that I received from a request I made based on one of my fics, but isn't actually a 1-to-1 scene in said fic as I couldn't fit the scene in the fic itself?

>> No.57411021

>>57410834
I guess you can attach it when you post the latest chapter of that specific fic, and just mention "oh hey this is cut content kakoi desu ne?"

>> No.57411090

>>57411021
Unfortunately, it was a one-off, so that isn't really an option

>> No.57411182
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57411182

>>57410834
I'd say if you managed to get art drawn from one of your fics, definitely share it. I'd love to see some writebros winning like that.
I wish I could draw so I could do that myself, or that people who could draw liked my fic enough to draw something for it.

>> No.57411298

>>57411090
>that isn't really an option
I see. If were in your shoes then, I'd probably write a brand new one-shot revolving around that scene and attach it whenever you post it. Since it's cut content anyway, maybe you can repurpose it.
Alternatively, what this guy >>57411182 said.

>> No.57411459

>>57410834
Do it, the guy that made the Chloe ghost fucking fic did it so why can't you?

>> No.57411498

>>57411182
It wasn't exactly art from one of my fics, moreso from a general idea I had that I ALSO wrote a fic about
At this point the consensus seems to just be "post it" so here's a "deleted scene" from Please, Mrs. Usada
https://files.catbox.moe/qaxm4v.png

>> No.57411714

>>57411498
Ogh shite there we go
This shoulda been a scene in that fic

>> No.57412037
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57412037

>>57411714
I wanted to, but I wrote the first blowjob into facefucking scene and I realized I don't have the stuff in me to write two blowjob scenes one after another and have them be different enough from each other, even if the position was different

>> No.57412183

>>57412037
I understand. Still, man, that is some very detailed art. Nice.

>> No.57412604
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57412604

>>57411498
>Let's have a little look see at what you managed to get picked up by a drawfriend
>ah, no surprises here
Good for you bro. We should all be so lucky to get something inspired by our work made one day.
If it makes you feel better, I can try to remember to throat bang the queen peko herself when the time comes. My anon is no shota, but that don't mean I can get that bunny mama on her knees or back and plow her face while using her ears to force her back and forth.

>> No.57417495

>>57299791
cute feet

>> No.57421221

>>57395212
We already have connected universes, so it won't be too much of a stretch,

>> No.57421536

>>57375359
In theory, chuuba's farting would be a natural evolution of the smell/sweat fetish, but that represents a hard line many readers don't want to cross. And that's understandable, since pretty much any fetish can be taken to more and more extremes until it becomes unpalatable. Though I do wonder what the reception would be if someone just slammed down a brap fic on one of these threads.

>> No.57421824

>>57421221
How does Shrunken Troubles tie into Ko'one breast milk?

>> No.57423969
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57423969

>>57395212
Actually, in theory, what would this even look like?
Because 'taking inspiration' from recent multiverse works there's like two stories I can see playing out from this.
Alt!Suisei being the "worst Suisei" gains multiverse sliding powers and starts observing her other selves , yadda yadda, she runs through a dozen incarnations of herself until she runs into her dream life "our" suisei, this starting plot that's like half character study of the comet, and half multiversal Suisei fight.
The other one I could see is a (You) and Suisei fic that's about an Anon (maybe the one from Graduation Day) sliding from universe to universe and experiencing every variation of a relationship with Suisei.

>> No.57427291

>>57299791
cute hands

>> No.57427379
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57427379

I was getting frustrated because of how much I wanted to get to the finale of Balsa so I just went ahead and wrote a huge chunk of it since it's going to be a while a way.

That was cathartic as fuck. Feels like I've been blue balling since I started this stupid story. Now I can actually focus on making this particular mini arc good instead of just rushing through it to get to the real shit.

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57430305

>>57421221
I've started reading Heartbreak Tokyo and seeing how similar it is to The Cover Job, I like to imagine that they're both the same story, just on altered/parallel timelines. Same characters, same Anon and same setting, except someone moved a chair three hundred years ago.

>> No.57431705

>>57421221
All fantasy stories take place in adjacent universes. Because they're all in the 'fantasy' section of the archive.

>> No.57433712

>>57431705
Shiori...

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57434098

>/wg/ were the D'ni all along
it all makes sense now

>> No.57436170

>>57411498
Never been much for /ss/ but it was good. Couldn't help but notice you described characters as lupine... were you trying to say something else or were they actually wolves?

>> No.57436199

>>57430305
You liking it so far?

>> No.57436312

>>57436170
He probably meant Leporid

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57436554

>>57436170
shit
I meant Lagomorph
time to fix that

>> No.57437286

>>57436554
So wolf pekomama... wait a minute has this been a Disguised Mio fic all along?

>> No.57438509

>>57437286
Funny enough, I only mistakenly used "lupine" to refer to the literal other two characters in the story besides Pekomama

>> No.57438667

>>57436170
lapine?

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57439384

>>57438509
>The Queen of the Pekos got railed by a wolfboy
Scandalous!

>> No.57439783

>>57439384
…now I’m getting an urge to write a fic where a chuuba gets knotted by a wolf boy shota
Maybe like a little red riding hood parody
Any suggestions for which chuuba?

>> No.57440369

>>57439783
Ehhh... Miko?
>"Ohhh... grandma, you have such big ears-nye..."

>> No.57440507

>>57439783
I mean you might as well consider the "default" for this scenario to be Mio, even if it would turn this Little red riding hood parody into Grandchild Ayame finding out Grandma Mio is banging a little pup that hangs around her forest. Maybe she joins in?

>> No.57440515

>>57440369
Eh, not fitting enough for the onee-chan type imo. I’m thinking a bit more “bimbo charm” type.
Looking through a little bit gets me thinking of
>Nene
>Mel
>AkiRo
(Marine and Noel would feel overused)

>> No.57440627

>>57440515
Mel would be nice, though Nene would be very cute right until she gets knotted

>> No.57441201

>>57440627
I’m now leaning especially towards Riding Hood Nene with going to visit Grandma Botan.
It just feels right to me to have Granny Botan casually and lazily seduce a young wolf boy, only for a clueless Nene to bumble her way into hard, breeding sex with the little wolf.

>> No.57442476

New thread time already?

>> No.57442819
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57442819

here's tower of tattle part v. as i said in my earlier post,
>>57330376

part v was supposed to be the final, but i stopped being retarded and realized it would be horrible to stuff everything in to part v like that. so it's more like the intro to the second half. anyone who happened to read through part iv, i hope you enjoy.

>> No.57442943

>>57442819
Anon you forgot your link.

>> No.57443032

>>57442819
oh shit. sorry. thank you! here it is...

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQpFNQcufhoQEvtBBFA8imIrVW-h5cZXXPz19bjijhxaWRJ1fXqWwqInKkTmVDOrJLmGoeVrJOu-oAn/pub

>> No.57443194

>>57299820
>>57443032
asdf sorry im dumb and gay heres me tagging the anchor

>> No.57443286

>>57443194
Any new tags?

>> No.57443454

>>57443286
uhh, lemme think. i guess it is a pretty high fantasy novel. i think the current set of tags maybe conveys it the best, because the only words i can think of otherwise are just references to authors. like gaimanesque or something. and i kinda hate neil gaiman

>> No.57443951

>>57360261
by the sea anon, i had a lot of thoughts on your piece just going through it bit by bit and thought word doc comments might be more useful to you rather than... it would honestly just look schizo if i just posted it here.

i apologize but i only have the first two pages done commenting. umm, as far as the whole story i've only read half so far, and i'll post about my general thoughts when i finish it.

it probably seems really extra to post comments when i haven't even finished it but it's mostly about prose stuff and it's almost entirely positive. also it was taking a surprising amount of time to get through it, and i'll probably do a more sizable chunk when i send comments next time.

i did up to the part where that one anon mentioned the prose verging into purple territory and gave my take on that part. from what i felt i didn't think any particular sentence was at all offensively purple, which is honestly the thing i think writers are much more afraid of in overwriting. i mostly felt like the continuous string of similes made it feel like they were fighting each other, as opposed to working with each other. but it was actually really contained to a small portion of that build up to meeting marine.

overall i actually think that dreamy sequence was really nice. i think with some sprucing it goes up from 8/10 to 9/10.

https://www.mediafire.com/file/49c2lr14evbyxe1/Comments+on+By+The+Sea+first+two+pages.docx/file

hope you see this before thread dies. if not i'll try and catch you in the next thread

>> No.57444013

>>57443951
Anon, why didn't you just publish it as a google doc?

>> No.57444052

>>57444013
Uhh... Good question. Because I'm stupid mostly and didn't think of that. I can change it to that whenever I next touch it...

>> No.57444192
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57444192

>>57299922
>>57442460
FuwaMoco domestic abuse!

>> No.57444367

>>57444192
Who the duck thinks mococo is the abusive one

>> No.57444894
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57444894

I'm at a bit of a cross-roads here, guys.
So I'm writing this fic, and I have two choices: Either go down the original, more grounded route that I wanted to take, or pump in some melodrama straight out of a Jdrama/Kdrama (but is kind of more exciting). The fic itself is romance/drama/incest, so... yeah.

>> No.57444954

>>57444894
Without context, we can't really know what the best decision is. The only advice I can give you is to flip a coin and pick one option, and if you feel disappointed at the option it lands on, write the other route.

>> No.57444967

>>57444894
I think that depends more on how well you can execute that melodrama. Melodrama when done poorly is just insufferable

>> No.57445012

>>57444894
I strongly advise that you pick the better option.

>> No.57445076

>>57444954
That's fair. Providing too much context will just spoil the story, but it would also be tough to give advice on the direction. I miiight do the coin flip if I can't figure it out.
>>57444967
That's true. I'm not too confident in my skills of doing it either. To me, it just comes off as a laundry list of cliches. We're talking literal falling to one's death, evil mothers, and Anon doing a mad dash to his beloved at the climax
>>57445012
Uwagh...

>> No.57445121
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57445121

Oh yeah, have some freshly-baked Botan bread while we're at it:
>>57444583
>>57444583
>>57444583

>> No.57445183

>>57445076
Cliches aren't necessarily bad, again it comes down to execution but don't be too hard on yourself. Also, I would be lying if I said that spolier didn't interest me.

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57445376

>>57445183
Oh boy... All right, I'll give it some more thought, then. Thanks, Anon.

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57445803

>>57445376
You got this anon.

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