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>>56722745
Story recap! There were five stories posted in the last thread.

Please, Mrs. Usada! >>56558932
Tags: NSFW, Pekomama, /ss/, cheating

A Predator's Touch, A Hazy Yellow Line (Omake)>>56615831
Tags: Botan, femdom, NSFW, pegging

Just Another Lovesick Afternoon>>56621448
Tags: SFW, Ina, Fluff

Alt!Suisei discussion continuation>>56651687

Penis inspection day with Choco!>>56657066
Tags: Choco, NSFW, Short

>>56722745
Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
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Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
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>>56722777
>>56722853

FacelessDegenerates,com

https://rentry.org/wzcar

tags: Shirogane Noel, NSFW, dark, misery porn

I've wanted to give the concept of "Interactive fanfic" a spin for some time, and I tried it out by getting cute with Rentry's formatting options.

I'm ready for any harsh criticisms regarding the story, if anything I wanted it as a proof of concept to what I tried to do.

As always, feedback is greatly appreciated.

>>56722777
First Train and Kafka Stop 21: Shelter

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRbfriLQc-zaWLLx4A8x70TOqgCfcDmOCAu3Fc1HARSC69xmIRfXzxQopSAXdpruwFPV1-0CESnzqcu/pub

tags: Sora, Choco, Fubuki, Anthology series, dark, NSFW

posted it in the last fucking thread because my brain doesn't work apparently. Fuck.

>>56723650
That was pretty neat. I'll give you an A+ for creativity. The smut was pretty good too, even though there wasn't very much of it. I liked the idea of getting to see both of their perspectives. Nice work.

>>56723650
You should probably unhyperlink the title of the fic within rentry
Other than that. God damn this was a good experimental fic. Usually when people do pseudo forum posts they either ape imageboards or use something like the PHO interlude generator if they wanted to ape a larger forum. This formatting meanwhile makes it feel like one of those mythical old internet forums.
As for the smut, it could have been better but I'm reasonably certain the intent was more about the misery than eroticism.
Honestly only real gripe is that 'noel' refers to the switch when '10 years ago' feels like it should be the late 2000s rather than the late 2010s.

>>56725192
Thanks for the read!
>>56725913
Unhyper'd
I'll also swap the switch. Wrote it in because it was the first thing that came to mind.

>>56723650
Damn, just looking at it, the concept is already blowing my mind. I'll explore it a bit more later but I'm pretty stoked to click through all this stuff.

>>56723650
Attempting to put aside my own personal preferences
It's a neat, creative idea, but I feel like the fic lacks depth behind it
The final "payoff" is very short and doesn't really go too much into it, leaving me feeling like the forum format is a distraction instead of an addition

>>56726694
Thanks for the read!
>I feel like the fic lacks depth behind it
You wouldn't be wrong. What would've you done in my stead?

>>56723650
This is pretty cool, I like it a lot

>>56727789
I mean, that's a hard question for me to answer objectively, cause I'm much more of a fan of smutty eroticism than dark misery porn.
I guess I'd add in a couple more blog posts detailing a few extra "events" that occurred before the finale, like Noel sucking him off or something. And then for the final one, just put in more detail about the process. Slow it down a little, add some more deliberation and thought process, and put in some more detail for the aftermath, as it cuts off very abruptly once it's done.

>>56728208
TFTR!
>>56728447
I guess we differ here then. I liked the deleted posts by Noel because they left a bunch up to mystery.
I do take the comments about the final one at heart though so that's that.

Clear!

>>56723650
This is super fucking clever and cool. Not a fan of /ss/ so there's nothing really hot or sexy for me here which actually works in it's favour a ton. Excellent stuff!

>>56723701
You know I kind of expected for there to literally be a unicorn to come in based off of the convo in the last thread. Kind of made me wary that the ending was going to be her getting high because she wasn't actually smoking tobacco thus ending with Sora "chasing the unicorn".
Still I liked the tension in this even if I came in with the wrong expectations. This could have been longer but I take it this wasn't meant to be erotic anyway so the length was just right.

>>56723650
>The Boy And The Queen
>12incher12YO
Based. This is a super slick way to do a fic, it's very neat. I can't think of something more unique than this in terms of presentation. I'll give it a more thorough look when I'm able, but already this alone has me awestruck, love the references.

>>56722974
Would that Pekomama story technically be allowed into the atchive? She has some art, but it's not like she's a vtuber herself.

>>56734762
Is a technicality that specific and autistic really worth worrying about?

SO THICK

>>56734762
She's a real character in the pekoverse, as in, we know of her existence, we've seen her on streams, etc. She's more real than Miyuki at least.
The line does get blurry but it's not a full OC so it's whatever.

>>56735289
I'm worried that the floodgates will be opened and we'll eventually move further and further off course until we start accepting pure OCs.
>>56735673
Miyuki stories still featured Fubuki in some form though.

>>56738487
Look if we haven't become clockgen by now we're never gonna be

>>56738809
Said anon none the wiser to the fact his cock had already become a clockgenerator.

>>56723059
Bae getting raped by Irys (lesbian flavor)

>>56738487
I’m extremely doubtful that there’s anybody in /wg/ itching to write fanfic purely starring their vtuber OCs, except for maybe people wanting to write Miyuki-only stories, which is way more of a sketchy area than Pekomama

>>56738809
What's the story with clockgen? All I know is they made a ton of extremely horny greentext and then one day disappeared.

>>56649447
Funny anon responses included

>>56649447
I remember one that I came up with and still love
>Everything is trying to rape Luna
>it turns out Luna is a massive slut and is happy to have sex with anything
>as soon as this fact is revealed to a would-be rapist, they immediately lose all motivation to go through with it because it would be consensual
>the story then becomes Luna trying to find something that will have consensual sex with her
>includes wacky scenes where she’s pretending that she’s going to get raped even though she wants it(her act never manages to fool the rapist)

My favorite funny prompt will always be the one swallowed by AltSuisei where Anon slips in a dimension where everything is slightly different but he freaks out like he's in a dystopian setting

>>56741686
>luna walks in a town full of gruff men who all eye her
>Luna "accidently" trips and exposes her bare assto the world
>"oh nyo! I reawwy hope no one twies to wape me in this compwomising position~"
>she shakes her ass
>literally everyone leaves the area leaving luna alone with her ass still in the air
>"NAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!"

>>56739040
That collab reminded me of "The idolification of Ouro Kronii", except Bae was getting raped by everyone except Fauna who was tryahrding a cake

>>56741902
>Kronii likes Chick-Fil-A
>Kiara is not Austrian, but a German from Bavaria.
>Watame thinks potato chips are just okay
>Pekora talks normally
Anything else I'm missing?

>>56741902
The only thing I remember about that is the species swap for Nekomata Korone and Inugami Okayu, Choco being a Doctor instead of a Nurse, and Miko being agressively (and uncomfortably) heterosexual.
For some reason this is also making me imagine the ending gag being about you getting rescued from that wacky alternate universe by Advent.
>Finally make it out that he'll universe rescued by some of Cover's newest idols.
>Ask for their names since it seems you missed their debut.
>Picking randomly you start with that pink one.
>"Un Un, oh my name it's Mococo"
>Instantly have a fucking heart attack thinking you've been dragged into another dystopia.

>>56744474
>"What... no, no, no..."
>Nerissa comes up to Anon. "Ope... Hi Anon, I'm Nerissa! I like crows."
>Anon assumes she's dystopian Kronii
>https://youtu.be/umDr0mPuyQc?t=3

>>56723059
Making the terrible mistake of trying to break up with IRyS while she's the one driving the car.

>>56747566
Or while she's playing Overwatch 2 with holostars.

>>56747920
Fuck off

>>56748575
IRyStocuck...

>>56747920
>israel
Oh shit
What is it with male collab drama today and yesterday?

>>56748721
Go back to your bait thread.

>>56748953
you first

>this is the best thing I've ever written
>this is the worst thing I've ever written
>this is the thing I've ever written
>all in the span of less than a day
I fucking hate this hobby. It's great.

>>56749278

>>56749209
Now I know you're trolling since you used a mori pic. Use Gura or Mumei next time. It'll work better.

Reading for the Contest
>Norwegian Wood
This is a reread since I wanted to give it another chance. It's not as wooden as I remember with it actually having some half-decent erotic description... it's just that everything around it is so bland that any erotic effect it would have is blunted unless you only looked at the smutty prose.
>Gravity's Rainbow
You know I didn't think the Korone Vore fic would actually get written but here it is. It's not really my thing, and the actual vore scene is rushed to high hell, even if I think it at least gets the appeal across.

>>56750808
I only had 3k words to write Norwegian Wood and the breakfast scene took up 500 words.

>>56750808
>Norwegian wood
>not wooden
What a ripoff

>>56751736
Your prose is the problem. I don't think you could have made it any better even with 50k words.

>>56751825
Please call me sputnigger again. It was funny last time.

>>56751736
Was it a self imposed challenge? Because I'm going to be honest with you the prose there was flatter than *Insert Bounce Ball Size 1 Chuuba here*. Like yeah looking back you at least managed to get some pretty good erotic prose in the two brief sex scenes but they're drowned out by the rest of the fic having basic dialogue and prose outside of it.
Have you ever written any other work of smut? I'm curious if you've gotten anything better done with more words.

>>56752165
Wait that fic was actually a weirdanon2 work? I had suspicions at the time >>54649378 but the reread made me think it was some other author because I was directly comparing it to the vore fic.
I guess I'll retract my question >>56752271 about asking what other fics you've written and switch it to asking why you wrote a sex scene as mediocre as that given that you've written much better smut multiple times by now.

>>56752507
>>56751736
it was a commission

>>56752759
Man... Bugfag really does have low standards; especially if he didn't even ask for a rewrite. Though on the other hand he is apparently the perfect fucking dream client for commision writers.

>>56752986
I wasn't particularly happy with that one, but I accepted it. I've mentioned my philosophy before; ask for a meal at a restaurant, it doesn't matter if you don't like what you were served - you still have to pay.
I just won't be going back to that restaurant anytime soon...

>>56753994
Cute Gura.

>>56754113
Something's wrong with this Gawr.

>>56723059
Gura some how manages to body snatch people and causes trouble while in other chuuba's bodies

>>56755000
>Ass and pussy hanging out in that tiny little hoodie
My dick feels it.

>>56753994
>>56754113
>>56755000
There's something different about these sharks... I just can't tell hwat...

>>56755425
complete shark saturation

Not enough hag impregnation in the archive...

>>56755198
This is making me imagine Gura smugly starting up a stream and doing that thing where she moves her body left to right to jiggle her new breasts... Only for her to get roasted by chat because she's still streaming with her normal model.

>>56756245
>"heheheh"
>jiggles mori's tits on stream
>"wook at me, I'm kowaiopi mpwi~ guhguh big ups t--"
>chat spazzes out for a moment and guraope mori glances at the screen to see she' that when she streams it's her body in Calli's outfit

>>56756650
What would the problem be?

>>56756211
Give me a bit.

>>56723059
Making Chloe get in a maid costume like >>56758276 thinking they're in for some kinky sexo but instead you make them clean around the house

>>56758790
way ahead of you on the maid thing...the rest of it well...

>>56758867
I guess she'll be cleaning some bvll cock with her orifices.

>>56752986
Of course bugfag has low standards, he keeps commissioning pekofag.

Woah! Your wordcount is very big anon!

>>56760169
Thanks. It's uncut.

>>56723650
Impressive! As the other Anons have said, this is quite creative and I respect the effort. Seeing both perspectives was cool and I've come to find that I'm a fan of semi-dark stories like this that involve trauma. This might be my favourite entry into the NSFW category so far.

>>56759006
sorry anon, this isn't a beast fetish fic

>>56732238
>>56760431
Thanks for the read!

Mio bump!

Clear!

Three days remain.
Will your contest submission make it in time?

>>56764782
no...im not even halfway done with the first draft and i work half the day and AC6 comes out as soon as I get off work tomorrow morning.

>>56764782
My first one is already in. I wanted to submit another fic, but I decided against it. I would have to rush it and I want to give it more time.

>>56764782
I’ll have to dedicate the entirety of Saturday (I’m way ahead of UTC-12 baby) to finish it, as that’s the only free time I have this week. I’ve worked with deadlines before like when I wrote my Christmas specials, but inspiration was flowing back then. Right now it’s bone dry and I have no clue how I’m going to churn out the rest of my story. Even the whole concept I’m writing is starting to feel contrived and shoehorned.

Bluna

>>56764782
I honestly don't know. I've been prepping for interviews and my parents are visiting so I only have sparse time over the next few days to make progress. I'll give it my best effort though, and if I don't make it in time, I'll finish it anyway and post it afterward.

Stay with me!

Would Fuwawa and Mococo be the the kind of twin boss where the other gets more powerful after one of them dies or would they be the kind where they revive each other if you don't take them out at the same time?

>>56769509
Mayonaka no doa o tataki

>>56769679
I want a Phase 2 Fuwamoco that works like Ornstein & Smough from Dark Souls 1.

>>56769679
as soon as one dies the other picks her weapons up and becomes twice as hard to deal with since not only does their stats go up, their move set is completely different

>>56769823
>>56769886
>When Fuwawa dies, Mococo's tits grow bigger

>>56769886
>the other picks her weapons up
But they both use those claw things?
Does Mococo go fucking feral once Fuwawa dies and starts quad-wielding all the claws with every limb?

>>56769679
>Kill Fuwawa
>Mococo comes down and latches onto her like the gay princes from DS3

>>56770030
wait...then what happens when macoco dies, do her tits deflate?

>>56770177
yes, this is what I had in mind.

add a move set that allows her to swiftly leap around, jump off walls to lunge at you quicker and perhaps a move where she leaps up (too high for you to look up with the camera) then she drops down on you for a grab and you have the ingredients for a real pain in the ass if you decided to hard focus one.

>>56770030
>Fuwawa dies, her body turning to dust and floats towards her sister.
>Mococo siezes up and screams as her body starts to change.
>When her eyes open up you don't see blue but purple.
>The split twins reunited as one being.
>FuwaMoco, The Abyss Guardian.

>>56770645
>I am chihuahua, nor am I Fuwawa
>I am not Fuwawa, nor am I Mococco
>I am FuwaMoco

KINO!
KINO KINO KINO KINO KINO KINO KINO KINO

>>56770645
I fucking love the "villan's title drop"
>Six petals of Stellar Purification- Micomet
>Chaos has descended- Baerys
And then you have the second phase
>Cosmic Shrine Maiden- Sakura Miko
>Aspect of Hope and Despair- Irys

>>56770645
plot twist
>one of the girls dies
>get a berserk mode for the other twin that's more of an endurance round
>as long as you get a few hits in you trigger a cut scnee
>she lays on the ground crying for a moment then she slowly lifts her head to see the other sister in an ethereal state reaching out to her sister
>"you were at my side all along..."
>they fuse to fuwamoko

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NjzF3XWrDdA

>>56770177
>>56770395
Mococo becomes UMVC3 Wolverine
>Buffs herself with Berserk Charge
>Berserker barrage that chips you
>Berserker Slash that crosses you up
>Divekick
>If she stuns You she does Weapon X

>>56771260
Okay that's just making me think instead of the dead sibling, it's actually their secret third sibling with like a green color scheme.

since this is fun what about the rest of advent as boss fights?

>>56771098
>Aging housewife - Ookami Mio
>The Embodiment of Love and Sex - Ookami Mio

>Lazing catto - Nekomata Okayu
>Beast of Hunger - Nekomata Okayu

>Momosuzu Nene
>uper Hyper Ultra Ultimate Deluxe Perfect Amazing Shining God 流派東方不敗 Master Freedom Justice Ginga Victory Prime Strong Cute Beautiful Wonderful Champion Galaxy Baby 最高 勇者王 天元突破 無限 無敵 無双 NENEMAXMAXMAXSTORONG NENECHI!

>>56771780
Bijou would be the kind of fight where the first half is fighting her as a floating moai head complete with vine booms when she throws rocks at you.
The second phase would be her doing her magical girl transformation, then the rest of the fight is rock bullet hell.

>>56732550
I'm glad you liked the tension, even if it didn't hit the notes you were expecting. And yeah, it wasn't really made for being erotica in mind hence the length. Thank you for giving it a read.

>>56771914
>Keeper of the Book- Ninomae Inanis
>Servant of the Ancients- INA
>The Priestess- ???

>Aloof Sniper- Shishiro Botan
>Deadeye Master- Shishiro Botan
>Apex Predator- Shishiro Botan
>>56771780
>Recordkeeper Shiori
A gimmick boss fight where she runs away and summons creatures to fight you.
>Glimpse Beyond Shiori
Shiori gets absorbed into the book and mutates. The fight is somber as you give her a mercy kill

>Shining Guardian- Bijou
More of a setpiece fight. She does big beams and shoots colorful explosions
>Crystal Determination
She becomes full melee. Its fast, hits hard and even has command grabs. She also calls out her attacks
>EMERALD BOMBER
>SAPPHIRE CRUSHER
>PEARL BUSTER
>DIAMOND STOPPER

>Demon of Sound- Nerissa
A souls like fight, full or feints and tight moves
>Banshee of hell- Nerissa
Same as before but turned up to eleven. Also a vocal song is playing

All this talk about fighting and violence...what about peace and love?

>>56770645
When you get her weapon and you look at the favor text it says
>Fuwamoco asked her infernal masters to split her into two beings. She gladly traded her existance just so neither had to endure eons of solitude

>>56772255
>>56772545
>Bijou phase 1
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=txuvKFuw1FY
>Crystal Dominion
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pRFgviKp5hA

>Narissa
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jPK7zWFMthA
>Banshee of Hell
https://youtu.be/0fj_ZbZGtTY

>Shiori
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UWx4we-xCMk
>Glimpse of Beyond:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AB6sOhQan9Y

>>56773115
Yeah, let talk about what happens after the fight.
If Advent (or really any chuuba you like) were mid-bosses in some kind of h-game what kind of fetishes would they force on you during their victory rape scene?

>>56758289
>In the distant future of 2025, all hags have become happy mothers

>>56773880
>Bijou
Lolidom footjob

>nerissa
dunno

>FuwaMoco
Riding your dick and face

>Shiori
Amazon press

>>56773880
Nerissa would make a female player character eat her ass while she 69's Kiara.
A male player character would be dumped in the corner, where he is eventually caught jerking off to the lesbian action and has his balls kicked as punishment.

>>56773982
>Nerissa
lifts your lower half and gives you a titjob while sucking you dry

>>56773982
Would Bilbo still have her rock shoes on? That would hurt so bad

>>56774161
Well it is lolidom, just think of it as an extra layer of humiliation.

>>56774161
Please do not call her Bilbo in these kinds of scenarios.

>>56773805
i was thinking more of

>Banshee of hell
https://www.youtube.com/watch?
v=kFs3LFMRccs

>Crystal Dominion
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e7YmF0TGNs4


>The Abyss Keeper
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oxQRn8WZIkg


>Glimpse beyond
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lBdnti4_UUg

Also achievements
>"Hey! stick to the Script!"
Go into phase 2 before Bijou can cast Diamond Dust Revolution
>"Cute and Funny Business"
Get caught by Bijou's Obsidian Guillotine

>"Volume is a little low"
Parry Infernal hellsong in the "Banshee of Hell" bossfight
>"God i wish that were me"
Get crushed by the Demon landing

>"BAD DOG!"
Parry The Abyss guardian's Berserker Barrage
>"Cat person"
Manage to avoid getting hit during Fuwamoco's Weapon X

>"Too long, didnt hear"
Interrupt Shiori's chanting
>"Curiosity killed the cat"
Finish the Glimpse beyond fight with 50% or more health

>>56723059
A fic about Iofi abducting a guy and trying to probe his anus, only to have the tables turned and have her anus probed by cock instead

I'm going to impregnate that Iofi......

>>56777772
>of course I'm okay with it, just as long as I get to probe you afterwards, mutual anal probing is a customary human greeting
>it is? our research on www.wikipedia.org found no such tradition
>of course not, you can't trust wikipedia. if you want to learn human customs, you should on research www.pornhub.com. but no worries, i'll be sure to teach you all about human culture

>>56780532 (me)
*research on

>>56773890
>2025
That might not be too far off from when that'll be done most likely.

Live

>>56773370
That goes hard, ngl

>>56782518
that is one smug Polka

>>56785748
I'm gonna bring out the smugness that lay dormant within this clown fennec.

>>56742578
fuck off it was a very cute cake

>>56782518
First I wanted to put 2026, but that seemed a bit mean. And 2024 felt like putting pressure on you.

>>56773370
Shiori
>In the pursuit of Knowledge, she lost herself. Perhaps it would have been different had someone been there for here

>Bijou
>Kingdoms fought over the Crystal Guardian, triying to seize her power over emotions, completely unaware of the girl under the stone

>Nerissa
>The demon of sound was beaten, her horn broken and her body trapped in a prison. In the darkness, she kept singing. Not out of malice, but out of love

>>56786188
>2026 seems mean
You mean I could write this for LONGER? That seems like a great idea, friend.

Give me your favorite fic per gen

>Gen 0
Apple of Her Eye
>Gen 1
If you count foobers, Petting your fox, if not, Festival of Sensations (Matsuri)
>Gen 2
Our cures, no contest.
>Gamers
Petting your Fox, or Childhood Hag
>Gen 3
Cover High
>Gen 4
Sad Genuine Smile
>Gen 5
Life with a Lion isn't easy
>HoloX
Match-Made

>>56788247
I respect your opinion but Cascade of White is objectively the best Botan fic and I WILL throw hands over this.

>>56777772
qrd on Iofi?

>>56790443
>cute
>genki
>friendly
>very erotic and horny without even trying

>>56790443
She's an alien who speaks a lot of languages, and hates tracing and AI art.

>>56791126
Which is funny because both of those things create better stuff than she does.

>>56790647
I will now watch your chuuba.

>>56788247
>Our Cures
I don't get why this is so fucking hyped around here. The writing is so full of cliches and stereotypes it's like the author decided to use TV Tropes as a cheatsheet; not to mention the completely illogical acts the characters take sometimes in order to keep the plot from collapsing, like Anon not just telling his mother "this girl's trying to rape me."
It's LONG, but long doesn't make it good.

>>56795145
It probably comes down to a difference in taste which can be explored and discussed, but not resolved.

>>56795145
I dropped it after Anon rejects Aqua, but for what it is it's pretty good. Hard to name many completed, novel length, romantic vtuber fanfics that are better than it.

>>56795145
Because it was a fun read.

>>56795145
I never finished it, honestly.

>>56795145
Because it was a sweet romance arc with a rrat!Ayame portrayed sympathetically. It may have effectively just ran through an anime school romance with a lot of twists but it was written well and like this anon says >>56795308 at some point it becomes a matter of taste. I liked what I was hearing when the author was writing it for most of last year and I enjoyed my time with it when it finally got released.

Speaking of Sad, Genuine Smile, anyone have any cuckquean stuff in the works? The Coco parts of it are some of the hottest stuff this general has produced for me. I'd give a nut to have an extended cut of the epilogue where Towa is semi-willingly still living with Anon despite him blatantly drowning in angel pussy right in front of her. Imagining the kinds of sadistic sexually charged scene(s) that must have occurred to get her to agree to such an arrangement is a million times hotter than the mere taste we got.

I'm experiencing decision paralysis from the recent CouncilRyS offcollab. There's too many potential stories to write from that nonstop barrage of erotic audio and dumb baking innuendos. For example
>Council shows up to the collab wearing nothing below the waist. Turns out "eating cake" actually meant IRyS would be eating ass
>Bae gets molested by IRyS' massage and no one tries to stop it, even when IRyS is audibly fingerblasting her
>Kronii gets pissed off from IRyS' inconsistent scoring, hatesex ensues
>Fauna and Mumei offer sexual favors to IRyS so that their cake will win
>Bae and Mumei taste each other's "cream". Mumei begrudgingly admits its pretty good
>all of Council waits for the stream to end so they can instantly correct IRyS for her bratty oujo-sama behavior. The sweaty orgy lasts long into the morning and by then Fauna's cake is almost done cooling

>>56797359
I'd like to see Towa masturbating while watching from the corner, eventually.

>>56797359
One of the scrapped endings I wrote was about Coco going on a supermakret and finding Kanata with a baby bump on her belly and Towa's child in her arms. No words are spoken between the two, just a sad, and a genuine smile

>>56797662
Kronii raping IRyS on the countertop while all of the other council members awkwardly try to continue baking around them.

>>56797662
Anything regarding irys/Bae im down for, but what we really need is some prime fauna bullyng
>"Alright girls, lets crack the eggs...we need big ones...of course, Fauna doesnt count"
>"B-B-BUT I HAVE REPLACEMENT EGG HERE!"
>"Oh yeah..does that even work as an emulsifier?"
>"Y-Y-yeah! I-Ill show you!"
>"Eeeh? Fauna still whisking that? we are already baking"
>"I-Its almost done! I swear this has never happened to me before!"
>"All that whisking and all you got is that pathetic quantity? bwahahahaha"
>"I-its gonna be a lot bigger in the over, when it blends with the almond milk"
>"Huh? just ten minutes and its going down?"
>"I-I-IT HAS TO BE THE TEMPERATURE OF THE OVEN, WHEN I DO IT AT HOME IT COMES OUT PERFECTLY I SWEAR
>*The cake pops and deflates in the ove*
>*Fauna looks in despair, pants (and sleeves) dirty as her deflated cake gets made fun off*
>"Whaaa? it even popped this early?"
>"And only once? boy talk about pathetic"
>"The size was nothing impressive, but its even worse when the otherr qualities suffer"
>"We have a thick, long and creamy treat here, since Fauna cant satisfy us"
And then the fic ends with Fauna whisking and crying in the corner

>>56797359
>That filename
Kanata dindu nuffin.

>>56788247
>Gen 0
A tough one since there are a lot of equally favored ones. Two-way tie between Parched at Night and Miko Noises because they were inspirations.
>Gen 1
Festival of Sensations. Gen 1 is a bit lacking outside Fubuki.
>Gen 2
Yuzuki Veterinary Services/spoiler]
>Gamers
Kintsugi. It's what led me to this place and start writing to begin with.
>Gen 3
First Summer Memories...
Honorable mention to Jamais Vu. Great fic that captured that emotional fallout.
>Gen 4
Deal with a Devil. Cute fic and I'm excited to see where it goes.
>Gen 5
Moonshine Blues. Funny, Fluffy, what more could you ask? Honorable mention to Polka and Rain as I think it's underrated.
>Gen 6
Match Made no doubt. With how much I love Kintsugi it's not really a contest.

>ID 1
Extrapedestrial. Not really my thing but its well done.
>ID2
Positive ID. We need more tacticool fics.
>ID 3
Fanning The Flames. A bit rough around the edges but captures Kaela very well.

>Myth
Girl of Emptiness. Still the gold standard for horror here.
>Council
The Idolfication Of Ouro Kronii. There's a certain schadenfreude in that fic that makes it stand out.
>... and IRyS!
Tie between La Goblina and One Last Kiss. Both capture IRyS pretty well.
>Advent
TBD

>>56798297
God I shouldn't get such a boner for this but seeing girls in distress is just too good.

Damn, how many years has it been since I fucked up my spoiler? Well, whatever.

>>56788247
>Gen 0
A tough one since there are a lot of equally favored ones. Two-way tie between Parched at Night and Miko Noises because they were inspirations.
>Gen 1
Festival of Sensations. Gen 1 is a bit lacking outside Fubuki.
>Gen 2
Yuzuki Veterinary Services
>Gamers
Kintsugi. It's what led me to this place and start writing to begin with.
>Gen 3
First Summer Memories...
Honorable mention to Jamais Vu. Great fic that captured that emotional fallout.
>Gen 4
Deal with a Devil. Cute fic and I'm excited to see where it goes.
>Gen 5
Moonshine Blues. Funny, Fluffy, what more could you ask? Honorable mention to Polka and Rain as I think it's underrated.
>Gen 6
Match Made no doubt. With how much I love Kintsugi it's not really a contest.

>ID 1
Extrapedestrial. Not really my thing but its well done.
>ID2
Positive ID. We need more tacticool fics.
>ID 3
Fanning The Flames. A bit rough around the edges but captures Kaela very well.

>Myth
Girl of Emptiness. Still the gold standard for horror here.
>Council
The Idolfication Of Ouro Kronii. There's a certain schadenfreude in that fic that makes it stand out.
>... and IRyS!
Tie between La Goblina and One Last Kiss. Both capture IRyS pretty well.
>Advent
TBD

>>56798297
Wouldnt the analogy for premature ejaculation be stronger and hotter if she was triying to decorate and she splurts all over her pants?
>>56798847
girls getting humilliated and cumming for that is a patrician fetish

>>5679804
First off, fuck, I'd want to see that if only for the dumb title drop.
Second off, this may just be the horniness speaking but I'd say it's a missed opportunity for Coco to also have a kid with her that's older than Towa's kid.

>>56788247
Cover High is so fucking incredible, I wish there were more fics like it.

>>56799067
fun seeing that one of my fics made it to someone's favorites list

>>56799067
Glad you liked both fanning the flames and Idolification of Ouro Kronii. Im itching to get back to Kaela, but the well is dry for now

>>56799164
...Which one?

>>56799270
Yo you wrote both? Based. I like the Kaela one a lot and I do think you have a knack for her.

>>56799067
>>Extrapedestrial. Not really my thing but its well done.
ID1 isn't exactly the most contested category, but I'm still happy to hear that from someone who isn't into the fetish. I had more leashing than writing experience and felt like the style and story weren't good enough to work for non-fetish audiences.

>>56799543
Vet Services.
I figured everything I've done was always an afterthought of "oh yeah, that was kinda hot" at best.

>>56799543
Thanks. I love Ela, but i can barely watch her due to the sheer amount of catching up i have to do. Between Bae,Mori,Kaela, Shiori and Bijou im so full of streams i can barely walk

>>56799641
I appreciated the Dom/Sub aspect of it even though I'm not that far into the scale, so to speak. That said I totally got what you were going for, hence my appreciation for it.

>>56799926
Well, I'm a degenerate, and when something hits that degenerate fetish it hits. What else can I say?

>>56800018
You and me both.

>>56799094
>First off, fuck, I'd want to see that if only for the dumb title drop.
I'm pretty sure SGS had a title drop. All my fics have them.
>Missed opporunity.
But hey! Look at this way, Towa gets to clean the batter off the sticks after her boyfriend inseminates Kanatan for the 6th time in the day, and all Coco gets is that her girlfriend chose being the side chick over her.

>>56797663
That's where my mind takes me when I think about it - deeper, systematic submission. Things like having her wait on Anon and Kanata with water or towels while they're fucking, making her lick Kanata clean after getting creampied, dictating when she is and isn't allowed to orgasm. It's a frustrating but intense form of arousal she's experiencing where the more control she gives up, the more it turns her on

>>56800018
>watching Kaela and En Kaela
learn japanese and start watching Koyori
i call it, the Triathlon of streaming

>>56800161
>I appreciated the Dom/Sub aspect of it even though I'm not that far into the scale, so to speak. That said I totally got what you were going for, hence my appreciation for it.
Ah, that's fair. Even I wouldn't walk a leashed girl outside or seriously train her in dog skills, but exaggeration is what fiction is for sometimes.

>>56799067
Time to write more Advent.

What did they mean by this?

>>56795145
Yeah, I tend to struggle with escaping cliches. It's something I've been told before but they seem to be somewhat ingrained in my writing, so I'll need to dwell on ways to branch out. I thought I covered that second point at the end of the bathroom scene, but I agree that the characters would sometimes act purely for the sake of the plot (I still wish I had spent more time giving Ayame's psychological issues some breathing room rather than have her "vomit" them out as other Anons mentioned upon its release).

Good luck to the anons rushing to finish their submission.

>>56804164
i hate this guy
he always draws a shitty AHAHAH SHOCK INCEST DICK ON GIRLS WAHAHAHAHA joke and then rakes money in

>>56808264
Can someone please make a countdown clock to fuel my anxiety?

>>56797359
>>56797663
>>56800405
Huh
https://files.catbox.moe/r9vj1z.png

>>56809777
tower really is cuckqueen prime...
also hot.

>>56809777
Sweet merciful Christ.
I feel flattered beyond belief.
Thank you so much for sharing anon.

>>56788247
Thank you. I'm going to write a proper novel of Apple of Her Eye one of these days. Keep getting distracted.

>>56810987
I'm pretty sure Coco is a bigger cuck, though I don't think Coco would be someone one that would stoop that low.

>>56810987
I've got a brainmelting need to draw more of it now so if you or anyone else'd like anything specific I'd be obliged to while I'm in the mood. I really don't get to draw this enough

>>56811977
It'd require a lot more to get her to accept something like that since she's more prideful, but i get what you mean.
>>56812382
Hmm... I was thinking of an unconventional chuuba getting cucked, someone like botan who secretly gets off to either watame or (you) fucking lamy

>>56809777
w-woah

>>56812382
I'm thinking
>anon guy on a chair, face out of camera
>Matuli riding him cowgirl, plump ass bouncing, legs on either side of the chair, arms draped over his shoulders
>Matuli with a smug smirk looking back at (insert chuuba here; Luna, Shuba, Foobs, whoever) who's tied up and forced to watch her bf get ridden

>>56809731
I think I've done this right.
https://countingdownto.com/?c=4935176

>>56812382
if you do futa i would like to ask Chuuba of your choice prematurely ejaculating
you dont even need to draw a dick, the implication is enough

>>56812382
>>56813891
Found the name of the position I'm thinking of if you want to search refs: "mastery position"

>>56812382
Any hag getting cucked by a zoomer

>>56795145
The dialogue is what sold it for me. Some might prefer to read more serious conversations but the silly insults and clever roasts were a blast to read, and even the more somber discussions were good.

>>56814224
Thank you, this makes me much more anxious, and therefore productive.

>>56815494
The insults and banter is probably the highlight of the fic, and kudos to the author for not doing a heel-spin on Ayame's exterior and going straight from scorn to love, but the romance still feels inorganic - it begins because he tells her to fuck off and she flicks the bean to him and suddenly she can't get him out of her head, rather than any definitive anchor point - and the tragically uninspired plot devices only to serve to paint the picture of an author wanting to write a rrat Ayame romance and putting everything else secondary. A romance should be an afterthought, an offshoot of two characters whom have interacted well throughout a developed plot.

>>56814692
That sounds brutal. Imagine having a hag gf but impregnating a zoomer instead.

>>56814692
>Fubuki walks in on you mating-pressing Bae
>predator instincts go into overdrive

>>56723650
Well, shit. I usually like /ss/, but I know that it's fictional content and I’m aware of what such a thing would entail in real life. You encapsulated the anguish that Anon feels at what he went through and the overall repercussions of what an actual /ss/ relationship would imply so realistically that I could almost think that you’re writing from experience, like you’ve lived something similar before. Nice job. The interactive pseudo-forum format was also really well-thought, I think that’s part of why it had such an impact.

>>56816748
I’m not sure I understand, or maybe I don’t agree with you. When it comes to romance stories a slow buildup is better than a turning point where a character goes “oh I actually love them”. I’d argue that an anchor point where she realises her feelings is more cliche. And shouldn’t a romance story be about romance? What other plot is there supposed to be if not the development of the relationship between two star characters?

>>56817390
>Yell "STAY"
>She sits there, leaking, mouth frothing and eyes bulging in both primal rage and sexual desire
>force her to watch as you dump your balls inside a fertile cunt while her dry cave gets nothing
>mindbreak

>>56723059
A fic like "Just a little Crazy"
I think that one is a masterpiece in yandere menhera comedy/love and we could use one
EN has otherwordly beings/gods that can love you
JP has some schizos
ID has the cold blooded killers.
Sky is the limit! give me more mentally ill girls!

>>56817894
Kemonomimi girls acting like actual animals is always so funny to me. Mostly because it makes me imagine melodramatic scenes ending with spraying them in the face with a water sprayer and yelling "Bad Dog", or them playing around in a giant scratch palace.

>>56822483
>Sitting next Okayu
>Starts digging her nails into your thigh for 45 minutes

>>56824170
Why is she holding a pack of cigarettes

>>56824500
(You) are trying to pressure Iroha into becoming a smoker.

>>56824500
Because she's gonna light one for us, man. We're sharing it.

>>56824500
She caught you smoking and she's confiscating your pack because she wants you to be healthy.

>>56824170
Okay unrelated but that filename sounds like a dumb nickname for Iroha to get in a fic. Maybe if you're doing one of those worlds where using japanese honorrifics would feel wrong.

>>56824736
>>56824844
A corruption fic but instead of sex it's smoking sounds like it'd be a good comedy

>>56826342
Okay that sounds like two fics either a moral degeneration thing like the fic called "Towa!" or a comedy about an overexaggerated anti smoking PSA starring Iroha where she gets pressured into taking just one... Then it cuts to her looking like an overly tanned gyaru who can't stop smoking 3 packs a day even as she's heavily pregnant.

I don't know about smoking, but Iroha would be the perfect girl to be corrupted into watching her boyfriend fucking Chloe and enjoying it.

>>56827060
This reminds me of a doujin I read where the heroine is a massive cuckquean because her first crush was married so her brain kind of short-circuited with the thought that her boyfriend isn't supposed to be into her. Was also kinda cute because the protag wasn't all that into the cuckquean stuff and was slowly breaking down her walls into having a normal relationship. Stopped reading when a cliffhanger being that her first crush was back in town and newly divorced happened.

>>56827060
>Chloe
She almost seems like it would be too conventional of a choice here... too bad I can't really think of any other options. Laplus just seems too comical to really make the domination /humiliation thing work. Maybe Suisei? I think there's a 'my oshi having sex with my boyfriend' angle that could work there, though that sounds like it's hitting notes a bit too close to that Mori fic "Grab as much as you can".

>>56827742
Lui maybe?

>>56827742
The Suisei angle, as spicy as it sounds, would need proper justification, as I don't think Suisei would do that.

>>56828045
Lui could work in that "let me show you how to please a man" angle.

>>56828190
Yeah the Suisei angle would only really work if you had some sort of connection to her maybe you were her childhood friend or old boyfriend that she really wants to reconnect with/take back even if it means bullying her kouhai into liking it.
Or maybe she's your sister who has come to live with you while wanting to respark your incestous relationship.

>>56828511
>that spoiler
You people are OUT OF CONTROL.

>>56828511
I was JUST thinking of something like that once some one brought up Grab As Much (As You Can) of something kind of like it, where you get a gf except it was just for her to get close to her oshi who's your sister only she then discovers that you two can't keep your hands off each other

>>56817711
I should specify what I'm talking about isn't a complete about-face but rather a defining moment where a character's relationship begins to change; something like an arduous experience that strengthens already close bonds, or a shift in living conditions that results in frequent necessary contact twixt two people, like becoming neighbours. Growing romantic feelings for someone that up to this point you ostensibly scorn and look down upon by thinking of them whilst paddling the pink canoe - that just ain't it.

A romance story should absolutely be about romance but it should not be the ONLY string to your bow - but I'm going to withhold on expanding upon that thought in case the later chapters turn out to be an amazing drama. I hope they do. Some moves were being made about Ayame's living conditions. I'm up to chapter 4.

>>56829500
>Iroha gets double NTR'd trying to get close to Suisei via her brother
Brutal.

>>56831304
I am saving this picture of my sister; thank you.

>>56830364
I see, it must be a difference in taste then. I’m more for a natural approach where the walls are slowly broken down as two characters get more comfortable with each other simply by interacting, because I believe that’s how love happens in real life. That’s why I hold the story in high regard — despite the absurdity of the concept the development of their feelings towards each other feels strangely realistic. Sudden “wow he saved me from x” or becoming neighbours isn’t for me, that in my opinion is cliched.

>>56831304
Normally Suisei doesn’t do anything for me, but god damn does that leg-lift pose activate my neurons.

>>56833801
Again, that anchor point is by no means an about-face in feelings, but rather a definitive point where the author expresses to the reader that something is *different*. Something between the two is changing and it's from this point that what was once a complete platonic friendship is starting to show the barest shoots - nay, tendrils - of a close bond.

But anyway, that's just semantics. It could very well wow me by the end; I struggled to enjoy the first half of the Steins;Gate visual novel and that ended up an easy 9/10.

Finished with the Selen Bully rough draft, let's fucking gooooo!!!!
Needs some editing though. Tonally it's fucked, because some of really dark abuse and some it's easy breezy slice of life comedy.
Don't really know which way to go. I don't even know if I should go one way another, maybe I should just keep it tonally schizophrenic

>>56833900
Anon, that's your sister!

>>56827742
Nothing wrong with conventional when the concept's relatively unexplored here. You could make it work with members that also would have a natural connection to Iroha (other HoloX+Suisei) but I'll at least start writing this with Chloe.

Who's the shogun of hololive?

>>56834701
FBK rules from the shadows, YAGOO is but a ceremonial figure.

>>56834701
Sora

>>56834259
How schizo are we talking about? How jarring are the transitions between the abuse and the comedy?

>>56834701
Polka.

>>56833913
I get what you mean, but what I’m saying is I don’t think an anchor point like that is necessary to begin with. That ‘something’ between the two that changes everything can be spread over the entire course of their time together. Each interaction and event can have the same level of importance rather than a single event kicking things off. My perspective might be different since I’ve finished the story, but Ayame’s fall felt very natural since the reader could see the obvious changes in their dynamic each time as the story progressed.

>>56834701
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eMRS8VnhklE

How do you guys know whether you've written something interesting or not? How do you know it's not boring?

>>56835774
If you are interested in writing, then it's interesting to read.

>>56835774
You don't. Just shoot your shot and see what happens.

>>56835774
Honestly, you just won't know lol
Sometimes, you'll write an absolute zinger and you'll believe it really is a zinger, but when you publish it, nobody actually notices.
Sometimes, you'll write what you feel is the cringiest bullshit that's been spewed forth by someone's fingers, only to find that people loved that specific line.
You just won't know until you publish. My rule of thumb is that if you think it's good, it's probably good (until it's not). Also, read other works so you develop a sense of what you think is good.

>>56835774
You think about what you like about the stories you enjoy, and you read feedback to stories (especially to your own). Over time you will develop a sense for what's popular and what isn't.

>>56835318
Scene by scene. It's a little tricky to explain, but because of the structure of the plot, one scene will be tense, while the next will be pretty campy.
It might need test readers to see whether it's jarring or a breath of fresh air.

>>56834259
Fricking sweet lois!
Now jokes aside, amazing. Ill be waiting patiently

>>56836673
If your own instincts are yelling at you to get beta readers then you really should look for them. Not sure where you'd look for them but the anons that have shared their emails in their fics might be a good start.

>>56808264
I've hit a wall... everything I write comes out tasting like raw flour. My prose is bland, the plot is contrived and every bit of dialogue feels forced. The moment I'm done with this contest entry I'm going to need like a year long hiatus for my other WIPs.

>>56837815
Hey, wait for the feedback at least. Maybe you're just being overly negative.

>>56837815
The other guy's right. Don't tear yourself down - let me do it.

Go on. Show me your harvest.

>>56837815
Rip off that bandaid anon, show us your work so we can roast you properly.

>>56838543
>Rip off that bandaid
I got the urge to do this with Matsuri and cleaning the blood off her wounds

>>56838671
Ugh... That just gave me the image of ripping off the bandage on her nipples to suckle blood from her tits.

>>56838671
You want to rip her nipples off? That's gross

>>56838366
>>56838420
>>56838543
It's incomplete, but even if I can't get it done for the contest I'll submit it eventually. Feel free to roast me when that time comes.

>>56722853
Does the contest end on Aug 25 midnight that day before the 26th?

>>56839377
The deadline for the contest will be August 25th, 23:59, UTC -12 time. So I believe in Tokyo for example, that would be August 26th 20:59.

>>56839663
I'm going to fly to Japan to get more time.

>>56839377
The contest ends when it's no longer August 25 Anywhere on Earth or midnight UTC-12 If you want to be boring about it.

>>56839663
oh based. that gives me a lot of time to finish. thank you. i dont know how i always seem to finish stuff exactly on time even when i plan to finish with three to five extra days

>>56839738
The clock is ticking… >>56814224

>>56839940
47 hours remain...

Reminder that whoever places dead last in the competition will be sacrificed.

>>56835774
Sometimes I get surprised and write something I think will be too boring but it turns out my audience was actually interested in it. The only way to know is to take the risk and show it. Even if it is boring, learn from it rather than hide from it. It's not a failure, it's a step to something better.

>>56840456
You know what the sweetest part is? When someone understands, or really analyzed a part you legitimately loved. It's like reading a passage of a book that seemed written exactly for you, but in reverse.

>>56840456
>>56841480
>>56835774

sometimes people even tease out stuff from something you wrote that you didn't realize.

it's worth saying that typically your perception of pace is going to be a lot slower than it actually is, until you have enough distance. i think the better you get, the shorter period you need not looking at what you wrote to be able to look at it with reasonably fresh eyes. but when you're starting out it really does take at least a day without looking at it to realize that what seemed awful and slow like plodding through the snow actually moves pretty fast. typically. some beginner writers really do get way too long-winded with description or exposition. but i have a feeling anyone in this writing general would be well past that level of beginner, even if they consider themselves a beginner writer.

>>56842969
Not pictured: Subaru (Getting rawdogged by me)

Oh boy vesper and magni graduated.
Its gonna be an entire month of zooming, keep an eye on the threads

>>56845720
Sheesh. Better be ready for page ten within 15 minutes.

Buckle up!
A storm of shitposting is ahead!

>>56845720
Took them long enough. Funnily there's a lot of cock obsessed esls in those threads.

>>56845844
i fucking hate the sea, if you catch my drift, cant stand the amount of water in it and the critters it brings
>>56846485
i feel bad for their fans. Must be really shitty knowing your oshi has one foot on the door and is pretty much bailing on you. Then again, those two werent holostars material and i dont meant that in a shitty way.
Vesper didnt like management and working with others and Magni was too restricted by perms and things he could talk and not talk about.

>>56847051
I wonder if they'll be persona non grata or not. Rip Pako man can't catch a break.

>>56847051
If anything, I only feel for Vesper. Dude was an inde with a blessing and now it's gone.
Magni on the other hand never gave a shit, he funneled his fans to his RM.

Welp looks like we need have something horny or interesting to talk about while the rest of the board is burning.
How about the topic from yesterday? What would the holoX bossfights be like?
Laplus seems like she's between two extremes either an overly chuuni multi-stage final boss fight with reality breaking down with each strike... or a complete joke fight where she calls time out after one punch because you hit her for real and it really hurts and she's going to tell on you to her mom.

>>56848143
I love making Wagahai as my character in games with character creation and the ability to have superpowers. She's just so great as a character.

>>56848143
It's a really epic bossfight, but once you overcome her and she reverts to her limited form you spank her like an insolent brat until she submits.

>>56837746
Nevermind, I figured out how to fix it. It's unconventional, but it works.
>>56837317
Please enjoy it when it comes out. I think you're in for some kino. It's been wildly fun writing it, and I hope my readers have the same fun I've had so far.

>>56848143
>chuuni boss fight with Laplus
>she's shooting energy beams and hurling destructo-discs and all sorts of weird magic shit
>you manage to close the distance and swing your sword
>it bounces off her head
>"You fool! I had my shields up!"
>"What?! No you didn't!"
>"Yuh-huh!"
>"Nuh-uh!"
>smash cut to you and Laplus arguing at the playground, the entire thing was just the two of you play-fighting at recess

>>56849041
Underutilized Laplus setting.

>>56848961
Anon... Please don't have them be imagine spots where you just imagine Selen performing absurdly dark femdom abuse rather than them happening "for real". As long as it's not that I think whatever solution to the tone problem you come up with will be satisfying.

>>56848143
I have a 10k word story written about a HoloX 1v5 just sitting in my WIP folder gathering dust. It's unrefined and only serves as the introduction to a much larger story, but I had a lot of fun writing it. Each member goes something like this:
>Lui
Whip user with the power of foresight that allows her to see 1-2 seconds into the future, which was inspired by her eyes sometimes turning yellow. She's also really strong physically, and has no trouble throwing you.
>Koyori
Incredibly weak in terms of durability and strength, but she stays away from the frontlines, bringing out gadgets (such as a fucking gun) and potions to disorient or hurt you from safety.
>Chloe
Can use invisibility magic to vanish and reappear in your blind spots to slash at you with her knives or throw them from afar. She's not very durable but being an assassin allows her to evade most attacks via stealth and agility.
>Iroha
Incredibly quick on her feet and even faster with her sword, Iroha focuses on pressuring you with flurries of attacks and has a crazy amount of stamina. In terms of sheer skill she's the best in the group, but can occasionally be a bit clumsy when dealing with unprecendented situations.
>Laplus
I made a bit of a strange decision with Laplus. I didn't make her as powerful as her lore might suggest, but around the same level as her subordinates. She's an incredibly powerful "mage" that can deal devastating damage with her spells from afar, but struggles in close quarter combat. She can put up shields to defend herself but Laplus herself is fragile.

>>56849041
>Laplus has out you in a most devious trap.
>An ocean of lava slowly eating away at the little ground of the island you're stuck on.
>"You won't get way with this Laplus I-"
>Lui opens the playroom door, she says the snacks are ready and the two of you should clean up.
>Smash cut to you surrounded by red Legos and Laplus raging that she just got them out.

>>56849272
Oh, it's all gonna be real. Perhaps a bit too real, that was the original problem. Don't worry about it, my fix only adds, not takes away from the original appeal.
It's hard to explain without spoiling, but this is going to be good. It doesn't affect any intended scenes, doesn't spoil the light hearted scenes or the dark hearted scenes, for which I'm glad because I enjoyed both shades.

>>56849812
>her eyes sometimes turning yellow
You're referring to what she calls Hawkeye Mode. We've never gotten info on what exactly it is. However, she said in her debut stream that she loves FPS games (although she plays them offstream). If this is the case, Hawkeye Mode most likely greatly increases her accuracy at bare minimum, thereby also increasing her aggression due to being able to confidently hit her mark.

>>56813222
For some reason last night I was fantasizing really hard about Shishiron being pinned to a bed by Lamy's baby bump that (You) put in her before realizing how that might not be a good idea.

>>56850612
Why wouldn't it be? Is this like a forced harem situation, an LGD thing, or a Shishiron has gotten cucked but still shares the same bed with Lamy sort of thing?

>>56850612
What's the not good idea, the baby bump giving or the pinning?

>>56849812
Shouldn't Laplus be the one to be able to see the future because, you know, Laplace's demon.

>Feel a bad cold coming on
>no brain power to write
Damn bros...not like this.

>>56849948
>barge into Laplus' throne room for the climactic final confrontation
>she sits upon her ornate throne at the top of the steps, looking down her nose at you
>"So, we meet at last. I've been expecting-"
>snap back to reality as the tower of chairs stacked on top of each other topples over and sends her tumbling to the floor

>>56850612
uh, anon, i don't think that baby can handle being in the literal middle of a cuckqueen dynamic.
Although, im not sure what would be hotter, botan worshipping lamy's baby bump, or constantly having it shoved into her face as a reminder that she doesnt have one herself?

>>56851090
NTA but I can kind of see it as taking inspiration from the holoX manga where Laplus could do a limited release of her shackles and loose out that demon thing. Maybe the full future-sight/prediction could be something like her real power with the "demon release" effectively just being her forcing out whatever power can get out of her shackles despite it straining her body.

>>56850047
Yeah, if I was adhereing strictly to what's most likely her 'canon' I'd have it as that, but she doesn't have any ranged weapons so it was a little hard to think of the possible uses for a hawkeye, even if it makes the most sense. If this were a modern setting she would absolutely be a sniper, but I have another reason for Lui having foresight. Perhaps I'll give her a bow in the future.
>>56851090
Yep, and guess what colour Laplus' eyes are?

>>56851210
Use this opportunity anon, take whatever wacky fever dream comes out and make that your last minute submission.

>>56839701
I'm going to take a trip to Kiribati to get the maximum possible time.

>>56851016
>>56851060
>>56851692
Actually yeah now that you point it out the potential fetal alcohol syndrome might be the least messed up thing about the scenario I'm envisioning lol. I guess that means I've gotta draw it

>>56852411
I'm almost 4k into my submission already though. I've wanted little Laplus chunni bonding as the positive male figure in her life, and dammit I'm gonna get it.
I also want Iroha in a tight one piece swimsuit at the beach, and dammit I'm getting that too.

>>56853226
Oh yeah. Forgot about that, the fic "Moonshine Blues" has just been lurking in my head for so long that I forgot that Lamy may hold back on drinking for the kids.

>>56853374
I like the sound of both of those things.

>>56853374
Tell me more about this I'm doing something similar with Laplus but not for the contest though.

>>56850020
Well I'm eagerly awaiting when this comes out of editing. I've been starved of femdom stuff and you're fic is sounding great.

>>56854022
The premise is that (You) are running a tiki bar in your grandpa's stead as he goes on an actual vacation. Lui shows up, exhausted and in need of a stiff drink. The girls she's raising as a foster are each a heap of trouble in their own way. Since this author cannot ignore a hag in need (You) aren't either, and offer to let them use the private beach your house is built on. You quickly get swept up in this crazy family's antics while trying your best to run the bar successfully for the summer season that you've been put in charge for, while also trying not to get busted for serving alcohol since you're not actually old enough to apply for your bartender's license. While they seem like a gigantic hot mess that borders on dangerous, getting to know them and just accepting them for who they are might just what they need. Maybe they're like the family you wish you got to have growing up, and maybe you'll get to kiss Iroha too.

>>56848143
>Lui
>Pilots a mech after stealing a forbidden power source to become the true leader of HoloX and attempts to rewrite reality

>>56856095
That sounds amazing, I can't wait for this.

>>56848143
>Laplus is actually a total pushover wimp but is the first one you fight because she knows what you've done to other chuubas and doesn't want you to hurt her friends

>>56853374
>I've wanted little Laplus chunni bond-
ohhh
>-ing
awww

>>56856943
Okay, I know you probably mean this in a "You killed them mercilessly" way but this just made me think of this in a h-game context and that makes Laplus like a horny brat that wants to get corrected before all of her friends.

>>56856943
>Will never go Super and have a climatic final battle with Laplus that feels a bit too easy

What does Lappy even want, aside from conquering the ass?

>>56857406
What the hell would Laplus chuuni bondage be like? Laplus giving out an extended chuuni monologue about how the evil demoness Laplus Darknesss has been captured by the hero, to be purified and filled by his "holy light"... Meanwhile you're just waiting for her to get tired of monologuing before actually starting.

>>56857406
Sorry bro, bondage is reserved for Lunahime.

>>56858255
You could make it an escape challenge where she monologues about how she will escape and how frightful her vengeance will be while freeing herself. Then you have a short playfight where you overpower her again and tie her up in another position, with additional humiliation and/or pain if you feel like it.

>>56858639
I'm going to lick her clit like a jollyrancher and NONE OF YOU can stop me

>>56858893
If that's what you wanna write, go for it bro. Do your best.

>>56859355
This Lamy looks like a NERD.

>>56859626
Lamy is a NERD

>>56859626
she's my NERD and she's gonna teach me to be better at magic, drinking, AND she's gonna help wrangle all my hags.

>>56860677
You think this めんどくさい女 is gonna help you wrangle anyone?

>>56860992
Out of jealousy she will. If she also wants to get her desired D and chest massages, she sure as hell will.

>>56860677
>>56861227
This NERD is also gonna be a RACIST, right?

>>56861510
Maybe a little light racism against some, and heavy racism against certain other pointy eared individuals. Whoever is hogging Anon's dong will probably get some choice words thrown at them whenever Lamy is feeling extra needy.

Anybody baking or should I?