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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.

previous thread:>>51272982

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Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em

>> No.51401424

https://archiveofourown.org/works/47751703
obligatory

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap! There... was one story posted in the last thread.

Mandarin:Tags: NSFW, Sara Nagare:>>51280693

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Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

My head swims with ideas of things in the vein of Corrupting Nene:>>51274749

queen of the jungle Botan finds a penis-shaped snake and starts fucking herself with it, but as she orgasms it bites into her cervix and in her sudden pain reflex she rips it out, prolapsing her entire womb:>>51276287

Not exactly a prompt, more of a personal challenge.:>>51284940

Pounding Azki's big fat ass:>>51286240

Mixing your cum in the cookies you bake and making a dumb chuuba eat it.:>>51291343

breaking coco into a submissive wife:>>51301867

you going around the world looking for kemonomimi chuubas trying to sex them all while doing David Attenborough like descriptions of them once you find them:>>51352569

Before the thread ends:>>51400703

>> No.51402549

>>51401424
https://archiveofourown.org/works/47751703
Thought provoking.
Truly an illustrative piece.

>> No.51407565

>>51401086
Feeling anonymous now?

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>> No.51408170

>>51407577
Ollie is the sexiest.

>> No.51408614
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>>51408170
If an undead zoomer is so sex, what hope do living breathing hags have?

>> No.51408767

>>51408614
For real. She even has a good head on her shoulders. I think she'd be a good girlfriend.

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>>51407577
>>51408614
Ollie gives me this weird sense of cognitive dissonance where I'm simultaneously attracted to and repulsed by her. Zombies have never been my thing, but she's just pretty enough to throw me off.

>> No.51410672

>>51376686
I thought i answered and turns out i never pressed enter.
Personally, i think you could actually make a decent story with JK Mio. You would rent her for compensated dating, and once you meet her...well turns out she didnt want to do this, she's always treated as ''the straight and narrow one'' in her friend group so she wanted to prove them wrong.
Basically, a kind of prequel where Mio learns how to be herself and to accept being Miso soup once she grows up

>> No.51411016

>>51410672
Then you take your revenge 15 years later in order to get your Hag Hunter powers back?

>> No.51411162

>>51411016
No. you reach Nirvana and realize that every zoomer can become a hag and that every hag was once a zoomer, and its a man's job to save every egg in this beatiful world
Sponsored by Shinzo Abe

>> No.51411595

>>51410533
She's really sexy to me. I'm not sure why.

>> No.51411857

>>51408170
Ollie genuinely would be an amazing girlfriend, she is fun to be around, smart, willing to do anything for you, quite horny, a hardcore otaku/vtuber simp so her hobbies would match 1:1. It's a shame the rm shit gave her such a bad rep. That girl deserves better, honestly. Like her content or hate it, she's a good girl.

>> No.51412041

What's the fic you want to see made the most and why?

>> No.51413930

>>51411857
I feel the same way about Ollie. She's a very very good girl and would be such a good girlfriend.

>> No.51414855

>>51321469
What author?

>> No.51415304

>>51408767
>She even has a good head on her shoulders
Most of the time, at least.

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>>51415304
That's just part and parcel of being a zombie

>> No.51415770

>>51415304
I didn't even realize the pun when I first made it. Love that Zombie though. Glad other people appreciate her too.

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Realistically, if you could meet a Holo in a bar or something where she was by herself, which Holos do you think you might have a chance of chatting up and potentially developing a relationship with?

I personally think I'd be able to give Ollie at least a bit of entertainment, given that she does seem pretty desperate for something. Maybe Marine, since she's so easy to talk to.

>> No.51416314

>>51416076
Marine would be fun, since I'm a bi golder htan her. I feel to old to be in this hobby but Marine makes me feel better about it.

>> No.51416692

>>51416076
I'd love to have a chat with Marine since we're both okatu millennials. But whether that can develop into a relationship is up in the air. I'm not exactly confident in my game and I have a feeling Marine would run laps around me if she wanted. I think Fauna would be fun and I can see her reciprocating although I don't get the gachikoi feeling with her.

Personally, I want to get white girl wasted with Nene

>> No.51418136

>>51416076
All of them. They'd be unable to resist my rugged good looks and bountiful charisma

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>>51416076
I'm an EOP, so that rules out the vast majority of the JPs. I want to say Lui, but she's gone on record that she isn't interested in love because she's afraid she might get hurt. Kiara is married to the idol life, so she's out. Reine is too gay. Calli might be down. Maybe Fauna or Risu. Maybe A-chan.
The one I'd really like isn't a holo.

>> No.51418618

>>51416076
I'd prolly chat any of them considering they're all stars, though I'd think twice before getting into a relationship with any of them since our lifestyles would be very different.

>> No.51418758

>>51418288
Your pic would maneat every single person in this thread.
>>51416076
After a lifetime of growing up with nerds, weirdos, and outcasts (love em all), I've become pretty good at making conversation with introverts.
Shy people with opinions are great conversational partners. I'd have to go Fauna

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>>51418758
Exactly. I'd love to spend the evening getting red-wine wasted with a lady my age and end up pinned to the bed.

>> No.51420625

>>51418758
> Chat with her for hours
> She seems incredibly friendly and nice
> Fauna has to leave
> Tell her that you're glad to have made a new friend and ask number to keep in contact
> She tells you that she's not your friend with a completely different tone of voice
> Refuses to elaborate and leaves
Idk, I wouldn't do it personally

>> No.51421374

>wake up with teary eyes after having super sweet dream about Nenechi
I didn't want to experience emotions this early in the morning. Maybe it's a sign I've been thinking about vtuber fan fiction too much... oh well, at least my oshi loves me enough to actually show up in my dreams.

>> No.51421434

>>51420625
Kek, poor saplings. That would actually kinda suck

>> No.51421719

>>51416076
Mumei seems like the type that you'd talk to for half an hour and then suddenly she says "oh I gtg my boyfriend is here"

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>>51421374

>> No.51422829

>>51418288
> Cause she might get hurt
Doesn't that make you want to try harder though?

>> No.51424423

>>51418288
I WILL save Lui from becoming a lonely old woman.

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>> No.51425481

Has there been a contest to determine what the best fics/projects of this thread have been yet?

>> No.51425538

>>51425481
There was some talk of joke "awards," but that's about it.

>> No.51425651

>>51425481
There was also talks about holding a fic writing contest but I'm pretty sure that's both waiting until LotB gets finished and someone actually steps up to run the contest and make up some rules.

>> No.51426477

Are there any cute of fluffy stories about Ollie?

>> No.51426741

>>51416076
My oshi doesn't drink.

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>> No.51427344

>>51425481
What, like a voting system? I don't really think that's necessary. If you like a story just let the thread know.

>> No.51427491

Has anyone used Shondo for a story before? Because I think I'm going to add her to one I've been working on. I love that little brat

>> No.51427620

>>51427491
Yeah course you are

>> No.51427937

>>51410672
When you put it like that, it makes me not want to do anything lewd with JK Mio at all. It just makes me want to be her friend for real and show her the joys of life and make her happy.

>> No.51428635

>>51427491
No one has so far

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>>51427937
unlike some old farts, im fascinated by zoomer's discovering things. they have that joyfull spark that makes me happy. Zoomer love!

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I would like to cuddle with this thing.

>> No.51429054

>>51428805
That thing sure is cute.

>> No.51429404

>Finish outline
>Finish rough first draft
>Finish first chapter
>Motivation goblin zaps away my enjoyment and inspiration
The cycle of pain.....

>> No.51429871

>>51425481
No, but you could make a poll like that if you want.

>> No.51430006

>>51429404
Fuck first drafts.
I want somebody else to finish them, I want to write rough drafts and only rough drafts.

>> No.51430771

>>51430006
I'd finish your drafts if you post them

>> No.51432225

>>51419895
I want to torture Nina (with consent)

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>>51419895
Yeah well too bad she's a JK now as well

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>>51433697
>JK Nina
Maximum wife material, all systems go.

>> No.51433938

>>51433697
Why must you take away everything I hold dear

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>>51433938
Because I can

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>>51429404
I got you bro. Get your motivation back.

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>>51433974
Uoh limits surpassed. Hold me back bros.
>loli nina fascinated by honey
I can't be restrained anymore. This lucky fox WILL BE doted on BY ME!

>> No.51434453

>>51401582
Solving the mystery of why all the hags are retroactively turning back into JKs.

>> No.51434573

>>51434453
>you have to impregnate the hags before they become too young to (safely) bear children

>> No.51435209

>>51434453
The Curious Case of Shishiro Botan

>> No.51435273

>>51434453
>anon is a hard boiled detective
>''im afraid i was too late''
>''anon can we go home? i need to do my science homework and then go for crepes!''
>''i need a drink..''

>> No.51435986

>>51434453
A little idol Sora sounds pretty cool. Imagine her trying to stay completely prim and proper while her audience continuously increases in the amount of hardcore lolicons lusting after her.

>> No.51436004

>>51433982
How does this increase motivation?

>> No.51436034

>>51436004
Well, revenge on her race for stealing your motivation

>> No.51437024

>>51436034
That makes sense.

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ZOOMER SEX

ZOOMER BREEDING

ZOOMER IMPREGNATION

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>>51438351
you're preaching to the choir

>> No.51438633

It's all zoomer and hag sex with you people. What about the cakes?

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>>51438633
Worst of both worlds, better to just let them ripen for a few more years. If you really can't wait, use condoms, no matter how much they beg

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>>51438847
This low level demon gets me acting up like you wouldn't believe. She needs correction.

>> No.51439390

>>51438847
Deniying both Choco and Marine the chance to breed, by fucking both younger and older girls

>> No.51440081

>>51401582
Tickling Luna's feet until she pisses herself.

>> No.51441100

>>51440081
Hot

>> No.51441780

>>51441100
About body temperature, at least.

>> No.51442815

>>51401424
>"You know, a snake is basically already a sausage."
I love this line, it's 100% pure Mumei.

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>when you spend 1-2 hours coming up with and writing the physical descriptions and names for your OCs
I suffer for my art, and my hags.

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Hows your latest WIP coming along?

Bonus: Have you ever done or tried anything in the name of research for a fic, or just to get a better understanding of something you wrote/read?

Still trudging along in Heartbreak Tokyo, and I've finally tried eel rolls today after writing the protagonist to really enjoy them. They're okay, though I now may have to include someone questioning his tastes if this is pretty much all he eats

>> No.51444683

>>51402065
Something similar to POLatio but with Mel and she needs cum to survive.

>> No.51444733

>>51444683
Meant for >>51401582

>> No.51444785

>>51444027
Nina sex

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>>51444027
Coming along. Might get done in the next couple of days.

Bonus: I've been more open about just going out and experiencing more things in nature; hikes, seeing different places, paying more attention to how things actually look and taking in the sensations. This goes for food too.

>> No.51445403

>>51444027
First chapter of the series is done. Now I need to work on the rest so I have something tangible to work with.

>Bonus
Oh boy, a lot.
>Gave my virginity to a hooker so I could describe sexual acts better for my smut
>Spent hours researching guns so I could write Botan as an autistic /k/ommando and make a whole scene about her getting mad at (you) for calling a magazine a clip
>I hold extensive knowledge on the mating process of different animals so I could play into the kemono aspect of certain chuubas
>Read about psychological archetypes to write better motivations behind my characters and accidentally underwent on a trip of introspection

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>>51445403
>I hold extensive knowledge on the mating process of different animals so I could play into the kemono aspect of certain chuubas
I...I kneel. Here I was just going to have their animal counterparts come out more personality wise during sex, and play with their various extra features accordingly, but you are taking it even further beyond.
I'm gonna use that part about fennec's trapping their partner for hours when the time comes though.

>> No.51446200

>>51445792
That is something that I toyed with. Basically, Anon and Polka are two teens in love, school teaches human sex ed, and a fennecs physiology is a mystery to Polka herself. So the two have their first time together, all goes as you expect, but Polka cums first and her vaginal muscles lock anon in place.
Thankfully she doesn't get pregnant, but in the future they play around it and set an hour of the day apart solely so Polka can milk him dry

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>>51442815
As a bonus, the pitcher plant thing is legit
https://www.sciencealert.com/where-does-a-shrew-do-a-poo-in-its-very-own-loo-of-course

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>>51446200
Not bad. The part about it being a mystery to her is a good angle I might use myself. Seeing as she's 1/4 fennec, she has no way of actually knowing what parts of her body inherited what. While I have you though, got anything spicy about sheep, wolves, or rabbits?

>> No.51446757

>>51445403
How was the sex?

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>> No.51447790

>Rabbits
They groom their partners as a form of bonding. After the act they tend to cuddle each other.
Some female rabbits like to play hard to get and ignore their partner at first, even if they're aching to get bred.
I read a long time ago on a lost source that certain rabbits feel depressed if they go unimpregnated for too long.
They don't carry their ovaries for days like women do, but instead release them the second they get a dick inside.
Some species can get ready for impregnation hours after giving birth
>Wolves
The concept of alpha male is a thing, and so is alpha female. The latter puts the rest of the pack in line so they won't take her prize just as much as the male
They bond a lot before mating, snuggling and touching each other or walk pressing against each other.
They have long attachment to their mates, but they will change partners if one dies
There is a lot of courtship involved too. It's not like the alpha just barks her to lay down and then fucks her, they play and bond together, there's scent marking, nibbling, meal sharing, all of that

Can't help you with the sheep though, apologies.

>>51446757
It was okay I guess. Was over quick and I just wrote down stuff I could use. I actually went back to the girl just to talk so she could give me references for smut.
a0p0s

>> No.51447934

>>51447790
mean also for>>51446526

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>>51447790
That bunny stuff might come in handy to know. Mostly the first half.
The wolf stuff is adorable and perfect for Mio too. This is good stuff anon. I hope I can incorporate this in a fun way when the time comes, thanks.

>> No.51448545

>>51448438
Anything that helps my fellow hagbros breed our beloved hags.

>> No.51449198

>>51448438
I want to fuck polka

It's a fact that during intercourse, fennecs get locked together in what we call the "copulation tie". The male penis gets locked inside the female fennec's vagina to secure a safe cum transfer. However, unlike most canids who only get locked in for a minute; fennecs can be locked for up to 2h45.

Just imagine getting to finally sheath your engorged penis inside Polka's tight pussy, only for her to suddenly clamp it down like a lobster holding a knife. Some would try to pull out and wrongly so, as their poor penis won't budge from the sheer strength of Polka's vaginal muscles.

Some other people would be turned on by that, thinking "I'm not locked in with her, she's locked in with me.... Right?". Turns out that while it may seem like an enjoyable moment for the first 20 minutes, they would quickly realize that the sexual drive of a horny Polka is a force to be reckoned with.

You'd try to pound her, play around with her large, perky breasts; but soon enough you'll feel your strength getting sucked away by the cum inquisition that is her vagina. You'll begin by trying to pull out, telling her "that's enough", but she won't have it; she'll keep going. She'll use the strength of her gigantic thighs to flip you on the ground; pulling extremely hard on your manhood and causing tremendous pain. She'll get in a cowgirl position and keep on ruthlessly draining your seeds while laughing maniacally.

After you've lost consciousness for the first time, she'll tell you that it's only been 30 minutes since you've just started. She'll bend you over and get you in doggy style position, almost ripping your dick off with how hard she'd be pulling on it. Then she'll use one of her trumpets to peg your defenseless behind.

Then, as you cry out in despair as your last bits of virility get stolen from your bum; she pickup jingly bells and clamp them on your erect nipples. The unfamiliar sensation will send your mind into havoc. She'll start squeezing your throat, cutting off any air from reaching your brain. You'll begin spasming as you barely hold onto life, while she enjoys your twitching cock pouring yet another serving of baby batter inside her womb.

But she'll keep on pounding, she'll bring up her fat polkass and smash it down on your crotch relentlessly, and your ribs will start to break. All of that, non-stop, for 2 hours and 45 minutes.

>> No.51450255

>>51449198
Why don't humans have that?

>> No.51450424

>>51448438
"Helping" Pekomama so she won't die of loneliness!

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>>51444027
So far so good on both counts. Right now I'm drafting a plot for the next arc of Sand Planet.

For my new story, I just finished chapter one. Since chapter one is going to be a strong hook with not much character work, I'm probably not releasing it until I finish three chapters. I know a complaint for Sand Planet was too much action and too little characterization so I'm going to make sure to properly balance it

Yes. I did a lot of looking up on ships and piracy for Sand Planet and right now I'm looking up proper spear technique and maintenance of pre-firearm military equipment. Also going for long walks in nature and reading a few things that are serving as inspiration for this new tale.

>> No.51453123

>>51444027
Gonna be slower release. I'm getting really burnt out.
Speaking of burnt out, to your other question:
Recently I played the lighter game with myself because I forgot my previous middle school high score and google was being stingy about providing the appropriate data.

>> No.51454478

>>51449198
Whose story did you copypaste this from?

>> No.51454561

>>51444027
Working, working, still working...

>> No.51454820

>>51454478
its a copy pasta.

>> No.51454832

>>51454478
I was looking for facts about fennec sex and found some copypasta thing about Polka (which isn't even that good) and just used that instead

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51455331

>>51444027
I was hoping to finish the second chapter to A Deal with the Devil before my trip, but I didn't quite make it in time, so progress will be way slower than it already is since I'll obviously be busy with other things. I'll try find some time to finish it when I've got nothing else to do, like on the train or something.
>Bonus
I had to research a lot about guns for one of my stories, but that may have backfired because I probably sounded like an amatuer trying to sound like a pro on firearms. I also did some surface level study on sexually transmitted diseases, just to make sure I had my facts about transmission right.

>> No.51455627
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>>51444027
I have been writing so much dialogue lately, so much. And it isn't brain off either. The story solely depends on the personality of the two characters and how they are interacting. It's been taking up so much time, and it is so much slower than just regular writing. It's not like it's boring or bad, it's just really difficult. Can't wait to get to the smut, so I can have a bit of a smoother sailing.

> Bonus
I sucked cock for a fic. For research.

>> No.51456469

>>51455627
Yeah, mi...wait

>> No.51456843

>>51447790
I will use this.

>> No.51456915

>>51455331
Where are you at? Changes in scenery usually help me get the creative juices flowing

>> No.51457434

>>51455627
>Bonus
In the unlikely scenario that that isn't a joke, I would very much like to know the fic it lead to.

>> No.51457888

>>51457434
Paradise Lost

>> No.51458047

>>51455331
>I had to research a lot about guns for one of my stories, but that may have backfired because I probably sounded like an amateur trying to sound like a pro on firearms.
If that was Holocalypse it was entirely fine, because when it comes to things like that people who do know will notice mistakes more often than you being out of your element.

>> No.51460841

>>51455627
>I sucked cock for a fic. For research.
Now that's dedication to the craft

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>>51444027
Slowly. I'm currently dealing with some absolute horseshit drama between two of my co-workers that's murdering my energy levels, and making me want to murder both of them.
Bonus: I climbed several dozen flights of stairs to better describe how you'd feel afterward.

>> No.51461339

>>51456915
I’m in Japan, visiting my family up in Hokkaido, which is the north island. I wonder if there’s any Towa merch I can buy when I get back to Tokyo.
>>51458047
I guess that’s true. It’s probably occurred in a few other stories of mine. Still, no more larping as a /k/fag for me, I don’t even have much hands on experience with guns to begin with.

>> No.51461625

>>51461339
Are you nihongo jouzu? What is the Japanese fan fiction community like?

>> No.51462546

>>51461625
I’m pretty nihingo jouzu in terms of speaking and listening, since that’s the only way I can communicate with my mother, but I’m pretty hopeless at reading and writing. I know maybe about <50 kanji.
>What is the Japanese fan fiction community like?
That is a good fucking question. I’m pretty sure there’s a lot of shipfags based on this oreapo fanfiction that Kamito read on stream, but I don’t know about hololive.
Maybe I’ll navigate the Japanese internet and look into it, or ask Reine.

>> No.51462776

>>51462546
>or ask Reine.
>>51401582
Reine asking (you) to write fanfiction of her fucking Kiara.

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>>51462546
>ask reine
I know she scrolls through a lot of fanfics, and it would be wild to think that she could someday stumble upon mine. She could fucking roast it to oblivion, but it would be king shit just to get noticed in that sphere.
>>51462776
Already planned my friend.

>> No.51463574

>>51463222
>The chance of a chuuba stumbling upon your fanfiction slim, but never 0
>The chance of a chuuba writing fanfiction is slim, but never 0

>> No.51463615

>>51462776
One of the many ideas I've played with but I'll never write was supposed to be a meta joke-ish fic where Anon gets abducted by Reine and she writes fan fiction about Anon aloud. Naturally, he has to do exactly what she says or she beats the shit out of him. Of course at some point Kiara would also end up in the dungeon and the two prisoners would have to do all of the disgusting things only an Indonesian peafowl could imagine people doing. Poor Anon would be beaten to death after failing to cum on command for the 7th time that session.

>> No.51463825

>>51462546
Hey can I stay at your mom's during my visit to Japan? Hotels are really expensive.

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>>51463574
I like those odds!
>Okay Reine, now all you have to do is read over 50 chapters until your character is introduced

>> No.51464887

>>51464579
I just imagined Reine writing feedback and accidentally letting you know a detail about her no one except her could possibly know.

>> No.51464892

>>51461339
>Still, no more larping as a /k/fag for me, I don’t even have much hands on experience with guns to begin with.
But wasn't your dad a soldier?

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>>51464887
We'll just have to see if the magical peafowl is /here/ by writing more stories about her. That and just wait until chapter 56 when my series finally includes her. I would be surprised if I got to her story by then...god there's so much to write.

>> No.51466270

>>51465248
You're Reine

>> No.51466449

Speaking of Reine, what's her personality like? I only know that she's a dyke and has connections to the Rothschilds.

>> No.51466665

>>51466449
You nailed it

>> No.51469567

>>51466665
I didn't know it was that easy.

>> No.51470943

>>51466449
>>51466665
>>51469567
Yall really think Reine sticks around in a thread with people saying shit like this? Lol

>> No.51471301

>>51470943
It's okay Reine

>> No.51473367 [SPOILER]  [DELETED] 
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I wish there was nearly as much knife ear bullying art as there is of goblin stuff. I want to see Flare in some unfortunate scenarios...

>> No.51475242

Might I ask if the series directory is sorted by date of entry? Haven't been here in a while and I was just looking for something to read.

>> No.51475930

>>51475242
Yes, the latest series' are down at the bottom of the list

>> No.51477513
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Kiara hatefuck is done, all it needs its editing and some good ol ''man what the fuck that dot shouldnt be there''.
Writing smut is kinda fun and has been an interesting experience

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>>51477513
>Kiara hatefuck
aw yiss

>> No.51477752

>>51477513
Is it your first time writing smut?

>> No.51478269

>>51477752
Yes. I wanted to try and expand my horizons a bit before i dive back in Lost and Found

>> No.51478922

>>51478269
Always good to branch out. Any lessons learned?

>> No.51480944

>>51477513
lets go

>> No.51481492
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51481492

Kronii: Kanatan. Coco's graduation is a canon event. You know I can't let you do this.

>> No.51482922

Jesus, HoloJourneys has actually tripled in chapters from what I last remember.

>> No.51483038

>>51482922
What's the word count up to now? Is it getting close to...THAT?

>> No.51483413
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51483413

>>51481492
So basically a fic where Kronii stops you or other chuubas from messing with the space-time continuum? I'm down for that.
>"So like, you wanna stop Rushia from graduating, anon?" Kronii asks with an air of amusement in her voice.
>"Yes," You respond immediately. "Please! I'm begging you!" You even fall to your knees in desperation.
>But The Warden of Time isn't impressed by such theatrics, and she crosses her arms over her chest with an eyeroll that could peel paint.
>"Rushia's graduation is a canon event," She explains flatly. "I really can't let you mess with that."
>You let out a long-suffering sigh - feeling like there might be no hope left for you now…
>"I'll do whatever you want Kronii!" You plead once more; hoping against hope that she might give in this time around. "Please, be reasonable!"
>"You be reasonable anon!" Kronii retorts sharply at your statement. "Time copping is my job - I can't just go letting anybody mess around with the space-time continuum willy-nilly!"
>You're starting to feel desperate now… like if you don't come up with something fast then all might truly be lost for you… and Rushia.
>"I'll give you all my money or give you beef jerky or whatever!" You start babbling frantically.
>But it's too late. Kronii has homed in on one particular detail…
>"Beef jerky?" she repeats curiously, giving you this expectant look.
>"Uh…yeah? Yeah, yeah, I can swing by a Trader Joe's or something…" You respond dubiously - wondering how exactly this will help your cause. "But really Kronii," you continue once more. "I'll do whatever--"
>"Get me the jerky first." Kronii interrupts again before silencing you with a finger on top of your lips. "Then we'll talk further. Okay?"

>> No.51483699

>>51483413
I had a similar idea but with Ame helping you and in the end the clock gets depowered and ends in an Aqua from Konosuba situation were she is forced to accompany you and Ame to get some semblance of divinity or control back or become a filthy peasant who would age and die normally. So she obliges.

>> No.51483825

>>51483038
Probably.

>> No.51483863

>>51483699
>Konosuba, but it's (You), Kronii, Ame, and a sexual deviant like Marine idk
Hey, that's an idea.

>> No.51484409

>>51483413
>Kronii carefully explains quantum time locks, parallel worlds, timeline culling, etc
>Ame: Oh so it's like a canon event!
>Kronii tries her best to not pop a gasket.

>> No.51484633

>>51481492
I know this is a spiderverse reference but this just makes me think of Mortal Kombat 11's arcade endings and what various chuubas would do after winning the fighting game tournament ladder and siezing kronii's clock to change the timeline.

>> No.51484670

>>51484409
Kronii:
>*Shoots Ame, dead*
>New Ame pops up from a time portal or something
>Turns out Ame has Kurumi's power from DaL so you can never truly kill her.

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51484891

Kobo is too cute for this world... Cuteness overload... I am dying...

>> No.51484902

>>51484891
We know, Kiara. We know.

>> No.51485056
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Foxbutt

>> No.51485461
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51485461

I am going insane.
> Google docs open for two hours
> Music playing
> Optimal time to write
> Brain decides now is best time to catch up with old correspondences and friends

No wonder I'm only writing 500 words a night.

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>>51484409
>"URRGGGGHHHHH stop it with the god damn Spiderman movie thing already - I haven't even watched it yet!"
>"One more spider-whatever reference and I swear I'll tear my hair out!"
>"UUUUUGGGHHH what the hell... God, just kill me already..."

>> No.51486630

>>51485461
Sounds like you need to make a new wip instead of working on your old fics anon.

>> No.51487937

>>51486630
But what if that's his only fic?

>> No.51488794

>>51485461
500 words is better than 0

>> No.51488849

>>51488794
>500 words is better than 0
Which is how much OP writes

>> No.51488911

>>51481492
>>51483413
>>51483699
>>51483863
>>51484409
>>51484633
>>51484670
>>51485776
>Spiderverse
>Holoverse
What's the plot?, who's Miles?, Also what are the alternate [INSERT HOLO AS MC] versions?

>> No.51489178

>>51488911
Kronii wakes up and sees the mess of timelines diverging from 'canon' and seeks to crash all of these timelines into one. Now a bunch of holos are fighting each other in a quest to get closer to kronii in order to steal her clock and have their timeline be the last one standing.

>> No.51489390

>>51489178
>The "Holomembers are VTubers" is just a bizarre timeline.
>The actual one is closer to HoloEarth but not quite
>There's an UOH timeline
>There's a HAG timeline

>> No.51489546

>>51488911
>The movie ends with Coco's death, and Rushia's existence being completely erased
>The third movie villains is the entire CN division alas sinister six who got erased before the first movie started by a similar catastrophe no one remembers and want revenge

>> No.51489812

>>51488911
>>51489178
>>51489390
>>51489546
>https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WtixlnxE8ZQ
Then, what fucking timeline is this?

>> No.51489872

>>51489812
This is my favourite timeline of that kind:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tCofEQupIh0

>> No.51490710

>>51489812
>>51489872
I love the future.

>> No.51491549

>>51490710
INTERNETO!
INTERNETO!
INTERNETO!

>> No.51491921

How many jojo references should your average fanfic contain

>> No.51491986

>>51491921
Between 3 and 15.

>> No.51492002

>>51401582
Miko awkwardly performing a striptease for (You) because she wants you to get an erection at the thought of her and she's fed up not being seen as sexy.

>> No.51492133

>>51401582
Misery (The book) but with Sora as the captor and you as the victim and somewhere in rural Japan.
Happens right after you go there for a leisure trip.

>> No.51493065

>>51492002
Nice!

>> No.51493100

>>51492133
What did you write that Sora needs you taken captive in order to finish it properly?

>> No.51493130

>>51478922
that pacing a sex scene is weird and that there's a severe lack of pussy eating in the archive

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>>51492002
>"I'm rock hard right now."
>"But I haven't started yet."
>"You heard what I said."

>> No.51493249

>>51493100
Probably:
>Convenience Store Trip
or
>A Long Night
Sora wants MORE.

>> No.51493322

>>51492002
>>51493195
fucking the everloving shit out of miko everyday but pretending you dont see her as sexy (despite dumping a truckload of cum in her everyday) so you can keep fucking her

>> No.51493365

>>51493195
If I'm already hard I'm still going to make her continue with the striptease. Her next goal would be making me leak precum from the tip of my dick.

>> No.51493518

>>51493195
>>51493365
>"Now look at me like I'm something you scraped off the bottom of your shoe."
>"Excuse me?"

>> No.51494301

>>51493195
I wanna cum inside her panties and force her to walk around with my semen sloshing about against her nethers

>> No.51494733

>>51493518
Is Miko saying the "excuse me" or is it you?

>> No.51494825

>>51494733
Miko

>> No.51494946

>>51494825
Ah. This isn't a path I was hoping it'd take as I wouldn't want Miko being more uncomfortable than she already is.

>> No.51495039

>>51493322
>literally breaking the bed and dragging her back to keep fucking her
>''yeah still cant''
>''dammit...I will try again tomorrow''

>> No.51495404

>>51483038
and what is THAT?

>> No.51496665

>>51495404
It's better if you don't know.

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>>51496665
well now I'm scared.

>> No.51499002

DO NOT BE AFRAID

>> No.51499288
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51499288

>>51499002
>Kanata trying to pull the Seraphim card after getting mogged by her coworkers

>> No.51500429

>>51477513
>Kiara hatefuck is done,

i NEED this

>> No.51500970

>>51492002
Miko recently talked about how she doesn't want to be seen as sexy, but she pushes for it because it is insulting as a woman for her to be called not sexy

>> No.51501553

>>51500970
>doesn't want to be seen as sexy
>doesn't want to be seen as not sexy
Women...

>> No.51501991

>>51501553
It's the curse of the women, isn't it? People will always make a big deal about their looks, so they have to try and be sexy even if they don't want to.

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>>51500970
>Miko trying to pull the reverse psychology trick
Not gonna fall for it

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51502532

>>51401582
Gal Polka cleaning up her act to ask (You) out on a date

>> No.51502666

>>51502532
This but you actually tell her you like her the way she is and that she doesn't need to change herself for you.

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>>51500970
I will fuck her while calling her unattractive just to spite her.

>> No.51502888

>>51501553
woman moment

>> No.51502967
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>>51401329
Balsa: Chapters One and Two

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSaTAY38ZnBqnL0pOx4MYElVxbnXV82flGuz8tw1uVnuFHhLSGsLE36a7GlUi7__MSYN8BJziD5k0aE/pub

tags: (you), Botan, Nene, Polka, medieval fantasy, adventure

>> No.51502982

Your favorite story WON'T update or get a sequel because the author was killed in an extremely horrific multicar pile up and you'll never know or receive closure

>> No.51503428

>>51502982
Joke's on you, I'm a ghostwriter.

>> No.51503434

>>51501553
Its like men who would like to be able to show their emotions but dont want to appear weak either.

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>>51502967
Not a bad start. I enjoyed the angle you took to get the Anon involved. The action scenes are quick and to the point, your poise for them is decent as well. One piece of feedback I got is that you should try to make the conversations a little more involved in terms of depicting expressions and mannerisms. Overall, the story seems interesting and you obviously got a bit cooking in the background in terms of the fantasy world elements you came up with.
>Another Botan story
It's really shaping up to be HER summer. Now I almost feel obligated to make some smut happen with her sooner rather than later.

>> No.51504119

>>51502967
I will read this based off of the name of the horse.

>> No.51504442

The Fly's on the telly.

>> No.51504821

The Fly is no longer on the telly.

>> No.51506391

Don't die damn it

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>>51401582
Lamy insists that she's not high-maintenance or difficult to deal with, so to prove a point (You), her bodyguard, and her switch roles for a day.

>> No.51507529

>>51507462
So you get to stream while she does bodyguard duty??

>> No.51507835

>>51507462
>switch roles
so what, she's the one raping me?

>> No.51509764

>eliminated from LotB
well, it was fun while it lasted

>> No.51509763
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51509763

>>51401329
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTakaj_DKx4iEizFMlTFoAjrpHOCLYP-fkLI_9r90Noq6qfBmvdE8uVD8fAbvDAIMzm_kZawLeIbbwH/pub

Ruffling some Feathers
TAGS: Takanashi Kiara, NSFW, Hatefucking, Oral Sex

This is my first smut, so i could use some pointers and all feedback is appreciated. I do admit, this isnt as heavy on the hatefuck angle, more like an ''annoyedfuck'' but it was really fun to write

>> No.51509941

>>51509763
Why are you African

>> No.51510083
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>>51509941
i just like how silly the word is, which is why i included the joke

>> No.51511587

>>51502967
Honestly it was a bit too frenetic. In like half an episode, Gaskier and Jeralt i mean Anon and botan meet, they travel and the plot goes off. I like what you write, you just need to work some details into it because it feels like a skyrim town, with just the ''quest line'' being told.
The dialogue is stilted and weird, characters are like NPCs with infodump dialogues and i have to say...did they even know what plasma was in the old timeS? i know its fiction but it struck me as weird
If you can iron those kinks out, you have good action scenes and a fun premise here

>> No.51511588

>>51510083
Ah okay.

Well it's pretty hot, especially for your first time writing smut. Though, your way of formatting really kinda fucks with the flow of the story I find. You also really need to work on your punctuation reps because dialogue especially almost never has any unless it's a question.

I also just noticed your quotation marks are all just double apostrophes dude what the fuck hit shift

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>>51511588
thanks a bunch. Punctuation keeps wrestling with me, guess its my fault for never paying attention in highschool. Now that i finally have some free time, im gonna try and read on some ways to improve my formatting
>Spoiler
Just like My oshi, im actually fucking braindead and i have no idea that was a thing

>> No.51512225

>>51509763
The banter thrown back and forth is great. I can't comment on the accuracy of the vocabulary chosen for Kiara, but nothing felt immersion breaking.
The scenes were great, I enjoyed the story a lot.
On the technical side, it could have used another pass for punctuation and grammar, and I noticed a tendency to mix up "in" and "on".

>> No.51512416

>>51504026
I'm glad to hear the action scenes are doing better. I've always struggled with those so it's good to hear.

>expressions and mannerisms

I'll dial it up a bit then. I'm going for a more cool and laid back Botan but it seems she is a bit too cool and laid back. I'll try to give her a bit more color next chapter.

Thank you. Glad you're enjoying it thusfar.

>>51504119
Lol. Thanks.

>>51511587
See this is why I said the witcher and its consequences have been a disaster for the human race. This isn't going to be a witcher story, I'm actually taking more influence from Claymore.

With the rest, i must respectfully disagree, especially since its only the very start. I have to lay a bit of groundwork so some exposition is necessary. It being like a "skyrim town" is silly.

I don't mean to rude, but I knew the moment I started this book someone was going to say "but witcher!" Not every monster slayer story is influenced by that. Again I apologize for coming at you but goodness gracious you can't write a fantasy story without someone accusing you of it being like witcher or LOTR or Skryim.

>> No.51512561

>>51512225
Thanks a bunch. Kiara here is a bit more foulmouthed because originally the prompt was born of her calling you ''little shit'' while you fuck her. I quite liked that so that was what i had in mind while writing.
It was very liberating to post this after so much problems, but i should have triple checked, but oh well

>> No.51512779

>>51512416
The witcher thing was a slight jab, but dont worry, i wont bring it up again. What i meant about the skyrim thing is that you laserfocused in the plot points and the lore, without really dressing up the town. As far as we know, the town where those two guys that showed up to do exposition and just bolted
Again, i dont think you did a bad job or that i disliked things here, i just think you focused a bit too much on the details and it came out as stilted, so i offer my apologies for the comparisons

>> No.51512846

>>51512023
>Just like My oshi, im actually fucking braindead and i have no idea that was a thing
H-How is that possible? Does your keyboard not have symbols?

>> No.51513076

>>51512846
he has mentioned being ESL so he might have a keyboard with an ñ...like me...

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51513924

An utterly uneventful and disappointing night has passed.

>> No.51515274

>>51446200
I need this.
>losing your v-card to each other with neither of you lasting very long, only to find out that somehow, you're now stuck inside Polka
>both of you freaking out because human biology never told you about this
>awkwardly fumbling for your phone on the nightstand while still stuck inside Polka
>looking your precarious situation up on google, fearing you'll have to call up an ambulance, or worse: your parents
>finding out about the 'mating bond' and that it means you actually satisfied your fennec girlfriend, feeling a bit of pride
>trying to console your distraught girlfriend, telling her that everything will be back to normal in an hour or two while stuck inside Polka
>kisses and cuddles to pass the time while stuck inside Polka
>all the while you brainstorm the possibilities for any future implementation of the fact that after sex, you'll always end up stuck inside Polka

>> No.51516735

>>51512416
I'd love it if I wrote a fantasy story and someone said it was like LotR...

>> No.51517088

>>51512846
as >>51513076 said, my keyboard has an ñ

>> No.51517715
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51517715

just a shower thought but do we have a fic with a disabled chuuba?
I think its an interesting avenue to explore, be it for fetish reasons or not

>> No.51517914

>>51517715
Does Mumei count as disabled?

>> No.51517953

>>51517715
There's the dementia fics and deaf Kanata fic but I don't think there's been any fics about a physical disability

>> No.51517954

>>51517914
why would she count?

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>>51517954

>> No.51518541

>>51518429
>Autism dog fixing the PC
now that's a good service if I've ever seen one.

>> No.51518633

>>51517953
hmm, might check that kanata fic later, i have a soft spot for ''people being deaf'' media
>>51518429
I have no idea what im looking at but congrats? or sorry that it happened

>> No.51518666

>>51518633
>I have no idea what im looking at but congrats? or sorry that it happened
A funny debut rrat.

>> No.51518783

>>51518633
While my guitar gently weeps is the name. It's short but pretty good.

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>>51512416
>I'm going for a more cool and laid back Botan but it seems she is a bit too cool and laid back
I feel like in that case you really want to showcase her mannerisms, things like relaxed shoulders, shrugs, unexcitable eyes. There's a lot you can craft to get laid back body language across. At least that's what I'm going for with my botan.
Also NTA but to your last point, I would be able to raise my head in pride to Todd Howard if someone said a part of my story reminded someone of Skyrim. It's not a jab or necessarily anything negative if your work reminds someone of something popular. Fans can tell the difference between inspiration and blatant plagiarism anyway, so keep moving forward with what your heart wants to create.

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>>51518429
I love the disabled mumei rrat.

>> No.51520828

>>51509764
FUCK. Ah well, we made it further than I thought we would.

>> No.51521036

>>51517715
We had a Mumei in a wheelchair story.

>> No.51521108

>>51509764
Aww, that sucks to hear. The fly's journey to impregnate every thread on the board has ended prematurely.

>> No.51521549

>>51509764
The time has come.
The /wg/ writing contest arc is approaching.

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51522275

>>51455331
glad to hear you're working on it anon, i'll be waiting for it

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51523455

>>51401582
Shion giving you CBT while mocking you for getting hard from it, and for the pathetic sounds of agony you're making.

>> No.51523647

>>51523455
>CBT
I know this is referring to the other kind of CBT but the image of crying and getting hard from Shion performing Therapy sounds hilarious.

>> No.51524845

>>51523647
She could combine both

>> No.51525246

>>51523455
the first CBT that came to my mind was Closed Beta Test dammit

>> No.51525623

>>51524845
That sounds like she's trying to cure you of your crippling hag addiction by doing CBT while showing you edited pornography.

>> No.51525667

>>51525246
>Closed Beta Test of Shion's pussy
Hot.

>> No.51525782

>>51525623
Pornography of herself

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51525807

Shion deserves correction more so than any other Holo.
https://files.catbox.moe/a6e4aj.mp4

>> No.51525960

>>51525782
not him, but it would be funny if she plays edited porn of herself interspliced with words like 'HOT' and 'SEXY' in an effort to brainwash you into thinking she's any of those two things
Plus points if she makes you drink a potion or inhale hallucinogenic gas that makes you more susceptible to her manipulation

>> No.51526061

>>51525807
Transcript for filthy EOPs:
> Eh~? You don't have any friends? How sad/poor you~ *laughs*

>> No.51526272

>>51525960
>009 Sound System Dreamscape plays while flashing images of Mio overlayed with 'OLD, GROSS, BUSTED' and pictures of Shion with 'YOUNG, CUTE, SEXY

>> No.51526508
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>>51509763
The setting is nice and your narrative voice is very entertaining. Your prose really does its job well at keeping the reader hooked.
The bits of back and forth between Wawa and you are very sweet, althought it scalated to sex rather quickly.
Me personally, I would've written something like "Jesus, get laid you stuck-up cunt. Oh, that's right, no guy can put up with your shit long enough for you to fuck them."
"You're telling me to get laid?" She smirked as her eyes closed. "The only women willing to fuck your micro-dick are the dollar whores you can pay."
And then it goes on from there.
The smut was on-fucking-point. You really made your descriptions work for you.
The Omake was fun as well.

Some sentences are weird. I recommend you read your writings aloud so you can hear what's right and what's not.
and the girth is intimidating for some girls (and you can quote them on that) The second and is a bit redundant.

Formatting could be better.
‘’I thought you were German, but you drink like a muslim’’ She flips the bird at you.
Since the line is (you)rs, Kiara's action should be a different paragraph.

Aside from that there's a few punctuation or grammatical errors.
Whenever you use i as in "I am" you have to capitalize it.
"you can help but have your heart skip a bit" is "Can't help it but have your heart skip a beat."
"You plant a kiss in her pubis" Pubes.
This is more of a nitpick but I would've broken up more the paragraphs.

I'm excited to see what else you'll write.
Buen trabajo mi negro.

>> No.51526781

>>51523455
I find it incredibly hot when women laugh at men for having boners.

>> No.51526791

>>51526508
NTA but isnt pubis the part where...you know...pubes grow?

>> No.51527145

>>51526791
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mons_pubis

>> No.51527984

>>51509763
man we really are lacking with Wawa romance fic. Good fic anon, though all the criticisms that I have has already been said by the anon above. Though I do wonder, would you continue this one or rather just leave it at that?

>> No.51527996

>>51526791
>>51527145
Hmm, I see. I just assumed it was a typo.

>> No.51528315

>>51527984 (me)
nevermind, there are a bunch of Wawa fic in the archive apparently. Though most of them are Yuri

>> No.51528328

>>51526272
>Sequence of images continues until the pattern is broken by a picture of Shion with everything but her armpits censored.
>Huh?
>"Whoops. Wasn't supposed to show that yet."

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>>51526508
Thanks a lot! it means a lot that you wrote such a detailed review, so again, thanks a lot. Also as other anons pointed out, pubis is the part where the hair that makes me really horny grows, but no worries.
>>51527984
I do plan on writing a second part, with a bit more bickering, a bit more romance and a whole lot of Anal sex
Its weird because im not THAT crazy for Anal but Kiara just activates that part of my brain

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51533028

>>51401582
As you walk out of your apartment, you hear something in the backyard and go to check.
instead, you find Tokino Sora, naked,pissing and indulging in her public indecency fetish

>> No.51533227

>>51533028
SORA NO THERE'S A GROUND WASP NEST OUT THERE

>> No.51533728

>>51533028
I often brush Sora off as boring with her old model, but looking at her new model with a cap and a jacket like this, man, it looks so freaking gorgeous

>> No.51535012

>>51530211
Adding that to the list of fics I'm waiting for

>> No.51535958

>>51519689
I'll need to watch a few more of her streams. I'm trying to strike a bit of a balance with her and influence from a character that is quite similar to her, just a lot less of a goofball.

Maybe I did take it too harsh. Obviously I'd never claim to write something wholly original, but I always fear people will look at my work and think "cheap knockoff" rather than a story that's just taken influence. Because this story is going to be pulling a lot of influence from a lot of stories I've recently consumed, it's a nagging fear in my mind people are going to think I'm just ripping it off, which I'm trying not to do.

>>51512779
Sorry I snapped. I think I just took it too personally. I get what you're saying, it's just my own hangups that are getting to me. The next chapter is going to be a lot more loose and self contained so it won't have that forced set up feel, at least hopefully it won't anyway.

>> No.51536048

>>51533028
Sora being lewd is one of the hottest things in the world to me. Imagining her being a secret pent-up pervert makes me cum buckets

>> No.51538548

>>51535958
Your next chapter should be called Blood of Elves.

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>>51533028
>Sora's lithe toned legs exposed to the world
mmm......

>> No.51541768

>>51538548
more like blood of a shit writer lmao

>> No.51541976

>>51541768
You’re not funny.

>> No.51542266

>>51533728
>>51536048
>>51541730
https://files.catbox.moe/tpw2j7.jpg
>Sora wearing only her hat and boots,walking around at night
>Pissing while standing, Squirting on the middle of the street, anything that gets her going
>once she has her fill, re-dresses herself and returns to normal Sora
btw i want to unironically fill her cap full of cum and watch her put it on her head

>> No.51542651

>>51541976
I laughed.

>> No.51543911

>>51461339
While you’re there, can you track down the girls and interview them on their thoughts about anal?

>> No.51544888

>>51502967
>>51509763
Two stories, seems like I'll have something to read in the afternoon tomorrow.

>> No.51545347

>>51509763
I will echo what other Anons said in that this needed a once over for editing. There’s a lot of grammatical errors like missing words, spaces, full stops and other things. I’d also recommend using more contractions. Instead of “you are”, I would use “you’re” and stuff more often. It sounds more natural.
Their hate for each other also felt a bit fabricated and unnatural at times. One second they’re chilling with each other drinking beers, then the next it’s:
>”Honestly what is your fucking problem?”
I think some more annoyance could have been built up before they started the deciding argument. The line:
>”Maybe i should rub my dick all over your face, maybe that will shut you up”
also felt like it came out of nowhere.
Besides those two criticisms though, I really enjoyed this. Their interactions were a blast to read 95% of the time. There’s something about the enemies to lovers (or at least bearable acquaintances) trope which is extremely appealing, and I don’t believe I’m alone in that opinion. The omake was also great, that and the McDonald’s scene were my two favourite scenes. I can’t comment on the sex because I don’t read a whole lot of smut, but it looked good.
Overall, a solid story, especially if it was your first time. Thank you for the meal.

>> No.51545806

>>51509763
After finishing a fic, take a one-day break and reread it to look for any errors.

>> No.51546786

>>51401582
Vesper and Bae have lovey dovey age difference sex

>> No.51547999

>>51502967
>Two chapters
Nice.

>> No.51548158

>>51509763
Not going to rag on you like the others. Just going to say that I'm glad that you wrote a Kiara fic.

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>>51509763
Wawa approved.

>> No.51548891

>>51544888
Don’t you mean three?

>> No.51549095

>>51509763
>isnt as heavy on the hatefuck angle, more like an ''annoyedfuck''
It don’t matter to me. It’s all the same. So don’t worry about it.

>> No.51549278

>>51509763
Wonder how many of the replies to this story are the same person.

>> No.51549559

>>51509941
>>51512225
>>51526508
>>51527984
>>51544888
>>51545347
>>51545806
>>51548158
>>51548764
>>51549095
>>51549278
All me

>> No.51549819

It was all me too, anons

>> No.51549908

All of those replies? Me.

>> No.51550184

>>51549559
>>51549819
>>51549908
Why?

>> No.51550254

>>51549559
>>51549819
>>51549908
>>51550184
Almost to 310! Go on, speed up!

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>>51550254
Can't even have fun anymore.

>> No.51550490

>>51550472
It’s a schizo. Just ignore him.

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>>51550472
Wow, I can do it too!

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>>51550472
You can have fun. Just ignore the retard that thinks every post is made by one guy. He gets extremely aggressive and pissy when things don't go his way. Fucking manchild if you ask me, since he does this shit whenever people are just having fun or being nice, but schizos are going to shizo.

>> No.51550686

>>51550532
Jesus, it's utterly pathetic how invisible he thinks he is. Let him keep talking to himself, everyone already knows it's him.

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51550709

>>51550254
>>51550472
>>51550532
>>51550686

>> No.51550713

>>51550532
>>51550686
You always do this, bro. Just stop.

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>>51550713
Try again schizo.

>> No.51550779

>>51550713
Stop embarrassing yourself.

>> No.51550789

Almost to 310, the shitposting will stop soon

>> No.51550800

>>51550789
You did start it.

>> No.51550808

>>51550789
Thread was alright before you went schizo, so I assume so.

>> No.51550811

>>51550800
No, you started it by making all the above posts

>> No.51550824

>>51550800
>>51550808
Why do you always do this.

>> No.51550862

>>51550824
I made one post which I showed here >>51550472 and you denied it and kept on being schizo.

>> No.51550878

>>51550862
Just stop schizo.

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51550883

I liked this iteration of /wg/. It even has a funny clown number to close the show

>> No.51550911

>>51550883
Personally, it stopped being funny a while back.

>> No.51550929

>>51550883
Not really. It's disgusting how little control we have over the thread. One dedicated little subhuman is doing the shitposting of a whole battalion of freelance hobby trolls.

>> No.51550984

Wait, guys, shut up. Something's different this time. There's still no new thread. Usually there's one up immediately.

>> No.51550992

>>51550984
Maybe the bot is broken?

>> No.51550998

>>51550984
Mommy must have called him away for dinner

>> No.51551008

>>51550984
Nah this has happened in the last threads too. The new thread posts popped up around 320 to 330 or so

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>>51550883
They've been doing this for months now, it stopped being funny a long time ago,

>> No.51551022

>>51551011
I think they’re trying to gaslight people, but that’s just my opinion.

>> No.51551052

>>51551011
That English is too good to be the subhuman shitposter.

>> No.51551095

>>51551011
They’ve been caught like three or four times already. Yet they still do it.

>> No.51551100

Ah, there it is.

>> No.51551121

>>51551100
Damn. I was halfway through making one.

>> No.51551144

I'm glad there's a bot that gathers all the stories, prompts etc. and puts them in the top posts of the next thread. I couldn't be arsed to do that.

>> No.51551148

New thread
>>51551031

>> No.51551151

>>51551052
Who knows. It’s been doing this shit for a while now.

>> No.51551152

>>51551121
If you try to make one, he just makes a new one anyway, sits in it and starts talking to himself and insulting the other thread.

>> No.51551164

>>51551152
So?

>> No.51551172

Threadly reminder that the shitposter will pretend to be anything just to mess up the thread and piss people off. White, black, SEA, JP-hater, JP-lover, EN-lover, EN-hater, it doesn't matter. They'll just say whatever the fuck they have to say to piss people off. And we have fallen for their tricks yet again. Bravo.

>> No.51551207

>>51551151
One of the key characteristics of the retard doing all the shitposting here is that his English frequently slips up, with rampant improper grammar and punctuation being the bigger giveaways.

>>51551164
So your thread will just be ignored because people flock to a more active thread and you alone can't outpace the posts of one guy, his bot and his fifteen smart fridges.

>> No.51551251

>>51551207
>One of the key characteristics of the retard doing all the shitposting here
Look, I just notice there’s always a retard that gets mad at the end of the thread and just goes ballistic and goes schizo. I don’t know if they’re the same or not. I just know it happens.

>> No.51551266

>>51551207
Continuing from this, it would take an organized effort and a thread-wide recognition of patterns in order ignore those threads, and I don't think /wg/ can do it.

You can start by ignoring any thread with the prompt and story recap, for a start. Those were input to incentivize people to move to his threads.

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51551283

>>51551251
Well, people just get mad over it. What are you gonna do but sit back and watch? Ain't nothin' we can do.

>> No.51551284

>>51551207
It's happened multiple times already. /wg/ isn't as full of sheep as you make it out to be. They just have to be sufficiently fed up with OP's shit.

>> No.51551332

>>51551284
Unfortunately, son, you're discounting the outflow of old blood, the infllux of new blood, the shift in priorities... /wg/ isn't full of sheep, but it's a sad fact that it does take the path of least resistance.

>> No.51551353

We should be arguing about this in the new thread. He gets ultra-mad and bitches about derailing when that happens.

>> No.51551389

>>51551172
Just report him or them. The last three days were peaceful because of that.

>> No.51551408

>>51551011
Shota writers onegai.

>> No.51551493

>>51551332
>it does take the path of least resistance.
This is the biggest barrier to any change in any format anywhere

>> No.51551502

>>51551389
But then they throw a huge bitchfit about how they aren’t the shitposters and it’s someone else.

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51551511

>>51551251
Strangely enough, it always begins the same. And accusation, then an argument and then, when they get push back or if people aren't buying it, they go to the next thread like >>51551389 is trying to suggest. They've been doing this since February of this year.

>>/vt/thread/S47657779#p47790663
>>/vt/thread/S42418775#p42547709

>> No.51551576

>>51551511
I remember that Conan thread. What a retarded affair.

>> No.51551585

>>51551511
>They've been doing this since February of this year.
They probably have been doing for a lot longer than that.

>> No.51551608

>>51551585
They've been doing it since 2021, except they used to use 2views back then

>> No.51551642

>>51551332
Yeah and you know what all it takes is one person to make a fucking stand and carve out a new path. I'm pretty sure the revolt that got us out of the literally who indie thread editions was caused by enough anons getting pissed off about the falseflagging and samefagging the old earlyfag made whenever they didn't get control of the OP.

>> No.51551693

>>51551511
>Strangely enough,
That’s not strange. That’s basic pattern recognition.

>> No.51551698

>>51551642
It actually takes a lot more than one person when you're up against one massive autist who samefags with remarkable grit. That's the singular compliment I can afford to him; he's got an iron will. Too bad he uses it to be a manchild.

>> No.51551711

>>51551576
I know it is, but I included it because that was the first time it happen and ever since then, all other similar events have started the same.

>> No.51551786

>>51551711
>the first time it happen
>all other similar events have started the same.

>> No.51551863

>>51551786
First time in that someone throws accusations at others, or blowing up about something inconsequential, people discussing or having a bit of fun and then try and shift the blame. The links shows all of it. That's why I think it's another schizo.

>> No.51551923

>>51551698
And yet on the rare occasions where someone has actually made an alternate new thread, the number of times it's been used in spite of that guy's sperging outnumbers the number of times it's been ignored. Endlessly talking to yourself can only go so far. And judging by the fact that samefag posts are starting to actually get deleted, we seem to have some sort of passing attention from one of the meidos, which is more than we had a year ago.
I choose to ignore any attempted demoralizing and maintain that /wg/ still has some fight in it.

>> No.51551948

>>51551923
Okay. Make a new thread, then.

>> No.51551958

>>51551863
>The links shows all of it. That's why I think it's another schizo.
The most likely answer so far.

>> No.51552001

>>51551863
Took me a sec to understand what you're trying to say. That behaviour is all characteristic of the same idiot that has been at it since after the nightmare threads; you can see myriad examples of it whenever his 2view threads were ignored. He'd get into the new thread and start spamming it up, constantly attempting to cause infighting and redirect blame onto others.
The lyrics are different, but the chorus is still very much the same. Why do you think this is a different schizo?

>> No.51552079

>>51552001
>Why do you think this is a different schizo?
His language skills mostly and some other things like this
>>/vt/thread/S41734084#p41739021

>> No.51552107

>>51552079
>Shits up a thread to possibly crest his own thread
That would be sad to be honest.

>> No.51552139

>>51551948
Okay.

>>51552084
>>51552084
>>51552084

>> No.51552171

>>51552139
I'm going to be doing everything I can to keep your thread alive short of replying to my own posts.

You're wrong, and /wg/ has no fight left. But I'd love for you to put me in my place, let me tell you.

>> No.51552185

>>51552079
Unrelated but
>fubuckold
Sounds like a title for a Fubuki fic where she gets cucked.

>> No.51552187

>>51552139
He was the shitposter then.

>> No.51552225

>>51552171
...is what I'd like to say, but it's already been deleted.

>> No.51552242

>>51552139
>deleted within seconds
Hm.

>> No.51552249

>>51552242
You think it really is a janny?

>> No.51552259

>>51552079
>one isolated thread means there's a new schizo in town
If it was a new schizo he would be trying every single thread.

>> No.51552275

>>51552249
That or someone in bed with one, so to speak.

>> No.51552284

>>51552275
Jesus Christ almighty.

>> No.51552291

>>51552249
Well it didn’t delete itself. And that response time is unprecedented.

>> No.51552293

>>51552259
>If it was a new schizo he would be trying every single thread.
I mean, this is his fourth time shitting up the thread with the same pattern, and second attmept at making a thread? Like I said, I think it's a new schizo, but I could be wrong. But this shit is getting way too common and obvious at this point.

>> No.51552338

>>51552293
I think it's the same guy trying to throw shade and discredit accusations or complaints about him. Easy way to shift attention away from yourself is to make the people angrier at something else.

>> No.51552399

>>51552338
Yeah, so the shitposter is a janny or someone close to one who also falseflags. Wow.

>> No.51552464

>>51552338
Not denying that possibility, but there's always a chance of another schizo just lurking and stirring up shit for shits and giggles. And I want to keep that open in the off chance of it being real.

>> No.51552647

>>51552338
>>51552464
The actual thought of this being a new schizo wouldn’t surprise me. There’s plenty of schizos in /wg/. One that acts like a sanctimonious ass wouldn’t that weird.

>> No.51552693

Wait, who are we accusing, again?

>> No.51552806

>>51552693
OP of shitposting.

>> No.51552818

>>51552806
Pekofag?

>> No.51552825

>>51552693
I think it's either accusing the new thread or the new thread that got deleted as being made by the schizo/earlyfag.

>> No.51552835

>>51552818
Yeah, it's probably Pekofag behind it all.

>> No.51552864

>>51552825
The thread that got deleted was made by a resistance fighter and a patriot. This thread >>51551148 was made by a shitposter.

>> No.51552990

>>51552825
>the new thread that got deleted
That one was me. I was asked to make one, so I did. Threadshitting wasn't my intention. I apologize for any misconceptions.

>> No.51553729

I don't see a good reason to make a new thread when a one with proper formatting already exists.
Anything from "I don't like the edition/images" to "The person making the threads is surely the evil shitposter" is just an invitation for further arguments and sperging. Just use the thread that exists.

>> No.51553803

>>51553729
>The person making the threads is surely the evil shitposter
This is enough reason.

>> No.51553837

>>51553803
If you had actual proof, maybe. Speculating about who is who on 4chan is usually worthless

>> No.51553868

>>51553837
2 years of rampant shitposting is good enough proof.

>> No.51553987

>>51553837
Not really. Having no names doesn't make people invisible. If someone behaves the same way for a long enough time, people catch on to their identity. It's just pattern recognition.

>> No.51554070

>>51553987
That's why I said usually - in this case it's about who is making the threads though, and I've never seen an argument about that which went beyond speculation. At least since the whole 2view-OP-drama ended.

>> No.51554235

>>51554070
It's the same guy just using hololive pictures now.

>> No.51554288

>>51554235
Where's the pattern that proves this?

>> No.51554330

>>51554288
The behaviour has been literally no different?

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