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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.

previous thread:>>48625251

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Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap! There... was one story posted in the last thread.

HoloJourneys: (Across Deserts to the Oceans Blue, A Shining Star Debuts) Chapter 28: A Day Softer Than Cotton: tags: Watame, Flare, Polka, Nene, Pomu, Lui, SFW, Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Fluff:>>48701850

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Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

American Psycho but Patrick Bateman is Suisei.:>>48630574

(You) confess to Foobs but she insists on remaining friends, soon after you meet Suisei and hit it off rather well. Feeling unpleasant emotions welling up inside her, can Foobs get you back and will Suisei even allow something like that?:>>48641843

Kobo hits the Yoinky Sploinky:>>48655952

Setting is feudal Japan. After your older brother Ping Pong was poisoned by (probably) an enemy, you are now the clan leader, your clan of course is small with little influence. In order to not get wiped out, you will need to either defeat similarly small clans or form political marriages to increase your influence. Polygamy is not unusual and neighboring clan heads are somehow all beautiful girls that can either be seduced by Anon's chiseled body oozing masculinity or be conquered and forcefully taken.:>>48663030

Your kouhai Zeta catches you doing something gross. She has evidence and uses it to blackmail you. She makes you do more and more embarrassing, degenerate things. She trains you do be the perfect masochistic pig slave.:>>48672153

Explaining to Ollie that, yes, they're that big.:>>48682784

I want to see an ordinarily perfectly straight-laced and stable chuuba slowly derail into madness. I want to see of it affects their work, their life, their relationships.:>>48685214

Shion getting raped but in like a fantasy setting.:>>48695983

one of the more menhera chuubas suspects that you might be having an affair and she is furious,just who do (You) think you are? She will make sure you know to whom you belong.:>>48703138

Hololive Council but instead of them being the wardens of aspects of the universe they're your trashy British renters.:>>48712250

a story where after many years of being married to suisei, you two grow distant, with signs of her having an affair. Your suspicions are eating away at you, but you are hesitant to confirm them, after all, if you turn out to be right, this marriage that you spent your best years on will be over.:>>48742944

Who would do this to Aqua?:>>48748818

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All right, anons, let's do this again! It might be fun to have a 'word of the thread', so we'll give you guys a few words that you could use as inspiration. Use them however you like - in a poem, a greentext, some flash fiction, or even a limerick if that's your jam.
Just remember not to make prompts! We've got a Prompt Anchor >>48762388 for that already.

The word of the thread this time is "magical".
Alternatives are "five" and "bone".

Use them as inspiration or ignore them completely; it's totally up to you. Just keep in mind that using these words could help other anons compare and contrast different interpretations and discuss works with each other. Reply directly to this post if you came up with a poem or greentext or some other short literary piece; for anything longer than that, please use the Story Anchor here >>48762362.
So yeah, go wild! And don't forget - be respectful and have a good time.

>> No.48763044

>>48762388
By some minor miracle (You) have a found a genuine working hypnosis app. So like any good shiokko you immediately use it to try and rape Shion. Unfortunately Aqua catches you in the middle of your rape, but thankfully you're fast enough to hypnotize her too. Then Subaru shows up, then Choco, then Ayame. Before you know it you've got the entire gen hypnotized. What are you to do?
Concept from a dropped wip.

>> No.48764440

>>48762351
Good to see idols establishing dominance over one another.

>> No.48764525

>>48763044
>What are you to do?
Make them collab and set up a Gen 2 concert

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So what fics have you been reading anons?
I've been reading through cover high, the writer saying he's writing the finale to it has gotten me to actually read it for the first time and I'm liking it so far.

>> No.48766071

>>48766038
I'll give HoloJourneys a read this weekend. I looked at the synop in the guy's main page and, based on what I understand of it so far, I kinda like the 'having a relaxed trip with hags' schtick

>> No.48766114

>>48766038
Chipping away at the last part of HF chapter 6. I’ve got a bit of catching up to do.

>> No.48767270 [DELETED] 

Bump.

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>>48752674
Thanks for the review! The part with Sana is going to make me chuckle like an idiot since I know what's coming later. I actually had to take a few time to think about just how big the coin purse would be by now, since I never gave it actual numbers before, or put a lot of clear value on what anything costs in this world. I should probably make a sheet or something so I don't forget later and have things to compare with. It won't be super prevalent, but I want to write more one on one dates, one with a specific half-elf you might be yearning for. That will kick the crap out of the wallet to be sure. There also might be a tiny insight to Lui's true intentions soon.I'm glad you enjoyed the read and that it might have helped you get ready for sleep. Nothing quite matches up to a relaxing story you can scroll through as you wind down for sleep. I did that with First Summer Memories a few times when I was first reading it.

>> No.48768041

Whats the best smutfic in the archive?

>> No.48768094

>>48768041
Depends on your preferences, I think. They're more about catering to those than about literary value or authorial craftsmanship.

>> No.48768099

>>48768041
Paradise lost

>> No.48768374

>>48768041
Subjective and based entirely on what you want

>> No.48768388

>>48768094
Vanilla

>> No.48768506

>>48768388
If you don't mind oyakodon, the Fox Family fics contain the best vanilla sex (among others) in my opinion.

>> No.48769106

>>48768099
Nope, Paradise regained.

>> No.48769916

>>48768388
Oh that's easy. Festival of sensations. It's a two parter with just enough plot to enhance the smut while also having some excellent smut in and of itself.

>> No.48770642

>>48762388
Aqua literally living in the walls and floorboards of other holos. Can turn this into horror, yuri, whatever floats your boat. Inspired by minecraft arc

>> No.48772038

>>48770642
Would it be likely Aqua was just living in someone's walls to avoid contact with anyone?

>> No.48772113

>>48772038
could also be extreme stalking

>> No.48772365

>>48772113
I'm not versed enough on the clumsy onion. Does she have stalker tendencies? Towards who?

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>>48766038
I think I might do a re-read of HF soon to help get myself a little familiar with some certain characterizations. I also want to check out some of the Botan centric fics we got in the archive as well. If anyone has any suggestions on where to start with the la lion, I'd be happy to hear them.

>> No.48772740

>>48772365
okayu and shion mostly
most recent >clip of aqua being schizo https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SuxKaYezMSc
the whole underground empire thing both from now and 2 years ago had her making secret entrances to other member's homes

>> No.48773980

>>48772596
Only read fics that have Botan acting as a sub.

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>>48773980
She's definitely gonna be a sub / power bottom, but I'm looking for more things interaction wise with her. I know she's kinda aloof in a sense and just enjoying the ride with her company, but that's about as far as I am so far.

>> No.48774544

>>48772596
Her two series fics that I'd recommend are holocalypse and the hormoning both of them feature Botan pretty heavily.

>> No.48774920

>>48772596
Which characters?

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>>48774544
I remember a fair bit of holocalypse and liked what I read of everyone in it. I haven't read the hormoning yet, so maybe I'll do that next. Thanks.
>>48774920
Two hags. Wonderful, breedable hags.

>> No.48776107

>>48762388
Anon is a space miner and he stumbles upon a relic of a lost civilization: a fully concious and sentient AI that is effectively a new lifeform. AZKI, as it called, takes residence on his ship

>> No.48777043

>>48762388
a bratty space alien/demon lord appears before you, promising you unfathomable riches and power if you swear your fealty to her. You oblige and after weeks of freeloading in your apartment she still hasn't shown you anything she promised. Will you throw her out despite her begging or will you make her pay rent, one way or another.

>> No.48778729

>>48777043
I will remind her of her obligations as my liege and threaten to revolt if she does not make good on her promises.

>> No.48781256

>>48766038
I've never read a fic

>> No.48783690

>>48766038
I've still got 10 chapters of HJ to catch up on plus the 2 most recent chapters of Cover High

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Why is Aqua such a pitiful creature?

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>>48785439
Because she's a beta female with no confidence.

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>>48785780
How do we fix it (her)?

>> No.48786378

>>48785954
>get her to practice good self care: cook for herself, clean herself daily, exercise at least bi-daily
>engage in moderate social activity be it online or in person, form meaningful connections with others and become a person they can count on and turn to for advice or help
>have a stable job: this one is done I guess, just keep the akusupas coming in, get more merch made of yoursefl (aqua has a stupid amount of merch in all the sectors)
>approach males out in the wild and strike a conversation; The worst they can say is no (inb4: ew)
>oh, and stop hanging out with other girls who want to molest her

>> No.48786498

>>48785954
Can't be fixed.

>> No.48786518

>>48786378
The first thing that came to mind was body swapping with her, calling senchou over and having hot lesbian sex with her. Somehow, that's what my brain thinks would fix her.

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>>48786518
Anon....what? How would that fix her? She would then be stuck in your male body. She would probably give herself a heart attack over having a penis. Also do you think Marine would not think somethings up?

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>>48786637
Her finding herself in another country, in a male body, having to figure things out for herself when everyone speaks a different language? Let it happen for a couple of days while I have sex with all the Holomem in her body, so that she can't just hide in a corner and wait it out. Her introvertedness would be fixed. Then unswap after that week or two and she can deal with all the Holomem turning to her for intimacy. Also, I can speak just about enough Japanese to fool Marine long enough to start kissing her and not letting go. Realistically, my plan would most likely end as soon as we swap and her phone/PC have passwords on them. I'd be stuck in the same situation as Aqua

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>>48786637
If Aqua called YOU over for sex would you say no?

Yeah didn't think so

>> No.48787290

>>48768041
The one where Irys and Mori fuck the shit out of Bae.

>> No.48787500

>>48786892
I'd be skeptical and possibly not in the mood to bone a girl who will just lay on the bed like a dead fish. If you're gonna call ME for sex, you gotta make it worth my while.

>> No.48787937

>>48787500
Yeah but she has a nice rack so you could just titfuck her until your balls dry up.

>> No.48788072

>>48786637
>>48786862
its not like impersonating aqua is hard
>eeeeee *slurp* eeeee
>*hide behind something*
>kyaaa akutan kawaiii''

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>>48787500
>Not pronebone'ing Aquas fat retard maid dumpy

>> No.48788992

>>48787500
>I'd be skeptical and possibly not in the mood to bone a girl who will just lay on the bed like a dead fish.
Dead fish are made for restrictive bed bondage

>> No.48789127

>>48788072
> Grab phone
> Look for Senchou contact
> Senchou... Atashi no ie kiteka? Onegai? Anata no hoshii...
> Senchou will be confused, unsure if Aqua is lonely and needing a shoulder to cry on, but also suspicious about the sexual undertones
> Continue being vague on text until she accepts to come over
> Take a shower, put on whatever sexy lingerie Aqua has
> Unlock door, sit by bed and wait
> Marine arrives
> Asks what's up
> Pat the bed, calling her over meekly
> Marine sits down and starts speaking more Japanese than I can understand
> Kiss her
> Aqua?!!.jpg
> Continue kissing her, pushing her down onto the bed, using my minimal Japanese skills to flirt

At this point, I don't know if Marine would push Aqua off, or let it happen

>> No.48792096

>>48788197
This

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>> No.48798814

>>48795815
My hand

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Why is Bae like this?

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Fellas, is body swapping gay or not?

>> No.48799885

>>48799712
It shouldn't matter to you, you're a faggot regardless

>> No.48799886

>>48799712
Since there's only biological sex, a man that was heterosexual would be gay in the body of a woman.

>> No.48801102

>>48799712
Yea
Sorry anon, but I diagnowe you with terminal gay

>> No.48803237

>>48799712
No

>> No.48804832

Mythbreakers is over...I need to write something about them.

>> No.48807048

>>48804832
Pretty realistic depiction of a ttrpg

>> No.48808271

>>48777043
The AI turns out to be weirdly good at navigation and cooking.

>> No.48808359

>>48808271
Fuck, meant for >>48776107

>> No.48808986

>>48799885
>>48799886
>>48801102
So if you were forcibly body swapped with your oshi for life, you'd never have a relationship again?

>> No.48809123

>>48808986
You're never going to have a relationship anyway

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>>48762388
Injecting an excess of cream into Scarle's donut

>> No.48810391

Is Dense Treasure still being worked on? I like it.

>> No.48811714

>>48810391
Author actually came back the last time that fic was brought up >>47871664 apparently they did try to write more but couldn't really think of anymore scenes.

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>>48808986
If I was forcibly swapped with my oshi I would sign up for a gym membership that very same day.

Actual permanent body swap sounds horrible though.

>> No.48812680

>>48812333
If it happened kind of like Your Name except none of the time shenanigans, you spend one day in your body and the next in hers. Would it be easier? Also, if you weren't forced, you could swap with her anytime you want once a week, would you? For what?

>> No.48813254

>>48810391
Nah, I had a sequel in mind but ended up dropping it. I could definitely squeeze a few more jokes out of the concept if I tried, but nothing was coming to mind at the time.

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>>48812333
>Actual permanent body swap sounds horrible though.
Yes, it would be. I suggest you read 'Inside Mari' if you wanna see its full extent and then some

>> No.48814955

>>48813914
I've read two manga that deal with horrors of it.
One is where this young boy gets genderswapped to a girl because he bullied girls and he has a hard time growing up like that
Another is where a boy and a gitl get bodyswapped young and learn to accept it but are never really the same, and both of them are kinda grim and depressed.
Reminds me of isekai. In isekai, plots that have their MC suffer in new circumstances are always better than those that have their MC's life improve markedly.

>> No.48815105

>>48814955
Oooh, mind telling me the titles, anon? All of these could be good fodder for a depressing chuuba bodyswap fic

>> No.48815235

>>48812680
I mean, yeah that would be more convenient but I'd still have to end up coming to some arrangement with her.
And I'd have to be professional and respectable, since whatever I do to her she can also do to me.
That makes for a boring plot though, so anyone pondering a bodyswap fic should opt for two characters with somewhat unconventional circumstances/goals, rather than just two average joes

>> No.48815797

>>48815235
Ayame and Ina forced to bodyswap.

>> No.48816671

>>48815797
>The only cure is for (You) to have sex with one of them.
>Ayame in tears as she holds and pats your head
>She's crying because either way you're going to have sex with a Korean.

>> No.48817306

>>48815105
>Until I Become Me
Is the gender bender. Apparently it recently got serialized.
>Shishunki Bitter Change
Is the body swap and god is it bitter

I don't read too much gender bender now cause it's kinda become gay and fetishistic, with the people adapting too quickly to their bodies and enjoying it, but those are two good ones

>> No.48817630

>>48813254
That's okay. I really enjoyed what's there anyway, really helps cut the working day down a bit. Kinda feel like I got blue balls at the end though kek.

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>>48817630
Gracias for reading.

>> No.48820452

More Niji drama just dropped so expect things to speed up.

>> No.48820986

>>48817306
Thanks, anon! I'll give these a read this weekend.

>> No.48823614

>10 in 30
jesas

>> No.48823721

>>48823614
Now might be a good time to go work on your story if you’ve got one. This could be awhile.

>> No.48824096

>>48762388
Your chuuba wife asking you to do her friend a favor and give her a baby with your super powerful sperm.

>> No.48825225

I'm curious did the guy working on that Path of Exile Zaion fic ever come back?

>> No.48826348

>>48762388
Bae and her Towanee-sama get steamy

>> No.48826491

>>48812333

I wouldn't be very well off if I swapped bodies with mine. I'd have to get used to life with a body destroying itself.

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>>48762388
Moving like the wind itself, a kunoichi zombie sneaks into your bedroom to drain your semen

>> No.48827874

>>48808986
I don't see why that would be. I would still try for a relationship, I'd just be a lesbian and spend a lot of time in onsens.

>> No.48827945

>>48827874
Well, that would still be...gay

>> No.48829390

>>48827945
I'd be a lesbian, yeah. I'd have to deal with it and take my chances.

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>>48762362
Rushia the Second
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vR0JD8tLtd9XTVvUQu3VQmtwQSYa1qMzZztEoAoC3ZHUI-OXnuRpYBf70ckQsp_erYavkQeK6IuGMzH/pub
Tags: Rushia, NSFW, /become/, abuse, corruption

>> No.48829916

>>48829581
Wait a minute, is this that fic where you get some random girl off the street and turn her into the next Rushia?!
yoooooooooooooo

>> No.48831438

>>48826666
Checked

>> No.48832515

>>48829581
It's decently well written but it kind has one big flaw that kind of undercuts the entire thing. The inconsistent pov.
I know it had to use the thread standard of second person limited for the first scene in order to set expectations but it really should have either switched to third person limited (Rushia's) pov or have bit the bullet and fully made the story from that point on about (You)r pov even as you start doing bad shit. As it is the metaphorical camera feels like it wants to be from "Rushia"s pov but is stuck with having to badly describe it from yours.

>> No.48832613

>>48829581
Oh Jesus Christ I'm sorry, I saw your email when I was half awake and forgot to respond. It's a little late now but the smut is totally fine in hindsight - or maybe you rewrote it, I read it when I was exhausted and may have misread some stuff. I just may have made it grosser to capitalize on the rape.
It's still a little spotty in the punctuation department. Missing commas and the like during dialogue.
>"An example," he went on to explain. "Would look something like that. See the comma at the end when you're breaking a sentence up? There's lots of times where it's unused in the dialogue and it can be jarring to see the mistake."

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>> No.48835499

>>48826348
This but it's about Bae and Towa getting locked in a steam bathhouse and trying to get out.

>> No.48836883

>>48820452
Again?

>> No.48837367

>>48836883
Again. Zaion released her manifesto so the sisters are having a field day with it.
Having read it, holy shit do I feel bad for her.

>> No.48838056

>>48837367
Not him, but what made it all the more poignant was how she referred to Zaion in the third person. Like she's talking about a dear friend that she lost. That's how it comes off to me, at least

>> No.48838205

The body swap discussion made me remember the last time we talked about body swapping sex with Fubuki >>27399612

>> No.48839077

>>48837367
Yeah, shit sucks. At least I get to laugh at dumb nijifags again.

>> No.48840234
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>>48832515
Really? My original plan was always for it's to be entirely 2nd person from (You)r perspective. But I was quite afraid that the flashback scene would be too awkward without justifying it. Then I noticed "Rushia" could be having a literal flashback so I kinda winged it and wrote the scene from her POV.
>>48832613
I did slap on some more sentences and reworded others but couldn't really change majority of it. But thanks for beta-reading and the advices anyway. It was my first fic so I have zero idea what was doing half of the time and had very little faith. Your comments really helped me.

>> No.48840999

>>48840234
The problem with the flashback is that it seems to want to be written from Rushia's pov but didn't actually take the plunge and actually switch to her pov; instead it goes for a weird in-between where the 'camera' narrates from Rushia's pov but still keeps the perspective as if it were from (You)rs. It kind of makes the rest of the fic weird since the 'camera' never really seems to go back to yours since the narration seems like it's coming out of what she's feeling rather than what you feel.
As for the smut, again the weird pov kind of fucked with it. I can give it a quick skim again without prior context but as I was reading it the eroticism never really managed to out do the feeling of horror that the fic was also going for.

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>>48823614
It happened again. Seriously, what is going on with /vt/? We need like 20 pages instead of 10.

>> No.48845982

>>48845587
No we don't.

>> No.48847314

>>48840999
So you're saying I should just ditch the (you) pronoun and go for "he"?
>the 'camera' never really seems to go back to yours since the narration seems like it's coming out of what she's feeling rather than what you feel
kinda don't get what you're mean. Other than the "dread rising", "ready to burst" or "you will kill her" line, I don't see anything else that (you) can't easily just discern from (you)r perspective. I think I wrote a lot on what (you) sensing as well.

>> No.48848357

>>48847314
I think you should have commited to one perspective rather than trying to go for the pseudo-hybrid that came out of the flashback scene since the perspective still felt like it was in that 'in-between' of rushia's and your's,
>kinda don't get what you're mean.
I suppose this is more of a lingering effect of the psesudo pov switch since the hybrid pov meant didn't really feel like it was your perspective or hers meant that I couldn't really get back into getting 'immersed' into the fic.

>> No.48851772

>>48843670
Is she missing her eye???

>> No.48851885

>>48829581
This was ludicrously hot. Haven't seen another corruption arc this detailed and sexualized out of this general, and hardly any, period. Flipping the obsessive dependency in the last scene was the cherry on top

>> No.48854978

>>48845587
A better solution would be a split of boards but that's a huge pain in the ass.

>> No.48856421

>>48826666
>Ollie tries to grab onto the roof
>One of her hands falls off
>Plan b
>Her hand walks with its fingers down to your pants and starts jerking you off

>> No.48857170

>>48856421
>getting a fucking handjob from Thing from Addam's family
I'd fucking shit myself

>> No.48858190

>>48829581
oh HELL YES

>> No.48859239

>>48826666
If I catch her does she just fucking kill me

>> No.48859395

>>48856421
Having sex with an Ollie split into multiple parts would be freaky and hot

>> No.48859618

>>48859395
>Having sex with an Ollie split into multiple parts
How?
The most I can imagine is (You) fucking her ass/pussy while her detached head is licking you ass.

>> No.48859915

>>48859618
I was mostly thinking about the distance between her parts being weird, like fucking her lower half while her upper half is elsewhere in the room doing something else. You could even take a hand of hers with you when you leave the house, in case you need a handjob on the go.

>> No.48860461

>>48859915
>the finger incident was you blasting her lower half while her upper half was streaming all the way at the other end of the house

>> No.48861016

>>48859239
>you wake up in the middle of the night to see Ollie pulling down your underwear
>flustered, she does a quadruple backflip off your bed and gets into a battle stance
>her hands flourish in a series of Naruto handsigns
>nothing happens
>she tries to escape by jumping out a half-opened window
>her hips get stuck in the opening, separating her waist from the rest of her body
>you take your time slamming her zombussy while her top half writhes in pleasure in the grass below

>> No.48862187

>>48861016
>she can become olivia

>> No.48862311

>>48861016
Would be a kino scene

>> No.48863586 [DELETED] 

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>>48762362
>>48762574
Based on the word "five" (and possibly on other media that I've been consuming lately): Dark Medicine (8.5k words)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vR7pJ9NPo4IptVS3IvnLescChyHXRsj1AH38qZrZlwR5OoAd94l8inry_KIonvtv4YFRcHom2CovXAo/pub
Tags: Koyori, Iroha, Botan, Izuru, Action, SFW, Gore, Tragedy

Jesus fuck. I had no clue I could pump out this many words in less than two days, it's undoubtedly a first for me. If this was instead spent on my WIPs I think I could've finished two by now, but inspiration just latched onto me for this one and didn't let go. I think the fighting did get a bit bloated because I had to reach the number 5, but I had fun writing my first proper action sequences in a while, despite feeling a bit rusty. I don't normally do fantasy fights either, and usually keep them grounded in reality, which made it a bit of a new experience. Hope you guys give it a read and let me know what you think.

>> No.48864696

>>48863986
Who's Izuru?

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>> No.48866256

>>48863986
Damn, impressive speed! And nice that the word of the thread inspired you. I'll read this after work.

>>48864696
https://holostars.hololivepro.com/en/talent/kanade-izuru/

>> No.48868308

No more dying.

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>>48863986
I liked it

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>>48762362
Evening lads. Here's something I wanted to get off the WIP folder for a while. Expect more to come.

A Bond of Blood and Sin. Ch. 1.

Your little sister, Omaru Polka, keeps insisting on playing "games" that could get you both in trouble. Worst part is, it's your fault.

https://rentry.org/yu88y

Tags: Omaru Polka, NSFW, incest, loli, yandere, blackmail.

As always, feedback is greatly appreciated.

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>>48863986
Vampires aren't really my thing, but I enjoyed the read and could feel the intensity of the situation. How you incorporated the "five" in it was pretty masterful. The action scenes were very good and how you describe the reactions to them is pretty believable, Overall, great job!

>> No.48869683

>>48863986
The numbers darkening as they count up was a nice touch. I preferred the combat in the beginning more than the stuff towards the end. That said it didn’t feel like too much, it only got a bit stale towards the end. While there wasn’t quite enough reason to really care for the characters due to their lack of screentime, you did a great job at expressing the hopelessness of the situation and the lack of light at the end of the tunnel. I think it needs some refinement but seeing as you wrote it in two days I can understand 8k words being rough.

>> No.48870644

>>48869436
ToT hot...

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>>48869436
>Yandere lil sis polcunny
LETS GOOOOOOOO

Kinda thought it moved a little quickly, but if this is moreso a prologue it's fine. Excited to see more!

>> No.48871748

>>48869436
>siscon stuff
Picked up

>> No.48871752

>>48870644
Thanks!
>>48871488
>Spoiler
Eh, it's a prologue in a way, but it's mostly intended to be smut. It will move at a quicker pace.

Thanks for the read!

>> No.48873069

>TFW you have no idea whether AI art based off a smutfic posted here belonged here or on the AI art thread
>>48873000

>> No.48873471

>>48873069
Both, really.

>> No.48873538

>>48863986
I've read it now, good stuff for something spontaneous. I'm usually more of a smut than an action connoisseur but I like how you fit the characters into the darker atmosphere while keeping them authentic enough.

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>>48873471
Ah, in that case, here's Nala, what Gura's Cousin interpreted IRL!Kiara.

>> No.48875940

>>48874554
That's a weird picture.

>> No.48876422

>>48875940
Agreed

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>>48762388
Hags fight for (You)r love

>> No.48879684

>>48878127
Canon now that Idol Showdown is out.

>> No.48880094

>>48869436
This was really fucking hot, though I agree with that other anon that this moved way too fast and really could have spent a bit more time to describe the scene and the smut for more effect.

>> No.48880139

>>48869436
Auntieanon?

>> No.48880741

>>48880094
I could add a few bits here and there to help ground the scene more I suppose.
>>48880139
What gave it away? The rentry link?

>> No.48880901

>>48880741
>What gave it away? The rentry link?
Identical writing style and the implied tragic ending

>> No.48881621

>>48880901
>Identical writing style
I feel flattered that someone would recognize my prose. Then again, it might just be because it's too barebones.
>implied tragic ending
Ah, this one is not going to be a tragedy, at least not in the regular sense. I'm going for more a thrill-shock thingy.

>> No.48883643

>>48869436
IKUZOOOO

>> No.48884461

Was all that talk of a contest just a daydream or are people putting stuff together? I think we drew up some pretty good plans, all we need to do is add it to the OP and have someone host the vote at the end of the month

>> No.48884571

>>48884461
Just a daydream.

>> No.48884640

>>48878127
As long as they don’t physically hurt each other, that would make me sad. I once had two ghetto whores fighting over me and they got into a scrap in my house and it was nasty.

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>>48878127
I can easily give you Hag fighting (You) for another hag's love or mutton.

>> No.48887143

>>48884461
I thought there was a soft agreement to hold it after /hfz/ Lord of the Board thing.
Though I'm pretty sure it's more a matter of one anon taking the stand and taking the responsibility of making up some solid contest rules and submission guidelines alongside actually running the contest (i.e picking a good theme for submissions, taking them, then setting up the polls for when they're all released for voting).

>> No.48887302

>>48881621
>I feel flattered that someone would recognize my prose
Only because Auntie's Little Secret is my favourite series in the archive, have read each chapter twice, and am eagerly awaiting the story's continuation... wink wink, nudge nudge.

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>>48762362
Small Mel Greentext
>after a very long day at work, you finish your nightly routine and slip into bed. sleep quickly overtakes you. but sometime in the early hours of the next morning, you're gently awoken by the sight of mel on top of you.
>she shyly starts to explain herself and what she's here to do, but that doesn't matter. your eyes are focused on her chest.
>a mighty primal desire overtakes you and you grab her, shifting positions so that she's under you. taking a deep breath, you shove your face into her bosom and welcome the warm feeling of a pair of massive marshmallows around your head.
>mel can only let out a little moan before you begin your assault.

tags: mel, nsfw, booba

just something i had a mighty need to get out of my system. might do something more with it later, or someone else can feel free to work off this and give this lust inducing hagpire some more loving.

>> No.48887871

>>48884461
As the other Anon said, I thinks it’s a good idea to wait for lord of the board to finish. Once that’s over we can lock in some of the rules and commence kick off.

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>>48885657
I wouldn't mind a fic where (You) and Watame try and have a normal date only for some comedic hijinx of Botan trying to eat her along the way.

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>>48889586
Stay tuned bro. You'll get your wish eventually.

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>>48889586
> Go to restaurant with Watame
> She excuses herself to the bathroom
> Is taking forever to come out
> Waitress comes over with one of those big cartoon metal trays with a round cover on it
> The waitress is Botan
> She opens the tray
> Watame is gagged with an apple, tied up with rope, naked, sitting on top of salad and vegetables
> Botan sits down at the table

>> No.48890869

>>48861016
>Ollie infiltrates your room
>restrains you to your bed
>you prepare yourself for death, but she's just pulling your pants down
>Ollie proceeds to give you the slowest, most inexperienced blowjob ever
>she's constantly looking up at your expression for approval, peering at what looks like a smut book for reference and is just overall nervous
>takes two agonizingly awkward hours for you to orgasm
>blow your load all over Ollie's face and she panics because she was supposed to get it in a special container
>she leaves you tied up to the bed for a bemused servant to find in the morning
>you immediately decide to plot your revenge

>> No.48891099

>>48864696
A holostars member I watch from time to time. Has a really unique singing voice
>>48868376
Thanks!
>>48869661
You know, vampires aren’t usually my thing either. I’ve just been reading too much Call of the Night. I’m glad the action scenes pulled through.
>>48869683
Thanks for the feedback. As you said, some refinement would be good, but lately I’ve been pumping out these quick one shots to give myself a break from my important projects. They act as breathers to write something down when I’m stuck in a rut.
>>48873538
Damn, I’d say I’m the opposite. I struggle to write smut but action comes to me pretty easily. Regardless, thank you for giving it a read, the atmosphere was one of the main focuses I was going for so I’m glad it came through.

>> No.48891138

>>48862187
Like transform into Olivia?

>> No.48893150

>>48863986
Thanks for this great but depressing fic. Koyori's kinda replaced Fubuki as my chuuba wife for a few months now and I'm happy that there's a couple fics featuring Koyori. I liked that Anon's sanity was slipping each time he popped a pill and the end nearly had me tearing up with how hopeless the situation has become. Good fic but I did not enjoy feeling depressed so at this time of day. Sincerely the writer who's kinda given up writing Fox Family bad end and writing in general. For now at least

>> No.48894939

>>48893150
>Spoiler
...Dodged a bullet, I guess.

>> No.48895091

>>48893150
>the writer who's kinda given up writing Fox Family bad end
I suspected as much but still you have no idea how sad I am to hear that

Sincerely, the writer behind Fucking Miyuki in the Ass

>> No.48897949

>>48762362
Posting this to slightly annoy that one guy.
https://archiveofourown.org/works/47004115
Tags: Vox, Hex, Fulgur, Kyo

>> No.48900897

>>48863986
Ooooh I liked this one. The action got a bit too bogged down in details at times, bur great job!

>> No.48901062

>>48863986
I need an epic sequel where Iroha survives and forces herself to keep fighting, Botan goes full Zabuza with her bayonet, Izuru breaks past the limit of his resistance, you ascend to a new form of special vampire and the four of you fight back the horde. Then you get married to Koyori and have baby-making sex.
That ending was way too depressing.

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>>48897949

>> No.48902294

>>48897949
I sent some feedback to you via email. I was wondering if you saw it.

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>> No.48904624

>>48903711
How many vibrators does she have stuffed in her?

>> No.48904667

>>48762388
After an epic battle, Hakos Baelz, the Utter Chaos, seals away Absolutely Order, the Laplace's Demon

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How does this make you feel?

>> No.48907111

>>48907007
The cube...

>> No.48907496

>>48907007
Like I want to hump her face.

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>>48762388
Fic focused around a shirt you give to IRyS while she does her laundry and the saga of you trading it back and forth. Obviously culminating in her getting and keeping it after a night of passionate lovemaking.

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>>48893150
Koyo is great. I'm still struggling to think of a way to properly express how she talks in writing. If the feelings hit home, then my fic has succeeded.
>Spoiler
That fucking sucks man, I'm always sad to hear about someone when they stop writing. Good luck, hope you find your groove again someday.
>>48900897
Upon a reread, I agree. It would have worked better with the number four or three, but then I guess there'd be no point. Thanks for reading.
>>48901062
I had ideas for one as well, despite the fact that I had planned for this to be a quick, spontaneous oneshot. A comeback for the fighters using the pieces that are already set up might make for a cool sequel, or even a series. I say this every time I write a oneshot, but never go through with it thanks to my other in-progress stories. I'm glad the feelings came through.

>> No.48908612

>>48907007
It makes me want to go get my chisel and get to work but only after cumming on her face and toes a few times of course.

>> No.48909578

>>48893150
>Fox Family bad end
What did you plan to put into miyuki's bad end anyway? Seeing as it's probably not coming out ever.

>> No.48909667

>>48909578
Well, it all starts with her visiting auntie Shion. She introduces a potion that tastes like cranberry and has the magical ability to shrink you down to the size of a pea...

>> No.48909668

>>48909578
NTA but I'm pretty sure he mentioned her filming an Av with Oga

>> No.48909735

>>48909578
Wanted to start with Miyuki introducing herself in an AV while the rest of the story will be about her downfall with the ending being her orgy sextape getting sent to your house. It pained me to write about this because I realised I'm just essentially pimping and slutting my own daughter out since she's my OC

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>>48909667
I admit I laughed audibly.

>>48909735
You got cold feet halfway through? Man, don't half-ass things...

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>>48909735

>> No.48909901

>>48909735
You're fucking NTRing yourself. Unless you've got a fetish for that shit of course it's hurting you
>>48909800
this

>> No.48910018

>>48909770
It's not really about getting cold feet, I just don't really have the time anymore ever since I've gotten a new job and going home late everyday. And I guess I got a little lazy now

>> No.48910288

>>48907007
Desire to flip her on her side and inflict tickle torture

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>>48762388
Aunt Watame babysitting (You)r and Okayu's kids

>> No.48911988

>>48910018
I don't get it. Sleep and work only account for two thirds of a day. How can you have no time?

>> No.48912001

>>48911988
You aren't smart enough to get it, anon.

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>>48912001
!!!!

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Fox Family Bad End would just be

>> No.48913053

>>48912238
wish-granting?

>> No.48914030

>>48904667
This but it's slowly revealed at the end that they're just 10 year olds play-fighting.

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Konkoyo

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>> No.48916472

anyone know what happened to that anon who was writing "Broken Hearlock"? I'd love me a neat story with Lui. It hasn't been updated in months tho. Did he intend for it to be a short story or something or is it on some sort of haitus?

>> No.48916504 [DELETED] 

>>48916472
Died in Ukraine

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>>48916425
> Sorry. I'll have the usual.

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>>48916505

>> No.48916667

>>48916504
ah.
shame.

>> No.48916739

>>48916505
I don't think these jokes are gonna fly with >>48916659.

>> No.48917171

>>48762388
Koyori forcing you to go bottomless so she has easy access to sniffing your sweaty balls and licking them sparkly clean.

>> No.48917321

>>48916739
>>48916505
what's fubuki's favourite recreational activity?
fly fishing

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>> No.48917450

>>48917171
Reminds me of the "Towa keeps your cock in her mouth" prompt. It's almost more endearing than erotic.

>> No.48917546

>>48917382
shame that Luna’s babby voice turns so many people off from trying to write her. her character is a goldmine for potential stories

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>>48917546
I got my own plans for the cute princess that will come to fruition eventually. I even know how I'm going to handle the voice.

>> No.48919156

>>48863986
This was a fun read though like you said it was ironically kind of bogged down by the prompt needing it to have gone to 'five' narratively so it was kind of forced to have these long series of actions without that kind of got tiring to read through. Though I guess some of it was from how you tried to keep the same level of detail even through the 'superhuman' vampire power scenes which basically lead to the entire thing having the same kind of 'rhythm' to it despite the powers.
Anyway for a wip made in two days this was pretty good.

>> No.48919370

>>48917546
Luna's hot and I'm tired of pretending she's not.

>> No.48919476

>>48916472
He posted a story recently; and by recently I mean literally in this thread. >>48869436

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>>48919370
She IS a hag, but can I really do her?

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>>48919722
I’ll do her if you won’t.

>> No.48919880

>>48919722
She's a princess, so you better get her parents to make her marry you before having sex. Ruining her would be dangerous

>> No.48920036

>>48762351
wtf is going on today, the last couple threads had barely any stories and now this?

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>>48919869
Okay don't twist my arm about it. The pink hime hag will be porked.
>>48919880
>marrying and settling down while there's still stuff to do
No can do homosexual.

>> No.48920133

>>48920060
Well, don't let the Luknights catch you. I'm not sure what the punishments in Candy Kingdom are like

>> No.48920811
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>>48919880
>He doesn't want to have the textbook romance between a knight and lady
>He doesn't want to slowly court Luna via achieving feats to prove your love via courage and strength.
>He doesn't want to finally have their love be accepted and consummated in secret.

>He doesn't want to keep their love secret.
>He doesn't want to experience the tragic end when it gets discovered

What a fag.

>> No.48921071

>>48919880
t. Gawain
>>48920811
t. Lancelot

>> No.48921523
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>>48920133
>I'm not sure what the punishments in Candy Kingdom are like
fucking severe. I'm going to make the candy kingdom a fucking mess when it comes to tradition, laws, and chastity.
>anon has to fight off three Luknights after they catch him in bed with Luna who is basking in the afterglow
I'm liking this segment more by the second.

>> No.48921568

>>48920133
Administration of broccoli.

>> No.48921978

>>48921523
Are you also doing the courtly romance thing for the build up or something more normal?

>> No.48922153

>>48916472
I've been meaning to rewrite the second chapter, alongside the hormoning.
I had a realization some time ago, that I wrote those two stories mostly for the sake of writing rather than because I had something to tell. I have a thousand ideas now, the problem is that time isn't infinite.
So, as with all fanfiction, all stories are dropped until updated.

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>>48921978
Possibly something more normal. I could come up with an interesting way to make courting a thing though. I think I have a few actually.
>Due to his actions in the kingdom so far that he just stumbled into, Anon is now required by law to court the princess as he has shown to be a prime suitor.
>Luna kinda hates all her country's bylaws and once she is married off either to another kingdom, or within her own and becomes queen, she may never be able to ever change them. Finds a loophole in the fine print that will allow them to completely rewrite the system through initial courting and then having sex in a very specific place. Could be the throne room, could be somewhere else equally brazen and funny.

>> No.48922414

>>48922153
Broken Heartlock was a bizarre story in that I wanted to fucking top rope bodyslam Marine and felt nothing but agony the entire time but kept reading it and wanting to see where it went. You have a way with making things emotionally investing, or maybe that's just past traumas coming to light and linking up. Either way, that's a shame...until it isn't and you maybe drop another chapter. Love your stuff.

>> No.48923052

>>48922308
>Due to his actions in the kingdom so far that he just stumbled into, Anon is now required by law to court the princess as he has shown to be a prime suitor.
That makes me think of
>By law, Anon now needs to get sent on impossible quests in order to 'prove his love for the princess'
>The impossible quests coincidentally all involve her genmates.
>(You) resolve them by helping them out and not blindly doing the knight things.
>Always return to the kingdom with the court and shock and awe at your valor and feats of love.

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>>48923052
The thing about the impossible quest gives me an easy opener to enter the dragon kingdom. I can see these ideas cooking up to be a fun arc. I also really want to get under that frilly pink dress now.

>> No.48923770

>>48923052
>>48923699
I like the quest idea a lot. The rewards for them could be getting increasingly close to (and later intimate with) Luna, until the King denies you the last reward of bedding her and you take her anyway.

>> No.48923800

>>48923052
>”He ventured into Hell itself and did battle with a loathsome devil! Such courage!”
>”Y’know she’s really not so bad once you get to know her.”

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>>48923770
>he thinks the king will be anon's main obstacle to taking another princess' purity
lol. lmao

>> No.48924212

>>48924146
Noel will be exiled after you reveal that she has an affair with an *lf.

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>>48924212
But I'm also banging the elf.

>> No.48924356

>>48922153
Like that other anon said, you have an amazing skill when it comes to writing drama and dialogue that makes your stories always have that edge when it comes to emotional investment. I hope you do go back to broken heartlock because there is some spicy drama there that I know you can make shine.

>> No.48924411

>>48924325
Well, don't let anyone find out.

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>>48924411
That will also make the entire stay in the kingdom interesting. Anon has to keep the fact that he's currently breeding other hags under wraps, much to the others dismay that they can't have public displays of affection like they've grown used to.

>> No.48925128

>>48924583
So ironically he is doing the traditional courtly romance of courting, consumating, and hiding an affair; just not for Luna.

>> No.48925784

>>48922308
As a legal loophole to avoid such inane things as "human rights" and "war crimes", the Candy Kingdom has officially declared the dungeons in the capital city as international zones, where the treaties don't apply.
Sexing the hime in the dungeons would thus let you avoid lèse-majesté, otherwise punished with the death penalty, but one problem remains. How do you convince her highness to lose her virginity in a damp, cold cell, on a primitive wooden bunk nailed to the wall?

>> No.48925938

>>48925784
I feel like that first bit is something that belongs in the Usada Kingdom. The second bit is quite simple
>Luna has a control kink
>Luna has a cell secretly furnished with all the prime comforts, she kept the wall shackles though surprisingly.

>> No.48926955

>>48923052
A knight's greatest tools are not his arms and armor, but his mind and heart.

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>>48926955
This dude gets it.
Although it can help to have a slew of magic at your disposal and women to back you up.

>> No.48928095

>>48927621
The worst part is this now accurately describes two stories at a glance.

>> No.48928144

>>48927621
The power of friendship, and this gun I found.

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>>48926955
Lunaito's are a dedicated bunch

>> No.48929843

>>48927621
The reason the Demon King always gets defeated is because the Hero and his four best friends gang up and beat the shit out of him. 1v5 is never a situation you want to be in.

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>>48929843
That's because the Demon King sends his lackeys one by one in ascending order of power all the way up until there's only them left. I'm all for demon kings popping up in low level villages with their right hand and left hand, and the three of them collectively nuking the places without any chance of fighting back. What sort of hero could ever thrive in such a world?

>> No.48930442

>>48929843
Maybe if the Demon King bothered to have friends he wouldn't have to go 1v5. Sounds like a skill issue to me.

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>>48930126
Oh no Demon King please don't send your lonely desperate cake/hag lackeys one at a time, I'll surely perish

>> No.48933387

>>48926955
I'd choose his honour and his strength, but yours works too.

>> No.48933513

>>48923770
I like the idea of a conventional hero x princess questing slowly warming her up to you as a suitor, as opposed to sneaking around the Lunaitos trying to bed her. Seems more pleasantly fairytale in a qay that really fits Luna and her candy kingdom

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>>48933313
now this is a 2v1 I can get behind, which gives me a better idea then the original I had for these two.
>Anon finds himself in a bad 2v1 situation
>manages to talk his way out of it for the first time and changes it to a sex battle instead
Yup. I just might print this.

>> No.48934296

>>48921568
I'd rather have a sword go through my neck than broccoli going down it.

>> No.48934516

>>48919156
Less time spent focusing on the vampire fights, gotcha. They were harder to write anyway as I generally prefer more grounded action. Thank you for the feedback.

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>>48933313
> "I'm ready for any hag you throw my way, Demon King!"
> First encounter

>> No.48934861

>>48934551
That's not a hag, that's an Australian

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>> No.48936432

>>48762362
So while I was continuing my Mori fic and working on another entry in the associated bestiary, I figured I'd also make a supplementary material that focused not on the different critters I'd be adding in my story, but on the organizations that would deal with said critters and that I'd feature (directly or indirectly). I figured it would also be a good way to hype you guys up. And lo and behold, this is what came out: https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQja5MqlRcsErlBOINzT5OTt0nQ1tQp5idinJivpGetL1FG3rWXdkufdIXxeN7fzyx9QGLFnQXFCwrz/pub

I'm already working on the followup for that one. I'll try to post it after I'm done with the chapter of the main series, though. As my best friend says, too much hype kills the hype.

Tags: SFW, Urban Fantasy, mentioned Mori, mentioned Amelia Watson, Supplementary material

>> No.48936504
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>>48934861
Fine then.

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>>48934861
>Do not think yourself mighty for besting my hags, you 1X year old fool! Tremble under the awesome power of this! My Schizo Zoomer!

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>>48928144
And how about when you double your friendship AND your guns?

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>>48939875
Twice the friend, twice the guns, twice (You)r age...

It's Flare!

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>>48942103
Look at how cool this half-elf hag is. She KNOWS there's no one like her around.

>> No.48945292

>7 anchor posts
/wg/ INCLINE?!

>> No.48947144

>>48936432
It's a nice formatting trick for the supplementary material, but I think you should have followed your own advice here and posted this alongside your chapter whenever you had gotten around to finishing it.

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It hurts my fingers to write... but it's not like they are going to get better so long as I keep using my phone/PC. I despise the weakness of the flesh.

>> No.48947632

>>48945292
Sometimes the stories just get finished out close to one another I guess. But maybe it's also that fics being published encourages others to finally move a fic they've spent a lot of time reworking from the WIP pile to the finished pile.

>> No.48947753

>>48947563
Look up what kind of pain you're experiencing and how do deal with it. I used to get some carpal tunnel problems until I did some exercises and adusted my positioning.

>> No.48948002

>>48762388
I want to see Pekora die from loneliness.

>> No.48948217

>>48948002
She's not lonely though. She bought an animal companion

>> No.48949372
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>>48947753
It's pain on the nerves of the fingers, they are probably swollen from playing with a controller for so long so many days in a row. Mainly my thumb and left hand pinky finger, but to type for some reason my ring finger is hurting. Using the phone hurts the most because of my thumbs. Ain't carpal tunnel. I'm going to get a scan of my hands if possible to see what I can do to fix this, cause it's been bothering me for almost two weeks now.

>> No.48949571

>>48948217
But that's not enough, anon. She can't bond with a monkey nor can she start a conversation with it.

>> No.48949895

>>48949571
She fucks the monkey...

>> No.48949922

>>48902294
Just read it. Funnily enough the part that you rewrote was before our discussion about dialog. Also thanks for reminding me about the edit link. I need to email AA about that.

>> No.48950005

>>48921071
Don't worry anon I get it your literary refences do not go unseen.

>> No.48952174

>>48949895
they need to be freed...

>> No.48953809

Which chuuba would be best for a stuck in the wall scenario?

>> No.48954202

>>48953809
Marine deliberately gets stuck on a wall in hopes of getting fucked, but instead someone calls the firefighters who free her.

>> No.48954338

>>48953809
Marine and a dog. A bitch in heat doesn't deserve human cock

>> No.48954386

>>48953809
Marine has publicly fantasized about this during the Portal era

>> No.48955561

>>48936432
It’s a nice bit of worldbuilding, but I think this should have been included within the next chapter as something Anon reads.

>> No.48955829

>>48953809
>willing to suck and fuck anyone in the near victinity
Marine would audibly scream in delight as one of her fantasies becomes reality
>unwilling and nervous, swatting away dicks
Lamy has a fat elf ass, and would probably try to shoo away people triying to get a turn while she tries to free herself
>unwilling, but could get talked into taking cock
Azki, she has a fat ass and is nice enough that you can convince her to let you do it
>yeah this is rape
Flare, she would get mad at getting caught in a cliche, but also would get raped because she's a fat ass brown elf
>Would jump into a hole in the wall triying to get stuck but would lack the ass girth to stay in place
Irys

>> No.48956992

>>48955829
I want to fuck IRyS so badly.

>> No.48957776

>>48955829
Supporting IRyS by the waist to help keep up the hole in the wall illusion while fucking her...

>> No.48959336

>>48953809
Korone.
Come on, dog stuck in a fence. Classic.

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>> No.48962881

>>48947144
Eh, fair. Didn't really think this through, did I ?

>> No.48963125

>>48949571
>He doesn't have a familiar
lol

>> No.48964129

>>48949571
>imagine not having a being that can communicate directly with your own soul
lmao

>> No.48964232

>>48964129
Jill is actually an intergalactic criminal trapped in the body of a monkey and Pekora was chosen as its jailer. Only Pekora can communicate with it.

>> No.48964573 [DELETED] 

>>48762362
Marathon sex with Koyori

>> No.48964634
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>>48762388
Coco returns to Hololive, but the reincarnation process has some unintended side effects. Now (You) are stuck managing the bratty Cocunny who has no memory of how to stream or behave

>> No.48964815

>>48762388
Marathon sex with Koyori

>> No.48965563

>>48950005
Thank you, I try!

>> No.48965633

>>48962653
N-Noel please, I swear the Flare rape commission is coming along.

>> No.48968055

Hi!, How do you make a story of a vtuber that you don't watch a lot. Like I really like Iroha, and I was trying to make a story about Chloe but I dont watch her a lot. So everything I wrote felt fake. Or you usually don't give a damn about that type of thing??

>> No.48968071

>>48920811
I want the opposite of this pic, like Mori coloured to be Luna

>> No.48968176

>>48968055
I experimented by watching different clips, but nothing beats actually watching streams really

>> No.48968305

>>48968055
>How do you make a story of a vtuber that you don't watch a lot.
By watching their streams, how is this even a question being asked?

>> No.48968905

>>48968055
Watching clips and making notes of certain mannerisms and attitudes. If you're lucky, you might stumble upon a channel or two dedicated to a specific chuuba. In my experience, it's those that give more niche details.
You can always ask one of the splits here if the chuuba has one, it's not something I've done personally but the option is there.

>> No.48969041

>>48968055
>Never once considers the obvious answers of watching streams or clips
Holy fuck, how do you even function

>> No.48969377

>>48968055
I lurk in their thread

>> No.48969489

>>48968305
>>48969041
Why watch streams when you have idiots giving them answers?

>> No.48969509

>>48968055
>Like I really like Iroha, and I was trying to make a story about Chloe but I dont watch her a lot.
Then watch her?

>> No.48970704

New thread
>>48970033

>> No.48970821

>>48969509
>>48969041
>>48968305
>>48970704
Samefag

>> No.48970906

>>48970821
Why won’t you watch streams, anon?

>> No.48971043

>>48970906
I do. Why won't you write anything?

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>>48970821
>I don’t watch this particular Vtuber, what can I do to get her right for a story
>Watch her streams or clips to get an understanding of her
>S-samefag
Why are you like this? Genuinely asking, why even ask a question if the answers will just trigger you?

>> No.48971748

>>48971539
>>48971043
Don't ignore the question

>> No.48972052

>>48970821
>>48971043
>>48971748
Anon, I'm not them, but its okay if you don't watch streams. I sometimes don't since I don't have the free time to do it, but just don't be a little bitch about it when people call you out on it.

>> No.48973511

>>48968055
read their tvtropes page

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