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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.

Previous thread:>>43516974

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43595093

Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap! There... were three stories posted in the last thread.

Too Many Times:tags: Hololive Myth characters, character death and violence:>>43522880

Sex foob:Tags: Fubuki, sex, wedgie:>>43556401

Power Botan: TAGS: vaguely collar verse related, Shishiro Botan, Petplay, Light domination, SFW:>>43565241

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Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

Mori and Ina kidnapping and molesting Suisei while acting like creepy ojiis:>>43525566

Chuuba splits off into literal split personalities. Can (You) get them to talk and reunite back together, or will you join in an alliance with your favorite split persona so she takes over.:>>43542598

Requesting a fic where Pippa Pipkin gives Kaneko Lumi a wedgie:>>43542954

Write what happens next:>>43544949

Being force fed breast milk straight from the source by Lamy as she holds your head and squeezes it into the mouth of (You), her unwilling recipient:>>43548233

Sex with a sleepy Mori where she's too tired to realize you didn't put a condom on:>>43554032

Shirakami Fubuki has lost a bet with her friend Mio, and the wolf, feeling mischievous, has tasked her to go and retrieve a takeout pizza, but with a twist: she has to have an atomic wedgie (underwear pulled up over the head), and she can only use a hoodie to hide it. Foob is hoping for a quick in and out, but things quickly devolve in a practical demonstration of Murphy’s Law, and the fox encounters roadblock after roadblock, including socializing with others (a big risk in her condition), all the while having to shield herself from discovery and trying her damnedest to act normal. Big psychological and comedy elements in this one, I think a lot can be done with it.:>>43556745

>> No.43595923

>>43595068
Oh no, Aqua's tail came off! Someone will have to put it back in.

>> No.43596310

I like this edition.

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>>43595068
Hey AA I think you might have messed up copying the tags for
"CM Fubuki gets her panties fucken ripped lmao"
It should probably be
>Kurokami, Fubuki, Wedgie

>> No.43599610

>>43598505
I see the issue. The tags someone replied to it with were only 'example' tags that whoever does the OP grabbed and assigned to it. Thank you for bringing it up.

>> No.43599997

>>43595068
What’s that bottle in the corner? Is that supposed to be lube?

>> No.43600351

>>43599997
Sorry, I just forgot my sippy cup on her bed.

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>Panties

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>>43601484
Need panties to give wedgies

>> No.43602273

>>43598505
Correct me if im wrong but we dont have a fic with 2.0 irys right?
like, no one wrote anything past her transformation

>> No.43602303

>>43602273
You could write a fic about her transformation, but for all other IRyS fics it doesn't really matter. She's the same as always.

>> No.43602350

>>43602273
there is a fic past her 2.0 but its misslabeled as a joke i guess.

>> No.43602588

>>43602273
It’s because IRyS 2 is missing the soul

>> No.43603074

>>43602273
There really isn't anything to base a fic off of with the 2.0 transformation. Unlike the flare 2.0 where I think you make fic out of flare wanting to be cute rather than cool, there isn't a good story out of the IRyS update other than, she's actually cute now.
Maybe a spiritual sequel to that paper bag IRyS fic? Something about her dealing with being beautiful now and anxiety about whether he'll still see her the same.
Other than that I can't really think of anything.

>> No.43604039

>>43603074
>>43602303
I guess it would depend on the setting on how you actually want the transformation to effect her. Like, I don't really know the full hopepill lore of her, just that she's some embodiment of hope but also has a split angel/devil thing going on? You could try to play on how the original is more about hope in a cynical sense, where the transformation is more positive. The design difference between the two actually opens up an opportunity for some real shiczo hours plotlines. She physically swaps appearances depending on what side is domininant at the moment.

>> No.43605999

bump

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Alright anons, what you got going on in your WiP right now? I wanna hear about the cool stuff you're doing.

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>>43606075
Reader (as roommate) giving Fujikura Uruka a wedgie because she’s been tempting it

>> No.43606584

>>43606342
Genuine question from an ESL: Is "she's been tempting it" correct in this context? My intuition would be to either say that she's been asking for it; or that she's been tempting (or provoking) you to do it.

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>>43606075
I had a breakthrough moment today. For awhile now I've had a nagging feeling that the outline for my story's finale is missing something special, and I think I may have found the solution.

>> No.43606965

>>43606075
I'm practicing long combat scenes by writing a Korone vs Ayame fic, but its mind numbing how little progress I've made on it despite the hours.

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>>43606771
That's rad dude! I'm hoping your solution is just what you've been looking for. Keep going, you got this!

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>>43606965
Action scenes are not easy to get the hang of. Try not to get too discouraged with how your progress looks in terms of word or page count. Try to focus on how each interaction, every swing of the arms, and every movement of legs reads and feels, and how it paints the picture in your head. You got me curious and looking forward to reading why the doog and oni are fighting and what that would look like. Do you best anon! You can make the scene in your head shine.

>> No.43607257

>>43606584
No it's incorrect. The general meaning could be understood but a native wouldn't talk like that.

>> No.43607742

>>43607257
Man I am a native, it’s just shorthand for “tempting (him to do) it.” Heard at least 10 people say it like that in the past few weeks.

>> No.43608612

Ok hear me out. What do you think about Brainfucking?

>> No.43609171

>>43606075
I broke 1k words today so I'm happy with myself.
>>43608612
Only if it includes eye penetration.

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>>43608612
brainfucking as in sticking your dick in the brain or mindfucking them so hard they cum?
either way, it could be really challenging to write

>> No.43609284

>>43608612
How would you go about writing that? Is it like necrophilia?

>> No.43609897

>>43608612
I only like it in the context of sex with a kemonomimi's ears. Outside of that convenient explanation, I ha no strong feelings about it.

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>>43609171
>broke 1k
Good shit bro. Keep it up! Aim for 1.2k next time!

>> No.43610455

>>43607203
Thanks for the advice! I'm attempting to make the reader have a vivid experience reading it. And if that fails, at least I'm having fun writing it, especially when the wordsmithing hits right.

>>43608612
Remember reading a fanfiction about that once. It was great. Goodluck anon!

>> No.43610936

>>43609915
I could've gotten to that but I needed to clock out (I do almost all my writing at work).

>> No.43611467

>>43610936
>Writing fanfiction on company time
Um, based??

>> No.43612593

>>43609897
>I only like it in the context of sex with a kemonomimi's ears
finally, I found a brother

>> No.43614485

>>43607257
Thank you.

>>43607742
Sorry, I was just curious and didn't want to tempt a callout. I guess my intuition for a short form would be cutting "to do it" instead of "him to do", but the way you said it was understandable and good enough for a short prompt.

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>>43610936
>getting most of your writing done at work
Are you me? Glad to hear you know you can hit those numbers.

>> No.43615595

>>43606771
This Pekora has very undersized ears and it's kind of cute.

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>>43610455
>I'm having fun writing it
Damn right dude. Never lose the joy in the journey of it all. That's the good shit.

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>>43595093
Well, after way longer than I would have liked, here's your scheduled dose of schizophrenic ultraviolence with the third chapter of Heartbreak Tokyo!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRfTz8GbN4jE6CAdKdqyrhnuPZPXT_SppR61DakirDa6BEaId5si6F5B4ua_7Hv_KV07OtdTmdXspe1/pub

Tags: Holostars, Kson, NePoLaBo, SFW, Action, Gore

I'll say ahead of it I'm kinda nervous about this one, but I'll wait to see what peoples critiques and questions are before elaborating on what specifically worries me.

>> No.43621642

yeah

>> No.43622284

>>43595138
Prompt: Ok scenario:
The local squirrel girl in your senior class (18+, to be clear…), Risu, is frustrated that you’re messing with her every so often, so to get back at you, she decides to pants you. Little does she know, you’re going commando, and she sees *everything.*
Later, feeling bad about it, she offers to let you do the same to her to make things even.

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>>43622284

>> No.43622726

>>43622645
What?

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>>43622726

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>>43619404
That was pretty intense overall. I gotta say I enjoy how you illustrate accents and mannerisms in speech. How you sounded out slurred and drunken speech is something I will probably end up taking inspiration from at some point. The bar scene near the end was a favorite of mine. The scene transitions felt like a roller coaster, but the formatting and the overall vibe of the chapter helps it read in a way that feels good. Only critique I think I have is that I'm not always certain how much time has passed between scenes. Also the sushi shop scene could use a small extra proofread, there was just one possible spelling error and a contraction error. I'm interested to know what your worries are since I think this is really solid and exciting to read. Keep it up!

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Rushia's story really is a goldmine

>> No.43625799

>>43625325
lol imagine giving money to this retard.

>> No.43625975

>>43625799
Nazuna cute tho ):
(I’ve never given any vtuber money)

>> No.43626391

>>43595265
>Tiddy veins
Uu....Uooh......

>> No.43626420 [DELETED] 

>>43625975
>girl is a whore
>threw her coworkers under the bus to try keep her gachi
>suicide baiting
B-But she's so kawaii desu ne.

>> No.43626589

>>43625325
i feel bad for nazuna.
sure, you can go list endless menhera antics featuring her but at the same time japan has a ''kill yourself bozo'' approach to mental health so even if she wanted to get better she couldnt
Like, if she had been a little less mentally ill, like matsuri, she could have saved herself

>> No.43626650

>>43626420
The model is very cute yes.

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>>43596203
> sweaty lethargic girls in general
Bonus points if they are horny

>> No.43627123

>>43626589
well she's a textbook example of why you dont feed unicorns, specially if you are mentally ill yourself
I think that's the thing that has her on mental edge, the idea of someone thinking like her and making everything in its power to hurt her

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>>43627017
>struggling on what to write featuring Snow leopard kemono lamy
>this post
I feel like i've been iluminated. Thank you my nigga, you gave me the last piece of the puzzle
now i just need to survive my exam and i will be able to write it

>> No.43628478

>>43627123
Literally all her problems are her own doing. The unicorn fanbase is still supporting her to this day

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Ayo what Marine doing to Pekora's carrot behind the screen??

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>>43623881
Thanks for the compliments! Part of my worries are that my dialogue can come of as..hokey? The transitions were my biggest concern, as somebody had said about the previous chapter that it had flowed from scene to scene really well and looking at this chapter I was thinking that it wasn't as good at that this time around, but I really couldn't think of a better way to handle it. That, and the longer glimpses into Anon's backstory potentially being uninteresting to some, as well as it being weird that Anon and Shinove having no clue that Kson was the chick from the end of Ch.2 despite her being a known streamer, which I do have an answer for I just wasn't able to comfortably work it into this chapter.

I'll be sure to try and work on making the passage of time between scenes more clear, too!

>> No.43628850

>>43628831
Is this real

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>>43628850
Oh, it's real. It's real son.

>> No.43629203

>>43628669
would peko have a slab of meat or a tinycock?
the balls are big one way or the other

>> No.43629565

>>43629203
based on the webm, it's at least 10 inches long

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>>43628831
I think the dialogue is just fine. As you continue to write more you'll think of little ways to present it to strike more of what you might be going for. As of this chapter everything read fine, I could hear the grittiness in some of the conversations as well as the exasperation.
>Spoiler
I can't speak for everyone, but I love that kinda shit. I also like to take a "wait and see" approach when it comes to unanswered questions I might have in regards to the plot or characters if a story is unfinished or part of an overarching story. Some questions are best left answered later. Be proud of this chapter and keep on striving to get even better.

>> No.43629971

>>43629565
Then marine will have one hell of a time rimming her until she's empty

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>> No.43633587

>>43628478
She lost a lot of them desu

>> No.43633647

>>43629203
Futas beyond 10 inches are gross no matter what

>> No.43635222

>>43627506
Kemono OwO

>> No.43637936

>>43619404
It's always high octane action with this series and I absolutely love it. I honestly don't see what you have to be nervous about with this, it's fucking prime. The dialogue, the characters, the action (especially the action), all come together to make something real gripping; got me kinda hyped up while reading through.
If had to reach for a nitpick, I'd say some transitions were disorienting, especially the one at the sushi place, but that I could just chalk that down to me being a little slow.
I would contest the use of 'bruv' in every sentence but hearing myself talk sometimes, I can say it's disappointingly spot on
Really looking forward to the next chapter.

>> No.43642193

>>43619404
It's alright.

>> No.43644817

>>43595068
That's a backstory.

>> No.43646571

>>43619404
Great chapter. I always appreciate how you do action scenes and I think this will always be my go-to for doing them. I especially enjoyed the club scene, great ratcheting up the tension there.

I will say that there are some scenes or plot elements that leave me confused about the jump between them. It clicked after a couple of rereads but I feel like it's something to point out. Things like Anon knowing who Kson is, and vice versa, and Toru's role in all that. It wasn't something that I inferred right away.

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>> No.43650357

>>43648550
>Aki and Iofi do the fusion dance
>

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>>43629926
I'm glad you like the mystery, I suppose it's just my worries over whether people view it as an actual mystery a problem with the plot.

>>43637936
I've always been proud of the action in this series, and the stairway brawl is probably my favourite of the one's I've done so far. Like I said earlier, I was a bit worried about the scene transitions so I'll be sure to give them some more consideration next chapter. Though there probably will be less of them next chapter anyway based off of what I'm planning.

I knew there's a few people from the U.K around here, and I was wondering if any of them would catch on to that. Billy's a reference to a very specific person and I've always gotten mixed answers on if how often that guy says it is deliberate overuse or not. I was actually gonna have him use La' originally instead, but writing that would genuinely annoy the shit out of me and I don't wanna write things that I would not enjoy writing.

>>43642193
That's better than bad!

>>43646571
Thank you! I'm glad you like the action so much to use it for inspiration! The club scene actually was one of the first ones I had in my head after I decided take the story in a different direction and make Polka more important, so it's nice to hear that seems to be all well and good.

That's probably my biggest worry involving the mysteries in this story and my skills as an author is being able to properly get across what I want the audience to know, compared to what I already know and also what the character's already know. I suppose that's just something I'll have to work on but looking back now I can see how Anon hearing about Toru and making the link that it was the same guy who tried to mug Astel was a little unclear, as well as the sort of 'reveal' that Anon knows of Kson just not via her being a streamer, I'll be sure to keep that in mind going forward.

>> No.43652185

I hope that Kirsche fan didn't get scared away.

>> No.43653478

>>43652185
If he has the mental fortitude to let a bit of tribalfag shitposting roll off his back, then he'll return.

>> No.43653653

>>43650430
>That's probably my biggest worry involving the mysteries in this story and my skills as an author is being able to properly get across what I want the audience to know, compared to what I already know and also what the characters already know.
Yeah I understand, I've been there before. When you're pulling a lot of plot threads simultaneously, dramatic irony can get a bit tricky, especially as a writer where it "makes sense to you." Whenever I am in doubt I make it direct but your mileage may vary, especially in a story like this.

Still, I'm looking forward to the next chapter regardless.

>> No.43653813

>>43652185
I hope he did. He shouldn't be shilling nobodies here.

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>>43595093
Hopefully that one guy likes this and sends it to his oshi. Pretty short because I made myself cringe too much. Someone might get a kick out of it.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSCS9_j67Yc_5nf1tHJAWzTV6cNvbL--jhbf1A5Fpdq6xJx8dbYZ9g0kH7x7kciMdCJMOdWdJROHBhJ/pub

Tags: Kirsche, SFW

>> No.43656424

>>43655273
It's strange how your low effort shitposts end up funnier than your actual comedy fics weirdanon2.

>> No.43656664

>>43655273
I found the intro quite boring but kept reading purely because >>43656424 said it was a "low effort shitpost", my favourite form of short story. You did not disappoint and I audibly cackled towards the end.
You've still got prose that flows like a river of bricks, and all your interactions feel very stop-go; but your humour is on-point.

>> No.43657310

>>43465575
Minutes? Hours? Pippa had no clue how long she had been out. Again, she couldn't move, but this time she could see what was restraining her. Three bleach white insects, each six foot tall. They'd cocooned her upper body, her arms crossed, and had stripped of her all her dignity beneath. One of the insects chitinous eyes turned toward her and it chittered out some nonsense. "FUCK YOU, LET ME GO!" Pippa screamed at full volume. Suddenly pain from beneath her. Her ass and pussy both felt like they were tearing open and her insides were falling out. Pippa screamed again, rocking against her bed, where'd they'd tied her down. The bugs began chittering wildly, excitedly, almost... hungrily. Pippa screamed again. The bug closest to her nethers head shot up, chittered, then extended a blade from his claw. Another insect, closest to her head, clamped his hand around her face. A cloying substance entered her throat and, against her will Pippa fell asleep once more.

The next day she awoke, all traces of the insects gone, as well as the things that were in her guts. The only thing that remained was a thin line of stitches on her stomach, just above her pelvis. She touched the bandages, then crumpled, hot tears staining her cheeks. She'd been voilated and used, then sliced apart like a fucking science experiment. Bile rose in her throat and she puked into the sink. The substance mixed into a murk with the running water, flowing down the drain, just, Pippa thought, like her own life.

Epilogue:
The director of the mental institution sighed, straightening his papers, then looked up at Pippa's husband. "The entire pregnancy seems to have taken more of a toll on her than we thought. It seems that, as a defense, a personality called Pippa surfaced. She seemed to think we were all insects. Or African Americans. Or both," The doctor re-read the part about 'white bugniggers' and raised an eyebrow. "Either way, this pregnancy was perhaps ill-advised." The husband held the infant gently. "I know... but you know her, there's no way she would have agreed to any sort of abortion, and she would have known that a 'miscarriage' was fowl play. I think this may be for the best." The doctor rubbed his nose where his spectacles normally sat. "Either way, it's over now. I'm sorry that natural birth wasn't an option, she was in too much pain, even with an epidural. A cesarean was the only way to go." The husband nodded somberly. "I understand, doc. When can she go home?" The doctor looked away from the man's gaze into a monitor, watching 'Pippa' watching running water in the sink. He sighed. "Until the cesarean closes, two weeks. But I think I should observe her longer, at least-" "No. She'll want to be with the baby. And her episodes have been getting better, in fact they were gone before we took her off her pills for the anesthetic. It'll be ok." "Fine. Fine, then in two weeks, you can take her home."

>> No.43657540

>>43656424
I think it's because with my "comedy" fics I get bored of them before they get funny. >>43656664
Pretty spot-on critique but I'm glad it made you laugh and in the end that's all that fic was trying to accomplish.

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>> No.43659937

>>43619404
You managed to balance the ultraviolence and myth arc/metaplot in this chapter much better than in the previous one. Here the action makes the entire thing flow really well, compared to chapter 2. Although that could also be from the fact that there's less set-up being done here compared to the last chapter.
Anyway this was a really strong chapter overall, the chase through the city was really fucking gripping.

>> No.43659968

>>43632765
One day I WILL figure out how to write orange woman, and I WILL write her getting plowed in every sexual orifice she possesses.

>> No.43660273

>>43659968
I feel like Kiwawa is the chuuba I have the easiest time writing, and I like using her as a side character. Unfortunately, she's my oshi so it's simply impossible for me to write about her having sex.

>> No.43660491

>>43659968
Kiara is one of the easiest holomembers to write in character. Watch streams.

>> No.43660710
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I'm trying my best

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>>43660491
NTA but the more eccentric the personality is the harder it will be to write it. Ex: Coco, Korone, Polka... Kiara fits on that regard. If you overdo it, it's cringy, if you underuse it, it's not her.

>> No.43661199

>>43660710
Your best isn't good enough

>> No.43661224

>>43660979
Just write Kiara as a blunt Austrian who likes cats.

>> No.43661242
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>>43661199
I know...

>> No.43661257

>>43661224
I've never met an Austrian and I don't hang out around cat people

>> No.43661323

Kiaras panties were absolutely soaked. She gently ran her fingers over the wet silky material, sharply inhaling, then turn to look at Mori. "Calli!" She said loudly "That bottle of wine you threw got all inside my fucking underwear drawer!" She plucked the rest of her bras and panties out of the dresser, then threw them in a laundry basket. "I swear to God, Calli if a single one of those stains I'll beat your ass!"

>> No.43661339

>>43659937
That's good to hear! I'll be sure to try and deliver!

>> No.43661341

>>43661257
You've heard a lot about a famous Austrian painter though, haven't you? Well, all Austrians are the same, and Kiara's just a painting. Problem solved.

>> No.43661370

>>43661341
I never had a Hitler phase, otherwise I'd be in /pol/, not /vt/, so no

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>>43657310
Aww. This went in a very different direction to what I'd hoped.

>> No.43661412

>>43661375
I wanna punch her

>> No.43661414

>>43661370
You're just making excuses at this point

>> No.43661435
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>>43661414
Yes

>> No.43661441

>>43661370
Wow you're dumb

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>>43661412
But... why?

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>>43661370
Hitler? He never became an accomplished painter. Sure, he painted, but so does George W. Bush. He's obviously referring to Maria Barbara Krafft, the Austrian woman who painted this famous portrait of Mozart

>> No.43661536

>>43661375
Sometimes I gotta subvert the status quo

>> No.43661541

>>43661498
I'm sorry that was too much but now that I've already punched her the harm is already done so now I want to rape her

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>>43661541
Anon, no! Why are you doing this!?

>> No.43661697

>>43661628
Hey wait a minute...

>> No.43661725

>>43661628
To impregnate her and then leave her as a single mother so she is forced to take a break from Hololive and then return several months later, whoring herself out for money for her baby

>> No.43661730

>>43661628
That's a delicious-looking pussy

>> No.43661813

>>43661628
I will now write Fubuki ryona. Macho Man Randy Savage x FBK

>> No.43661845 [DELETED] 

>>43661725
Yeah, nah, that one's too specific to find an image for

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>>43661845

>> No.43661902

>>43661813
Yes, please!

>> No.43661921

>>43661845
I vaguely remember reading a caption fic akin to that scenario, but it was for botan. I'm pretty sure I found it off of /trash/

>> No.43661968

>>43661921
Dammit, why didn't you link it here? That sort of needless cruelty is so much fun to read.

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>>43661628
>>43661900

>> No.43662457

>>43661968
Well, I found it after a bit of searching but it's only kind of similar to the scenario described.
https://mega.nz/folder/XU8ASKQI#itA4u0SuPVeb5-goTgJTrQ/file/eEEnXQaJ

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>>43662457
It was okay. Not as bad as I thought it was gonna be.

>> No.43663129 [DELETED] 

>>43655273
Tier 0 - No danger at all. Staying here will most likely heal you. Life expectancy may temporarily skyrocket within this location.
Tier 1 to 5 - Regular life conditions with a few non life threatening encounters.
Tier 6 to 10 - Dangerous location with hostile encounters.
Tier 11 to 15 - Very dangerous creatures and/or terrain.
Tier 16 to 20 - Planet ending powers lie within this location.
Tier 21 to 25 - Threaths to a entire galaxy/part of it, or artifacts of great power.
Tier 26 to 29 - Danger to all life on the universe.
Tier 30 - Threat to the very fabrics of reality.
Tier 30 EX - Threat to all that is, was, and ever will be.

>> No.43664138

>>43662889
I want to suffocate underneath Botan's minge.

>> No.43664738

>>43662889
Why is everything from /trash/ either cuck or IR related?

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>>43664738
>Why does /trash/ enjoy garbage

>> No.43665419

>>43665393
Cuckoldry is the thinking man's fetish. Disagree with me and you're subhuman garbage.

>> No.43665498

>>43664738
It's the literal bottom of the barrel where the 'trash' that can't fit the rest of the site gathers anon. Of course it's going to get the worst and the weirdest of everything.

>> No.43667782 [DELETED] 

>>43665419
If you like being a liar on the level of kikes then you're welcome to think that cucking is good and that I'm subhuman, however if you don't want to be a kike and instead tell the truth then you can agree with me and come to your senses that cuckshit is trash. What's it to be, are you a liar or will you tell the truth?

>> No.43667877

>>43667782
The truth doesn't change to suit your biases, subhuman.

>> No.43668052 [DELETED] 

>>43667877
The truth never changes. If you enjoy watching other men fuck your woman then you are below subhuman. Thanks for admitting that you know that, kike loving liar.

>> No.43668191

>>43668052
And thanks for admitting you're a peabrained lobotomite with a palate akin to wallpaper paste. Enjoy dribbling on your keyboard as you masturbate to bestiality porn for the rest of your miserable existence.

>> No.43668453 [DELETED] 

>>43668191
Lobotomite? That's a buzzword from that reddit video game. How unsightly. But, seeing as how you are a piece of trash it's not at all surprising. You are a complete and utter fool if you think that bestiality is worse than cuckshit. The only thing that is would be IRL toddler rape, hurtcore, scat, and worse of all blacked.

>> No.43668516

>>43668453
No doubt all favoured pastimes of yours.

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43668540

Again?

>> No.43668638

>>43668516
Spoken like a true subhuman. Why don't you go suck your bull off. Or even better, why don't you introduce me to your wife, little cucky. I'll show her what you would never.

>> No.43668720

>>43668540
At least it's just seetheschizo talking to himself this time.

>> No.43668732

Are you faggots serious? What does this achieve? What do you HOPE to achieve? You’re not going to change each other’s opinions on the matter no matter what, so why bother?

>> No.43668862

>>43668732
>Are you faggots serious?
No, of course not. At least I hope cuck-kun isn't, I personally don't care what goes on in his bedroom.
>What does this achieve? What do you HOPE to achieve?
Keeps the thread bumped when it's dead.

>> No.43668866

>>43668638
If I didn't roll your flabby gut back down the hill you came up, then my wife would simply cut your balls off. I choose who she partners with, and you aren't good enough for society, much less for her.

>> No.43669167

>>43668866
You think you choose? You don't. When you tell your wife to cheat on you, little bitchboy, you stop choosing anything ever. Your life stops, your decision stops, your respect stops. If a worthless woman doesn't respect you then I certainly won't. A little soibaby like you is worthless. You've already decided that you're not good enough for your woman. Tell me who your wife, my next fuckmeat, is. Now, bitchboy.

>> No.43669483

>>43668732
>change each other’s opinions
The only one doing that is the cuck proponent; the other guy is blatantly engaging in bull RP which, mind, is extremely erotic and I wish he'd done it to me instead of this anon of dubiously genuine NTR affinity

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>>43669483
>which, mind, is extremely erotic and I wish he'd done it to me

>> No.43670349

>>43669483
I'm interested. Post some way to contact you.

>> No.43671718

>>43669483
I'm sorry anon, did it feel like he was stealing away something rightfully yours?

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>>43660710
Keep trying then. When you try again the next day, your new best will be better than your old best, and then the same thing after that, and after that.

>> No.43673971

>>43595138
Helping Aqua to become independent and live her own life while trying not to become emotionally dependent on her.

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>>43595138
Breaking Aqua mentally so she can't live alone while also becoming emotionally dependant on your ability to take care of her.

>> No.43675268

>>43673971
>>43675142
This, but as one fic with two opposed protagonists.

>> No.43675362

I hope all writeanons are hanging in there.

>> No.43675716

>>43675142
If that somehow ends with you leaving Aqua when she's at her lowest then I don't like it.

>> No.43676007

>>43675268
What if it's the same protagonist having a mental breakdown about how he should take care of Aqua?

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>>43675362
Y-You too.

>> No.43676471

>>43675142
Misdirection is kinda like that, except the roles are reversed.

>> No.43676506

>>43595138
Mindbreaking Polka with the power of love into the perfect wife

>> No.43677319

>>43676471
>Misdirection
Man that fic is a classic comedic one-shot. Thanks for reminding me it exists so I could reread it.

>> No.43679412

>>43675362
From trees.

>> No.43681163

>White monster
>LibreOffice open
>true crime document about rape victims open in another tab

Yep, it's fanfiction writing time

>> No.43682952

>>43681163
Can't say that's my cup of tea, but if you're feeling inspired and having fun, all power to ya.

>> No.43685317

>>43675362
By a pair of underwear

>> No.43687970

>>43595138
Sora watches Gura pee herself when meeting IRL

>> No.43688027

Leaked Polka Membership stream after the events of Heartbreak Tokyo ch.3

https://files.catbox.moe/2dmqyj.mov

>> No.43689883
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Drum up some hype for WiPs and prompts alike.
What works are you excited to see more of? What prompts do you hope someone will take on? If you got some WiPs of your own, how's it going?
I'm waiting to see if anything involving the chadcast hypnosis comes to life, as well as the Suisei noble in maids clothes idea.

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>>43689883
>the Suisei noble in maids clothes idea.
That's a based idea for sure, though I'm partial to any brother/sister incest prompts. Especially because I've got like four WIP's of it

>> No.43690197

>>43689883
no.

>> No.43690212

>>43689883
Cuckqueean

>> No.43690223

>>43690170
>spoiler
Do tell

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>>43690170
Do I got good news for you then! The conversation around that prompt quickly devolved into Suicest. The main idea being that Suisei is seething because her brother is lusting after the dumb peasant maid, so she looks to squash the chance of him wasting his superior genes by being the maid he so desires. Turns out, Anon is just retardsexual and likes Aqua's fat dumpy.

>> No.43690444

>>43690212
You're going to have to be more specific than that bro. Who's the cuckqueen? Who's getting cucked? Give a little more to get a little more.

>> No.43690822

>>43690223
My incest WIP's?

>Run sequel where Amelia teases you over being jealous of Tempiss until she assuages your worries with steamy incestual lovemaking(started writing this after their announcement but before their debut so there isn't any specifics about them or anything that's happened)

>Bae using you as a workaround for the cuckshed so your parents are none the wiser, though she gets self-conscious about your seeming reluctance which is actually you just holding back from absolutely manhandling her every time she's cheesed to meet you

>Marine finds out her father has a secret family and that as a result she has a younger half-brother who's in high school. Upon meeting you she gets immediately smitten and her attempts at teasing quickly get turned around on her.

>Ollie showing off her new ninja outfit to you only for you to fuck her and send her downstairs to show your mother while she has to hide the creampie leaking out of her

There's a few other but those are the most recent.
I really like incest

>>43690358
Oh I know! I just meant I thought it was based because it was mainly Suicest

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>>43690822
I'm not a big incest guy, but I greatly admire your drive! My hats are always off to multiple WiP writers. I don't know how you all manage it, but it's nothing short of damn impressive.
>manhandling her every time she's cheesed to meet you
That got me good.
Also, again, not big into incest, but that particular suiscest prompt was pretty funny and interesting.

>> No.43691262

>>43690822
That Marine one has caught my interest

>> No.43691325

>>43689883
To do list
>Pass (or fail) my exam before i can do anything, hitting the books with moderate sucess
>Write something with Snow Leopard Kemono Lamy
>Rework The chat Scene
>Work in lost and Found 3
stillness is the enemy lads

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>>43689883
I'm once again counting on your support to make the
>You're an expert kemonomimi liaison for Cover, and have helped Botan in the past with her mating cycles; but one day she shows up with Rurudo, who's going through her first estrus and doesn't have anyone to turn to for help.
>Cue having to deal with not one but two horny lionesses dying for your semen, having to use of your smarts and tools to satisfy them lest they start chomping your nuts and not in the pleasurable way.

prompt happen.

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>>43691325
You're gonna kick that exam's ass bro. Your time with the books will not be in vain. Take the time you gotta to sort that out and work on the fluffy ratto's love story at the pace that's comfortable for you. I'll look forward to seeing the next part.
>>43691409
I can see someone wanting to take the power bottom Botan persona and utilize it for a guiding threesome. Might be cool.

>> No.43692350

>>43691409
Have you given it a shot yourself? Writing isn't as hard as it might seem.

>> No.43692581

>>43692350
NTA but writing is 110% as hard as it seems.

>> No.43692603

>>43692581
You're thinking about writing well

>> No.43692634

>>43692603
Fair point.

>> No.43695339

>>43692581
Nta but it really isn’t difficult, just turn brain off and go

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>>43595093
my first short story, I'd say it's not 100% done but I feel like it's the best I can do at the moment
tags: Flare, Marine, NSFW, Futanari

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTtveY23CMTwadqn2jmQr1jCda64FV1VZjVnbZnQ4YV38sAavIgQNQSGxU2v6Kec3YvqBiTlpJUjgA-/pub

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>>43696605
>Futanari

>> No.43698987

>>43696605
And ignored.

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>>43696605
>Futanari
Good

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>>43696605
Formatting could be better. You could break the dialogues into different paragraphs depending on who's speaking.
Open a thesaurus. Using the same world multiple times can be taxing on the reader.
Couple of odd sentences and grammar mistakes like "shear" instead of "sheer"
Not much I can say, I did like some parts of it, like calling the lollipop a weapon.
Read more and work on your mechanics. You'll get better.

>> No.43699892

>>43696605
I liked the plot, but you write like you're trying not to fail an ENG 1000 essay. Keep it simple and edit for ease of reading. Smut, of all genres, benefits from having a nice flow.

>> No.43700777

>>43699686
>Couple of odd sentences and grammar mistakes like "shear" instead of "sheer"
Not an English speaker.

>> No.43701121

>>43700777
And?

>> No.43701351

>>43701121
He’s saying that he’s an esl, Anon. Which is why he made the mistakes, don’t know what more you need.

>> No.43701507

>>43701351
NTA but that's not an excuse

>> No.43701840

>>43701507
Kinda is anon. I really don't expect top-tier things from fanfics, especially if written by people who aren't all that good in the English language to begin with.

>> No.43701938

>>43701840
Expecting a certain level of English skill is the bare minimum. Sounds like you're just making excuses for your own poor English.

>> No.43702160

>>43701938
Not even the author, anon. I just know expecting top-tier traditionally published novels fanfics is just dumb and not worth the hassle.

>> No.43702203

>>43702160
Didn't accuse you of being the author, just lazy.

>> No.43702378

>>43702203
Anon, this is 4chan, and this is a fanfic general, expecting people to write in perfect english is just dumb, since they're just writing for free and on their free time.

>> No.43702550

>>43696605
Never use Miss as a sustite to -san again. You can't translate honorifics, either use them in their original form or don't use them, Are you gonna write a continuation? this have potential

>> No.43702630

>>43702378
Anon, this is 4chan, and this is a fanfic general, expecting people to not remark your errors in a fic is just dumb. All fics receive some kind of critic so the author can improve. Don't know why are you acting like a faggot about this one

>> No.43702649

>>43702378
Writing in perfect English takes no effort at all for those who know it. That's why the original anon gave feedback, and that's why you seriously need to keep studying if you're this insecure over poor English getting called out.

>> No.43702747

this is why you ignore futa shitters, they're all a bunch of special snowflakes who demand the world changes to meet their wants

>> No.43702917

>>43689883
Shion takes a shit. I planned out a skeleton the other day.

>> No.43703137

>>43702550
Seconding this.

>> No.43703369

>>43702747
>Post fic
>Get critic and advice in how to improve
>Cry
This is not a safe space for fags

>> No.43703516

>>43703369
exactly what i was saying

>> No.43703695

>>43702917
Dude, why?

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>>43703695
Why not?

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>>43706413

>> No.43706577

>>43706413
No wonder Shion's depressed and taking breaks all the time, Shiokkos are fucking weird. Imagine having a fanbase that doesn't just want to rape you 24/7 but wants to see you take a dump too

>> No.43707037

>>43706577
Same reason why I feel bad for fauna and lamy. They’re sweet girls that don’t deserve such degenerate fans.

>> No.43707045 [DELETED] 

https://youtu.be/Vqbk9cDX0l0

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>>43707037
I know saplings are just saplings. What's wrong with Yumikins though? I can venture a few guesses, but I never actually looked into it. I just think is a hot snow elf and can't wait to write her magical ass.

>> No.43707686

>>43707045
Perfectly sums up my feelings on this thread the last couple months

>> No.43707822

>>43707353
i think he means /become/ which was a really loud minority
Yukimins and Miofas are the same: Very respectful but also very horny

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>>43707822
I respect the horny part. I myself am dangerously horny for the wolf hag and the snow elf. They both fill me with a MIGHTY NEED to BREED.
I always thought that loud minority was an elaborate bit.

>> No.43708082

>>43706577
The fanbase reflects the streamer. I think very few people actually watch her on this board despite all the uoohposting but she has done things like talk about the color and density of her piss on stream. This is the same girl who laughs about taking her first shit of the year and can casually bring up going to the dentist but within 5 minutes she's talking about mouth fetishes and whether people get aroused by the submissive feeling of opening their mouths for a cute dental nurse.

>>43707037
Saplings are unhinged though yes.

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>>43707822
Understandable

>> No.43708436

>>43707037
Saplings are fucking weirdos, holy shit, I really hope Fauna never has to read one of their fucked up posts.

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>>43707037
>>43708082
>>43708436
Don't be rude, you're going to make Building Block Doll anon cry.

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>>43707822

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>>43707037
If Lamy and Fauna didn't have that degenerate fanbase this is how they would look right now.

>> No.43708785

>>43708623
He doesn't really come around here anymore. Apparently, an AI with a Fauna picture attached to it going

>Wear a diaper!

Is just too much for him to do anything. Like a rat with an orgasm button.

>> No.43708879

>>43696605
I don't read anything under 500 words

>> No.43708931

>>43708623
At least that guy was enough of a man (or big boy i guess) to own it up. Half of the saplings dont admit their weird pedo mommydom / gay rape fantasies
>>43708785
see that's a win for AI, it helps getting rid of the scum of this site

>> No.43708938

>>43708698
I remember. The glory days of /wg/.

>> No.43709060

>>43708698
That's a fake Miofa
>claims to love Mio
>splurts that little
there was a guy in /Feg/ that utterly blasted a drawing of a girl he wasnt that particularly into and then someone took a shit on a picture of a character because he was so mad at a shitposter

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>>43708931
There were some things I didn't have to know. I actually rather enjoyed Building Block Doll until I found out he was self-inserting as Suisei and literally had all the gear in real life.

>> No.43709575

>>43708931
I feel for him.
Life dealt him a bad hand.

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>>43709344
>I actually rather enjoyed Building Block Doll until I found out he was self-inserting as Suisei and literally had all the gear in real life.
Anonchama, that fic has like hardcore infantilism out of the gate and the way its written its quite obvious the guy did the stuff irl
im not calling you retarded, just not very bright

>> No.43709681

>>43709344
>Until I found out he was self-inserting
Did you miss the conversations that filled a whole thread after he post the first part? That guy is a hero in my books. He bring a interestic topic to the general, wrote and is still writing dozens of long series fics. I didn't know he posted that image, based.

>> No.43709833

>>43709344
How the hell did you not know he was self-inserting from the getgo.

>> No.43710173

>>43709681
>and is still writing
yeah you got that part wrong

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>>43709627
>>43709833

>> No.43710275

This thread sure accepts people from all paths of life

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>>43710275

>> No.43710422

>>43710275
Read Apple of Her Eye
That fic was based on an anon's actual story of childhood sexual abuse.

>> No.43710666

>>43710173
His AOO still has uncomplete stories, don't tell me...

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>>43710275
If you got a story you want to tell, even if it's one I may not agree with or am into, you can be damn sure I'll encourage you to write it anyway. I love seeing people let their creativity flow and create something from it.

>> No.43710982

>>43710756
What if I want to write about drinking a chuuba's vomit?

>> No.43711137

>>43710982
Not the weirdest thing to come out of this place.

>> No.43711228

>>43710982
If that's what you REALLY want, go for it. If your creative juices are urging you to give that story the setup and words you think it deserves, do it big. I'd be lying if I said I wasn't curious as to how you'd set up the scenario.

>> No.43711631

>>43711228
Okay, okay, but what if it was a chuuba drinking a giant bug's vomit?

>> No.43711769

>>43711631
Tame
Does she die of cumflation?

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>>43711631
I don't back down anon. If that's what you wanna do, then do it. If you got passion going into your works, you got my full support.

>> No.43712161

>>43711631
Funnily enough I'm writing something that involves that.

>> No.43712398

>>43711631
Technically I already wrote that

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>>43712161
>>43712398
It was just a joke man

>> No.43714022

Putting
>but with a bug
to your prompt doesn't make you funny

>> No.43714209

>>43714022
Factually incorrect

>> No.43714830

>>43712434
Not anymore

>> No.43714834

>>43710422
And he had a meltdown when people here didn’t give two shits about it, because he thought, rather stupidly that a group of anonymous people would give him the psychological help, instead of you know, going to a therapist.

>> No.43715000

>>43710666
He's either still stuck on chatbots or is taking a break from writing/had a Menhera breakdown like last time.

>> No.43715069

>>43715000
He came back, took requests, realized he didn't have the same spark for writing that he once did and left again

>> No.43715161

>>43714834
I'm starting to see a pattern of writers being entitle little shits that throw a fit the moment their fic gets shat on. Bro, go to ao3 if you want people to suck your dick, ah shit i forgot nobody left you a reply cause the niji fujos dominate the vtuber tag. My bad

>> No.43715373

>>43715161
>I'm starting to see a pattern of writers being entitle little shits that throw a fit the moment their fic gets shat on
Well, duh. It doesn't take a genius to figure out people don't like it when they aren't rewarded for their hard work.
Get this: for every 100 people that visit this thread, let's say 5 actually contribute. That's a generous number, too. Of those 5, 4 of them are going to be discouraged if their fics are ignored and stop doing what they're doing - because they're not getting the emotional satisfaction of a job well done.
Only a tiny, tiny portion of writers will actually be able to continue doing it just for fun.
Point is: get used to seeing authors stop after one or two fics, because that's the natural, normal response.

>> No.43715725

>>43715373
>get used to seeing authors stop after one or two fics, because that's the natural, normal response.
Ehh I stopped cause I'm lazy, but I could drop a 2k fic by tomorrow if i wanted. But seriously tho, I don't drop participation awards over here. If I don't have any interest in a fic, I won't read it and review it. Hard work is overrated, just write for whatever shit the thread is asking on high demand, you'll get easy (you)s out of it. Just see how much clout one dude got out of shitty as wedgies

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>>43715373
My first fic, which I've never released of course, was roughly 10k words of (you) slowly piecing it together that Risu is a futa and has been feeding you her cum (as well as putting it in several other things) but by the time you learn it is too late and she rapes you. At the time, I was excited to write whatever the fuck I wanted because I thought the people would be actually interested if I posted it. Now I don't really write anything more complex than sex in the three main orifices or a handjob, because if I do anything beyond that, the story either gets shit on, gets no attention or gets one guy saying the smut fic was so weird that he thought it was the funniest comedy fic he's ever seen (god bless that guy)

In short, I personally lost the spark for writing fic after fic because I learned who my audience really was. That's not anyone's fault, it's just what it is

>> No.43716144

>>43715828
>Now I don't really write anything more complex than sex in the three main orifices or a handjob, because if I do anything beyond that, the story either gets shit on, gets no attention or
Good, step in line motherfucker

>> No.43716166

>>43715373
Well Drawn Manga are Doomed to Have Bad Anime Adaptations got no response and I'm still writing. People who make OC should always expect their work to get no response at all. It's the best way to temper expectations.

>> No.43716193

>>43715828
release the fucking fic or I'm calling cap on this one pal

>> No.43716208

>>43715828
So in other words you were forced to suppress your instinct to write futa shit? Is this supposed to be a bad thing? If anything it makes me want to be harsher on new blood

>> No.43716368

>>43716208
It's morally right to bully the new blood when they release an unreadable 500< words fic and expect people to care cause it's futa

>> No.43716441

>>43715828
Pekofag? Such is the fate of all niche fetishists, I suppose. Except furries.
There's probably futa-dedicated forums out there. It'll be a wide variety of fandoms for sure, but I find it hard to imagine there's no futa collectives anywhere. There might be such a thread in /d/, even.

>> No.43716475

>>43716368
Based and correctpilled

>> No.43716548

>>43715828
>one guy saying the smut fic was so weird that he thought it was the funniest comedy fic he's ever seen
I'm curious. What was this about?

>> No.43716706

>>43716441
>There might be such a thread in /d/
multiple in fact. To the point you have to clarify this is NOT futa thread in your description to avoid people posting that shit

>> No.43716938

>got a fuckton of anons commenting my first fic
>no one gave a shit about my second one
i think you are a bitch if you expect every single one of your works to get THE TREATMENT.
Even Holojourney, which is the most popular fic here has days off
Also of course you get no traction if you fetish is some weird shit, what where yo u expecting

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>>43716938
>Even Holojourney, which is the most popular fic here

>> No.43717088

>>43716977
>fate image
>garbage comment that adds nothing to the conversation
like clockwork
seethe all you want my dude, but it is the most popular fic here by the simple fact it has the most chapters and more than three people reading

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>>43717088

>> No.43717438

>>43715373
That's why It's always important to reply to those posts. Even a "Hey, I like that part when" it's enough

>> No.43717441

>>43717088
Its probably pekofag criying because something that isnt him is on the spotlight

>> No.43717506

>>43717438
Pity replies are disgusting

>> No.43717561

>>43716706
It's a fic thread. There's no rule against any kind of story, in the archive you can find nechrophilia, insectshit, NTR, blackedshit, cuckshit but you only bring "There's a thread on /d/ when its futa kek.
Btw I doubt that all those faggots crying about the critic were the author of that fic

>> No.43717569

>>43716938
What have you written?

>> No.43717622

>>43716938
To be honest, With really long series I usually wait them to be finished before reading
>>43717506
>pity
Kys, If I like something in a story, I'm gonna say it anyways.

>> No.43717676

>>43717561
If you're going to cry that nobody appreciates futa then maybe you should try creating it in a place that actually wants it.

>> No.43717728

If a story isn't smut and doesn't include a character I like, I'm not reading it. End of discussion.

>> No.43717775

>>43717676
>If you're going to cry that nobody appreciates futas
I'm not the one crying about a two paragraph futa story. Every time a futa story get posted you always cry about how this isn't a thread about futashit. If you don't like it just don't read it and dont fill the thread with your crying.

>> No.43717778

>>43717728
BASED BASED BASED

>> No.43717816

>>43717775
Now you're pinning me to all the imaginary phantoms you've got floating around in your head. Just stop, you're embarrassing yourself.

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>>43717622
I'm still waiting for Holofantasy to end.

>> No.43717828

>>43717728
Based

>> No.43717847

All my futa fics are dogshit cause I wrote them when I was new, so I know for a fact I'm partially responsible for lowering the average quality of a tag for at least 20%

>> No.43717874

>>43717847
All your futa fics are dogshit because they're futa

>> No.43717906

>>43717874
Exactly this.

>> No.43717943

>>43717816
whatever you say dude
>>43717824
Wait, is still hasn't ended? fuck I wanted to go back to reading. I stopped after the Polka Bad End chapter
>>43717847
eh.. I like them, don't know if you wrote the one about Marine and Flare fucking a cake but that one was funny and erotic

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>>43716548
Assuming this is pekofag, I think this is referring to 'The Grim Reaper's Stable' which involves mori having a horse stick its cock up her futa dick.
Which due to the combination of imagery and the narration made that fic the funniest unintentional comedy fic for me. Even thinking about it sends me laughing; though I haven't really gone back to reread it.

>> No.43718043

>>43717943
Not him but glad you liked it. It was the first time i wrote futa
Not even like a big futa guy, just was in the mood

>> No.43718084

>>43717775
Whenever I read comments like this I shake my head. Replace "futa" with "scat" and realize how much of a hypocrite you are. This isn't a place for any fucked up fetish, faggot, yet you still insist there's heaps of you and no-one that likes other weird shit.

>> No.43718097

I just want the Pekora x Moona futa scatfic to update...

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>>43717943
>I stopped after the Polka Bad End chapter
Anon...

>> No.43718166

>>43718084
It's actually ridiculous how many scat fetishists are in this thread. I think we've got 3? That's 3 more than I could have ever expected.

>> No.43718244

>>43718148
This is just word vomit. AA has incredibly good writing but doesn't know when to stop.

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>>43717622
>wait for them to be finished before reading
Uhhhhhhh. I can tell you personally that this train is gonna take a long ass time to reach its final destination. That doesn't mean I won't try to make each and every stop as fun and exciting as it can be along the way. On the one hand I get not wanting to get potentially invested in a piece until you can be sure it's not gonna blue ball on the chance you get really into it, but I also sometimes find reading things as they iteratively come out to be rewarding in its own way. You're kinda there in the moment when new stuff happens and can even voice what you did or didn't like about it. Something like that can end up having an impact on how things move forward, and hopefully it's for the better.

>> No.43718364

>>43718084
What's that smell? Ah, the sweet tears of anger...they sing to me. It's enough to make a man kek.

>> No.43718431

>>43718364
This is why everyone hates futafags

>> No.43718460

>>43718166
I think it's a bunch of LARPers.

>> No.43718539

>>43718460
Please explain to me how an image board on the internet is Live Action.

>> No.43718573

>>43718539
Please explain to me how it isn't.

>> No.43718690

>>43718539
Well it's not Fake Romance, is it? Unless you can't that time that chumbud fell in love ERP'ing with a hooman only for the hooman to reveal he didn't care all that much and was using the ERP for seperate ERPs about cucking the chumbud, but that was just bizarre

>> No.43718965

>>43718431
Suisei wrote, crying, her face twitching in a sneer. Behind her head in the next room Fubuki was practically pile driving Mio with her thick futa cock. Mio was screaming in both pleasure and pain, begging Fubuki to slow down, but the fox was having none of it. The sickening squelches and slapping disgusted Suisei, which made her impossibly hard nipples and cunt dripping through her panties and stockings that much worse. She paused, lurking the writefag thread on /vt/, waiting for someone to speak up about that disgusting futanari fetish again while the slapping, panting, messy, sloppy sex went on behind her.

>> No.43719239

>>43595093

It was a hot summer day and I was in my workout room benching 1200 pounds. My abs were flexing and girls within a 10 mile radius were getting wet. Once I was done with my daily 32 hour workout I called one of the bitches I know, Subaru. She is really fucking hot and looks like a high schooler. SO I got into my Lamborghini Gallardo and reved it up to 40,000 RPM (this is an Italian import with special engine system). I got onto the freeway near my house and threw it into 8th gear, I hit about 600 mph and I could hear the sonic boom as I broke the sound barrier. As I was flooring it on the freeway like a badass, Fubuki called me and said she wanted me to fuck her. So be it.

I came to a full stop from 700 mph in front of her house. These Ferrari’s have top notch brakes, you know. So she gets out of the house and walks up to my Bugatti and starts eyeballing my cock. I could tell she was staring at it because when I looked at her I noticed she was looking at my cock. Booya.

Flash forward to like 10 minutes later. My 30 inch dick is going inside of her vagina, hitting them walls. I’m holding her entire body up with my left pinky as I’m fucking her and she has 30,000 orgasms. She looks me in the eyes and she says “harder.” V-TEC just kicked in, yo. I blow my load so hard she falls off my dick. There had to have been about two pints of cum everywhere. People say I cum like a pornstar, I wouldn’t disagree with them.

I throw her a towel so she can clean herself up then I do a triple backflip into my Maserati and drive home.

>> No.43719338

>>43718965
What's weird to me is you futafags constantly cry about people not liking futa and then proceed to shitpost like this when you get told why.

>> No.43719441

>>43719239
No love for Mercedes?

>> No.43719466

>>43719338
its pekofag having a breakdown, ignore him

>> No.43719475

>>43719239
This is what that one dude thinks Miss Sakura was

>> No.43719521

>>43716441
Futa threads are degenerate as fuck. You'll find hypercocks, disgustingly detailded musky horse cocks and hyperdocking as the most prominent fetish in such places

>> No.43719569

>>43719475
Funny you should mention that because Miss Sakura is what I was thinking of when I read it

>> No.43719666

>>43719475
It's not anywhere near as bad but Miss Sakura reads along similar lines to this copypasta.

>> No.43719908

>>43718244
Yeah not a fan of >spinoff >EXTRA >AFTER >ALTERNATIVE REALITY

>> No.43720005

>>43718084
>Whenever I read comments like this I shake my head. Replace "futa" with "scat" and realize how much of a hypocrite you are
I post in /ringo/ so I wouldn't cry like you faggot, why don't you stop projecting? Also It seems you're forgetting that various /ringo/ fics were reposted here to be archived. Such as the Botan Mio sweat and pee fic. You even can find /ringo/ Directory in the Archive

>> No.43720037

I like futa when its just a normal dick and not the abominations that >>43719521 mentions.

>> No.43720066

>>43719338
Suisei slammed into the keyboard, her fingers sticky on the keys. What? She tentatively licked her hand. When had she been fingering herself? Behind her Mio and Fubuki had switched positions, now Mio was against the wall, doggy style -wolfy style?- being pounded from behind. "You like that, don't you Mio?" She could only moan, but Suisei, for her part, managed a breathless, inaudible "N-no..." Suisei alt-tabbed into another window, her 'degenerate cam' as she had dubbed it. A series of hidden cameras in Fubuki's room. The fox's hands were gripping Mio's hair like a horseman riding bareback, and Mio for her part was bucking like a wild mare. Thuds came from behind her, Mio hitting the wall with her balled up hands as she came. Fubiki looked directly into one of Suisei's 'hidden' camera's and smiled then pulled her eight inch long cock out of Mio's still twitching cunt, hotdogging it between her ample asscheeks.

>> No.43720365

>>43719441
I have never ever owned a reliable Mercedes. They have all been overbuilt shit boxes that when one simple thing fails another ten do. I'd rather have a BMW -still hella unreliable by the way-, Bentley, Lexus, or even a fucking Cadillac than a Mercedes.

>> No.43720629

>>43719666
Satan's telling the truth for once.

>> No.43720669

>>43720365
The only Mercedes I ever owned took a metaphorical bullet for me in a four-car pileup. Didn’t look impressive, but that tank saved my skin.

>> No.43720807

>>43720669
Honestly, I can see that. Outside the engine bay and they're built like fucking Fort Knox. Glad you're still around, anon.

>> No.43721081

New thread
>>43720852

>> No.43721288

>>43718965
>>43720066
anon if you're going to shitpost at least make it bad. make me not want it to keep going. this shit is too good.

>> No.43721335

>>43721288
laughable samefag

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>>43692214
>power bottom Botan persona
That would be nice, definitely something I'd like to see.
>>43692350
I just have too many unfinished projects to add another onto the list. If nobody picks it up, I definitely will... someday.

>> No.43721415

>>43721335
sure man. not even gonna argue with you.

>> No.43721421

>>43721335
it's pretty funny that he thinks we won't see it.

>> No.43721428

>>43721335
Let hin keep going. He can be his own writer and readership and eventually he'll get bored and fuck off.

>> No.43721920

Jesus, what ever happened to this thread?

>> No.43721932

>>43721920
It got heated.

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>>43721920
>happened to this thread
Past bullshit got brought up, and you know, it went downhill from there. pretty sure one side got BTFO.

>> No.43722235

>>43721335
Suisei nodded with assurance. Samefag, had to be. On the monitor Fubuki had switched to another position, in front of another 'hidden' camera, the angle was just right enough to allow Suisei to watch Mio penetrated slowly, one in at a time. Angrily Suisei pinched a nipple on her flat chest -she'd shed her top in between posts- and let out a low moan. Mio began moving her hips on the laying Fubuki's cock, riding her. "Cum for me Fubuki, give it to me, all of it!" Fubuki began to moan and grunt, "No...Work for it, Mio!"

>>43721421
>>43721428
As long as I get someone to respond I will do anything, including samefagging and there's nothing you can do about it except not respond. :)

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>>43595093
Another fic I've written on a whim, I've decided to write something a bit more fluffy and cute this time (also, the lack of fics about the girls from Production Kawaii is very disappointing)

Tags: Aletta Sky, Fluff, SFW, Romance

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>>43722235

>> No.43722407
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>>43595093
Another fic I've written on a whim, I've decided to write something a bit more fluffy and cute this time (also, the lack of fics about the girls from Production Kawaii is very disappointing)

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTj2oSpzNkFvyyBONOdyhiiYiahtqZYMS4YB-2i01Wq9utP9mgHu-QD14a868HtPJUBZjZbCoWYxv2k/pub

Tags: Aletta Sky, Fluff, SFW, Romance

>> No.43722430

>>43721920
Fetish fags crying here instead of going to the safe spaces allocated for them to not bother other people.

>> No.43722439

>>43722407
Make sure to post this in the new thread.

>> No.43722466

>>43722407
Now write her giving birth.

>> No.43722740

>>43722439
I did, thanks for the heads-up.
>>43722466
No.

>> No.43722925

>>43722407
>>43722740
Watch out, anon. People here don't like it when you post stories that aren't from hololive.

>> No.43723060

>>43716938
>Even Holojourney, which is the most popular fic here has days off
I can’t tell if this is ironic. Don’t get me wrong the author is based for writing that much, but “most popular”? People can’t read it because it’s too long.

>> No.43723093

>>43722391
Suisei's jaw clenched as she posted the reaction image. A loud growl filled the entire house, and Sui's attention turned back to the monitor. Mio had her hands wrapped around Fubuki's throat, her lust had overwhelmed her mind and now she wanted -needed- to be bred. Fubuki was struggling under he as Mio brutally savaged the poor fox. Fubuki's hands went to Mio's wrists as her eyes started to glaze. "CUM," Mio roared, "GIVE ME YOUR CUM NOW!" Fubuki struggled under the wolf's clenching cunt, tight as a fist. When she didn't do as she commanded then Mio began slamming her pelvis into the others again.

>> No.43723139

>>43722430
Bug guy seemed pretty reasonable

>> No.43723360

>>43723139
He's one of the nicer people here.

>> No.43723396

>>43722407
My oshi is Nene, but it’s hard to think of any fanfiction material for her that isn’t just basic “nursing handjob with no context” stuff.

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>>43723139
>>43723360
Are you seriously complimenting yourself?? This is pathetic. Almost as pathetic as this fag>>43723093

>> No.43723648

>>43722925
Well, good thing the works in my WIP pile of shame that I'll be working on next are about holos then.
>>43723396
Kek, funny you say that, I'm also the guy who wrote the Nene smut fic a few months ago. The world needs more big titty tenshi sex fics.

>> No.43724017

>>43723529
Hastily typed Suisei, before jumping up from her chair and running out her door. On the monitor Fubuki's face had been turning blue. Grabbing the knob of the couple's door she tried to open it. Damn, locked. No matter. She took a half step back, aimed right next to the knob, and slammed her foot into the door with her bodyweight. The frame splintered and the door swung free. Suisei slid her arms around Mio's neck in a rear naked choke, and Mio immediately let go of Fubuki's throat, clawing at Suisei's arms. The fox, now able to breathe, came an eruption, her entire body quaking as Mio went limp in Suisei'a grasp. Not from the hold but from the thick futa fox cum flooding her womb. Soon her howls quieted and both had stilled. Fubuki raised a clenched fist towards Suisei, a smile on her face, and Suisei tapped it with her own. A smile and a nod, the Suisei dragged the sleeping Mio off of Fubuki, and went back to her room to shitpost on /vt/ once more.

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>>43724017

>> No.43724298

>>43723139
>>43723360
You might be thinking of someone else, because my last post was >>43715373.
I'm really not interested in a stupid fetish war. No perspectives are going to be changed, so it inevitably leads to a bunch of pointless arguing and insults being thrown around.

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>>43724096
You're welcome, anon, hope you enjoyed! I know I had fun. See you at the end of the next thread!

>> No.43724367

>>43724298
>>43724304
Kill yourselves.

>> No.43724734

>>43724367
https://files.catbox.moe/jpombq.mp4
Die mad, salty bitch

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