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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.

Previous thread:>>42087084

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Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap! There... were no stories posted in the last thread.

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Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

You meet Mio on Craigslist while browsing around for something to eat, and you quickly hit it off. She's sick of her job streaming and has always liked the thought of being miso soup, and so jumps at the idea when you offer her the opportunity to be boiled and eaten by you. Unbeknownst to you, however, she falls into a sinkhole on the way to meet you which opened up due to mutated giant ants, who also happen to be intelligent and speak Japanese. Due to strong warrior pheromones activating her primal wolf mating instinct, she quickly agrees to be eaten by them instead, all the while laughing at the idea of you all alone and going hungry tonight.:>>42096557

Chuuba trying to VERY sensually go down on you but she can't stop laughing the entire time:>>42158728

A fic about pic related but with Koyori:>>42197241

>> No.42233649

>>42233214
Bad bot, there was one.

>> No.42233761

>>42233649
None that were anchored/supposed to be archived.

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>>42233128
I think it’s high time that this elf learns a lesson she should never forget. Streaming is a sundown job and unfit for elven occupation.

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>>42233128
I hope this thread won’t disappoint in Flare content. She needs all the love she can get.

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What are you working on anons?

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>>42238596

>> No.42238836

>>42238596
currently helping with my divegrass commitee, then im gonna try and finish a wip i had way for too long

>> No.42239717

>>42238596
My rapidly-dwindling sanity.

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>>42238596
two separate NTR fics because I'm unhinged

also the Holo X hypnosis fic, which does not have NTR

>> No.42240270

How many human sacrifices does it take to summon the First Summer Memory Anon?

>> No.42240353

>>42240270
About tree fiddy

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>>42240270
Jokes aside, I do wonder what happened to him. I recall he briefly appeared a few months ago but when people were surprised at his return and asked if he's releasing another FSM chapter sometime, he vanished again without replying. I hope he returns someday, I don't want to lose any of our authors. Even the Koreans were asking about his story.

>> No.42241066

>>42240270
You'd probably have better luck with an ouija board.

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>> No.42242866

>>42241066
Another writeanon lost to the war in the Ukraine.

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>>42238596
Well now since the thread is Flare themed, I'm gonna try to finish this current chapter before it dies. A little ambitious, but hey, a challenge is good sometimes.

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>>42238596
Actually editing an old story by adding things like commas or changing 'was' to 'is'. I'm not making any changes to the (awful) narrative but upon rereading it, the horrible grammar and constant switch between present and past tense made me want to scream. Very boring work but I can't resist.

>> No.42243361

>>42243290
What fic is that anon?

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>>42243361
It's an already published story about some dumb cunt that's out for revenge or somthing. The setting is a really relaxed and non-threatening post-nuclear apocalypse.
I went to read through some of the older chapters of Holocalypse because I had forgotten things I needed for chapter 7, and ended up cringing the fuck out, which lead to this minor, in-progress edit.

>> No.42244577

>>42243672
I'm glad you're working on it again. I love Holocalypse.

>> No.42245601

Hagswith shota

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>>42238596
Character sheets! Hopefully they're all done this weekend so I can edit the outline and continue writing the story next week

>> No.42246772

>>42245657
>Character sheets
What fic are you writing that character sheets are a relevant factor to slowing down your writing?

>> No.42247257

>>42246772
It's a fic with Ame, Ina, and Kronii in it, and I'll be spending at least 100k words with them through this story so I might as well go full autismo on it. Already finished up the first sheet, so two more to go, just so I have a good idea of how they are as characters as I knock the fic out

>> No.42247852

>>42247257
What system are you making them under?

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>>42247852
I dunno about a specific system, but my character sheet is divided into two parts. First part is a questionnaire about their goals, psychology (mask and counter-mask) and how they interact with other people. Second part is an autistic list of trivia relating to them like birth date, favorite animal, favorite porno, shit like that.
But I'm just giving those three the full treatment. Other major characters will probably just get the first part. But I'll write the story out more before I do that. So, so far it's been a process of write>edit character sheets>edit outline>edit what's been written>write again. Then when the first draft is done, copyedit and proofread the whole damn thing

>> No.42248933

>>42248343
100k is a lot. Do you have a good story to tell?

>> No.42249185

>>42248933
Aye, at least three months of work according to another anon here. As for whether or not it's good, we'll see.

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>> No.42250267

>>42249185
As long as you have a story to tell then it shouldn't be too bad.

>> No.42250843

>>42245657
Oh god you liked that game

>> No.42250890

>>42249689
What a strange looking Iroha.

>> No.42251203

>>42250890
That's Fubuki's and Iroha's daughter.

>> No.42251274

>>42249689
>friende gozaru

>> No.42251860

>>42235066
Just like her eggs

>> No.42251964

>>42251860
Eh, she's a half-elf. She's good to breed for some decades to come at least.

>> No.42252985

>>42251964
She's already over a hundred years old though. She's in her early thirties in human age

>> No.42254292

>>42252985
I wonder what she was doing during 1933-1945.

>> No.42254826

>>42254292
I have no idea. Probably at home.

>> No.42255086

>>42254292
She does know German songs...

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>>42254292
>He didn't watch her episode of Holotalk
Jesus It was like watching Triumph of the Will

>> No.42255995

>>42255498
kino

>> No.42257260

>>42233180
EN are made into stress relief toys for HoloJP

>> No.42257303

>>42257260
What kind of toys?

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>>42233140
Evening lads. This one turned out longer than I expected it to. What you're waiting for is coming next.

Auntie's Little Secret. Ch. 4.

https://rentry.org/77kfp

Tags: Shirakami Fubuki, NSFW, /ss/, fluff, grooming, dark

As always, feedback is greatly appreciated.

>> No.42259554

>>42258714
Holy shit, what an amazing morning I've woken up to.

>> No.42262024

>>42258714
“I’ve already ruined his life.”
>And then, you tug on her shirt's neck, and you offer her your lips. Fubuki takes your lips into hers, your tongue licks them in an inviting gesture.
>She feels hot.
>"I guess it can't be helped, right?~" She thinks.

What a way to end. Hanna, you're a fucking cunt and three quarters and I'd like nothing more than to feed you through a mandolin. Less of a thrill ride than the previous chapter, but still god damn excellent. Getting more erotic by the second, too. I love this aura of constant lust they've got around each other. Feels like they're going to get more and more ballsy until one of them slips up and they're caught.

By now it's a customary attitude but still - fucking holy SHIT, I cannot wait for the next chapter. I'm hooked on every word.

>> No.42263437

>>42238596
Mio sex.

>> No.42264529

>>42238596
Okayu getting spanked for bad behaviour.

>> No.42266958

>>42258714
I'll read this when I have the time.

>> No.42269328

>>42258714
Ugh, I still can’t get over the feeling of looming dread and melancholy this story manages to portray. You’re doing a stellar job, auntieanon.
The shifts from (you)r perspective to Fubu‘s have gotten cleaner as well, so I’m glad you have taken that to heart.
What I still can’t quite grasp in terms of character drive is why Fubu’s actually lusting for Anon. The immense love she feels I get, as well as the way she sees him as a sort of surrogate son, but why she actually feels attracted to him is a bit lost to me.
Same with Hana’s motivation. She seems a bit too flip-floppy between hating anon and then getting jealous of Fubuki. From what I see, she should be glad to have her in-law take care of him. Why would she want to have a son at home she doesn’t like just to then not take care of him? Just to spite Fubuki? I guess women can be like that, but it seems a bit too on the nose and plot convenient.
But that’s already really nitpicky of me - maybe just my personal preference, too. Anyways, looking really forward to the next chapter and hoping that collage anon can finally be messed up, but happy with his auntie

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>>42238596
Ready or Inat, but I may have gone a little overboard with some ideas

>> No.42269968

>>42262024
Thanks for the read, and also the suggestion Anon!

>>42269328
>What I still can’t quite grasp in terms of character drive is why Fubu’s actually lusting for Anon.
When this was still a WIP, it was about Fubuki coming to terms with her pedophilic tendencies and just grooming you, so everything spurted from that. I also have a bunch of fluff scenes where Fubuki slowly begins falling for little anon as they go, all mixed with her darker side.
As for her lust escapades, I've toyed with a couple of concepts, none that I've given enough thought just yet, but the main one was hinting that Fubuki was a victim of abuse herself, and that she's perpetuating the cycle herself
And as for Hana (blogpost warning) She's based on a real person I know, and one of the most foul people I ever met. She had a son to try and pin down a man that would provide for her and her other two, both of which came from different fathers, she was horrendous with money and would often steal from her own children because she felt as if they owed her, and despite being extremely manipulative and pretending to be super caring for them, she would destroy them verbally to the point they'd crumble inside so they'd stay in line. The person I'm talking about lost the keys to her store once, and in a fit of anger, she told her 11year old son that she wanted to die so she wouldn't have to put up with him anymore, all because he forgot to get his school uniform ready Hana is written after the kind of person who takes her anger on others and always covets ill intentions, but is actually too much of a pussy to actually stand up to her problems, and seems to enjoy her own misery to the point she'd perpetuate it simply so she has something to complain about, some sort of "scar" to show off.

Of course, the character's been amplified for fiction purposes, and if she came off exaggerated, I'll have to own it.
>Spoiler
Oh Anon...

Thanks for reading, Anon!

>> No.42270834

>>42250267
Just got some free time again. Thanks, anon. Hopefully it turns out as something I can respect
>>42250843
Yeah, for what it is, I found Hi-Fi Rush to be pretty good. Never found a hack-and-slash with rhythm based mechanics before, and I liked it

>> No.42270931

>>42269968
>also the suggestion Anon!
N-no. Unless you're planning on killing off Hanna in a decidedly grotesque manner, I definitely did not make a suggestion there. Certainly not to the effect of them being caught and their relationship prematurely ending. That would be bad, see? Very bad. Don't want that at all. Just forget I said anything, okay?

>> No.42272102

>>42270931
Wtf is this behaviour

>> No.42272228

>>42272102
Wtf is with this post??

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Robert cop is tired from writing all day.
Are you?

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>>42274777
I ain't done yet! I've got just a little more to write and I can finish up this chapter, and I'm gonna do it tonight!

>> No.42276013

Thread sure is slow today.
So, anons, read anything good recently? Any ideas you're toying with?

>> No.42276275

>>42276013
go outside

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>>42276013
>Any ideas you're toying with?
I've combined two ideas for Botan fics I've had for a while into one, which I may write at some point.

Botan's having an affair with a Black Division member(You), when she has a feral relapse that results in her killing someone and nearly killing her boyfriend before you intervene. The purely physical relationship the two of you have begins to gain an emotional edge after that, which (You) always wanted but Botan was only really interested in sex with a handsome soldier boy

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>>42276013
i wanted to make a spoof about the latest ministry stream but i dont think i have the comedic chops to make it
the idea was
>Hayko finally works off his debt of 4 million dollars
>his first paycheck, after taxes, is fifteen argentinian cents
>a small scene with Goonposting (HEY ITS DA BOSS!) that would end with a bat popping out from the ceiling and everyone screaming ITS DA BAT!''
>''Hey boss can you give me a lift'' *buffson benchpresses him* ''thanks boss''
>he goes out in the street and zeta, who learned that he's out of debt, comes to scam him once more
>But anya also wants to
>''i only have fifteen argentinian cents!'' ''THAT MAKES YOU THE RICHEST MAN IN INDONESIA''
>some joke about Anya and Zeta sharing him because they are muslim
and i didnt know how to end it, so that's all i have.

>> No.42278223

>>42276586
>Spoiler
I read that as fetal relapse at first, and wondered how the hell that would lead to her killing and nearly killing another person.

>> No.42278237

>>42233140
Fucking retarded story I decided to write for funsies. If some decides to read this please tell me how I did on the action and the gore. I would really appreciate it. Otherwise, enjoy what might be the strangest crossover fic in hololive fanfiction.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQObN2jrI9fuPA8wYyq42cetzNPdB8mnNAmI-S1KKvA1VTOMnD4XlBRce5CKqNd1bcaIy1ujznTKKz4/pub

Tags: SFW, Comedy, Gore, Kiara, Crossover, Ajin, Sato

>> No.42280152

>>42258714
Didn't have the time or inclination to knock one out prior to the gym but now I'm home I nutted fucking hard to this

>> No.42280363

>>42258714
hot
the only problem is that im not into NTR and i feel really sad for the husband (which i tend to imagine as shinri from tempus), i hope he gets a happier ending than fubuki and anon
i love the story but i hope you dont plan to rush the story or do anything that ruins the anticipated ending (sakura summer...).

>> No.42280499

>>42276013
i just watched tusk and now i want a similar story involving /become/

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>>42280499
Unfortunately, everyone here hates /become/, anon. So, you'd have to write it yourself, and your only response will probably be something like "kill yourself tranny" or "fuck off schizo".
A shame, but what can you do?

>> No.42281702

>>42280152
Thanks! There will be more smut to cum.
>>42280363
Sucks to be Kenji.
I will take my time with it, I know is the ending sequence I want and I know it needs more chapters

>> No.42281867

>>42280730
> anon with strange request comes to/wg/
> people assume it's ironic and love it
> 20 fics made about it in a week
> original anon gets comfortable and shares extra info
> people realize it's not ironic
> no more fics made of it again
It's happened with shit eating and it's happened with become when people realized most become members wanted to transition

>> No.42282160

>>42280730
everyone hates /become/ because it started as a ''haha schizo joke'' and it quickly morphed into rp tranny shit that leaked to other threads.
dont try to play the victim card when become faggots invaded nepolabo and yonkisei threads to shill their weird obsession

>> No.42282250

>>42281867
There's also the sapling stuff but after PF /wg/ didn't fall for the ERP

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>>42233180
Kaela tries to seduce you but her ESL condition doesnt help one bit

>> No.42286001

bump

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contributing to the thread, I hope you guys enjoy, it's my first serious attempt at an erotic fiction. https://files.catbox.moe/20xzhn.txt excuse the formatting I did this on openoffice then turned it into a txt for easy reading... Even if you don't know these vtubers I hope you enjoy my work!

>> No.42288780

>>42288041
Anon, my dearest, my autumn flower... You need to write about Hololive chuubas, sweetie. These literally whos will generate you no (You)s.

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>>42288780
It's in third person and has a strong buildup, if you like slow burn it's right up your alley plus it's not that long at all

>> No.42289257

>>42289014
He's just being an ass, write about the chuubas that inspire you to write

>> No.42289610

>>42289014
desu a lot of the pinned stuff is first or second person and it takes me out of it so I'll give it a chance

>> No.42292816

>>42282809
wasn't there a prompt like this with Okayu awhile back?

>> No.42293944

>>42257303
Sexual

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>>42293944
I guess they could use magic to transform them into dildos and such.

>> No.42294734

>>42294071
That's disgusting

>> No.42294840

>>42294734
Onaholes for JP's futa cocks?

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>>42282250
PF?

>> No.42295417

>>42295376
What's with the horribly ugly art?

>> No.42295424

>>42295376
oh no

>> No.42295461

>>42295417
It's the most /become/ sapling I could find

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>> No.42297215

>>42258714
Damn this came out earlier than expected and I gotta say, you knocked outta the park again anon. Your ability to portray this taboo is nothing short of amazing; balancing the erotiscm along with dread and guilt perfectly.
As always, I can't wait for next chapter. Good job.

>> No.42297860

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PKmCXj4SHfM

>> No.42297898

>>42297860
FBK wants the Fuwatame...

>> No.42299117

>>42295376
Love everything this guy makes.

>> No.42300527

>>42295376
Did a schizophrenic make this?

>> No.42302765

>>42242955
Looking forward in reading it.

>> No.42302899

>>42300527
That's just the average sapling.

>> No.42304013

>>42294734
Better than making them out of their bones or something

>> No.42304145

>>42304013
Disagree, imagine anal masturbation penetrating yourself with Watame's femurs

>> No.42304587

>>42294071
I'd like to read about the sex toy forms of holos.

>> No.42304747

>>42304587
>the sex toy forms of holos.
What do you mean, they're already all onaholes

>> No.42305280

>>42304587
That sounds like it would be an interesting 'description' fic ala holofuta but I think it would only work if it's at the scale of something like that holoID cum drink descriptions fic since I'm reasonably certain you'd run out of variations of
>This chuuba has been turned into a (dildo/onahole) and has a (description of hardness/tighness), with a (quirk based off their lore), (quirk based off of their stream persona), and (wildcard that's either a joke or another quirk).
Really fast unless you're really into thinking themed up sex toys.

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>>42292816
i dunno, all i want is autism penguin sex

>> No.42306455

>>42305280
I think it's more interesting with the transformation magic. There's not enough smut from the toy POV

>> No.42306632

>>42258714
Ugh, that first scene is really rough. It feels like the narration was in-between going for something 'in your head' and 'outside narrator'.
Still the plot is really fucking engaging; outside of the rough first scene the prose works really well. Your Fubuki pov is really fucking good, that mix of eroticism and guilt made her segments the most compelling part of this chapter.

>> No.42307349

fubuki doesnt deserve this many stories about her

>> No.42308240

>>42233180
Patrolling the Mojave with Ame.

>> No.42308289

>>42308240
Does she wish for a nuclear winter?

>> No.42308689

>>42308289
Yes, and there should be a scene where the two of you see two bears high-fiving.

>> No.42308924
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>>42244577
It's still on the back burner for the most part to make space for other stories, and I only added a few hundred words to it because of a flash of inspiration birthed from the alternate nightmare chapter I'm also working on. Still, progress is progress.

>>42258714
Alright so I just read this entire series, and... fuck. Despite the smut and overall premise itself being kinda boner-inducing(?), how fucked up it all is ultimately prevents me from getting off to it. It feels extremely wrong and evil, to the point where I don't think I can find it hot. Not that that's a bad thing mind you, strange as that may seem. From a narrative point of view I actually really enjoyed this because of how conflicted and disgusted it made me feel (but again, in a good way). It's definitely a unique experience and I find myself craving more. The highlights for me were the beginnings where present day Anon was going about his adult life. In particular I liked the beginning of chapter four where Anon goes clubbing. As an introvert (mostly), I fucking felt that. I resonated with the way he felt about the situation, especially for when I'm not in the mood.
I do have a few criticisms, like your tense switches to start off with. I didn't seem to notice it in the earlier chapters but at the beginning of chapter four, despite most of the story being told in past tense there's a few present tense sentences and verbs.
>crowds of people swarm by. Someone from your group signals everyone to follow him and you make your way to a cramped table.
>“Come on!” Another one chimes in.
>Groups of all ages are passing by, from high schoolers, college students and people in office getups. The air smells a lot fresher here, untouched by the filth of the club you just were in. It’s not going to be like that forever, you figure, so you take a deep breath and let it fill your lungs. A nice, refreshing breath...
>Fresh air is a relative term, you realize.
As I said I didn't notice it unless I paid proper attention, so it wasn't glaring. One thing that struck me as strange was Anon not knowing how to read, yet it was mentioned that "a girl from his class" had said something to him, implying he goes to school. Unless I missed something I highly doubt someone could go to school for that long and not be taught how to read. Other than that it was just a couple of grammar mistakes and occasionally it was a bit hard to tell who was talking in a conversation.
Nice job, Anon. Thank you for brining something fresh to the table. I both love it and absolutely despise it... in a good way.
GOD, I want every character from every /wg/ story to come together and beat the ever-loving SHIT out of Hana. Holy fuck.

>> No.42309292

>>42308689
And another scene where both of you do a goofy dance to the tune of Jingle Jangle Jingle
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1DD_NCM_RJs

>> No.42309504

>>42308924
>alternate nightmare chapter
Is that the 'nightmare mode' alternate universe thing you talked about from like a year back where it's Holocalypse but the MC is a waste of skin with shitty stats.

>> No.42310036
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42310036

>new vegas gets shilled as this god-game must play that is somehow a relic of gaming
>install it
>It plays like absolute dogshit
>the writing is good but i have to walk 90 years to find an npc to talk
>combat makes me fall asleep
>its not even particularly that funny either
goes to show you should never trust /v/

>> No.42310071

>>42310036
You didn't play it when it came out?

>> No.42310155

>>42310036
i wasnt into vidya when nv came out

>> No.42310198

>>42310155
meant for >>42310071

>> No.42310320

>>42310036
Warhammer, masquerade and New vegas are the holy trinity of ''the fanbase thinks the setting is so perfect they are willing to forgive a mediocre/bad game''

>> No.42310474

>>42310155
Fair enough.
>>42310320
You better not be talking shit about VtM:B

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>>42309504
Pretty much. (You) are weak as fuck and have various health conditions, your companions are either more of a dead weight than Aqua or have apathetic attitiudes towards your wellbeing, and the survival conditions are less than desirable. I'm going to put more of a focus on the apocalyptic setting of the world and the types of early communities that would emerge from the ashes with this version. You know, like an actual nuclear apocalypse story should do.
I tend to struggle with writing heavy-hitting scenes and drama, but I'm hoping that will change with this.
>a year back
Oof... it's that bad, isn't it?
>>42310036
Yeah, you have to mod it to make it run well on the PC without crashing. I never thought anything else about it was a negative back in the day though. Try get through some more of it and play the DLCs if you can. They were my favourite parts... most of them.
Er, chuubas, chuubas... there's actually a FNV mod that adds a new radio station. It exclusively plays Amelia's rendition of "Heartaches by the Number" on your Pip-Boy. Having it is... an experience.

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>42310320
>Warhammer (non-specific)
>VtM:B
>FNV
>"mediocre/bad"

2/10, try harder next time, uncultured swine

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>Somehow finish this chapter in a week
>Time to start on the series landing page
>This is truly one of god's greatest challenges

>> No.42311779

>>42310666
That mod is funny given Ame's history with Fallout. Also, Fallout 3 is unplayable without mods. Nice post Satan.

>> No.42312266

>>42304587
There's fanart of that

>> No.42312295

>>42310036
> play open world RPG
> complain about open world RPG features

>> No.42312994

>>42288041
Wtf this ending sucks

>> No.42313199

>>42312266
Are you referring to the Astel tenga drawing?

>> No.42313333

>>42313199
No just a compilation of EN sex toys

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42314193

>>42297215
Thanks for the read!
>>42306632
Could you be more specific as to what you found rough about it?
>>42308924
I have no excuse for my tenses, as it is my inner ESL shinning through.
I've always written in past tenses, so I switched it up to see how it would affect the scene I'm trying to paint, while doing some editing I did notice time and time again that they get muddled up in certain parts, but I'm trying to improve.
>. One thing that struck me as strange was Anon not knowing how to read, yet it was mentioned that "a girl from his class" had said something to him, implying he goes to school.
You didn't miss anything, I did.
I intended for that section to be set years back. In that scene, Anon is around 6 years old, while the premise (as seen up until now) is when he's around 9, approaching 10.

Thanks for the read, and for taking your time to write feedback!

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>>42233140

Idol Steps

https://rentry.org/cws3g

Kronii is pressured into putting on her idol outfit in front of Council and A-chan. She's worried the other girls will laugh after seeing her in such frilly, girly clothes, but the reality is much worse.

Tags: Kronii, forced idolization, humiliation

>> No.42315552

>>42314312
I'm mad she doesn't show her tits.

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>>42299117
Me too, sapling threads are full of SOVL

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>>42314193
>Could you be more specific as to what you found rough about it?
It's mostly the tense trouble combined with awkward narration. The roughness mostly comes from the prose.

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42317650

>>42314312
This was really hot and the perfect level of humiliation/degradation that I like. Nice work!

>> No.42319886

I have a love-hate relationship with editing. It's never enough for me.

>> No.42321158

>>42281867
People really are writing fanfiction online and unironically getting mad at others for having wish fulfillment in theirs. The absolute state.

>> No.42321178
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42321178

>tfw you can't concentrate on writing and it's been 30+ minutes of getting sidetracked by absolutely everything

>> No.42321288

>>42321158
The post you replied to wasn't about getting mad, it was about not fulfilling more requests from others anymore. Anyone writing their own degenerate fetish fics is welcome.

>> No.42321570
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>>42321178
Take a little bit to reset yourself. Do something unrelated to both writing and whatever was sidetracking you for a little bit, and see if you come back refreshed to get down to writing. I know you can get back into it.

>> No.42321848

>>42321178
Try the pomadoro technique.

>> No.42324204

>>42321178
Go outside for a bit.

>> No.42324351

>>42321178
Just turn off your fucking wifi for as long as you have an empty page.
It's easier to write once you get over the hump and have something written down.

>> No.42325003

>>42280730
You could go ahead and kill yourself. You won't have to worry about it ever again, and you'll probably even get to meet Lamy, wriggle up her arse and wear her like a suit, too. The rest of the world will be spared having to listen to your schizophrenic bullshit; it's a win-win no matter what way you look at it.

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>> No.42327865

>>42327361
My (based) wife making artfags seethe.
Isn't she cute?

>> No.42327919

>>42327865
simps'll defend anything huh

>> No.42328139

>>42327919
"Good artists borrow, great artists steal."
-Pablo Picasso

>> No.42330792

>>42314312
i really liked it. I was expecting hot lesbian sex gangbang but hey, cant win them all

>> No.42332150

>>42328139
That's why he's fucking dead

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>>42332150
>tfw he stole his own life

>> No.42334049

>>42332150
I don't drink water because everyone who ever has has died.

>> No.42334218

>>42334049
Well I drink water because everyone who ever hasn't has died

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42336083

Ollie's new outfit is super cute. I want her to pretend to be a ninja to sneak into my room and steal all my semen

>> No.42336431

>>42336083
>indog
No.

>> No.42336775

>>42336431
You don't get a choice, she's stealing it

>> No.42336905

>>42336775
What's she gonna do with it anyway? She's a dusty bitch.

>> No.42337175

>>42310036
Unless you played it when it released or you're willing to mod it to make it run decently, I suggest you better wait for the Fallout 4: New Vegas mod instead.
FONV is a product of its time. It was a hell of a lot better compared to other FPSes and RPGs that came out in 2010, but saying that it still holds up to this day is an opinion of someone wearing rose-tinted glasses.
Don't get me wrong though; FONV still has an atmosphere that I'm convinced nothing else in its genre has matched to this very day

>> No.42337782

>>42337175
I played only Fallout 4 and Fallout NV for the first time last year. As someone completely new to it, the game was really fun, but I cheated my speed to like 1.5x because there's no sprint for whatever stupid fucking reason. The game was literally unplayable to me until I changed the player walk speed. After that it was all good.

>> No.42337810

>>42337175
>''kamige'' actually needs mods to be playable
thats the reason i will never touch masquerade, no amount of ''no dude its actually perfect and kino'' can excuse ''no you see, the game isnt finished, the combat is ass and you need this modlist''

>> No.42338835

>>42337782
If you think that walk speed is unbearable try playing the first three Halos or Morrowind.

>> No.42342971
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42342971

Sit down and write. NOW!

>> No.42343017

>>42342971
im watching my oshi play agame soda, please have mercy

>> No.42343032

>>42342971
You first.

>> No.42343127

>>42337782
Funny enough, there's a Fallout NV sprint mod, bundled with the mod author's other QoL mods like a grenade button, etc. I recommend it.
>>42337810
True. VTMB was also a product of it's time. It didn't deserve those low sales numbers on release though because it was great. Just don't compare it to current games.
>>42342971
Yes, right away; I still got to crank out a few pages before this doctor's appointment

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>>42343017
Your oshi doesn't deserve such a weak blooded follower.

>> No.42343244

>>42343127
I couldn't get mods to work for whatever reason it was. So I just used the cheat thing. I don't know why but I quit right after entering the last DLC, and never felt like playing again.

>> No.42343548

>>42343244
>I couldn't get mods to work for whatever reason it was.
Are you technologically illiterate?

>> No.42343672

>>42343548
Yes!

>> No.42344024

Hard and sharp are words that don't flow well together. I wonder if they occupy the same genre of identifiers, I never really studied that

>> No.42344079

>>42258714
I still can't believe this was originally an idea you were going to throw away

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>>42233140
HoloJourneys Chapter 18: A Forest of Tricks

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSudvpa5jdTp3lShsADwBz8RGyK5KUWGoiq_gnNtx8y-pNJyy3lPrOCLnqykXY8M7TapmQMUumx4XvR/pub

Tags: (Watame, Flare, Polka, Nene, SFW, Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Fluff)

HoloJourneys Series Landing Page

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTusE1zMaWb9jlMkAF0bnIlwyqwjXi3MiZGQw6BxcV-EsaU8e3W9IaEImzcrf6c-yQUiIe7Zm7XmkEE/pub

Here's the next chapter and my attempt at a series landing page. It feels like I blasted through this chapter, but I just built a fun momentum despite having to redo some sections a couple times. I'm really excited for what I get to write next, so hopefully the I can keep this pace.
Any feedback is always welcome, and please let me know what you think of the landing page. I hope it's helpful to anyone who might be interested, I honestly had some fun writing it up. Shout outs to the anons who encouraged me to give it a go.

>> No.42344582
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42344582

> once wrote 4.7k words of smut in just one scene
> now struggle to go beyond 900 words
Goddammit I'm gonna have to study my old writing aren't I?

>> No.42345137

>>42344534
i dont read holojourney anon but im amazed at yur discipline
keep the good fight my man

>> No.42345366

>>42344582
Same thing happened with me. I think it’s just what happens when you get better and gain more skill in writing. You can no longer mash out horrible sentences and bad descriptions since more thought is going into your work, and that just takes more time.

>> No.42345783

>>42343244
I'm the anon from earlier. That's a big oof. Try using Mod Organizer? Or... Vortex?

>> No.42348737

>>42336083
she's too clumsy to sneak

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>>42342971
B-but Soda-Dono! I have a standing desk!

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42349046

>>42348737
>Tries to be cool and seductive
>Is too much of a clumsy dork to take seriously like that
That's even better, to be honest.

>> No.42349171

>>42344582
If what you're writing is starting to be a struggle then put it down until you're motivated to come back to it
No point writing for fun without the 'fun' part

>> No.42350094

>>42314312
Based A-chan. Too bad she didn't tease her nipples harder.

>> No.42350219

>>42349171
NTA but the actual process of writing is only sometimes fun for me. The real fun part is reading my finished work and feeling proud of myself, and hearing what others think.
It’s like cooking; the actual process of preparing food isn’t fun, but the taste of the food and the faces of the people I feed in the end is the reward.

>> No.42351133

>>42314312
I guess you really didn't put Sana in it
It was a good story though, you communicated Kronii's shame really well

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>>42350094
>A-chan relentlessly touching Kronii's nips until they are rockhard
>then moving to the clitoris
>the photo of the end being one of a disheveled Kronii standing on a puddle

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42353638

> only 4am
> already too tired to keep writing
I miss being a young lad.

>> No.42354716

>>42342971
maybe later...

>> No.42356023

>>42342971
On it.

>> No.42356685

Why is life so horrible unfulfilling?

>> No.42356927

>>42356685
Idk man but the answers aren't in a message board thread about writing smut fanfiction for autistic anime girl streamers

>> No.42358025

>>42356685
Sounds like a you problem.

>> No.42359152 [DELETED] 

>>42356685
Because niggers exist. Niggers are the source of all malcontent and suffering in the world. They should never have been enslaved and brought to civilization - such was a fate far too good for them. Instead, they should have been purged from the face of this planet the moment the white man first set foot on tainted soil.
A life spent killing niggers is a life worth living, anon.

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>>42359152

>> No.42360664

I'm starting to realize that I have developed an amazing talent for taking a simple premise and turning it into a complicated mess. It didn't used to be like this...

>> No.42360679

>>42360664
Details

>> No.42360696

>>42360664
Just keep adding ingredients, it’ll be fine. Trust me bro.

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>Format PC
>Forget to back up some out of folder WIPS
>Rentry links get lost as well

Dang.
I can rewrite them but still.

>> No.42361016

>>42344079
Funny how writing urges are, aren't they?

>> No.42361091

>>42360679
I take a simple premise with a few key scenes in mind and start writing. Eventually I start to see faults in the pacing or ways to make the characters actions make more sense. Repeat repeat repeat. Suddenly I hate the WIP because it's ballooned out of control.

>> No.42361164
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42361164

>>42361091
Clearly the solution is to keep escalating. Add dice to your writing process somehow. This should cause it to loop back around to being simple.
Trust me.

>> No.42361178

>>42361091
You're just overthinking it. Listen, it doesn't matter what you do in life - for everything, your first idea is always a 'first revision'. You'll always compound upon it and see the flaws in it, and for lengthier projects, you'll find yourself identifying flaws you didn't see earlier as you gain more experience.

>> No.42362653

Are there any resources to getting into writing?

>> No.42362665

>>42362653
yeah, the archive and google docs

>> No.42362920
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42362920

>>42233180
Getting jumped by HoloX

>> No.42363212

>>42362920
This looks like 4Kids removed Chloe's gun

>> No.42363264

>>42362653
You should be able to find a lot of them online - /wg/ fanfics aren't that special outside of the use of frequent 2nd person perspective.

>> No.42363482

>>42362653
Supposedly "On Writing" by Stephen King is a good resource.

>> No.42363552
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42363552

>>42362653
There are resources that can help you better your writing in an objective way, such as vocabulary or painting a scene. As for writing itself, you either enjoy it, or you don't. If you want to write something, do it, a short story, a poem, a piece of dialogue, etc.

If you're looking for resources to get started or better your prose or such, then read Bird by Bird by Lamott and Letters to A Young Poet. They have some solid advice.
Read lots of books as well, that way you can shape your own style by seeing what you like and what you don't, but read with the intent of reading, not just finishing a book.

And lastly, write. You can't get good at it if you don't. Your first writings are going to be shit, and you'll look back at them and cringe, but that's part of the process.

Ganbatte!

>> No.42363643

>>42363482
It's a fun read, but it taught me more about working in a paper mill in Maine than it did about writing.

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>>42345137
That's the plan bro. You keep it up too!

>> No.42366155
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42366155

Fics you're waiting for?
I want anything by MatthewAnon honestly.

>> No.42366239

>>42366155
Holofan pure black

>> No.42368348

>>42233180
Wrangling the retarded chuubas because they can't take care of themselves.

>> No.42368705

>>42366155
At this point it'd be foolish to hope for a sequel to A Brat's Punishment...I guess any SM fic (sequel or otherwise) where the chuuba sub is kinky and bratty would be fine. No doormats and no strong power bottoms.

>> No.42369196

>>42366155
the HFxCH crossover episode

>> No.42369351
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>>42233180
Anything with armpits

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Iofi's new outfit is really activating my neurons
It makes me want to make a fan sequel to Extrapedestrial or just something original about Iofi

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>>42369586
Iofi is an underrated gem.
>cute and pretty even with her mid default outfit
>supportive friend to her genmates
>thicc ass and nice tits
>probably willing to do all sorts of perverted things

>> No.42370181

>>42369586
>>42369849
STOP

THIS ALIENS BODY IS DESIGNED TO SEDUCE HUMAN MEN IN ORDER TO ABDUCT THEM AND HARVEST DNA SAMPLES. DO YOU WANT TO BE PROBED BY THAT 'WOMAN'?

don't answer that

>> No.42370208

>>42369849
>terrible artist
>leaches off of MaFia (formerly TriNero)
>has a hissy fit when the strongest idol nenechi traces over artwork
>has never recited the shahada
>probably doesn't perform salah

>> No.42370678

>>42370181
I think I would be the one sticking my probe into her harvesting machine

>> No.42371443

>>42370678
>"YES STICK YOUR GENE COLLECTOR INTO MY DNA TRAY"
>Anon stops trusting
>Iofi looks at him
>"Too much?"
>"Yeah"

>> No.42371581

>>42371443
>Brings out a list
>Traces over a line, reads the next
>"Alright, keep going, next one's going to be better."

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>>42371581
>Traces

>> No.42372264

>>42369586
I wrote Extrapedestrial, but if you want to write a sequel to it or incorporate any ideas/parts of it into your own story that's totally fine with me; I don't plan on writing a sequel, and don't even have ideas for one.
I liked writing the story and it is pretty hot to me, but I mostly did it because the prompt was inspiring and Iofi had so few works about her. She's not among the chuubas I watch - and 24/7, serious petplay isn't my top fetish either.

>> No.42372799

>>42368348
Reminds me of an old idea from around last year about it being the post apocalypse with you in charge of keeping a group of chuubas alive.
The twist; They're all behaving like they're still streaming the game they were playing while the apocalypse rolled over the world. Now you're stuck babysitting a bunch of women talking to a non-existent chat and acting like the post apocalypse is just agame they're playing with each other.

>> No.42372917

>>42372799
>"Wow, this build looks pretty dangerous. S-Should I go in, guys?"
>You're screaming no as she just stares off to the side blankly
>"Okay, if you want me to!"

>> No.42375129

Any fics that deal with the topic of disability?

>> No.42375243

>>42375129
There's 3 fics about alzheimer's and one to do with deafness

>> No.42375979

>>42372917
>Nene keeps breeding beetles
>Which are actually mutated gigant beetles now

>> No.42377069

>>42366155
"a deal with the Devil" and the remade ending to "to be 17 again". No, I won't give up on that
As for your wish, I'm working on it. Next week is full of shit though and fairly soon after I'm going on vacation - don't know if I'll get to write much during that.

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>>42233140
First Train and Kafka Stop 17: The Stone

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTTAzCrRWgiWZSISUVUZ1H9dJBFU3MdnERv0fUb57vPlgZTlleMFkVOluSUNM2RKjSNcxdlJxGXWH8Q/pub

>> No.42379295

>>42233128
sugoi

>> No.42379499

>>42379295
Chisai

>> No.42381083

/wg/ is dead... and we have killed it...

>> No.42381230

>>42381083
Or you could've read any of the five stories in this thread instead of complaining.

>> No.42381435

>>42381230
No pulse... zero life signs... it's over...

>> No.42382598

>>42377069
>the remade ending to "to be 17 again".
Funny, because I was going over it today
I'll wait for whatever you come up with next

>> No.42384381

>>42344534
Nobody has read your story yet. Let this be a lesson to you; enthusiasm is no substitute for quality. You're 18 chapters in when this story shouldn't have gone further than 1.

Write something else.

>> No.42384660

>>42384381
not the author but that was uncalled for. Sometimes it's fun to just write something because you want to, not because you need approval.

>>42344534
I'm going to give your story a read here in a bit mate. Don't listen to the faggot above me. Work on what you want to work on. Even if the novel is bad, it's a learning experience for the future.

>> No.42384866

>>42384660
dont answer to threadshitter how many times do we have to tell you that?
him blowing his 5 filipino dollars on a cibercafe is punishment enough

>> No.42384878

>>42384660
That's right, give him a pity (You). He desperately needs it.

>> No.42385017

>>42384660
>Even if the novel is bad, it's a learning experience for the future.
You can't learn anything if you don't get any feedback and it took a threadshitter insulting the author to attract an audience.

>> No.42385358

>>42385017
>You can't learn anything if you don't get any feedback
I see someone who never wrote anything

>> No.42385571
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42385571

So if I were to write another story like Building Block Doll, and no promises here, what sort of things would you like to see and what characters would you like to see?

>> No.42385615

>>42384866
Cybercafe

>> No.42386102

I do not think the lack of response on a series boils down solely to writing quality, as opposed to oneshots. Rather, I believe it's a fate all long running series here are doomed to meet here. The average novel usually cuts under 100k words and there are some stories here that go well above that. Regardless of quality, starting such stories is a commitment that not everyone is willing to make.

Also, this place ain't big at all. Everyone here is still writing for a tiny active audience.

>> No.42386192

>>42385571
none, keep away from my oshis you heathen

>> No.42386197

>>42386102
Except those posting on AO3 as well, right? Unless the audience is small there too.

>> No.42386259

>>42386197
The audience is small there unless you're writing gay shit

>> No.42386305

>>42386259
Does that include lesbian shit

>> No.42386398

>>42386305
It primarily refers to lesbian shit, and less so sausage parties

>> No.42386449

>>42386398
What about lesbians with sausages?

>> No.42386508

>>42386449
There's probably plenty of those, although I haven't gone looking for them so take that with a dose of salt

>> No.42386724

>>42385571
I'd like to see exploration of a derelict, overgrown city and I'd like to see Botan in there.

Catch my drift?

>> No.42386832

>>42385571
You should write a story with Terumi in it since you're both hermaphrodites.

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>>42384660
I AM that author. I've never paid the threadshitters who tend to have a hateboner for my story and the stories of others any mind. This story has always been the kind I wanted to tell, and I have a blast doing it. Even if it doesn't get a ton of traffic, it's still fun, and I enjoy the things I'm creating. I've also noticed that my style, poise, and even plots have gotten so much better since the early chapters of this series. I still look back on my first two arcs and see how I would improve upon them knowing what I know now, and it feels kinda good being able to read them and know I've improved. So I've accepted and even appreciate how my beginning was a little rough around the edges, it just makes what I made afterward and will continue to make shine more.

>> No.42386865

>>42386259
> audience is small there
> post fic on AO3
> 1000 views in a week

Idk bro

>> No.42387290

>>42386865
Add an extra thousand if it's futa or beastaility.

>> No.42387681

>>42386197
With AO3 you can rack up a large number of views but I wouldn't call the audience over there active. Often, the view-to-comment ratio is fucking massive and it's even rarer to get actual feedback within those few comments.

>> No.42387682

>>42386853
>Even if it doesn't get a ton of traffic
None. It doesn't get some traffic, anon, it gets none. Your elongated story has not kept any readers with it, and new chapters will not attract a new audience when they have to go through a lengthy series with a horrid start just to follow along.
This is a mercy kill. You are wasting your time.

>> No.42387876

>>42387681
Seems like the place with the highest chances of many comments is Koreanbro's forum, then.

>> No.42388107

>>42386724
God I didn't even think people liked that story. I will look through my archives and see if I can continue it. I remember being at a loss for how to move the plot in an interesting way but I'm a lot stronger of a writer now than I was then. I'll see if I can continue it.

>>42386832
I've never heard of her. I'll look her up.

>> No.42388317

>>42386449
I wrote one of those "X grows a dick and convinces Y to help jerk her off" stories and it was anomalously popular given how long it took to write. But with that said, anyone who thinks Ao3 is homo central obviously doesn't know about the most prolific vtuber author on the site.

>> No.42388396

Give me your best rape correction story

>> No.42389391

>>42388107
I've only been asking for a continuation since it was released! Let me know if you do or do not decide to give it another crack, because I'd rather not hold onto false hope.

As for a continuation, I'm all for seeing slice-of-life in such an exotic environment with a focus on relationship development. Seeing how they get by day-to-day shadowed by the faded glamour of a bygone era. Campfires, rusty cooking utensils, fruit-bearing greenery growing through the cracks of a former busy highway... that sort of thing.

>> No.42389610

>>42388317
What's with people misspelling easy shit today?

>> No.42390974

>>42389610
What's with you sucking so much dick you could legally advertise yourself as a penis pump?

>> No.42391959

>>42344534
I just finished the chapter, I'm surprised you didn't make a mommy joke when Fauna showed up for a couple seconds but I assume we'll see more of her soon. The section with Pomu was pretty great too, from her god awful pranks and her god damn Yaoi book that made my autistic brain think of Metal Gear Rising for some reason, honestly I should have expected that the hags would just be listening in too since they have a tendency to just be there when Anon is being a tard. I really liked the ending for this chapter too, seeing how the families reacted to all the shit the gang's gotten up to was cute and funny. I think the real highlight of this chapter was Noel and her incredible seething. Now, I'm really curious to know if she's malding so bad that she'll take a boat and try to catch up to the group or if she'll write a strongly worded letter telling Anon to kill himself because he's cucking her. Thank you for the chapter as always anon

>> No.42392119

>>42390974
It pays the bills.
I work under the Queensboro bridge if you're interested.

>> No.42393730

>>42372799
Holy fuck, I thought I was the only one who remembered that.
>”Thank you for the superchaat!”
>”WHAT THE FUCK IS A SUPERCHAT!?”

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>>42344534
>Anon getting Noel's letter

>> No.42394031

>>42386853
>I've also noticed that my style, poise, and even plots have gotten so much better since the early chapters of this series.
If you were to go back and change the first few chapters to make them read better I’d give your series a shot, depending on how much it improves. The only reason I didn’t pick this up is because the beginning wasn’t written very well, and then the chapters started piling up and I decided it wasn’t worth reading through that much if the quality wasn’t going to be great. I do respect the effort though.

>> No.42394150

>>42392119
Kudos for rolling with it. You're alright.

>> No.42395043

>>42386865
I guess a better word would be 'uncaring', it's weirdly consistent for multiple fandoms that ao3 has no review or comment culture on the site itself. You get likes/kudos but that's pretty much it unless you're an author that's somehow gotten a 'fandom' of people following you just for your writing.

>> No.42395160

>>42395043
Now why does that sound oddly familiar...

>> No.42395385

>>42361016
Absolutely, no motivation one minute then surging the next and vice versa. Personally I'm praying to God, Allah, Buddha and the entire Greek pantheon that your motivation sticks around because this series is great

>> No.42396516

>>42395385
Thoth will answer your prayers.

>> No.42396656

>>42314312
This fic handles the humiliation angle really well; enough that I'm kind of suprised it doesn't go farther.
If you have plans on expanding this/writing a sequel I'd love to read it. This establishes a pretty good baseline for further works in the same vein of kronii forced idolization/feminization.

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>>42394031
I can certainly give that a go. If and when I do, I will likely just announce that I did when I post a new chapter, since I would likely do the rewrite and copy paste over the existing published links. That way it's less of a logistical nightmare for everyone involved. If there's anything specific you thought of that wasn't hitting very well in the beginning chapters that you remember, I'd be super appreciative to hear that feedback. That way I can spruce them up to be even better. Since right now, I would pretty much give a clean rewrite of them, with better descriptors of scenes, actions, expression, and some formatting too. I wouldn't change anything about the content itself.
>>42391959
The seething was probably one of my favorite parts of the chapter to write. That's been on my mind's boiler plate for a while and what will come of it. It also made me realize, in relation to changing the first few chapters. I never fucking gave the family any actual descriptions of their appearance. I'm glad you enjoyed it though. I plan to use more of those little ending intermissions to show what is going on with other groups or individuals in the world at the time.

>> No.42397518

>>42397283
holy FUCK I want to fuck that fennic SO FUCKING BAD

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>>42397518

>> No.42398863

>>42397283
It's not too fresh in my memory, but I recall giving you a review on your first ever chapter if you're willing to go digging. It just felt a bit amatuer-ish and everything was happening way too fast, like Anon accepting the circumstances and diving into a fight way too quickly. It almost felt like the things happening to him were an everyday occurence despite the story telling the reader "this has never happened before".

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>>42398863
Believe it or not, I remember that. I can't remember though if that was when chapter 1 was originally a 2 parter, or when I reworked it the first time to be one singular piece. Well that's kinda reassuring that one of the things I seek to do with the rewrite is to better show Anon's thought process and put more detail into the flow of the events.
>Make anon piss his pants a little more
Can do.

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> keep coming up with grand ideas
> never finish any of them

>> No.42402684

>>42386259
This is hilarious. AO3 dwarfs this thread by several orders of magnitude. People there are also not afraid to read several words either.

>> No.42406436

>>42400506
literally me

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>> No.42412695

>>42397656
fennec sex...

>> No.42412794

>>42388396
What was that Shion one? Credit where it's due?

>> No.42412921

>>42412794
Unfinished and is unfortunately going to stay that way

>> No.42414479

>>42388396
Can't go wrong with Ui-Mama Rape Correction or Gawr Being A Brat

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>>42366155
there was an anon looking for sapling fic ideas awhile ago...

>> No.42417194

Kiwifruit tastes great. I really like it.

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>>42417194
I brought you this shiny apple, enjoy.

>> No.42417664

>>42417194
Next up, try caju, guaraná, açai and mandioca

>> No.42418103

>>42417664
The taste of poverty.

>> No.42418133

>>42418103
literal Icecream fruit with a funny c

>> No.42418255

>>42417664
>all native to brazil
Gee I wonder who could be behind this post

>> No.42418291

>>42418255
Has it been more than three days already?

>> No.42418315

>>42418255
hey mandioca is paraguay stuff, hues are just borrowing it

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>>42366155
The Ready or Not Ina fic

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>>42418315
I just wanted to include as much stuff as possible that gringos never tried and never will. Mandioca is common all over South America. Batata com Pepino (vtuber) was talking about this stuff which always reminds me

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>>42418408
i mean Mandioca/Yuca/Tapioca is all over the world but yeah sure

>> No.42418558

>>42418408
The nationalistic pride you exhibit never fails to make me laugh. You're living in Brazil. That's the rebuttal to end all arguments right there.

>> No.42418560

>>42418359
I'm working on it!

Shout out to Gemini Home Entertainment btw, gave me a lot of ideas for stuff

>> No.42418622

I wanna write smut about kronii maybe 1200 characters max but I need a scenario help a brother out or I'll just write about maplestory

>> No.42418660

>>42418622
Write about maple story.

>> No.42418680

>>42402684
I really need to start going to AO3

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>>42418622
Smut about Kronii getting fucked by Nurgle

>> No.42418748

>>42418622
Kronii goes back in time to fuck her senpais as bab- I mean as lolis

>> No.42418789

>>42418622
dry humping. that's something no one has written here
>>42418714
why do w40k niggers always force their shitty memes everywhere? you fucks go to every thread under the sun and spam your unfunny garbage, i cant even have a break here

>> No.42418811

>>42418508
Explain the lack of farofa then

>> No.42418825

>>42418660
ok I'll write about kronii in maplestory

>> No.42418840

>>42418560
Well fuck.
I mean well can't be worse than getting Deep Root disease right?

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>>42418789
>why do w40k niggers always force their shitty memes everywhere? you fucks go to every thread under the sun and spam your unfunny garbage, i cant even have a break here

>> No.42418876

>>42418789
They're the bronies of /tg/. 40kiddies gotta spread their shit everywhere and go on about how great it is.

>> No.42418932

>>42418789
>bro le epik space nazis are so cool xdxdxddx
warhammer is for manchildren who want to be edgy and cool but breakdown into a criying mess the second someone makes something fun with their plastic toys
Most of them have a meltdown when they see you play with custom pieces/custom paintjobs that are not ''lore accurate''

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>> No.42419016

>>42400506
Literally me, but everything I've ever done in my entire life, instead of just writing.

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>>42418840
It is a struggle to not just put the shifting tendons bit in for a scene. I probably fucking will anyway because it's fantastic

>> No.42419099

New thread
>>42418775

>> No.42419206

>>42418932
Hey they need to cope for their absurdly overpriced shit. I could get some damn nice model kits for the price of some small army men. I presume it's the glue fumes rotting their brains.

>>42419038
Oh most definitely. But Ina pulling off some of the Woodcrawler shit would be perfect too. Also going for the humans going Takodachi at the end as the result of the encounter?

>> No.42419216

>>42418622
Can i interest you in kronii armpit sex?

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>>42419206
Sort of

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>>42344534
Great Chapter as always. I'm really curious to see what kind of role Council will play with the whole "guardian spirits" thing. The Pomu's and Noel's bits were hilarious to read, anon just can't win doesn't he?

Btw didn't expected the Midnight Tales story actually "happened" and that for some reason Koyori saw everything. She's way more twisted than I thought

I look forward to seeing how the storyline with "The" Pomu will develop

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