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Story recap! There... were five story posted in the last thread.

is it ok to not fantasize about Pink Cat?: tags: Nyanners, NSFW, /ss/, Gangbang, Bukkake: >>37342599

You look cuter when I'm drunk: tags: Nene Amano, Lua Asuka, Reina Sun, NSFW, Drunk, Slight femdom:>>37396777

SEX WITH HAGS: tags: Okayu, Korone, Mio, Fubuki, bdsm, anal, spanking, oral, mommydom>>37399745

Sapling greentext: tags: Sapling, Fauna, mental illness:>>37422402

Anthology of Sapling Greentexts and Shitposts: tags: anthology, saplings, fauna, mental illness: >>37424918

Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

Fic about having a kemonomimi chuuba as a pet slave:>>37304307

UOH BRIBING GURA WITH ICE CREAM SANDWICHES AND COOKIES TO LET YOU FONDLE HER PLUMP FEMALE SHARK KID BODY ToT:>>37310473

Nodoka discovers your plan to ask out one of the Holo's and has to intervene per her contract:>>37315927

I can't believe Ina would do something so brazen as to get (You) to help Gura practice all the different types of kisses there are.:>>37325974

Locking Shondo in your basement and slowly cannibalizing her over the course of several weeks, taking care to keep her alive:>>37344734

Stumbling out a bar with Marine and fucking her senseless in a nearby alleyway:>>37412769

An essay about why X is the most Y. Some non-biased examples:>>37416952

Using the cramped confines of the train to molest your girlfriend Mori's massive badonkers.:>>37431363

>>37434556
>Confess your sins Edition
I want to like Noel but she's too much of a whore, she's got a yeast infection in her cunt at least two thirds of the year

>>37435047
You have her confused with Marine

>>37434556
I love marine so much bros. She’s trying to save our eternal soul from damnation, she’s such a nice and sweet girl.

>>37434556
Any religious docs in the archive or in the works?

>>37437687
What do you mean? Would you like a sermon written in such a way as to reference vtubers? Or are you expecting false religious texts containing vtubers? Or just fiction that makes reference to real religion?
What are you even asking for?

As much as chuuba fic inspires Fans I don't think we've really had anything with a religious bent outside of that nun corruption concept/greentext earlier this year

>>37438732
Playing the last chapter of Faith gave me an idea for a story involving Kanata and the various devil/vampire/etc. chuubas. But it needs more meat on its bones for now.

>>37438837
Is Faith any good?

>>37438837
Planning on making something spooky/normal horror or are you going for a more schizo-religious horror thing?

>>37439257
I liked it a lot. Good spooks and the rotoscoping looks great.
>>37439327
Schizo-religious horror. Right now the preliminary idea is to put (You) in the role of a priest, though you could just as easily be some random guy if that seems like too much of a ripoff.

>>37434752
Don't do it - she can trap your dick in her mechanical pussy, leaving you completely at her mercy.
Hm, I guess some might like that.

>>37441799
Honestly you're making fanfiction it's probably better to embrace your influences openly rather throwing them out because your afraid of looking derivative.

>>37441799
Did you see that Towa prompt the other week? It was HEAVILY Faith inspired.

>>37443389
The one where you're her childhood friend trying to stop her from destroying humanity?

>>37443656
It was fucking deleted I guess, what the fuck? I can't fucking find it anywhere. The basic premise was (You) are an exorcist called out to a home far out in the Western Virginia woods in the mid 80s (around when home VHS recorders became more affordable) to a hysterical woman claiming she has video evidence that a demon came and took her kids. Cue a recording of two kids playing together in their bedroom when the closet suddenly opens and a woman with purple hair and a spade tail begins to speak with them but the audio's cut - they booth look clearly unnerved and scared by the situation but as the dialogue continues they seem to fall into a sort of trance state, take her hands, and then all go into the closet together - something the mother said should be impossible because it's only two feet deep at best. It was set up to be a horror fic.

>>37444341
You're thinking of this prompt
>>36166059

>>37444619
>In the fucking thread I can't access for some reason
Fuck you Warosu. I knew I should've tried Nyaafuu or something. Yes, that's it exactly, thanks.

>>37444680
I think warosu was under maintenance for a good part of late October which is why it won't appear there.

>Confess your sins
Fuck, now I wanna write a followup to my Nene Amano smut fic that I posted last thread. It was meant to be a one-shot, goddammit !

>>37442367
There's a solution you're not seeing.

>>37439257
I really like it. Not too insane, the scares are well done. Some of the best indie horror you can probably find, and it touches on the rare religious horror in a way that isn't just "RELIGION EVIL"

>>37447521
Do it dayo.

>>37434567
Ayame Nakiri, also known as 'the hottest girl in school', has made it her mission to have sex with every single male student in her grade to flaunt her superiority over the boys at her school, all of which are infatuated with her. All but one. In your eyes, she's nothing but a dirty slut that you would do anything to avoid. So when she approaches you, the last person she needs to fuck to finish her little game, you are quick to reject her advances. Little did you know that doing so would only make things much harder, and upheave your lonely, mundane life into one of chaos, drama, fun and of course, some eroticism. Who knows, maybe you're better off sticking it out until the end.

Our Cures (Total ~65k words)
Tags (I can't be fucked doing them for each individual chapter): Ayame, Aqua, partially NSFW, Enemies to lovers, Comedy, Drama, Female solo masturbation, LOTS of kissing, Male deflowering, Gentle femdom
Chapter 1 (~8k words):
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vR5N4cKLNJpGYtz9a48CrKFp5cX4qcQx22D4erJC7vLOnRWjY3MhqEgEWgJjVW466bFX-zxlwZ1FzgW/pub

Chapter 2 (~12k words):
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSmkPTiYvVl-RF6ARgNogDaq4MgG1IobAoVRDdiE_xzeLEK8rGYXBkI2DiFthdDHVfV2Ap4oHj9jm_d/pub

Chapter 3 (~7k words):
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRE6SLtmTsCCChofDut0lrkAa553H1CGj76SLscRayzl0gNWAsg0pYA6z1XEN6kLKJ17sciZFb0PC8k/pub

Chapter 4 (~10k words):
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vR-RQf1m3I5NE0jJD4A75eGexDdS5USPJBZjLtt8yjZIYzudIM0C67hnwko2Wxwkp0i_1q0GNS2UNO8/pub

Chapter 5 (~13k words):
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQL4iZYyH0Oi5kMwNpdzCnYrWxwXuMcZmMGEVxh2yJ3stmMilpuGl9D0CqzVL7r0KhcOGF_LIr8m7Bd/pub

Chapter 6 (~13k words):
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSyEUniNpd_qMwlBLjA65g7zu8R4ejERYs_e3dpGYNzwhDzQDaU0hc-aqgsiJq26X3Rggb2tk6Ki9NJ/pub

Epilogue (~2k words):
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQITDk52jbY9K9YSttUyM9iibHPKiL7F77U1NjowlITSpoAqSX4jwozEOdEu1Xbf-0u1oTi-FLqkfSA/pub

I'm really sorry for the long wait, I was supposed to finish this shit at 30k words.

>>37449403
God, this is way more Rrat!Ayame than my lonely heart can take. Thank you.

>>37449403
Anon, what the fuck?
You're supposed to release a series like this in chapters over time, not all at once.
That said, I can't wait to read this. I'll be sure to give some feedback once I finish it.

>>37449403
Did you just drop an entire fucking series at once? What a fucking hero, really. Madman. Thanks for the description. I'll add this shit right now.

>>37449197
Alright, I might do it, but fair warning, it won't contain any smut this time if I do go through with it. My idea pretty much went like this: (You) and Nene confess to God about your tryst from the oneshot. Hilarity ensues as God not only absolves you, but admits that He is cool with the whole thing because He finds the idea of a mere human actually pulling off a feat like having sex with one of His messengers too funny to be mad about.

>>37449701
This but God set it all up secretly, for his own amusement. He also embarrasses you by reciting the lustful thoughts you had at the time in your voice.

>>37449894
My sides have reached the fucking stratosphere. Ya know what ? I'm gonna go eat lunch and then I'll decide whether I ultimately go through with it or not.

>>37449894
>>37450091
this, but you see a video recording of the sex that focuses on your facial expressions

>>37449403
Ay yo?

>>37449403
>65k words
>6 chapters plus epilogue
Anon, this is a fucking novel at this point.
Thanks for finally publishing this. I thought you were going to slowly deliver this chapter by chapter but given that this was all already written I can see why you'd take the route of pushing it all at once.
I'll be back sure to give feedback once I read through all of this because because you deserve it for finally getting this to release.

>>37450555
Okay, that's a bit too far from my original concept lol

>>37449403
Just read chapter one and I can already tell I'm going to hate this bitch with all my heart. Her fucking things up with Aqua and then the bathroom kiss scene made me actually gag. It's well written and I can tell there will *probably* be some huge turn around, but holy shit, I felt a spiritual link to this poor bastard in that one moment. The "Oh, that's kinda hot" mixed with "NO! NO NO NO NO-"
Goddamnit, Anon, what've you done?

>>37449403
You magnificent son of a bitch, you've finally done it.

>>37449403
>dumping an entire series all at once
Holy shit, you crazy bastard. I kneel.

I love this guy.

Okay, I've decided: fuck it. I'm gonna do that followup to my one-shot. the idea is just too funny not to go through with it.

>>37452069
I don't get it.

>>37452389
Godspeed (heh) anon

>>37453193
Kek.

>>37449403
I sat down and hammered it out all in one sitting because the first chapter set a hook in my mouth and dragged me from the shallows to the surface. And boy fucking howdy am I glad that I chose to do so, what a fucking ride.
While I initially shared the resentment of Ayame, I somehow found myself connecting to her in an incredibly strange way with regards to the sex shit. It was a little emotionally jarring. I think that maybe she and Anon had a bit of a quick turn around time in the span of a few days, but ultimately, seeing them happy together made *me* happy, though I also was screaming internally over Aqua getting cucked. Words fail to describe the relief in my chest when it was revealed to be fine between the two of them. The actual date filled me with a disgusting sort of saccharine sweetness that resonated throughout the hallows of my heart and left me feeling at peace with this fucking whore. I only wished I shared Anon's ability to press on past anxieties and worries. Having them *actually* fuck was...really, really satisfying in some way. Like, I wanted it at the end, a complete and total turnaround from the beginning where I was mentally chanting 'Headbutt.' as she approached. Your smut, by the by, is fucking mint. The foreplay and build up is is fucking awesome, and is definitely something to learn from! By the time they actually got to bumping uglies, I was fucking sinking my nails into my thighs. The callbacks to the earlier dialogue sprinkled in was an amazing touch. I cannot stress enough that that - and this is as a whole- was some great shit. You better make a fucking sequel, you slimy cunt. You can't leave that epilogue there. I'll kill you. I'll rip you in fucking half. Genuinely astounded that you managed to make Rrat!Ayame appealing to me in such a way, but here we are. Maybe it's all the kissing, since that's totally my biggest weakness... I can genuinely say this is an easy recommendation to almost anyone remotely interested in a nice fluffy series with a healthy nugget of drama within it. You've outdone yourself, and all that extra time and effort has paid off to make a wonderful story. The length to which it was stretched has given it a great chance to let all the punches land - it wouldn't have been nearly as good if it was a mere 30k words. So, rest easy, the wait was worth it. You're a champion.
Mark is the single greatest UK hero left alive and I would do anything to protect his smile for his efforts in forging Anon's. A fucking bro. The king of kings.

>>37451596
I wish I had half his work ethic. Gonna start working on my WIP pile of shame after doing the fic I'm working on.

>>37450658
What a cute king

>>37434567

HoloJourneys Chapter 9: A showdown with a secret society

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTCBIwcf6NGLnZI7B_2l-xP4vshJYLChaFTTLJgz-2MtFvC-bvjCbKcTcqh_pDpy7_9et-ifJMfTQ4s/pub


Tags: (Watame, Flare, Polka, Nene, Chloe, Iroha, SFW, Action/Adventure, Fantasy)

This has been a fun one to write for sure. I've been thinking about getting HoloX into the mix for a while now, and it feels great to finally get it out there. Any feedback is always appreciated.

>>37399745
This was pretty good, I'm not super aroused by pain, but when it's light and for enjoyment purposes it's hot.

As far as smut for smut's sakes I think what it lacked was an impactful finish for Okayu; she's being edged the entire story by Mio and Fubuki, but when her climax finally comes, all we get is a single sentence - it's kind of blue balling in my opinion. Especially in a third person story I think it's always hot to know how the girl feels during orgasm etc.

But it's good to see you back and writing again, and otherwise I enjoyed it quite a bit.

>>37294119
This was pretty good, definitely worth nutting to although a bit too short for me in particular. But few things are hotter than a girl who's so cockdrunk she orgasms without any physical stimulation at all. Gokkun is hot to me and so is cum play, so I'm sure I'll be revisiting this one soon.

>>37434567
Alright, by popular demand, I have done a followup to my smut fic I have posted last thread. Hopefully you'll like it: https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSWbgoaZgdfT_3rQwImYFAwCce6hE1jZVH07F4gjKjlychUAsAnLAxMy-WTUJo6ILvuAcqbi9N3DExV/pub

Tags: Nene Amano, Semi-NSFW, Comedy, Fluff

>>37434567
Alright, by popular demand, I have done a followup to my smut fic I have posted last thread. Hopefully you'll like it: https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSWbgoaZgdfT_3rQwImYFAwCce6hE1jZVH07F4gjKjlychUAsAnLAxMy-WTUJo6ILvuAcqbi9N3DExV/pub

Tags: Nene Amano, Semi-NSFW, Comedy, Fluff

(forgot to add the image to my post)

So when it comes to more fluff/SoL stories, do you guys write them with Tokyo in mind or what?
I always figured them as an alt-Tokyo or whatever anyways. But now that I'm writing a plot point about cities, I have second thoughts about how "weird" it is.

>>37460477
I don't really make my stories take place in actual real-world locations except when specified, so that's not really a problem for me.

>>37460477
if your chuuba involved is anything that isnt a human, all bets are kinda off for being 1 to 1 with actual locations. If you want to use real locations to give the reader an idea of where things are or what they look like without going into deep detail, that works too. You can ultimately take whatever liberties you want with your city. I doubt anyone would be too anal unless you're doing shit like, Shibuya is now in the middle of the ocean for no reason.

>>37459762
>ywn have The Almighty christen your relationship

>>37464870
Kek, glad you liked it.

>>37464870
To be fair, it's not exactly approved. At least not the sex.

>>37457769
Glad you enjoyed the nuts fic. If I could’ve made it longer, I would’ve, but there’s only so many ways I can describe sniffing and orally worshipping balls and only so many synonyms for testicles I can use before it all starts to blend together.

>>37467422
I feel like Risu could have worshipped the balls with her feet also, but that's probably just me

>>37467472
Not into it, so not the kind of thing you’d get from me, sorry.

>>37467116
Yeah, but He didn’t disapprove either lol

>>37467885
Given the circumstances, being told that more sex would be a problem is much better than being smitten down for sure.

>>37457769
Thank you for the review. To be honest, the ending was kind of the point - to Okayu the entire experience is supposed to be closer to foreplay than sex proper. I might expand the orgasm a little bit.

I like physical pain a lot, but kept it fairly light, considered doing without but "Okayu gets punished for stealing food" was the prompt, so.

>>37467422
True, I struggle with that too sometimes if the story is focused on one thing only, so that's pretty fair.

>>37468102
I see. Maybe I just don't understand that part of dom/bsdm play so that's why it felt lacking for me.

Nah, punishing the fat cat's butt is definitely the way to go.

>>37468099
Kek

>>37434567
This chapter ended up longer than my previous ones, but it was also a lot more fun to write.
I even put in a little world-building Easter egg. Happy hunting!
A Predator's Touch, A Hazy Yellow Line (Part 3)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQVPsZhWoEprE8oP_7Sz3nbM-3-2hAmBU-MwtFyKAiRs2R4-UbGWS7xoyrRdSZgiqGj_DqiChMEWHWu/pub
Tags: Botan, Koyori, Moona, Subaru, SFW
Oh, and don't call the numbers (duh). There's no chuubas on the other side.

>>37449403
It might not be much coming from me who treats most fluff series in the archive amazing but this has to be the masterpiece amongst all of them. Might just be my Ayame bias but I'm really glad she has the perfect fluff story. I really hope for the sequel with the ending being marriage.

Is there anything like rentry but with better formatting? It's not pastebin at least but it's not very good.

>>37459762
This got a bit too long for a regular post, so here's a rentry link instead https://rentry.org/taow.. It came out way harsher than I wanted too, so here's a little metaphor: some people have a gene that makes cilantro/coriander taste like piss/soap for them. They can't do anything about it. If you have one of those persons, let's call him Bob, with 5 other persons in a room, prepare something with cilantro, and ask them what they think, Bob will have a very hard time saying anything positive because all he can taste is piss. That's not because you put piss in, and that won't affect the enjoyment of anyone in the room. Bob could try to sugarcoat the thing by saying "I like the texture here", but he won't, and prefer straight-up saying that he's sorry, he's got this gene and can't eat that. The reason for that is that what Bob is eating is not the meal you prepared, since you didn't put piss in and Bob is tasting piss, and saying anything about the actual meal would have no connection to reality since he's tasting piss. So don't think of it as criticism of your cooking, but more as a way to experience what it is like to taste piss, without having to taste piss yourself.

>>37471705
Seems like in the US you can use XXX-555-XXXX for fake numbers

>>37472952
That's an analogy not a metaphor.

>>37473238
I've looked a bit at the definitions of the two and now I'm even more confused about the differences, so I'll trust you on that

>>37472952
Huh, didn't know that.
Though, its probably fine if I leave it. I checked and there's only a hundred people with those first 6 digits.

>>37473946
It probably is, it was mostly curiosity

>>37473536
An analogy is a comparison whereas a metaphor uses a word to describe something that it usually couldn't. For example, my balls are moons orbiting a thick planet. A simile is the same as a metaphor but uses the words like and as. Hope this helps!

>>37474296
It does, thanks!

Don’t die yet, we haven’t even made it to 100.

>>37471705
This was a pretty good chapter, I liked the tension is the confrontation scene the dialogue and the bolded text did a lot of work while being spaced out enough to be 'balanced' with the rest of the prose rather than overpowering as a lot of amateur uses of bold text turns out for amateur online fiction.

>>37434556
>Marine smothers you with her dump truck ass

>>37482358
Thanks! Hopefully the dialogue was also easier to distinguish this time around.

>>37457423
I really like the execution of magic in this series so far. I also liked HoloX appearing like fucking Team Rocket at first. Undine's weird spirit link thing is neat and has greatp otential for more stuff in the future, too. Like a pseudo Spidey-sense.

>>37468099
The way that I wrote it, I intended it to come off less as more sex being the problem so much as too much of it being the problem. You know, too much of a good thing and all that (and even then, it would only be a problem in the measure that God needs to keep appearances in the face of Lucifer whining like a little bitch about how He's bending His own rules).

My take on God in that fic is that He considerably mellowed out since the Old Testament days and is now a pretty cool guy. But yeah, either way, it's better than being struck down LMAO

>>37472952
Uh...I'm sorry, but I'm not sure if I follow you quite right. You're saying you didn't like it, but that it wasn't necessarily because of something that I did ? Did I get it right ? (also, not to be rude, but maybe try to be more concise next time. Just because I came back from a graveyard shift at work doesn't mean I necessarily have the energy or patience to read a wall of text).

>>37449403
My honest Review is that while i really liked it, the relationship is very rushed time wise (since it would have worked over the extent of a year) and you had ayame vomit out her issues which kinda deflates her as a character. Also this is a personal gripe but aqua kinda adds nothing to the story aside from predictable drama, i personally would have looked into anon fighting with ayame and ignoring her, so both the abandonement issues and the drama could work hand in hand
But i still liked it, nice job anon

>>37480022
Slow day, but it is a Sunday night, so it's not unexpected.

>>37484516
Thanks! I'm glad you find how magic works in this little world I made to be interesting. It's one of my favorite things to expand on and make ideas for. HoloX is such a fun group to write for with the world building I'm going for. I'm looking forward to including them more and all the scenarios I can set up with them. The spiritual links are going to have a lot going on with them in the future, it's a component I've used in a lot of stories I've been a part of and written in the past, so I'm really excited to flesh it out fully and make it even better.

>>37484926
>You're saying you didn't like it, but that it wasn't necessarily because of something that I did ? Did I get it right ?
I'm saying I didn't like it because I don't like at all the way you talk about religion.

>(also, not to be rude, but maybe try to be more concise next time. Just because I came back from a graveyard shift at work doesn't mean I necessarily have the energy or patience to read a wall of text)
Feel free to not read it. As for conciseness, it would make my stuff better but then it would feel like work

>>37490846
Oh, that's it ? Well, sorry, I'm an atheist so that might have unconsciously influenced my writing a bit. You know what they say, writers put a bit of themselves in their work.

For what it's worth, one of the works in my WIP pile of shame is a much more serious urban fantasy fic, and when I do those, I tend to be more thorough in my research when it comes to stuff like that.

>As for conciseness, it would make my stuff better but then it would feel like work
Completely understandable, I was just saying.

>>37459762
>“and Lucifer is already, and I quote, ‘calling bullshit’ over it.”
I don’t know why this line made me laugh that hard, but it did.

>>37496380
Kek.

>>37434595
A second person pov that hides that the person being narrated is actually a chuuba until the end as a last second reveal for the entire fic. (Something like a micomet fic that hides that (You) were actually Suisei, or a fic where (You) are Pekora on that night she got raped by Miko)

>>37484926
>My take on God in that fic is that He considerably mellowed out since the Old Testament days and is now a pretty cool guy.
I physically cringed.

>>37498954
I had an idea for a amnesia fic where the narrator is actually two separate chuubas, one of which is lying and inserting herself into your life, while the other one comes in at other points and paints a much more boring and depressing version of your life. Ultimately I thought it was a neat idea but I didn't have the time to dedicate more to it.

>>37499495
>t. Yid

>>37492849
I'm not very religious either, I just don't really like people taking religion lightly

>>37499642
Wait, I don't get it.
Is this like a chuuba reincarnation thing where one of them is their indie persona while the other is their corpo persona, with the amnesiac being implied to be their roommate?

>>37499642
You're insulting the wrong religion, retard.

>>37499993
No I meant something kind of like this


>You were always a quiet one, but the second you walked in you almost screamed. Silky blonde hair, enchanting ruby eyes, gorgeous sun-kissed skin, and long pointed ears that wiggled up and down in excitement when you were noticed. Noel certainly told you to not even consider it, but there you were. Alone.

>Alone with me.


—-------------

>You weren’t that close with anybody, always kind of a wallflower. Everyone that did see you thought you looked profoundly lonely, though, and you probably heard them saying things like “Marine you should at least go say hi, or thank him for his hard work!”.

>Thought that’d be kind of weird to do out of the blue though, especially since you don’t know me, so I didn’t.

>...Obviously.

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>>37451833
Thanks, I pray it doesn't disappoint.
>>37451287
>gag
Oh uh... that wasn't the intended effect, but if it helped you enjoy the story then that's great.
>>37455536
Trust me man, I have zero work ethic, don't feel ashamed. This has been in the works since MARCH.
>>37452069
I was considering making Mark Oga, but thought that might have been a bit much. His name wasn't even Mark the entire time I was writing this fic and I only changed it about 20 minutes before publishing.

>>37454172
I appreciate the lengthy review, I love reading through these.
>though I also was screaming internally over Aqua getting cucked.
Yeah, after writing her rejection, I wanted to leave it at that but my heart wouldn't let me be that cruel, so I decided to force myself to spend a few thousand words giving her a happy ending too.
>Your smut, by the by, is fucking mint.
Shit, I really appreciate you saying that. I don't write a lot of smut and generally don't think I'm that good, so thanks. I almost did a fade to black, but considering the whole story is based around their sex, I had to write it out. It's good that you liked Ayame in the end but hated her at the start, that was definitely what I wanted the reader to feel about her.
>Maybe it's all the kissing, since that's totally my biggest weakness
Same... that's why I put so much in there. I'm especially a fan of 'undefined relationships' in stories which is why I had them kiss so much despite not even dating.
I'm really fucking glad you liked it, both the story and the slut. Thank you for reading and telling me all this. I'm going to go hibernate somewhere now.

>>37472189
Thanks for reading, I'm grateful that you think so highly of my story.
>Sequel
As I was writing this I actually had some ideas floating around for one, where you and Ayame go to university together but conflict arises when you tell other people how you met. They seem confused at why the two of you love each other, resulting in Ayame wondering if you only started dating her because you were lonely and she was all you had because she was aggressively clinging to you, while you become worried that the only reason Ayame loves you is because you were the only guy that didn't want to fuck her and that she doesn't like any of your other qualities.
It's just a few ideas I'm tossing around, I don't have a solid plan for a sequel yet. >>37454172 Please don't kill me.

>>37485954
>the relationship is very rushed time wise
I guess I can see where you're coming from. I've found in my experience that mutual romantic interest and relationships can develop very quickly sometimes, especially when you see that person five days a week, which is what I tried to imply Ayame was doing with Anon. But you're right, for the sake of the story maybe enemies to lovers in a month was too quick. I don't know about a year since I wanted the story to be autumn themed, but maybe stretching it across three months would have been better.
>you had ayame vomit out her issues which kinda deflates her as a character
Yeah, I was a bit iffy on that part too. I tried spacing the reveals of her backstory out, but they ended up being a couple info dumps and I couldn't think of a way to reveal them over time naturally.
>Also this is a personal gripe but aqua kinda adds nothing to the story aside from predictable drama, i personally would have looked into anon fighting with ayame and ignoring her
Funny you should say this, those were ideas I had going in. Basically, there were two other ways this story could have gone, both of which I was seriously considering; the version i posted is the one out of three that won.
The first was a little less likely to happen, but to be blunt it was going to be NTR. The story up until chapter 4 would be the same, except Aqua would get more development and screen time. Then, you have a proper fight with Ayame where she feels bad but you're pissed off and ignore her, then proceed to ask Aqua out, to which she accepts as Ayame overhears your confession from behind a corner. Cue story ending with you ending up with Aqua as Ayame bawls her eyes out, depressed and regretful.
The second path was actually VERY close to being the final copy. Same story up until chapter 4, you have a fight with Ayame, she feels bad, you get pissed and ignore her, then you go and ask Aqua out. Aqua actually rejects you, saying she doesn't like you that way, causing you to fall into a depression as Ayame overhears your confession. As you sit on your knees, dejected, she approaches and tries to comfort you with a hug. In extreme pain, you tell her you want to have sex to distract yourself, that you'll let her cross off your name from that stupid list. Ayame refuses, despite wanting to fuck, saying that sex isn't what you need right now because she actually cares about your wellbeing. Cue a tamer Ayame spending time with you as you slowly get over Aqua and begin to fall for Ayame instead, eventually ending up with her.
The only reason I didn't pick this version was because it would have required a lot more words after the rejection for Anon's journey to come to love Ayame, and also because it might have made it seem Anon doesn't truly love Ayame because he loved Aqua first, and that she's only his rebound.
Anyway, thank you for the criticism, I'll keep it in mind. While Aqua was always going to lose to the main heroine, I was thinking that Ayame DID need something to spur her on and make her realise her feelings, or else she would have kept the same status quo.

Sorry about all the autism, I wanted to talk about the process this story went through before its completion.

>>37504323
>Oh uh... that wasn't the intended effect, but if it helped you enjoy the story then that's great.
I just share an unhealthy dislike of whores following some shit in my life, so the same sort of thought running through his head during the kiss was sprinting towards mine. Either way, it's a fantastic story

>>37504451
>Sorry about all the autism, I wanted to talk about the process this story went through before its completion.
These kinds of posts are the best thing in /wg/ though. Keep the autism coming

>>37471705
I took a quick look at this and it caught my attention, so I went to look for the previous chapters, then came across 'The Days of Dreams'. What's the difference between that and 'A Hazy Yellow Line'?

>>37471705
I've always thought that Anon in this was insane for routinely making worse decisions and making elaborate plans to keep Botan and the dark, and while he still is for being unfaithful to a woman he really doesn't deserve, I know think for both their sakes she never finds out. Koyori and Anon's now super-awkward relationship is very well-written and believable too.

With the dream and now the basement I'm wondering what Ame's involvement in this is now. I sure hope Anon didn't fuck her too

>>37506152
NTA but those are the names for the 'arcs' of the fic, with hazy yellow line being the current arc.

>>37504323
Seeing the epilogue had me hooked on the sequel so I expected you already had plans but I guess not lmao but I guess

>March
Man it'll be a while before the sequel huh, guess I have extra motivation to not die in the upcoming year

>>37504323
Honestly, some part of me was thinking Aqua would be roped into an Ayame/Aqua/Anon session. Her getting her own happy ending is just as well, though.

> rewatching old Hololive clips
> Luna getting on Subaru's lap and being kissed by her
> Korone fondling Okayu's breasts out of nowhere
> Okayu doing it to her later to repay the favour
Goddamn I love company sponsored lesbian tete...

Upp

>>37449403
goddamn i wanted to spank Ayame so bad. Great fic. Mark is a bro.

>>37419392
Eh, honestly I'm not really opposed to 1st person perspective. It's just that when it comes to reader inserts or well the use of Anon, I vastly prefer second person.
I think first person is perfectly usable for chuuba fic. Stuff like it being the main pov for a vtuber in a fic centered around them, or for completely shameless self inserts.

>>37507876
Straight girls pretending to be lesbians for the money is pretty hot

I guess I'll wait for the secret to be found...
>>37506152
What >>37506949 said. Of course, the previous arcs are linked to the current one.
>>37506815
That's good to hear. This chapter I wanted to establish character dynamics a bit more, especially for koyori.
That pot will boil over soon, best I leave it at that.

I would post some Ayame but I can’t reach my laptop.

>>37499495
Kek, I could have worded it better, couldn't I ? Sorry, I was pretty tired when I came up with that explanation, and that was the best I could come up with.

Besides, it's a followup to a smut fic which I wrote by popular demand (and even said smut fic was written on a whim based on a dream I had the night prior to begin with), it's not supposed to be taken seriously lol

>>37499737
Well, I'm sorry, but that's just part of who I am and unfortunately there's little I can do about it except for doing more research next time. I wish you luck on your future endeavors, be they in this thread or anywhere else.

>>37449403
I really enjoyed this. Like other anons I was sort of surprised at the epilogue and think there could be a whole story there (around Ayame's relationship with her parents) to explore further.

I'd also have liked an anal sex scene.

>>37434595
Botan ahoge correction gone violent.

>>37516101
What would Botan be after she gets her ahoge cut off?
Is the ahoge holding back Botan's violent nature or is she naturally a mewling kitten that's driven to violence by the ahoge?

>>37516261
If you touch it she suddenly becomes Dark Botan and starts asking for burgers

>>37516261
It could be either.
I imagined the story would be about trying over the course of weeks to cut it and failing each time, with each attempt becoming progressively more extreme.
Then it accidentally gets cuts at the end and she un-hags.
If nobody else writes it, I might give it a shot.

>>37516449
Ends with loli Botan sex.

>>37516811
Now that she's weaker than you, you'd abuse your power over her? That's kinda sick, anon.
I know exactly what I must do now.

>>37512610
What the fuck is going on with the basement? And the coat...
I'm stumped, maybe. I thought it could be related to the phone number, but I can't find anything with it.

>>37517997
There's a lot of events I'm hinting at that occur behind the scenes.
As for the phone number, I can't say if you're hot or cold.

>>37516432
This just makes me want to see Botan vs Dark Botan, SA2 style.

>>37520273
I don't know what SA2 is, I was referencing Fate

>>37520302
Sonic Adventure 2

>>37520273
>Jungle fight is just a high octane shootout

>>37516811
Please don't make me do this before I'm done writing loli Polka sex.

>writing general
not bad desu, creativity is what keeps boards alive

>>37525972
>pic
Unironically zoomer's first SoL show. Also get that shit out of here before you get our thread nuked.

>>37526295
>he's never seen AA post
Also, Rozen Maiden is hardly a show for zoomers. They were like five when it aired.
>>37525972
Thanks, friend.

It's never gonna happen but I've thought for a long time that the most kino graduation of all time would be saying the final goodbyes in roommate form (with End of Evangelion-esque direction).

>>37527252
>AA post
huh?

>>37527252
>rozen maiden
Ok, let's not be facetious

>>37527252
>Seen AA post
What

>>37527526
>>37528455

>>37434595
The ghost of an idol you accidentally killed in a hit and run haunts you, forcing you to become a successful musician so she can pass on

>>37529145
Fuck that sounds really cool. Could it be something like a typical haunting or a johnny silverhand-esque possession.

>>37529145
Or what?

>>37516449
Wait is that a mental or a physical thing?
Was the ahoge forcing her to age faster or did it contain all of her hag energies?

>>37531529
Presumably you get haunted

>>37531529
Or she makes you her Chloe.

>>37531601
The latter. She keeps her personality all the same, but she's decades younger.
The length of the ahoge determines her age, and overtime (as the ahoge grows back), she returns to her hag body.
I imagine her desperately trying to prevent you from trimming it, but every time it grows you cut it again.
Cue eternal domination as she's too tiny to save herself.

>>37532643
This makes me think of what happened to Matsuri's ahoge in the original ahoge correction fic.
What happens if the ahoge gets straightened rather than cut off?
Does it just become a pure mental effect while keeping her body the same?

>>37532643
Reminds me of Jahy-sama.

>>37533041
That would make sense, the degree to which it's straightened affects her intelligence.
Now that I think about it, it could also straight-up immobilize her, could allow for some interesting scenarios.

>>37533678
Is that why she doesn't have an ahoge?

>>37533707
So wait, is straighter dumber or smarter?

>>37534637
Well, straighter would be dumber in regards to ahoge.
I feel like since it's Botan, it should also have some other effect. Maybe straightening it also makes her less aloof?

>>37534979
>Hyperactive leololi let loose in your house
No survivors.

>>37535119
>leololi
fuck that's a good nickname. I'm considering that to be the title for the fic, whenever I get to it.
That said, I can't remember the last fic where a loli dominated. Usually they just get corrected.

>>37532643
>Absolutely slamming your hips inside Botan's plump hag pussy
>Snip
>Incredible tightness around your cock as she begins to shrink into a loli, a big bulge in her flat belly as her eyes go wide and she starts squirming and cumming all over you

Emergency bump

>>37535119
Why the racist imagery?

>>37540985
Anon…

>>37540985
Wait until you read Lovecraft.

>>37540985
You must be 18 or older to use this site.

>>37540985
Nigga where the FUCK do you think we are ?

Mumei and fauna
Mumei can't stop crying she is so sad, she doesn't know what's wrong and wants to feel better, but it's so sad she goes to open the door but it's stuck and she is frustrated that she can't fix things but her friend fauna hears her being very sad and comes to ask her. "What's wrong mumei?" Mumei makes sputtering weak noises then hugs fauna and fauna continues to console her until the sputtering noises stop and mumei feels not so sad anymore "there there" fauna says while patting mumei on the back "it will be ok" and mumei doesn't believe her but nods yes anyways

>>37542662
Off your meds?

>>37542910
I just take vitamins I stopped taking meds a long time ago

No discussions? Where is everyone?

>>37546411
Kill yourself, earlyfag.

>>37449403
I finally got to read through all of this, and I have to say it was worth the wait. This is one of the best romance fics I’ve ever read. While your approach to making and releasing this all at once was a bit weird, the fact that it made this as tight and well written as it is made it was well worth it. Even if I would have loved to have seen this as a slow burn fic that was serially released as you wrote it, this was good as well.[/spoiler
I don’t know if this is intentional but you have a habit of long run-on sentences while Anon’s alone. I honestly can’t tell if this is intentional since this completely vanishes when he’s interacting with others. Aside from that, your prose is great. In particular, you have some really fucking good dialogue. The only real nitpick I have is that you sometimes have weird tense troubles alongside a couple awkward sentences.
Other than that, the writing is solid outside of Ayame scenes they feel ‘tell’ rather than ‘show’ with how she narrates it. I guess it’s a necessary sacrifice. As otherwise the word count would have to balloon even higher than what it is now. Because even if I would have loved for it to be even more in depth, I can tell even you’ve kind of gone way past your initial word-count estimations.
That ending smut scene was so good. It ties it all together so well. The echo of the past dialogue and the detail of the emotions and actions made it all go together perfectly. Probably one of the best endings to a fic we’ve gotten in a while.
Also, why the hell is Aqua referred to as a pink-haired girl? She’s purple.

>>37546856
Wait, the earlyfag is real? I thought he was just an 'escape goat', as another anon put it.

>>37547791
At this point multiple people have taken the role. To deny that some fuckers try to push to bump limit in order to take control of what the next op will be is delusional when 4chan archivers exist. At least the current one/s do the bitch work of doing the recap posts.

>>37548162
What do they get out of picking 4 photos that are completely ignored half the time?

>>37550388
Don't know, don't care. Don't try to understand this level of retardation. We should be creating new threads instead of allowing a schizo to control the OP.

>>37549526
chammers...

>>37529475
I'm a big sucker for the latter, and I think it'd be tremendously interesting for Suisei having to basically start from scratch with a body that isn't even hers and has no latent musical talent either.

>>37549526
God, I love this fucking tease...

>>37552325
The latter situation seems like it would have a last minute twist where it hides (via the use of ambiguous narration) that the original Suisei's body wasn't the blue haired girl and that Suisei's original body was someone else entirely.

>>37532643
Cutting her ahoge at the precise length of going through puberty again, with all the hormonal swings it implies.

Getting her in bondage and giving her a pair of scissors. How young is she going to go in hopes of being able to escape the ropes?

Trying to spank her for misbehaving and cutting her ahoge at a precise length where where's she not strong enough to fight back and has no other option but to comply.

Getting her to just before her menopause so you can get her impregnated.

>>37546411
Potentially gearing up for family shit given as how a major holiday is in a few days.

>>37546411
Making terrible and irreversible life decisions that will shape the next 10 years of my life

>>37509530
>>37514618
Butt stuff, huh? I think that may be beyond my capabilities, but I could give it a try someday. Thanks for reading.
>>37547295
Releasing the chapters as I finished them may have made for better presentation and built some more excitement, but I absolutely would have ended up regretting writing something in chapter one as I'm releasing chapter three or something. Without fail, I always end up wanting to retcon shit and change the beginning of my stories (which I did multiple times throughout this production), so I've found unless I'm writing something really long, I'll release it one go. And yeah, this one is pretty long, but it was intended to be shorter. Maybe I should have finished the entire thing then slowly released chapters.
>I don’t know if this is intentional but you have a habit of long run-on sentences while Anon’s alone.
Hrm, maybe when I'm writing inner thoughts and observations I tend to make the sentences longer than I would writing actions or dialogue. Thanks for pointing that out.
>The only real nitpick I have is that you sometimes have weird tense troubles alongside a couple awkward sentences.
I can probably guess where they are. Still a ways to go as a writer. It's comforting to know that some of my other prose is good though, so thank you.
>Other than that, the writing is solid outside of Ayame scenes they feel ‘tell’ rather than ‘show’ with how she narrates it.
Yeeeaahh... I'm beginning to dwell on that a little. It's only AFTER I publish and post the document that I begin thinking of many different ways I could have shown her problems and circumstances rather than told. Shit sucks. I'll do what I can to avoid info dumps in the future.
>Purple
That's the thing... isn't it in-between? Her OG 3D is without a doubt purple, but some of her newer 2Ds look more like a dark pink. That or my idea of pink is fucked.

>>37434595
bottom left

> Pekora enjoys getting degraded by Gilgamesh
Slut

>>37546411
Exercising for the first time in years.

>>37555525
>>Yeeeaahh... I'm beginning to dwell on that a little. It's only AFTER I publish and post the document that I begin thinking of many different ways I could have shown her problems and circumstances rather than told. Shit sucks. I'll do what I can to avoid info dumps in the future.
Pretty sure the only way to have 'shown' her problems more would have been to have her scenes be significantly expanded and written with a more 'in her head' third person style. Alongside a bunch more Ayame pov scenes, in order to get her problems revealed more subtly.
Only problem is that doing this would probably have necessitated the story being even fucking longer since it would need an 'arc' or chapter devoted to getting her problems out to Anon/ some other way to get the plots to connect to each other.

>>37557169
Who doesn't?

>>37554781
What holiday

>>37559209
In the US, Thursday is Thanksgiving, which is a big family oriented holiday celebrated by a majority of the country.

Lord help me, I've started another incest fic. Why do I keep doing this?

>>37560322
Who is it this time

>>37560341
Suisei.

I came across this image set I hadn't seen in a while I really like and got inspired

>>37560406
What else have you written wrt incest then?

>>37560559
To and Fro, Run, Motion of the Ocean are the ones I've published. My backlog situation is embarrassing but there's a few in there as well.

>>37560406
I have to ask, is it Suisei/Anemachi or Suisei/(You) her younger brother?

>>37560712
>To and Fro<
YOU
WHERE'S THE SEQUEL

>>37560909
It's...around. Unfinished, but around.

>>37560837
Brother

>>37561265
>Around
Good or enough. The flames of hope are rekindled.

>>37557422
>a bunch more Ayame pov scenes, in order to get her problems revealed more subtly.
This is what I had in mind, like sprinkling in scenes that show her parents aren't present and that she doesn't have any female friends. For example, maybe once she stops fucking every guy you notice her sitting alone sometimes, or she doesn't come to parent-teacher interviews and receives money titled 'living expenses'. Just small things that make it clear what her situation is like. But a proper arc dedicated to Ayame and her problems would probably be the best bet if I wanted it to be a major issue in the story. Thanks for the advice, I appreciate it.

>>37546411
Drawing, mostly. I'd say I've improved quite a bit since last I posted my art.

>>37561265
Is this some ss stuff? I hope not

>>37546411
Having non-consensual anal sex with your oshi

>>37566635
Same, but you're my oshi. Bend over

>>37546411
Your oshi having non-consensual anal sex with you

>>37546411
Working on uni shit.

>>37546411
I'm like 5k words and 2 chapters in but this one fucking scene being a giant info dump is killing my ability to progress.

>>37546411
I haven't written anything in over a year, maybe a year and a half, in protest because threads were being made too early.
Is that still happening?

>>37567751
Yes, it's a conspiracy to keep you from writing so you don't make everyone else look bad with your magnificient writing skills.

>>37567751
We were briefly free of early threads earlier this year so you've clearly already missed your chance.
Unless you just disliked the 2view op arc.

>>37567874
Hey man, i'm not making any claim to technical proficiency, but the earlier you post the thread the more unnecessarily cluttered the board becomes. It's not in line with imageboard culture, and more to the point it's bad manners to everyone else posting on /vt/. I'm not about that life. See you again in another couple of months.

>>37567991
Goodbye, cute caring anon

>>37449403
fuck you, anon - I stayed up far too long long last night because I couldn’t put this story down and have to live with the consequences today.
Seriously though, what a great piece! The transfer from hate to love worked out smooth like butter and the pacing was just right for a story such as this. One could argue that the timeframe might be a bit too tight for all those changes to happen, but turning into the worlds biggest gigaslut because of a few daddy issues isn’t to most realistic premise to begin with. It worked out perfectly fine in my opinion.
Your characters were well rounded and likeable Mark best girl, he should‘ve hooked up with Aqua and the dialogue and interactions felt very engaging.
Now, I‘m an absolute flufffag and don’t necessarily need drama in a good story, but the Aqua arc felt a bit castrated. Like, nothing of value was lost there. No spice. All are friends in the end. Don’t get me wrong, I love Aqua as a character, but it feels like Anon and Ayame would‘ve ended up together without her appearance all the same. A bit more “ooomph” in that department would’ve been nice.
The smut might not be the most ball-busting piece of erotica in the archive, but it was a solid conclusion to what I thought was an excellent build up.
All in all, this goes to my comfort fics and I will definitely read it more than once. In my opinion one of the best titles in the archive, although it would’ve probably been even more hype if you’d dropped it bit by bit.
Good fucking job, anon. Really.

>>37434595
jealous yandere IRyS kidnaps and rapes (you) while being sensory deprived after she saw you flirting with other holos

>>37567560
What story?

The Botan ahoge correction discussion from earlier made me realize the original ahoge correction fic left a big unanswered question.
What would Friend be like after getting her ahoge cut off?

>>37571433
Homicidal maniac or someone so desperate for romance they make even the yannest of deres look sane and emotionally developed.

>>37571433
She just straight-up fucking dies.

>>37571433
She would be not funny or cute or endearing or amazing

>>37571433
she becomes your wife

>>37572231
>not funny or cute
Fubuki getting her ahoge cut off turns her into a super hag?

>>37572728
She just turns to fucking dust.

>>37571433
Need to see a sequel to Matsuri's matsuri because it did end with a pair of scissors about to cut of Fubuki's ahoge.

>>37434595
Chuuni battleshit, if you manage to make the coolest lamest ability names, then i will personally get your oshi to suck your dick

>>37575415
HoloJourneys/HoloFantasy

>>37575966
>DnD
>same as chuuni battles
unironically stick your dick in a blender and roll to see if you grind it into a fine paste or if you at least get some chunks

>>37449403
HOLY SHIT

/wg/ IS SAVED

THE STORM OF MORDOR CLEARS, THE BODIES OF SCHIZOS PILE UP ON THE CROSSING OF OSGILIATH, THE SEAJANNY OF ANGMAR SCREAMS IN AGONY AND FALLS

>>37529145
I turn around and rape her. Ghost sex. Ghost pregnancy.
>that can't
Ghost pregnancy.

>>37576356
Anon DnD has been fucking garbage like every other WotC property for at least the past 5 years. The gurgling, mutated monster 5e has become wishes it could be low-effort shonenshit.

>>37574646
What?

>>37577156
Dust is made of fine particles of solid matter.[1] On Earth, it generally consists of particles in the atmosphere that come from various sources such as soil lifted by wind (an aeolian process), volcanic eruptions, and pollution. Dust in homes is composed of about 20–50% dead skin cells.[2] The rest, and in offices, and other human environments is composed of small amounts of plant pollen, human hairs, animal fur, textile fibers, paper fibers, minerals from outdoor soil, burnt meteorite particles, and many other materials which may be found in the local environment.[3]

>>37577010
why should i care? i want to read about how polka uses ''Ill Arlechinno'' to defeat Luna's ''Knights of Cydonia''

>>37577156
Genesis 3:19

>>37449403
It’s been quite awhile since I got hooked to a fanfic but damn, I hate to admit that I am for a chuuba I’m not even that much into. I don’t really know my way around advanced literatures so I don’t think I can give detailed descriptions on what to change but suffice to say I liked it and I’m hoping there’s a sequel(or hell even prequel) of some sort in the works. I hope this also gets uploaded to AO3 for easier tracking at least.

Worthwhile sacrifice for my sleeptime, if I have to say

>>37577277
I know Kaela is the blacksmith but Anya reforging metal to make armors and weapons around to fight with would make my entire year

>>37576966
Based

>>37577721
Is that Anyas gimmick? I literally know nothing about this small ID girl.

>>37578259
Anya's gimmick is speaking JP better than some of her JP senpais

>>37578299
That's not exactly a high bar.

>>37578421
To Japanese people it is

>>37578259
Her gimmick is having giant tits that she despises and actively nerfs herself.

>>37564494
Don't worry. I'm not a fan of /ss/

This is the image set I was talking about https://danbooru.donmai.us/posts/4002444

>>37581496
My god. I wish nothing but wellness in making that fic anon.