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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.

Previous thread:>>32514693

>> No.32612514
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Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em.

>> No.32612576
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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap! There... was one story posted in the last thread.

Love Bites:Tags: A-chan, Yozora Mel, abuse of power, sexual harassment

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Story recap! There... was one story posted in the last thread.

Love Bites:Tags: A-chan, Yozora Mel, abuse of power, sexual harassment:>>32527767

>> No.32612836
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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Fubuki and Mio arguing who's better at slurping, asking (you) to be the judge.:>>32515550

Oh no! Ui has had enough of your disgusting antics and made your dick disappear with the infamous Ui-beam!:>>32516932

Molesting young sister Ame.:>>32524983

Selen's new proudly displayed pitpussy is something else. I NEED a fic about jamming my face or dick in there:>>32538669

Going to see the Nene exhibit at the zoo:>>32550727

Defending yourself against Gawr, only for her to turn back to Gura in the middlenof the fight and start crying because you're hitting her:>>32573090

Request a Kurokami fic now that she has a model.:>>32586825

(You) get hit by a truck and reincarnated as a small monkey in sub-Saharan Africa.:>>32600002

>> No.32613265

>>32612576
Towa's been putting off her duties as a demon for just a little too long. She learns that the only thing she can do to keep her sin count high enough for the next audit from hell and keep herself from being sucked back down into that torturous nightmare is literally kill an innocent in cold blood before tomorrow at midnight.

>> No.32618555

>>32613265
That sounds ripe for a comedy fic where Towa's carefully laid murder plans get disrupted and she kills someone that deserves it, causing the heavens to open up and drag her up to ascend.

>> No.32618575

>>32612576
I’d really like to see a long story about (You) going through many different relationships with different chuubas as life goes on. Having a crush on a girl in elementary school, getting your first girlfriend in middle school, then breaking up and finding someone else in high school, etc.. Similar to five centimetres per second but better than whatever the fuck that shit was. It’s a concept I don’t see explored much in any media and we also don’t get a lot of breakup fics.

>> No.32618587 [DELETED] 

>>32612482
So, this is how /wg/ dies.

>> No.32618694

>>32618575
That be one hell of fic.

>> No.32618696

>>32618587
Stupid indog.

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>>32612514
I didn't stop to think if I should.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTrHfMxwyqdZlyT1qk2NzeGRO5txG5Ka6Vv77XXl1n5m_oenDAbUSF2D9o2n_bC1kUBYUuwwWMmunS-/pub

Tags: Fubuki, NSFW, Rape, Chuuba Abuse, Tragedy.

>> No.32618910

>>32618694
Aye, I’d write it myself if I wasn’t already bogged down with a trillion WIPs.

>> No.32618980

>>32618910
You at least got any ideas about it?

>> No.32620280

>>32618855
>no niggers
bugfag's going to be disappointed

>> No.32620990

>>32618855
This was pretty generic, in my opinion. Chuuba cornered in an alleyway, disgusting man starts raping her and she starts feeling good, even if she realistically shouldn’t. Tack that rushed suicide onto the end and the whole thing feels like a cookie-cutter story with nothing surprising or interesting.

>> No.32621158

>>32618855
I agree with the other anon that this is rather by the book for a rape fic. Still the smut as written is pretty hot (I like the roughness in it) so you're on the right track for smut writing, as for everything everything else... Meh it could be better.

>> No.32621302

>>32614797
That's a boy, you homosexual

>> No.32621494

>>32621302
Question for the thread.
How would you write femboy Towa?

>> No.32621714

>>32621494
Unironically just write her the same as you usually would. Then an absolute nervous wreck when it comes to the sex.

>> No.32621839

>>32621494
>How would you write femboy Towa?
I wouldn't.

>> No.32621910

>>32618855
That was a great rape, anon. Really great rape. Nobody can beat the cock, not even Shirakami Fubuki could deny its pleasures. Thanks for writing this.

>> No.32622019

>>32621910
>Nobody can beat the cock
I can. Try me

>> No.32622029

>>32622019
Are you a cute fox girl?

>> No.32622040

>>32621494
With a nice, juicy penis

>> No.32624322

Nuthin but a bunch of sussy bakas in this thread smfh

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>>32618980
Not a whole lot. I had Suisei in mind as the first crush, and you awkwardly try to impress her while still learning about romance and bumbling about the ABCs of men and women. In your inexperience, you end up trying to tease the girl you like and become unable to say anything by the end of elementary school. You and Suisei go your separate ways.
In middle school you meet some chuuba (haven’t thought of who, maybe a quiet one), and you think she’s kinda cute so you ask her out and start dating her. Despite being her “boyfriend”, it’s still awkward and hard to talk to each other at school, or do anything together. Your middle schooler limitations prevent you from going on big dates, and you don’t find yourself feeling the same way towards her as you did Suisei. In the end, you realise you only started dating her to see what the whole relationship thing was like, and end up breaking her heart.
I had ideas for high school where you start dating someone cheerful like Kiara or Koyori, and things start going really well. That is until something (maybe she cheats on you or you have a massive argument) results in a tearful, dramatic and explosive break up filled with crying and screaming and a lot of bad blood. High school ends on a depressing note.
I haven’t decided what will happen after this, whether you go into the workforce or University, but I guess from here the story could explore more mature relationships and whatnot.

>> No.32627772

>>32621494
Immediately discover she has a penis via her pitching a tent in those insanely tight shorts

>> No.32627988

>>32612576
Matsuri develops an NTR fetish as a coping mechanism for having crashed-and-burned with so many different girls and projects it onto an innocent cute girl fan who idolizes and crushes on her, scaring the chick away as soon as they try to get intimate

>> No.32631087

>>32612576
Towa secretly doing compensated dating and prostitution services toward Oji-sans.

>> No.32631171
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> 14 WIPs
> several ideas I want to write
> ...
> 15 WIPs

>> No.32631190

>>32627988
I have to ask, what kind of story were you thinking of when you made this prompt?

>> No.32631317
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Hello! Gutfucker Altare x Magni fic author here. I wrote an equally sickening one, this time Altare fucks a dead headcrab! :D I don't know much about half-life lore so I ignored plot and kept it nice and simple. Critique is welcomed please! I want to get better :)

https://archiveofourown.org/works/41550336

>> No.32631473

>>32631317
Why a headcrab? The metroid from the metroid series is literally a headcrab with a more lewd fuck hole because it leads into a soft slime part that is translucent

>> No.32631505

>>32631473
He played HL:Alyx today and an anon made a comment that he was gonna fuck the headcrab that you get for sustenance.

>> No.32631633

>>32631505
Fucking a headcrab would be like fucking a dog, there's no point.

>> No.32631867

>>32620280
Oh, fuck off.

>>32618855
I thought this was great, anon. As a rape fic, it hits all the right notes for me - random stranger, uncalled-for cruelty, unwilling pleasure, and a tragic ending. The biggest criticism I can really give is that this kind of ending doesn't fit the set-up; Fubuki is a strong-willed person, and whilst rape is a horrific act and there'd no doubt be SOME mental scarring, I think suicide is taking it to the extreme. If you do another fic like this in the future, or consider a suicide ending at all, I strongly suggest doing a page or two illustrating the heroine struggling to fit back into the mold of normality. It will give at least some more credibility to such a powerful ending that way. Alternatively, have the heroine tortured and/or killed by the antagonist(s). Taking agency away from the heroine means there's no damage to suspension of disbelief.

All in all, though, great job. Very enjoyable and I've made a back-up of it to be able to read it again long into the future.

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>>32631867
Why do you have to give him attention?

>> No.32632294

>>32631171
How many of those are you still actively writing, and how many are just eternal WIPs at this point?

>> No.32632521

>>32632294
> how many are you still writing
0
> how many are eternal WIPs
Maybe 10 of them.

>> No.32635131

>>32612576
Crushing Towa's Testicles!

>> No.32636323

>>32631317
It's not bad. I think the joke at the end is odd, and if you wanted to do something like that I think you could have gone for a "Altare jerks off thinking about fucking a dead headcrab" and have the actual fucking just be his imagination, which might help with the overall length of the fic as well as it's kind of brief. Or maybe have his curiosity of sticking his wiener in it start as he's taking it's teeth out as opposed to him just wanting to as soon as he's done. Also he mentions the headcrab being heavy due to still having organs though it was said to be gutted before.

Not a guro person by any means, so I can't tell you how successful you are on that end.

>> No.32638121

>>32621494
That sounds gay. I'd rather have futa Towa

>> No.32638237

>>32622029
No, but I literally beat my cock. It hurt

>> No.32638757

>>32612576
I wanna see a fic about (you) fucking your oshi then prematurely ejaculating inside her despite previously agreeing to pull out, and then has to deal with the fact that she got creampied might get pregnant.

>> No.32639461

which holomem would best fit as a dominant, perverted, horny femboy anyway
my mind goes Matuli
Towa feels subby femboy to me

>> No.32639552

>>32639461
https://files.catbox.moe/xb74ma.mp3

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>>32639552
I only have interest in femboys dominating women and proving their superiority over them

>> No.32639614

>>32639461
> towa too subby
https://streamable.com/8rdttu

>> No.32639714

>>32639613
then write a faggot male OC or shotify a homostars character

wanting to genderswap one of the girls just reveals you as a wannabe cocksucker

>> No.32639870

>>32639714
>male oc
gross, no
>shotafy holostars
done that, but shota isn't femboy
and I refuse to write lewd with JP stars so the femboy and femboy adjacent ones there are out

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>>32639870
>gross, no
what you're doing is 10x worse faggot
>I refuse to write lewd with JP stars so the femboy and femboy adjacent ones there are out
nice, just give yourself away completely

>> No.32639994

>>32639870
You don't have to take him seriously. You shouldn't, in fact.

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>>32639947
jeez, you sure are a pissy bitch about it huh

>> No.32640033

>>32639996
just stating facts bitch
>>>/lgbt/

>> No.32640092

>>32639461
Festival feels right, but Migo or Chammers would also work.

>> No.32640154

>>32639461
I would say some options but you're limited to flat chested so that narrows it down a lot.

>> No.32640169

Jeez, I dislike femboys as well (women with dicks are better) but there's no need to be a faggot about it.

>> No.32641316

>>32639461
I feel like Laplus would try to be like this but would break at the first sign of resistance.

>> No.32641402

>>32641316
Laplus is all talk. She's the type to scream when you pop a balloon in the room (fucking annoying btw)

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> polka will not do the jump
No space for doubters

>> No.32642835

>>32627988
so like Matsuri and the female Matsurisu are in a love hotel, getting hot & heavy, and Festival fucks it up by talking about how hot it'd be if the girl would tie her up and get fucked by another man while forcing her to watch, or that she'd make it weird by acting like she somehow knows that the girl is cheating on someone with her and won't shut up about it?

>> No.32643146

>>32642835
Wait would Matsuri fetishize it in a she thinks it's hot if (Female Matsurisu) gets fucked by another man way or a it would be hot if (Female Matsurisu) was stolen by someone else?

>> No.32643492

>>32643146
NTA but I think Matsuri is definitely the "hot because stolen" kind of NTR fag. The kind you see crying while they masturbate, you know?

>> No.32643708

The hell this JAV sounds and acts just like I'd imagine Towa would, though a bit too slutty but

>> No.32643782

>>32612576
>>32519711
Anon throws away his 11 year long happy relationship for a night of suisex. Suisei has no interest in having sex with him and only offers it to see if he's willing to sacrifice his relationship for her. She also makes anon send proof of his cheating to his gf.

>> No.32643806

>>32643492
Yeah that seems like it would fit a Matsuri that gained that fetish after as a cope for failed relationships.
Though it does ask the question of what kind of fic this would be?
It feels like it really wouldn't fit something smutty with how 'high concept' the thing is so it would have to be like a drama/character piece kind of fic.

>> No.32644154

>>32643806
Ah no don't worry she wouldn't actually cry or anything during the cucked sex with the fematurisus. It's just like a describing trait to give a feel to the nature of her fetish. But if you're not going for smut, I'd go the broken girl kind of path, a spiral of ceaseless, relentless despair caused by bad choice after bad choice. Of course you'd have to study up on Matsuri's yabs and fill in the blanks as to why or how they happened, but there's plenty of those so you shouldn't have trouble picking just the ones that serve a good narrative purpose. You could have her NTR fetish be just another thing to add to the pile of feeling bad for this broken girl.

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I'm writing an Ayame fic but for the first few thousand words there'll be no traits of Ayame being Ayame besides the fact that she's an Oni, but I can't avoid it. She's a slave who's lost her voice and mannerisms due to mistreatment. I'm wondering if this will feel too bland for Vtuber fan fiction.

>> No.32645367

I'm literally gay for Towa

>> No.32645559

>>32644894
don't hyper focus on mannerisms, just go with the flow. The suspension of disbelief will do a lot of work for you, fanfic having the advantage that everyone will already have a mental image of the character even if you don't describe her much more than call her Ayame.
Especially with a premise such as yours, it's probably more than enough to let a few characteristics sicker in over time (cute giggle or whatever) to make it believable enough.

>> No.32646348

>>32644894
That's fine, just let the personality shine through when it's appropriate.
In general you have a decent amount of freedom with personality in significantly different alternate universes, unless they're the focus of the fic.

>> No.32648526

>>32644894
Is this gonna be like an oni version of teaching feeling? If so, I'm looking forward to it.

>> No.32648656

>>32612576
Humiliating a holo in a wrestling match by stripping her naked, and fucking her after she taps out and submits to end the pain

>> No.32648689

>>32612482

>> No.32648734

>>32648656
This but the fic is told entirely through overly excited wrestling commentary.

>> No.32651105

>>32612576
cute, penis-less Town-fluff. Except for mine.

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>>32651105 (me)
This is Town, btw.

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>>32651276
townbaby?

>> No.32651628

>>32651332
More like town bike

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>>32651628

>> No.32651914
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slut

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>>32651914
Love this slut

>> No.32653352

>>32651914
>>32652405
need to punch this slut on the gut

>> No.32653468

>>32653352
She'd probably like it

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>The "NSFW on blue board" report option is gone

>> No.32654607

>>32654453
Welp, time to post porn

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>>32654453
Oh yeah, would you look at that. I'm sure it'll come back soon enough. I want to fuck this fox.

>> No.32655130

>>32654691
That's a sexy Fubuki.

>> No.32655276

>>32651628
That town's population? Me

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>>32654453
Interesting

>> No.32655470

>>32654453
Liar.

>> No.32655474

>>32655319
I really want to like dikk0's stuff but the 3d backgrounds that stick out like a sore thumb and the Arby's roast beef pussies are just too much

>> No.32655565

>>32655470
>>32654453
Well looks like it's back abayo porn posters.

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>>32655470
?

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>>32655604

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>>32655474
>Arby's roast beef pussies are just too much
You're in for a surprise if you ever have sex.

>> No.32656136

>>32656081
I have had sex and her labial walls were basically stuck together, you god damn dollar-store whore.

>> No.32656171

>>32656034
Black magic?

>> No.32656175

>>32655604
there's no image in that post, anon

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>>32656175
Uh oh

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>>32655565
I'll take my ban with dignity. God, I want her to sit on my face.

>> No.32657710

>>32657330
if I had a nickel for every time a hot picture was ruined for me by wonky-looking feet...

>> No.32658050

>>32657710
Then you could afford gay conversion therapy.

>> No.32658354

>>32657710
Feet are hard to draw plz understand.

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>>32656136
Every vagina is different. Just because her labia are on the outside doesn't mean she's loose as a goose.

>> No.32658637

>>32658354
it wouldn't be so bad if that wasn't clearly a left foot

>> No.32660189

>>32612482
/wg/ husband edition!

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32661213

What are you working on? Ask for some advice or simply generate some buzz and excitement for your new literary masterpiece!
Bonus Question: How do you come up with titles?

>> No.32661549
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32661549

>>32660189
Towa is a girl!

>> No.32661557

>>32655474
Thank God it's not just me. He also has hands that are 3D, sometimes legs too. Once you see it, it's like a curse of knowledge.

>> No.32661722

>>32661549
>When Towa shows her TowaP for the first time.

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>>32661213
>How do you come up with titles?

>> No.32662126

>>32661903
How does that usually work out for you?
Any regrets on titling?

>> No.32662860

>>32661213
Right now I've run out of steam, so I probably won't be publishing anything for a little bit. Need some time to recuperate my creativity.

I typically using song titles. Often the songs will have relevance to whatever work I'm producing.

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>>32661213
>Bonus Question
I LOVE alliteration but also I just think of lines a lot. Sometimes I can steal inspiration from lines I've read that have stuck with me a lot throughout the years or sneak references in as titles.

>> No.32663928

>>32662126
Well, I get a title which is all that matters in the end. I do struggle and dwell on what kind of title my story should have while writing it, but once I settle on something and publish it I don't really think about it much.

>> No.32664216

>>32661213
Finishing up the Lui chapter for Present Day; Present Time. I could post it today, but I want to include a rusty trombone scene so it should come out either tomorrow or Friday.

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>>32664216
a what
A WHAT?

>> No.32664515

>>32661213
>Bonus
Whatever allows for those epic title drops.

>> No.32664592

>>32664216
Oh, I'm down for that.

>> No.32664851

>>32664515
Do we actually have any examples of fics here that have a deliberate title drop?
I can think of some fics where the title appears in the fic but I don't remember any "character says the name of the fic" title drops.

>> No.32665538

>>32664851
Exposure Therapy, sort of

>> No.32665801

>>32664216
>>32664430
What sound does a rusty trombone make?

>> No.32666358

>>32661549
That's okay, she can still be my husband.

>> No.32666573

>>32665801
The same as a regular trombone, but less loud and clear if it's very rusty.
Brass instruments are unique in that the sound is made with the lips (not strings, membranes, a piece of wood...) so the state of the instrument itself isn't that crucial. Brass instruments are just a metal tube of adjustable length that you make something between a fart noise and a whistling noise into, so it comes out of the other end much louder and better-sounding.

>> No.32666662

>>32666573
>something between a fart noise and a whistling noise
What the hell is Lui doing to (You)r ass and cock?

>> No.32666898

>>32666662
She has a beak please undastan

>> No.32667870
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>>32612576
Anything to do with school StartEnd.

>> No.32668127

>>32667870
StartEnd has a threesome in the school restrooms but Aqua is the only girl between the three of them.

>> No.32668221
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32668221

It's the Tits 5, a group of vtubers with oversized breasts who keep the peace by pleasing the needs of everyone, be they fans, fellow vtubers, the staff, or even the director. Since they joined, the biggest conflict that happened pre-debut was between four staff members who wanted to be the first to "calm down" with the leading member's breasts, which she solved by making them lie on the ground and squeezing all four cocks at the same time with her massive tits. Sadly for the Tits 5, pleasing hundreds of cocks daily left them with no time to play minecraft or even read akasupas a lot of times, so their yabs were at the top not only of their corpo, but of all the country. Despite that, the average subscriber count of the corpo rose drastically thanks to their support: every staff member was now relaxed and focused thanks to having their balls empty. Thankful for that, the director still made them debut even if he knew their completely below average intellect only made them useful at cleaning cocks. Now in their first year, and while all the other vtubers are working hard to reach their objectives and avoid graduating, the Tits 5 keep doing nothing but squeeze cum out of everyone's cocks. By now, all 5 girls only appear in a stream if they were told to titfuck a stressed staff member there because they knew that nothing else that they do on stream would entertain the viewers. Thankfully for them, everyone at corpo agreed to make them collab with the males, and they were offered full monetization to stream from now on doing the same service they have been doing for every single male vtuber. Having to manage 5 yabai talents instead of forcing them to graduate might sound like a waste of money, but the corpo was getting so much funding from their now top in the nation akasupa that it more than made up for it, not to mention that the memberships will grow even further with 5 cumdumps collabing with every male talent. It was a win for everyone, and the girls were very thankful for the kindness of everyone allowing even dumb living cock cleaning machines like them to also have a future.

>> No.32668427

>>32668221
How is this this related to chuuba fanfiction?

>> No.32668547

>>32667870
(You) meet them in the corridor and jerk off in the school's bathroom thinking of them.

>> No.32668706

>>32667870
Give Aqua a kiss
Give Towa a swirly
Give Suisei a wedgie

>> No.32669791

>>32668706
I'd kiss Towa also, but Blue Mori really needs some thorough humiliation.

>> No.32670201

>>32667870
Something about this Suisei makes me want to see her lifting her skirt up for me out of curiosity about male arousal but also disgust.

>> No.32671654

>>32670201
It's either for curiosity or disgust, in Suisei you don't get both. Maybe disgust after you get hard

>> No.32671824

>>32670201
>>32671654
>Suisei insulting you for getting aroused, but she can't hide the excitement in her voice as she continues on

>> No.32672229

>>32671824
Nice fan fiction bro she's not like that though

>> No.32672282

>>32672229
>Nice fan fiction
Thank you, that's what we're writing here

>> No.32674453

>>32671824
>Keeps her skirt lifted and panties exposed long enough for you to cum all over her thighs, expresses confusion, goes to the library to read about human arousal without cleaning it off

>> No.32675330

>>32667870
>Staying late after school one day, finally time to head home
>Hear a trio of voices down the hallway
>"Eeeh? You haven't seen it even once, Akutan?"
>"Nee, of course not! I'd die of embarrassment..."
>Oh shit it's the school troublemakers, Suisei, Aqua and Towa
>You cross paths with them while they continue their conversation
>"Oi, you!"
>You feel your blood getting cold when they call out to you, and you're forced to turn around by your sleeve
>You end up face to face with Suisei, who's considerably shorter, but looking at you intently with a grin
>"Oh, you're an upperclassman aren't you, if I'm not mistaken..."
>"He's a bit plain-looking isn't he?" The purple-haired girl eyes you from top to bottom
>"Y-yeah, real plain looking!" Aqua stutters it out somehow
>Ask Suisei what they want, feeling a bit intimidated by her aura
>Her grin widens, as she starts to drag you down the hall
>"See, senpai, we were having a little chat about the human body and..." Realize where she's dragging you to, the woman's bathroom, "I think it's time to have an imprompty anatomy lesson."
>You lock your steps, but Towa pushes you from behind and you have no choice but to get shoved into the largest stall
>Ask what the hell, but Suisei locks the door once Towa's done shoving Aqua in there too
>"It's fine isn't it? You look like you have some free time." The blue-haired girl pushes you down onto the toilet, and the girls circle around you
>"Sui-chan are you sure about this guy? I'm sure he's got a tiny pecker..." Towa giggles while looking straight at you.
>This bitch
>"Well Aqua hasn't seen one in person so size doesn't matter right?"
>"R-right..." The shy one stammers again, though she never makes eye contact as expected
>"So go on and strip, senpai. We don't have all day."
>You cross your arms and refuse
>"Eeeh, so you don't mind if we scream right now?" Suisei pulls down on her necktie and undoes her top button, exposing her collarbone and part of her chest
>"That's right, you wouldn't want any rumors to go around about you, right?" The green-eyed girl giggles happily.
>Sigh, realizing your position here, and ask them what they want.
>"You just need to drop your pants and give Akutan here a nice look at your little prick."
>Meanwhile Aqua is blushing heavily, eyes shooting from side to side
>Might as well get this over with, so you undo your belt and zipper, sliding your pants halfway down your thighs
>Still wearing boxers though, Suisei looks at you with disdain in her eyes
>"Heeh, you're not even stiff yet, how come?"
>"Fuahaha, isn't that pathetic? Maybe he is already at full mast!"
>Glare at Towa, who backs off right away. Maybe she's all talk...
>End up going the rest of the way and drop your underwear as well, leaving your crotch completely exposed to the three girls
>Suisei's right though and you're totally flaccid, this situation not arousing you in the least
>"See, Aqua, that's how a guy looks normally. Oi, why aren't you getting hard anyway?" Suisei complains
>Say there's no reason for you to get aroused in this situation so it's expected
>"Huh? Why? Doesn't every guy dream of getting ambushed by a group of girls?" Towa asks
>"Maybe he just needs a little bit of service... Aqua, show him your panties." Suisei orders, and Aqua blushes heavily
>"E-e-eh? Me?!" She complains, but doesn't defy the ringleader, bringing her hands to the hem of her skirt and hesitating for a moment
>Eventually, you get a peek of her upper thighs, which are nice and plump and finally her clothed crotch - her panties a striped blue and white type
>It's definitely a nice sight, and your cock does react, going from full soft to a half-chub...
>"Fuhaha, look, he's so easy! I bet he'll explode if he sees Towa's!" She grins and looks down at you, slowly and sensually pulling up her skirt
>And sure enough the sight of her slender thighs does pool more blood around your crotch, your eyes fixated on the edge of her skirt
>Except she stops just before showing her crotch and underwear, expertly denying you the pleasure with a long cackle
>"Pff, guys are really easy aren't they..." Suisei furrows her eyebrows, looking on with a bit of disdain
>Fire back, saying you're not at full mast yet and ask where's her contribution?
>"Wahaha, you're funny, why should I?"
>Ask if she's such a coward that her friends have to do all the work
>You can feel her eyebrow raise and she looks pissed
>"You've got a big attitude, senpai, is that to make up for your little dick?" She grins. "Fine, fine, Sui-chan will show you..."
>Without any ceremony she flips up her plaid skirt, exposing her frilly black underwear - a rather lewd pair of panties with a see-through lace that wraps around the back
>Sure enough, your cock continues to harden at the sight, Towa finally growing bold enough to lift hers up all the way as well
>"Fuhaha, it.... Eh?"
>At full mast, the three can't take their eyes off of you.

>> No.32675383

>>32672229
Next you'll tell me she isn't actually in highschool.

>> No.32675765
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>>32675330
Nice

>> No.32677692

>>32675330
You should ask who's going to suck it, to make Suisei and Towa bully Aqua into doing it.

>> No.32677734

>>32675330
Hot. More please.

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>>32612576
Luna giving her kingdom absolutely psychotic orders that people go through with because she's to cute to say no to

>> No.32680616

>>32661213
I try and follow the advice a writing teacher gave me one time and that's to pick a title that represents the story, either literally or symbolically. 99% of the time I save titles for last, and brainstorm names as I lie in bed after finishing the first draft since I'm already mentally going over the story.

>> No.32682883 [DELETED] 

>>32612576
>>32669852
Mating chase through the magical forest with Risu

>> No.32683005

>>32612576
>>32670765
Mating chase through the magical forest with Risu

>> No.32683719

>>32683005
What the hell is mating chase

>> No.32684334

>>32683719
A chase that ends in mating

>> No.32684512

>>32683719
Squirrel things

>> No.32685487

>>32675330
>"Hooh, senpai's thing isn't that tiny after all huh?" Suisei chuckles
>"Such a plain looking guy was hiding this huge thing? Towa is impressed." She grins, watching your cock throb all on its own while Aqua stares dumbfounded
>"A-ah..." She stammers, and takes a step back, flat against the door
>You adjust yourself on the seat and scowl at Suisei
>Ask her if that's enough and if you can leave now
>The blue haired girl grins and squats down o the floor, her head level with your cock
>"Not yet, we said it was an anatomy lesson right? So go on, show Akutan how guys go spurt spurt."
>"N-n-n-no, I think I've seen enough..." Aqua covers her face and looks away, and you throb again at her embarrasment
>"Tch, we went through all the trouble, don't chicken out now, Aqua!" Towa turns around and pulls Aqua closer, guiding her in between your legs
>"Ok, senpai, start stroking won't you? We don't have all night." Suisei orders, closing her eyes halfway whilst Towa keeps Aqua's head firmly planted right in front of your crotch
>Tell her she's crazy, but if that's what she wants you'll oblige
>Start stroking your shaft slowly, pulling on the skin and exposing your throbbing glans. Despite the attitudes, Towa and Suisei start sporting a light blush on their cheeks
>Masturbate slowly and lightly, the only noises in the bathroom being the girls' breathing and the sound of your strokes
>Start feeling Aqua's hot breath against your balls and shaft, her breathing getting heavier and heavier
>"Hehe, Akutan, aren't you looking enthralled? Towa isn't even holding your head anymore." Suisei teases, Aqua's blush growing even deeper
>"Fuhaha, I bet she's a pervert after all."
>"E-eh? I-I'm not!" Aqua pouts and looks away while you keep stroking
"Um um, I bet she wants to touch it too, right, Akutan?" Suisei grabs Aqua's hand by the wrist and pulls it up, placing it on your thigh, making you shiver from the soft touch of her flesh
>"S-sui-chan?!" Aqua attempts to pull away and fight back, but Towa drops behind her and cups both of her breasts over her clothes, forcing Aqua to let out a moan and give up.
>"Come on, come on, don't you want to feel what it's like?" Suisei blows on Aqua's ear, the girl closing her eyes in embarrassment
>It's not long before you feel the soft touch of Aqua's hand over your shaft as Suisei guides her there, her fingers twitching when the heat of your cock brushes against her skin
>One of Aqua's eyes opens and she looks at your cock, tentatively closing her fingers around it and making you see stars from her touch
>"Nee, nee, why not give him some more service too?" Towa shows a toothy grin, beginning to unbutton the pink-haired girl's shirt and exposing her cleavage.
>"W-wait! I-" Suisei doesn't let her finish, forcing her to look at your member, her hand guiding her to start pumping up and down
>"Don't stop now, Akutan, you want to know more about dicks right? Didn't you say that yourself?"
>Aqua pouts and looks away, finally focusing back on the job at hand, her hand sliding up and down your girth. She's awkward, has no rhythm, but it doesn't matter much to you since it's a hot girl jerking you off.
>"Haa, senpai, you're making a funny face. Is Aqua's handjob that good?" Susei grins, letting go of her friend's wrist
>Say it's good, afraid if you complain she would stop
>"Fuhahah!" Towa giggles loudly. "He's such a liar, I bet you can't even make him come like that." Towa whispers in Aqua's ear, the girl shivering from head to toe. Finally, you lay your eyes upon the round, fleshy orbs of Aqua's tits and her simple white bra that pushes them up into a deep cleavage
>"W-wah, it's throbbing a lot..." She says somewhat proudly.
>"I guess every guy likes boobs, huh..." Towa grins, cupping Aqua's tits and bouncing them up and down, teasing you and copying Aqua's hand movements, both bouncing up and down in sync
>"Nee senpai, how much longer?"
>Tell her it feels good, but it's not enough to make you want to ejaculate yet.
>"Aqua, do something about that will ya?" Suisei pokes her on the side, and she looks up dumbfounded
>"E-eh? What should I do then?" She looks distressed, her hand stopping altogether
>Her face gets suddenly shoved into your cock, her eyes going wide as her nose docks with your crotch
>"Use your mouth, dummy, you can do at least that much, right?" Towa chuckles, finally taking a sit next to you opposite to Suisei
>"E-eeh?" Her big amethyst eyes look up and lock with yours for a moment as your shaft divides her face in two, her nose sniffing your sack out of curiosity and sending shivers up your spine
>"You don't want the Karaoke place to close do you?"
>Aqua turns her head negatively and closes her eyes, giving the very base of your cock a tentative kiss
>Growing bolder, her tongue pokes out and lightly traces your shaft all the way to the head, forcing a grunt out of you
>She seems pleased by this and picks up the pace

>> No.32689063

fuck, thread, I just finished writing my story, don't die before I post it

>> No.32689540
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32689540

>>32612514

Yuzuki Veterinary Services
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSE9yfk0DnJZouiUeg9_pzBYVH_i8oTEI2YAIfFSZrSZtcN-XLJs0-_So04qJfEmHB69uxFM6FC2hRu/pub

Towa's pet hellhound Kuroshi is acting strange, and she asks Choco if she can help find out what's wrong with it. Choco reluctantly agrees, and after performing a short examination, successfully diagnoses the issue, and decides to take matters into her own hands and mouth, and vagina to fix it.

Tags: Choco, NSFW, Bestiality, Smut

>> No.32690783

>>32685487
>You feel Aqua's tongue running from the base all the way up once, then twice, leaving behind layers of saliva on your skin
>She moves her head to the side in order to reach around it and leave no part of your member untended to, then turns her head sideways and docks her lips around your cock, licking up and down
>"Fuhaha, for someone who's never seen one you sure know what you're doing." Towa grins, even as a red tinge covers her cheeks
>"Heeh, so the rumors are true then, the quiet ones are the real lewd ones huh?" Suisei continues to tease her friend
>Aqua closes her eyes with force, but the strength of her vacuum picks up
>You notice one of her hands disappear between her legs, her shoulder moving just enough to give you the impression she's touching herself, and when she whimpers and moans into your dick, you get confirmation
>Ask her to wait and slow down a bit, because you'll come in no time if she keeps up
>"Senpai, that's exactly what we want to happen, silly. We're busy, you know?"
>"Aqua, don't you think it's time to finish this? I'm getting bored now..." Towa plays with her hair idly.
>The girl looks at both of her friends, then at you for a moment.
>"O-okay..."
>She pulls away, giving you a bit of respite, but it's not long before she opens up her mouth and hovers above your dick
>"Aaaahh-" She says just before pluging down, her lips tightly wrapping around your girth and forcing your head back
>Her tongue grinds against your frenulum as she pushes you further and further inside, only able to get it about halfway in
>Still feels incredible, the warmth and slimy feel of her insides making it so you just can't hold on anymore
>Seeing that you start to throb more and more, Aqua goes for the killing blow and starts to bob her head up and down, sucking in her cheeks and keeping a vacuum seal around your shaft
>Suisei and Towa both giggle wildly as her friend's head dives against your crotch, the two of them exchanging devious glances
>Say you can't hold it anymore and you're going to blow any second
>Aqua looks up at you with concern and starts to pull away
>Except both other girls push her head down even further, and you feel the tightness of Aqua's throat constrict your glans as she's forced to essentially swallow you to the base
>"Mffh mffh!" She struggles but can't pull back, the vibrations and scene being more than you can handle
>The first shot of semen rushes up your urethra and explodes down her throat, bypassing all of her natural defenses and going straight down her stomach
>Aqua's eyes tear up as she looks at you, her tongue wildly licking and probing your cock which only serves to extract and lengthen your orgasm
>She pushes herself back a tiny bit, but only enough that your glans slips out of her throat - the next shot eventually making it up her nose, forcing her to cough and expel semen out of her nostrils and onto your groin
>Suisei and Towa press her down again, and a heavily defeated Aqua simply lets them, the rest of your cum sliding straight into her stomach
>Once you soften up a bit after the best orgasm of your life, they let Aqua pull away, allowing her to catch her breath
>"Uugh..."
>You're spent, and rest your head against the wall while Aqua spits out whatever of your cum she didn't swallow, and cleans up her nose.
>Suisei and Towa both stand up, hooking under Aqua's arms and pulling her along
>"Wow, senpai, you sure did a number on her..."
>"Yeah, what a beast, forcing her to deepthroat you and all..." Towa grins
>"Fueeh..." A seemingly drunk Aqua simply looks around drowsily, her heavy tits hanging from her open shirt
>Tell them they're the ones who forced her down, not you
>"Oh, senpai, that's an awful accusation, you know?" Suisei chuckles.
>"Well, at least he was good enough for a hands-on lesson, huh?" Towa giggles and bends down, flicking your softening cock with her fingernail
>You can't really respond while catching your breath
>"Well, see ya senpai, we're late after all." Suisei kicks the stall door open and pulls Aqua along, Towa right behind and waving her hand
>"Bye byeee."
>You simply sit there dumbfounded as their voices disappear in the distance, the last thing you hear being Suisei telling Aqua to dress up properly...
>Seems like it's very clear who the group's scapegoat truly is...

>> No.32690922

>>32675330
>>32685487
Very nice. I'm listening.

>> No.32692064

>>32675330
>>32612514

>> No.32692310
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>>32690783
My lust for this sexy yet innocent retard knows no bounds

>> No.32692600

>>32690783
God damn, thanks for that.

>> No.32696854

>>32692310
Same. One day I need to write a proper story about making Aqua into a woman, abusing her every hole and drowning in her breastmilk.

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>2 stories posted
>Thread almost silent
where the hell is everyone

>> No.32701459

I just woke up, for some reason.

>> No.32701858

>>32699738
I was asleep

>> No.32701901

>>32699738
Im writing a Mori fanfic

>> No.32701979

>>32701901
Is it Mori smut?

>> No.32702100

>>32701979
Its actually my first attempt at a fanfic but all i can say its that the title is ''the bimbofication of calliope Mori''

>> No.32702244

>>32699738
Busy playing Raft with a mate.

It's... a very boring game, to be honest...

>> No.32702418

>>32702244
You know you have /vt/ brainrot when you read "playing Raft with a mate" as "playing Raft with a male".

>> No.32703926

>>32702244
Can I join?

>> No.32704128

>>32703926
Yeah, sure.

>> No.32704646

>>32699738
Listen I took 4 days off of writing because of a toothache I'm sorry

>> No.32704823

>>32699738
>boring rape story with /wg/'s basic bitch chuuba
>bestiality
There is nothing to discuss.

>> No.32705146

>>32702100
hot

>> No.32705309

>>32704823
0/10, trying too hard

>> No.32705430

>>32699738
Catching up on shitty anime I should've watched ages ago, namely Demon Slayer where Nezuko and Tanjiro are pulling out more power ups than Dragon Ball out their asses.

>> No.32705483
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https://rentry.org/pifni

This is my first attempt at this shiet. i know its cringe and bad but i dont care, I want to give kudos once again to the anon that wrote ''grab as much as you can'' because that shit made me nut and feel happy, so please post more if you did other stuff

>> No.32705766

>>32705483
Don't forget to anchor your story if you want it to be archived

>> No.32705819

>>32705483
Also,this is a request in disguise, please wrote something better with this prompt, i didnt do it justice and my boner is dissapointed
>>32705766
should i do it? or is it too amateur to be anchored?

>> No.32705952

>>32689540
Good stuff

>> No.32706006

>>32705952
What's your favorite part and why?

>> No.32706180

>>32706006
not that anon but i like when they got butt to butt after the seggs was done and the impregnation
that shit is hot

>> No.32706382

>>32706006
When she got the knot stuck in her mouth, I can't really put into words why

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>>32706180
>>32706382
E~, soudesune? Ayashi...

>> No.32707073

>>32706763
You posting this suddenly gave me an idea for a sequel one day where Choco's pups are grown up and they gangbang Towa
thanks anon

>> No.32707089

>>32690783
Good.

>> No.32707220

any good fanfic with armpit action?

>> No.32707285

>>32707220
shrunken troubles

>> No.32707501

>>32689540
I had a specific image of a hellhound in mind it was one of those Houndoom images, later finding out it was a donkey-sized Doberman was jarring. I think it would be better if the story opened with the uncomfortably detailed description of what Kuroshi looks like, which also helps set the tone for what kind of depraved story it is.
I also felt you weren't using the character setting enough. THE big meme about Choco is that she is a cake in dire need of a husband, and that aspect wasn't even touched.
Consider the following:
>no breeder will take him; guess I have to fuck this dog
>no breeder will take him, no suitor will take me; I'll accept this demon mutt and his red rocket full of lava seed
She still receives husbandry correction, but it frames the story as one of personal desperation, rather than merely circumstance and curiosity. It also better justifies how easily she gives in, especially for the type of "expert dogfucker" dirty talk being used.

>> No.32707778

>>32707501
huh
I don't actually know a whole lot about Choco other than some of the surface level stuff, so I didn't know the meme
I'll probably edit it to take this feedback into consideration

>> No.32708030

>>32689540
I don't go out of my way to find beast content, but it was good enough to squeeze a nut out of me. I think focusing on Choco's feelings of degradation and submission is what did it for me, and the bj scene with the knot stuck in her throat was pretty hot, also because of the total helplessness it leaves her in. Women ass up, eyes rolled into their skulls while getting railed are at their best, so good stuff.

>>32705819
We've had literal shitposts get anchored, I don't see why this shouldn't be. It's pretty saccharine in its own way.
The biggest issues it has are in regards to spelling, sometimes you capitalize names, other times you don't. The "I" is almost always in lowercase which is jarring to read in a story in first person, especially. Otherwise there's nothing wrong here that I can see, it's a good first foray into writing.

>> No.32708089

>>32707501
(I'll note Houndoom is kinda based off a Doberman though, and I was kinda thinking something Houndoom-like for it as well which is why I chose a Doberman)

>> No.32708318

>>32707220
Try Nyeh! in the archive. I guess you'd have to search for "wakipai" to find it, not "armpit".

>> No.32708366

>>32707220
'Nyeh!' is the only one I know that has armpit stuff.

>> No.32708368

>>32708030
Thanks a lot anon. yeah i need to proofread my stuff a lot more.
i dont think it should be anchored though, im a bit more autistic about ''showing off'' so ill try to get better before anchoring something
Any other thing i could use to build up my skills? any feedback helps

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>>32612576
Kronii ntr with altare

>> No.32708875

>>32708318
>>32708366
Yeah thats the good stuff
>>32707285
hey what did i do to you?

>> No.32709153

>>32708596
>hehehe le kuroni ntr xddd
you are already shitting up the catalog and the drawthreads, fuck off to your discord clique

>> No.32709258

>>32689540
Wew, good stuff. I think you really nail what makes this kind of smut appealing. Choco's feelings of debauchment and submission are really well done. Especially the stuff about not being able to go back to regular sex as well as recognizing and respecting "a real male". In that sense, the cock worshiping scene is really hot and a perfect encapsulation of what I mean. Props to using Choco's tail in various scenes, it was really effective.

My main criticism is that Choco is a bit too eager. Part of the appeal is the reluctance, as that makes the fall that much better. >>32707501 has a solid idea of making that eagerness work, however.
More of a nitpick, but I think Choco could have gone with more dirty talk. Begging to be knocked up as her mind is completely blasted from pleasure and all that. Really lean into the "a real male" stuff. It would make the ending funnier.

Overall, wouldn't mind seeing more of this stuff.

>> No.32709561

>>32708368
>Any other thing i could use to build up my skills? any feedback helps
The only thing you can do really is to just write, pretty much. But try to write with a purpose, in the sense that you make an outline of points you want to touch upon then try to stay within those boundaries as practice. If you just want to try and get better but don't want to fish for new ideas, maybe pick one of the scenes in the diary and simply expand on them. Actually write out dialogue, actions, prose. Those are the things that set stories apart from one another. So far, the diary is more of a "This is what happened", not so much how it happened. Maybe try that.

>> No.32710411

>>32707501
>>32709258
Edited the story to take into account feedback. Leaning into the husband thing was a great suggestion, and all it took was removing a few things and putting in a new paragraph, and the rest of the story is in a completely different light.

A thought suddenly pierced through her mind, her eyes growing wide; she returned her gaze to the thick, long dick, which was twitching eagerly. A partner for Kuroshi...and a partner for herself. For years, Choco had been trying to find someone who would take her, but no matter how hard she tried, she was never able to find the right man. It was always something wrong with him, or something wrong with her, or they just couldn't find the spark of passion between each other...she'd been with human men and demons of all shapes and sizes, but not one hit the mark. So maybe...she could try going for something a little more...out there?

>> No.32712546
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>>32708875
I definitely need to find a way to incorporate some armpit fucking into my Miko story, but... how...

>> No.32712941

>>32712546
Literally one of her greatest fetishes bruh. It's wakipai. How would you ever struggle to put it in?

>> No.32713297

>>32712941
Because the story is going to be centered around training her ass, so it doesn't really fit the theme. I'll think of something.

>> No.32714237

i'm 100% convinced no one is actually into armpits and it's all just a meme. i've literally never heard about it in any capacity before i got into vtubers. there's no way it isn't just some community in-joke that everyone pretends to find armpits sexy because there's no way that anyone legitemately finds it hot in the slightest.

>> No.32714312

>>32714237
I agree with this. I mean, being into insects impregnating women is one thing, but armpits? Fucking crazy.

>> No.32714611

>>32713297
Her ass hurts really badly and you agree to grant her a temporary reprive if she can make you cum with her armpit in a certain amount of time

>> No.32714623

>>32714237
I think they're OK.

>> No.32714633

>>32713297
you could split it into parts, each focused on worshipping a different part of her bombshell body

>> No.32714660

>>32714237
I literally came to a softcore picture earlier after beating my cock for almost 30m to strictly hardcore because I liked the exposed armpits in that photo more. It's just something you're either into or you're not.

>> No.32714714

How many of your balls would you be willling to give up for having sex with holos 300 times (you get to pick a new partner everytime if you want)?

>> No.32714820

>>32714714
If you gave up both balls, what would even be the point?

>> No.32714855

>>32714820
Not much, so I wouldn't pick that.

>> No.32714857

>>32709258
>Props to using Choco's tail in various scenes, it was really effective.
I forgot to bring this up in the first read through. It's surprising how well the tail stuff was used in the story.
>>32710411
The new line is much stronger than the one it replaces, and really helps sell the later internal monologue. I think she's a little too eager in the beginning, but that may be because I read the first version. It's entirely possible that someone who has only read the revised version will find it plausible. Other than some stuff that really doesn't matter (an infirmary is always connected to a larger building, but nobody overhears the sound of loud wailing while being railed by a giant dog), this is a nice, complete story with a resolved setup and delivery.

>> No.32715008

>>32714237
Brother I have a fetish for cumming into food. Not even eating it, but that's also nice. You really think someone can't have a fetish for armpits? It's human skin. Full of pheromones.

>> No.32715053
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32715053

>>32714237
I haven't been saving these pictures ironically

>> No.32715128

I used to not care about armpits until I watched Watame. I need to fuck her Pits&Tits so badly

>>32714714
0.

>> No.32715273

>>32714857
eh
it's summer so school's out and she's the only one in the building
there that's the explanation lmao
the tail stuff was added in about halfway through, I was like "is there any part of her design that I'm missing" and then I was like oh yeah I could do stuff with that
now I gotta figure out which of my 6 different prompt ideas I gotta write next...

>> No.32715319

>>32715128
Not badly enough to give up a ball over it, apparently.
Coward

>> No.32715357

>>32714714
Does it just *poof* and disappear, or do I have to through all the surgery and everything? Either way, probably zero. I have no idea what that would do to my health and I don’t want to find out.

>> No.32715381

>>32714714
I would give up both balls if I could have sex with all of them 300 times before losing my balls and then gifted the entire wealth of Cover without taxes. Also all the Holo girls will be pregnant with my child. Then I'm fine with losing my balls.

>> No.32715444

>>32715381
Are you going to raise all those children with them?

>> No.32715486

>>32715053
Cum target obtained

>> No.32715588

>>32715444
With my millions I got from Cover, I could. Not all of them, only my favorites would I spend time with raising. Actually scratch that, I only need one child from each gen, the rest can grow fatherless.

>> No.32715774

>>32715588
That's an interesting setup for picking your lucky mothers. Spontaneously I'd go with

Sora
Aki
Choco
FBK
Flare
Coco
Nene
Koyori

Iofi
Anya
Kaela

Ina
IRyS
Fauna

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>>32714237
yeah there is no way anyone can get turned on by soft sweaty smelly armpits

>> No.32716168

>>32716112
Me on the right

>> No.32716221
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>>32716112

>> No.32716418
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>>32715774
It's an odd feeling to be listing which girls I'd want to be pregnant with my child but fuck it I'll do it anyway. Listing the reasons why would take too long.

Miko
Haato
Subaru
Fubuki
Marine
I love all of gen 4 but probably Watame
Polka without a doubt
Laplus

Risu
Reine
Kaela

Kiara
Irys
Baelz

I feel like I've just given away a piece of my humanity by doing this. Also, some of the gens are really tough to choose, especially gen 4 where all of them would make great mothers. Gen 2 though, it was tough because all of them would make bad mothers.

>> No.32716598

>>32715774
>>32716418
IRyS is literally the worst pick from Project: HOPE.

>> No.32716688

>>32716598
Holy fucking shit taste. Irys is absolutely the best pick from that gen. I'm sorry but we don't treat fags here in this thread, maybe you should leave?

>> No.32716854
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>>32716418
>Haato
>Marine
>Watame
>Subaru
>Risu
>Polka
>Kiara
Supreme taste with a shitload of overlap.

>> No.32716879

>>32716112
since you mentioned sweat, i'd just like to mention that the sheer quantity of japanese porn with sweat shoehorned in is proof that japs have no taste. i have never seen a single piece of western porn with sweat but it sometimes seems like every other piece of jap porn has it, utterly ruining an image that would otherwise be incredibly hot.

>> No.32716888

>>32716598
>>32716688
I think she's an average pick from P:H.

>> No.32716964

>>32716598
Show me one person who wouldn't pick IRyS, then you can talk shit.

>> No.32717000

>>32716888
Are you forgetting sYri? The half-human, half-human member of Project: Hope?

>> No.32717060

>>32716964
...Fuck.

>> No.32717201
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32717201

>>32717000
Is she like a mantaur

>> No.32717492

>>32714714
Do you really need both of them? I'll ditch one for three hundo

>> No.32717523

>>32714714
Why would I give up my balls for fictional characters who don't exist?

>> No.32718220

>>32658377
>pic
checked

>> No.32718383

>>32717523
You have no idea how much I absolutely despise you. It's a feeling powerful enough to make me retch.

>> No.32721021

>>32718383
you get mad at shitposters, they win

>> No.32721269

>>32721021
I shoot myself in the head in front of them, they respect me

>> No.32721319

>>32721269
That sounds more like a mental illness than anything else.

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> it was this~ big

>> No.32721948

>>32721790
>"How many of the neighbourhood boys were watching you get railed through the window?"

>> No.32723524
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>>32716112
>Virtual Youtubers barely have any actual armpit sex/armpit stuff that leads to sex at all
Criminal. Absolutely fucking criminal. At least someone wised up and gave Selen a titfucking pic, but still. There should be a law that requires at least one piece be made a week.

>> No.32724039

>>32723524
A man can only cum once. Blow the load inside her sweaty armpit and admire your work, that will do.

>> No.32725574

>>32724039
Fair. What's there just makes me wish there was more though. At least the guy who made the Polka pic is beyond based and has a load of images where it's lots of armpit kissing/licking before something like actual sex, even though it's only Marine and Gura in their own sets so far.

>> No.32726008

>>32725574
I'm into armpit sex but not the whole licking or worshipping thing. It's the same with feet, I love me some good footjob, feet covered in cum, stepping into boots filled with sperm, but the toe licking and sucking is weird.

>> No.32726422

What do you call like a medallion but not held by a string? Like a coin but bigger. Don't think of metal, just in general a round shaped object that holds an engraving?

>> No.32726533

>>32726422
For more context, like the carvings of Dark Souls where you drop them and they say "hello". I'm not finding a word for it

>> No.32726546

>>32726422
>What do you call like a medallion but not held by a string
A medallion

>> No.32726570

>>32726422
Token? Emblem?

>> No.32726629

>>32726570
Isn't token for wood? I'm thinking more like a stone thing. An emblem might work, it sounds off though because of its definition of usually being used for nations, organizations and such

>> No.32726637

>>32726422
>>32726533
Yeah it can still be called a medallion, it's just that some are small enough to be worn as a pendant

>> No.32726677

>>32726637
It's not to be worn, it's a trinket of sorts.

>> No.32726697

>>32726677
It's still a medallion

>> No.32726704

>>32726422
a talisman?

>> No.32726726

>>32726677
Medallion has a lot of uses. It doesn't specifically refer to a necklace like a pendant or amulet does.

>> No.32726759

>>32726422
A simple google search can answer this for you, in fact, I just search it up. Don’t know why you didn’t do that.

>> No.32726773

>>32726677
medallion has a lot of meanings, and can even refer to cuts of meat, for example

>> No.32726804

>>32726704
Talisman would've worked if it was religious. It seems like there isn't a completely exact word for it. Unfortunate I'll just use something else, a generic descricption.

>> No.32726814

>>32726759
In his defense, I tried this and got a lot of unsatisfactory answers but also a metric fuckton of links about shopping for necklaces on fucking Etsy.

>> No.32726852

>>32726804
Actually, I'll just use talisman. It sounds right after I typed it out.

>> No.32727020
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>>32726814
Don't know what kind of shitty search engine you're using, but this is literally what comes up when I typed "What do you call like a medallion but not held by a string?".

>> No.32727113

>>32727020
Mine gives me a amulet as first result and trinkets as second.

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>>32727020
I like posts like these. Really shows some anons, not being able to do the bare minimum on their stories.

>> No.32727215

>>32727175
Anon, neither results that came up when searching that correlate to what was chosen as the correct answer.

>> No.32727357

>>32727175
That Anon didn’t find medallion to be suitable, which is why he asked the thread. Nothing in that search says anything as specific as what >>32726726
>>32726773 say, it just tells you what a medallion actually is, which isn’t what he was looking for.

>> No.32727506

>>32727175
What, snide? Yeah I can tell

>> No.32727523

>>32727357
>That Anon didn’t find medallion to be suitable
No, he described medallions, and he thought medallions were pendants, solely to be worn by a string, when they weren’t. You don’t have to defend him, I can scroll up the thread and see his posts. But yeah, this is going to be my last posts about this.

>> No.32727581

>>32727523
Who in their right mind would find a small circular stone object that can fit in your hand and call it a medallion? You're in the wrong, just stop.

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>>32727581
>Who in their right mind would find a small circular stone object that can fit in your hand and call it a medallion
The people who made the medallion. Not him, but you do know medallions come in various shapes and size, right?

>> No.32727837

>>32727523
Way to miss the point I was making, and by that I mean you didn’t even shoot.

>> No.32727882

Alright shut the fuck up, nobody cares.

>> No.32727981

>>32727795
>That file name
You cheeky cunt.

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>>32727795
Alright, I’ll admit, that made me chuckle, but I’ll drop the subject now.

>> No.32728184
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32728184

Nothing like writing a puzzle that you don't know the solution to. Classic!

>> No.32728249

>>32728184
You have to understand, we have ESLs here.

>> No.32728252

>>32728184
Is it really a puzzle if it can be solved within a minute, if people bothered to search it up?

>> No.32728273

>>32728249
>>32728252
I'm not talking about this discussion. It's unrelated.

>> No.32728460

>>32631317
>>32612514

>> No.32728466

>>32727882
I care

>> No.32729386

>>32689540
As someone that read this post edit while knowing nothing of the pre-exit state, I've got some nitpicks. The "Choco thinking of the hellhound as mate" moment seems at odds with the 'breaking' of her that occurs later on since it seems to something that should occur after she gets aroused by the dog rather than before. Also the 'dirty talk' seems a bit too composed given how hard the writing is making her get fucked, perhaps some slurring of words could have helped with that?
Other than those two nitpicks this got the tone of a beast fucking fic right while having pretty good smut writing. I think it conveys the feelings it wants to get across rather well while also being rather creative with the smut itself. Overall pretty good for a smut fic.

>> No.32729629
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Anya thread next btw

>> No.32729709

>>32729629
Didn't we just had her?

>> No.32730298

>>32716854
>Supreme taste with a shitload of overlap
My guys, that’s not supreme taste, that’s basic bitch tier. Excerpt for Kaela.

>> No.32731082

>>32618855
Finally hope up, and got to say, love this. You knocked it out of the park, anon.

>> No.32731188

>>32731082
*woke

>> No.32731433

>>32728184
Why have a puzzle?

>> No.32731669
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>>32612482
I wish Towa got more fics, she’s severely underrated in my opinion, also wish the fags who keep insisting she’s a boy.

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>>32731669
>also wish the fags who keep insisting she’s a boy.
It's really sad that fags have ruin her with their latent homosexuality. Towa deserves better than that.

>> No.32731924

>>32731669
I have high hopes for A Deal With the Devil. Unless the person writing it is who I think it is. Then I might temper those expectations.

>> No.32731959

>>32731924
It’ll be best if you do temper your expectations. I’ve been burnt before, not a good feeling.

>> No.32732031

>>32731959
What were you looking forward to?

>> No.32732038

>>32729629
That is the ugliest image of Anya I've ever seen.

>> No.32732079

>>32732031
I don’t want to say, on the off chance the author is still here.

>> No.32732090

>>32731924
damn fine proof of concept though

>> No.32732169

>>32732031
Not him, but Callis bad day. It was nothing but disappointing.

>> No.32732302

Agreed about Towa as a boy being stupid. I just want a female Towa with a big dick

>> No.32732310

>>32732079
Coward.

>> No.32732375

>>32732310
People always come to the defense of the authors, just don’t want a subject that would spill over.

>> No.32732382

>>32732302
You repressed fags are the worse.

>> No.32732424

>>32732375
It is pretty fucking retarded how you can't criticize anything here because of all the idiots with hurt feelings who will jump out and samefag the thread to bump limit.

>> No.32732626

>>32732424
But stories get criticised all the time?

>> No.32732699

>>32732626
It's mostly just the authors of Miss Sakura and Cover High that start freaking out, but they freak out hard. Massive shitposters.

>> No.32732734

>>32732626
If you ignore all the evidence that proves him wrong, he does have a point

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>> No.32733210

>>32732699
>Miss Sakura
He's still here?

>> No.32733228

>>32732375
All you're doing is wondering if there's going to be a continuation, right? Why would people need to defend that?

>> No.32733356

>>32733210
I dunno, been a while since he had a tantrum.

>> No.32733661

>>32733210
I think he ritualposts now, and occasionally shitposts.

>> No.32733684

>>32733356
>been a while since he had a tantrum.
Ah, its because people keep bringing him up, yet I never see any updates on him.

>> No.32733783

While you're here earlyfag, can you have your bot remove the stupid fucking ellipses from the last thread stories post

>> No.32733825

>>32733783
You got to specify, there’s 59 earlyfags.

>> No.32733863

>>32733825
If we're all earlyfags, then none of us are earlyfags.

>> No.32733890

>>32733825
No, there's just you faggot. Fix it.

>> No.32734068

>>32733890
Not the earlyfag, but whatever makes you feel better.

>> No.32734236

>>32734068
You shouldn’t take it personally, he just hates people who disagree with him.

>> No.32734242

New thread
>>32733801

>> No.32734270

>>32734068
You might as well fix it now anyways as it's all fucked up, and maybe not just take the first pictures you see off turkeygen either

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>>32734270
You really think I'm the earlyfag. All because I disagree with you and call you a retard for calling everyone an earlyfag. I'll say take your meds, but you're too far gone.

>> No.32734514

remember that time when everyone collectively decided to just stop using the automated 2view threads and make their own instead?
that was a nice arc

>> No.32734566

>>32734426
Anon, just ignore him, there’s no point.

>> No.32734788

>>32733661
Which ritual posts?

>> No.32734795

>>32734514
If I'm awake and able to, I'll make one next time

>> No.32734810

>>32734795
Yeah, I'll be joining that thread

>> No.32734845

>>32734514
I don't trust anyone to use a proper thread over the earlyfag's thread, especially given he just starts rebooting his router like mad to get as many IPs in the thread as possible

>> No.32734848

>>32734795
cool

>> No.32735002

>>32734845
if he wants to waste that much time and effort just to try and force his thread to be the next one, then he can be my guest

>> No.32735044

>>32734514
Eh always felt like that entire arc happened because whoever the earlyfag was at the time was such a jackass that spite fueled the thread for the days needed to kill their ironmouse thread.
Even the laziest OP won't really get that kind of energy back unless they deliberately fuck up the thread.

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