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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.
Previous thread:>>17247596

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STORY ANCHOR
POST 'EM IF YOU GOT 'EM

>> No.17456188
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Do you have a story like you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

>> No.17456214

>not putting Rushia or Polka as the thread edition

>> No.17456328

>>17456214
Disappointing desu. C'mon threadanon, do better

>> No.17456515

>>17456214
>>17456328
earlyfag is content with his nobodies

>> No.17456775

Is it already back to Nijis in the OP rotation?

>> No.17458886

>>17456214
You act like EF actually reads these threads. Or is a real person.

>> No.17460127

>>17458886
Should we replace the thing then

>> No.17460451

>>17456214
This is completely normal. Earlythread fag will just pick a random chuuba that isn't Hololive and use it as the OP. He's gotten the chuuba in question wrong a few times which goes to show he doesn't even watch them, and is only picking them because they aren't a holo. I still don't know what his motive is or what he hopes to achieve, but I think he's the guy who was throwing a tantrum and saying that this should just be renamed "the hololive writing thread" many months ago, before the nightmare thread.
I don't particularly care since it's just an image at the top of the thread and doesn't really affect anything else, but fuck he's got some serious dedication to keep it up for this long.

>> No.17461236

>>17460127
No real point honestly, like >>17460451 says it's just a header image, and at this point I'm reasonably sure any kind of acknowledgement of the thread OP justifies them doing it again, especially since it's not like we go through threads fast enough for them to not have a thread ready to go by post 310.
Especially since that image name format for the images they use is literally just the default booru file save name
So unless they seriously fuck with us by breaking the links at the top again, we can just bear it.
...
Also since metaposting is bad. What's in the works writeanons?

>> No.17461673

>>17461236
My twappers fluff is at 7k words but has been crawling forward at a disappointing pace. I need to up my game and get it done because it’s still a while away from finished.

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>>17461673
>twappers fluff
Hell yes

>> No.17462042

>>17461236
I mentioned it at the end of the last thread, but I'm writing a Matsuri corrupting (You) fic, and I'm intending for her to slowly break your body and mind to the point where you crave her just as much as she craves your dick

>> No.17462133

>>17461673
>crawling forward at a disappointing pace
I know that feeling, having to write a section that is absolutely needed for the plot but is also playing to your weaknesses as a writer. With the only thing you can do being chip away at it bit by bit till you get it done... Or at least that's been my experience when it comes to 'my writing has slowed down to a glacial pace'

>> No.17462571

>>17462133
It’s similar for me, yeah. When I get a flash of inspiration for a story, I think of only a few scenes that I really want to write, but when it comes to connecting those scenes I just cannot for the life of me write something that I’m happy with. They’re necessary because you obviously can’t have two people meet then suddenly move in together or some shit but damn is it tedious.

>> No.17462653

>>17456188
It has come to my attention that there is no step-sister content in the archive.

>> No.17463175

>>17462653
You'd better pick up that metaphorical pen, then.

>> No.17463339

>>17462042
So just long term manipulation or imprisoning (YOU and using drugs and torture to get (YOU) to be remade into what she wants

>> No.17464047

>>17463339
Mental, emotional and power abuse on (you)r virgin ass, giving you a taste of a woman and then depriving you until you can't take it anymore and will only desire her.

>> No.17464294

>>17462571
Admittedly that exact scenario you mentioned could unironically be done, in a 'story setup' way but I get what you mean if you're writing a fic where the journey towards the relationship is the interesting bit.
While you can probably minimize the need to write the 'boring' bits via planning out the structure of the fic sometimes you are just locked in and there is no way you can't have that scene in your fic without it not working.

>> No.17464645

>>17462653
>>17464294
Man, I’m just realising that there are so many common trope stories that we just haven’t written, at least not to my knowledge. Roommates/living together, step-sister, pretending to date, arranged marriage, etc.

>> No.17464946

>>17461673
>twappers fluff
Based
Speaking of Twappers, I still cling to dim hope that we may one day get Young Vibes part 2.
P L E A S E

>> No.17464966

>>17464645
>Roommates
Gave me the stupid idea of checking in on your roommate Matsuri to ask what she wants from Mackers only to realize she's streaming and leaving quietly, unknowingly setting into motion a complete collapse.

>> No.17465065

>>17464966
Za Hando...

>> No.17465101

>>17464966
I don't get it

>> No.17465146

>>17464645
Honestly I think it's because there's like two types of fics made here the "Oshi" fics that are the labor of love made because the writer want it and the "Creative Challenge" fics that are written because the writer thinks a specific prompt/idea is an interesting concept to tackle.
The wellspring of common tropes isn't usually tapped since it's not really within their domains. With the Oshi fics usually spring from 'base' and simple desires and the Creative Challenge fics coming from the 'interesting' ideas.

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>>17461236
Currently working on a fic that's inspired by pic related. It's my first time writing fight scenes which is honestly pretty fun all things considered. It's sitting at around 9k words at the moment but it's probably gonna be a while until I actually finish it.

>> No.17466860

>>17466615
Wait is this fic just based off of the pic, or were you the anon that said they were picking up the 3rd gen are your classmates/ party reincarnation prompt last year?

>> No.17466864

>>17466615
AHHHHHH MODS REMOVE THE DOX AAAAAAA

>> No.17466927

>>17466860
Nope, different anon. Just started this a couple days ago cause that prompt and idea won't leave my head

>> No.17468122

>>17466615
>That Marine
I've already jerked off twice but that Senchou has me completely ready to go again. Marine is truly sex.

>> No.17470379

>>17461236
I've barely started (about 100 words in) but I finally picked up this prompt.

>(you) make burgers for a cover office party
>fubuki gets addicted to your liberty sandwiches
>keeps trying to find excuses to get you to make more
can take it friend or gf route (though i'd very much prefer the latter) from there depending on how close she gets to you on her path to borgars

>> No.17470437

>>17456132
that art is takeshi genesis

>> No.17470613

>>17461236
Mori Ryona, Fucking San

>> No.17470790

>>17461236
Stuff. Coof has mostly vanished. Right now it's Mori getting her fucking ass beat within an inch of her life.

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How many stories in the archive were written by Reine?

>> No.17471253

>>17471170
All of them.

>> No.17471329

>>17471170
Reine runs the archive, where have you been?

>> No.17471908
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>>17456188
Sex with the wing hair trio where the two zoomers keep mogging the hag

>> No.17471913

>>17471329
Woah I didn't know Reine was a man around his late 40s-early 50s who also writes absurdly long stories.

>> No.17472273

>>17471329
Woah I didn't know Reine had two sons and a grandkid which gender hasn't been revealed to us yet.

>> No.17472970

>>17471913
>>17472273
Reine funds it, AA maintains it. Deepest lore: Reine hired the guy who improved the archive.

>> No.17475687

>>17472970
>AA is Reine's fanfic manservant
SO jealous rn

>> No.17476914

>>17475687
> Reine is actually AA's Indonesian wife and he cucked her entire fanbase by putting two kids in that oven
It's not fair...

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>>17476914
I hope Pochi knows that, she's been desperate for a man to dick down Reine.

>> No.17479856

>>17464966
My Crybaby Roommate is a V-tuber?!
>Be me
>Be normal part-time wagie that needed a roommate to make rent and pay for college
>Find girl that was kind of off but at least she can pay half
>It's been 3 weeks and she hasn't left her room and I hear her talking to herself sometimes
>Worry that she might be going through some things that she cannot talk to anybody about
>Decide to invite her to get some food to cheer her up
>Open her door slightly and say "Hey want to grab some grub down the street with me?"
>Look around the room and its dirty af with clothes and boxes everywhere
>Look at her
>She is looking at me in pure horror as she starts to mess with her computer
>Her computer has a weird avatar thing that moves with her head movements and some sort of chatbox that is going crazy with text
>She looks at me dead in the eyes and says "get out" in a quiet voice with tears in her eyes
>"A-ah, sorry."
>Close door again
>Eh, maybe tomorrow

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>> No.17483454

>>17483416
Gomen Nenechi, Am writing

>> No.17483478

>>17483416
I'm awake damn it, the lights on the warning station haven't gone off!

>> No.17484053

>>17470379
Bless you, Anon! I've wanted to see it written for so long now, but could never sit down and start it myself.
I hope you take it down the gf route, though ultimately it's up to you. Still, I'm looking forward to it either way!

>> No.17487107

>>17484053
Rest assured anon, I'm going down gf route.

>> No.17487154

>>17479856
Hearty laugh. Having a roommate chuuba would be an awkward as fuck experience.

>> No.17488111

>>17487107
Truly bless you Anon! I'm looking forward to reading it!

>> No.17489073

>>17466927
Well either way, nice. That picture has kind of been thrown around as a fanfic concept before so it's nice seeing someone tackle it.

>> No.17491179

Any genuinely depressing stories floating around? I want to read stuff that will make my heart sink.

>> No.17491226

>>17491179
I remember that Mumei fic being quite depressing.

>> No.17491307

>>17491179
'While my guitar gently weeps' is a classic.

>> No.17491613

>>17491307
Over hyped. I thought there would actually be some Kanata in there but there really isn't.

>> No.17492205

>>17491179
The Marine Alzheimer's ones are the standard, I guess.

>> No.17493059

>>17466615
>fight scenes
Interested in how they would be needed for this fic. If you want some inspiration I’d recommend holocalypse and say hello to my FRIEND, they have decent writing for fights.

>> No.17493496

>>17491179
A cat’s life, Ameranthine and Young Vibes are good. Also the link to Memories of a better time is dead.

>> No.17496827

>>17479856
Honestly I'd a fic with this concept expanded.

>> No.17499815

>>17496827
It'd be fun to try and detail living with a woman whose entire life revolves around no one knowing you exist.

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>>17479856
My Crybaby Roommate is a V-tuber?! (Part 2)
>Be me again
>Roommate still hasn't left her room since the last incident
>Wondering if she can even sustain her health on no sunlight
>Still hear her talking to herself(?) sometimes
>I haven't even seen her use the shower for the last 3 days
>Ew
>Decide to say fuck it and knock on her door to check on her
>Hear some shuffling and then the door slightly open
>She is just standing there looking at me with a questioning face
>"You okay? Just wanted to check on you."
>"Y-yeah..."
>"How about we go outside and get a quick snack? Okay?"
>She seems hesitant but nods her head and closes the door again
>She comes back out in casual wear but she smells kind of bad, like the type of bad where someone tries to mask it with too much perfume
>I try not to cough at the stench and take a quick peek into her room
>It's worse than it was before somehow, some trash bags are pushed up against the wall
>Oh god how has she lived this long
>I start to pick up some of the bags
>She starts to protest but I ignore her and pick all the bags up and take them out to the garbage
>She is a little red in the face from shame but quietly says "Thank you..."
>We go out and have a nice dinner near the shore
>We get home and she thanks me once again before looking at her dirty room
>She looks at me once again and a determined look goes through her face
>She picks up some dirty clothes from her floor and I leave her to her cleaning
>Later on into the night before I go to sleep I hear her talking to herself once again, but this time with a happier tone
>I can't really hear her but I get one word through my brain before I finally drift off
>"Friend."

>> No.17505569

>>17504116
Why do I feel like the twist at the end is going to be that this is Matsuri's past and she's not actually a vtuber yet.

>> No.17508913

>>17505569
>It's actually Aqua

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"Ehhh? But that doesn't explain why you were smiling at her..." Korone tilted her head to the side as she advanced towards me, backing me up into a corner.
"I just thanked her!" I nervously muttered as my hands frantically searched for ground behind me. I was sitting down, stumbling backwards further into the corner as my abusive girlfriend, Korone Inugami, towered over me in the singular room of our cheap apartment.
"Thanking a cashier is fine, but don't you think adding a smile was a bit too far?" She said with an innocent expression on her face, as if she was stating the obvious. As if there was nothing weird about punishing your boyfriend for smiling at a cashier as they thanked them for the transaction.
"P-Please, Korone." I was panting nervously now. My heart raced against my chest as I realized that she might hit me in any second. One wrong move and I would be in a world of pain.
"A naughty boyfriend should be punished." She spoke slowly, smiling at me. "Or else he might do it again."
"I'll never do it again!" I launched my hands at her feet, bowing down before her in a begging position. "Please, you don't have to do anything! You're the only girl I have eyes for! Please-"
*CRACK*
Her foot struck my ribs from the right, sending me reeling and rolling over on the floor to my side. The cold hard floor greeted me, and I could only see the dark silhouette of my girlfriend as she peered down at me. Our cheap, flickering ceiling light was shining behind her form. From down here, she looked like a giant.
"I practiced kicks today." She noted cheerfully. Korone was an avid member of a local kickboxing club. Despite the fact that we were poor, she made sure to always save up money for it. Now that she mentioned it, I caught the aroma of her sweat emanating from her. Since she normally didn't shower anyway, I had grown used to the stench and barely noticed it anymore. But on the days when she came back from kickboxing practice, there was a slight accent to her natural body odour.
"Please..." I murmured on the ground, at her feet.
"Please? Please what?" Korone asked with feigned confusion.
"Please don't take another finger! I learned my lesson!"
"Ehh?" She tilted her head head to the other side. Korone placed a single index finger on her chin, seemingly pondering.
"I've learned my lesson!" I blurted out. "I'll never smile at another girl again!"
Her eyes peered into mine. Like a predator sizing up her prey, her brown eyes looked at me in a relaxed, yet alert way.
"...Never?" she echoed.
"Never!"
Korone brushed her hair to the side as she leaned down. Her mouth was just an inch from my ear. I could feel the warmth of her breath against my ear, and the musk of her gym-sweat enveloped my senses, making me light-headed. It took my mind off the pain in my ribs.
"Never?" She whispered into my ear. I gulped.
"N-Never..."
*CRACK*
Another kick, this one delivered to my shin. Sharp pain jolted me as I let out a cry of pain. I crumbled into a fetal position on my side, clutching my knee against my stomach for protection. It ached with pain as Korone rose up to her standing height again.
"Anon... you get off easy today." She said with her hand on her hip. "But don't push your luck, okay? I don't want to hear you squirming back here when I go on stream."
She stopped. He eyes went wide as she did a cute little gasp.
"That reminds me! I have a collab with Shion in ten minutes! I better get ready!"

>> No.17510096

>>17509477
Based. Classic Early writethread feel. Very nice.

>> No.17510233

>>17510096
It's probably because I haven't been to these threads in over a year. Have they changed much?

>> No.17510445

>>17510233
Yes and No? I've only been around since May so I can't say it's too different from then. Maybe less abuse overall but there's still a fair amount shared.

>> No.17511106

>>17510233
There aren't quite as many writeanons are there used to be, and a lot of those that are left have gotten pretty busy with IRL things.

>> No.17511125

>>17510233
It's more longform, proper stories in Docs now rather than the post format but it's still people writing chuubas. Abuse is far rarer than it was in the beginning. Not insanely rare, but definitely not the norm. We're approaching our one year anniversary soon.

>> No.17511337

>>17510445
>>17511106
>>17511125
This sounds like the perfect opportunity for me to sweep up and take over the Abusive Korone niche.
It's really weird calling it a "niche" now. It was very popular back when I was last here.

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>>17511337
Hey feel free. I'm always down for any form of doog posting

>> No.17511453

>>17510233
I mean to give a hard change, abuse fics like that aren't actually that common anymore interest is absolutely still there but I'm reasonably sure a lot of the early writers wanted to write about something else thus leading to the varied content here.

>> No.17511476

>>17511337
It still has its crowd. The "issue" is that there was, at the time, an abundance of abusive stuff. As people began to branch out more and express interest in other things/authors getting tapped out of creative juices for the subject, it just sort of fell to the wayside. We're probably overdo for some more, though, so go crazy.

>> No.17511498

>>17511337
Having ERP with an anon cross dressing as Pekora is what the cool kids do here nowadays. Get with the times old man.

>> No.17511541

>>17511337
Welcome back into the fold

>> No.17511720

>>17511498
Does Pekora beat the shit out of you after you beg her to let you masturbate to her while rubbing your cheek against her pantyhosed leg?

>> No.17511838

>>17511720
LIterally ignore everything he said. It's just the result of some annoying personalities who don't get the memo they're not welcome.

>> No.17511892

>>17511720

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSAL28ZFk_vysT0fI730rHWa5Q8TF7LWrFeQi2dPy4YqFRGsAbi4w3QblrNOgWiRpHM3Zqyh4KQIARI/pub

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>>17511720
I wish.

>> No.17512377

>>17456154
>>17500038

>> No.17512397

>>17512186
Ough I want Peko-chan to mash her stinky NEET pussy on my face while verbally degrading me for being a perv

>> No.17512703

>>17456154
I wrote the fic I said I was going to write. Personally, I think PF could probably do a better job. If there are any unironic cucks (read: deadbeats) out there let me know if I did your fetish justice. Enjoy?

Tags: Fubuki, Interracial, Cuckold, NSFW


https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSaovYXP-qTVYr8J3t0pX6Vx1eOjE6yh8kuJ0ilfzsDFCrfv_fAAPRx9bSUgcTCjtKV2aRWie9IWaqk/pub

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>>17512377
Ah man, that was dumb. At least Husbands know Nene will love them no matter what. There's some comfort in that, I imagine.

>> No.17513691

>>17512703
You're brave, posting this after the shitfit over the rape fic the other day.

>> No.17513860

>>17511337
Personally, I tend to write emotionally/mentally abusive stories rather than physical as you can really drive in the pain deeper than any physical trauma.

Break a man's bones and he'll recover after a few months, but break a man's heart and he may never be the same ever again.

>> No.17514197

>>17512703
I'm going to be honest this leaves a bad taste, and ironically not because of the themes but because it tries to play it too 'smart'. This is a genre that's reliant on 'shock and awe', gut feelings, and base emotions. This fic plays it a bit too safe in that regard by making it feel too normal, too blase about it. I think you could have made it work better if you leaned harder on the cuckoldry and actually make it feel bad.
To state my feelings on this in a sentence it, rather mediocre. Meh dialogue, kind of arousing sexual descriptions, and a misunderstanding of the strengths of the genre.

>> No.17514219

>>17512703
The nsfw scenes could've used some more work but I guess it's not the focus so it's fine
>>17513691
I mean it isn't as bad as the rape fic I guess.

>> No.17515191

>>17514197
That seems to be a recurring problem I have with fics that revolve around cheating. Thanks for the feedback!

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>>17456188
Training your rowdy pup to be an obedient good girl.

>> No.17516350

>>17515191
You've written other cheating fics here?

>> No.17517220

>>17516350
Yeah. One of them was a Fubuki NTR that had a happy ending and the other was a Watame NTR that lacked the punch in your gut feeling that NTR is supposed to have. For the Fubuki one I went out of my way to have a happy ending which probably made the story worse desu.

>> No.17517398

>>17517220
Oh yeah I remember that watame one, at least here you kept the PoV consistent. You're still struggling with making a fic like this have impact but at least you're going in the right direction if you want to keep making 2nd person NTR/cuck fics. All you need is to work on making it hurt.
The fubuki one was the one where she was fucking your entire office right?

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>>17456188
Getting daily pics and updates from Subaru that turn more and more depraved and sexual

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>>17512703
Cuck here, I appreciate your efforts.
In terms of more objective criticism, I think the rising action felt a little contrived, what with her going deep-in with the queen of spades schtick without any apparent foreknowledge of (You)r masochistic tendencies or experience being an onahole. After that it picked up more normally though, and the sex scenes themselves were fairly juicy..

In terms of whether you captured the essence of the fetish... kind of? Seeing Fubuki be a little pushy and call (You) out for getting hard at hearing about/watching her get dicked down is very much in the spirit of it, as is her attitude gradually getting sluttier. Picrel was the peak of it IMO, got me good.
That said, a few things were distinctly not to my taste. Having the entire thing be instigated by her, at first in secret from you, paints her as rather bitchy, which sort of weakens the apparent strength of her relationship with Anon and leaves little room for corrupting it further. Much of the eroticism is in the gradient of it all, the downward spiral: the sweeter and more attached the girl, the more depravedly erotic it is to have her gradually tease and deny you more and more as she gets sluttier.
Next, and this is like a 50/50 as far as netorase fans go, the actual scenes where she's fucking other dudes are of little descriptive interest to me. Rather, I care about the milestones of depravity she's hitting (getting done raw, gangbanged for the first time, kissing and acting lovey-dovey with other guys, etc) and want the meat of the erotic description to be reserved for scenes between the girl and the cuck. Again, coming back to the handjob, I'd rather that have been expanded greatly in length, or to multiple similar scenes, while her exploits with Jamal be reported by her in shorthand directly to Anon rather than given so much focus by the narrator.
Finally, and again, 50/50ish on preference amongst fans, ending a story on a really optimistic note like that is a bit of a blueball. Not to say I want a "bad end", mind, where she's permanently cucked away or whatever, but giving the cuck extra pussy from other girls feels too rewarding for a narrative targeting masochists. A simple reaffirmation of Fubuki's love would have sufficed, if not a "the adventure continues!"-style ending where they continue the erotic play indefinitely into the future.

Seriously though, I appreciate the effort. Incidentally, I AM a cuck and I rather dislike Mori

>> No.17518653

>>17518120
Smartest cuck in /vt/

>> No.17519079

>>17518120
>Cuck here
Why is this funny

>> No.17519145

>>17518120
And so the trend continues of the weirdoes being the most amicable posters

>> No.17519347

>>17517398
>spoiler
correct
>>17518120
Okay now I'm starting to understand that it's more about getting cucked then the actual cucking. Your criticism has been super helpful. On a final note, did you cum? That sounds like a weird question but that's ultimately the end goal in writing smut in my opinion.

>> No.17519490
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17519490

>>17517746
This but with Rushia

>> No.17519548

>>17519347
>Okay now I'm starting to understand that it's more about getting cucked then the actual cucking
Yeah, I think a few people have phrased it this way, but it's an extension of femdom and S/M play first and foremost. The cuck deserves the most focus and attention.
>On a final note, did you cum?
No, but not necessarily for lack of material. I'm like a half hour from being unconscious, sorry. That screencap probably would've done it earlier in the day. If you do this again but with Aki my dick would explode

>> No.17520291

>>17518120
Have you write

>> No.17520385

>>17520291
I have, in fact, submitted multiple stories to the archive, but I think it's amusing that you don't know which, so I won't elaborate

>> No.17520411

>>17519347
>more about getting cucked then the actual cucking
Okay NTA but man did this sentence make me understand the 'art' of cuckold captions since it's pretty much the same genre in that it focuses on the feelings of the reader insert as they feel it rather than on the action displayed in the image. Kind of makes me want to try and take a stab at this genre now too.

>> No.17520456

>>17520385
Not fun i want know you type familiar

>> No.17521540

>>17519490
Schoolgirl Rushia is such NTR bait.

>> No.17521613

>>17521540
We had this discussion last thread. You'd panic thinking you were getting cucked but she'd actually kill the Jock Chad, the fat Math teacher, and the foreign exchange student whenever they actually were alone.

>> No.17522102

>>17521613
Okay but what if you were the PoV character trying to NTR her.

>> No.17522719
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17522719

>>17456154
Here's the attempt at Mori Ryona. It's been a hot minute since I last tried writing it but I think it definitely went better this time.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vT9VHtRptJ10Z03r-l0yYgT32X3dPmhCxeKKywhAMHcxKiJE6AJX2ArVcqQ5KIOKI9cT5sgZC2eNJQg/pub

Tags: Mori, SFW, Chuuba Abuse, Ryona


Surprising request, but do let me know what you think.

>> No.17523121

>>17522719
Slightly disappointed that there isn't any mention of lean but the abuse made up for it. The action had a good flow to it and there weren't any grammatical errors I could find. So very good abuse fic.

>> No.17523515

>>17522719
I like the dialogue but the action felt flat if you were seriously going for ryona, it felt more like you were trying to cross apply knowledge from writing action scenes rather than writing a sex scene where the violence is the sex.
Also the 'aftercare' part felt a bit too short, I know that's not the part that really matters but if you're putting it in I think more of it would have been nice.

>> No.17524166
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17524166

>>17522719
Requester here.
Fuck that felt good. Great job. It's exactly what I needed, and more. Like, I didn't even consider the aftercare part, but it was brilliant.

Thanks a billion for fulfilling my request.
Mori love.

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17525511

>>17523121
Yeah, I mean I probably wouldn't have included it anyway, but the requester did specifically say not to. Thanks for the compliments!

>>17523515
Hmm, I do see both your points. The first one may be in part to my brain having the violence on action mode rather than it being passionate due to some other things I'm writing. The aftercare was meant to lead into a timeskip where it seems like you're relationship with Mori has improved, but she's still noticeably jumpy. I decided that was going a bit too far past what the idea was and stopped. Though, I definitelyshould have fleshed out what I left.

Really I think the biggest thing I should take away is that Ryona isn't just an alternate term for abuse.

>>17524166
Hey, I'm glad you liked it! I haven't written a legitimate request in a while, so it's glad to know I didn't disappoint.

Mori love indeed

>> No.17525679

>>17522719
Cute...

>> No.17525823

Anons, if you could choose a piece from the archive to be illustrated into a short comic, which one would it be?

>> No.17525946

>>17525823
It has to be short? In that case I’d pick an action scene maybe from one of the series’. As much as a full on romance comic of one of the fics would be nice, they’re generally easier to visualise and wouldn’t require that visual aspect a comic can provide. If not action though just some good old smut, can’t go wrong with porn

>> No.17526181

>>17525823
Paradise Lost i.e. the scat fic.

>> No.17526241

>>17526181
can you don't

>> No.17526281

>>17526181
I was gonna say the rape fic, but I totally forgot about this. This is perfect.

>> No.17526288

>>17525823
The fight in scene in the hospital in ch.6 of Holocalypse.

>> No.17526335

>>17525823
Honestly, Lies come to light.
Mostly because I'd be interested in how anyone would adapt that while still keeping the sexualized violence.

>> No.17526371

>>17526335
Fuck! I forgot that one, too! It's too difficult to pick just one.

>> No.17526447

>>17525823
the dream sequence from cover high

>> No.17527173

>>17512703
Of course weirdanon would write this
Either way, just like the previous one - won't even bother checking it out
Good on you for writing it though, ig

>> No.17527177

>>17525823
Not sure how short "short" is, but "Corrupting Nene" or "Luna's Dentist Appointment Massacre" are both fairly short, and would be cool to see.

>> No.17527371

>>17527177
Of fuck Corrupting Nene sounds amazing if it was made into a comic.
The fact that it's mostly narration and dialogue almost makes it perfect to be adapted as well.

>> No.17528796

>>17525823
Perhaps a little self-centred, but I always imagined the ending of MW accompanied by the Undella Town theme, the waves slowly and rhythmically washing over Anon as he fades away, before he wakes up on another beach, the waves taking away those memories back to the sea.

>> No.17528838

>>17525823
Still waiting for BossLamy's comic commissions to come in.

>> No.17528927

>>17528838
it's been half a year, i don't think it's happening

>> No.17530311

>>17526181
>the scat fic
>the
Are the original weirdanon's scat contributions so easily forgotten? I suppose he wasn't attempting to make it erotic, but still.

>> No.17530337

>>17530311
I feel immense disgust at the fact that, not only there are scat fics, but there are enough of them to make distinctions

>> No.17530423

>>17530337
Can't be any worse than waking up and looking at the mirror

>> No.17530443

>>17530423
Dude you eat shit, shut the fuck up

>> No.17530457
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17530457

>>17456188
Steaming hot, pure childmaking, sex with Lamy

>> No.17530472

Isn't this place great?

>> No.17530734

>>17530472
Honestly despite the occasional spats this place is probably the most civil a general can be. Since trolling here is probably way too high effort unless you can also write fics.

>> No.17530802

>>17530472
If /vt/ is a massive storm of shit and toxicity. /wg/ is the eye of the storm where it is somewhat calm and serene. Aside from the few shitters that manage to get in here

>> No.17532875

>>17530457
Seconding this.
I hope the Anon that wrote about spending Christmas with Wamy will write a continuation. I'd be extremely grateful if he did so (and so would be my dick).

>> No.17532949

>>17530472
Unironically yes. Regardless of how much bait is casted and bitten, this is probably the one place in the whole board where you can find anons seriously dedicated to creating literary works for their favourite chuubas and being brave enough to share it to the rest of us.

>> No.17532990

>>17528796
It’s a comic, there’s no audio.

>> No.17533099

>>17532990
Wait what someone's seriously thinking of commissioning a fic/scene from here to be made into a short comic?
I thought that was just discussion bait.

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>>17528838
To think there still exist those who yearn for the tales of /become/. Truth be told, and as one might expect, I have paused the project indefinitely. There exist so few aware of our past, and fewer still willing to continue what we once had built, that I thought it a fruitless endeavour.
It shall come as no surprise if there are those who find my reasoning unsatisfactory, and to they, I hope one day my apologies may be sufficient. Even so, if there is interest, I can perhaps release what was complete, even if it is quite so little.

>> No.17533359

>>17533099
I couldn’t tell you, I’m not >>17525823, I’m just pointing out that comics don’t usually come with a built in speaker to play music.

>> No.17534716

>>17525823
HoloFantasy's versus Ina

>> No.17534777

I'm not writing gen 0 gets Buff. Sorry to anyone who wanted it. I've been in a slump. I thought about writing more than actually doing it. I hated thinking about it after a while. I can't really give a good excuse. But I won't write it. Sorryfvsghdhd

>> No.17535305

>>17534777
Oh.
...
Can I ask what the hell was supposed to happen with the Ame time travelling to find Guras plot that was in the prologue chapter you posted.
I feel like having at least some closure for that would be nice.
This is also to try and anonymously confirm that you're actually the writer and not just a random anon

>> No.17536726

>>17525823
The PF instant loss moment

>> No.17538179

>>17535305
>>17535305
Sure. I just didn't want to blog post since I feel like im not gonna write for a while or just not do it at all. It was supposed to start with a timeline like ours where AZKi contemplates wanting a world where the hololive are their lore selves and not just roommates, after seeing the character of Coco stop existing after she graduated. Her wish ends up creating multiple timeline with said lore selves. That brings in Ame time travel shenanigans where each time, an Ame hops dimensions to change something but ends up making that universe rid of lore selves and replaced with roommate selves. Story takes place in timeline where an Ame catches up to a point in time to stop it from happening (Her motive is to stop the chain of Ame's fucking up shit so she can meet lore Gura again after finding many universes eith just her roommate). Preventing this timeline from changing involves Gen 0 getting buff to play peacekeeping between a nationalist group formed by Pekora and Ayame against Hololive KR with Kronii, Ina and Sana (HoloX misleads the former into believing the latter is doing a hostile takeover of hololive, to create internal strife and take over themselves).

Pretty convoluted as you can tell. I could go into detail with how I got sick of thinking about this prompt. Short part of is that I spent too long about trying to twist the prompt into my own thing until I realised I wasn't fully motivated to write it. I'm sorry, since I did say I would write it for some while, but I hate thinking about it now.

>> No.17538632

>>17538179
You got my brains scrambled like 3 lines in.

So it's like, Kingdom Hearts but with Hololive instead. I see.

>> No.17540943
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>>17538179
Sounds nuts but in a fun way. Sucks that you lost the motivation but don't apologize for it.

>> No.17542686

>>17456188
> anon is rich, has a great job, lots of friends and powerful acquaintances
> he is set for life
> however, he is clinically depressed and can enjoy none of that
> he tried everything scientific and even occult to at least make it better, to no avail
> he starts to think that he might be better off dead, but he recognizes his auspicious circumstances and doesn't want them to go to waste
> he finds Mori and asks her to take his soul into the underworld and give his life to a soul that is more deserving of all the riches he has

>> No.17542788
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17542788

Marine giving you a handjob while she shows you pictures of herself when she was 14

>> No.17543124
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>>17542686
Why are you making a prompt out of my life story? Minus the rich part, it's eerily similar...

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>>17542788
That's...dunno how to feel about that. I can't tell if it's more or less weird

>> No.17543523

>>17543124
Can you give me all your shit? I'll enjoy it for you.

>> No.17545290

>>17512703
You're going to burn in hell cuckfag

>> No.17545810
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Milking Eliras fat sweaty tits

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17546160

>>17545810
>Both Selen and Elira are titcows hiding their massive breasts
>They'll never come to you to help relieve the pressure

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>>17546160
>Imagine them struggling not to whimper when their breasts are too full but they're too shy to ask for help

>> No.17546549

>>17513691
What rape fic? Rape is my fetish especially if it focuses on the psychological suffering and none of that "She's enjoying it" bullshit.

>> No.17546670

>>17518120
Who is your oshi, based cuck?

>> No.17547035
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17547035

>>17546504
>Elira's outfit makes it obvious that she's leaking
>Selen laughs at her and teases her to cover the fact that she is too, but its just harder to tell

>> No.17547579
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17547579

>>17547035
(You) are left with no choice but to take the titties into your own hands and milk these two dragons for there own sake

>> No.17547596

>>17538179
Sounds wild... Also sounds like the metaplot was really not related to the whole getting buff thing outside of like throwing crumbs to the original requester. Which makes sense given what I remember of the uruka gets buff fic.
Honestly it sounds like you got lost making the wild plot that you never got around to making it this giving yourself anxiety over it. Though I suppose with your pseudoshitpost style stalling out like this would fuck up further progress since you'd be locked in ascending heaps of absurdity while also trying to juggle the 'serious' initial starting point.
Hope you can find your spark of writing again though.

>> No.17548271

>>17546670
Rosemi, but she's a rather poor match for this type of play. I actually have difficulty sexualizing her in general. She's just fun to watch.
Prime NTS material chuubas have a dominant/sadistic lewd streak that doesn't dominate their personality, someone you could imagine being reluctant to engage in unusual/extreme fetish play, but that could also be convinced into it with a little effort. Aki is my go-to, Matsuri, Suisei, Mio, etc. are also decent picks.

>> No.17549361

>>17546160
>>17546504
>>17547035
>>17547579

Milking the two dragon sisters while they gasp and moan until you've collected almost 4 buckets full of dragon milk. The two of them then eye you with an amorous glare and now it's your turn to be "milked"

>> No.17549522

>>17548271
Oh those are really good picks. I can totally imagine a scenario with all of them.
Aki being your wife that finds a thrill openly doing it.
Matsuri being your girlfriend that finds better sexual satisfaction outside of your relationship but still keeps you around for emotional support.
Suisei being your childhood friend that falls into depravity chasing her dreams and leads you to suffer due to you wanting to support her.
Mio being a classic Bully NTR target that gets corrupted by them trying to defend you.
And these are just ideas I'm spitballing.

>> No.17549582

>>17549361
You end up knocking them up only causing them to produce even more milk!

>> No.17552318

bump

>> No.17552471
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17552471

>>17549361
>>17549582
What would dragon milk be like? I'm thinking something kind of like a thinned out kefir where it's a little sour and almost carbonated feeling

>> No.17554168

>>17542788
"See? I still look pretty much the same, don't I?" Marine paused to swap hands. She had been giving me a handjob with one hand for the past three minutes while holding her phone in the other, showing me pictures of her younger self. And although she was going slow on me, her arm seemed to have gotten tired already.
"Yeah, you still look the same." I lied. It wasn't a complete lie, though. If you took away the crow's feet and the faint but undeniable presence of her sagging jowls, she looked pretty much the same.
She stopped and leaned in, looking up at me with a pained expression on her face.
"That was a lie, wasn't it?" She pouted. "How could you lie to Senhcou..."
"What? No!" I acted shocked. "Of course not! You're every bit as cute as you were in that image!"
Tears seemed to be welling up in Marine's eyes. The way she looked up at me reminded me of the meme of Aqua from the Konosuba anime. If Aqua had a redheaded grandmother, she'd be a good fit.
"...really?" Marine sniffed.
"Huh?" I had forgotten what I had just said to her. "Oh, right. Yeah, you look just as cute as you did when you were 14! Why don't you show me another image?"
"Okay." Marine sniffed again and swiped on her phone with her right hand. Her left was now moving up and down on my shaft as she sat on my left side. However, there was remarkably less enthusiasm in her strokes. She pulled up another image of herself from her prime years and showed it to me, accompanied by a sad look on her real life face. The image was a shot of her from behind, and she was leaning forward to take the selfie on a mirror while giving a wink with her tongue out. It gave a perfect view of her ass and thighs. They were voluptuous and thick in all the right places.
"Wow." I found myself muttering. I had forgotten how good Marine's ass had been in her prime.
"I can still do that pose!" Marine suddenly piped up after hearing me. Even though my remark was aimed at her younger self, the compliment of a "wow" seemed to have immediately put her in a better mood. She put down her phone and let go of my dick as she scrambled to do the same pose, including the wink. Her youthful wink created an odd juxtaposition with her 30-something face. Worse, although her ass and thighs were fatter than before, the cellulite beginning to subtly form on them was a grim reminder that she was not, and would never be, the girl from that picture ever again.
"How do I look? Hot?" Marine asked excitedly, oblivious to her condition. "You're turned on, aren't you? Oh, I know!"
Marine paused and gave me lewd look, hearts appearing in her irises.
"I'm horny!" She exclaimed.
I felt blood pumping to my dick as it became harder. I had to hand it to her: despite her aging body, Marine knew how to act lewd. I could not deny that.
"Can we have sex now?" I asked. When I had asked earlier, she said she was too tired for it (as she often said, nowadays) so we had settled for a handjob. "I know you said you were too tired for it, but after seeing your ass, I'm really in the mood right now." I added. It was also a lie, what actually put me in the mood was her lewd attitude, which hadn't changed despite her decreasing libido over the years.
"Really?" She asked, like a hopeful child. "My ass turned you on?" She stopped and the surprise on her face immediately turned into a relaxed, lewd look. "I mean, of course it did. You love seeing my ass."
My dick was getting softer. And she noticed it as her glowed hand began rubbing me faster. She glanced down at it from the corner of her eye with desperation.
"Yeah, I love seeing your ass, Marine! Now let's fuck before I lose my boner!"
Marine stopped to give me an 'Are you fucking kidding me' look. I cleared my throat.
"I mean," I stuttered. "I love seeing your heavenly ass and bewitching thighs! Let's fuck before I lose my mind because I'm crazy horny right now! You are a SEX GODDESS! Seventeen years old season 1!"
"Now you're trying too hard." Marine said, her voice swapping to her lower pitched one. "But if you're trying too hard, I guess it must mean you're really horny."
I nodded.
"I guess it can't be helped." She said. "Fine, lie on your back."
"Huh?" That took me completely by surprise. Marine would never be on top. The last time she was on top was years ago.
"I'm going to show you that I still have the energy!" She said confidently.
(1/2)
(The following post is NSFW)

>> No.17554570

>>17552471
I can only imagine it beings as sweet and warm as they are!

>> No.17554615

>>17554168
>Worse, although her ass and thighs were fatter than before, the cellulite beginning to subtly form on them was a grim reminder that she was not, and would never be, the girl from that picture ever again.
>Worse
>grim
MC is a faggot. Excellent description though

>> No.17555910

>>17552471
Influenced by what they drank before
So mainly it's going to be a sickly sweet flavour of generic unflavoured energy drinks hat always reminded me of cough syrup

>> No.17555955

>>17554168
(2/2)
(The following is NSFW:)

I did as she asked, although I was questioning her resolve. She climbed on top of me and straddled me, her fat thighs enveloping my waist as she pulled aside her sheer leotard, revealing a vagina that didn't look as tight as her 14 year old self. However, compared to the rest of her body, this one part had aged somewhat gracefully. It was still pleasing to look at, and my dick throbbed with the thought of entering it. With a white gloved hand, she guided my tip into her. I was rushed with a good feeling as my member inserted into the warmness of her pussy. She let out a small gasp as I reached her cervix, pushing against it.
Gone was the confident and lewd Marine, replaced by a woman who looked like she was losing her virginity for the first time again. She gingerly rocked back and forth with her hips, barely moving. Her eyebrows were raised and her face was flushed red as she looked down at me.
"Aaahhh! I'm cumming!" She whispered.
Already? I thought.
She began rocking back and forth a little bit harder, but it was still not a lot of movement. Her hips and crotch began to vibrate. I could feel her insides shaking. In an instant, warm fluid began leaking out of her and onto my groin, but it was not my cum. It was all her.
She collapsed on top of me, dead tired, panting. She was out of breath as if her tiny movements were akin to running a marathon. Her breath was warm against my chest. It had barely been twenty seconds since we started.
I gave her a few moments to catch her breath, knowing that she needed it.
When they passed, I gingerly rolled her over so that she was on her back and I was on top.
"Anon..." She murmured. "Be gentle with me... I'm not young anymore."
But you're still perfect, I thought in my head.
I thrusted inside her, going slower and softer than I would have liked. She let out tight gasps each time, as if each thrust was enough to send her mind to oblivion. Her hot body was already slicked with sweat, and I leaned in so that her wet breasts would be squishing up against my chest. In her younger days, she would wrap her arms and legs around me at this point, putting me into a leglock. But her legs were no longer as flexible as they used to be, so she simply let them stay where they were. Being as tired as she was, even her arms didn't move up to go around my shoulders.
But the look in her eyes, the same "please take care of me" look that she had, was still as innocent as ever. She made intense eye contact with me, her eyes begging me, her eyebrows raised, her mouth open and inviting me in for a kiss. I leaned in, and that once dexterous tongue began cuddling up against mine with far less speed. Her saliva and mine began one, and I became light-headed, lost in the aroma of her body sweat.
Even though I tried to restrain myself, to be gentle on her, a deep bestial energy within my groin wanted to pound against hers. My erect penis was craving to dig deep into her vagina. It yearned to penetrate her cervix. As I thrusted into her, stronger and faster, Marine's small gasps grew into whimpering. Like a primal animal, my mind went blank and all I could think about was going deeper into her wet, hot pussy as my tongue began going crazy in her mouth. She was letting out heavenly moans, now. A cresendo to her beautiful song.
I wasn't wearing a condom. I didn't care.
I want this woman to bear my children, I thought.
I wanted to protect her.
I felt pleasure rising within my groin as it all came rushing through me. I flexed my butt-cheeks hard together, pushing every inch of my lower body forward as tightly as I could within her. I felt the cum spurt out of my dick. And then I did it again. And again. Each thrust accompanied by a fragile moan from Marine.
And then it was all over.
This time, I collapsed onto her. She was more out of breath than I was. I looked into her eyes, and was greeted a tired but motherly smile. Her chest rose up and down slowly, and her breath calmed me to sleep as I drifted off on top of her.

>> No.17556510

>>17554615
>MC is a faggot.
He redeems himself though.

>> No.17556745

>>17555955
It's like I'm looking at a declassified intelligence report.

>> No.17556956

>>17554168
>>17555955
>Anon succumbs to hag lust
Based

>> No.17557668

>>17546549
"That's The Way Fubuki Crumbles" iirc

she most certainly did not enjoy it

>> No.17558083

Selen is talking about being sweaty and just makes me want to make her pregnant even more God please

>> No.17561449

>>17554168
>>17555955

Nothing beats a good ol' hag sex!

>> No.17563208

So a question regarding writing NTR/Cuckold. The earlier discussion about it being more about the cuck rather than the cuckoldry only applies to first person or second person, right? Third person omniscient would theoretically let you have the opposite and focus on the act rather than on the feelings of the cuck. By which I mean the plot can be more like a traditional NTR erodoujin because the "camera" is still the same rather than locked on one person's PoV.

>> No.17564312

>>17563208
That is not a question but yeah

>> No.17564397

>>17564312
Not an argument.

>> No.17564733

>>17563208
That's what was done in Rabbits & Habits and from what I heard it didn't do well at all.

>> No.17564854

>>17564733
Fuck are you talking about? It was great. Retards frothing at the mouth over NTR don't count for criticism.

>> No.17565016

>>17564733
I didn't read it but I thought the outrage was caused because anons didn't know it was an NTR fic.

>> No.17565032

>>17564733
I remember that fic, was also one of the people that replied to it honestly.
Its problems mostly stem from starting at 2nd person then shifting pov to 3rd person taking the reader out of getting into it/immersed.

>> No.17565280

>>17563208
I don't really get what you're trying to ask here. You can absolutely tell a netorase cuck-focused story in the third person, though I agree it'd probably turn out less impactful since the genre's more prone to self-inserting than most.
Regardless of your approach though, if you're following the fundamentals of NTS, it should not feel like "a traditional NTR erodoujin". Use VNs or doujins that explicitly bill themselves as "netorase" to get a better feel for how perspective should be used.

>> No.17566209

>>17565280
>NTS
I don't understand what that acronym means.
Also to address the rest of the post, generally the traditional NTR doujin isn't actually cuck focused but 'target' focused where the cuck and the bull are basically just non-characters with the actual character usually just being the woman, with the bull getting some character if it's some sort of multi chapter deal.
What I'm asking is if you could do that same kind of focus on the woman with 3rd person omniscient where 1st and 2nd person fail due to the inherent connection with the viewpoint character. I'm asking because the general idea of take the structure from a NTR doujin is what fucked up the earlier NTR works here due to being chained to thread standard 2nd person, thus I'm asking if what was wrong was the viewpoint used rather than the approach.

>> No.17566804

>>17566209
netorase

as opposed to netorare

>> No.17567077

>>17566209
>the general idea of take the structure from a NTR doujin is what fucked up the earlier NTR works here due to being chained to thread standard 2nd person, thus I'm asking if what was wrong was the viewpoint used rather than the approach.
I don't agree with this at all. The lukewarm reception of earlier NTR fics was mostly due to a lack of audience: vanillafags seethed as usual, and the actual NTR fans here don't seem to be fans of the rapey/girl-focused subgenre. Starting in second-person is a great idea.
I'd like to reiterate, if you were catering to me, specifically, there would be NO scenes just between the girl and the bull(s) without the cuck there in some capacity. He should be the focal point of everything. If you're going for the more generic audience/formula emulation though, I see no problem with starting in 2nd-person and then shifting to 3rd as in Rabbits & Habits. I just don't think any of the regulars here are so inclined.

>> No.17568746

>>17566804
But that doesn't make any sense afaik Netorase is Bull PoV right?
>>17567077
> The lukewarm reception of earlier NTR fics was mostly due to a lack of audience: vanillafags seethed as usual, and the actual NTR fans here don't seem to be fans of the rapey/girl-focused subgenre.
I feel like we'll just argue in circles if this continues, my point is that it seems like the format (2nd person) failed the content (Normal NTR) while your point is the the content failed the format. 2nd person perspective has its strengths but in general I think it will fall flat if it has to be in a work where you are supposed to not actually sympathize with the pov character but with another character in the work.
My major sticking point with the PoV switch is that 2nd person really isn't something that works with switching PoV, 1st and 3rd person can switch between each other in between sections and chapters but 2nd person is really something where having the 'camera' always be with you is its strength.

>> No.17569184

>>17568746
Dude if you're so convinced of this, why did you even bother asking the thread? The Fubuki fic earlier was done totally in 2nd person to great effect, and the Pekora fic fit pretty neatly into its own subgenre. I think you're wrong about this "revelation" you're having, and I guess that's all I can say if you're still not having it.

>> No.17570477

Man. NTR enthusiasts certainly have 'refined' taste.

>> No.17573040

>>17534777
>>17538179
Foreman Spike here. The guy who initially requested the Uruka gets Buff story, as well as the Gen 0 Gets Buff story. The guy who is still ip range banned on 4chan for some fucking reason. Getting sick of fucking diner food.

It's a bummer that you won't be able to finish the Gen 0 Gets Buff story, but I feel like some that shit is my fault. One, because in life shit is usually my fault, and two, maybe I lost the plot myself. The core of the story was about AZKi, Suisei, Sora, Miko and Roboco all growing ridiculously gigantic muscles, especially their pectorals, with AZKi being the biggest and most pectacular by far. Tons of flexing and showing off and posing, pressing muscle against muscle, maybe some very light les stuff between AZKi and Sora, and ending with my favorite, AZKi, just outpecflexing everything. And some interaction, dialogue, etc, to show off their peronalities and show they're not just empty YCH. Something that could have been easily done with a simple bodybuilding contest and concert or something.

The story outline you detailed was impressive and complex and fascinating, but I also felt like my original request would have gotten lost in there somewhere. I do appreciate you putting thought and effort into it, and going far and beyond the scope of the original request, like you did with the Uruka story... which I believe is still the only female muscle story in the archive.

I guess that would be the problem with making a story request like this in the female muscle community, they wouldn't know who the characters are... and honestly, with some of the shit that goes down there, it's a space I'd rather not go back to. At least here they'd know, or at least put effort into researching them.

I'll be honest, that request, and the other requests I've made (like the Holodeath juice one, ones that were made as a jape more than anything) were the only reasons I checked /vt/. so thank you for being honest. I'd go ahead and repost the requests, but always seem to get shit on when I do. So i think I'll just keep an eye on your AO3 in case you ever decide to change your mind, try the idea again, try the simpler idea, anything you want to write.

Ages ago, I used to write. I haven't been creative in over a year. The last thing I even tried to put any thought into writing was about a guy moving to Montana, buying acres of land, and starting a Yukkuri ranch while running across American versions of our favorite 2hus. So I understand the issues with inspiration and the like. If my ideas or suggestions fucked with your head any, I apologize.


I think I'm just going to yeet out of vtubing for a while. Uruka and AZKi are always going to be my mains, Kson and Melody are my legacy subscriptions, the ones who showed me this world, and I find Emma Oumiya to be very promising. But past that, I don't find myself giving many fucks anymore. So maybe it's for the best too. I look forward to your work, I look forward to any potential fills this board does see, and.... yeah, that's about it. See ya.

>> No.17573160

So the writer for the Detective Watson and Inspector Anon is pretty much confirmed no longer here right?
Reasonably certain their only other work was the Baelz series and both of them haven't gotten an update in months..

>> No.17573777

>>17573160
I remember them saying they'd be gone for a while, or something like that.

>> No.17574222

>>17573160
I miss the horny chocosen Anon too...

>> No.17574361

>>17574222
the chocosen series is an underrated gem. i do not blame him for losing interest, though, as he barely got any feedback or interest when posting at all.

i've busted quite a few times to the latest chapter of chocosen, at least 6 or 7. i wish he was still here so i could tell him that...disgusting though it may be

>> No.17574363

>>17574222
He was just here, he's the buff fetish writer

>> No.17574384

>>17574363
the fuck? how do you know that?

>> No.17574513

>>17574384
He commented on one of my fics on AO3

>> No.17574585

>>17456188
A story about (You) killing that NTRfag with your bare hands while his oshi watches and laughs at him

>> No.17574988

>>17574585
Which one? There's more than one IIRC

>> No.17575022

>>17574585
watching vanillafags seethe never gets old

>> No.17575069

>>17574585
Joke's on you, my oshi laughing at my misfortune is exactly what gets me hard

>> No.17575165

>>17575022
I can't take you seriously ever since you assumed Blood Meridian was an edgy hentai, contrarianchama.

>> No.17575205

>>17574988
>>17575022
>>17575069
You could have just ignored him and his shitty bait, but you just had to be retarded and reply to it.

>> No.17575261

>>17575205
/wg/ is full of retardant who can’t ignore bait, even it’s obvious as fuck.

>> No.17575340

>>17574585
I'd be down for some pekofag snuff sex, why not?

>> No.17575353

>>17575261
Better to reply to bait than have the thread die.

>> No.17575394

>>17575205
>>17575261
>bait
It's not like he was stirring drama, I found it rather amusing. I think (You) two are the only ones in that exchange that didn't have any fun.

>> No.17575469
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>>17575165

>> No.17575938
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>>17575938
Man, I hope somebody picks up that Polka prompt.

I would, but I'm up to my eyeballs in shit to do already

>> No.17576937

>>17574363
Oh fuck you're right. I checked the ao3 account that posted the uruka fic and would you look at that it's the same account that posted the choco-sen fic

>> No.17577147

>>17573160
Hope he's doing well. Really wanted to see where DWAIA was going. Mystery and suspense stuff always really gets me going but it's hard to do, more so with chuubas...

>> No.17577696
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>>17456188
(You) are an aging doomer with substance abuse problems who encounters Watame by chance. Over the course of your various interactions with her, you gradually find the motivation to get your shit together and start taking better care of yourself.

>> No.17577840

>>17456188
Having mind-blowing orgasms while Noel beats you to death for touching Flare.

>> No.17577865

>>17577696
This, but you're a black guy and the story makes explicit mention of this at every opportunity. The relationship blossoms into a romance and you fuck her in every hole on her body - belly and ears included.

>> No.17577905 [DELETED] 

>>17577696
something something low brow and lower iq post about blacked shit

>> No.17579363

>>17577905
Seethe.

>> No.17579663

>>17577840
>"Any last words, asshole?!"
>"More weight."

>> No.17579872

>>17577840
Noel swings her boobs at you and knocks your teeth out

>> No.17581858
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0 hours on photoshop btw

>> No.17581977

>>17581858
10/10

>> No.17583077

>>17581858
Nice! You should totally go show the rest of your buddies back on Reddit.

>> No.17583612
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17583612

Where would you guys want to go on a night-time date with Towa?

>> No.17583670

>>17583612
Fancy restaurant for sure. She's the type.

>> No.17583749

>>17583612
Karaoke

>> No.17583781

>>17583612
I'd just smoke with Towa. I know little about her other than the yab but she seems chill.

>> No.17584077

>>17583612
Red-light district

>> No.17584245

>>17583612
Noel's house

>> No.17585690
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>mfw that Mori abuse fic is starting to get passed around

>> No.17586123

>>17583612
Roadside diner followed by dirty trailer-park sex.

>> No.17586543

>>17585690
W-wuh?

>only on /Morig/ again and a bait thread
Oh thank fuck, I had some dire thoughts

>> No.17586692

>>17586543
Hey, at least since the common consensus is that Mori is /here/ (board) chances are that she may have read it.

>> No.17587385

>>17456188
Beating up Aqua or Ayame for being a burden in your league or legends game and apologizing profusely to them by buying them ice cream.

>> No.17587471

>>17587385
This except you apologize by beating them more, and harder

>> No.17587555

>>17587385
This but there is no you, it's just Ayame beating herself up over being a burden.

>> No.17587632
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>>17456154
Like this?

Tags: Aki, Cuckold, Light Femdom, NSFW

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSRNB9v4O2p_nHnhdyvnAEMFcM4Kp7Jqr9LG3yyOpo2_vktDzEK3W2Kwan_m6sjNRaq_OG5G5Ygv8dO/pub

>> No.17587699

>>17587471
And also you're a black guy.

>> No.17587992

>>17587632
Eh, I know the femdom focused cuckold stuff like this isn't really my fetish but, I feel like the dialogue isn't 'spicy' enough, and given that this story is mostly dialogue telling of an event that's a rather glaring flaw.
Honestly I think if anyone wants to do unironic cuckold stuff like this they need to turn up the meanspiritedness and amp up the dialogue to make it work better. This casual cuckold stuff just doesn't really work for me.

>> No.17588866

>>17587632
This fucking cucking arc is still going strong I see, at least this time Anon is enjoying being cucked

>> No.17590639

>>17456188
Shooting ropes into the air watching her bull shoot ropes into your oshi!

>> No.17590965

>>17456188
Suisei waking up one day after it's all over wondering if it was worth it.

>> No.17591034

>three NTR/cuckshit/nigger stories written in the last two threads
This is what happens when you enable fuckers rather than shutting them up on sight. For fuck's sake.

>> No.17591304

>>17591034
Let them have their fun. We don't have to read it.

>> No.17591326

>>17575022
>vanillafags
I like piss, Ryona, rape, femdom, maledom but dont pretend cuckshit is the same as other fetishes. You're a weak faggot who cope saying ''I like being cheated on haha...''

>> No.17591670

>>17591326
kys earlyfag

>> No.17591686

>>17587632
>pic
God, I want to eat Aki's asshole so badly.

>> No.17591697

>>17591670
Kys cuckfag

>> No.17592149

>>17573040
I lost the plot myself, don't worry. And yea, your best bet is keeping an eye on ao3 when I come back to it. I just don't want to write right now.
>>17574222
>>17574361
It was more because the last chap was a big, arduous one and I got busy after. Also I wrote myself into using an OC in greater capacity than I'd like, so I wrote other things while thinking about how to get around it. I might come back to it since there's some interest. Thanks for letting me know you like it. Especially to the one guy who wrote detailed walls of text.

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>>17592149
>Especially to the one guy who wrote detailed walls of text.

>> No.17595201

>>17522719
This is some good shit dude, nice job. Could definitely use a once over since there're a couple weird word choices and a couple sentences that are a bit "off" but I still definitely enjoyed it.
The aftercare part was fucking fantastic, god I wish you went through with the timeskip thing where she's terrified of you losing it again cause that's hitting all the right buttons for me but what's given is good enough I suppose.
Mori love

>> No.17596524

>>17579872
Noel smothering you to death with her tits.
Using a favor Rushia owes her to revive you so she can unintentionally kill you erotically again and again.

>> No.17597417

>>17456188
Pushing down Temma with the intent to rape but finding out he really has a vagina!
Eating out Temma's hairy vagina!
Sucking out his embarrassed queefs!

>> No.17597878

>>17587632
Fuuuuck that's the stuff. Yeah, I think you nailed the spirit of it this time. Only thing is I generally concur with this >>17587992 , but I think it's clear you were just trying a quick short story as a fine-tuning experiment here, so I won't begrudge you for it.
Not sure how long or involved your NTR arc is going to last, but the final step is including progression within the girl's relationships, both with the bull(s) and the cuck. She at first might keep herself from doing the bull(s) raw, kissing them, doing stuff she hasn't done with the cuck (like anal), etc., but in later sessions as the play gets more intense caving in. Meanwhile with the cuck, denial and humiliation gradually becomes more and more prevalent by the session, maybe at some point temporarily banning regular sex, switching to humiliating forms of sexual aid like footjobs or onahole handjobs, forcing him to masturbate himself while she describes her most recent sessions, direct dick comparisons, maybe even brutal late-stage stuff like a chastity belt. All that bittersweet teasing interspersed with a loving attitude outside of sex is the core of an NTS fetish.

Thanks for all this inspiration recently by the way, thinking about taking a crack at writing something like this myself, though I've got a number of other stories in my queue I'd have to knock out first.

>> No.17598044

>>17456188
haachama rolling her face across loaves of bread on a member's stream and secretly masturbating as she does it

>> No.17599630

>>17598044
What

>> No.17600303

>>17598044
>Haachama is the one commissioning all the white bread art
No no no no

>> No.17600467

archiveanon can you bring the pekofags thing back

>> No.17600803

>>17600467
fuck off retard, it was taken down for a reason

>> No.17600826

>>17600467
There's a well established condition for their return, so AA isn't the one to ask

>> No.17601858

To whoever wrote "That's the Way the Fubuki Crumbles", that was masterfully executed. Excellent work, I hope to see more from you in the future.

>> No.17606240

Just small bump to get us through the wave

>> No.17606547 [SPOILER] 
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This is how you bump, fags. Watch and learn.

>> No.17606602

>>17606547
GREAT GOOGLY MOOGLY

>> No.17606616

>>17606547
DONT OPEN THIS IT CREATES AGENT ORANGE

>> No.17606706

>>17606547
For the first in my life, I thought "damn, to be a shota right now..."

This thread is breaking me, god damn it.

>> No.17609857

>>17606547
>Noel riding you
>Flare sucking your balls
>Rushia and Pekora licking your nipples
>Marine telling you to confess in between kisses

>> No.17610935
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>>17456188
Being forced to choose between hags and cunny by the two of them forcing themselves on you.

>> No.17611137

>>17610935
Then proving you don't discriminate by forcing yourself on them both!

>> No.17613373

>>17601858
There will not be any more. I have elected not to take conmissions from that person again

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>>17613373

>> No.17613575
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>>17613373

>> No.17613662
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>>17613373
I don't know if it's you or not but god I hope it is.

>> No.17614013

>>17613373
Once a shit eater, always a shit eater.

>> No.17614074

>>17613373
>>17613547
>>17613575
>>17613662
>>17614013
No, that is not me, I have not stopped taking commissions from that person, and yes, I am working on a sequel right now.

>> No.17614151

>>17613373
Based

>>17614074
Cringe

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>>17614074
I don't necessarily believe that either

>30 posts to limit
I'm gonna assume neither are real

>> No.17614296

>>17614215
They're both me, and I am laughing at you all.

>> No.17614395

>>17614296
No, you are not me, and there will never be a sequel to that rape fic. I regret writing it.

>> No.17614472

>>17614296
Cringe

>>17614395
Based

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Cuteshia!

>> No.17617087

>>17616073
I have a clinical need to suck on that little tongue.

>> No.17617282

>>17614472
Having regrets is not based

>> No.17617716

>>17617087
Same. But only after I stuck mine so far up her asshole she'll wonder if I meant sucking her tongue from beneath.

>> No.17617774

>>17617282
Yeah but not having a sequel to the story is

>> No.17617798

>>17617087
I want more kissing focused fics. I don't even like Nina Kosaka but the one MWAnon wrote that has a lot of that at the beginning has been something I come back to.

>> No.17618024

>>17617716
My Based meter just exploded from the sheer basedness of this post.

>> No.17619183

>>17617716
BASED

>> No.17619544

>>17617716
we need more rimjob fics...

>> No.17619704

>>17619544
Wait, there's such a thing as rimjob fics? Recs?

>> No.17619748

>>17619704
Mouthful of Fox I think is the only one

>> No.17621099

>>17456154
>>17576994
>>17577895

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>>17621099

>> No.17621270

>>17621183
Ayo don't shoot the messenger cuh, sheesh, you be tripin no cap on a stack bruh

>> No.17621532

>>17621099
This sounds actually hot

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>>17621270

>> No.17623858

The board is going wild? What happened?

>> No.17624519

>>17623858
Mori continues to exist and her antis had one of those reddit atheist "I am euphoric" moments

>> No.17624566

>>17624519
So schizo shit still?

>> No.17624600

>>17624566
Pretty much.

>> No.17624740

>>17624566
>>17617736 you tell me

>> No.17624803

>>17624740
Jesus Christ, the cringe.

>> No.17624891

>>17624740
>Someone actually wrote this.
Do these people have no life?

>> No.17624922

>>17624740
I want to believe this is a false flag.
Mori antis cannot be this fucking retarded.

>> No.17625061

New thread
>>17624967

>> No.17625421

>>17619544
I want to write a sequel to Sleeping Beauty at some point and already have good amounts of material, I guess I'll add doing plenty of rimming to that one when I get to it.

>> No.17625488

>>17613373
I thought you only wrote for commissions, so I find this hard to believe.

>> No.17625871

>>17625488
It's fake.

>> No.17626069

>>17625421
What would even be the setup to a "Sleeping Beauty" sequel.
Sleeping Sex with Rushia... On a boat.

>> No.17626311

>>17626069
Wouldn't be going for the sleeping/fake sleeping sex angle though. Have other ideas, but sometimes it's easier to build on the base you already have.

>> No.17627138

>>17625421
nice, looking forward to it

>> No.17628093

>>17625421
Why write a sequel for a fic only 3 people read and even fewer care about?

>> No.17628276

>>17624922
>name drops Viper
>durr is this real
how fucking new

>> No.17628568

>>17628276
Literally who? Nobody cares about your 2views, earlyfag.

>> No.17628749

>>17628568
neck yourself retard

>> No.17628871

>>17628093
Because I want to molest Rushia's asshole with all my might and if others don't care about that, well it's not my fault they have bad taste.

>> No.17629046

>>17628749
Seethe more.

>> No.17629274

>>17628871
based

>> No.17629278

You guys are fucking nerds holy shit

>> No.17629346

>>17628568
Literally an idiot

>> No.17629581

>>17628871
You can do that in your head. Don't waste your time writing something out nobody else cares about.

>> No.17629659

>>17629581
>He doesn't want to rim Rushia's asshole
Yea ok faggot your opinion is invalidated.

>> No.17630573

>>17629659
We've got enough scat fics already, thanks.

>> No.17630703

>>17629581
>this blood tastes awful. give me better blood
Detach from your host, leech.

>> No.17632238

Impregnating Kiara.

>> No.17632357

>>17613373
>>17614074

Responding to this because these are impersonators with their false words. For the record, I'm still accepting commissions and I do not regret writing that FBK rape fic, although I will admit there is much room for improvement on it. Did I expect plenty of backlash and ridicule? Of course. Do I think I care? Not really.

That's just how the cookie crumbles.

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