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>>70150829
Your prose is certainly an enjoyable level of flowery, but I would space out your lines and paragraphs. The indentation helps, but the extra white space always makes it look so much cleaner. The dialogue is pretty close to how the chuubas would speak, so nice job there. The smut itself moves a little too quickly and is too short to find any real satisfaction or eroticism in, but it might be more about the emotional factor than the actual act itself for a story like this. The subject matter itself isn't really my cup of tea, but I think you handled the after effects quite nicely. For a short little thing, not bad.

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Eimi spitting' truth!

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MIDNIGHT
Eimi Birthday NOW
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gqXPMvSH6iM
SPFB WOOOO

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[Eimi News] Eimi showered today

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[Eimi News] Phase Two just started

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HAMSTER SEX

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>>64565659
Wrong

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>>64388030
You accidentally used the wrong squib there, anon

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