/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

>>72965703
>Fight Suisei
>During the back and forth of your deadly blade dance she starts unloading her trauma
>Sometimes it makes her swing harder, other times it gives you both a chance to breathe
>Landing clean blows alongside your advice is the only way she considers it, if you miss, she discards your opinion
>Sometimes her trauma makes you lose focus
>Then comes the crying
>Session ends with your slumped on the ground supporting one another by your shoulders
>Suisei sighs in mild relief as she cleans some of the blood of her face with a damp rag
>Same time next week?

>>72252537
i don't think it exists in my country yet (or if it ever will). thanks for describing it, i'll check next time, i want to try it.

>>70851633
Not to pressure you or anything, but you won't improve unless you try! Everyone is always game to read some smut and offer you some feedback on it. You sound super passionate about your collaring, so if it's something you'd want to pursue, give it a try and see how it comes out.

>>67299940
The adventure party is going to rise up while your factions squabble. It's the perfect opportunity.

>>66545384
no haachama?
great timeslot

>>64938561
>one

>>64375483
wasn't talking about (you) specifically, but the dude you quoted and all the other post in that thread doubting it. like, what the hell, we listen to suityan every day.
also it literally is, since they got it right and doubters didn't. lmao

>>64088087
I think this could benefit from another pass of proofreading and edits. Some of the lines come off as very stiff and have some grammar issues. For example: Botan and Fubuki looked so peaceful and she felt some part of her die as she gazed upon it. - "It" should be "them" in this context, since she's looking at the two of them which is causing her despair.
another minor grammatical thing
“You’re… you follow Ina’nis? Isn’t that… evil?” - It would flow better to imply that Ina'nis is evil and not simply the act of being of a follower of her, since she herself is the subject of the conversation there and afterward.
For the content itself, it's moving right along. I'm honestly more interested in what Watame and Mio get up to over Botan at the moment. I have a feeling that you might try to paint some experiences within Botan's past that helps shape who she is when Balsa starts, but when that seems to entail a lot of life kicking her in the snatch at every turn, I'm more interested in what my sheep is gonna get up to and how she will do nothing wrong.

>>56505289
I should probably check out that radio show you mentioned a little before it's time for Suisei's big entry and she gets a lot more speaking time in.

>>55562690
I got my own Suisei cooking that I hope people will enjoy.

>>54660670
I mean, if she needs some powerful loving, she can get it. I love the idea of fighting to fucking. Advent is giving me some good inspiration to use for future arcs. I'm pretty stoked for it.

>>53100961
You can try.