/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

>>65707894
>There are Days That Last Forever
Perhaps it's just me but, this felt strangely melancholic. Like there's a thread of sadness running through it despite how fluffy everything is supposed to be looking from the outside. I guess it's a side effect of how the narration is initially presented coloring the rest of the work... and honestly I think it works. Towa is a splash of color lighting what would otherwise be an introspective depression. If there was anything I'd say wasn't working it would be that the contest limit of 25k made this entire piece feel like it's stretched thin, especially since it covers multiple months and an epilogue. Everything to do with the cat and splitting apart felt well executed but, by nature this felt like a slow burn concept condensed into the word count.
Nitpicks
The bandaid scene feels weirdly orphaned with where the need for it came from. I can assume it comes from the guitar p;aying in the previous scene but it feels a bit weird that the only mention of his fingertips getting hurt from playing too much is in that one instance.
>Drunk of Christmas Spirit and love.
This was a cute one. A bit bare bones and could honestly be longer but it's cute for what it is.
BTW if the author is here, given that I'm not sure who you are I'm taking the liberty of tagging you in for the under 5k category unless you want to opt out.
>The right one
Already read it on release >>65534790, but to sum up my thoughts. The entire thing had a lot of heart but not a lot of polish with lots of things being half baked (iroha plot, the narration getting dropped half way through, etc). Still it manages to deliver some pretty good scenes, the foreplay to their first time being a highlight of the fic. Even so, it feels like something more suited to a multi-chapter romance fic than a one-shot. I liked it, but the flaws do kind of stick out.

Posting this Towa to attract kenzies

towa is yelling for her mother facing JP