/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

>>40716810
Hi, I promised you a review, so I'll try my best, despite it possibly being lackluster.

First off, I really enjoyed the story so far. I like the way you incorporate various chuubas into the story, despite many of them not really doing much. It does get the point across that the school is ruled by the girls, though, so that's pretty cool still. It strikes me as a bit odd that no one in the school staff seems to care that their students are being terrorized by so many female delinquents, but I understand it has to be this way for the story and the events to move forward. It's a minor gripe, but I felt like pointing it out regardless.
As far as Kuro and her crew's characterizations go, I'd say you did a good enough job, though outside of Kuro, we still don't really know exactly what kind of people Korone, Okayu and Mio are. I guess that's fine, given that they're supporting characters at best, but a bit of deeper characterization wouldn't hurt. That aside, I love the way you're writing Kurokami. She's pretty close to 'canon' and seeing her gradually warming up to Anon (or us, I guess) is incredibly cute. I hope to see more of this in the future.
The one thing I felt was a bit lacking was probably the descriptions of the places and events. Large chunks of the scenes are simply going from point A to point B with nothing else in between. It's not something I hate, I just feel like I should point it out as I think your future works may benefit from it.

Overall, great job, I enjoyed those first two chapters a lot and hope to see more! Thank you for writing it, it's incredibly enjoyable so far!

>>23593651
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