/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

Random story time!
>Eriatarka (In Dreams)
I can't believe I missed this, when was it even posted? A huge fan of these types of stories, and Ina is perfect for them. The idea of a greater being trapping you in a constant state of dreaming as you remember and try to break free each time has so much potential to be explored. I really liked the conversation with Ina on the rooftop, and although it works great as a short, seeing this expanded would be amazing. The story reminds me of Girl of Emptiness, despite the premise being somewhat different. There were frequent problems with verb tenses though, with sentences like:
>You bolted awake. Looking around your room in a panic, you try to figure out what’s wrong. Something was there. Your eyes dart around.
making it hard to tell if the fic is in present or past tense. Other than that there aren't any glaring problems. Good shit, would recommend. Makes me wonder what other hidden gems there are in the archive that I've missed.
Now for one more...
>Suisei is Upset
This was... not good. I can tell a beginner wrote this, likely in the early days of /wg/, so I can't give it too much shit, but basically everything needs work and the premise/plot is very basic.