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Thank you for the glowing review, I'm glad you liked it. I'm honored that you consider it one of your favorites. If you're DwtDAnon then I accomplished my goal of making it hit your standard. I'm glad to hear that you think I got Towa characterized well since I found her difficult to write at times.
The idea for Towa was that since it's pre-hololive she's a bit unconfident and nervous but wants a connection and that the current more outwardly goofy Towa would be post-debut. So I'm glad that came through
Thanks for your words about their dynamic and the scenery as well, if there's one thing I'm confident in my writing, it's setting up a scene.

In regards to your criticisms: I was fairly concerned with keeping the story going, especially when it became apparent to me that it was going to be long. I could write dialog all day so I apologize if sometimes it seems brisk
The argument is one of those things where I needed to happen to progress the narrative. Since this was based on someone's dream, there are gaps in between the cat dying, Towa disappearing, and the reunion. I needed a reason for Towa to dip that left room for the possibility of a reunion. Towa doesn't strike me as a person to just disappear like that and leave Anon behind, so I used the idea of emotions running out of control as a sleight of hand since both don't really mean what they are saying.
If it feels inorganic or forced, it's because I had to bridge dream logic. I did try hard to make the scene work and be impactful so I am a bit disappointed to hear that.
I wanted to include a kiss but couldn't find a spot for it, gomen.

>Most of it's charm really does come down to the dynamic between the characters and the drama that comes with the story, so the 24k word length really paid off IMO. You mentioned that you never want to write something this long again but I really hope that doesn't turn out to be the case
I was pretty concerned with scope creep with this one. I tended to write too much so I try and be conscious of word count. There was also the feeling of it kind of taking a lot of presence in my life. Too many times where I thought "Man, I could be doing shorter WIPs right now." But luckily my autism is too strong. Thanks though, those words mean a lot.

I'll get to the other comments in a second.

>assuming you're also the writer of the Suisei cooking series
Hey how's it going

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