/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

Another sleep deprived review, this time with Onion Soup.
Same stuff as before applies, feel free to ignore what I've said, I may have misinterpteted some stuff, done is better than perfect, and above all, thanks for your work!
"Vampires always drank fresh blood, to not do it fresh wasn’t even considered." It sounds a bit unnatural to me.
First paragraph is a good intro. Last sentence is intruiguing, especially as it starts right after with Aqua. Makes me want to know more.
First two phrases of the second paragraph gives a "drug abuser" vibe, like when you get some realisation at the end of the night.
From what I understand Aqua didn't know that Mel was a vampire? That's surprising.
"The problems really started" I feel like you could remove the "really" here, but that may be projection as I'm a "really" abuser myself. I also feel that this paragraph "jumps around" temporally a bit too much and may be less confusing if written more linearly. I'd appreciate if someone else could take a look at it and give their opinion on that, it might be just me being dumb, or some figure of style.
"It was times like these where Aqua really hated herself." Another "really" that may be unnecessary.
I took some time to understand that Aqua was working at the blood donation clinic when you mention that other people went to the cafeteria.
Just after that, the part where Aqua smells him and brings him magazine is good, I like the way you describe Aqua, Anon cutting her train of thought.
"Ahno immersed in his magazine" Is Ahno supposed to be Anon here?
Having donated blood a few times before, I feel like it's good description, although I think you missed the tourniquet and using the needle. That could be a good scene too.
Again, the mix between blood sucking and drug abusing behavior is good.
"Ahno’s limp body" now I'm even less sure that Ahno is a typo, it might be his name or a nickname.
I don't know if skipping the part where she sucks too much blood is intentional to highlight how unaware of that she was, or if it's just missing.
Maybe it's a difference in countries, but here nurses usually put a cotton ball on the needle hole and then wrap that is some kind of plastic fabric bandage that's ~10/15 centimeters wide.
I like the detail that Aqua is a bit dumb so she puts a cover over him instead of under him to isolate him from the cold floor.
The onion stuff is fun, and kind of fits with the personality of the guy that lets this happen to him.
"Mel had tried to explain but now Aqua understood that it really wasn’t something you could just put into words." Another bounty for the really hunter.
"She threw Ahno’s number in the trash, there was no reason to keep it since his blood wasn’t even special like she’d thought." Maybe start another sentence at "There was no reason".
I like a lot how you continue the parallel between Aqua wanting to get blood and drug addiction. Now she's going to go to dangerous places, and Mel is trying to talk her into exchanging sex for blood (drugs).
With the tone of the fic, the onion stuff may feel a bit out of place if you're going for the drug/corruption angle and plan on following up.
All in all, I enjoyed it a lot. Aqua and Mel kind of fit how I see them, the blood donation is realistic, and the drug subtext adds another somber, darker layed to the fic. It kind of reminds me of when I was in litterature in middle school and we were studying "La Vénus d'Ille", a novel where a series of incidents might be explained either through rational means, or through fantastic means (here a killer statue). That's the case here with vampires and drug addiction. Thanks for writing and sharing that!