/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

Sorry for letting the thread slide off I took a smoke break while writing a review...which is now gone as a result. Shit.

>>40925908
I originally had a lot more to say, but essentially I'm into it. I'm not as against the suicidal stuff at the beginning, I thought that was fine, but I'll agree that the protagonist is a bit much after that. I think that he gets a little too upset at Polka a little too quickly, I think if his anger at her trying to perform was stretched over a few days his blow up and her openness about feeling that it's all she's good for would come across a little better. It is difficult to write somebody as unlikable without them going too far and being intolerable, it's something I'm struggling with in one of my own fics, so I'm not gonna blame you too much on that, but that is the biggest critique I can see reading this.

>>40934023
This is cute but it does move at like Mach 5, so definitely don't worry about giving stuff more time to breathe especially if you want this to be considered 'Slow Burn'

>>40084864
I did mention a Advisor for Agriculture, chosen by a cooking contest in my politic stuff but i didn't get around to creating more yet because i first wanted to do more maps with you and i'm also getting scared of writing about food at all...