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>>62032256
Now I can give feedback on the epilogue with the previous context in place. For this chapter I'm not sure how much there is to say. Encounters went pretty quickly, which is alright, but I kinda hoped I would see more insane stuff from the gods you built up. The conclusion with Mel had the proper tone and emotional beats, but I can't help but feel it ended rather quickly for her considering all the Ws she stacked while getting here. Like you said though, burnt out can be rough, but I'm glad you pushed through the best you could and got it done.
The part near the end was cute.
Botan not mentioning your new lion features are cute was kinda a missed opportunity though.
Now with that out of the way, I can go back to what you said when you released the epilogue and how you did something that would be considered jarring. Yes, that is kinda the case I think. I know a lot of people are avid fubuki fuckers, so it's alright that you wanna make her the end winner of the anon bowl, but it did kinda come outta left field almost with the previous context. Their personal training helped with that in some regard, but not enough to really show and romantic interest by either party. Still, chapter 29 has a nice feel to it and neatly wraps up your passion project with a nice bow. Good work again finishing your adventure story. It was nice to watch it evolve through it's journey. If you're up to talk through it, what hit you with burn out while you were near the end of your story?

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>>59192984
Hell yeah, anon. Looking forward to seeing what you come up with.

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