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>>5311908
Updated my story a little bit. The more I write, the more ideas I have on what to continue it with. With the basic plot notes I have jotted down, it'll unfortunately easily breach 15 pages by the end.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQsSnE0I9cI9SPlupPtG_e8UeiLYe_-Xe3_fgzIAwp9T9G9na4-tZZR0nVzBhJntQo_zgy8zsxqDtNY/pub
As before, feedback so far would be great. It's my first time writing a narrative since high school, where I used to barely even pass creative writing. Any and all feedback would be incredibly helpful to ensure I don't just produce a mess.

>>4464058
I haven't written in years, and I'm only about 10% of the way through what I want to write, but any feedback so far? I tried to tie it into the Luna/Pekora request that was in the prompt archive, as a bit of a what-if scenario for where the prince marries Pekora. I do plan to expand a bit more on the backstory later, I just haven't found a great point to mention it yet. Writing-wise, I've mainly noticed the pacing is a bit wonky, so I'll likely need to go back over it again later.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQsSnE0I9cI9SPlupPtG_e8UeiLYe_-Xe3_fgzIAwp9T9G9na4-tZZR0nVzBhJntQo_zgy8zsxqDtNY/pub