/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

>>78058739
Thanks for reading, as well as providing this lengthy feedback post.
>Amelia
Man, it is good to hear she's liked. Amelia was the character I was honestly the most worried about. The climax was like that on purpose - (You) had plenty of energy to reply to Amelia but wanted to avoid confronting your feelings on the matter. "Too tired" was just an excuse. This will hopefully become clear in the future chapters.
>Aqua
Makes sense, I think I did overdo her uselessness a bit. Some of it however is part of my plan for Aqua's character growth.
>Botan
Yeah, I absolutley agree with your criticism here. As I mentioned in an earlier post I was torn between angry Botan and goofy Botan and ended up mashing the two together, but that should hopefully be amended in the coming chapter. She's going to be the main heroine for the next chapter or so, meaning I'll have a chance to expand on her relationship with (You) and clear a thing or two up.

I've actually never played Fallout 3. I just needed a plot that would split you and Amelia up and arrived at what you read, which, as you noticed, did feel a little forced. That was one of my worries as I was publishing this fic but I couldn't think of a better way to achieve everything I wanted. As for OCs, aside from the antagonist, no OC will ever play a major role in this fic. I add them when I need a character for the plot but don't have a Vtuber to fit the mould, or if I need a minor role filled. You're free to give zero fucks about them if you wish.
As for character motivations...
>why does he hang onto Aqua despite his own absolute goal being revenge?
There's a reason for this but it exists in like chapter 10 or so. Sorry. There are some hints in the first chapter when he agrees to help her, though.
>why does he fight off 20 guys to help Botan in one moment and then refuses to fight 20 more to recapture Albatross?
Well, ten guys mostly armed with melee weapons are a much less significant threat compared to about a hundred guys holed up in a fortified military base with access to an armory. That and securing Botan's safety was the main objective -- now that she's safe, you have no reason help with her revenge mission.
>I find it a bit irritating that I, the reader, get to hear some of the characters monologue and reasoning, while other parts are not explained at all.
Right, that might be something I need to work on. I'm trying to drip feed information at the moment but I guess I'm not doing it very well. Basically every motivation and reason for (You)r actions will be explained in time. Probably.
>I hope that didn't come off too harsh.
Not at all, I'm always grateful to any kind of feedback. I really appreciate you taking the time to read all this and tell me your thoughts. I'm glad you're enjoying the Holocalypse remake, I've got a good amount planned for it.

In Our Cures I tried to imply that Aqua ended up with the Anon in A Good Onion is a Clean Onion, but in hindsight you're right in that Mark should've dated her. Before its release though, I was unsure of how well Mark would be received and if the thread would even like him. Maybe I'll sneak in a little reference in another fic. As for "Miss" Sakura, that was mostly a bad decision on trying to translate the "-san" honorific, and the fact that in Japan only those close to each other use given names.

>>78067998
I read this in public and kept grinning like a retard because I love silly, short comedies like this. It's also as painful as it is hilarious because Anon is literally me. Thanks for shoving a boot up my ass, I'll get back to work so I can have a pool with hags in it.