/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

>>51399609
Sorry I did not reply earlier, had a busy few days away from home.

Thanks a lot for writing a response!

Yeah, as I said, since I am looking at the text through my own lens I would be making erroneous assumptions. Its nice to see such attention to detail as you taking into account species psychology in writing.

I do relate with the lexicon issue, and I too often find myself repeating words. I have noted that as simple things as simply omitting the word works sometimes, if you can re-format the rest of the sentence to flow well. I.e., one wouldn't go "the faint sensation of the needle", but "the faint prick of the needle". One could even remove the mention of the needle altogether if the existence of the needle is established in a previous part, since the descriptor "prick" is already related to the idea of needles and sharpness; Mentioning a prick when the existence of a needle doing an action has been established will automatically remind the reader of a needle.

the above example does not relate to your text though, since in your text the sensation of the needle was not exactly a prick, as far as I can tell.

Also, one could establish an association with a sensation and a descriptor, and then simply use the descriptor to imply the existence of the sensation as well. I suppose one could chain these together and make a sensation description chain, where the new sensation is always established in the previous part. I would love to write an example but I do not want to come up with a scene rn, and it is purely theoretical anyways, I dont think I've used something like that myself that often if at all.

Descriptors beginning with "as if" are also something that one should think about. I use it a bit too much, i think. In a lot of cases, one can completely cut that portion off, and sometimes they should since this word structure distances the reader from the image you are trying to paint. You can compare this with these two sentences.

>It was as if tendrils of cold fire were growing through his veins, crystallizing into invisible shards of glass shredding his insides.
>Tendrils of cold fire grew through his veins and crystallized into invisible shards of glass that shred his insides.
It might be just me, but the bottom one is much more evocative as a descriptor.

I would personally be tempted to go pretty crazy with that, and write something along the lines of "Jagged shards of cold fire flowed into him through the injection site. With each heartbeat the blazing cold splinters were pushed (further into his limbs and) deeper into his flesh, until the fire had saturated his entire body."
This descriptor is probably absolutely horrible to use regarding flow, and it isn't as precise as the ones above, but I really like the picture it paints. Although, you can clearly see in it the problem I have with overloading descriptions.

>Theme park ride
Based taking inspiration from irl. I have done so myself as well at times.
Is ichorite some real thing? I have never heard of it before myself.

>AI probing MC's mind
I did pick up on that. It gave the AI a slight hostile/creepy vibe, which works pretty well.

Dont take the issues too seriously, these are just things i have decided to nitpick on. I would love to hear your thoughts on my thoughts on this and whether it works at all for you, its not like the style i like is the only valid one.

Ill try to read more of your stuff as I get the motivation to read and write. Thanks again for responding!

>>39263386
>how all of you feel about pg and how he treats everything related to chuubanite and /meat/ coming from other people
He's got his issues but overall he is doing a decent job. His only problem with /meat/ stuff is that he seems to think that people cannot fail, and that /meat/ has perfect information which no one has, but his attempt to make sure that /meat/ isnt used to illogically prop up characters or factions or other mary sues is a good cause. If he does this only one-sided, than thats hypocritical, but its not like thats a great sin, especially since this place is full of hypocrites, me included.
>So in essence, I believe his intent is right, but his methods are not. He was worse in the pioneer days, and I would still like to acknowledge the change for the better he has achieved.

As for the curse, i dont think he has fully realized that what /hag/ claim the curse does (in universe) != what the curse actually does. Since all interaction here is based on mutual consent, it is perfectly in his rights to demand explanations for the curse thing, however autisticaly detailed and perfectionist they are, since the curse would have to do with the nation he writes for. If he wants his nation to be affected only by stuff he finds sensible, that is in his rights. Literally almost everyone else has done the same, their areas of interest and thresholds for plausibility just are different. The only question is how he is going on about that and I havent caught up with this drama yet, because reading dramaposting gives me immense headache.

I think in general people should treat each other's lore with some respect. Few do it at all, even fewer do it well. Or so I feel, that might just be my overthinking.
That's my two cents. And please call me nasfaqronie here.

Realism is fine and all but there is no reason to be cunts about it. Over adherence to realism will be the end of this project. Not everything has to make perfect sense or mirror the real world as well as possible, and if OGsuner thinks that mentioning a resting period is not important then so be it. Not everything has to be the most logical and efficient things, which is why I also do not like nitpicking about the BF using big ships for small missions.

Also, how are you expecting people to bring you messages before their arrival if we dont even have any fast messaging systems?

>>34246771
>Am I the only one that doesn't think that people dying is needed for shit to be "interesting"?
No, you are not alone.

nasfaqgbeat made me a substitute rep for the cases where he is not present and this I have mentioned in this thread before.

No one has before this day ever mentioned anything against it.

Basically the rule is that both nasfaqgbeat and I can make canon and vote, but nasfaqgbeat's lore and nasfaqgbeat's vote will always gain priority over mine in a case where the two are in conflict, and I will not contest this (i might want to discuss it though).

Never will /nasfaqg/ be able to cast two votes. If an event where I vote and then nasfaqgbeat votes occurs, my vote ought to be discraded in favour of nasfaqgbeat's

We were both elected by our thread to work as reps but I initially gave up the role to nasfaqgbeat, so we both have legitimacy as well.

>>33026993
>>33027680
Finnish rice is pretty good though.
I haven't heard of fish porridge though, but they do make porridge out of rye, potatoes, berries, oats (this is the usual), barley, wheat, semolina, corn/maize,buckwheat, and whatever.
There are a lot of better foods though, porridge is pretty bland and not really representative of the nordic cuisine. Its like claiming that the french eat only bread and nothing else.

Also, rice porridge, or riisipuuro, is a heavenly dish. Its the only porridge I like.

>>31886256
Zoning autism made me leave the thread which is why im still grateful for nuefag, who ultimately ended the zoning autism, even though we now have to fix his work to suit us better.

Is it weird to superchat and ask for a happy birthday?

>>18171603
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>>18172399
I can confirm, I first heard of Seuss from the internet, and the first time I read green eggs and ham was three or so weeks ago when the zai-ba-tsu rewrite of it was posted

>>17618786
Impossible.

>>17317741
>I don't think Kronii is ever going to do GFE.
She's already doing GFE...

I love the clock and the snake!

I love the clock and the snake!

>>16816909
Cute, yes

I love the clock, Ouro Kronii.

I LOVE KRONII!

Kronii love!

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