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>>31774820
Now that's the good shit right there.

>>25534470
A bit scuffed, but not bad. The part where Fubuki joined in was a nice surprise.
I think it would have been a good idea to split the first paragraph into pieces, since it keeps jumping between what (You) are doing and what Matsuri is doing. As a rule of thumb, you should start a new paragraph whenever the subject changes.

>>23037344
Come on, Fate. All the way! Let nothing stand between Matsuri and her ultimate victory.

>>22289112
Part two of this makes no sense.
>Her locks of auburn hair shift softly in the breeze as she watches the bit of her reflection she can see stare back at her, blue eyes unblinking as her mind takes gentle, measured steps down the road of recollection once more.
So the person thinking/speaking has blue eyes, and brown hair. I'm going to make the assumption that this is a Hololive character, and not an OC, and thus, this can only be one of, at best, 3 characters. Sora, Matsuri, or Subaru. Subaru is really stretching it though.
Presumably, this is supposed to be Sora based on the sentence:
>Every blow, every exchange of words…the joy and terror in equal measure, watching her brave hero fight to defend her
Since this calls back to Anon's words in Chapter 1:
>"I...I won't let you take the Princess!" You continue, attempting to muster every ounce of courage you can. You're going to be a knight, damn it! Man up! "If you want Princess Sora, then you'll have to go through me!"
However, this makes little sense because it's contradicted by the later declaration:
>She managed to visit him as he recovered. To convince the guards and attending men of medicine that she was his sister.
It's highly unlikely that this could happen, since Sora is the princess of the kingdom and thus would be well known both amongst the citizens and especially amongst the soldiers. Also, while it's not made super-clear, presumably Sora is with Coco in the time period between the battle and Coco's kidnapping of Anon near the end of the chapter (and thus cannot visit Anon in this time).
This all leads me to think it is in fact Matsuri. The character in this section is fleeing Coco in chapter 1, and even makes eye-contact with Anon. These two actions are not possible for Sora, on account of her location (within the castle). Also, a further key detail about her appearance is given:
>Lacking at best in terms of skill…and bosom.
Again, this indicates it's Matsuri. The physical appearance and circumstances recalled all seem to support this, but her character doesn't at all. Matsuri generally doesn't act like a mature, but lovesick young lass, dreaming of the day she meets her hero. Even if you get past the general character differences, you still have to account for the quote earlier:
>Every blow, every exchange of words…the joy and terror in equal measure, watching her brave hero fight to defend her
Anon is not fighting to protect Matsuri, nor does he ever even make a declaration that he's fighting for the people. He claims to exclusively be protecting Princess Sora. Even worse, Anon never so much as notices Matsuri amongst the fleeing crowds in the first chapter, not even enough to mentally comment on someone of her appearance (unlike his explicit mention of Shion). Any eye contact he made would be coincidental at best, and not akin to an attempt to actively look at her. As such, from where does Matsuri get the idea that Anon is fighting to defend her?
Sorry if I'm just overcomplicating and overthinking it all. Thanks for the story nonetheless.

>>6809047
We mightn't make it. We're very close to the end of the catalogue.