/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

>>45835698
Retcons... yeah, that's not a bad idea. I try to avoid using them, but if it's to create a better story I'll think about it. This is why I'm not a fan of releasing chapters individually as they're made, so that I don't feel tempted to change the established story whenever I want to go back on a decision.

Speaking of Hell time, though, that was actually the original premise of A Deal With the Devil. The story I had first planned went like this:
(You)r mother has brain cancer, you meet Towa, yadda yadda, except in the original version, you're still a high schooler and you're successfully able to sell her your soul. Towa is unsure what she's supposed to do with your soul, having just taken it so she could be considered a 'devil'. She goes back to Hell to do some investigating, but never returns. You move on with your life, but can never forget her. Until she returns 10 years later, when you're finishing your masters at University. For Towa, it's been a week.

The story would follow that formula from there, with Towa unable to stay in the human world as it saps her powers, forcing her to return after spending time with you. Each time she comes back, about 5-10 years pass and it breaks her heart seeing you lose so many years of your life that she never got to experience with you. The story would end with you on your deathbed and Towa by your side. You would pass away, expecting to go to Heaven since you had led a good life. That is until you find yourself standing in Hell, your soul bound to the one you sold it to.

I don't remember why I let this idea go. I think it was partly because I couldn't get the scenes to feel that emotional when Towa saw you after many years, and I also had no idea what you and Towa could do together each time you met. That and cohabitation with a Towel seemed cute.

Here's the original draft that I still have stored of that version, if anyone's interested. It's my incomplete writing from over a year ago so it's definitely quite rough (shit), and certainly isn't worthy of archiving.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRe5PJxKXaXkmigt_jso7eeXIIWB5hQwZ-5WGHuvaEDf4pK_325B9kZYlrj6y5SYaEst-5T2iWZHMJ8/pub
Though bad, I'm cleaning and reusing a couple of ideas from this document in part 2.

>>45836751
Funny you should mention that, my friend also pointed this out when I brought up the premise with them. Maybe she can hide under his desk.