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Kronii LOVE

So i caught up on https://rentry.org/fleshbone-meeting and its related works.

>Offer & Response
Nothing much to say about the offer, i did like how it was formatted though.
I loved the description of the bas relief about the final yab, somehow i never really thought it could be depicted as the vitubia / Ailivian ragnarök, but it works amazingly well. I keep thinking about what this bas relief would look like, and how each of the chuubas would meet their end.
I also like the mention of the meeting being held within the viewing distance of the mountain. Its very logical and adds depth to the religious aspect of the organization.

>Story, Ch.1
I will steal the footnote system you were using. Very good.
I really liked how you described the catalog dive, especially the note about the other presences recoiling at Nex's touch.
>Ch. 2
You should be aware that the beginning of ch.2 repeats itself twice. Probably an editorial overlook. You also start to use a different footnote method in ch2 than in ch1, which is a bit inconsistent but this is a bit of a nitpick.
Deadbeat thrower in action. Beautiful. The mention of the counter-force pushing the submarine back earns this a 10/10 mark of approval. I do wonder what the darts dream-nathanata threw were exactly though. Some sort of a grenade it seems, but conventional or chuubanitic?
Schizo hiveship? This sounds extremely intriguing, please do elaborate on your idea on this.
Mea was there? I need to go check out her story as well then. More reading to the "critical reading" backlog!
>Ch. 3
The part with the schizo shaman a bit before Nex gets pulled back to the catalog from the dream is confusing. Was the "enemy catalognaut" the shaman? They aren't usually described as such, so hearing this was confusing. I feel like there is a paragraph here missing that you accidentally erased during editing or something, the scene feels very disjointed and there seems to be critical information missing.
Their lifespans are falling.. Oh shit. I do wonder what this will lead up to. Thats one hell of a thing to drop on someone like that.
Who is Moriko and is there information about here somewhere? Or have you planned on writing something at some point? Im curious about her now.

Looking forward to more!

>>31521925
we already got one
>>31516809
and he seems to have been accepted by the locals

>>31126035
I didnt have them on my shitty laptop i had to go find them from the archives

>Map with place names
https://files.catbox.moe/r71jpk.png

>Map showing the heavily urbanized areas in orange
https://files.catbox.moe/ipqo34.jpg

>Map showing cities and some of the nature
https://files.catbox.moe/vfyi13.jpg

Most of the Home Island has been claimed for agriculture and industry decades ago, with only a little "true nature" existing at around Idelshire.
There are patchy forests remaining here and there interrupting the monotony of farmland and Plutocrat estates, and most of these forests are being used for forestry and lumber purposes. Or as hunting grounds for rich fucks.

The forests near Idelshire are closer to wild ones, and there is some swampland there as well. That area has lower population.

As you can see in the map, the shores of the Heartflow are the most urbanized areas of the serene republic, with the majority of the entire nation's population living there. Absolutely no wilderness exists within the orange areas, its all cities, towns, villages, and the farmland that separates them. As such, these areas would probably (im assuming) be entirely unusable for hunting anything that hasn't adapted to live alongside humanity.

Heartflow Coast is where most of the mining and logging industry is located. There is still farmland there, but not so much. The closer to the /ahoy/ border you get, the higher the elevation gets. Very hilly area.

Northern and Southern Territories are somewhat similar, except that the southern ones are colder than the northern ones. Southern territories also has more forests then the northern territories, which have, like the home island, been heavily claimed by agriculture.

Fishing is a very important source of food for nasfaqg as well. Southern Territories has a few sizeable fishing communities, but fishing is practiced all across the republic.

The Four Coins Archipelago (as well as the Lird's Wallet Island) are volcanic, and the former belong to a different climate zone (Tropical Monsoon) from the rest of the republic

Hope that helps.