/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

>>26168873
>she clearly had fox ears and a tail
...do you even know who you are writing about?
Besides that, there were a few other issues. Your sentences are too long and your formatting needs more breaks to make it look cleaner.
The plot... is non-existent. All we know is that it's cold wherever (you) are. Nothing else. No why, how and where. Mio has nothing that defines her as Mio - it could've been literally anyone else. No, a few adjectives like nice, sweet and polite are not enough to define a character.
Your smut descriptions were decent enough, but again: Spacing. The sex scene was literally one paragraph.
Also, "weenie" is probably the least arousing term for "penis" I have ever read. Please don't use it again.
Good luck on your journey.