/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

>Ayame is completely clean shaven
the bad news just doesnt stop coming... i dont think i can take much more of this shit...

So, who's on right now?

>>82109494
Yes. Ayame is begging Iroha not to tweet that she won the fight.

>>80258086
Well your use of body language and how you describe expressions is pretty alright. Ayame is rightly eager in this scenario, which you do a good job in expressing, but there's just one small, teeny tiny detail that flips this entire story on it's head.
Iroha would never need to ask Ayame for advice on swords since she canonically jobs her in such an embarrassing way that Ayame is frantic over the idea of word getting out there that she's such a jobber.

HOOMANS?! YOUR GODDAMN OSHI!?

No dying.

>>71894092
>mentions bat
>"kiddo"
Rebel and his skinwalkers are the ones who made the numerous anti-Gael posts. Huh... that actually makes sense.

>>67517096
Hologra are basically YTPs at their essence. Put that shit on 4x speed if you want a gmod flavor of it too.

>>66789650
>Ayame soundly beats your ass with her fightarded oni strength
>hfw this works against her and Mio takes it upon herself to nurse you back to health, while prescribing you hot wolf pussy as the only cure.
Love always wins bay bee.

>>65419724
Don't make me watch Ina streams just to equip myself for giving you the best feedback possible anon. I'll do it, I won't be thrilled about it, but I'll fucking do it.

>>64123580
I can't bring myself to eat seafood at all. It just tastes so weird to me.

>>57676909
To write about Iroha leaving lengthy and constructive feedback on Ayame's amateur porn videos?

what the FUCK im in a calli stream now

>>56542458
Jacob would leave GTA4 just to show up in random rally game for Kiara?!

>>55539080
So a trend I've noticed with your writing is that you tend to not describe the full picture that is in your head. You are THINKING about those things that make the scene make sense and mesh together nicely, but they are either given to the reader with a one liner or not at all. I know it's difficult to do, but when you have your chapter written you need to try reading through it from top to bottom as if you have fresh eyes for it. Take the words at their face value and see if they depict the things they need to. As for Ayame's general theme. I wasn't thinking about any sort of theme for her since the way characters come and go and are generally the chuubas in name and appearance only, it doesn't encourage me to think they will have an overarching theme or even development. For that kinda thing you need to make use of subtle foreshadowing. A prior conversation that hints that Ayame being included or something like that.
Also the thing you mentioned earlier about the boobs getting bigger via their ascension, how huge are botan's now? Those kinda mountains would make it impossible to run the way she does.
I think you could have just gone with how Ayame's tits were perky and got the same feeling of enticement across. The larger boobs on her itty bitty frame aren't even referenced during the sex anyway.

>>53977860
>Iroha's face when she had just finished leaving a scathing review on an AV actress she follows video "amateur oni gets horns pulled and blasted doggy style" and then ayame pipes up and asks why the hell she thought her performance sucked
>dont meet your heroes kids

>>53620330
...what?

Is Kurokami the Akuma to Fubuki's Gouken?

>>51835084
He's not wrong, Korone crumbles whenever anyone gets in her JP's face.

Ayame, don't look...

>>50702705
my brother, the hologra is literally about Iroha jobbing ayame and the oni stalking her to make sure she doesn't tweet it out and ruin her rep.

>>49551672

Team D... you just have to believe...

>>48719288
How did boochi poster come to be anyways? I missed the start of their arc.