/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

>>27770942
God fucking dammit this general's gonna give me an incest fetish isn't it? Can the writer working on the sequel to "To and Fro" hurry up so that I can finalize my descent into depravity already? Assuming I haven't already begun falling of course

>Also yeah, hope nothing bad happens to Rushia cause some Anon said that HF, CH, HC, FS Memories, GB Watson, and now this would be pretty weird to read and write if something does happen. Then again Coco's still fine to write but she left amicably so that's not really the same
>Rushia gets terminated
Fucking shoot me in the goddamn mouth. Should I just rewrite the story so that Rushia died during their journey? not actually gonna do it but fuck was I tempted to do it when I heard the news
>>18941236
>>18941681
>>18942913
I think I worded it wrong when I said I'll fix her characterization. What I meant is that I shouldn't have used the word "hot temperament" when I described her in that scene. I just didn't know a better word to use since the word "passion" doesn't have the same oomph needed for that scenario so I just used the first thing that came to mind. Also thanks for the detailed response, feels nice to know that people can understand the character's emotions and thought processes through my mediocre writing.
>>18967661
Glad that you enjoyed it dude!
>>18980147
Just read through this and I really liked what you've written so far! It's very different from what I'm going for so don't feel any pressure in delivering your work. I especially liked the internal monologue at the start, it had a lot of character in it that I could immediately tell what kind of person Anon is just from those paragraphs.

You know, reading these two stories back to back probably wasn't the best idea now that I think about it cause I feel like absolute shit. One was an emotional gut punch whose bruise lasted the whole story and the other was like a knife slowly being pressed into your chest like that one scene in Saving Private Ryan and you could only sit and watch as it slowly digs in deeper while you can do nothing to stop it. Just fucking shoot me in the face, this is the worst birthday surprise ever.

>>13312505
Like the others have said, the feeling of unease and disgust that you managed to convey is absolutely spectacular in that horrifying kind of way. The way the story unfolds as it reaches its crescendo just off to the horizon is just incredibly compelling to the point that I can't turn my eyes off it even as it descends into such sickening scenes of debauchery. The Apple Of Her Eye was great but it was contained in the fact that it was written in greentext format so it felt more like a play by play of abuse, this however has no such restraint and your writing proves as much which impresses me just as much as it disturbs me.
My only complaints is that since this story is being filtered through Anon's perspective, the writing should reflect as such because there were one or two sentences that felt slightly off.
All in all, great work and I'm not looking forward to seeing the next chapters. Still gonna read them though.

>>13316769
I just fucking reread Berserk so this is just full blown pain throughout. I didn't read the spoilers so I was completely caught off guard when the story veered off into something I did not expect. The mindbreak of the other Myths as the Nijis violated you was just pain especially as they screamed and begged for it to stop. Ame was the most painful one, the way she was forced to talk about her dreams of the future as she watches it being forcibly taken away was just brutal, Calli is a close second, seeing her cry and beg for it to stop in contrast to how she was at the beginning just made me feel horrible. The semi chub I had throughout the story was also pretty horrible not gonna lie
As your first foray into 2nd person works this is honestly pretty great, is this your first work here because I don't recall reading non 2nd person fics in the archive. Also, I think you're overreacting when it comes to the potential arguments if you post this on A03. If people use the representation of certain chuubas in a fic to promote tribalism then their opinions shouldn't matter in the slightest

>>12808264
A-anon... I was only shitposting when I said that the thought of beating up Flare turned me on. I didn't actually expect someone to take it seriously much less write a fic about this scenario.
I feel like absolute garbage reading this fic, I wouldn't even call this a monkey's paw scenario since I actually thought of this scene when I wrote that greentext but I think that just makes it worse.
I'm sorry for having a hand in creating this prompt, I'm sorry for inspiring you to write this, and I'm sorry for everyone who read this and who will read this in the future.
Flare deserves better.

Please forgive me /wg/

>>12686473
From México to all the way down, it really doesn't matter. All latam is in the same situation