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>>77665599
Physically I would, but emotionally I can't. That's what happens when you get too involved in your own damn headcannon that if your character doesn't / there is no sexual attraction between the two, I can't do it either/

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>>76451835
Well this was pretty enjoyable. I got no real opinions on Hoshikawa, but you sure wrote her to be fun. The dynamics you set up felt pretty organic, which was probably one of my favorite aspects of this fic. The bits of comedy laced over the drama and inner conflict were also really nicely done. Your smut dialogue was really good in my opinion, and perfectly captures the essence of saying things during sex that would make your own head turn in the mirror when you recall them. I am prone to say some really nasty shit when I'm in the moment, and when I think about it 20 minutes after, I'm fucking red hot with embarrassment over it. For the smut itself I was surprised there weren't more positions used. The buildup kinda felt like no potential way to fuck would go unexplored, but the way you did it had a distinct feel of realism to it, so the trade offs work out. Also during that scene, there was a minor spelling mistake:
both of you as you glans pushes past her swollen curtain
>you
>your

I might say you can also focus a little more on the physical sensations during the smut, but you nailed the emotional and mental aspects. Also really loved your includes of other chuubas in this, it feels like a fun little world anon is in. The aftermath was probably the chef's kiss to this piece for me. It was the perfect reward and flow that kinda built up explosion of tension wants in the end.

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>>75523351
This is a pretty good way to do a sequel. I really liked the mental wrestling you incorporated into this one, and the internal tension was practically visible.
The sex itself was pretty easy and enjoyable to read. It doesn't do anything for me since it is in fact incest this time, but the way you describe the exploring of bodies and your reactions to them are pretty good. I'm sure people who are into this will get quite a bit of mileage from it. Nice work and major props to your quickness on it.

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>>73437166
I will be joining you in editing hell soon. I have at least several scenes and sections to refine, but I know in my heart they are necessary and will make the story even better, so don't shirk from the effort even though it might prolong things! Live without regrets!
>>73437826
We've all been there at least once. On the bright side, the practice of that foreshadowing will help you to include those types of things sooner rather than later, and your outlining process will continue to get polished from it. You can keep doing this, the fennec believes in you.

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>>72697625
>Spoiler
My heart goes out to you brother. I have a similar situation with my own SO. She's come a long way over the years, but there are still aspects of herself that she has a lot of trouble with accepting. It's a hell of a mountain to climb, but I choose to believe the view from the top is unlike anything else. Keep doing your best. We're all gonna make it.

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>>71346791
It's only cringe if you let it be that way. Be proud of your work, no matter who sees it. At the end of the day you made something and had the guts to put it out there for others to see.

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>>69539094
Thanks for reading! I hear you loud and clear on the slower subject chapters. I love reading and writing those myself, which is why I found a good opportunity to give myself a little of that with this with this installment. Sometimes you gotta reward yourself as a writer and give yourself something you need, and I definitely needed a little mixup in the mist of the current chapters. Back to back action chapters can be a little taxing, so getting some slowly building fluff in there really refreshed me.
As for the questions, I can only guess which you might have due to what I've been planting, but the answers will come.

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>>66949863
The desire alone to be good does more than you think. I know it's hard and sometimes it's easier to just give up, but you can persevere and some seemingly minuscule thing you did will inspire someone else to do another small good thing, and then that small thing becomes another, and eventually becomes lots of good things. You get the point.

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