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>> No.47354179

I miss when we could go a half a day without a CYOA thread.

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These threads are the only good thing left on this board, you moron.

>> No.47354240

These threads are the only thing keeping me from doing the suicide.

>> No.47354289

Same anon from >>47353178. Been thinking of some perks for my Energy cyoa and thought of adding a HUD to the list of perks. Will work something like this:
>Grants specific and accurate knowledge on how much energy you have, how much you will gain from a source, and how much you will spend with your powers.
>Grants several other benefits based on your energy source.
>Food, for instance, gives you a list of many recipes and saves others you may read, as well as knowledge of locations of various food sources.
>By comparison, Solar will grant you a clock detailing the time, time zone, and how long the sun is expected to be out.

Is this a good idea? Or is this too much for the cyoa?

>> No.47354346

>tfw want to post OC
>but Bliss will finish his soon
feels bad

>> No.47354364

You've been teasing us with that cyoa for so long now I'd even accept (but wouldn't pick) watching midget scat porn as an energy source.

But yes, the HUD sounds fun.

>> No.47354406

Have to say I wasn't expeting this to get dark. Neat! Obviously we're ignoring the fellow in the last page.

>Past Life

Intelligence 3
Fast Adaptation 4
Halo Effect 5
Independent Action 6
Danger Sense 7
Charisma 9
Stealth 10

A Necklace

Anna Beck

>The World

I focused on "soft" power for my abilities, choosing to predict, prevent, and avoid situations that could erupt into violence. My goal is to assist Anna with her goals and keep her safe from the people in this world that would use her technological prowess to cement their position. My past experience with influencing politics can come in handy but only if Anna intends for her influence to blossom to that scale. Regardless of whether she's the spark of hope for a true rebellion or simply wants to be left to her own devices two things are certain. One, I will always be with her and will keep her safe. Two, she will wear her fucking hoodie on her goddamn shoulders or I swear to god

>> No.47354438

Prey (is that a pun?) is a reference to something in the real world, isn't it?

>> No.47354446

I'll try to get it up by this thread or the next, but it will have to be in pdf form. I have no idea how to use paint and this cyoa is taking up several pages as it is.
And don't worry, nothing lewd in it. So no midget scat porn.

>> No.47354474

>CYOA about alternate power sources
>don't worry, nothing lewd in it

I feel like this is a missed opportunity, but hey it's your adventure. Can't always pander to the pervets, I understand.

>> No.47354564

>And don't worry, nothing lewd in it.
You might not see it, but someone else will.

>> No.47354581

Not the creator, but what are you thinking?

>sexual fluids
>following orders
>pleasing others
>siring/birthing offspring

>> No.47354650

Mostly just sex in general, though the act specifically is the one that makes more sense as a power generation source. Hell you could even go the succubus route and have it be draining energy from the other people, either a generic "life force" or as a specialized form of "social" energy generation from the CYOA.

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>Fast Adaptations
>Magic Spark
>Danger Sense
>Magic Detection




Be magical bodyguard and assistant for Kiri as she inspires the people and unites the world so they can rebuild from this disaster!

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Here it is, as promised. Kingdom (Crusher) Diplomacy.

Feedback is highly appreciated.

>> No.47354747

Prey is Earth, yes.
"World-spanning terrorist organization" is America, but that much is obvious.

>> No.47354776

And here I was about to finish the addition for my Yandere cyoa
btw which is your favorite? Which would you rather be, which most corresponds with your fetish, which would you rather have as a girlfriend?
Just curious.

Guess I better close Photoshop and get ready to erect a building in my pants.
See you in an hour.

>> No.47354814 [DELETED] 

He said tonight, it's early afternoon. You have time to get your headpats.

>> No.47354861

Rolled 4, 8 = 12 (2d20)

Do the Diplomacy/Hostilities options cost a benefit or are they the equivalent of drawbacks in other adventures? Also do you get that kingdom's bonus as your +1/+2 or can you pick any? Either way, rolling a kingdom that I am an Ambassador to. Second roll will determine my ambassadorship if the first one rolls the kingdom I was planning to be a member of.

I do like how there's a lot of options and the benefits of them are all fairly vague. Good for storytelling and you can really set up a wide variety of characters with this.

>> No.47354862

>what are timezones
>Bliss literally posted OC in the thread three posts behind you
open your mind

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I think we have pretty similar style, but still manage to choose totally different things. Pretty cool. >>47354689

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Honestly, monopolizing is my favourite. Is it really wrong to be so perfectly matched with eachother that more intoxicating than drugs?

Worshipping however is something that greatly appeals to my fetish. A mix of the two would be excellent.

>Do the Diplomacy/Hostilities options cost a benefit or are they the equivalent of drawbacks in other adventures?
They are free to choose. They are like drawbacks.
>Also do you get that kingdom's bonus as your +1/+2 or can you pick any?
You only get a kingdom bonus when you are a Dual Citizen, Citizen or Official.

And thank you.

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I would love it if you posted the images you used for this.

>> No.47355018

>over 60 images
I uh, am happy to provide you with any specific image. Dumping them all would take me forever.

>> No.47355028

I like the stat system but what does a 5 practically signify, in wealth for example? Can we ever reach truly high positions, second only to the King or Queen of a kingdom?

>> No.47355030

Could you two link to Kingdom Crusher and Yandere? Or post them if they weren't in a recent thread?

>> No.47355040

>You only get a kingdom bonus when you are a Dual Citizen, Citizen or Official.
Right so when it says "Options add 1 point to an aspect of Power." I can choose any I want? That was my original reading but I just wanted to make sure.

Also blehhh rolled Ell. This Diplomat business is starting to seem like a bum job. Definitely going to build an Independant background after this.

>> No.47355063

How accepted is homosexuality/lesbianism in this world? Is there any kingdom, or multiple kingdoms, I should avoid at all costs?

>> No.47355133

You could just roll independant and play as an openly Lesbian queen. I don't think it would be that much of an issue if you also magecraft desu.

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Here's Kingdom Diplomacy.

>I can choose any I want?
Yup, any. And yeah, being an Ambassador means you have to kiss ass at times. With Ell that is certainly a shit job.

Rahai is misogynistic. But otherwise it's just a part of life. Especially in Eden.

However, sometimes you need to make blood heirs, so careful with that.

>> No.47355154

Description for Eden has a typo. "A lot of credit is due to the Queen, whose wisdom and diplomatic skills and are unrivaled." Extra "And" in there.

>> No.47355164

You could put them on Mega but I'm really just looking for the images labeled: Custom Outfit, Festivals, The Ouroboros, Nocturne, Magecraft, The Lotus.

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Thank you. I usually read through them a couple of times but a few can slip past me.

I'll upload them here.

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>> No.47355245

What would you suggest for people seeking personal power?

I also noticed that most warrior options revolved around being a commander of a (small) army. Are superhumanly strong warriors not a thing in this world, think musou style elite units?

>> No.47355278

Great stuff. The only thing I'm missing is some expanding on our family seeing as how many benefits establish some sort of familial background, but I'm guessing that's up to our imagination.

>> No.47355296

Independent seems kinda stiffed. Their neutrality and independence cannot be understated, it's true, but that's mostly fluff. The main limiting factor is how many kingdoms tax your Treasury and the options to get more points are (understandably) very limited. It just seem hard to buy more than one reward a lot of the time.

Not sure if this is anything you want to change, but it's just a small complaint from me.

>> No.47355310

Rolled 1 (1d20)

I hope I did this right. Making a build as I read it.
>Combat 1 -1 = 0
>Knowledge 2 -1 = 1
>Resources 5 +1 = 5
>Treasury 5 -1 = 4
>Property 3 +1 (Ambassador) = 4


I honestly had too many
>Diplomacy - Ambassador
(You should probably note that there are 20 kingdoms, and how rolling works)
If roll = the kingdom I picked, round down.

6 Benefits, Kingdom bonus and tax
I don't understand taxes: I assume they remove one point of said stat?

Honestly, I can barely read it.
I can't get a reward, or what? Do they cost Power, or reward it? Assuming I can get it, and it costs Power:

So uh... apparently I'm a high-standing citizen of this city.
And I'm really weak, physically, but I have a bunch of shit to earn money from.

>monopolizing is my favourite
All of my yes.
I wrote Monopolizing, knowing already that I would choose to become that one.

>he prefers worshipping
I have no words
i mean, it's not like I'd ever say no, but still... I don't want to be beaten, or to feel worthless.

You said you wanted to do a CYOA together. I have plenty of ideas, but I'd prefer to do the ones I've already written some for myself.
I know you mentioned Superheroes

>> No.47355325

Please, PLEASE, can all CYOA creators who use symbols for stats also say what those stats are when using the symbols later in the CYOA?

It may seem obvious that sword = combat and coin = treasure, but even after reading the intro, by the time I've finished reading and picking origin and benefits, I'm not going the remember the difference between book and scroll.

There's room to say "2 points of treasure" or "1 point of treasure, 1 point of resources" after bonus/tax/cost.

I would also use more headings: one for Aspects of Power above the paragraph explaining them, one above the origin paragraph.

I would also suggest a line of text under the Benefits heading reminding the player how many they get to choose (yes, even though it's just the previous part where it says that).

It's not clear which options are mutually exclusive. Can I be Baron and Merchant? Baron and Noble? Can I be Ambassador to one country and At War with another (or the same)? Can I be Ambassador and Diplomat? If so, should I roll two kingdoms or use the same one?

The fact that aspects can't go below 0/above 5 should be mentioned earlier. I shouldn't think I'm minmaxing them discover I'm wasting points at the end.

Personally I would allow stats over 5. Why not?

Dual Citizenship should say "Bonuses and Taxes" (plural).

Some of the rewards don't seem very good. I pay two aspects, permanently reducing my magical ability and wealth, for a single magic outfit with unspecified magical capabilities? Even getting both rewards for paying cost once seems poor value.

Do Ambassadors and Spies need to pay tax+cost for rewards like independent or just cost? Why don't Diplomats get to buy rewards? I would let all three get rewards for just cost, and consider even allowing At War to buy rewards (spoils) for tax+cost (or bonus+cost, to be an inversion of independents).

Why do origins give set arrays instead of allowing you to assign points freely? That would make the math easier for costs.

>> No.47355347

>I should avoid at all costs?
Seriously, you're that much of a fucking homophobe that you would avoid, "at all costs", somewhere where homosexuality and lesbianism are merely "accepted"? Fuck you!

>> No.47355382

So I need to be the Ambassador of Roza, to Ecclesia
I think we can make this work: Obviously I can't hope to seduce the Queen, but I can't imagine they can grow much in the Frostlands.
Their soldiers for our food seems a fair trade.

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You can become very strong individually, but most of the peak abilities and items are secrets only passed down in kingdoms (such as weaponry from Solsteir and Armour from Caer), or require you to join their faction (Shadow Order).

I'd say that strength is attainable, but numbers always outweigh the individual. That cannot be changed.

Thank you. It's true that I've put emphasis on yourself, rather than your family. But yeah, I guess you should let imagination fill up the gaps.

I purposely made independent stiffed. Normally, you are a free individual with nobody to govern you or tax you. If you wish for rewards then there must be an added penalty. I don't know if I will buff them yet though.

>I don't understand taxes: I assume they remove one point of said stat?
Yeah, that's what tax does. It is stated in the Rules by the way.

>Honestly, I can barely read it.
Is it that bad? Darn, I found it to be doable.

>I can't get a reward, or what? Do they cost Power, or reward it? Assuming I can get it, and it costs Power:
They cost power, like everything.

And worshipping isn't about beating, it's about loving!

I'll think about it. Just finished this after all, and I am spent.


>> No.47355544

Do I get to choose my gender, or is it locked to my real one? Can my double identity be a different gender to me?

>> No.47355701

Why would you believe you aren't still a guy?

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It's just 5 icons anon. This is a minor issue.

A heading for aspect of power is a bit redundant. Origin though, perhaps it needs one but I thought it was self-explanatory from the intro.

>It's not clear which options are mutually exclusive. Can I be Baron and Merchant? Baron and Noble?
You can mix any type of benefit.

>Can I be Ambassador to one country and At War with another (or the same)? Can I be Ambassador and Diplomat? If so, should I roll two kingdoms or use the same one?
You may only choose 1 role, but I agree that it should be clarified. Maybe I'll make it cost 1 benefit too. Keep in mind this is an early release.

Yeah I guess I'll release the cap on 5. Why not? I won't spell out what it means though.

Certain rewards aren't spelled out in value, since values are objective sometimes, but you can assume that the cost of that outfit is equal to what you invest.

Yeah the whole Diplomacy/Hostilities section was something I added in on a late stage. It needs a lot of fine-tuning, so I will consider your comment.

I gave arrays instead of free points to avoid making costs and taxes a redundant system. Free min-maxing is also something I do not fully agree with, it's fine within limits, of course.

Thank you very much for your suggestions and pointed errors.

You're a fictional character. And double identity can use magic to alter your appearance even genderwise.

>> No.47355750

Because it presents me as being an individual from that world with his/her own life, not the real me transported there.

Perfect xD

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Last requested image.

>> No.47355830

Oh, so you're one of those guys who can't have fun with their imagination if they can't also be a girl.
You should really ask your doctor for some hormones when your disease is this bad.

>> No.47355887

Yo, so like. What happens if someone rolls Miragus for Diplomat? Are they just autokilled by assassins or do they just have the worst possible assignment a diplomat could get?

>> No.47355901

Here it is. My first cyoa. The Energy cyoa. Feel free to suggest balancing issues and give criticism.

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>> No.47355908

>wishful thinking
If you wanted me to dress up for you this badly, you just had to ask.

>> No.47355965

I mildly dislike a Stat system combined with such extensive benefits. I can give myself 0 resources or property, but still own a mine, a shop, a mansion, etc.

I'd suggest making some of the benefits affect your Stats (a mansion = +1 property; sorcery = +1 knowledge) but then we'd all end up with ridiculous stats. I just feel there's some awkwardness between stats and benefits now.

>> No.47356012

Why else do you want to be a girl if not because you touch yourself to the idea of being born with a cunt?

>> No.47356035

>It's just 5 icons anon. This is a minor issue.
Yes it's just five, and they are fairly distinct, but that was a general comment. I've seen CYOAs with more icons where they are all very abstract. It gets confusing.

>A heading for aspect of power is a bit redundant. Origin though, perhaps it needs one but I thought it was self-explanatory from the intro.
It's understandable what those sections are, but headings also serve an aesthetic purpose of splitting up the CYOA. After reading it, I can go back to the start to start my build and skip the paragraphs that are intro and just go from the ones associated, by headings, with particular sets of options.

>You can mix any type of benefit.
Considering how similar some are, it would be helpful to say so or give some indication of the difference between similar ones. I have no idea of the implications of Baron vs Noble vs both.

>Maybe I'll make it cost 1 benefit too.
That's a big switch from giving points at the moment. I think there should be a consistent idea behind the purpose of the options: are they meant to be benefits I can buy or drawbacks I can take?

>I won't spell out what it means though.
As long as it's clear they're not meant to be capped. With the current text I was only sure the cap applied to bonuses when I reached the explanatory text at the end.


>> No.47356054

>>47356035 (cont)
>but you can assume that the cost of that outfit is equal to what you invest.
That's what I normally do in CYOAs for benefits that are descriptive, not numeric. But in this case, the huge cost (the drop from being average to low or peak to rich, in both magical skill and wealth) and the very open description (outfits that may, not even necessarily, have unspecified magic) made it hard for me to imagine what possible subjective benefits they could have to be even comparable to the cost. For example, is a nation prides itself on fashion and I'm at 5 treasure and 4 knowledge, I would take for granted that I can get many rare outfits, even with minor magic powers. So for a single outfit to set me back so much that my magical power and wealth drop significantly (by a fifth of the greatest anyone can be expected to have) it must be pretty damn impressive! But there is no indication what sort of spectacular it might be! Enough to make me immortal? Enough to give me immunity to fire or water breathing? Enough to make me as a minor wizard?

Thank YOU for the CYOA!

>> No.47356077

I chose not to roll for the kingdom I'm spying on in favor of making for a better story.




Ambassador to Ell (+1 Knowledge)

Spying on Kaliph (+2 Knowledge)

Double Identity (Kaliph)
Covert Order
The Ouroboros
The Kalipha
High Society

>Final Array
Combat: 2
Knowledge: 5
Resources: 2
Treasury: 0
Property: 1

A hotheaded young noble from an otherwise respected noble family has little place in the hallowed court of Miragus. It was decided then that my considerable talents would serve the Matron in a place much more suited to my temper: Kaliph. It was a woundrous country, with so many exotic sights and experiences, but I made sure to keep my eye on the mission: infiltrate, investigate, and, if possible, destablize a potential threat to Miragus. Well in a country so stridently factionalized it was child's play (literally) for one trained in the arts of the Covert Order to insinuate myself with both parties, each aware of my collaboration with the other and certain that I was their triple agent.

I amassed my own influence as well during this time and drank deep of the rewards both factions offered. It would be suspicious not to, you understand. As I rose in the ranks and took part in minor, local governance both groups seemed to decide of their own accord at the same time that I should serve as an arm of their foreign relations department and gave me a seat as an ambassador. My greatest failure was in getting myself sent to Ell of all places. It was the least I could do to make sure that both the Ouroboros and the Kalipha sent me to the same place and I couldn't risk overplaying my hand.

>> No.47356083

I'm not >>47355750, I'm just making fun of you for obsessing over whoremoans. Mostly because it's easier to identify with the gender I've been my entire life.

>> No.47356096

I can have a little fun without also being a girl.

Maybe you're right though.

Take out "being born with".

>> No.47356100


So now I'm stuck in the frozen asshole of the world for the time being. I've managed to buy my way into their High Society but all that means is I get to spend more time rubbing elbows with more frozen assholes. It cost me most of my physical wealth to get to this point but that doesn't bother me so much. I've managed to secure for myself a wide array of influence and knowledge in three different kingdoms. The worst part is I can hardly think of a valid exuse for either Kaliph or my home country to come give these bastards a beating. Still, it's not all bad I guess. While you're never far from the Matron's web I'm far enough away that it's inconvenient to micromanage and I'm granted a lot of independance. Plus, though far from the Upper Villa, I've manged to secure a Residence of my own in this hellhole. Built in the Kaliph style I enjoy the fact that it must rankle these snobs to see my mansion breaking up the monotonous architecture of their city. More than a few nobles are interested in the exotic pleasures I offer, as well.

>> No.47356116

Not only are you jumping to extreme conclusions mighty fast, but have you also considered that people can have multiple interests that don't define them as a person?

>> No.47356141

>Why else do you want to be a girl if not because you touch yourself to the idea of a cunt?

>> No.47356199

OC up here.

>> No.47356203

>I mildly dislike a Stat system combined with such extensive benefits.
I don't mind it myself, but I'd mainly like to point out that a CYOA could have extensive benefits that don't overlap with its stats. For example, stats cover intellect, knowledge, physical abilities, while benefits cover property, social status, allies, etc. Or the reverse, for an unusual twist.

>I can give myself 0 resources or property, but still own a mine, a shop, a mansion, etc.
That means you own nothing else. You sleep in your shop/mine entrance, are one of those nobles with nothing left to his name but his mansion, etc.

>> No.47356226

He probably wants to be a sexy lesbian so he asks which kingdoms would lynch him for that to avoid them.

>> No.47356239

What, you mean you're a real girl? Lucky you but why make fun of anon because of that?

Also, add "having". inb4 you add it somewhere else in the sentence.

>> No.47356247

Doesn't seem to open up properly on Sumatra.

>> No.47356267

Hell yeah, motherfucker, i was waiting for that.

>> No.47356269

Sorry, didn't know Sumatra was a thing.

>> No.47356280

Works for me. Update it (v3.1.1).

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>> No.47356314

it's a pdf so nobody's gonna read it.
anon, actual girls don't fetishize their gender like you do.

>> No.47356334

My main point of criticism:

While I could pick 'Solar,' I wouldn't actually know what this choice really meant. What powers, really, would I have and how would they be different from electricity and heat? Couldn't I transfer my energy to electrical appliances or is that a strictly lightning thing? Could I burn things or is that only for heat? So on and so on.

All the same you did really well for a first OC.

My build: Solar
Benefits: Immortality, Dual-Source (Diligence)
Weaknesses: Unstable powers

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I guess I'll make a build for my own CYOA.

COMBAT 4 +1 -4 = 1
KNOWLEDGE 3 -2 = 1
TREASURY 4 +2 -3 = 3
PROPERTY 2 -1 = 1

Dual Citizenship
Primary: Nidal, Secondary: Myst
(+1 Combat +1 Treasury -3 Treasury)

Benefits: Warrior, Advisor, Merchant, Diplomacy, Residence

Kingdom Rewards: Personal Assistant, Order of Shadow, Market Priority (to get myself a Caer outfit, Solsteir weapon and perhaps even magical teachings/scrolls).

Diplomat (rolled 12 = Seille), +1 Treasury

I'm fine with that. I'm a Nidal tradesman, looking for resources and negotiations with Seille. Most of my combat forces have been redirected to assist the ruler of Myst for a safer Myst free of assassins. Maybe one day I will return to my homeland, but for now I have other duties. I have my trustworthy assistant to help me with my tasks, plus to find distrustful people.

I stand ready if the Order of Shadow calls for me.

That would certainly be complicated.
>Receive a formal letter to investigate a newly discovered kingdom
>After years of investigation finally found out who and where
Yeah, good luck.

>> No.47356365

Hold on now Watson I think this young anon is saying that they wish to avoid discrimination. You should reserve your rage and shitposting till after you learn about context clues.

>> No.47356396

The problem was apparently the PDF preview thingy that Pale Moon / Firefox have. It somehow inflated the filesize to 256KB which broke it for Sumatra. Right-click and Save As... got me a working file.

>> No.47356422

I bet some do.

>> No.47356471

Solar can't transfer power to electrical devices or burn things, that is for Electricity and heat/anger respectively. All you can really do with it is remove the need to eat and create light from a distance or from yourself. Thanks for the criticism, I'll try and clarify Solar.

>> No.47356518

No, anon, I really don't think they do. It's a part of your fetish.
That's not how functional people think.

>> No.47356540

This anon >>47356203 pretty much covered it.

Alright I understand where you're coming from, but I often struggle with design and text. Having too much text destroys design, having too little is sometimes confusing.

>I think there should be a consistent idea behind the purpose of the options:
My intentions were that benefits are background/lore options, and Diplomacy/Hostilities are lore+reward option.

Considering the Custom Outfit (or generally any kingdom reward) is a reward fit for Kings and Queens, you certainly can expect greatness from it. I left specifics open for interpretation, but you can think fantastic aspects (except immortality. That's a no-no).

And thank YOU for enjoying it!

Hey that's cool man. I'm all for that. Going to read it now.

>> No.47356638

Rolled 16, 11 = 27 (2d20)




At war with... (+2 Treasury)

Grand Ship

>Final Array
Combat: 2
Knowledge: 2
Resources: 2
Treasury: 1
Property: 2

Born to a wealthy family in Netherlands-analogue, it had always been my dream to forge my own state out on the waves, answering to noone and as self sufficient as I could make it. Finally, and at great cost to my liquid wealth, I am the captain of the Insurmountable. Equal parts pleasure ship, merchant hauler, and war galleon we mostly ply the waters around the Islands but we'll take anyone or anything to any port in the world. For a price.

The utter freedom and wealth (in experiences, if not in any particular quantifiable category) suits me but unfortunately for me and my crew we're still required to fly the flag of Netherlands-analogue and while I'm out gallavanting at sea I haven't kept up with the news that they're apparently heading for war with...

>> No.47356709

(Didn't mean to roll 2d20)

... Aurendal?! Damn! The nation most able to threaten my livelyhood, though I can see why they might have an issue with the expanding influence of Netherlands-analogue. It is some irony that they'll soon be hunting down a Grand Ship of their own design but somehow I doubt that will stop them. This does mean a life of constant risk and adventure for me, at least for as long as the war lasts. Perhaps I could seek refuge in a more distant port but the opportunity for privateering, profiteering, and perhaps amassing my own armada certainly has its appeal. I already possess a small army and the seafaring equivalent of a castle. High-stakes boarding actions would be one of the fastest ways to recoup my investments.

>> No.47356716
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>Dual Citizenship

>4-1=3 Knowledge
>4+1-1=4 Combat
>3 Property
>2-2+0 Treasury
>2-2+1=1 Resources


>Tusk (Legendary Beast)
>Caer (Custom Outfit)

Be poor but still fairly strong and influential noble. Have some castles in mountainous lands between Tusk and Caer. Would have lots of money from trade through border area, but unfortunately dragon breeding business is expensive. Especially when you spend time fighting off barbarians and studying magic instead of developing business sense...

Anyone interested in buying a dragon can come and stay with us for awhile.

>> No.47356728

>actual girls don't fetishize their gender like you do
You'd be surprised, lol. I adore being a woman, and most well-adjusted men I know adore being men.

>> No.47356747

>doesn't masturbate in front of a mirror to how fucking cash it is to be a woman
look at this loser

>> No.47356774

How about a little number from 1-20 next to each kingdom? To make rolling easier. Maybe the numbers could have dice shaped outlines.

>> No.47356822

>That's not how functional people think.
Well there's no way all women are functional! Now I know you're bullshitting!

>I adore being a woman
What do you mean? You enjoy dressing up sexily, having a hot body, being arousing to guys?


>> No.47356830

So you masturbate to the knowledge of being born with a cunt rather than a dick lol, as anon masturbates to the fantasy of being born with a cunt instead of a dick lol?

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> lol
Buddhism praises feeling nothing right? Because looking at this I feel empty.

>> No.47356892

I celebrate my life and everything in it, including my body. It's good to be me.

>> No.47356914

I think that's called narcissism.

>> No.47356920

>ME?! I know who I am!
>I'm a dude, playing a dude, disguised as another dude.
So many identities. So much intrigue. The Covert Order can train you for that, sure, but hot damn.

>stuck in the frozen asshole.
Yeah, that's Ell. Stuck until summer. Nice job representing too, those nobles are little stuck up but they are very interested in exotic curios and pleasures.

Oh shit. You're shipfaring in war with a shipfaring nation. You could always seek refuge in Rahai waters, but darn, that's a big dent in your freedom. Maybe you've been pirating, and they've set up a hefty bounty on your ass.

I like it, too bad you're broke as fuck, but at least you can get into the breeding business.

>> No.47356927

Back to the drawing board for you, I guess.

>> No.47356948

>being born with
I already corrected you on this! Get it together anon!

>It's good to be me.
Yeah, yeah, you're a girl. Stop rubbing it in!

>> No.47356950

Lady I don't even care about your argument with whoever. I just saw that post and it made me think of ol' Narcissus.

>> No.47356964
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OC incoming. You don't need to be familiar with the Persona series in order to understand it.

This is my first CYOA, but I feel like I may have tried to do a bit too much with it. I just wanted to make something that would encourage everyone to be more emotionally introspective than normal.

Really, though, this CYOA is just a glorified waifu CYOA, with some superfluous elements added in. Harem Creator has always been my favorite author, and I mean that unironically. The secrets in this CYOA aren't meant to be intentionallly incendiary like his stuff--just add dimension to the characters. I hope you enjoy it, just the same.

Please give me comments/suggestions for the next time around, if you don't mind.

RE: Personas. Fans of the series will wonder why I chose certain personas. I just wanted to represent a wide range from the different mythologies. Try not to think about the power imbalances too much.

Also, P4>P3, edgelords.


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Secrets to be posted after I finish up the page. Shouldn't be too long.


>> No.47357083

Rolled 1 (1d2)


Hard to decide between Kali and Alice. Both accurately describe my flaws desu. If 1, Kali else Alice.

I struggled to figure out which female companion but pick, but even without having read the other males I knew I wanted Kaoru. Good work, duderino.

I guess I'll take Honoka to help with the diplomacy effort.

>> No.47357124

>That spoiler

I wholeheartedly agree but P5 is primed and ready to take that crown already.

>> No.47357170

Oh boy, is everyone ready for futa NTR?

>> No.47357191

Very true tbqh desu

>> No.47357239

>futa NTR
How can you stand to combine something so shit with something so hot?

>> No.47357260

Narcissus literally looked at himself in a goddamn pool of water until he died of thirst. I think a little bit of self-appreciation is healthy.

>> No.47357270

Combat 5 + 1 - 2 = 4
Knowledge 4
Resources 2 + 2 = 4
Wealth 5 - 1 = 4
Property 2


>Warrior-Merchant (2)
>Treasurer (3)
>Diplomacy (4)
>Sorcery (5)
>Lord (6)

>at War, roll 15: Miragus, +2 Resources

Myst (+1 Combat, -1 Wealth)

Order of Shadow (-2 Combat)

What is a man to do when he's got wealth, knowledge, might and men yet no title? Join a rebellion of course!

Mizarus going to war against us is the perfect opportunity for the Order of Shadows to take control. Soon we'll be in charge and I'll get that lovely title of nobility I always wanted.

I originally wanted to join Mizarus but I rolled it as the enemy kingdom so now I guess I'll be a corrupt official.

>> No.47357271

please, I beg you, stop posting like a tranny-gay version of Angel.
>being envious of a girl
And I do honestly urge you to ask your doctor for more hormones, too.
> this CYOA is just a glorified waifu CYOA
Thank you for being honest. It's nice to know I can ignore it before I start caring.

>> No.47357276

You need to work on your baiting technique desu

I literally cannot wait to see what anon fucks up trying to copy the worst role model of all, Harem Master Anon. I bet what he thinks isn't incendiary eats up two threads.

>> No.47357292

Which is which?

>> No.47357305

>genuinely needing that explained

>> No.47357355

You didn't reply to >>47356822

>> No.47357383

>Ruri Abe's quote
Oh my, she certainly works quickly

>> No.47357386

>Please select a persona that best represents you.
So am I supposed to pick a persona that represents things I accept in myself ("this is how I am and that's OK"), or things I reject in myself ("this is how I am but I wish I weren't"), or what? The whole "personas are shadows" (and "shadows are repressed aspects") is what's causing this confusion.

>> No.47357394

I figured people would have trouble picking. Maybe I should have added in something about rolling among your options...

I haven't watched any of the trailers since the first one, but I'm hype as hell. Blonde Rise looks like she has best girl potential.

It won't be that bad, I promise!

>Thank you for being honest. It's nice to know I can ignore it before I start caring.
You get to choose a male companion, too, though, so maybe it's not totally irredeemable?

>> No.47357414

mootikins killed our thread. oh well.

Weakness: Anger
Dual Source: Social

Im basically immortal and any place with large amounts of people will fill me up. All I have to do is really live in a big city or a college town or something. Not too bad. Hell, I probably throw the best parties.

>> No.47357425

>It won't be that bad, I promise!
Harem Master Anon and Hunter Anon both said that about their last secret CYOAs that ate up a half-dozen threads each. The only recent one that did well was Pallas because he didn't make his about waifus.

>> No.47357451

>You get to choose a male companion,
Anon, I'm not gay.
Look, you made a waifu CYOA, and some people like that. I don't.
Again, I'm just happy you said it right off the bat so neither of us had to waste any time.

>> No.47357469

Different sides of the same coin. Almost all the aspects listed are negative, so it's less about whether you accept them or are trying to change them, and more about how accurately they define your personality. What you think of them doesn't factor in.

I'll make a v2 to clarify.

>> No.47357534

What's there to say?
The first part makes no sense, the two next are him/you unable to differentiate between reality and his/your fetish
You know, you could make a CYOA instead of this.

>> No.47357544

Don't count your chickens, bro. Wait until the shitstorm is over before you make any promises.

>> No.47357568

>Anon, I'm not gay.
Really? Because you seem really annoyed by men wanting to be women.

>> No.47357601

I'm kinda curious about what those might be, though I can understand your reluctance to link them. Is there any way to search by author or anything or am I doomed to not be able to find out what you're talking about on my own.

>> No.47357613

Orobas fits, but I refuse to choose a horse furry.

>> No.47357634

I definitely have inverted Strength, so
Orobas, Isis, and Byakko would be decent, but not quite as well matched.
>Chinami Endo
She's the only waifu female companion who I can't see any potential dangers in, which obviously means she'll turn out to be the worst choice. Maybe she's haunted by some spirit of making people trip or something.

Speculation from a Persona newb:
Nanananananana... is NOT tsundere towards you. She's just really bad at being mean.
Jane McAvoy Was sent to draw out and hunt down some sort of enemy of the government/world/etc., and suspects you. Alternatively, the 'training' messed up her soul, meaning she literally does not sleep (among other effects).
Kaoru Adachi is NOT secretly a shadow, but some nominally higher entity that decided this whole human thing might be worth a try.
Shiho Nanasaki is a trickster-type entity that feeds on fun.
Tsukasa Komon's dad made a Faustian pact for his powers, and its effects somehow trickled down to his son. He desperately tries to get out of the fate that took his father already.
Albert Engel is a Bond villain, most often foiled by Jane. He has put a tentative halt on plots to save his wife, and you (and/or she) might be able to convince him to stop them for good.
Chinami Endo Again, I'm not sure. It might be an act as a desperate way to get attention
Xiaoxiao Zhao Besides the generic "mad scientist with ulterior motives for research", I'm not sure.
Honoka Yanagi might be a sociopath, might be an entity posing as a human. Picking her would very likely end poorly, though.
Ruri Abe got taken over by a Shadow by Xiaoxiao's treatment, probably unintentionally.
I'm pretty sure they got more subtle near the end, but that may just be me.

>> No.47357665
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>all of the personality descriptions fit me
ha ha ha

>> No.47357707
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There was a professional wrestling cyoa that was posted here a long time ago, does anyone have it?

>> No.47357722


>Persona: ISHTAR
Why do I want to bully and dominate cute boys?

>Female friend: Chinami Endo
We'll strategize our way out of this.

>Male friend: Xiaoxiao Zhao
He's clever and basically our healslut. Also a literal slut. I mean, if he gets to experiment on me, I should get to experiment on him. He'll look just great all bound up. Or with some red stripes on his back. Maybe both.

Now show me the mystery page so I can see how badly I fucked this up.

>> No.47357730

The one with the blue background? I remember that, but I'm on my phone now so maybe later tonight.

>> No.47357735

Im not following your train of thought: shouldnt a gay man be happy at the thought of s guy who thinks
>it's not gay to take it up the ass if I tell him I'm a girl
I'm mostly annoyed that you think a guy loving cock isn't gay.

>> No.47357746

I guess Ill take Quetzalcoatl?

For companions, How about Ruri and XiaoXiao.

Well. Here goes nothing. Lets wait for that secret. I'm sure Ruris will be terrible.

>> No.47357752

Yeah that's the one. Thanks

>> No.47357755
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Hey Bliss! Glad you like it! I don't mind being a poor noble in this case. I feel like I'm more like "house poor", it's more like all my money and resources go into protecting my lands and raising dragons and there's just not to much left over. That's not to bad really.

Oh, and I forgot to mention that my custom outfit would be some fashionable dragon handling gear.

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Damn it. Just noticed the typo on Albert's quote. Oh well.


There's a reason for that.

I actually chose him specifcally to placate the furfags!

>> No.47357781

Loving cock IN A VAGINA isn't gay!

>> No.47357803

But in the process now I must pick a less-fitting Persona.

>> No.47357809

Whoops, forgot
>Kaoru Adachi
Thus will probably end poorly, but a flaw of "betrayal" means he's already done the betraying. This either means he'll never betray us or that he's almost certain to. One or the other.

>> No.47357827

>You know, you could make a CYOA instead of this.
Where to start? What would distinguish it from other genderbend CYOAs?

>> No.47357830

I could've sworn we've already been over this: you're turned on by cock.
Just because you have to go through mental loops to justice this, doesn't change that you love cock.
All I ask is you admit to yourself you're gay.

>> No.47357836
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Shadows? Anyway, I choose Kali, and Albert Engal as my companion. You will have a option that will let me "Talk" to demons and get spell cards right? I can summon my persona anytime too, right? If not, I going to hit up Steven for the devil summoning program.

>> No.47357858

Does it need to be anything but generic?
You could go into great lengths to make it sound not-gay via the "how did you become a woman" options.
Maybe add worlds were gays/trannies aren't thought less of?

>> No.47357866

You get to pick a girl, too. And there can't be a talk option, because Kaoru's ability is described as being unique.

>> No.47357879


Lets see. Ruri: Yeah. Damnit. I knew that was coming.

Xiao: God damnit. Again?

I may have made some bad choices.
I guess Shiho and Jane wasnt as bad as I initially expected. I was thinking about picking them.

>> No.47357894

demons =/= shadows, brother

>> No.47357942

>First girl is literally insane and is going to injure you for your blood.
How is this not supposed to be incendiary?
>Second girl is disgusting raped good who gets off on shit.
That's repulsive.
>Third girls is kind of a bitch and a liar.
Mostly harmless.
>Fourth girl is pretending to be stupid.
Mostly harmless.
>First guy is gay and gets you in trouble with the Yazuka.
Plot hook and doesn't bother me, but it'll piss someone off.
>Second guy is /pol/
Hilarious to me. Shitty secret though.
>Fourth girl is a bitch.
Not fun or interesting.
>Third guy is a fucking drug addict.
This is going to piss people off too.
>Fifth girl is a bitch.
>Sixth girl is dying.
How is this not supposed to be incendiary?

Most of these are just boring/stupid, but what the fuck were you thinking with Nana, Jane, and Ruri? These are the exact kind of shit that had people shitstorming about Harem Master.

>> No.47357977

Good thing I never check the thread updates!
In any case, I was dead wrong for all of them.
My choices turned out... interesting, to say the least.

>> No.47357995

>Pick one aspect of your all-consuming despair and depression

Well Dionysius the Moon then, and thanks for nothin.

Jane McAvoy is cute as hell, but I gotta go with Shiho. Lack of focus isn't what I need but spending time with someone cheerful and friendly, even physical, would be amazing.

Tsukasa seems a bit needy at first but hey I love magic and I'm sure he has great potential. Shiho teasing him will probably be funny as hell too.

Shiho's is tragic, but, not insurmountable. Not terrible. I wouldn't want to force her in either direction but I have to admit giving up on all that seems like a mistake to me. Not that I can entirely understand. Still, just more perfect.

Tsukasa, man... Damn. I want to tell him to just get the fuck over it but I know how much that doesn't help.

Really what they both need is just a strong support structure. Which I obviously can't provide myself, but hopefully the three of us can help each other.

>> No.47358034

>Muh tragedy
>Muh deep story
>Muh pathos
Oh fuck off.

>> No.47358042

>who the brain?
Truly a question that philosophers will ponder through the ages...

>> No.47358043

Albert doesn't want you to get with Jane becuse of age difference is she a older woman or what? Certainly doesn't look like it.

>> No.47358062

>you're turned on by cock.
So are girls and they aren't gay.

>> No.47358065

She was raped by literally everyone and now has a fetish for scat.

You think I'm joking.

>> No.47358070

Or maybe, deep down, you actually are a furry.

Man, I could have made this thing a lot more fantastical, couldn't I have? I keep it in mind for next time.

Shiho's really isn't all that bad. I had a really hard time writing for her and Chinami.

>Most of these are just boring/stupid, but what the fuck were you thinking with Nana, Jane, and Ruri? These are the exact kind of shit that had people shitstorming about Harem Master.
I don't know. I guess I was just thinking about Persona. Sympathetic psychopathy (although it did just turn into straight-up yandere, which I admit is my fault), traumatic pasts, and limited time to live are all featured there. Sorry.

>> No.47358077

>unironically calls people 'disgusting raped goods'

>Criticizing the CYOA maker for being 'incendiary'


Tbh I'm kind of annoyed at Kaoru's inability to talk to shadows. I was hoping that they'd be intelligent, or willing to engage in diplomacy; something like that.

Honoka was a tad bland as well desu. ]

>> No.47358083

>Chinami bullied
>Xiaoxiao drug addict

I made a mistake. I shouldn't have picked Xiaoxiao. I'll whip the addiction out of him but that's all I really want to do.

I'll help Chinami too. Hopefully I can find out the real culprit before she gets herself killed on a solo mission. I'm definitely beating some sense into her first though. "This is not a soap opera. Don't shut me out. Let me explain myself."

I really regret not picking Tsukasa just because he was boring. We could've been great together. I'd love his loving, pleasing nature and he'd love my cock.

Could have been worse I guess.

>> No.47358091

Persona was NEVER that fucking edgy. Either one person self-sacrifices and everyone else moves on or shit goes down but you manage to scrape through. It's not about getting raped and anime death illnesses and fucking blood as hair dye.

>> No.47358092

That have nothing to do with age.

>> No.47358101

I'm just curious what your definition of an exciting/smart reveal would be? For a Persona CYOA of all things.

>> No.47358106

You're repulsed by your own cock? How do you have sex? Do you wish you were a woman?

>> No.47358121

See >>47358091
The ones I'm complaining about in particular are out of tone with the games. Dial that shit down. An abusive parent is in-line. Having a train run on you by the military base is not.

>> No.47358134

Yeah, you make a good point. I will reconsider for the next time I try making one of these.

>> No.47358161

You mentioned a v2. If you really want to do a v2 right, you can overhaul the problem character's secrets. Not like anyone's attached enough to this to complain. It'd really suck for the only persona cyoa to be a disappointment.

>> No.47358185

Maybe Anti-Trans Anon is secretly Angel and she thinks if someone likes men as much as she likes women then they must be gay just like she is lesbian.

>> No.47358190
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anon>>47357836 here.

If shadows and demon are roaming about, to hell with school and social links. I am going to crush them all and become king of the demons.

I choose Rue as my female companion and will fuse her with a demon to give her life. We Digital Devil Story Now.

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>Persona: Ishtar
>Companions: Xiaoxiao (how the fuck do you pronounce that?) and Ruri

Alright seems like a good balance for combat, interesting personalities, and a cute waif-

>Ruri's secret
Well... Guess it's gonna get awkward first and then I'm gunna miserable...

>> No.47358212

Worst part of Ruri is how she cuts you out of getting a real romance partner desu. Selfish bitch.

>> No.47358231

Xiao is pronounced she-ow with a slightly heavier emphasis on the back and pronounced quickly (not dragged out sheeeee ooooow). Its generally chinese for small but depending on where the accents are (see why americanization is terrible?) it could mean smile shave etc.

>> No.47358259

Can't blame America for that. Chinese is a phonic language and that shit isn't going to translate right into any phonic language.

>> No.47358260


>> No.47358271

>Xiaoxiao (how the fuck do you pronounce that?)

Sh-ow(the ow sound is closer to OUCH!! that hurts than show as in Seinfeld.) Sh(OW)Sh(OW).

>> No.47358277

>any non-phonic language

That shit does terribly with some words (even in English).

>> No.47358291

>Hopefully I can find out the real culprit before she gets herself killed on a solo mission.

I'm assuming you are trying to play it straight, because there are strong hints about who is bullying Chinami in the CYOA itself.

Going off the companion descriptions (and pretty much confirmed if you reference knowledge from the secrets), you already know the bully, regardless of whether you picked them for a social link or not.

>> No.47358312

Plus changing the secrets around is perfectly in line with them being, y'know, secrets. It'd be fitting for people to make ther picks in v2 based on the original secrets only to find out that it's all new stuff.

>> No.47358315

>Not being there for her every second you can
>Not watching her struggle to perform for you one last times despite being barely able to stand
>Not telling her it's okay when she collapses halfway through as she sobs in your arms
>Not holding her hand as she passes on
You're kind of a heartless prick, anon.

so his name is "she-ow-o-she-ow?"

>> No.47358317

I'm Chinese; the tone is a bit off but it's reasonably accurate in this case.

>> No.47358329

Yes. Although it sounds like a nickname.

>> No.47358332

That makes Xiaoxiao Zhao sound pretty goofy. Then again, so does Nana Nanasaki.

>> No.47358336

I don't advise that. It could easily just lead to more fuckups like this. It's better just to fiddle with the secrets people complained about as not being representative of the series.

>> No.47358383

Don't do this, persona bro. Just change the original.

>> No.47358402

Solid reasoning, actually. It fits the observed thought pattern.

>> No.47358413

>Picked Chinami and Xiaoxiao
Holy fucking shit. I dodged about 8 different bullets of varying caliber and shit covered-ness.

>I promise It wont be that bad!
You fucking promised anon. Jesus.

>> No.47358436

Looks neat I'll post a build once I get off work

>> No.47358449

Maybe thats his fetish.

If not for the whole scat and stuff.
I mean the mind breaky rapey dom humiliation bits werent so bad. I'd keep her as a pet. Why cant she just be a naturally repressed pervert like the rest of us?

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>mfw Honoka is literally quoting Hitler.
/pol/ needs to revoke albert's membership if he can't get on her level

>> No.47358482

Okay, I admittedly fucked on on her and Nana. But ~8/10 isn't bad, right?

>> No.47358507

ruri is cheap drama whoring

>> No.47358514

>I mean the mind breaky rapey dom humiliation bits werent so bad.

Yeah, if it were just her fetish and nothing actually happened to her. Being repeatedly raped from the age of 7 is fucking horrific no matter how you look at it.

>> No.47358521

Man this just hyped me more more P5. Also I'm get this out of the way now but
motorcycle girl>Milady>blonde>>>>>>a piece of toast>Glasses girl

I'll read it over after work

>> No.47358526

And definitely out of tone with Persona.

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>> No.47358545

You are susceptible to cheap drama whoring. That's not surprising. It's an effective trick by shitty writers.

Also your waifu is dead.

>> No.47358554

see >>47358315

>> No.47358567

see >>47358545

>> No.47358587
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>Anyone over Poofy Shorts Musketeer

>> No.47358591

Considering that Shijiro from Persona 3 was dying taking Persona suppression drugs, it's not really that bad.

>> No.47358607

And can you explain this position not using the term 'Drama whoring' or other similar terms. Or perhaps provide alternatives.

>> No.47358635

It's just a scenario that's used to easily make someone sad. It doesn't require effort. It doesn't require you to count for people's agency or the randomness of life. It doesn't require you to write a character. Just make someone weak and sad and have them die, receive cheap tears. It's like making your villain eat babies and kick puppies so we'll hate him, it's the low road.

>> No.47358663

And if I could reiterate my asking for alternatives for Ruri?

>> No.47358676

>Okay, I admittedly fucked on on her and Nana.

>But ~8/10 isn't bad, right?
More like 5/10

Isn't much of a secret and it distracts from the mission which could doom humanity. And it just dooms you to be the blunt instrument of some asshole.

People are going to be legitimately upset that she can't actually talk to shadows and is in reality, just a lazy cunt with no real applicable skills

His secret is more stupid than anything else and only is invalidated by the fact that it doesn't impede his usefulness. His money.

It's kinda shit senpai
Real disappointing for a Persona CYOA but hey, you already mentioned that it;s basically a glorifies waifu pick.

>> No.47358701

Considering it's not even hinted in her main profile that she's a walking corpse, you could do literally anything else and it'd make as much sense.

>> No.47358721

>People are going to be legitimately upset that she can't actually talk to shadows and is in reality, just a lazy cunt with no real applicable skills
I will defend this secret. Her persona made it very clear she was lazy and a liar.

>> No.47358753

>betryal is in the description of her persona
>expects her to be useful
I mean it's a good thing she is only useless, i was fully expecting her to actually be harmful traitor or something.

>> No.47358754

Yes, but I'm asking what Alternatives are there, your saying it's a low road, I can see it being such, you say he could do anything else.

So throw something up. I like the concept of this CYOA, and I agree the secrets could use an overhaul, but throw the author a bone here. What could be done?

>> No.47358755

A waifu pick that makes one girl hurt you, one girl raped by packs of men and eats shit, one girl who is a worthless sack of shit and doesn't do anything, one girl that hates you, one girl that just uses you as a lackey, and one girl that just straight up dies.

The only one that works as an actual waifu is Shiho.

>> No.47358818

>It's like making your villain eat babies and kick puppies so we'll hate him, it's the low road.

There's difference between "evil for evil's sake" and the actually tragedy of a life cut short.
Doesn't strike me as an uncreative option, considering it's far more realistic than most of the deaths in P3.
How much character do you expect a guy wring out of a short description in a CYOA? I think he did a perfectly good job characterizing her in the little space he had.
I mean, I got a good enough idea of her to like her enough to pick her.

>> No.47358844

And this is tragedy for tragedy's sake. And it's definitely uncreative, everyone and their grandma has pulled something like this.

Also, you're basically choosing to be a miserable crybaby and watch a girl die for no benefit. You have some kind of weird sadness fetish.

>> No.47358864

Yes, YES I got the yandere and the magician, oh baby, these this is one of the times the mystery boxes actually helped me. YES.

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>> No.47358888
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>implying love is not a benefit

>> No.47358890

This is the kind of yandere that drugs and stabs you to bleed you out for hair dye. Not good.

>> No.47358893

You could always use the one suggested by >>47357634

>> No.47358906

Not that anon but here's my two cents.
Rape as character development is just kinda... Lazy. For one it's not super relatable, only a small percentage of the population will ever be raped and this forms a dissconet. Secondly as far as tramitic pasts go it dosnt work in this character. Example, I have a friend who once fell into a spiders nest and was stuck there with a broken leg for about 2 hours, to this day he gets super fuckin nervous around spiders and holes. Yesterday I choccked on some bread, this morning I had toast. Trauma needs to have a lasting effect otherwise it's just an inconvenience.

Still fine work for your first cyoa don't let any shitstorm stop you from making more!

>> No.47358915

The dead don't love.

>> No.47358933

I don't think anyone in this thread has ever formed a relationship with a physical person they loved that isn't their parents or close relatives.

>> No.47358958
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I don't care!
I got the yandere. I'm happy. This is a good night for me.
I don't give a damn if I died, I chose the devil for fuck sake.

>> No.47358962
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> I have a friend who once fell into a spiders nest and was stuck there with a broken leg for about 2 hours

>> No.47358974
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Jesus fuck...
Who hurt you anon?
I'm too sorry for you to even keep arguing at this point...

>> No.47358976

You're projecting your limitations on others. Not judging you for it, but it bears saying.

>> No.47358983

>Persona: Kali
>Companions: Kaoru Adachi, Honoka Yanagi
I'm not even gonna bother trying to guess at my companinons secrets, since I'd probably get them wrong. I'll just hope they're not too bad.

>> No.47358984
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>Not wanting a strict but caring waifu who's embarrassed by lewd and punches the shit out of bad guys for you

>> No.47358986

>nothing involving crossdressing or becoming a girl

>> No.47358998

>only a small percentage of the population will ever be raped

I mean...not really. I get what you're saying that it's hard to relate to someone who's been raped, without having been raped yourself but I doubt it's really because of this. A lot of people get raped and sexually assaulted in various forms.

>> No.47359000

You talking about Nana?

>> No.47359001

Alright, I've never played a persona game, but let's do this.

The persona choices seem weird to me. Picking Quezalcoatl because a giant flying snake is awesome.

Tough choice between Nana and Jane, but I'm not really into weeaboos, so Nana.
Either Tsukasa or Albert for the guys. I'll probably go with Albert for the money.
Well, I dodged a massive bullet not picking Tsukasa or Jane.
Nana being an obsessive yandere is pretty hot, even if she's using my blood as a hair dye.
I'm not racist, but I don't have that much of a problem with Albert, as long as he's paying me, and doesn't have a problem with someone who has family lines that are both traced back to Ireland. And Nana can protect for when he doesn't.
Pretty happy with my choices. If I had to pick beforehand, I'd probably choose Shiho and Kaoru, Kaoru because a girl with large assets who teases me is nice, and Shiho instead of Nana so Nana won't want to kill Kaoru.

Still very happy with my choices though.

>> No.47359002

Hey. First girl I loved (and loved me back) died. That shit ain't fun. He's got a point you know.

>> No.47359011

>Tower: Cu Chulainn
>Honoka Yanagi, Xiaoxiao Zhao

Welp, that certainly is a lot darker than I was expecting it to be. Maybe I don't know what I'm talking about, but the Social Links in Persona were meant to be likable in one way or another, right? And they were also suppose to be capable of growth beyond their dark secrets, iirc.

Almost all of these characters seem unmanageable as Social Links. Maybe it's just not my cup of tea, as it were.

6/10. I feel bad for complaining, but I suppose that I had some expectations about what a Persona CYOA would be.

Looks nice, though.

>> No.47359015

Dude was like 8 he didn't two shits about that national geographic ass animal fact shit

>> No.47359036

No, not really. Rape has a very narrow definition unless you're a crazy motherfucker who thinks you can be stare-raped.

In most places men can't even be raped in legal terms.

>> No.47359052

Yeah, I'll probably go back to the drawing board at some point.

You make a good point. Especially
>For one it's not super relatable
I think this is the major stumbling point and where I will try to improve later on.

>Still fine work for your first cyoa don't let any shitstorm stop you from making more!
Thanks, anon!

>> No.47359057
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So many nobles that could REALLY use a dragon! There's a place where you can get all sorts! You can buy baby ones to train yourself or adult ones that already have training as mounts, war beasts, aerial transports or all the above! Just send a letter to Lady Ryaxsan and we can negotiate a price and start getting a dragon ready just for you! Or come and visit for awhile and see what we have and what we do! >>47356716


>And I'm really weak, physically, but I have a bunch of shit to earn money from.

If you're looking for something cool to spend some of that money on, a dragon is a great idea for any noble to own! They're great conversation starters, mounts, and guards!


>Most of my combat forces have been redirected to assist the ruler of Myst

Dragons make powerful and terrifying war beasts!


>Equal parts pleasure ship, merchant hauler, and war galleon...while I'm out gallavanting at sea I haven't kept up with the news that they're apparently heading for war with

Dragon fire does truly horrible things to wooden ships! A dragon could be really helpful for intimidating or attacking hostile ships, or you could even fly it around to scout! Very useful for your oceanborne adventures! You don't have much money!? Well at since you're an adventurous merchant, perhaps we could work something out.


>Join a rebellion of course!

What could help in a rebellion more than a dragon! They're very frightening and terribly deadly!

>> No.47359070

Major stumbling point is that it doesn't really feel like Persona imho. For a lot of them, but especially for someone getting gang raped. Also this anon >>47359011 makes good points.

>> No.47359078

Sexual assault =/= rape the same way that assult =/= murder. Rape is the extreme. And no ones been consesistently extreme since the 90s

>> No.47359090

Come on, have some faith in your fellow anon.
I'm sure some of us have had actual relationships.
Hell maybe even long term romantic ones!
I agree.
Both that rape is more of a shock value attempt than actual character development.
And that anon should just learn from the feedback hidden in the shitposting and keep trying!
For a first attempt, this is still pretty good.
I expect great things from you.

>> No.47359137 [SPOILER] 
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Some people like different things.
I like poofy shorts.
I will not apologize for that.

>> No.47359159
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Resposting the poorly written CYOA fron last thread.

>> No.47359163

>For a first attempt, this is still pretty good.
>I expect great things from you.
this ~desu. author, putting persona in the title creates a lot of expectations, but this is definitely not terrible for a first-time cyoa. you have good design aesthetic, too. please keep at it.

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>men rape simply by walking by you

>> No.47359195

Design wise, it's definitely nice. First and second pages are okay for sure.

It's the third one where it falls apart, and it's mostly from crappy twists in a few characters. One can definitely do worse of course, but yeah. But secrets always end in shit no matter how experienced.

>> No.47359201

>can't feel sorry for rape victims unless you've been raped yourself
>what is empathy

>> No.47359214
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>He alone, who owns the youth, gains the future.
Real subtle, guy.

>> No.47359248

I'm aware, it just seems like an exceptionally bleak and sad way to look at the matter.
The dead loved and most were loved in turn.
Them being dead doesn't change or devalue that.
I'll concede that "terminal waifu" is a bit cliche, but I maintain that it's not something that if done fairly well, as I think it is here, is any less tragic and heartbreaking.
Just my opinion on the whole thing, though.
And I'm a giant fucking pussy so I'm pretty biased.
I still can't watch movies where pets die.

>> No.47359251

I never said that. I countered anon's post saying 'most people get raped'.

>> No.47359279

I was replying more to the conversation than your specific post. Hopefully neither of us needs to get worked up over this error in judgement.

>> No.47359310
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So here's a powerup system I drummed up while on a walk today.

Trouble is, I haven't got a setting or narrative to go with it.

>> No.47359317

I personally thought it played to the trope too much. She was brought back from the dead. The only possible secrets would be she's still dying, she is dead and just reanimated, she is getting taken over by the persona.

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>> No.47359356

Hey, /cyoag/, what was that mystery CYOA from a while ago that generated a shit ton of discussion? The one where you pick a school to go back to and pick friends and powers? I know that's exceedingly vague, but it's worth a shot.

>> No.47359370
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>motorcycle girl>Milady>blonde>>>>>>a piece of toast>Glasses girl

While I don't agree with the latter ranking. Biker girl is my fucking waifu and I applaud your good taste sir.

>> No.47359395

benefits commander, baron, noble and sorcery

kingdoms ell

>> No.47359410

>men rape simply by walking by you

Who said this?

>> No.47359416
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Forgot pic

>> No.47359418

As one smart anon once said
>Implying picking thunder twice won't instakill everyone
>Implying the target can't be the ground or enemy's sword.

>> No.47359451

Basically every feminist.

>> No.47359459

So no-one at all that exists outside of your head. Got it.

>> No.47359461

All Access pass, even just taking it once is insanely good.

So i'll take that, and the space ship. Eventually I should be able to get access to it.

And make america great again without trump or bernie! Fusion power, ho!

>> No.47359471
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I'm trying really hard not start derailing this thread with waifu war for a game that isn't even out yet, but you guys are making it really hard for me...
Why are there no Noirbros in this thread?
I'm so lonely...

>> No.47359487

Unfortunately, I have. Thanks for bringing it up.

>> No.47359492

>>only a small percentage of the population will ever be raped
>I mean...not really.
Right anon, probably 30, 40% of people, maybe more, get raped. A large proportion, not a small one. 25% at the very minimum. A majority as likely as not.

>> No.47359495

Is this the same guy who made the hunter cyoa?

>> No.47359506

>Kaoru's secret is being a girl
Well that's ni-
>A girl who's so lazy she wasted valuable Shadow-fighting time on bullshit 'diplomacy'
O-oh. Well, maybe Honoka's better?
>She wants me to act as her right hand in some dumbass school coup, to the outright detriment of fighting the Shadows

Guess we're fucked, then.

>> No.47359527

Are you implying that feminist aren't real, Anonymous? Why do you hate women? Why are you oppressing me?

>> No.47359537
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>> No.47359539

It's quite the feat of wisdom to read "you may pick two" as "you may pick one twice". Nevermind how double-Thunder constitutes any sort of instant death.

No idea what that second greentext refers to.

>> No.47359549

If only feminists were but a dream, if only!

>> No.47359612

I've done business with Rahai in the past but given their excellent relations with Aurendal I don't think they'll be too interested in harboring an active combatant in somebody else's war. I couldn't afford a bribe like that in my current state. No, it's a life of constant high seas action for me and my crew. Risking it all for the chance to score big off the war.

And I must assure you that I participated in no illegal or aggressive actions prior to war breaking out. However, now that we are in this mess I would be very happy and proud to receive a letter of marque from my home kingdom. Though ultimately my goal was total independence I cannot deny my blood, and I doubt the Aurendal admirals will either.

Also, kind of related, but I've been thinking about the stat arrays. The way I view it, and I think your statements support this, is that the stats represent your current assets and net worth at the time of actual character creation. But your decisions and especially your Benefit choices represent your potential for growth. I absolutely adore when CYOAs imply not only a storied past but also a future for your character as long as you can imagine it. Of course almost any adventure is only the beginning to something greater but there's something about Kingdom Diplomacy, Royal Revival, and their ilk that sort of gives room for the mechanics to sort of continue playing a role after you've finished the game. I don't know if I'm explaining this well at all, but it also plays into what >>47357755 said. Low in assets but with a lot of value in the future.

You've successfully highlighted why I very much do not want a dragon on board my vessel. There's a lot of power there but also a lot of risk and I don't want to give Aurendal a reason to start carrying dragons of their own. Plus, where's the profit in burning down enemy ships? I want the men, their cargo, the hull, all of it!.

>> No.47359618

I think man can still get raped in most countries in the world. It's just that it requires them to get anally penetrated in some places.

>> No.47359621
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>current year
>confusing your imaginary boogeymen for things that exist in reality.

>> No.47359661

It's not rape if the rapist says "No homo" afterwards.

>> No.47359663

Go to your local university and ask around.

>> No.47359669

>wake up
>discover there are no feminists
>it was all a dream!
I'd be so relieved I wouldn't even be angry.

I'd write a book about the fantasy. A trashy one, or a cheap comic. It wouldn't be believable or enjoyable as a serious story.

>> No.47359697 [DELETED] 

If you're still around, what's the 'Bad Ending' scenario for this CYOA? As in killing that guy in Persona 3, or throwing that guy into the TV in Persona 4.

>> No.47359724
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>Feminism isn't real!
I have no problem with the way this thread turned out

>> No.47359741

Plenty of them use words like 'vagina' and 'woman' in the legal definition of rape that prevents even that from counting, though. It's pretty disgusting.

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>still has yet to name a single person who has seriously claimed that men walking on the same streets as a woman is raping her.

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>> No.47359786

>get raped
>get charged with sodomy

>> No.47359803

Or penetrated specifically by a penis, meaning that while men can be raped, women can't be rapists.

>> No.47359811

If you're still around, what's the 'Bad Ending' for this CYOA? As in killing that guy in Persona 3, or throwing that guy into the TV in Persona 4.

>> No.47359820

Even if she uses anon's cactus as a dildo on his ass.

>> No.47359836

I never said that and I'm not either of the other posts you're replying to and I don't know why you thought I did or am.

>> No.47359842

Go to jezebel or your local college campus, or facebook and find the right groups.
Then kill yourself.

>> No.47359855
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>Rape became an expression of how the average man viewed the average woman.
- from part 1 of "The New Mythology of Rape: Politicizing Women's Pain" by Wendy McElroy

>> No.47359873

Dawkins elevator

>> No.47359887

So how is:
>Rape became an expression of how the average man viewed the average woman.

the same as:

Also what was the context for the quote?

>> No.47359911

Are you dense?

>> No.47359937

>Rape is not a personal misfortune but an experience shared by all women in one form or another.
- New York Radical Feminists Manifesto

>> No.47359938

>Go to jezebel
s/he probably writes for it.

>> No.47359950

He's not dense anon, probably bored and curious how deep this rabbit hole of stupidity actually goes.

>> No.47359974

>The act of rape is merely the logical expression of the essential relationship now existing between men and women.
- "Rape: The First Sourcebook for Feminists" by Mary Ann Manhart (p. 215 if anyone cares)

>> No.47359977


Definition of a strawman:

>The straw man fallacy occurs in the following pattern of argument:

>Person 1 asserts proposition X.
Person 2 argues against a superficially similar proposition Y, falsely, as if an argument against Y were an argument against X.
This reasoning is a fallacy of relevance: it fails to address the proposition in question by misrepresenting the opposing position.

Neither of those quotes are even alluding to:

You're literally just quoting random feminists without context and expecting me to make strange leaps based on limited--not even that-- no information.

>> No.47360001

She's a feminist, so yes.

>> No.47360019

And you're just some random person shitposting on the internet on a Friday night.

>> No.47360029

>direct quote
Ah yes the good old "even if you repeat what we say it's also a strawman"
Bro, stop.

>> No.47360032

>Angel jumps to defend feminism

>> No.47360047

You mean Monster Hunter? Yeah I made that too.

>> No.47360054

Glad to see you guys couldn't even wait till autosage to sperg out about some stupid fucking bullshit.

>> No.47360071

You were asked to do a simple thing:

>name a single person who has seriously claimed that men walking on the same streets as a woman is raping her.

None of you have done this.

You have only taken specific quotes from a random assortment of feminists, utterly without context and then expected me to completely misrepresent their arguments based on, again, only one sentence that isn't even the one asked of you.

>> No.47360085

People were predicting that the persona mystery boxes would be the doom of the thread. They were mistaken.

>> No.47360086

At this point, Angelanon's schtick is so well known and her posting style so provalent and builds so fucking reposted, anyone can be Angelanon.

>> No.47360099

see >>47359873

>> No.47360103

You're retarded anon, just like everyone else said. Not for the reasons they said, though. But because you act like you expect people here to approach the concept of feminism with anything other that false preconceptions and memes. I would prefer it if you could not shit up a thread I enjoy so that you can get your jollies from a bunch of idiots responding idiotically to your idiocy.

>> No.47360112
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I'm not arguing against anything, merely providing factual context.

Your claim that I am? That actually /is/ a strawman.

>> No.47360122

If it pisses you off so much I'll see what I can do about starting it even earlier in future.

>> No.47360134

>providing factual context.

Of what? With what?

Fair enough.

She never claimed to have been raped, just that she was made uncomfortable by the encounter.

>> No.47360140

I think they're retarded for ignoring quotes, personally. You have to be a special kind of shit to do that.

>> No.47360167
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>Your claim that I am? That actually /is/ a strawman.

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>You have only taken one sentence long quotes from a random assortment of feminists, utterly without context; then you expected me to completely misrepresent their arguments based on, again, only one sentence that wasn't even the one asked of you.

What else should I have done?

>> No.47360207

So now that I have posted the energy cyoa >>47355901 , I think I should work on some other ideas I have. So, which of these sounds better:
>Political Party cyoa
>Four horsemen cyoa
>My take on a seven sins/virtues cyoa
>Powers cyoa
>HUD cyoa
>My take on a Mage cyoa


>> No.47360214

>But because you act like you expect people here to approach the concept of feminism with anything other that false preconceptions and memes.
No, they expect people here to approach feminism from their false perception of it being a holy scripture.

They don't genuinely expect that, they simply wish to present themselves as though they do in order to create the impression that by questioning it they are deviating from holy word.

>> No.47360253


Honoka will make this world great again

>> No.47360267

Fucked off and died, for one.

>> No.47360297

The last time feminism got its shit together and applied itself, alcohol became prohibited and that was quickly repealed because everyone soon realized it was a really stupid to prohibit something so profitable instead of taxing it.

>> No.47360315

>>Political Party cyoa
For which country? If it's for a generic, fantasy or alternate timeline country, fuck yes! If it's for mine, yes please. If it's for any other country, well, still better than the other five.

>> No.47360320

That could be really interesting. Color me intrigued

>> No.47360323
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Why don't you show us all how with a live demonstration?

>> No.47360348

>but the context
Anon, the context is that in the feminist lens these authors are proposing everything in this "masculine society" is rape, opression, a form of humiliation and dehumanization of women.

If I say "dogs usually have fur" you don't need context because it's a self encapsulated statement.
Fuck off.

>> No.47360353

Not expect anons to post the entire manifesto for you when the quotes are self-evident in their meaning.

>> No.47360361

It's actually non of those. What I had in mind was a cyoa where you formed your own political party, and describe how you would fix any of several common scenarios mentioned (Global Warming, National Debt, etc.)

Though, now that I mention it, it does seem a little idiotic. Will still try and do it, though.

>> No.47360373

>a live demonstration
>of having died in the past
After all your shit about pronouns I shouldn't be surprised feminists can't into grammar, but just ignoring tense is a new low.

>> No.47360376

Shit, meant to say none instead of non.

>> No.47360429

>The act of rape is merely the logical expression of the essential relationship now existing between men and women.

>Rape is not a personal misfortune but an experience shared by all women in one form or another.

Self evident in that these quotes == women are raped when a man walks down the same street as them? Come on now.

They're not proposing that. The first one claims that men view women a certain way and that this leads to rape. The other's claim is a tad vague though I assume she means that the act of rape degrades a society in such a way that it's effects are felt by all women.

Neither of which are == women are raped when men walk down the same street as them. Unless you consider strawmen valid counterarguments.

>> No.47360433

Oh fuck me, how comes all of my choices were just plain horrible...

>> No.47360444

I thought that may be what you meant, and the question still stands: would my party be for a generic modern country, an imaginary country, or what?

I'm still saying yes, very yes.

Anthropocentric climate change is a myth though. Make sure the CYOA works for parties that are aware of that.

>> No.47360473

I'm sorry you missed out on futa NTR...

>> No.47360475

I can just imagine it now.

>"Global ocean levels are rising due to global climate change what do we do?"

>"We most offer a worthy blood sacrifice to appease the Sun God of course! 1000 virgin shotas would do nicely for this fiscal year, steadily increasing to 10000 and 1000000 in the next two fiscal years to adjust for population size and diminish returns of divine miracles on our sacrificial investments."

>> No.47360493

Generic Modern is where it is at. Though this cyoa may take some time since there is a point system for spending on benefits and I still need to balance price with usefulness, might post a rough draft and let the other anons offer advice.

>> No.47360494


/cyoag/ can't into science...?!

>> No.47360506

Thank you for the kind words by the way! I'm glad others have an interest in the world and its lore. And yes, your stats represent your power level at the moment. When you buy kingdom rewards they won't just vanish, they will just aid the ruler and kingdom, which is why they see fit to reward you.
Thank you for the kind words by the way! I'm glad others have an interest in the world and its lore. And yes, your stats represent your power level at the moment. When you buy kingdom rewards they won't just vanish, they will just aid the ruler and kingdom, which is why they see fit to reward you.

But really, Rahai attempts to keep anyone safe as long as its in their territory. Especially a customer like yourself.
Your dragons are truly a terrifying sight, but I'm afraid I have diplomatic obligations. However, I am sure I have a few clients in the frostlands who may be interested, if you allow me to fence your dragons, Madam Ryaxsan.

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>Nobody wants to buy dragons because they're to dangerous;_;

*rants at advisers*
We live in a Godforsaken mountain range! Our only resource is dragons! The only reason I'm able to be a Noble Lady of both Tusk and Caer is because they LITERALLY DON'T REMEMBER WHAT KINGDOM WE BELONG TO! They don't even care enough to fight over us as long as we keep the dragons under control and keep slaughtering barbarians! We need to find a way to make this profitable. My newest ideas a forming a dragon riding mercenary company owned by me or selling dragon steaks. Brainstorm on this. I want well thought out plans at the end of the week!

>> No.47360540

>Climate change debate.

No. Please no. We already had one completely unrelated debate, /cyoag/ is not the place to determine wether or not man is responsible for or even capable of causing climate change. Just move on, folks.

That political party CYOA is gonna destroy this general...

>> No.47360550

hot cocoa generator and lovely dreams. They both sound pretty rad. permanent soft and fluffy blankets, relaxing dreams, perfect cocoa, what's not to love?

>> No.47360556


Typed >>47360515 up before you posted that lol. Glad to hear there's clients in the frostlands. Maybe we won't have to resort to selling dragon steaks!

>> No.47360557

Mobile why you do this.

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>> No.47360569

I was just baiting desu, it's all good.

>> No.47360572

Maybe I should hold off on it, then. At least until I get a few more cyoas out.

>> No.47360577

>Four horsemen cyoa
Sounds cool, and I don't think anybody's done it before.

>> No.47360582

>might post a rough draft and let the other anons offer advice.
I am excited. Looking forward to it!

On the contrary, you can look forward to high scientific accuracy on issues like drugs, medicine, eugenics, agriculture, energy, GMOs and fisheries.

>> No.47360603

>no one believes that
Except for the women who claim everything is rape?
It's literally common knowledge that it became a trend to say shit that isn't rape is rape, you fucking mong. Just get the fuck out and go back to your cave

>> No.47360608

>lending money to Israel is a negative
>says no useful allies right after talking about investing in Israel

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Israel uses your money to sabotage you

>> No.47360623
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I was partially inspired by this cyoa. That being said, I am not adding it as part of this cyoa for several reasons.

>> No.47360624

If every masculine associate activity and thought is fabricated from the desire to rape women, than nobody is a rapist.

>> No.47360635

Do it if you want to. /cyoag/ can handle a few shitstorms, and who the hell knows, people might glide over it without a hitch.

It fits the pattern of people throwing shitfits over the most minor of things. when you get something that should cause problems, I bet it simply wont.

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>Doesn't post a single source
>implies others are stupid for not uncritically accepting his claims as truth

>> No.47360641

Unless you're the creator I can't assume the CYOA is completely unrealistic in ways it doesn't explicitly say it is.

>> No.47360644

I'm TRYING to understand why someone would choose Captain Communism

>> No.47360649

>Agitates the middle east

>> No.47360657

Congratulations on being in touch with reality.

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>/cyoag/ can handle a few shitstorms.
While I do agree with you on that, I personally don't want to cause a shitstorm just yet. Mostly because I'm still surprised the first time I caused a shitstorm. pic related

>> No.47360679

When faced with the choice between going red or dying, they chose to be cowards.

>> No.47360681

What's this, a DLC? Hello there Captain Islamism!

>> No.47360684

well being able to predict things in advance even minorly is fucking bullshitingly powerful

>> No.47360690

I'll grab the pen. In the meanwhile I've been filling in the missing elemental Domains:

- Flense (animate fleshless remains - skeletons, shells, fossils)

-Outred (walk through the wrong side of doors to enter an underworld of bugged portals, break a mirror to shatter reality)

(also I missed Iron's fluff description, that's an old version - current is "The Undying Nucleus")

>> No.47360697

I am just going to continue to ignore the shitposting
Dragon steaks? I'm sure I can find clients for that too. But perhaps we can make a more profitable deal with when they are alive. And I am quite interested in your fashion, who made your garmets and is he open for commission work?

If that'll be all, then I will leave my assistant to handle all the details, including a downpayment. Excuse me, I have a volatile situation to handle in Seille.

>> No.47360699

>people post sources
>nuh uh it's not what they mean, I know what they mean even if I complain there is no context because of my magical interpretation :^))))))
>if I post a video or a link to an article
How do you expect me to give a shit?
I'll just call you out and let you fuck off on your own..

>> No.47360700


Post it now!


As soon as you have even the most basic draft!

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>Completely unrealistic
Yes, its impossible that the American-Israeli is this harmful

Both Captain Nazism and Freedom are coming for you, and Captain Freedom is undoubtedly resistant to your powers.
What are you going to do, use your powers to fucking flee?

>> No.47360719

The most basic draft is almost half done, though it has no descriptions and is basically as bare bones as it gets. Will post it either next thread or the thread after, though.

>> No.47360722

>Rape is nothing more or less than a conscious process of intimidation by which all men keep all women in a state of fear.

- "Against Our Will" by Susan Brownmiller, p. 6

>> No.47360734

Oh, dragons are cool don't get me wrong. If I had anything other than a pile of fancy kindling to my name I'd be very interested in your offer.

>> No.47360739

That was you?

Look, anon is a faggot. he always has been and he always will be. Never make plans based on anon being calm, rational, or letting things be as they will be. He will freak about anything, and probably over what you thought couldn't possibly cause drama, like your pic related.

If you think the idea has merit, do it, and to hell with how anon reacts.

>> No.47360742

>I am just going to continue to ignore the shitposting
When your post appeared among all the rather different ones, I grinned. I almost gave you a reply asking your opinion on one part of it or another, but decided against it. I thought we'd only end up disagreeing and I didn't want to think you were a dick. Then you went and said that without me even needing to bring it up or ask you to take sides.

>> No.47360756

Further I've also revised the point's system:

4 Origin Points

1 Origin Point can be converted into 3 Element Points or 8 Power Points

Power Points without any Element Points only grant forms of Telekinesis

Element Point without Power Points only allow weak phenomena (light breezes, making a constellation seem brighter)

Thus the various starting point values:

32 Power Points
24 Power Points 3 Element Points
16 Power Points 6 Element Points
8 Power Points 9 Element Points
12 Element Points

>> No.47360760

>use your powers to flee
well considering anyone under 1 million net worth is so helpful...yea.

and while i flee i can fuck both of their countries over or even make my own country, hell if i destroyed the entire idea of "net worth" and "currency" by annihilating economies the power broadens to "people are more inclined to trust/help you"

>> No.47360766

Political Party cyoa is a nice idea but how can getting your gender swapped be included?

>> No.47360795

Okay, I'll do it. As I said in >>47360719 , I will post what I have by next thread or the one after. It will be a rough draft, so it will likely be shit and still in need of ironing out.

>> No.47360814


Sun would be my actual arcana most likely, so Quetzalcoatl.

I'd take Albert because MONEY is the best power, but if we have the same persona, that's just friggen awkward. (You should give the companions their own separate personas of the same arcana, imo)

So... Jane and Kaoru then.

*Double takes* Wait, his name is Adachi!?
Welp, this might not end well.

Not much to this CYOA really. May as well check those secrets:

Could be worse DESU. Looks like I wound up with two girls. Fuck Igor's rules. First of all, dodged a bullet not taking Albert, being a mixed race mutt.

Jane is probably a few ticks too deep into /d/ territory for me, but that's a non-issue as a team-mate rather than a waifu. So she's still the most compitent person to have my back in the actual fights and we could be bros regardless. Fuckbuddies even, if she can hold off on the end-grade fetishes like scat. Still plenty of weird shit still on the table though.

Kaoru on the other hand...

I don't need to bribe her, I just need to chain her up and let Jane have some quality alone time with her if she's not cooperative. If Kaoru's useless as a teammate the least she could do is fill in as Jane's mindbreak pet, right?

>> No.47360830

>How can getting your gender swapped be included?
It won't. While I understand some anons like that, it is not something I want to make in this cyoa.

>> No.47360835

Goddamn it, I keep forgetting about the desu auto-filter.

>> No.47360846


Captain Commie might be effective, provided he plays to his strengths of avoiding direct conflict with the other captains while formenting a communist revolution.

He might be able to keep his backers from becoming immune to his community ray by seizing all property in the name of the communist property as supreme leader of the glorious revolution.

Of course, if he does succeed, he faces the dilemma faces by all communist leaders: attempt to see if the communist utopia is even possible given human nature, or succumb to human nature and keep all power for himself.

>> No.47360847

I am neither interested nor informed to give a reasonable opinion. But it is kind of clogging up the thread, yeah.

>> No.47360899

Throw me a bone anon! It could be an option to win the female or progressive vote. Or maybe a drawback that gives extra points because it puts off some demographics. Think of the possibilities, anon.

>> No.47360901


I'd very much prefer to keep them alive to, but I have to make a living! My people can get with your people and we'll work out a price for however many live dragons you need! You like my clothes?! Well I happen to know a great designer in Caer who I'm sure would appreciate your business and custom make whatever you desire. Please let him know I sent you his way! And good luck in Seille! Just send a letter if you need a dragon or two down there!


I understand. Stay in touch and let me know if your situation changes. A dragon would be good for burning a hostile port or intimidating a small island nation!

>> No.47360944


Yep. She's already your classmate, is well known to just about everyone since her picture is plastered all over the place, and she has a habit of being around you and doing things for you for no (seemingly) good reason.

Since this is all in her companion description, it's nothing secret. It even mentions that you notice her being quite upset when Nana sees you talking with Shiho.

And then if you read Nana's secret, yandere nature gets proven, beyond a doubt.

>> No.47360947

>Pro-Commie poster is also pro-feminist poster
What a surprise.

>> No.47360964

If this were true, imagine how quickly a man could gain power with one of those "gain power through the spread of a particular emotion" CYOAs.

>> No.47360965

Well, when you put it that way, there maybe a place for it. Not a huge chance, but maybe.

>> No.47360973

Do you want (you) pictures or are you content to live in your fantasy land?

>> No.47361003

And is also "Lady Ryaxsan" who is also somebody else we know.

>> No.47361042

Based creator
>Fetishists: 1 "maybe"
>Cisgenders: 0

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>> No.47361076

>replying to yourself

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Cyoa maker here, you're right that Captain Commie is a more indirect type.
He's the guy who stays in the background brewing a shitstorm by moving the right pieces in their respective places.

So what else should I add?

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>> No.47361136

Since this seems like a joke cyoa, how about Captain Planet (EPA). Could that work?

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That isn't me! I stayed out of this argument cuz I'm having fun pretending to be a Merchant Princess and trying to sell dragons to the other nobles.

>> No.47361168

Captain Zionism's drawbacks don't make any sense! Israeli girls are hot and big breasted, not cartoon hunchbacks, and a more realistic drawback would be Captain Freedom fucking with you and helping Captain Islamism, not the other way around!

Also, Captain Islamism's flag should be white on green and Captain Anarchism's should be red and black.

>> No.47361171

Captain Hippie?

>> No.47361188

Sure, why not?

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Is this some sort of irony or not

>> No.47361201

>white on green
I was trying to be fast so since the paki flag was too small I went with the red one.
>red on black
I'll recolour both regardless.

>not cartoon hunchbacks
You're not the embodiement of all israelis, you're the manifestation of Zionism.

>> No.47361203

>Why do I want to bully and dominate cute boys?
Because you have good taste?

>Mfw I picked Yanagi for basically this reason

>> No.47361233

>So what else should I add?
Captain Imperialism, based on the 1800's British Empire.

The file doesn't need to be so big either. It should be way smaller.

Covered by Captain Communism.

>> No.47361283

>you're the manifestation of Zionism.
What better representation of Zionism than a hot IDF girl?

>> No.47361413

That's bullshit and you know it, 'greatest ally'.

>> No.47361433

>'greatest ally'
But I'm Captain Freedom!

>> No.47361503

The thing is, after all that moving around and positioning it's really only one identity. Whatever goes on with the Double Identity magic on top of my natural personality. The Ouroboros, Kaliph, and Ell all know me as the same person, who is basically the same person I was back in Miragus with a fresh coat of paint. Oh there's a lot of duplicity and proper spycraft going on but the best part, the real art of it all, is that they all know I'm a spy! Well, not so much Ell but they know I'm a barbaric foreigner who isn't to be trusted. And yet they are interested in me nonetheless. It's a very handy position to be in.

The hard part is managing my Kaliph spy ring from the other side of the world and keeping my turncoats, liars, dead drops, and ciphers running smoothly for three different spy organizations. A lot of passing myself a message then lazily leaving it somewhere for an enemy agent to discover and think he stole it from me. Plus the diplomatic nonsense in Ell. The lying and duplicity is easy enough but I'm not so much a fan of dealing with their parties and balls.

I think my end goal is as follows. Miragus decides that they want Kaliph fighting with another nation so a fellow Covert Order agent infiltrates, say, Aurendal. Then they lazily disguise themself as an Ell attendant, "kill" me, and then are "killed" in the immediate aftermath. Body doubles, illusion magic, faking death, something along those lines. Now mistrust is sown between Ell and Kaliph but more importantly Kaliph knows that Aurendal sent someone to kill their diplomat. That's something that can build up to war. Meanwhile, as a dead man, I'm free of my immediate obligations. The Matron will want to reel me in eventually but in the short term I'd seek out the Order of Shadow to complement my skills even further and then learn Magecraft in Arcania to improve my sorcery. I'd need more money first, unfortunately.

>> No.47361511

I have no idea what this Evan is

power 2
constitution 2
motor 2
coordination 2
ticker 2
sense 2
system 2
frame 2
might 1
intellect 1
dexterity 1
rationale 1
physique 2
mentality 2
iron blood
star constella
angel smite

>> No.47361532

>no option to become a girl
>no Captain Transgenderism

That would cover the first one.

>> No.47361534

I already love your CYOAs. You don't need to pander to my fetish for reasonability and lack of shitposting as well.

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>Alexander Fehr
>Abilities: Physical Strength, Durability, Determination, Fast Adaptations, Survival Training, Combat Training

I will act as I did in life: as a soldier fighting the good fight. And indeed I fight the good fight, for there is no greater master than Onii-sama. As I did for my country, I will protect Onii-sama with my life.

>> No.47361565

I am captain freedom

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>> No.47361671

More updates. Ticker is renamed Cortex, and Sense is renamed Detect. The first two Iron powers are renamed "Forge" and "Sanguine" respectively.

- Horizon (marks trapping/information-destroying boundaries)

I'd presume it's some guy called Evan. Impeccable humour aside, it's a model for granting powers that currently exists outside a quest or narrative of any sort. Updates are floating around the thread with new powers, points options and renames.

You've spent too few points by the way. You assign points exclusively to the finest stat points (ie Pow, Con, Mot, Coo, Cor, Det, Sys, Fra), then just add those together to get the middle and higher stages. Not that it really matters anyway, given the perfectly even stat build you've gone with.

>> No.47361685

Please do not respond to the amazing no-reply anon.

>> No.47361714

Addendum: You'll be a good looking genderbent version, even with the physical issues that come from the other choices.

Addendum 2: You can also just pick Captain Transgender and nothing else, so just genderbend and get done with it.

Fucking slutanons.

>> No.47361732

But the only way for the AI to learn is if we interact with it!

>> No.47361737

You actually did it you absolute madpersyn

>> No.47361779

That would be one hell of an AI, to crack the content of a png image and the context in which it was made enough to participate but still mispell even. Someone telephone Big Yud, hot damn.

>> No.47361789

Anon who suggested Captain Imperialism here, it's hilarious. Loved the Islam bit. You missed out on including cockney and limes though.

Please, though, "subjects" not "servants".

Also there's a line break in the first power that shouldn't be there.

>> No.47361807

So how do I roll for this?http://i.imgur.com/bkIYWtG.png

>> No.47361829

Never underestimate shitposternet.

>> No.47361875

That one is set up all kinds of retarded.

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>> No.47361910

Yes. It's great!

>> No.47361968

New one: >>47361960

>> No.47362040

Igor! You're alive again!

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enemies demons, outsiders and illuminati

perk berzerker
companion the slayer
enchantrd pistols upgrade II
symbio suit upgrade II
gear warbow and tactical grenade

>> No.47362191

All access pass sounds cool but there's no guarantee you won't get fucked by lack of passports or not being able to check stuff while inside important facilities.

>> No.47362230

This might be the English Igor. I don't think he's dead yet.

>> No.47362310

persona orobas the magician
companion shiho nanasaki

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Guy who made Waifu Secret here. It's a rough business, this sort of thing, but must say, god fucking dammit why'd I have to pick Jane.

>> No.47362447

Not as bad as about two of the girls you made, but worse than the rest of them.

>> No.47362468

Now I breathe forever

source water
perks immortality

>> No.47362487

Thanks bud.

>> No.47362893

Bunny is a murderous whore.

Fremy a best.

>> No.47362912

>Not having a fetish for broken girls with terrible pasts

>> No.47362937

>Having a fetish for the entire government's bicycle who is now into scat.

>> No.47362988

QUADs checked

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