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All word and pixel /tg/-related lewdness is welcome here, so long as the rules are followed. Writefags, consider pastebin/1d4chan rather than dumping for long stories. Drawfags with uncensored pictures need to host their images offsite and link to them. For those of you visiting from other boards, err on the side of censorbars and spoilers if you're hesitant.

People especially appreciate it when you give them meaningful feedback and criticism, so make sure to do so. It's easy and both writefags and drawfags will love you for it.

In any case, enjoy! Remember to play nice and that all contributions and requests are welcome!

>> No.33186826 [DELETED] 

1st for you're fetish is a shit.

>> No.33186844

DISCLAIMER: While these threads are quite tolerant of many different forms of /d/eviancy, you can't just assume that everyone will automatically share your kinks. There's nothing explicitly preventing you from talking about your fetishes, but if someone has one that you dislike, please do not derail the thread with a flamewar- there's plenty of smut for everybody here.

Master smut list:
http://pastebin.com/JbeDnCAP
(/a/'s monstergirl fic collection is in here too.)

Smut list, 1d4chan edition:
http://1d4chan.org/wiki//tg/%27s_Smut_Index

A guide to constructive criticism, because "Your writing/artwork sucks" doesn't help anyone get better at it.

http://pastebin.com/1s1fLktL

Need some help coming up with something to write? Here's a few requests that haven't been filled yet.

http://pastebin.com/4VAN7gY3

>> No.33186954

>>33186794
This really should have been Freedom edition.

>> No.33186986 [DELETED] 

>>33186826
your*

>> No.33187062
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33187062

linking the two stories ive written so far.

The Fall of Marxus IV pt1

(40k howlingbansheeXguardsman, Oral/male,Oral/female, memory sharing, bloodlicking, mindcontrol, doggystyle, earplay)

>http://pastebin.com/SjVXqEfn
The Seeds of Chaos pt2

(40k, eldar guardianXspace marine, brutal sex, blood licking, memory scrying, oral vaginal, begging, sensory overload)

>http://pastebin.com/qRqa7JQw

>> No.33187081

>>33187062
two thousand words into the third story. ive had fun writing it so far

>> No.33187094

>>33186954
I'm not a US citizen so it didn't occur to me

>> No.33187122
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33187122

>>33187062
>>33187081
also, ill be back later to answer any questions people have

>> No.33187139

>been unable to focus on writing a story cuz my sexual mood has changed like every 3 seconds

>> No.33187143

So who wants more evil wizard x Kobold m/m story I started last week.

>> No.33187188

This is up rather early. Not that I'm complaining.

New story up. It's hella short and ends on another cliffhanger for the unlucky main character.

The Mermaid Malefactor
>http://pastebin.com/vK6VXxLr

tags: mermaid, breathplay, reluctant male, rape

>> No.33187196

1d4chan not working for anyone else?

>> No.33187210

H&A 20 http://pastebin.com/Ef64Gvkr
Tags: Villainous Male Knight/Virtuous Female Squire reverse-trap, non-consensual oral

Also H&A Dramatis Personae http://pastebin.com/PpYcwbFr

Next thread can be ">Not Freedom Edition" Edition.

>> No.33187220

Requesting a smutty retelling of the American revolution with national personifications.

>> No.33187308

>>33187094
A fair amount of people here seem to be Eurofags.

>>33187196
It was working just fine right until now. Maybe they're doing maintanance or something. No matter- the pastebin still works at least. And on that note, I should get to work adding stuff to it now.

>> No.33187549

Ooh, early thread! Cool! How's everyone doing?

I'm almost afraid to show up here.

>> No.33187563
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>>33186794
I am currently writing a story about an evil kobold lady and a gnoll woman who hire out their thuggish services in a shady port city.
The kobold gets the gnoll drunk and tortures/teases her breasts until she admits she likes it an begs for more.

Is this dangerously furry for these threads? I don't read them often.

>> No.33187588

>>33187563

Eh, nah, we like the staple monsters from the D&D books in our stories. Plus, it's only as furry/scaly as you actually describe in the story...

>> No.33187610

>>33187563
We have several stories of human guys fucking normal normal dragons. Hell, since Iron Claw is a thing you could have a story of just anthro animals fucking.

>> No.33187612

Last weekend I lamented the fact I did not have time to finish a certain story in time for that thread to sage. But I decided that I would finish this damn thing despite going on vacation, and get it posted here for this weekend anyway. The upside is that I had time for a couple more rewrites and corrections.

So here it is. I'm still writing as anonymous because I haven't figured out a good smut-writername.

Fetishes/tags:
Transformation, transgender, age reduction, consensual, bisexuality, elves, D&D

Enjoy. Or hate.

http://pastebin.com/371b7PTk

>> No.33187645

So I'm the guy writing the gay barbarian story, but I kinda wanted to take a break from it. But I can't get any other ideas so I'm thinking I should just continue it.

Any advice?

>> No.33187663

>>33187308
>A fair amount of people here seem to be Eurofags.
Lewdness knows no nation or boarder!

>> No.33187737

I'm a bad person. To procrastinate and avoid working on the noble trap story (gay is hard), I did some script writing.
(The first one has been in the works for several weeks, though)

Of Elves and Barmaids
(f/f, barmaid, elf, humor, script)
http://pastebin.com/C1Wp9H1c
Voiced Version: http://chirb.it/aANq0z
(Stellar as Barmaid, Blush as Elf, mixing and SFX by VK)

Letter to My Dearest
A love letter that gets progressively dirty.
http://pastebin.com/x6JHcDLh
As voiced by Blush: http://chirb.it/yzDmw9

College Bound
[script, incest, brother/sister, light femdom]
As voiced (in French!) by Lie: http://vocaroo.com/i/s0ufftwlSaLt
As voiced by the ever delightful SS/MizSpecific: http://chirb.it/tAMsL5

Curse of the Wereslut
[m/f, fantasy, female paladin x male rogue, questionable consent, dirty talk]
Blush's version: http://chirb.it/x2Kmx5
SS/MizSpecefic's version: http://chirb.it/KhfIv4

>> No.33187753

>>33187188
...that mermaid is hilariously singleminded

some of your wordings gets a tad repetitive, the paragraph starting at line 19 stood out in particular

dat cliffhanger, I jelly

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33187756

>>33187588
>>33187610
Ah good. We'll see how furry it turns out- I mean its not like I'm going to have it end on AND THEN THEY YIFFED.

>> No.33187786

Woke up from a nap and sat down at the tablet just as this thread was made. Let's see if I can cross anything off the to-do list tonight.

>> No.33187817

>>33187737
>gay is hard

you don't say.......

>> No.33187819

>>33187645
Are you only into writing gay stuff or are you open for other prompts?

Either way, I've been rather wanting to see a solo piece. One character masturbating, rather than multiple characters having sex.
Whether the character is a guy or girl, straight or gay, I just want to see if it can be done well enough to jack it/shlick to.

Maybe something with a little voyeur, with the character spying on their crush and doing the self-nasty?

I suppose this is a general request, too.

>> No.33187873

>>33187819
I had an idea for a story about a centaur girl trying to masturbate, but it never got off the ground

>> No.33187948

>>33187873
Oh god, her not being able to reach and trying to come up ways to do it anyway- hnnnnng!
Rubbing up against a pillow attached to a wall.
Using a long piece of silk to pull up and down.
Slipping onto a knobby, polished tree limb.

Maybe sequel bait with someone walking in on her and offering to "help."

Do it. DO IT NOW.
Someone do this!

>> No.33188000

>>33187948
>>33187873

This is kinds my fetish. People unable top pleasure themselves, meaning they must submit to the D. regular horses are fine too

>> No.33188018

>>33188000
>regular horses are fine too
Gross.

>> No.33188062

>>33187948
If the sequel involved pussy eating I'd agree

>> No.33188068

It's here, YES, time to actually contribute:

It's short but I've two more parts in the making.
http://pastebin.com/75vxEsvu

>> No.33188332

>>33187737
Oops, forgot the links the the last two scripts:
College Bound
http://pastebin.com/FENqGzYi

Cures of the Wereslut
http://pastebin.com/0F2Ne7Sx

>> No.33188400
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33188400

So I wrote my first Faith of Inimel fic. This one is about Father Franklin, the high priest of the religion, as he finds a volunteer to help him treat his skin disease.
http://pastebin.com/GVkuHxse
Tags: Absorption, m/f, Vanilla, Snuff?

I fear I may have entered XS territory. I guess the horror aspect of the cult is getting a bit more face time than I anticipated.

I might work on a second installment this weekend, either for the paladin or the bard of the inner circle.

Heres the information on the cult/characters, if anyone wants to use them for their own fics go ahead.

http://pastebin.com/MyWkvG3y

As always, feedback, criticism and comments are appreciated.

>> No.33188515

The man with the cursed penis

OR

The woman with the cursed ass

>> No.33188643

>>33188515
What does that even mean? If this is a request, you're going to have to actually explain what you want written.

>> No.33188662

>>33188400

I was one of the guys who wrote for that thread. Cool tos ee it lives on

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33188750

Even as a non-us resident I am also disappointed in the lack of Freedom edition.
In other news, Amalur combat system is awful without proper dodge cancelling and the Teeth of Naros DLC just loves throwing purple items on me in attempt apparently break everything else. Not to mention apparently handing out a ton of money for no real reason too just for completing the main quest.
Also stunlocking traps are utter bullshit. Caused me to actually die for once. Twice even.

*Ahem*

Anyway, so I wish I could say I got much written on Little Red this past week but then I'd be lying. All I really did was trying to improve the prose to the best of my ability.

http://pastebin.com/kEajt6d7
Little Red (MMMxF, Worgen/Blood Elf, "Werewolves", Dubious Consent, Group, World of Warcraft.)

Probably gonna make a post with some of my findings that may interest people later.

>> No.33188896 [DELETED] 

>>33187612
Glorious. The scenario is great, the characters even better, and I love the trickster motif that ties it all together.
This is one of the more clever smut stories I've seen in these threads and enjoyed it quite a bit.

You have a bit of a problem with punctuating dialogue, however. You often cut out the necessary comma completely or replace it with a period. In fact, the ONLY time you punctuate it correctly seems to be accidental, when someone's dialogue requires an exclamation or question mark or an ellipses.
It's hardly enough to ruin the story, but it is rather distracting.

Just remember, after a piece of dialogue and right before the quotation marks, you need to put a comma.

"Like this," said Anon1.
"Do you mean like this?" asked Anon2.
"That's a different case," Anon1 continued, "but it works since the question mark is indicating that piece of dialogue is a question but the sentence is no. Which is why you have a period at the end of said sentence."
"That's really cool!" Anon2 replied happily.
"Indeed. But you did the same thing again, this time with an exclamation mark." Anon1 thought of how to continue, realizing that this sentence would work as an example of when you ARE supposed to end dialogue with a period, since the piece after it is not modifying it in any way, and being rather smug about it. "Try it again," Anon1 said, giving another example of how to do it properly.
"I don't think I can," Anon2 lamented in a sad tone.
"But you just did..." Anon1 was wary of using an ellipses in such a manner, but it was technically correct and he reasoned the example would be helpful.
"I did? Neat."
"Indeed."
"That was fun."
"I agree," said Anon1, giving an indication who was speaking after a succession of non-specified dialogue that was easy enough to follow without the usual identifiers, which is usually a good indicator that they are unnecessary in such cases. "I think we're done here," he concluded in an overly smug way like the jackass he really is.

>> No.33188929

>>33187612
Glorious. The scenario is great, the characters even better, and I love the trickster motif that ties it all together.
This is one of the more clever smut stories I've seen in these threads and enjoyed it quite a bit.

You have a bit of a problem with punctuating dialogue, however. You often cut out the necessary comma completely or replace it with a period. In fact, the ONLY time you punctuate it correctly seems to be accidental, when someone's dialogue requires an exclamation or question mark or an ellipses.
It's hardly enough to ruin the story, but it is rather distracting.

Just remember, after a piece of dialogue and right before the quotation marks, you need to put a comma.

"Like this," said Anon1.
"Do you mean like this?" asked Anon2.
"That's a different case," Anon1 continued, "but it works since the question mark is indicating that piece of dialogue is a question but the sentence is not. Which is why you have a period at the end of said sentence."
"That's really cool!" Anon2 replied happily.
"Indeed. But you did the same thing again, this time with an exclamation mark." Anon1 thought of how to continue, realizing that this sentence would work as an example of when you ARE supposed to end dialogue with a period, since the piece after it is not modifying it in any way, and being rather smug about it. "Try it again," Anon1 said, giving another example of how to do it properly.
"I don't think I can," Anon2 lamented in a sad tone.
"But you just did..." Anon1 was wary of using an ellipses in such a manner, but it was technically correct and he reasoned the example would be helpful.
"I did? Neat."
"Indeed."
"That was fun."
"I agree," said Anon1, giving an indication who was speaking after a succession of non-specified dialogue that was easy enough to follow without the usual identifiers, which is usually a good indicator that they are unnecessary in such cases. "I think we're done here," he concluded in an overly smug way like the jackass he really is.

>> No.33189262

>>33187220

This post didn't get anywhere near the attention it deserves.

>> No.33189274

>>33188750
Amalur is an awful game. The Artstyle is so bland, the lore is boring, and all the quests are all just generic "get this herb" or "kill this person". Worst TES clone ever.

>> No.33189361

>>33189274
Amalur was orgianlly going to be an mmo, but it got switched to a single player game.

>> No.33189364

>>33189274
It's perfect as a time killer but that's about it. Still surprised I haven't been stabbed by one of the Glaswegian Gnomes yet. I know it's gonna happen at some point.

>> No.33189395

>>33189361
It shows. I could go on about how EA is the antichrist of gaming all day, but this isn't /v/ (thankfully).

>> No.33189457

>>33189361
>>33189395
Not entirely. 38 studios was gonna develop an MMO and they acquired Big Huge Games, who were working on their own single player RPG. They decided to make Big Huge change their game to an Amalur prequel to open up for the eventual MMO.

>> No.33189494

>>33189457
And it would seem the MMO in question never materialized. Figures.

Oh, and 1d4chan is back up. Seems like they were changing the wiki's formatting around a little bit.

>> No.33189511

>>33189364
The Biggest crime was that you're not allowed to play as one of those Gnomes. Any fantasy RPG that features Dwarves/Dwarf like races that doesn't let you play as one loses a point on the score

>> No.33189528

>>33188750
>>33187737
Looking forward to checking these out in a bit.

Currently working on a Changeling: the Lost fic, loosely based around some comments Mask made about the nature of masks and how they might allow one to cultivate an alternative persona so they can do things they otherwise couldn't, or wouldn't.

And if the guy who requested the next B&P chapter is reading; I've not forgotten you, I just got hit with a lot of inspiration for this one. Apologies for any delays.

>> No.33189577

>>33189494
It never really materialized because 38 studios tanked because their owner was an idiot or something.

>>33189511
I almost wanted to play the giant race you encounter in the Naros DLC. Mostly because their greco-roman design is more interesting than other bland races. Even if I'm horribly vanilla and just tend to prefer playing as humans in RPGs.
However the pseudo-scandinavian elf names are frankly the dumbest thing.
Still enjoy the really bored look my character has though through the conversations.

>>33189528
Should be noted there isn't anything really new from last week, just that I've tried to inject some more flavour into the text.

>> No.33189617

>>33189577
>pseudo-scandinavian elf names
Those were actually what High Elves/Dark Elves were called in Norse Mythology. But the fact that the game lacked any sort of Nordic Aesthetic made it dumb as fuck.

>> No.33189660

>>33188068

Ooh, neat! Filed to read later.

>> No.33189668

>>33188515
>The woman with the cursed ass
I want to see how this one would be done.
Does she have anal dentata?
Does her ass suck up any man who tries to fuck it?
Or does it just smell so bad no man will touch her?

>> No.33189674

What's everyone working on?

>> No.33189695

>>33189617
I stand corrected on that point then after looking it up on Wiki but it really doesn't work anyway for the reasons you mention.

>> No.33189747

>>33189695
It sucks that there aren't that many games which feature genuine Nordic designs and mythology.

>> No.33189753

Is this thread just for smut or can I ask for suggestions for a bit of fetishy world building?

>> No.33189804

>>33189753
>inserting your fetishes into your game

Literally cancer

>> No.33189806

>>33189747
Yeah kinda, even if there is Banner Saga that came out recently otherwise the best one I can think of is Rune but that's a really terrible game anyway

>> No.33189807

>>33189528
>And if the guy who requested the next B&P chapter is reading
I generally try to have a /wst/ tab open, so yes, I am reading this.

Also, I try to think of it as not directly a request, but as offering some suggestions that are equally interersting for you to write about.

>> No.33189836

>>33189674
Waiting for feedback on >>33188400 before starting anything new. May try starting Temptation part 3 instead of another Inimel thingy, not super sure

>> No.33189849

>>33189806
Banner Saga confuses me. Like is it a visual novel type game?

>> No.33189894

>>33189804
It's probably not something I'd ever run, mostly because I enjoy being a player about as much as my DM loves being a DM, but our games are already more than a little fetishy due to my groups fondness for lite (and sometimes quite heavy) ERP

>> No.33189956

>>33189849
Part visual novel part turnbased strategy game as far as I know.

>> No.33189966

>>33189836
>skin disease
Uh, sorry; instant boner killer. If this story had been about literally ANYTHING else, erotic botfly removal excepted, I'd give it a read.
Imma go take a hot shower, now. Where's I put that steel wool....

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33189985

>>33189894
>ERP

>> No.33190013

>>33189753

There's no law says you can't ask. Ignore the prude, naughty RPG stuff is only bad if it's sprung upon unconsenting players.

>> No.33190032

>>33189966
>erotic botfly removal

I'm gonna try this, one day, I swear.

>> No.33190038

>>33189966
If its any consolation, where the story picks up hes suppressed the symptoms and needs a 'volunteer' to keep it that way.

But yeah, I realize I may have crossed the gross threshold.

>> No.33190051

>>33189894
/tg/ had an ERP thread, but mod mandate has caused a relocation to /d/.
Perhaps you can find the help you desire over in that /d/irection.

>> No.33190079

>>33190013
>calling me a prude because I think Erotic Roleplay is stupid

>> No.33190190

>>33189836

I haven't read it yet. Sorry fellow gestalt Sorceress friend.

>> No.33190266

>>33189674
N-nothing. I haven't been able to write anything longer than a paragraph in three weeks. Feels super bad.

>> No.33190326

>>33190079

No, I'm calling >>33189804 a prude for implying that running a sexy game is automatically bad.
Thinking ERP is stupid is a separate thing, and you're welcome to do so. (Though doing so in a thread devoted to D&D/WH40k/other-/tg/-related smut is odd)

>> No.33190368

>>33190326
Wouldn't be the first time somebody did so.

Anyway, I've noticed that there's nearly nothing for MtG, which is odd since it's had a dedicated waifu thread for a while now. Why is that?

>> No.33190370

>>33190326
Yeah you're talking to me right now. And yeah, it's inherently bad.

Also smut isn't equal to sexual themed roleplaying.

>> No.33190430

>>33190266
Try writing a script.
I'll even give you a prompt:

Long space voyage, entire crew is in cryo-sleep. The engineer has to periodically awaken to do checkups on the ship's systems and make repairs.
Then, either:
1) Another crewmember has set their pod to awaken at the same time to try and make it with the engineer
or
2) The engineer awakens another crewmember to have sex with, likely another officer. Perhaps they're secretly a couple and this is a "thing" they do?

>> No.33190437

>>33190370
>>33190368
>>33190326

Meta discussion goes elsewhere, anons. Preserve posts here for story discussion, requests and feedback.

On that note:

What is your one favorite idea that you never wrote OR never read a story from someone else about? It can be incredibly specific or somewhat general

>> No.33190447

>>33190370
>yeah, it's inherently bad.

Well, that's just like, your opinion, man.

>> No.33190467

>>33190266
Eh, join the club really. Haven't been able to write anything this entire week and I've got no idea currently if I can get some stuff written this weekend or not.

Anyway, I promised links to stuff. Starting with some art. Namely more Incase shortstack material including more pages on the Halfling/Human comic.
http://buttsmithy.tumblr.com/post/90568590778/more-talking-now-with-75-more-floating-hearts
And then goblins, lots and lots of goblins.
http://buttsmithy.tumblr.com/post/90655875648/experimenting-with-fast-and-loose-styles-id-love
http://buttsmithy.tumblr.com/post/90677709198/more-experiments-with-loose-color
http://buttsmithy.tumblr.com/post/90692013318/boop

Moving onto stories it seems that someone else has noticed that a certain doctor is a really kinky person.
http://www.hentai-foundry.com/stories/user/Rakked/14109/Alien-Interrogation-Hard-Way-XCOM-blowjob

Switching topics I realized earlier that if I was ever to request art of the Leather & Silk characters it would probably have to be in the shape of a beach picture because I think you can reflect a lot of character in what kind of swimsuit people wear.
Shame it'd be expensive as all hell because it'd involve three characters.

>> No.33190696

>>33190430
I like the second one, but its more a problem with the actual writing, not a lack of ideas.

>> No.33190748

>>33189674
H&A 21, Masquerade, brainstorming

>return from zoo
>inspired to write something about a gyrfalcon themed harpy
someday

>> No.33190764

>>33187210
i ended up reading all the henric and alex stories youve written so far, and ive really enjoyed them.

along the way, i noticed myself hoping that Henric would turn out being good at heart and Alex would end up falling in love with him for real. (i can always dream right?)

i enjoy the setting and their adventures, and the darker parts that Alex goes through on a continual basis was a nice change. I remember feeling really hopeless for her and wishing that Henric would show her the occasional kindness and actually mean it every now and then. I really do remember saying to myself, "damn, if that was me, I would have killed myself by now."

i spotted a hand full of spelling errors along the way, or words that I could tell you meant to type but typed something in its place instead, but like an asshole, i didnt catalog where they were.

cant wait for the story to continue, good job with the writing. It's a very engaging series.

>> No.33190822

>>33187210
>>33190748
Mask, there was a thread earlier this week about masks:
https://archive.foolz.us/tg/thread/33145303/

Just thought you might get a kick out of it.

>> No.33190826

>>33187563
i like the sound of that..

>> No.33190864

>>33189985
It's more we don't avoid it when it pops up, we're all fond of getting involved in romantic relationships, and tend to be creative with the variety of species and magic available in a standard D&D setting

>>33190051
Those threads were mostly for F-list ERP, I don't remember them ever talking about in game fetishy stuff, other than that one breast size powered magic setting idea, plus they got banned from /d/ almost immediately because /d/ forbids /d/iscussion, they're in /soc/ now

>>33190013
It wouldn't be the weirdest (or most fetishy) stuff we've encountered but basically, a few days ago in another thread someone mentioned the succuMILF and shortly after an idea was raised of a group of all female paladins that have a spell that lets them unbirth evildoers and rebirth them as children so they can try and raise them right this time, and while it's not a fetish I'm too fond of, giving an evildoer a second chance at life as a child does seem like something a Motherhood goddess might do so I decided to try and stat said spell and after a bit more discussion on it, the order.

I have most of the fluff thought out, if not written down, but what I really need are names (I am very bad at naming things) for the spell and order/goddess and if someone with a better grasp of game balance can tell me if the spell and magic item I made for them are balance (I'm positive they're not), suggestions for spells for a motherhood/fertility domain are also appreciated but I have some ideas

The spell and magic item in question:
http://pastebin.com/RuV96uB6

Once again, what the hell am I doing spending time making this?

>> No.33190867

>>33189674
I'm still working on that efreet queen and her male slave boy bard story. It's pretty slow going.

>>33190467
Man, I've been following this artist and all it does it make me want to write about more shortstacks, but I can't because I still have two unfilled requests to finish.

>> No.33190900

>>33188929
that whole post made my day

>> No.33190997

>>33188929
I really think we should put that whole dialogue in the second post of these threads. Like, maybe an extra "Tips on Writing" pastebin because I know that I still have trouble with that to this day.

>> No.33191022

>>33188929
This is going in the list of tips.

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>>33190867
It's always good to have a "To do" list.
In fact I modified one idea I had earlier involving a maid suit into a better plotted idea and with a new character to boot.
http://pastebin.com/wsSPE36k
"The Maid" in this case.
Also added a story idea based on the attached picture.

If I just had time to actually try to finish some of these things. *sigh*

>> No.33191113

>>33187737
the letter was hilarious.

first line, "How I long to hear your voice whisper into my hear those sweet words I have read in your letters"

i think you meant 'hear' to be 'ear'

>> No.33191176

>>33187873
i want this to happen

>> No.33191181

>>33190822
nice, appreciated

>>33190764
I'm so glad you've enjoyed them.

Sometimes we think about maybe doing something nice, but every time we end out tossing away the idea because it just doesn't fit so we try to throw Alex a bone every once in a while in some other way to give her something to be happy about, or at least something to be not miserable about.

The main things that keep her going rather than killing herself are that she put together early on that Henric genuinely has something wrong with him in addition to just being an asshole, so she at least has an explanation for his motives, and she has a set date when she knows she will be a knight and won't have to deal with him anymore. As shitty as things are there's at least a light at the end of the tunnel for her.

>>33190997
"Rules for Dialog and How to Break Them"

>> No.33191246

>>33191181
Mask, you're indecent!
Your anonymous is showing.

And my fingers are still crossed for that Masquerade story.

>> No.33191255

>>33189274
>>33189361
>>33189364
i loved the game, but it made me want to cry everytime i found someone new to talk to and they added onto the list of endless quests.

>> No.33191338

>>33189674
lifa is going to a Tau world to assassinate an ethereal caste member. should be neat to write

>> No.33191375

>>33191255
Are you a fan of MMO's? It's understandable that you liked it if you did. Personally I find MMO's to be boring as shit.

>> No.33191412

>>33189836
i was excited by the post you put up last week about that story, so when i get done reading it, ill give you feedback.

tfw no feedback makes you wonder what anyone thought about it, or if they clicked on it and gave up halfway through... its a bad feel


but seriously, ill let you know what i think about it

>> No.33191426

>>33191375
MMO's only really tend to be enjoyable if you have friends or people to talk with as you're doing stuff. It can help a lot and I kinda wish Amalur at least had 2 player co-op to make it more bearable.

>> No.33191470

Jesus Christ I made 40K. I just took the time to compile all of the ideas I wanted to flesh out in DEEP SPACE, about the universe, the government, typical fluff, and I realized.... I made Warhammer 40,000. Slightly less grimdark, and no nigh-immortal giant space marines, but the similarities are disturbing. What the fuck. I never even read 40K outside the Eisenhorn books.

>> No.33191474

>>33190038
my second story crossed some gross thresholds for sure

>> No.33191506

>>33191412
Thanks. Ive been meaning to do the same for Seeds of Chaos, but I've not had the time to read it.

>>33191474
Welp, time to start.

>> No.33191520

>>33191470
Well you are on /tg/ so I guess that was bound to happen. If you had been posting a worksafe version on /m/ I'm sure it'd be something more like Gundam or even Battletech.
And this is kinda why I like doing vague universes. Even if I'm pretty sure I could make something slightly solid out of all the non-smut stories I've written so far. Or at least a general image of the world.

>> No.33191545

>>33191036
I keep my todo list in my pastebin. Under Monster's WIPs.
>http://pastebin.com/jnQyqi86

>> No.33191547

>>33190430
what if he violates them while theyre still asleep?? seriously, what would you do after not talking to someone for so long and seeing them sleeping peacefully everytime you wake up? maybe he develops a huge crush on a girl hes never spoken to just by looking at her while she sleeps. that could really go somewhere

>> No.33191582

>>33191547
Thats just creepy enough to get me going. Slight yandere vibes, make it a little rapey when he finally unthaws her early.

>> No.33191724

>>33191582
Maybe people in cryosleep experience particularly vivid dreams, and as she starts to wake up, he's able to convince her that she's still dreaming while he goes to town on her? She's still half-asleep and confused, but assumes he must be right, because why on earth would he do something like that to her in real life? So it has to be a dream, obviously, and it's such a good dream, so it's better to just go with it...

>> No.33191759

>>33187143
Link?

>> No.33191785

>>33191506
i had another blow out ending. it will probably make sense after the fourth story gets written

>> No.33191846

>>33191582

doing dirty things to an unresponsive person in cryosleep. theres some definite power trip stuff right there.

>> No.33191911

>>33191724

Expanding on this:

He feels guilty for taking advantage of her, but the way she responds and even enjoys what he does to her is addictive to the extreme. He starts to wake her up and do it with her repeatedly, turning it into a routine of sorts. Then her time to wake up for real comes, and when she does, she goes through the mandatory automated medical examination and she finds out that she's pregnant.

Then it can end however the writer wants.

>> No.33191965

>>33191470
Now all you need to do is found a miniatures company and hope GW accepts your explanation that it's just a coincidence if they sue you. Worth a shot, right

>> No.33192212

>>33191965
I>>33191470
That's because 40k draws from a ton of sci-fi sources and is kind of an amalgamation of the good stuff, but in a silly grimdark way. I don't play it or read it but I can see the Heinlein and stuff just looking at it and listening in on people playing Dark Heresy.

If you're worried about making it too /tg/ you should read some weirder sci-fi maybe and try getting ideas from there. Have you read Mote in God's Eye?

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>>33188400
>>33189836
Good as always Francisco, no real problems I saw with it, no idea why people are worried about it being gross

>I might work on a second installment this weekend, either for the paladin or the bard of the inner circle.
Eagerly looking forward to it

Also, you need to give people a bit before you start getting disappointed by the lack of feedback

>>33189674
Well, this >>33190864 right now...
Anyone? No suggestions? Or even a simple "you should feel bad for doing that"?

>>33189966
The skin disease was only mentioned, never described beyond itchy

>>33190437
>OR never read a story from someone else about?
After that one harpy thread this week, I really want a guy X pic related type harpy story preferably if she had a personality and accent like the one they were suggesting for harpies in that thread, basically cockney chavs

>>33190032
>>33190867
I'm also looking forward to these

>> No.33192306

>>33192212
Although nowadays they're moving away from trying to be silly grimdark and more into serious grimdark.
Which automatically flips over to hilarious grimdark because it's so utterly try hard.

Ah, I remember back when I was younger that I was writing down "design specs" for my own brand of mechs that I was trying to be realistic about and impose certain restrictions and dimensions on. Can't really remember how far I got with that thing and I have vague memories of doing some setting description involving Mars demanding independence.
Maybe I should just try to dig up that text for giggles or something. Should have that saved either on my machine or in that forlorn folder of mine.

>> No.33192449

>>33191036
fran and penelo....
i love vierra

>> No.33192536

>>33192254
I was feeling the ending of Ruth's absorption got kinda snuff-y, thats what I was worried about. The stuff about Franklin's illness wasnt what I was referring to.

But yeah, Ill be more patient next time.

>> No.33192567

>>33192449
No idea where that dom/sub relationship between those two came from as I've got a bunch of stuff by Ganassa that is all about them and the usage of various straps and such. Guess one of those really dedicated commissioners or something.

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>>33192567
good lord man!! post all you have or give me a link! i REALLY love vierra! Like more than elves even!

>> No.33192610

>>33192536
>I was feeling the ending of Ruth's absorption got kinda snuff-y
>Absorption porn
>Snuffy
Eh, comes with the territory, just depends on how the absorption works but I didn't see any problem with it, but I could see how it could be taken

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33192713

>>33192605
actually way more than elves, and lamias, and tieflings, and asari all combined.

>> No.33192857

>>33190032
How about some erotic guinea worm removal? Or do we need to wait till they're extinct first?

>> No.33192867

>>33190826
Oh good.

>> No.33192923
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>>33186794
You know what we need more of? Robot porn.
Specifically Robot MILF X Human Boy porn. No wait! A threesome between two Robot MILFs and human boy.

Yep I could sure go for some of that right about now.

>> No.33192941

>>33192923
Yes, yeas please

>> No.33192967

>>33192306
Yeah, my observation has been that the more serious they try to be the sillier it becomes.

Which is perfectly fine by me. I don't but when my housemates play Dark Heresy I like to listen in, and the players and game master are all people who prefer a balance of silly and serious. There was a camouflaged tyranid of some kind and they handled it by luring it into a trap with a bomb and paints to paint it so they could see it. Very slapstick. To me that's almost perfect, and what I love about tabletop games--serious problems that can be solved creatively and optionally made silly.

Then there are sillier problems like ruining the inquisitor's robes in a washing machine and trying to get new ones before they notice etc.

>> No.33192972

>>33192923
Milfy machine spirit of a leman russ taking interest in a new recruit.
Fucking ratbat giving me a fetish for humanXliving tanks/planes/warships.

>> No.33193029

>>33192605
https://www.dropbox.com/s/311hb3ykgr2pk8k/Final%20Fantasy.rar
Here's the Fran/Penelo stuff at least.

But since I'm a giving mood here's pretty much all the Fran stuff I've got in my primary folders and are specifically tagged as her. Probably got more on the external folders but it's a mess there with probably a whole bunch of shit that needs to be cleaned up and sorted for dupes.
https://www.dropbox.com/s/3dkyn2xsele2vqm/Fran.rar

>>33192967
I mean at it's core 40k is meant to be incredibly tongue in cheek about everything and not overtly serious as the current writers tend to do it with the newer stuff.
Speaking of memorable moments I listen to a Only War session log where the squad hijacked a Baneblade in about 15 to 30 seconds of in-game time.

>> No.33193119

>>33193029
> 40k is meant to be

If I was being picky, I'd say that 40k is meant to be whatever the current writers want it to be; it used to be a lot more tongue-in-cheek, yes, but the current, more serious version, is no less right or wrong; it's no less legitimate, even if you don't like it.

[spoilers]Don't touch muh grimdark, I like it.[/spoilers]

>> No.33193201

>>33193119
I guess that's true but I almost prefer the slightly cheeky English Black humor version where Orkz travel in time to kill themselves over the more modernized "Schola students will get turned into mortar if they rebel unless the rebellious ones get killed by their classmates", or however that codex went with their fluff text, kind of thing that is running right now.

>> No.33193202

Last time I drew a giant gold elemental with huge tits but I don't remember if I got to post it before the thread was in autosage, if not I can post it again.

>> No.33193273

>>33193201
Meanwhile Ghazkull seals the Warp Rift with a headbutt.
it's not like everything has changed.

>> No.33193316

>>33192923
>/ss/

Absolutely disgusting

>> No.33193328

>>33193273
True, it does depend on the writer and the ones who wrote the IG and Tempestus Sc- Storm Trooper codexes were trying a bit too hard at times.

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33193330

>>33187220
>>33189262
seconding/thirding this suggestion

>> No.33193343

>>33193202
I think you said it was finished but post it again anyway just in case I'm remembering wrong

>> No.33193360

>>33193330
Needs an Injun and Mexigirl bert staring them from a distance.

>> No.33193372

>>33193273
Wait, WHAT? Context, please.

>> No.33193379

>>33191338
neat

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>>33193360
right? missing a Spaniard and a Hessian as well

>> No.33193623

>>33188400
line 36. "with selections of the scripture stitched in in gold filigree."

not sure if you meant to use the word 'in' twice, because it does work, but another word such as 'with' or 'using' may help the flow


line 38
"Those who encountered him bowed 'there' (their) heads"

line 40
"looking more like a harem dancer 'then' (than) a holy woman"

line 74
"Tanager referred to it as an ‘attraction(')"
forgot the second parentheses

line 76
"Ruth had long, voluminous hair and a(n) oval-shaped face"

line 97
"The temple kept her eyes fixed on the floor and nodded" ??? im guessing you didnt mean to call her a temple

line 153
“But you promise ill (I'll) join with her, right?"

It was a well written story, but it did make me sad. I could tell very early on what he intended to do and with his reasoning and justifications, I began to agree with him. it was a good plot and i would be more than eager to read more if you choose to continue writing that story line


deserves more than 7 views for sure

>> No.33193638

>>33193029
i love you

>> No.33193793

>>33187062
>http://pastebin.com/qRqa7JQw
the action scenes are nice. Goddamn, but their relationship is giving me diabetes though, all that teasing.

........the uh....the blood is sort of a weird direction to go in just my opine, other than that the sex is everything I want when it comes to space marine lewding

that fucking ending, that and the fact that their quest is intriguing in and of itself are making me want more. good job

>> No.33194145

>>33190900
>>33190997
>>33191022
You're shameless flatterers, the lot of you. Thank you
But seriously, read the story. It's quite enjoyable.

>>33191113
Thank you for catching that. Fixed.

>> No.33194151

>>33193793
im not into blood, believe it or not, but the idea was too much to pass up. Im working on the third story right now, which occurs after both previous stories. everything will slowly link itself together in the end.
all in all, i did not think the second story was as engaging as the first, but thats my own opinion. im glad you are enjoying the story though, and im not sure if thats what counts or the smut. either way, i appreciate it

>> No.33194161

I'm new to writing, and I want to write something gay. What should I write?

>> No.33194173

>>33194161
Something not gay.

>> No.33194193
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>>33194173
But why not gay?

>> No.33194212

>>33194161
We had a few people requesting gay fics last week, didn't we? Did anyone take note of what they wanted?

>> No.33194228

>>33194193
because I won't read it, maybe

>> No.33194231

>>33194151
>and im not sure if thats what counts or the smut
For me it's
characters > story > setting > everything else
This is /tg/, we love pretty much every aspect of fiction.

>>33194161
Well if you want to write something gay, you should write that. If you haven't written anything before I'd probably suggest something about the two characters and how and why they get along (or don't). Sometimes for me if I just start writing dialog I know what kind of story I want to write.

>> No.33194250

>>33194161
Assuming that by "gay" you mean either lesbian or male varieties, allow me to look up some of the unfilled requests:

>"I'll say the same thing I always say, need more pure lesbian Drow smut. Drow x other of-age member of a sentient race, but must be pure lesbian. No remincing of dick-sucking or mid-lezzing man-love or whathaveyou. Only thing good in the master list is one half-elfxhalfing fic and some light vampire stuff."

>Orc Lesbian orgy

And that's it.

>>33194193
We've had a massive glut of gay smut recently that should last us a few more weeks at the least, and it doesn't seem to be letting up. Honestly, it's almost kind of boring. Granted, you can still write it, but it's not likely to get too much attention unless you do something novel with it.

>> No.33194260

>>33193343
http://imgur.com/0ln72Id

Ok here it is

>> No.33194272

>>33194161
yourself

>> No.33194287

>>33194250
>it's not likely to get too much attention unless you do something novel with it.
The same could be said of almost any genre I think.

>> No.33194302

>>33194260
Okay, yeah, I don't think the last one you posted was colored, thanks

>> No.33194316

>>33194161
*shrug* what else interests you besides gay? try to marry the two together

>>33194250
i like the gay though

>> No.33194317

>>33194250
Could you point me in the direction of said smut?
>>33194272
Nobody wants to hear the story of a delinquent nerd, who's lurking on this thread while his boyfriend paints in the same room.

>> No.33194332

>>33193623
Thanks, those should be fixed now. I wanted to make Franklin a more sympathetic character then his peers while still being, well, a bit of a monster.

Further entries in the story line will be from the other members of the inner circle's perspective, but I aim to tell a cohesive story and build a setting between all of them.
Also I might do a story from the perspective of a ground-level cult member, as well as one from the savage tribes to the east (going to call them the Mardik).

>>33194161
Dudes fuckin other dudes. With their dicks. I would suggest gay mermen because reasons.

>> No.33194335

>>33194260
noice

>> No.33194339

>>33194316
I like lanky, smart men. Aside from that, my kinks are pretty goddamn vanilla.

>> No.33194414

>>33194317
I think there are a lot of people who would read that story actually.

>>33194339
How about an apprentice loremaster to an enormous library has the job of helping adventurers get the information they need when they're trying to solve mysteries, and at one point gets so enamored of his research that he ventures out with a hunter to try to slay the mysterious beast they've been reading about? Also they fall in love despite their differences.

>> No.33194416

>>33194339
maybe something with a con man that keeps tricking a cute city.guard/adventuring partner into lewd?

>> No.33194418

>>33194161
Effeminate elf seduces the barbarian warlord attacking his people, convincing him to leave.

Effeminate elf prostitute is hired by a human noble. Said noble did not know elf was a male, but elf isn't going home without getting paid.
They come to an agreement.

A wealthy sheik has a harem of young, exotic men. He likes to make them fuck each other.

A commissar with dubious morals:
option 1) Finds two guardsmen fighting and has them do more than simply "kiss and make up"
option 2) Punishes a recidivist malefactor. With his penis.

A paladin goes to the secret room of an infamous bathhouse. Sucks lots of cock.

An immortal tires of sex after centuries of fucking every sort of woman there is. His faithful elf bard friends shows him what he's been missing out on.

In a pseudo-Ancient Greek setting, a veteran soldier comforts a new recruit before his first battle. With his penis.

>> No.33194485

>>33194418
>A commissar with dubious morals
>mfw when my boyfriend has attempted this on more than one occasion
Also, thank you for the suggestions.

>> No.33194497

>>33194418
>A paladin goes to the secret room of an infamous bathhouse. Sucks lots of cock.

Mmn. Not normally into gay stuff, but I'd read that.

>> No.33194527

>>33191759

Sorry it's so late, but I was out doing errands.

http://pastebin.com/SRtNSGH5

>> No.33194531

>>33194485
You should write it, then have him paint something from it it and then post them together.

Teamwork!

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>>33194418
dem effeminate elf and commissar ideas

>> No.33194567

>>33194317
Again, I assume you mean both male and female homosexuality.
>Breaking Taboos (Yuri, Undead, Flesh GolemxNecromancer): http://pastebin.com/muDkeVKp
>The Littlest Nymph: The Raunchy River (Script, Lesbians, FFF, Fantasy) : http://pastebin.com/JrfXin9b
>Lace & Silk (F/F, Human/Draenei, Warcraft): http://pastebin.com/xa6eYJjY
>Kobold Loving, The Battle of the Bulge (kobold, m/m): http://pastebin.com/15veGVe9
>The Barbarian's Quest, Part 1: The Lusty Lizardman (Gay, Bara-ish, Human Male, Lizardfolk male, frotting, oral, rimming, light cumplay, lots of manly kissing): http://pastebin.com/Z6VJWUdT

See what I mean?

>> No.33194586

>>33194535

"We're here to keep the peace."

>> No.33194589

>>33194531
But I play guard, he plays Tau.

>> No.33194616

>>33194589
Then make it Gue'Vesa or something then. Use your imagination, man.

>> No.33194626

>>33194589
Then the commisar's morals are especially questionable.

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>>33194589
guardsmen are versatile though

>you like that blue milk don't you gue'lla? pay homage to my blueberries

>> No.33194690

>>33194589
Water Caste ambassador teaches captured commissar the glories of the Greater Good. With his penis.

Commissar punishes filthy xeno firewarrior for being a filthy xeno. With his penis.
Then has the rest of the platoon help.

Commissar and firewarrior are the last survivors after Tyranids fuck up both their armies. After several months of relying on each other to survive, they bone.
The commissar is tired of just masturbating and the firewarrior is tired of just masturbating while he watches the commissar masturbating

>> No.33195277

It's quiet.
Too quiet.

>> No.33195346

>>33195277

I'm almost finished the C:tL fic I'm doing at the moment. Just writing the final sex scene now.

>> No.33195564

I need some motivation to actually write something.

Give me some ideas for a story involving lactation/breastfeeding

>> No.33195612

>>33194690
>With his penis.
Just tack that onto the end of any sentence describing what someone is doing and watch a full fledged story of intrigue and muscle control blooms.
Watch:
>>33194527
>Sneaking towards the tent, Svee had to pat his stomach.
With his penis.
>>33187062
>He picked the tiny girl up and embraced her as gently as he could, lowering his head and lifting her until their lips met.
With his penis.
>>33193273
>Meanwhile Ghazkull seals the Warp Rift with a headbutt.
With his penis
>>33188929
>he concluded in an overly smug way like the jackass he really is.
With his penis.
>>33188750
“End of the line for you Red,” snarled the black one,
With his penis.

>> No.33195788

>>33195564
>Female minotaur in the maze wants to mother someone. A boy is sent into the maze.
>Cowgirl maid
>Recent mother is attacked by bandits/monster/animals/etc and they notice she comes with free drinks
>A mother dragon has excess milk since her pups/dragonlings/whatever left the nest recently. Finds Rookie adventure and finds his flustered bravery and trying to act big/powerful cute. Uses him to relive her tension. Dragons having milk has been used before in a series called Dragon's Milk.
>Beastgirl/Amazon/Forest witch/etc finds an injured guy in her woods. Nurses him back to health using healing breast milk. It's magic, I don't have to explain shit.

>> No.33195809

>>33195612
These aren't the droids you're looking for with your penis.
Damn it works!

>> No.33195812

>>33195564
At a whorehouse, a recent mother finds herself a popular attraction for clients that have breastfeeding fetishes.

A wizard's apprentice has a habit of not following orders and trying things out before she's ready. Wizard tells her he's working on a potion that grants immense magical powers and she tries it, only for it to make her breasts grow and start lactating.
He continues to punish her by playing with dem titties.

A goddess of war and fertility rewards her mortal champion with a suckle, granting him demi-godhood.

A soldier returns home from battle to his halfling wife. She's still breastfeeding their youngest children and he likes to have a drink as well. This time he's nearly ravenous.

A lord sexual abuses the youngish wetnurse that cares for his kids.
Alternatively, she's into it.

At a raunchy maid cafe in the redlight district, fresh milk is a favored creamer for coffees.

Goblin raiders kidnap a nursing mother and are fascinated by her ability to produce milk. They start experimenting.

A recent girl mother has her matronly friend teach her how to breastfeed and to milk herself without a pump.

An imperial guardsman fighting chaos forces is pulled into a warp portal and finds himself in Slaanesh's chamber of ever lactating tits. The whole room is made of tits.

The party wizards tries a new spell on the stuck up paladin. He claims "getting all the milk out" is the only way to cure her ailment.

>> No.33195865

I may have time to draw some boobs or something

>> No.33195903

>>33195812
>He continues to punish her by playing with dem titties.
With his penis
>This time he's nearly ravenous.
With his penis
>A lord sexual abuses the youngish wetnurse that cares for his kids.
With his penis
>They start experimenting.
With their penises
>An imperial guardsman fighting chaos forces
With his penis.
>is pulled into a warp portal
With his penis
>and finds himself in Slaanesh's chamber of ever lactating tits.
With his penis.

>> No.33195911

>>33195865
A big breasted dorf and a jealous looking elf girl putting on their nipple pasties before getting on stage at a strip club.

>> No.33196044

>>33195564
>>33195788
>Female minotaur in the maze wants to mother someone. A boy is sent into the maze.
>A mother dragon has excess milk since her pups/dragonlings/whatever left the nest recently. Finds Rookie adventure and finds his flustered bravery and trying to act big/powerful cute. Uses him to relive her tension. Dragons having milk has been used before in a series called Dragon's Milk.
>Beastgirl/Amazon/Forest witch/etc finds an injured guy in her woods. Nurses him back to health using healing breast milk. It's magic, I don't have to explain shit.

Yus plese.

I've been meaning to write a story for ages about a shota would-be adventurer who gets injured in some really naff way (like twisting his ankle by tripping over a tree root) because he's just a kid, and manages to find refuge in the cottage of a cowgirl. From there I've got two ideas and I'm not sure which I'm more fond of

>The creepy version
The cowgirl gets overly attached to the boy because she's very lonely. When he tries to leave she kicks him in the bad leg, reducing him to tears, and ends up raping him whilst trying to comfort him. She holds him captive in the cottage and forcefully mothers him until his mind breaks and he accepts his situation. They live happily ever after. Sort of.

>The cute version
The boy and the cowgirl grow fond of each other, so it's requited love instead of the cowgirl becoming obsessive. The boy decides adventuring isn't really for him and ends up deciding to live with the cowgirl and occasionally defending her from minor threats. They live happily ever after.

>> No.33196052

>>33195788
>>33195812
These are some good ideas minus the straight shota stuff

>> No.33196084

>>33195564
Since there was a werewolf thread earlier, which is still up, and there hasn't been any werewolf stories. Milfy werewolf hunts a scared kid/guy through the woods. He soon finds out she doesn't want to kill him. You could even work multi-breasts if you want to be extra kinky.

>> No.33196122

>>33195788
>A mother dragon has excess milk since her pups/dragonlings/whatever left the nest recently. Finds Rookie adventure and finds his flustered bravery and trying to act big/powerful cute. Uses him to relive her tension. Dragons having milk has been used before in a series called Dragon's Milk.
I really really want this one, preferably with the dragon milk having some sort of side effects

>Beastgirl/Amazon/Forest witch/etc finds an injured guy in her woods. Nurses him back to health using healing breast milk. It's magic, I don't have to explain shit.
>Female minotaur in the maze wants to mother someone. A boy is sent into the maze.
These two are also nice but not as good as the dragon one

>> No.33196172 [DELETED] 

so when are these shitty, faggy threads getting shitcanned like those erpfaggots

>> No.33196196

ALWAYS GENERIC CHARACTERS
NEVER PRE-EXISTING ONES WITH DISTINCTIVE FEATURES

>> No.33196208

>>33196196
>wanting fanfiction

>> No.33196234

>>33195788
>>A mother dragon has excess milk since her pups/dragonlings/whatever left the nest recently. Finds Rookie adventure and finds his flustered bravery and trying to act big/powerful cute. Uses him to relive her tension. Dragons having milk has been used before in a series called Dragon's Milk.
Wasn't there a whole conversation last week about dragon lactation? Or am I thinking of a different thread?
Either way, I want this also

>> No.33196242

>>33196196
But anonymous, writing about pre-existing characters isn't as fun as making up your own characters and developing them in the story.

It's like sitting down to roleplay and someone hands you their high level character they've been playing for ages. It just wouldn't feel right to play a character that someone else developed.

>> No.33196243

>>33196208
>not wanting fanfiction over the equivalent of faceless dark grey rape mooks for monstergirl fetishists.

>> No.33196275

Alrighty, here we go;

Masks and Masques: http://pastebin.com/Kx33GPP0

Tags: Changeling: The Lost, F/MMMM, Gangbang, DP, oral, anal, vaginal, bukkake, large penetration, masked/anonymous sex. I might have missed a couple, but those are the big ones.

>> No.33196276

>>33196242
There are so many wrong things with your post that i'm not going to list them, but overall, just be aware that your approach of writing porn is dangerously close to ERP, but much more pretentious.

>> No.33196339

>>33196242
Fuck that noise, I want characters whom I can recognize, whose aspect I know, and whose smut I can masturbate to right off the bat without having to go through excruciatingly long paragraphs of "character development" in order to get the faintest idea of what they might look or think like, since you guys only focus on the most unattractive, tedious aspects of their lives when "developing" them.

>> No.33196343

Hey which one of you is this?

>>>/i/420910

Anyways could someone save it as imgur and post on here? Nice to be posted here is all.

>> No.33196348

>>33196275
>F/MMMM
Why did you put the F in front? Why not a more random orientation such as M/F/MMM or MM/F/MM.
I feel personally offended by your blatant sexism in this regard.

>> No.33196350

>>33196275
Oh, yea, fair warning; this one's like 9000 words long. I'll have to shoot off in a bit, so might not be able to address any comments in this thread, but feel free to leave feedback - I'll catch it in the archive later.

>>33196276
>your approach of writing porn is dangerously close to ERP

That's complete and utter horseshit.

>> No.33196353

>>33196339
>I'm Autistic

>> No.33196366

>>33196052
Eh I like straight shota and those ideas sound nice.

>> No.33196384

>>33196350
>That's complete and utter horseshit.
It's in fact frighteningly accurate for circlejerking hacks like you.
if only you were doing it to actually produce fap material but in fact you're only doing it for the street cred.
>>33196353
>I think I'm hot shit and my internet friends also do

>> No.33196389

>>33196366
Well I don't and I'm the guy they were responding to.

>> No.33196411

>>33196242
Granted, there have been a few exceptions (inevitably involving certain 40k characters), but even then that's because there' s so little information about their personalities to start with.

>>33196276
All right then, smart guy- how about you write us a smutfic with "pre-existing characters with distinctive features" that can remain good smut without any of the characters acting in ways that do not contradict their current depictions.

I guarantee you that it's a difficult feat at best, if not borderline impossible.

>>33196339
If that's how you feel, then why don't you just watch regular porn that doesn't require any of that nasty "reading" or "delayed gratification"? It sounds like it would be right up your alley.

>> No.33196422

>>33196384
Being only comfortable with things that are familiar and not wanting to step outside of boundaries is a sign of Autism, I'd suggest you stop shitposting in this thread and get yourself checked.

>> No.33196465
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>>33196422
Or he could just be shitposting and as such should be kindly shown the door, courtesy of our good friend the report button.

>> No.33196478

>>33196384
Any characters in particular youd like to see? We can see if anyone is interested in writing something with them and if not we can put it in the request list for later, should someone want to later.
>plz dont say Mialee

>> No.33196483

>>33196411
>Hurr durr if you don't do it you can't criticize us
>It's borderline impossible to write smut without completely being OOC.

I don't want to belong to your retarded club and that's a pitifully wrong excuse when so many characters are made precisely with smut in mind.

And I don't watch regular porn because regular porn doesn't have recognizable and characterful people in it most of the time, idiot.

>> No.33196496 [DELETED] 

>>33196276
I usually try to remain civil, but fuck you. Using existing characters is nothing but trouble. First and foremost, they're rarely, if ever, like the "real" character and then we get people complaining how the character isn't acting right, or wouldn't do that, or that something is breaking canon.

What you call "generic" characters are original characters. Yes, a few authors may write something lacking backstory that results in a character coming off as interchangeable or generic, but plenty of the smut created for and in these threads has resulted in great stories with fleshed out characters.
Look at Mask's Henric and Alex. Monster's Lythra and Shanon and Jarun. Smutomancer's Ishana. CB's Noose. Fucking Fernweh.

You sir, are the one posting with "so many wrong things" we can hardly list them. You may have a fanfiction fetish and that's fine and dandy, but the second you start mocking insulting people for daring to enjoy the exploration of new content you can go right ahead and fuck yourself.

Also, write your, request some in a civil manner, or shut up.

>> No.33196524

>>33196465
Yeah at first I was thinking it was a whiner but definitely just a shitposter.

>>33196483
>"I don't want to belong to your club"
>came here and posted asking for content

>> No.33196528

In a self serving attempt to turn the conversation away from the shit poster, or at least give him a target more worthy of his ire, I am going to ask one more time for help with >>33190864, given the lack of name/balance suggestions, I'm going to assume it's a bad idea and I should feel bad for having it

>> No.33196529

>>33196422
>>33196465
Or, more realistically, I could be expressing reasonable expectations for someone who just wants to fap, and in order to fap, I have to feel compelled, and reading ten paragraphs of non-sexual story is simply not compelling.

Fapping may involve exoticism, but definitely not stepping out of your comfort zone.

>> No.33196563

>>33196234
That's where >>33194260 came from I think

>> No.33196598

Does anyone actually get off to these stories? I personally just read them because they're nice and well thought-out short stories. Like a mini-cupcake.

>> No.33196609

>>33196496
>waaah waaah I don't want to do hard work so I keep toiling for hours on end writing painstakingly long backstories because that's easier than having to put up with a few criticisms

Your "original" characters are generic. The amount of development they might gain has no bearing on their attractiveness. You just use these threads as an excuse to fulfill your fantasies of being a renowned author who writes deep and intricate stories, and attempt to do that at the expense of producing smut.

So start writing something people can fap to instead of circlejerking with your internet friends, or shut up.

>> No.33196611

>>33196196
1) Request something specific in a civil manner
2) Write some yourself
3) Shut up
Please choose one of the following. I'd suggest option 1 or 2 if you wish to make a change in the direction you consider to be "for the best."

>> No.33196619

>>33196598
Yes, mostly Francisco's

>> No.33196627

>>33196529
Then this isn't the thread for you. People like to also worldbuild and character develop for their smut. Written porn stories are counter to instant gratification you're looking for. I advise you to go to a site that has rule 34 drawings like you seem to want. You could even write dirty fanfiction yourself for these threads. Most writefags here are not to keen on writing about existing characters.

>> No.33196639

See?

>>33196598

This kind of attitude shouldn't exist.
Nothing produced here has any literary interest whatsoever, and entertaining the delusion that it's not the case does nothing but divert the writers' efforts from a goal they can realistically achieve, namely writing stuff to fap to.

>> No.33196654

>>33196598
I've been fapping my way through familial bonding for a couple weeks now. Used to fap to Heinrich and Alex too but I fell behind on that.

>> No.33196673

>>33196598
All the fucking time. These threads have ruined mainstream porn for me.
Hell, I can rarely get off to r34 pictures now.

>> No.33196693

>>33196627
Yes, but the problem is that you guys fail very hard at what you try to do, and use porn as a sorry excuse for producing drivel that wouldn't be published in pulp magazines.

Smut is embellished porn, that is all.
if it fails to be sexually gratifying, it has no reason to exist. Either the porn parts become a deadweight, or the story parts become a deadweight.

>> No.33196722

>>33196654
>>33196673
blatant lies or sexual deviousness.

>> No.33196725

>>33196483
Then make your own. Oh wait, you don't want to do that either. Guess you're out of luck then.

>so many characters are made precisely with smut in mind
>I have no way of proving this apart from groundless assertions and an inability to comprehend the concept of fanservice

>>33196496
If he wanted to request in a civil manner he would have done so. As he obviously never wanted to be associated with our "circlejerk" to begin with, I must wonder why he condescended to beg us to write for him in the first place.

>>33196529
>>33196627
>>33196639
>>33196693

Look in virtually any decent hentai manga (not a doujin, a real hentai) and you will find exactly what you seek, regardless of the fetish or the content.

There's a reason why this thread started on /tg/- it's because many of the writers (and readers, at that matter) find that "extraneous" detail part of the appeal. I am sorry, but as it appears we have reached an impasse here I must kindly ask you to either provide concrete examples of what you might want or leave for somewhere which is undoubtedly more conducive to your requests. (Might I suggest Adultfanfiction.net?)

>> No.33196733

>>33196598
A couple of them, yes. Normally I use them as a warm-up before going onto other things, but there's a few I've gotten off alone to before.

>> No.33196741

>>33196611
1) take writing lessons and stop writing porn
2) write fappable porn
3) https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2dbR2JZmlWo

>> No.33196762
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33196762

>>33196496
Hate to be that guy, but Noose was me.
Also Emp's Stray, cant forget her.

>>33196529
Theres a lot of smut for Macha, Lelith, Taldeer and a bunch of other Eldar. Cooked has done a nice fic about the XCOM scientist, Vahlen. Sexual Hitler wrote something with Matt Ward. 3Dfag has something with fucking Elesh Norn. And a few people have done Cultist Chan or Chem-Chan here and there.

So theres a few, mostly of female waifus from 40k. And to be frank, there really isnt much demand for existing characters outside of that, besides some more MtG ladies.

The secret to these threads really is that we're (or at least i'm) here for feels, not fapping. The boners are just an added bonus.

>>33196619
Thanks anon.

>>33196598
Yes, but more often I read them, get aroused, and then just watch tv and lose it.

>> No.33196796

>>33196725
The fact that you don't even know what i'm talking about proves that you actually have no interest in producing fappable content and instead use these threads as an excuse to post your fanfluff or short stories that would otherwise get criticized even a little.

>> No.33196797

>>33196350
How long have you been working on this 9000 worder? How is Changeling The Lost?

>>33196528
>and finally the target is also protected from going insane while they are inside the caster.
I'd say either flesh that out and give it a reason, or leave it out. It feels out of place. I also feel like the subject should get a Will save as time goes on in order to escape early, but every successive failure should increase the DC.
And for the fact that it lasts so long, containing a person, my gut feeling is that it should be a higher level spell but I might be totally off about that and just spacing out.

>>33196598
I read anything that sounds like it has a clever premise but I usually just get off to stuff that's up my alley. Others' imaginations are like drugs to me, s'why I read other stuff too.

>> No.33196799

>Someone has come into a thread about written porn just to complain that none of his favourite characters have any smut written about them

This isn't even autism, its just rude and retarded

>> No.33196815

>>33196796
I think most of us want our stuff to get criticized, and more than a little. Hell I beg for that shit.

>> No.33196831

>>33196762
>there really isnt much demand for existing characters outside of that
because people who are looking for the purpose of these threads quickly understood that you weren't actually interested in fulfilling it.

>> No.33196835

>>33196799
His post are all pretty much "Quit liking what I don't like."

>> No.33196853

>>33196762
there is also that very nice urabrask smut, wish that author would write more

http://pastebin.com/vRdgcCDf

>> No.33196856

>>33196796

Take a good, long, look at this, then come back and try rephrasing your complaints in a way that does not make you look like a hopeless douchebag. Criticism is welcome, but blindly lashing out and attacking the people who might actually take your request if they only knew what you wanted from them is in poor taste at best.

http://pastebin.com/1s1fLktL

>> No.33196878

>>33196835
and how dare we have fun with traditional games.

Got my monster manual open to Sphinx by the way. There was someone asking for it a while back.

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>>33196815

>> No.33196900

>>33196878
I think that might've been me, oh gosh my boner can't handle it :3

>> No.33196908

http://1d4chan.org/wiki/Cain_and_Amberley
I think this story is proof enough that r34 fanfictions are a bad idea. It's well written, but I feel everything about the characters is just wrong. they have the names of Ciaphas Cain and Amberly Vail, but, no offense to The Provider, they aren't. They just aren't.
The author has to be an expert on the character to even have a chance of getting them right and even then it won't work unless they manage to mimic the original author's style, as well. Characters from non-print media are an exception, but have the added problem of needing their mannerisms and such explicitly stated to seem accurate.

I've never read an erotic fanfiction of a character I was familiar with that managed to work, whereas the stories produced here (especially the longer ones) are excellent for their ability to get me invested not just in the narrative but in the characters.

Also, using established characters narrows the possibilities for scenarios considerably. You can't have a story with Lara Croft getting tentacle raped by an alien that lays eggs in all her holes because that just couldn't happen in her universe.

Speaking of which, to the author of that "emotionless elf girl warrior and her human traveling companion getting trapped on a mountain story," PLEASE continue.
That goes for the "Roman-themed, voyeur-focused slave story" writer as well.

>> No.33196939

>>33196878
oh yeah you're totally having fun with traditional games
>>33196835
Wrong, my posts are: be consistent with the topic of your threads and with your real intentions, and stop writing in those threads, start writing actual short stories and let people actually interested in writing fappable stories take over smut threads.

>> No.33196964

>>33196939
>I have no understanding of the purpose of these threads
>do exactly what I want or go away

>> No.33196968

>>33196762
Realized my mistake .5 seconds after posting. S'why I deleted mah post.
Sorry about that.

You're certainly not that guy.

>> No.33197000

>>33196908
>That goes for the "Roman-themed, voyeur-focused slave story" writer as well.

this, missing Fubot and Smutomancers work as well, those scripts are nice though

>> No.33197012

>>33196856
You wouldn't do what I request, you'd twist it into a ten-pages-long epic with two sorry dickings squeezed into your purple prose.

I mustn't give you precise criticisms. If I do that I won't get my point across.

if I keep them vague enough it might conceivably give you the incentive to question your approach of writing smut in general, instead of focusing on a few details, and figure out your own way of dealing with the overarching problems I've mentioned.

>> No.33197014

>>33196856
>>33196939
And since I get the feeling you'll overlook it anyway, this section might be of some interest to you.

>This may come as a shock to most of us here, but your job as a critic is to help the writers, not deliver put-downs and rant about how bad they are. It might even be the most atrocious thing you've ever read, but just saying that does nobody a favor. If you just want to complain about things and insult people, try going to /a/ or /v/ instead because even if you're the best writer in the world, nobody's going to listen to you if you act like an insufferable prick. (Yes, this even goes for NiceDaemonette's work. Guy might be a pain in the ass, but at least he's TRYING to write something, which is more than what can be said for most of us.)

It might help if you can provide an example of what a "fappable story" is rather than just demand them. What you consider fappable may be anything but that to someone else, after all, as your own posts have proven.

>> No.33197030

>>33196964
smut:
stories made so that you and other people can fap to them

=/=

stories made so that other people can compliment you on them.

>> No.33197038

>>33197030
that's not smut

>> No.33197076

>>33197030
ah, the problem reveals itself. You don't know what smut is!

google says, "obscene or lascivious talk, writing, or pictures"

So we do that, but about /tg/ things like Dungeons and Dragons.

>> No.33197078

People, please. He' s either a troll or simply an asshole.
>>33196611
The fact that he refuses to even request something with an established character leads me to think he's a troll.
Report, hide, move on.

>> No.33197105

>>33197078
Goddammit, misslinked.
>>33196741

>> No.33197108

>>33197014
No. If I gave you a precise example you'd somehow manage to get it wrong. You'd take only the cosmetic parts into account, or only the general type of characters, or someshit that doesn't make the story fappable by itself. Beside I never said that I could do it myself. The point is that you should stop focussing on "worldbuilding", plot intricacies and anything that you perceive as giving you literary cred, and instead focus on whether or not all that stuff is absolutely necessary to make the sex parts more arousing.
also
>>33197012

>> No.33197124

/r/ing art of the anon always posts that we should all be banned and smut isnt /tg/ related screaming that in the middle of a gimp suit party. i.e., a bunch of gimps/dominatrixes standing around drinking punch and dancing

>> No.33197131

>>33197078
>i'll call him a troll so that I don't have to acknowledge his point
always on /tg/.

>> No.33197146

>>33196797
>I'd say either flesh that out and give it a reason, or leave it out. It feels out of place.
It's to nip any "they'd go insane with no stimulation" arguments in the bud, my logic was that it keeps them in a dreamlike comatose state where they can review their life and think about what they did while they sleep, placed that reasoning in there

>I also feel like the subject should get a Will save as time goes on in order to escape early, but every successive failure should increase the DC.
I had thought about something like that, would +2 for each failure be fine?

>And for the fact that it lasts so long, containing a person, my gut feeling is that it should be a higher level spell but I might be totally off about that and just spacing out.
I also feel it's too low but I didn't want it too high where the order would only have one or two priestess able to cast it/make the tattoos the rest of the order uses, their whole schtick was sending paladins out to try and redeem evil, unbirthing them and re-raising them as their own kids if they won't repent

>> No.33197155

>>33197030
We're not allowed to compliment smut stories. All the people who've fapped to these stories are doing it ironically.

>> No.33197171

>>33196389
Well then that's a pretty damn good reason not to write it, then.
Good luck, amigo!

>> No.33197220

>>33196389
Please do the dragon/adventurer one

>> No.33197262

>>33197146
I think you should say that maybe they experience it as sleep then. Could simplify things then so you don't have to worry about going crazy.

+2 sounds good.

And with the level it more depends on the level of the setting as a whole. Like I remember some book regarding greyhawk saying something like how most people never make it above level 4 in their life, and meanwhile when I'm looking through the forgotten realms campaign setting I feel like holy shit everyone is a crazy powerful master of magic and everything else.

Perhaps only a few high priestesses can cast the spell and inscribe the tattoo (at appropriate exp cost I suppose), but any of their followers with the tattoo can use the spell it as if they have the levels the priestess does.

>> No.33197283

>>33196348
i laughed harder at that than i should have. the writer is a girl though.

>> No.33197322

>>33196343
Here you go http://imgur.com/jSaJ2Mp

>> No.33197324

Couldn't the anon who's complaining just scroll through the stories until he gets to the sex bits? I do it all the time.

>> No.33197345

>>33197324
I often do the same on subsequent reads.

>> No.33197362

>>33197108
Here's the problem.
>you should stop focussing on "worldbuilding", plot intricacies

This is /tg/- we put those things in because we sincerely enjoy them, and not because it gives us literary cred- if we wanted that we'd all be trying to get this shit self-published rather than distributing it freely. What you're asking for is the equivalent of asking /pol/ to let up on the racism, or telling /d/ to stop posting futa all the time- it's directly contradictory to the spirit of /tg/. If this was the Erotic Literature board your complaints would be justified, but it isn't. We're fa/tg/uys first and porn-makers second.

>> No.33197367

>>33197322
>Taldeers face
I went to Farseer college for this?

>> No.33197378

>>33192923
I've got something almost precisely along those lines half completed. Come next week I'll probably share that story along with a different, second one.

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33197409

Okay, I can't stay very long this weekend since I'm all kinds of busy, but I did manage to crank out a fic based on one of Lewdanon's pictures. Also, someone please save every doodle cuteanon does in the flockmod because I cannot be there.

The Golden Nest
With thanks to lewdanon.

Tags: harpyxmimic, cunnilingus, anal, double penetration

Based on: http://imgur.com/xcHsJGf


And reposting the fic I did based on one of Keys' pictures as well since I only got it in at the end of the last thread last weekend.

Eversor Rampant v1.02
With thanks to Keys.
Tags: Vanilla, EversorxScribe, deepthroating, from behind, light on the plot

Inspired by: http://i.imgur.com/tXgRWJp.jpg

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>>33196384
>>33196276
>>33196339

stick to macha and lelith. theres tons of those

and how are you gunna be a dick to writers in a thread they contribute to on a regular basis?

i should write a horus and emperor love story just for you so you can automatically know who the characters are

>> No.33197434 [DELETED] 

>>33197409
WAIT, DON'T LEAVE YET.
You forgot the links to the stories!

>> No.33197469
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>>33197367
this is a nice post because it also reflects my general opinion on the picture posted

>> No.33197502
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33197502

Okay, I can't stay very long this weekend since I'm all kinds of busy, but I did manage to crank out a fic based on one of Lewdanon's pictures. Also, someone please save every doodle cuteanon does in the flockmod because I cannot be there.

The Golden Nest
With thanks to lewdanon.

http://pastebin.com/DMpRAE3q

Tags: harpyxmimic, cunnilingus, anal, double penetration

Based on: http://imgur.com/xcHsJGf

Excerpt:

>The woman’s face flushed furiously as the cool gold slowly rubbed against her sensitive place, her feeble attempts to comprehend the creature before her being ruined as a new thought entered her mind: shiny felt good. She instinctively bucked her hips against the tongue, which took the movement as permission to kick its vibrations up a notch in intensity and slide back and forth over her womanhood with much more fervor.

And reposting the fic I did based on one of Keys' pictures as well since I only got it in at the end of the last thread last weekend.

Eversor Rampant v1.02
With thanks to Keys.

http://pastebin.com/tyWrzm74

Tags: Vanilla, EversorxScribe, deepthroating, from behind, light on the plot

Inspired by: http://i.imgur.com/tXgRWJp.jpg

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Can somebody write some short haired tomgirl stuff?

>> No.33197535

>>33197520
Doing?

>> No.33197589 [DELETED] 

>>33196172
Hopefully soon.

We may not yet be free of /a/ level Quest threads and ERP quest threads, but we're free of dedicated ERP threads and soon Smut.

Baby steps.

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>>33197502
You gonna work on the daemonette one soon? It was getting to the best part.

>>33197416
I think there's several scattered throughout the internet already. And ones with nearly every PrimarchxPrimarch pairing you can think of, and then some.

>>33197520
>tomgirl
You mean like pic related?
I cannot legally be held responsible for any mental scarring caused by this pic.

>> No.33197603

>>33196693
personally, when i read books and they hint at lewdness going on but skip over the sex scene, i nearly lose my mind. The Girl With the Dragon Tattoo didnt do that, and it was a widely loved book. the content and sex should go together. it makes more sense than to leave it out because youre afraid of stepping on some prude's toes or for fear it will negatively affect book sales. Frank Herbert did it in Dune Heretic and holy muad'dib, it was a good scene. i enjoy writing the content more than the sex, but i thoroughly believe it should still be included.

>> No.33197612

>>33197590
Fuck, I meant tomboy. Man I'm almost as big as a tard as chris

>> No.33197615

>>33197262
>I think you should say that maybe they experience it as sleep then. Could simplify things then so you don't have to worry about going crazy.
...Yeah, that works better, more to the point

>+2 sounds good.
Okay, I'm thinking a will save once every two weeks for the first third of the pregnancy, otherwise they end up pretty much guaranteed to get a natural 20 and get out

>And with the level it more depends on the level of the setting as a whole. Like I remember some book regarding greyhawk saying something like how most people never make it above level 4 in their life, and meanwhile when I'm looking through the forgotten realms campaign setting I feel like holy shit everyone is a crazy powerful master of magic and everything else.
>Perhaps only a few high priestesses can cast the spell and inscribe the tattoo (at appropriate exp cost I suppose), but any of their followers with the tattoo can use the spell it as if they have the levels the priestess does.
Looking over similar spells they seem to be about level 8-9, but only let the target have one save, I'm thinking bumping it up to 7 for clerics and 5 or 6 for the clerics with that domain would work best

>> No.33197632

>>33197612
Thought so. I couldn't resist noticing the typo.

>> No.33197637

>>33196762
is that what noose looks like now? its awesome you got some one to draw her for you

>> No.33197655

>>33197590

I'd love to continue that, but right now priority #1 is writing up a story based on cuteanon's sci-fi robutt setting. It should not take long. I will probably have that and the continuation of the daemonette one next weekend.

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>>33197632
Short haired girls tho

>> No.33197686

>>33197590
Fulgrim and Ferrus hatefuck plox

>> No.33197752

>Independence day
>The day the shitposters are free to post all they like
>Old white men liberated my country for this

>>33197637
Yeah warpstuff is one hell of a drug, though he added in the eye-tats in this updated verison
http://33.media.tumblr.com/82a778bcae7ba5985274a880709687ad/tumblr_n6rzstXDob1tdv657o1_r1_1280.jpg
Personally I imagined her a little more tattooed/scarred, even as a daemon, and a bit thinner, but guoh did an amazing job nonetheless. IIRC a drawfag was gonna do the mspaint monstrosity I posted last week, it'd be nice to see what his take on her is.

Still reading Seeds of Chaos, ill let you know my thoughts tommorowish.

>> No.33197808

>>33197686
Well, I found this one with PerturaboxFulgrim hatefuck, does that count?

http://archiveofourown.org/works/1114616

And I found this one, which is Rowboat GirlymanxAll of the other Primarchs. Don't ask.

http://archiveofourown.org/works/985403

>> No.33197847

>>33197752
I'd still hit it.

And, to keep from using two posts, here's a general request to all our writers:
A forbidden love story between Tau of different castes.
Preferably anything except and ethereal.

Their decision to go all out being prompted by a neighborly visit from the Tyranids asking to borrow a cup of sugar and all biomass on the planet would be nice, too.

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>>33197502

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A little something I wrote this week. Might become a series. Adeptus Soroitas Hospitaller finds an injured Black Templar on the field of battle...

http://pastebin.com/RcSigtte

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>>33197808
.........thank you

>> No.33197932

>>33197868
>Hospitaller Sister x Black Templar
Iiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiinteresting.

>> No.33198003

>>33197889
And there's much more where that came from, and an alarming amount of it consists of blatant author self-inserts and unusual crossovers. (Homestuck and Half Life Full Life Consequences? You couldn't find any better settings to stick 40k into?)

Needless to say, that earlier anon's complaints that we should use more established characters ring hollow when the stuff that he'd hail as being precisely what we should be doing is an abortion of writing.

>> No.33198032

>>33198003
>an abortion of writing
Well, yeah. It's fanfiction.

>> No.33198189

>>33198032
The difference between us and them is that we generally have a better idea of what the fuck we're doing and what the setting is supposed to be like. That, and the characters we do make aren't just idealized versions of ourselves.

I also note that none of us has ever accused any of our detractors as being "jealous" or "haters" in recent memory. Let's try and keep it that way.

>> No.33198234

>>33198003
yeah, thats why I stick to the smut threads in general, the ones you linked weren't too bad aside from the occasional purple prose and typos

>> No.33198249

>>33190864
>Once again, what the hell am I doing spending time making this?
Could be worse, this week I dreamed up a Brothel that turns its patrons into busty females for "Contraceptive Purposes" when in actuality the erogenally enhanced forms are to further their secret Feminazi agenda.

>>33190997
>>33191022
Agreed!

>>33191470
>>33192212
Indeed, 40k was originally "put every cool thing we can think of into a blender on liquefy" by a bunch of British geeks, so you ended up with something so stupidly cool it's awesome.
Probably one of the reasons it's so easy to write for, it's everything you've ever loved about the genera in one place!

>>33192306
>>33192967
>>33193029
>>33193119
>>33193201
>Although nowadays they're moving away from trying to be silly grimdark and more into serious grimdark.
Well I like subverting the grimdark myself... Because that is my Fetish...

>>33192306
>Ah, I remember back when I was younger that I was writing down "design specs" for my own brand of mechs that I was trying to be realistic about and impose certain restrictions and dimensions on. Can't really remember how far I got with that thing and I have vague memories of doing some setting description involving Mars demanding independence.
>Mars mind
Seriously, I had the same thinking for a Gundam Setting...

>>33192923
>>33192972
Hell, my Daughters of Peace Daemonically-possessed Leman Russes are rather MILFy by default, what with letting themselves be bound to vessels of Plastasteel to protect squishy mortals...

>>33194589
You act as though this would stop anything...
After all... LOVE CAN BLOOM ON THE BATTLEFIELD!!!

>>33195564
>>33195788
>>33195812
>>33196044
>>33196084
Yis...

>>33195812
>An imperial guardsman fighting chaos forces is pulled into a warp portal and finds himself in Slaanesh's chamber of ever lactating tits. The whole room is made of tits.
I love the tittyroom...

>>33196122
>>33196234
It was this thread.

>> No.33198257

>>33195812
>At a whorehouse, a recent mother finds herself a popular attraction for clients that have breastfeeding fetishes.

>A wizard's apprentice has a habit of not following orders and trying things out before she's ready. Wizard tells her he's working on a potion that grants immense magical powers and she tries it, only for it to make her breasts grow and start lactating.
>He continues to punish her by playing with dem titties.

>A goddess of war and fertility rewards her mortal champion with a suckle, granting him demi-godhood.

>A soldier returns home from battle to his halfling wife. She's still breastfeeding their youngest children and he likes to have a drink as well. This time he's nearly ravenous.

>A lord sexual abuses the youngish wetnurse that cares for his kids.
Alternatively, she's into it.

I really like these. I usually like my women petite, but lately I've been lusting after big busty ladies and these ideas sound amazing.

>> No.33198335

>>33198234
Really? I just picked them completely at random from the tags. Perhaps one of the more...interesting ones would be more illustrative.

I already regret linkiing this. For the author's sake, I hope it's just a parody.

Elderstuck 40,000, A New Hope Rides Alone:
http://archiveofourown.org/works/311465

>> No.33198507

Help /tg/ I need to draw something with monstergirls to break a wizards curse

>> No.33198515

>>33198507
Mantis Shrimp Mer-girl fighting a pistol shrimp girl.

>> No.33198538

>>33198507
Vampire-bat girl and vampire-vampire girl fight over an orc's massive cock.

>> No.33198656

Quick, I can't write anymore. Somebody write something that I can stick my name to and steal all the credit!

>> No.33198678

>>33196384
Troll, I frequent these threads, NO ONE is getting street cred or feeling like hot shit as long as they have my pathetic ass dragging them down.

>>33196693
>producing drivel that wouldn't be published in pulp magazines.
Son, have you ever READ the kind of drivel that passes for Pulp Porn?

>>33197030
No friend, let me show you how you are wrong... WITH SONG!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iaHDBL7dVgs

>>33196762
>>33197637
>>33197752
Wait, which fic was this Daemonette in?

>> No.33198708

>>33198656
http://pastebin.com/bpDdRTg8

>> No.33198792

>>33198708
Jesus Christ, thats a long one. It'll do fine.

>> No.33198809

>>33198708
>>33198792
>The Eye of Argon
Heh.
SFWF, you don't want it.
You really, really don't.

>> No.33198833

>>33198792
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_eye_of_argon

>> No.33198856

>>33198833
I actually wouldn't mind that.

>> No.33198892

>>33197752
Ok I lied heres my thoughts now. Please excuse the disorganized style, I just wrote these down as I was reading.

Lifa seems childish. No control of her emotions. I would imagine Eldar, espcially those on the path of the Eldar would be very stoic; remember the last time they let their emotions get ahold of them?

Im sure you have something in your head to explain her aberrant behavior, but without it she seems way out of character. While I imagine its a bit too late for the Lifa series, considering establishing a character and explaining why they are abnormal first; Lifa's reactions in both this and Marxus IV left me confused and made her less belivable as a character.

Other than that, I do like how Lifa's character seemed less mature compared to her Marxus incarnation. She seems to have a weaker grasp of human language (very similar to Starfire from Teen Titans imo), be less experienced a lover/companion and be even more volatile emotionally (which though I dont think it fits her as a trait, having her be even more nuts when she was younger makes sense). The remark about the Guardian armor slowing her down was nice foreshadowing for her eventual adoption of the banshee's path.

Id really like the situation explained. This sort of backwards storytelling is cute, but when there's lines like "[lifa] loved him dearly...she'd known him for 150 years," I want some context. Eldar and SM arent exactly buddy buddies y'know.

>cont...

>> No.33198918

>>33198892

I like how their mission is being alluded to and gradually revealed, though I know that conflicts with my desire to know WHY this situation is taking place. Consider how your stories are paced and when information is given to the reader; before we know anything about their mission, we know that 2 that would normally be enemies are lovers and are risking their lives to find space stuff. I think if you can balance giving the reader enough info to make the scenario clear but still have that thrill of reveal your writing would considerably improve.

You say 'thru' alot when you mean 'through'

Loved the description of the webway; however breif, it made it much more interesting and intricate then just the interstellar subway system its normally written as. Theres enslavers and shit in there, right?

Physical description of Artemis was nice; its good to see you establish just how BIG this dude is. Little things like that really help set the scene.

>The actual smut
Teasing was great. I like how it was foreshadowed at the start. Definitley liked the consensual-abuse angle. The blackouts were nice, but some more sensory information would have been appreciated. Really dont have anything to add to this except that I wanted more of it. While the bloodlicking wasnt really my thing, the sensory overload was nice, and I see how it contributes to why in Marxus she let Mike lick her; nice bit of retroactive foreshadowing and character development.

>Line 225
Spelled semen as 'seamen'

And yeah, that ending. The firefight was tense and pretty well written, but I DONT KNOW WHAT ACTUALLY HAPPENED AT THE END. I would honestly consider rewritting/adding on to the last paragraph, because I feel totally in the dark about that. I hope that the next installment elaborates on what exactly happened to her, as well as why/how she parts with her soul stone.

>> No.33198942

>>33187612
Did you poop a virgin?
'Cause that shit is tight.

>> No.33198986

>>33198942
Oh Bo.

>> No.33198993

>>33198918
I'm a bit more concerned with the more obvious problem of "will she get her soul stone back or otherwise replaced"? I don't want to keep reading knowing she'll be Slaanesh-chow- it's a real boner-killer.

>> No.33199021

>>33198249
>Could be worse, this week I dreamed up a Brothel that turns its patrons into busty females for "Contraceptive Purposes" when in actuality the erogenally enhanced forms are to further their secret Feminazi agenda.
Well part of the order's fluff is that use the unbirth spell on their own members when they get too old/if they ask for it and because they find women more useful male members get "encouraged" to try for rebirth into a female form. Not immediately though, they don't like unbirthing children (childhood should be enjoyed under mother's loving care) and the religion's teachings encourage large families (both real and "adopted") and free love as long as it's kept in the order, so men are kept around for a few years after they reach puberty/join/marry into the order/ect to father lots of children before the "encouragement" starts, leading to a much higher ratio of women to men and causing men to have a much lower ... "lifespan" I guess you'd call it.

Add that to them having a very high conversion rate among the reborn (even if they remember their past life, childhood is the best time to imprint ideas on young minds) and the order having some variations of the rebirth spell that grant templates/stat boosts (and rumors of ones that may involve a bit of mind control for those stubborn troublemakers) leads to the order in practice having a bit of a female supremacy eugenics/social engineering campaign going on.
Nothing malicious, it's just more useful for the order to have men father children for a few years and then get reborn, hopefully as females, and empower the women so they can go out and "redeem"/convert evil more easily

>> No.33199045

>>33198249
>It was this thread.
You mean last weeks? There was a bit of back and forth about it

>> No.33199082

>>33198918
Honestly I liked it more than Marxus, but it still suffers from many of the issues. It feels out of place, a part of a larger story, though this one stands on its own much better. What I was honestly thinking while reading this was that the story is being told in reverse; first we get Lifa reuniting with Artemis, then Lifa on a mission with him centuries earlier, and likely next we'll get how they met to begin with. And on a micro-level; we are given the characters as they are and their situation first, then the information I would have liked to already know is revealed to me.

Its...an odd way to pace things, and I have trouble articulating what exactly is off with it.

That being said, the smut was very, very good, and after passing the mental hurdle of seeing Artemis and Lifa together I thought their relationship was very cute, believable and likable. The dynamic between the two and how they interacted honestly seemed 100% believable, apart from the space elf and giant mutant parts. A girl I know treated her dog exactly like Tobi and cuddled in sorta the same way, funny. You arent an Asian girl who was recently taken out to a BBQ dinner are you?

I think this series is giving me the same feel as LOST: Its very well done and very interesting, but every installment answers two questions only to raise four more. I only hope this one doesnt shit itself at the end like LOST. Good work overall dusty, but its tricky to puzzle it out as I read it.

>>33198993
Does that stop you from reading deldar smut?

>> No.33199084

>>33198993
Forgot to mention- I think part of her odd character is due to the fact that Dusty chose to essentially pull a Star Wars and begin in the middle of the story- while his willingness to experiment with unorthodox forms of storytelling is laudable, in practice they only really work once all the pieces are in place or if the initial segment the audience is introduced to doesn't have too many elements that depend on the other elements in the series. The first Star Wars movie is a good example of this- despite technically being the fourth installment of the series, its story was able to wholly stand on its own merits rather than relying on the promise that everything would be explained in the prequels/sequels. That's just my two cents, of course.

Perhaps a rewrite of the earlier two stories once the whole series is finished would help with those problems?

>> No.33199140

>>33199082
One more thing: I think the story could have benefited more from exploring Lifa's volatile emotional state; you came close to that with her sudden masochistic teasing and her almost zapping Artemis, but I think that touching a bit more on her overblown reactions to things would help the story, or at least make her seem more consistent. At the beginnings of both Marxus and this story Lifa has an emotional breakdown from something it seems she should be able to handle, then seems in control for most of the rest of the story.

>> No.33199159

>>33192254
Could I get a link to the artist's page? Google has given me nothing useful.

>> No.33199202

>>33199082
The DE have their own way of avoiding being Slaaneshl-food, and as long as they keep satisfying the Thirst and/or have a Haemonculus fix them up they're functionally immortal, so not really. Besides, most of them are portrayed far less sympatheitcally than their craftworld counterparts.

More importantly, the idea of an Eldar losing his or her soul stone (or giving it away, which would be absolutely insane on several different levels) in a way that does not involve dying in the process just makes no sense regardless of what scenario I can make up for it. It's just one of those things that pushes my suspension of disbelief too far. It might be worth considering taking that part out completely if it's not absolutely vital to the plot as a whole, and at this state there's too little info for me to tell if that is even the case.

>> No.33199227

>>33199159
http://kemosyoujyo.blog71.fc2.com/blog-category-13.html
I think this is the artist's blog, but it's in moonspeak

>> No.33199261

>>33199227
Eh, better than nothing.

>> No.33199318

>>33199021
>Add that to them having a very high conversion rate among the reborn (even if they remember their past life, childhood is the best time to imprint ideas on young minds) and the order having some variations of the rebirth spell that grant templates/stat boosts (and rumors of ones that may involve a bit of mind control for those stubborn troublemakers) leads to the order in practice having a bit of a female supremacy eugenics/social engineering campaign going on.
Nice!

>Nothing malicious, it's just more useful for the order to have men father children for a few years and then get reborn, hopefully as females, and empower the women so they can go out and "redeem"/convert evil more easily
Well that's the great thing about conversion, if you are doing it for the other parties "benefit," can your actions really be call malicious?

>>33199045
Yes, we were discussing Dragon Milk and possible Dragon MILFification through breastfeeding...

>> No.33199326

I've been trying to force myself to write lately, but what I have has been shit. I'm not quite feeling it with any of my works. I think I took too long a break from writing and now I can't into it anymore.

>> No.33199367

>>33199326
Bullshit, writing is like riding a bike- you can never truly not into it after you've successfully done it before.

Out of curiosity, what have you written in the past?

>> No.33199392

>>33199326
Sort of in the same boat.

Do what the other anon said and just write. You'll get back into the groove eventually.

>> No.33199394

>>33199318
Any suggestions you would have for the spells/names/fluff? I figured it'd be right up your alley and was a bit surprised you never showed up in the thread the idea was created in.

>> No.33199406

>>33199367
Oh, just a few stuff for the thread here and there. FIlling requests, writing my own stuff from time to time. I co-wrote another story that's been floating around lately (and often gets more praise than any of my short one-offs). I guess I just don't like to keep my tags on when I whine.

>> No.33199431

>>33199326
Are you me?

Scripts don't count

>> No.33199477

>>33199406
Point one or two of them out- I'm sure at least one person on here has read them and would be pleased to give you a helping hand.

>> No.33199573

>>33199326
When I get like this, I go and read non-smut by authors I like. I always get inspired.

>> No.33199630

>>33199477
I usually get all the help I need when things get posted, I'm just not doing well currently.

>>33199573
That's actually a relatively good idea. Luckily, I happen to have Wizard and Glass right here and I'm gonna go read that then.

>> No.33199667

>>33197868
Nice work. I would like to see more of this, if it is in the cards.

>> No.33199732

>>33199394
>I figured it'd be right up your alley and was a bit surprised you never showed up in the thread the idea was created in.
Oh I was there, I just caught it at the tail end.

>Any suggestions you would have for the spells/names/fluff?
I'm in the same boat for names... terrible with them...
I'd suggest plundering them from classic mythology, after all it's chock full of Goddess of Motherhood.
Same with the fluff for the most part, birth hasn't changed that much in the past several thousand years after all.

For Spells, I go with anything Maternal or MILF related, like lullabies that quell violent thoughts or breast-milk that act like a healing potion.

>> No.33199797

>>33192254
Oh god
>breastfeeding something with a beak

>> No.33199866

>>33199082
Lifa is fucking nuts. Its a miracle she hasnt aready lost it in Marxus

>> No.33199887

>>33199630
I'm still curious as to what you've written. Don't be shy.

And before I forget, here's a little feedback for Fictonian on his latest addition to An Unlikely Coming Together:

Your explanation as to the nature of some of the quirks in Tau reproductive physiology is an interesting change from the normal "all xenos have the same general configuration of sex organs as humans do" slant, and it made what originally seemed to be a rather unusual thing (cervical penetration, which in humans is a very bad thing) far more easily stomached than it would have been otherwise Overall, a fine addition.

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>>33199866
>Lifa is fucking nuts

>> No.33199956

>>33199866
So, how long before she goes full Dark Eldar? It seems fairly likely she's on a one-way trip down the Path of Damnation.

>> No.33199965

>>33198678
she was a humie who got blasted by the warp.

>> No.33199988

>>33199732
>I'm in the same boat for names... terrible with them...
Oh well

>I'd suggest plundering them from classic mythology, after all it's chock full of Goddess of Motherhood.
Already doing that, though with a heavy amount of MILFdom added in

>Same with the fluff for the most part, birth hasn't changed that much in the past several thousand years after all.
I think in a world with healing magic birth would be a lot easier at that "period" than it would be in the real world
Also I'm thinking about removing the bit where the spell keeps the pregnancy from bothering the caster and making a domain power for the order that prevents any complications/inconveniences involving pregnancy and birth for the mother (ex; easy births, she can be 9 months pregnant and still fight/move as effectively as if she wasn't, ect), my other domain idea was breast milk as a healing potion but I may make two custom domains for their goddess. A pregnancy/renewal(healing) themed one and a motherhood/child raising themed one

>For Spells, I go with anything Maternal or MILF related, like lullabies that quell violent thoughts or breast-milk that act like a healing potion.
Like I said, I was thinking about the breast milk = healing potion idea but I like the lullaby one, a lot of mind affecting spells could be fluffed as that couldn't they?


Also, now that the thread is past bump limit AND IT DIES UNTIL IT DROPS OFF OF PAGE 10 (I know why no one will post stories now but we can keep discussing them can't we?), I have no problem with taking up posts talking about my horrible fetish order

>>33199797
Now I'm positive Google translate mixed up 2 or 3 sentences but on the creator's blog, he said she uses those to hunt by smothering her prey, or it may have been about her accidentally crushing a few of her riders with her breasts, like I said, Google translate

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>>33197502
chaosbeetle, if you write a story with this girl, ill worship you as the next chaos god

>> No.33200006

>>33199965
You say that like it's a BAD thing...

>> No.33200053

>>33200006
not at all. Francisco first described her as a rather ugly human with some cute if weird qualities. i think the words were "she was not an attractive human" but i could be wrong. the chaos gods blessed her judging from that picture

>> No.33200114

>>33199988
>names
This only works with settings that use "real world" type names, but I have a trick for that:
yearbooks

Just open a yearbook, point to a random person, and take their first name. Flip a few pages, randomly choose another person and take their surname.
Bam.
You have you're characters name.

Filter by gender as needed.

Also, yearbooks (especially college ones) and newspapers are great for character "portraits" if you ever need to describe what someone looks like.

For fantasy names, look in glossaries of fantasy books and change a few syllables of the names you find there. The Middle Earth wiki and sites like that are also useful: just hit random page and take a name, changing it a bit as needed. I've borrowed names of rivers and towns and such several times.

Also, if your setting has established deities, it's fun to alter their names for to give to your characters. Ishana, from Darkest Dawn, is "Isha" with "na" added to the end.
On the one hand, it's easy to do. On the other, it's fairly fluffy because naming children after or for gods/goddesses is (or was) fairly common in the real world and there is no reason why a fantasy setting shouldn't be the same.

For alien names: fuck if I know.

For spell names: when you figure this out, tell me.

>> No.33200196

>>33199956
I couldnt tell you that. she clearly has a very difficult time following the path. i dont want to cut her psychic link though.

>>33199082
I was going to write the story of how they met, but i wanted to break away from artemis for a while and decided to send her to assassinate an ethereal caste tau

people love tau. i like painting them. and now im going to have to spend the next week researching them and hope no one wants to kill me for any scrap of lore i butcher

and really, blood is not my thing, but something clicked when looking at the list of augments marines go through. if im dancing with heresy, why not go all the way right?

and i swear, the words Drive Thru are painted on the ground at fast food places and I had to believe it was the correct spelling for years and years. i thought it was a different word than threw and through. i cant believe i let it slip again....

>> No.33200256

>>33200114
Well for character names I tend to just open up a bunch of fantasy name generators and pick one that feels right.

I'm looking more for a name for the order that isn't order of [insert goddess here] and a name for the spell that isn't [insert goddess here]'s blessing, [insert goddess here]'s mercy, or something along those lines, though I am leaning to something like mother's forgiveness or mother's loving embrace

Of course, given how a lot of D&D spells are named, I could just call it Unbirth

>> No.33200270

>>33200196
Perhaps more like one of those Corsairs then. They're basically regular Eldar in name alone- a few even have the Thirst.

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>>33198918
there are possibly three things in this story line that if i filled the reader in on instead of dropping hints so subtle you can hardly pick up on them, im afraid they would throw their computer out the window.

>> No.33200331

>>33200298
If it's that big of a deal people might want to know ahead of time. Like tags and stuff.

>> No.33200355

>>33200331
yeah, such reveals make or break stories for people

>> No.33200384

>>33200298
>dropping hints so subtle you can hardly pick up on them
What is the point of this? If they are too subtle for the mind of a reader to subconsciously pick them up, then why have them? And if its to foreshadow and prepare for a future event/revelation/whatever then that should be able to be picked up appropriately by the subconscious.

Subtlety through text is a hard thing to manage, and many don't execute it well, usually to their works detriment.

>> No.33200398

>>33200256
This is what happens when I don't follow the chain up to the first post.

For names, how about:
Goddess: Urt the Allmother or Karala or Mera (Hera with an "m")
Spell: The Rubric of Renewal or The Biter Mercy or... no, that's all I've got.
Order: The Grey Sisters or The Conclave of Mercy or Maternia Conclave or The Waysisters

I can see why you're having difficulty, this is harder than I thought.

>> No.33200400

>>33200298
>im afraid they would throw their computer out the window.
Then what is the point of them? Because that makes no sense to me.

>> No.33200406

>>33200331
i dont think it will be that crazy once it happens... but just throwing it out there would cause a shit storm. i think im more excited to surprise the reader than make them feel like since they already know whats going to happen then theres no point in reading it. Like, i love the direction Henric and Alex is going in, but i do not want to know what happens next. The scene where Kerran holds the puzzle and you figure out what it is was amazing and made me shiver with happiness, dread, hope, and anticipation

>> No.33200438

>>33200406
>i dont think it will be that crazy once it happens... but just throwing it out there would cause a shit storm. i think im more excited to surprise the reader than make them feel like since they already know whats going to happen then theres no point in reading it.
I've not yet read the first part and have it open on a tab and your talk is making me want to close it and not read it...

>> No.33200445

>>33200400
i would guess this would happen more in the case of a die hard lore fan than anything, but i cant see them reading much smut to begin with if they couldnt take some bending of the way things work

>> No.33200469

>>33200438
some things that happen later are not impossible, but highly unlikely. it will make for a killer story though

>> No.33200501

>>33200406
If it's just a plot thing, then it's safe to keep secrets.

But if like, the fetishes all suddenly become about poop for example people are probably gonna wanna know ahead of time. That was more my point. I've had it happen before where I've been reading something and it's interesting and all of a sudden people were doing some things I was very not okay with and I mashed the back button.

>> No.33200510

>>33200445
Then you might want to be a bit clearer with conveying the intent of your posts in the future, it read like the computer hurling would concern the story and characters narratively, not the setting details.

>> No.33200520

>>33200501
>I've had it happen before where I've been reading something and it's interesting and all of a sudden people were doing some things I was very not okay with and I mashed the back button.
What a coincidence, I had that happen to me with the very first H&A

>> No.33200529

>>33200520
Didn't you read the tags?

>> No.33200546

>>33200529
First time it was linked that I saw it had none.

>> No.33200550

>>33200501
not gunna happen. the blood was pushing it in the second one. i imagine some rapey stuff and lesbian action sooner or later, and maybe some more alien intermixing.

>> No.33200571

>>33200546
But anon, mask's pastes have the tags at the top of every page.

>> No.33200621

>>33200398
>Goddess: Urt the Allmother or Karala or Mera (Hera with an "m")
I really like Mera, I think I'll use that one

>Spell: The Rubric of Renewal or The Biter Mercy or... no, that's all I've got.
Mother's Mercy? It's nice and alliterative

>Order: The Grey Sisters or The Conclave of Mercy or Maternia Conclave or The Waysisters
I like Maternia Conclave, gives the impression they're still a fairly small group, plus I can use Maternial to denote membership in the order

Thanks, when it comes to stuff like names I always work best if I have someone to bounce ideas off of
Also, still want to know if letting the target of Mother's Mercy have a will save to escape every 2 weeks for the first third of the pregnancy but the DC increasing by +2 for each failure is a good idea

>> No.33200634

>>33200520
I apologize wholeheartedly for that if I didn't put it in the thread (though my very first ever pastebin upload of it as anon still has the tags at the beginning of the story, as have every other version, I just double checked). I should have been as clear as possible and I obviously wasn't.

It was definitely not my intention to freak people out or cause unpleasantness, I usually do my best to spare people because I know it's not a good feeling. I'm really sorry.

>> No.33200642

>>33200621
Note to self, you can put 2 blank lines in between lines in posts but if you put three 4chan trims them out, that also bit was supposed to be separate from the thanks

>> No.33201059

>Also, still want to know if letting the target of Mother's Mercy have a will save to escape every 2 weeks for the first third of the pregnancy but the DC increasing by +2 for each failure is a good idea
Anyone?

>> No.33201082

>>33201059
I'm more of a fluff guy than a crunch guy.
Hell, the only RPG I've ever played was the Warhammer Fantasy RPG.

Sorry I can't help, anon.

>> No.33201167

>>33201141
Yeah, and your DM can change it as necessary too to fit stuff if it ever is relevant to plot stuff.

>> No.33201190

>>33201082
I understand, it'd be easier if I had a base line to work off of but most of the high level "you're imprisoned until..." spells are save or die, not save to escape

Plus it's not like I'm going to run it, though my group isn't opposed to fetishy stuff so I may give it to my group's forever DM and let her change it to fit how she wants it


Forgot I still had my name as OP

>> No.33201218

>>33201190
That sounds like the best. If she's running the game you should let her have final say on how works.

>> No.33201277

>>33201167
>>33201218
Yeah, this isn't anything more than a mental exercise on my part, I like playing more than DMing and she likes DMing more than playing but I just wanted to try a bit of world building, it's not really something I ever intend to be used.
She might use it if I gave the finished write up to her, she's pretty good at working ideas the players give her into the setting, plus it wouldn't be the most magical realm thing that's been tossed in.
It's up there though.

>> No.33201406

It's 4am where I live, so I'm calling it a night.
See y'all in the next thread.

>> No.33201516

>>33201406
5 AM here, I should but I just installed a new mod for civ 5 so...

>> No.33201528

>>33201516
It's 5pm here and I've got to get ready for work. Hurray for night shift.

>> No.33201543

11 in the morning here and I just woke up.

>> No.33201561

>>33201543

Swedefags represent

>> No.33201567

>>33201561
fo sho

>> No.33201588
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Only Hawaiifag reporting in, it's not even midnight here.

>> No.33201603

>>33201588

Hawaii is a mythical place, populated by fictional creatures like elves, dragons and samoans.

>> No.33201617

>>33201218
>>33201167
I guess just one more question then, in the thread that spawned the idea someone was asking if there was a way they could see the finished version and I said I might post it in the weekend smut thread if I finished it this weekend, is it okay if I do that?

>>33201516
Scratch that, I'm going to bed can't plan improvements out, Poland will never take control of the subterranean realm if I work like this (It's a steampunk mod, the science victory is going to the center of the earth)

>> No.33201622

>>33201603
Hawaii actually has its own dragons and dragon myths. Pretty sure there even lizardwoman in Hawaiian folklore.

>> No.33201629

>>33201603
I thought Samoa was the place with samoans.
But what do I know.

>> No.33201727

>>33201622

>lizardwoman

oontz oontz

>> No.33202182

>>33201617
I will take the silence as a yes, if I bother to finish writing it up this weekend I'll post it

>>33201629
My first thought was of the cookies

>> No.33202343

>write something
>seems good
>check beginner writefag guide
>feels like i did everything wrong
>lose the will to write for the day
>next day decide to start writing from scratch again
>repeat process
Why?

Also, unrelated to my writing issues, a few of you mentioned typewriters last week, and it seemed interesting enough to try out. I now have two typewriters I don't feel like using.

>> No.33202371

>>33202343
If you are having doubts post the completed thing anyways. Many of the stories I have shared felt kind of hammy, poorly done, and so on, but a handful of people still seemed to enjoy them.

There are two things that can happen-
A: It's bad, and people help you improve.
B: It's good, and people say as much.

You don't really have anything to lose.

>> No.33202377

>>33202343
don't stop carry on

>> No.33202414

>>33202371
It's like I keep saying, you always find something to dislike about your stuff regardless of how much effort you put into it so it's just generally better to keep on trucking until you write that one story that everybody goes "Hold on here for a second"-

Also you forgot C: People don't say a thing.

>> No.33202426

>>33202414
I didn't have the heart to include it.

>> No.33202446

>>33202426
Due to the fact that my heart is a black lump of coal which means I have no real qualms about adding it.

>> No.33202564

I want the new thread already.

>> No.33202768

>>33202564
Patience, young smutfag.

>> No.33202794

>>33202564
Generally a new thread is made when the current one is somewhere between the next or third thread to be auto-pruned.

>> No.33202843
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Freedom celebration thread for the next one?

>> No.33203055

Here we go!

>>33203047

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