/lit/ - Literature

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>>2514019
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>>2514268
I'm really attached to present tense, for this project only though. But I don't want to be stubborn, so I'll try writing some of it out in past tense and see how it reads. Or read something else in present tense, and maybe that will make me see bad spots in my own use of it that I don't see through vanity-goggles.

>>2514112
I have my reasons for doing that, although they may not be coming across. I'll think about alternatives.

>>2514112
I have my reasons for doing it, but they probably don't come across. I'll think about how to do it differently.

>>2514088
No, it's 3rd person present tense.

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Hello /lit/.

I've been working on a novel for a while. There's only a prologue and the first chapter so far, but I could use feedback as I head into writing the rest.

Prologue: http://landonrode.tumblr.com/post/19886841031/landon-rode-entrance
Chapter 1: http://landonrode.tumblr.com/post/19956582850/landon-rode-chapter-1

Pic related, it's a cover I threw together.

Also, if you want feedback on anything you're working on, I'd be glad to do my best and give you a response in return.

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Hello /lit/.

I've decided to start writing a novel idea I've had for a while. I just wrote up a tentative opening, and I want to know if you think it's effective. Does it pull your attention, does it lose you? From this alone, what are your expectations, and more importantly, do you care to go on?

I understand that people are more willing to give me input if they get something in return. I've got all day, so if you have something you need input on, I'm willing to give you any feedback I can manage in return.

Anyway, here it is:
http://pastebin.com/xs62nJET

>wheat isn't dry and overgrown
It is compared to grass, which is usually green and short.
>What is a shattered hole? a half?
A hole made from shattered glass.
>Surely ripe plums would lie heavy, and shriveled plums... not so heavy?
Heavy doesn't have to mean physical weight, but I wasn't as clear as I should've been if I wanted to use 'heavy' to mean 'malevolent'.

You're the first one to pull things apart like that to such a degree, so I'm not sure how much of a problem I have with that, but I'll keep this sort of thing in mind. If it's possibly to have readings like that I want to avoid it if I can.

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>>2240097
I haven't read it yet, I've only read a bit of Ulysses so far.

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>>2238124
Awe. I love Fire Walk with Me. But yeah, definitely watch the series first. If you loved the last episode, you'll probably enjoy fire Walk With Me.

Oh and if you start getting bored in season 2, skip to the last episode. The creator left some time during season 2 and returns for the last ep which is pure mindfuckery.

So yeah, I don't get how anyone can not love it all, but there are some useful protips for a casual new-time watcher.

>>2238046
I'm actually playing SH2 right now, I'm at Maria in the jail cell as we speak.

I think a SH fan will find lots to love in TP and Lynch, it may not be exactly the same type of thing, but it's in the same ballpark, if that makes any sense.

>>2237974
That was all helpful, thanks a bunch. I always like getting grammar reaction because I still feel nervous about how I use it.

Yeah, I was trying to go for representation of a child's thoughts, but I think I lost hold of that once it seemed to be oversimplifying things.

Plus I wanted to show Ben had a fixation with blue without saying "and blue and blue and blue", but now I can't help but feel I should've stuck with the simple style.

>>2237895
Thanks. I'm the artist, yeah. Anything on my blog that isn't a song or youtube link is from me unless specified.

I guess I'll post mine:

http://landonrode.tumblr.com/

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>>2236875
Yes, what does that have to do with anything, though?

>>2236523
How come?

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