/lit/ - Literature

>>2362293
Hm. How about he falls in love with some girl, and is driving to her house one night, she is out at the store, he hits her, but does a runner without knowing who it is, finds out that it was her, and kils himself?

/lit/, I need your help, I have to write a tragedy story (shortish) and I can't for the life of me come up with an idea.

Help me brainstorm! Thanks.

>>2231489
If you like something that i dont like it means your retarded.

>>2183085
>a single person
>a bunch of highschoolers
oh wow

I don't. What now, faggot?

>>2183023
I am.

Herp Philosophy Derp Derp

>>2115383
Ouch. I'd still like feedback, which was really the only reason I posted it.

>>2115365
Because I wanted the characters to have deep seated hatred for the way they lived their lives and the ones who'd be getting abortions would be the ones that hate the society the most. Most people in the novel would have kids and abandon them immediately after birth (I know this would result in dead baby 99% of the time, but I'm conveniently ignoring this). The ones that get abortions are the ones that don't want their kids growing up in the world they're in. They have a certain hatred for the way life is lived but not enough to try and change it.

Also I want the novel to be completely devoid of any and all happiness. Just people that act a certain way because that's how everyone has acted for quite some time.
>are you honestly interested in what anyone thinks about this piece
At this point not really. Later on, very much so, but at the moment I'm more worried about feedback rather than if someone thinks it's good or bad.

>>2115363
Thanks for the feedback. I chose God because I felt that the characters would all be resentful and believe they're better than everyone else due to their lack of upbringing. I really would like to keep that in it, but I'm very open to different names that I'll do some research on. Abortion God will be in the first chapter and the first chapter alone. From there on I'm not sure where the story will develop to but I wanted to involve other characters joining together with a small group of protestors and the group will grow. Then the protestors will realize they have no idea what they're protesting and taper off one by one, hopefully they'll all be named by the end as well. I wanted there to be a very nihilistic ending as well. I'll work on the prose as you said, but I'd like to maintain a sort of broken English.

>>2115351
The original of that video is why I named myself that for my music, and the Le came from my appreciation of French House music, but that's quite off topic.

>>2115346
It was what I was going after, as the last threeish (not two) lines explain. So shitty gimmick it is

>>2115339
assuming you're not being sarcastic, thank you.

>>2115334
Everyone thinks they are God because of the conditions they live in. And I understand what you're saying against it, but nothing you said was very constructive. Just that it was bad, but not broken, and that it was absurd and wouldn't appeal to many people then just resulted to a bunch of insults, which makes your opinion harder to take seriously for me. I really do apologize if I'm coming off as a twat or superior but I'm trying to explain why I chose to do things whatever way I did them. This was much more experimental than what I'm used to doing and I wasn't sure if I was good at experimental or not. Judging by the reactions, it's not all that great. I appreciate you taking the time to read it though and I really don't want to come off like I hate you for not liking it or anything like that.

>>2115325
>You failed. English is decent. It's sstupid, but not at all broken.
okay

>You don't write for the reader? Okay. Why are you so hasty to publish half a page on a message board if you don't care for an audience? Ah, forget it.
I'm not trying to impress every reader, that would be asinine, I'm not that talented.

>You're a seventh grader, then? Yes or no?
I said I've been writing since then not writing this since then. I'm a freshman in college

>So that's why you refer to the character as "He". You lying piece of shit, no you meant the character to be God, but are a-backpedalin' now.
Read the last two lines of the chapter

>Quit saying you're not trying to impress anyone. Did anyone ask you about your reading habits? No.
Sorry

>>2115327
Indeed. I'm trying to explore more negative ones though.

>>2115317
He perceives everyone as hiding sadness inside of anger.

>>2115304
It's something I should probably work on but my current obsession with Beckett makes me want to keep it in.

>>2115302
>It's an age-old student author excuse: it's shitty... because it's suppsoed to be!

I wanted it to be broken English.

>Nothing else happens to matter. Also, yes you _are_ trying to impress girls. Just go read your shit again.

I'm not but okay.

>Book aren't written to be niche, ever. Books are written to have the widest audience possible. Then, if they fail at universal appeal, they fall in the niche market. That's how it works.

That's not why I write.

>Writing something since grade 7 is called "not going to ever finish it".

This is something I've worked on for a week

>Don't call it God at the first word of line one then, for fuck's sake.

It's his name

>And you already have. The moment your POV character, who hasn't been explicitly established as unsympathetic, called abortion patients "wistful sluts", you have. You may have wanted antipathy for whatever, but you have only earned some for yourself. That's how readers work, you know.

He also gives abortions out as a volunteer and gets no payments for it. He also extends courtesy towards a patient. I wanted him to make a mysoginistic statement, but not be one overall, just saying it out of anger.

>>2115294
no no I realize that. I wanted it to be broken English.

>>2115289
It's not actually God. He called them sluts because they had insulted them. I am in no means trying to come off mysoginistic, but I wanted to create some antipathy towards the character so he's not a perfect man in a fucked world. I wanted him to be just as fucked as everyone else with a sense of superiority over them. Does that make sense or am I a bit off my rocker with the wistful little sluts part?

>>2115279
I tried to write it as if the main character were unable to really talk normally because he has so little interaction with other people.

>>2115280
Not too worried about impressing girls or ordinary readers. It'll be a very niche book if anything. But maybe you're right, I might be too inspired by people like Marx, which might warrant a reaction image in itself.

>>2115282
How exactly is it a procrastinational hike? I've worked on multiple things not just one project.

>>2115277
Been at it recreationally, if you could say that, since 7th grade, I doubt it'll be something I'll drop anytime soon. I appreciate the concern though, and I'm a bit fond of the premise. I don't think that's one I'd drop willingly either.

>>2115274
Because it's an overdone concept? Or?

>>2115272
Well damn, thanks for your warning. I'm gonna keep writing anyways, though.