/lit/ - Literature

>>1402833
>>1402833
Yea I edited the correct form of "they're" on my draft.

I just consider my work always average, like something anyone could write. I feel that every writer has a better vocabulary, and a better flow than I do. Maybes its because I'm so used to my own style that everyone else's just seems more in depth and refreshing.

Bumps for thoughts; please feel free to post your own work

>>1402620
>>1402620
I really appreciate it.

Heres a more pg 13 exert :p
I remember watching movies like Rocky you know? Silvester Stallone, just pushing himself to the limit. He was always overcoming his own demons, and coming out on top. Boxing just seemed like the only sport for me. I was never interested in football. Hell, for the most part I think sports are pretty boring. But boxing, boxing was a real sport. It was never crowded with teammates or fouls, wasting time with constant timeouts. Boxing was relatively simple. Two men stepped into the ring, and only one man came out. I always wanted to pursue this dream, the boxing lifestyle you could say. Everyones always working for themselves. Thats not how my vision is planned out. Everything I do in my life is not only for me, but for my family, my loved ones. When I step into that ring I represent myself, but also my family, my city, and even my country. They all got me to where I am today. It would be selfish to claim I only fight for myself. Its this mindset I hold in everything I do in life. Knowing I’m here for them, allows me to focus on the bigger picture. There’s very few things in life that really make you feel alive then when you go head to head in the ring. It’s just you and him. Three minutes have never seemed so long. The bell rings and your body goes numb. Its the feeling of excitement, the feeling of fear, and the feeling of anxiety. It rushes over you and takes control. It starts in the pit of your stomach and shoots straight to your face. You feel flushed as if you’ve had to much wine. The whole world seems to slowly stop turning, and time itself has been put on standby. Its like snapping a picture and stepping out of your body and viewing the world for what it is. For those 3 rounds; you know your alive.

any others?

>>1402512

I tend to use a certain word phrasing, and I become attached to it and usually forget I used it earlier. Thanks I'll look into it.
>>1402513
>>1402513

Help me understand your point

>>1402493
>>1402493
Can you elaborate, thanks

I had stayed awake in hopes of seeing our plan through. Only to imagine you lying on the mattress with your back arched, slowly gripping your hands around the bedposts. I couldn’t wait any longer. I lifted my feet from the sofa and placed them onto the cold wooden floor. Each step twisted and warped the floorboards of the apartment. Every inch was like a minefield of TNT just stopping our lips from ever touching again. Admittedly, twenty feet have never seemed so far away. How could I let this night end with your smell still lingering on my skin. I wanted more, and I was destined to get it. Only to feel your body once more pressed against mine, as I held you up against the kitchen wall. Hands placed high above your head as chills ran down my spine. I took another step as the noise bellowed through out the apartment. I tried my hardest not to awaken the only obstacle keeping us apart. She lay on her back bundled in blankets by your door. Eyes slowly nodding asleep as if to be awakened by the simplest breeze. I knew I’d have to get past her if I wanted to see you. Her eyes flushed and wavered as my heart beat out of its chest. The cold silence of the night was dim enough to hear my heart beating like a drum. I swore she would be awakened from the sounds of my adrenaline. You wore those lacy black tights that ran up and down your legs and led me in the right direction. Your black panties just dangling slowly on your hips, waiting to be removed. I was almost there, I was so close. I could practically hear you clawing at the door waiting for me.

Thats it, just something that happened to me a couple days ago

A fancy dinner you say? sounds lovely, I’ll see you in a few. These were the words that started our adventure. I walked in the door only to see your sexy black heels staring back at me. The ones with the Lacey straps that delicately found themselves around your ankles, as if waiting to be unwrapped. A yellow shall was the only thing keeping my eyes from fully exploring your body. ‘Hello darling’ were the words that tore my attention away from you. I stood there as a kiss found its way onto my cheek, and warm hand fell onto my lower back. ‘I’m so glad you could make it’ she said softly into my ear. Quickly adverting my gaze, I began to panic. I couldn’t believe she was here tonight. That black dress she wore. Simply hugging those thighs and leaving very little to the imagination. A thousand different thoughts ran through my mind. I was captivated by her charm as I sat back and watched her lips move. Politely I nodded my head in attention as the hostess began to introduce me. One by one I conversed with each woman, only to forget there name shortly. I was obsessed. When she came to say hello, our eyes became intertwined. My hand extended across the table as her lips began to part, revealing a smile and a lower lip ring.

Hello /lit/ first time poster here. I've started to get back into my writing, as a promise I made to myself here. I would like any honest opinions on it. I've always felt my writing as just "average" never felt like I could compete with the big boys which is fine. I could use some help, thanks.

Your nails ran down my back as I threw you against the bed. Each kiss consumed my every thought and had me begging for more. This was forbidden, our lust, which made it even more irresistible. I knew I had to leave, but every time I tried, you pulled me closer against your body. ‘I want you now’ were the words that filled my head as you moaned between breaths. It was taboo from the start, which led to this beautiful disaster. I pulled away and said I’d come back, but you still wanted more. ‘I’ll be back when there asleep, I promise, you know we can’t get caught’ were the words that fled from my mouth as I shut the door.

At any rate.
cheers, smiles and blessingz.
i am goin to sleep.
night /lit/izens.

>>501851
the formal debate is still open and there has been no official statement as to the handling of dyslexics
> things in my ass is a deal breaker
down the hatch !
^_^

>>501823
literacy should be a requirement for any sort of sexual activity, what the hell goes on in your country.

>>501816
i believe the right and proper thing to do is to flip a quarter to see who is top and who is bottom for the first round.
then a pleasant break is in order, perhaps a shower.
then the roles are reversed.

>>501798
>I fail to comprehend your perceived point
so ?
i do not teach monkeys to think in my spare time, but your infuriation is pretty to read.

>>501798
such pretty structure and choice of words
forget those girls i wana fuck you

>>501766
one good joke
(i had an arguement with a tanning salon, i said don't take that tone with me)
>>501766
well i have never into redhead before.

>>501727
Valis then.
thank you fellow /lit/izen.

>>501586
>all night
actual time post 2min
>"baby i am goin to make love to you all night long"
2 minutes

now i see why you resort to porn.
this did take some time for me to think about, you can thank me latter, please4 take your time as well.

>>501661
>>501609
i think i can get this.
(i am so sorry /lit/)

to keep pretentious readers happy

>>501586
i know your talking about my remark about porn
search your heart, you know this to be true.