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Greentext the plot of your new novel, it's not like is going anywhere.

>> No.9180414

>>9180379
>A dog sprouts wings from its anus and begins to fly around the house and yard (ass) backwards
>finally the police and fire dpt. get a handle on the situation, but not before the news arrives and the story makes national headlines
>dog gets its own twitter and instagram, book deal, morning tv and radio show appearances
>after a few weeks, it turns out that the wings belong to an angel, who in the middle of the dogs guest appearance on saturday night live, finally pulls itself completely out to the shock and awe of the live audience and thousands of live viewers of their tvs at home
>you will have to wait till it is published to hear the rest :^) im not gonna give away all the mysteries, suspenses, drama, romance, symbols and twists

>> No.9180467

>>9180379
>it's not like is going anywhere.
>it's not like is going anywhere.
>it's not like is going anywhere.
Maybe you fucks could ever write something worth finishing if you had the creativity to come up with a better opener for these trash threads.

>> No.9180476

>>9180467
>if you had the creativity to come up with
anon... the people that make these threads and look in these threads are just trying to steal other anons ideas
Of course they are aware they do not have creativity, but people will post in the threads regardless

>> No.9180525

>about farmer
>purchases first tractor in village
>finally able to move big ass rune stone away from field
>turns out stone says if you move it you get cursed
>shit starts going bad for farmer
>gets worse as story progress
>eventually even tragic
>farmer refuses to believe in curse
>somehow story concludes satisfactory

>> No.9180529

>>9180476
It's been pointed out before that even if you're that much of a sad pathetic fuck to steal someone else ideas to write an story, the starting point is actually so general that it would end up being two completely different stories. If you believe otherwise you don't really know anything about writing.

Also /lit/ it's actually a place to share and criticize creative writing, so you both insecure plebs can fuck off

>> No.9180535

>>9180379
i want her to spit shine my asshole

>> No.9180540

>>9180379
>Pitch dark in the wood.
>Boy next to a firecamp gathering the ration for tomorrow.
>He can only hear the wind colliding to the high dorest, the chirping sound of the fire eating wood and the grunts and cries of one of the man that he and her friend raided.
>Blood splatter to the sides. One man lay face down a meter from him. Another far behind with his arm sliced open.
>At the end of the cave, he can only figure the muscular silhouette of the 2m orc he's been travelling with.
>Breast covered with thick brown wolf skin. More pelt loosely strapped below her waist. Standing on one leg and another raised. On one hand a battle axe raised over her shoulder. Another one pressing the raiders torso into the large rock thatsupported his back.
>And her hips thrusting into the man, furiously.
>Boy takes the last food ration found on one of the men's backpack
>Finds a knife at the bottom.
>Nervously, grips its handle and raises it.
>Looks back at the cave. His eyes narrows and his grip steadies.
>With disgust in his face, stands up picking his own knapsack with the spoils obtained. Slides his knife into his inner pocket and walks towards the chilling forest.

>> No.9180569

Its about a big pair of scissors.

>> No.9180575

>Girl plays poker
>Most of her income comes from winning big poker games
>Loses to a shitty hand

That's all I have for now.

>> No.9180586

>A boy falls in love with a girl.
Unable to confess, he is gifted with by a deus ex machina with the girl’s phone number. Never minding the strange area code, he immediately calls her, and is overjoyed to find out that she has a crush on him as well.
But, the next day, when he recounts the previous day’s confessions to the girl, she only looks at him with a perplexed expression. After some investigation, he finds out that the girl he called is not the same girl he fell in love with. In fact, she doesn’t exist in this universe at all. She is the girl’s alternate universe counterpart, who has fallen in love with the MC’s own AU self, who too is blissfully unaware of her crush.
Hijinks ensue as the two strike up a deal to give each other their darkest, most private secrets in order to equip the other with the weapons they need to conquer the heart of their other selves. While the two chase their respective loved ones, DRAMA ensues as they begin to fall in love with each other instead and question the NATURE of LOVE.

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9180603

>last year of high school
>Spring break
>Chad and his brother(protag) go to Argentina
>Find Hitler's grave
>Find Nazi technology
>Get VRIL
>Kid gets power to slow down time by half
>Adventure!

>> No.9180637

>>9180529
You can fuck off yourself. I just want somebody to show some originality in the OPs of these threads.

>> No.9180642

>>9180379
>It’a about complicated semi-erotic semi-Platonic relationship: i wouldn’t fuck her but if i got a chance to sneak into her house and smell her panties and jerk off i would....kind of thing

>> No.9180653

>>9180603
>By half
How does that even work?

>> No.9180689

>>9180653
Just imagine The World, but instead of stopping it slows everything in a 1:2 ratio.
8 minute mile to a 4 minute mile.

Gravity like falling goes slower, wind, the whole world. Only his body is the same in the time slower. Also due to this, his strength doubles. So say he long jumps usually only 20 feet, if he slows time and only comes out of it as soon as he gets of the air he'll go about 40, a little less though

>> No.9180721

>>9180529
Look at the first greentext after OP. Look at how original (as far as I know) that concept is. If everything was touched upon, by someone else, the poster of that green text, may as well not right their story. You retard.

>> No.9180763

>>9180637
u can b honest m8, you just dont like seeing those discouraging words, its not like its going anywhere... m8... use it as fuel... to fuel your fire, to succeed

>> No.9180811

>>9180586

Going for some of that YA cash eh?

>> No.9180819

I want her to kiss my feet in respect.

>> No.9180842

>>9180525
Sounds pretty good

>> No.9181074

>>9180379

> Man commits a bombing in a major city
> Afterwards he anonymously posts a manifesto explaining his motivation: the world has lost all meaning due to overexposure to media, technology, etc.
> Nobody notices his manifesto and a bunch of separate terrorist organizations claim responsibility for the bombing (ISIS, anarchists, etc.)
> Bomber gets pissed that no one is hearing his message and tries to draw attention to his manifesto by posting about it online
> Soon the police come to him
> He shits himself when he realizes that him trying to draw attention to the manifesto has put him in suspicion
> The police sit him down and tell him to "stop spreading rumors and false leads"
> Man is at first relieved that he's not going to be arrested but soon starts to get pissed that the police don't take his message seriously
> He has an awkward argument with the police where he tries to convince them that the manifesto is real but that he didn't write it
> Eventually the police let him go
> Three days later, he is walking through town when a bomb explodes and injures several people
> He dies in the hospital hours later
> The last chapter is a news article which states the the main character was the only fatality and that no one has claimed responsibility for the bombing

>> No.9181114

>>9181074
This is pretty good actually

>> No.9181367

>MC is an edgy teen at college
>he's actually pretty inteligent but also a weirdo and thus gets rejected by all his classmates
>reacts the edgy way to this and his classmates hate him even more, ends getting bullied slightly
>bully gradually intensifies, shit starts to get really serious
>hell in earth for the MC
>get to be friends with a gurl who's getting bullied as hard as him by the same group of ppl
>they get close and obviously end falling in love with each other
>actually happy with this gurl
>but bully doesn't stop
>MC really suffering and can't stand it anymore
>Figures out a nasty plan, kill the nice gurl to get the approvation of the bully popular group
>kills her
>?????
>works out... or not

Have been working on this for a few months now, what do you guts think? it is total shit?

>> No.9181409

>>9181367

Eh...it's not awful but it would take a seriously compelling depiction of the MC's mental state and an actually resolved ending. The fact that the last two lines of the greentext have no information is not comforting.

Maybe it's just me but I don't understand the angle on bullying in college. Bullying happens in high school and lower because the kids are basically trapped with each other for 40+ hours a week and have super underdeveloped brains. If a kid gets bullied it's tough luck because he's still going to have class with them for the rest of the year and/or see them on the playground. Constant supervision keeps pushing the bully and bullied together. Also the bully doesn't have any other ways to get kicks than to keep being a jerk, etc.

In college there is no reason for this to happen. If person A is a jerk to person B then person B can just leave. Boom, bullying over. Also the people who were bullies can know get their rocks off any way they want and don't have to channel their frustrations out on some nerdy kid. They can just ignore him.

Obviously it still must happen in some rare situations but when I was in college everyone just kind of lives in their own circles. I didn't see roving gangs of jocks giving nerds wedgies.

>> No.9181445

>>9180379
>Igor runds a mink farm
>Igor goes bankrupt
>Igor decides to build a mink clad zeppelin and crashes it into an famous landmark

>> No.9181472

>MC is a man entering his 30s
>As a kid his stepfather was abusive
>Goes through life blaming him
>Finds out the dad he never knew is dead
>Makes MC resentful
>A year later he learns his stepfather is dying
>He begins to get "flashbacks" about his stepfather
>He is angry again
>Realizes for better or worse he was his only father figure
>Stepfather dies

>> No.9181482

>>9181445
Based Igor
Watch the world burn

>> No.9181501

>>9181409
Thanks for the feedback.

I agree for the most part of your arguments but that's exactly what I'm trying to archive actually, to show how the bullying it's not a thing from middle and highschool only, and how sometimes you see this anomaly happen in college.

Also yes, I'm working on the develop of MC mental illnes, and about the ending thing, I'm actually working on both, haven't decided wich one is best yet. Any suggestions on this?

>> No.9181522

>>9181074
This sounds literally terrible.

Find a new hobby

>> No.9181533

>>9181522

I'm just glad to get a response, friend. Would you mind elaborating on what you dislike about it? How would you improve it?

>> No.9181543

>>9180379

>Two vapid, competitve corporate attorneys can't stop having horrible violent hate sex while trying to undermine each others careers
>There are no underlaying feelings and things do not end up happy, they're just horrible people who do horrible things to each other

>> No.9181571

>>9181472

Decent concept, mate. With good prose, not letting it get too sappy, and vivid scenes of the abuse/moments of good fatherhood this could be cool.

>> No.9181604

>>9181533
I think you should have a secret ending chapter, where the manifesto is finally found, by parents, or whatever, and the connection is made in the news, and the manifesto is so bad and cringy that everyone just laughs, and bonds over it, the bombings stop, everyone across the world holds hands in laughter, marking the day of his death (or discovery) a world holiday, the darkness and meaningless fades and the world begins marching toward a pure, futuristic traditionalism utopia

>> No.9181619

>>9181604
>chapter in a book
>secret
What did he mean by this?

>> No.9181626

>Very small country in the Alps
>Decide to enter the Olympics so that they can become 'big'
>Have almost no infrastructure to do so
>the most athletic people in the country are the convicts
>enter them, why not?
>ex-king/president has to fool the olympic committee into thinking they're competent.
>convicts are going to trying to make a break for it during the games
>a false flag operation is going on and the hosting country is going to bomb the stadium to declare war
>only convicts notice something funny is going on because of criminal past/bored out of their minds
>meanwhile, the ex-king/president is trying to mingle with the bigger countries
>is mocked and degrated
>goes to get his team and go home, only to find his team awol
>kidnapped, country thinks he knows
>team is awol in service tunnels of stadium, trying to survive host's agents
>find president/ex-king
>end up actually doing athletics and saving the day
>president is fed up with trying to be big
>makes a scene, exposing the other country
>earns some respect
>becomes territory of larger country who was ok, but still retain their identity

It's supposed to be a Terry Pratchett/Confederacy of Dunces sort of thing.

Also, no one is named until the last chapter when two convicts are talking. Everyone is referred to by job/status.

>> No.9181641

>>9181619
what, youve never read the secret ending chapter of finnegan's wake, titled "Its Just A Prank Bro" ?

>> No.9181643

>>9180586
That'd be a pretty fun read

>> No.9181703

>>9180379
>Autistic guy who wears a box that looks like a robot in his head hasn't left his apartment for good knows how long
>Gets a letter from someone he used to know a long time ago....maybe (the actual content of the letter is undisclosed)
>Decides to get out of his apartment and heads out to were he was supposed to be
>To get to his destination he has pass some weird forest that may or may not be magical
>Think stalker the movie
>Then he has to take a bus
>I love buses for some reason and i don't know why
>While heading to the forest he meets a qt who also wants to get were she was supposed to be
>They decide to travel together since apparently the path that one has to cross to get through this forest is the same for everyone but the exit leads to where you were supposed to be
>When they enter the forest they find that something or someone is chasing them down
>They also find that entire communities have settled along the path they have to cross
>The people who live in these communities are the people who were afraid of finding the place they were supposed to be and they are not exactly friendly
>As our main character gets deeper and deeper into the forest he start to realize what his life is really like and how he allowed it get so fucked up
>Also bonds with qt
>Yadayadayada something about loneliness, yadayadayada something about chasing things that were (or perhaps not even that), yadayadayada nothingness, etc.
>At the end our character has an opportunity of changing the misery that he has been living in for the last couple of years, but due his obsessive desire for finding something more meaningful that is beyond himself, his past and his future, he exits the the maze that is the forest and fucks everything up for himself

>> No.9181768

>>9180379
>A boy's grandfather dies on that boy's birthday
>the funeral arrangements are all made so his funeral is held on the boy's birthday
>boy was fishing with a friend while this was happening
>fishing montage
>drives to the funeral
>driving montage, funeral scenes focusing less on dialogue, more on the boy's indifference towards his grandfather, but the effect it has on his father
>parents pick up boy to celebrate his birthday and simultaneously honor his grandpa
>birthday party that consists only of the boy, his sister, and his parents
>father needs to clear his head, suggests he and his son go fishing (forgot to mention they either love fishing/do it as a job cant decide which yet)
>fishing montage 2: electric boogalo that is cut short by the father's restlessness
>son comforts his father while a light wind picks up
>the father casts his reel again
>slowly transition away from the family, and into the slow stream, where salmon are beginning their journey back to the distant waterfall

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9181813

>>9181641
Uh, o-of course I have, anon. That's my f-favourite. Who hasn't? Bunch of pseuds in here, th-that's for sure. This place is r-riddled with em!

>> No.9181946

>>9181619
>>chapter in a book
>>secret
>What did he mean by this?
You know like blooper reels after the credit of a movie? Have like a bunch of shit at the end, thanks, publishing info, etc., blank pages, images. and then a few pages, maybe even written in near white, or glow in the dark ink :^)

>> No.9181956

>>9181626
Really good, a great essence, hopefully you pull it off convincingly and compellingly. A lot of neat angles, and things going on, very noice.

>> No.9182034
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9182034

>protagonist is a back-alley doctor to whom wounded criminals and other folks who can't go to a hospital are taken
>has "magic hands" and always manages to save the wounded fellow no matter how unlikely their chances to survival may seem
>became a back-alley doctor after losing his license in an unexplained past event but pretends he doesn't have a license because it's only valid in his country, as he is not American but residing in America
>a corrupt violent police officer starts pursuing his business to try and arrest MC, and asserts a fair deal of blackmail upon him
>the past story of the main character, as he works for a well-installed and nearly ideal hospital somewhere in New Mexico is told
>MC discovers a conspiracy happening in the hospital among a head surgeon and all of the nurses to conduct experiments on the comatose patients to poison and try to bring them back to life repeatedly, also harvesting and selling their organs if they stay dead
>ends up being forcefully taken into the conspiracy
>shit hits the fan and he is one of the main figures to be screwed of this
>rats everyone else out and escapes prison, loosing his license
>becomes back-alley doc in New Mexico
>as he is pondering murdering the officer who's after him, his past comes back to his door as he discovers one of the sociopath nurses is stalking him
>drastic measures and the necessity of taking lives ensue

This was supposed to be a dialogue-centric, very dark black comedy I wanted to write as a play, but I don't know if a novel would be better

>> No.9182041

>nameless narrator wakes up from a falling nightmare
>takes a shower, puts a gun in backpack, walks to school, keeps being sad, thinking about dumb shit
>goes to class, starts to trip balls a little bit while still being sad and loney
>eats lunch, plays piano, starts to trip balls hard
>goes to next class, super sad now
>walks home in the rain
>sits in the dark in apartment for a while, then leaves and buys beer
>drives to nature park
>walks around drinking beer, pondering suicide
>starts raining, drunk now, tripping balls
>walks back to car and starts to drive
>crashes into a ditch
>leaves abandoned car, walks back to town several miles away in the rain
>gets to town, goes to bar
>sits in a back corner drinky whisky
>hallucinates a conversation with a demon that tells him to kill himself
>leaves the bar, gives all his money to a homeless beggar on the street
>hallucinates some deformed spider creature chasing towards him
>fires gun into crowded street to kill the creature
>runs to abanonded building
>climbs to the top of the building fully tripping balls now
>stands around in the dark for a while, goes to window
>jumps out window
>the end

it's going to be the next great american novel.

>> No.9182132

>>9182041
If I could urge you to not even start writing that I'd be doing literature a huge favor

>> No.9182198

>young man graduates college with humanities degree
>gets job at father's law firm as assistant
>meets girl, gets somewhat serious
>girl dumps him because he lacks ambition, not independent from father
>sad for a while, considers maybe that he was trying to hard to meet father's expectations, decides to leave father's law firm and start business with shady friend from college
>eventually discovers ex was cheating on him whole time
>shady friend doesn't deliver on business plans, also fucks over protagonist
>protagonist considers that maybe he was actually trying too hard to meet expectations of ex gf and peers
>asks father for job back
>eventually discovers satisfaction in the law practice, gets law degree, moves up in the business
>relationship with father becomes closer all this time as well, whereas it was somewhat distant, with self imposed barriers while growing up
>finds new gf, gets married has kids
>tries to teach kids the importance of family in personal identity

>> No.9182245

>>9181074
I like it until the last two green texts

I think you can go with something much more interesting
That being said, i have no better ideas as of now.

>> No.9182272

>>9180379

wtf I love Israel now

>> No.9182435

>a young stoic man living in a big townhouse next to an imperial libary
>work in some kind of laboratory but i just describe the impressions of working there
>meets seperately two old friends from his military time
>one friend is like napoleon, the other one like René magritte
>he begins to suffer under the strong personalities and starts to work desperatly
>he discovers something, what he beleaves could be important
>the 3 start to get chased and it ends in 'tradegy'

>> No.9182449

Cecilio Don Arugulo is a latino cyber pimp in the year 2045, and after one of his girls goes missing he finds himself pulled into a massive international conspiracy.

that's all ill give away. this is the next great work of meme literature, after all

>> No.9182476

>>9181768
I like this, its modest

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9182489

>>9180586
when is Abdiel gonna update already? Tomoyuki X Seiko was actually bretty gud

>> No.9182497

>>9181768
That sounds more like a short story than a novel.

>> No.9182935

>>9181604

> futuristic traditionalism

Cogent concept there, bruh

>> No.9183182

>Novelle about a southfrench fisherman that catch tellines in traditional way to grant quality
>tourism and greed in the neighboring city cause the tellines to shrink because they have no time to grow and dont get sorted out
>whole subjekt is just a Symbol for modern art and livestyle seen trough the eyes of the past (this will be not mentioned openly in the book)
>endchapter about how the fisherman carries his heavy telinaire (the tool he uses) on the back because he sold his house and his car
>He has a long way to go to the second neighboring town where his children live
And goes to sleep on theyr couch

>> No.9183417

>when a person is born they have a tether of flesh protruding from the back of their head
>it slowly grows as the child matures and will eventually fuse to what is most important to that person
>the tether can extend and stretch as far as it needs to, and is very flexible, meaning movement is not hindered
>it may also change what it is fused to throughout the persons life, the world is changed to accommodate all of this
>the main characters tether as far as he can remember, never fused with anything, it has constantly been stretching into the distance for his entire life
>after suffering the extreme trauma of the death of his dog, he journeys to discover what his tether is stretching towards

is this a half decent idea or have i finally lost my mind

>> No.9183486

>>9182132
it's already written, and is more than likely better than anything you have ever written, you fat disgusting virgin

>> No.9183492

A bfake biography of a fake writer

>> No.9183529

>>9183417
I'm so sorry, but yeah, you've finally lost your mind. Why the fuck is it flesh? Make it fantastical and make the tether some magic thing, not head flesh, not nonsense Pynchonian hell-taffy that's going to get tangled everywhere and result in arduous hijinks.

The death of his dog is a stupid complication, too.

>> No.9183600

>>9183529
i dont really like the idea of making them ethereal or magical, but to each their own i guess
and the death of his dog is his motivation for his journey. he considered it to be the most important thing in his life, but apparently that cant be true if thats not what he was fused to

>> No.9183904

>>9182034
dig it. Definitely better as novel (and a film, has a no country for old men vibe, there is a lot going on, and a bit of that tv show 'weeds') than play, play would suck all the life out of it, and all the descriptive language you can use etc.

>> No.9184008

>>9181074
Try to publish, I'll buy it. It's absurdist and a good plot. Take it off here so no one steels it

>> No.9184069

>>9180414
oh noes!

>> No.9184082

>>9180535
i'll be next

>> No.9184091

>>9180586
you again?
holy shit, stop posting on /lit/ and write it already ffs

>> No.9184100

>>9181543
rad
i'm in

>> No.9184753

>>9180689
I fucking love time based fantasy stories. That's why I'm very critical with them. Even if its fantasy, I would encourage your to ground that idea a little more.

>> No.9184870

>>9180379
>Bourgeois Parisian 18yo kid sells drugs to other kids
>He is popular, has a girlfriend, is a good student and leads a perfectly comfortable life.
>His best friend just got out of rehab
>Being an asshole, our hero makes his best friend relapse
>He also cheats on his girlfriend, usually with a prostitute who hides his drugs.
>After some party, the main character and his best friend have a car accident.
>His best friend dies. Our main character survives
>He's crippled by guilt. His girlfriend also realizes he cheated on her. She leaves him.
>Our hero is still well liked. He sleeps around a lot.
>He overdoses on his own drugs.
>He eventually goes to rehab.
>He gets out. Tries to get his girlfriend back. They have a conversation, she rejects him.
>Novel ends on an ambiguous note. We don't know if the main character is going to relapse or if he'll be able to live a normal life.

>> No.9184892

>>9182041
I am forced to the conclusion that your MC is stumbling over wayward testicles everywhere he goes. Is this the future of absurdist literature?

>> No.9184951

>>9184091
Mate
MATE

>> No.9184965

>>9182272
How do you get Israeli from mexican navajoian asian/korean ecuadorian eskimoian hondurian 2% ukranian

>> No.9184996

>>9182935
>incase you are attempting to make fun of me because you falsely perceive an incompatibility
>futuristic traditionalism
>Cogent concept there, bruh
>Traditionalism was started way way back in the past
>There are people today who believe in and claim to be and think it is good to hold traditional values
>In relation to when Traditionalism was started, according to the current year, it is now currently, the futuristic future
>cogent indeed, my bruvski

>> No.9185001

>>9180379
>Novel is set in the far future. First wave of space colonization occured 1500 years ago. That space faring society collapsed into a new dark age, civilization is resparked on a continental earth like world.
>Protagonist is a naval officer on board a frigate voidcraft during this second age of space colonisation.
>centuries ago, earth was annihilated by an accidental impact of a craft entering an emergency FTL jump.
>Story takes breaks to explore earlier memories of the MC.
>English exists much like Latin did, as a dead language for studying ancient texts.
>MC patrols space encountering deserted outposts from first colonisation.
>Visits earth to explore the strangeness of learning his history from a world he has never seen until now.
>Reflects on why those civilizations collapsed and whether his civilization will too.
>During a patrol, ship is attacked by revolutionaries who dislike his nation's presence in their space.
>Becomes the captain of his frigate.
>Decides to FTL to a continental world on far fringe of perseus arm.
>releases a false emergency beacon to trick nation that ship has been destroyed.
>Mutinies with crew to settle on world.
I haven't quite figured out how to write it, but I will.

>> No.9185011

>>9183417
Its good. But you are implying the ending, is that it is tethered to the grave plot where his dog is buried?

I mean, you have definitely been watching a lot of anime right

>> No.9185019

>>9180586
I hate that premise.
In all honesty, it's disturbing in its absurdity.
The first time I heard it was late one night after having recently experienced a horrific existential crisis.
The idea of these two people who are so unaware and uncaring in their pointless contact with a parallel universe, in pursuit of a love which is right in front of them, is somehow sickening to me on a very deep level.

>> No.9185038

>white man watches too much cuck porn
>convinces wife to cuck him
>she does
>has sex with black bull
>a month goes by
>cuck becomes frustrated
>next time bull comes over tries to sex wife
>cucked
>kills bull and wife in bout of rage
>now has to hide the bodies and continue daily life without being found out

>> No.9185908

>>9185019
it's a pasta you newbies, fuck off

>> No.9185974
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>Alt universe holy crusades where the fight is getting so desperated that clergymen were getting conscripted to fight.
>run out of clergymen
>start sending out bishops and other more important men of the faith
>Main Character is one such bishop
>Starts silently questioning his faith after seeing all the bloodshed. He can't believe that the same benevolent god he read about in the bible could give the order to spill the blood of others that also believe in him
>he begins to ponder why god would have them kill for the holy land if it belonged to them.
>comes back from the battle for reasons I haven't worked out yet
>ends up voicing his doubt to the wrong person
>imprisoned
>kills the pope

>inb4 le athiest fedora tippan
meme
I'm a catholic

>> No.9186038

>>9185974
A bishop who knows and believes in the God of the Old Testament would have zero issues with that same God sending people to kill each other or sending people to fight for their holy land.

>> No.9186892

>>9185011
i only have a vague idea of where its tethered
and fuck, there isnt an anime thats already done something like this is there?

>> No.9187397

>>9185038
is it based on real events, minus the two last sentences?

>> No.9187406

>>9185974
Good but the drafting clergymen seems like a faulty concept, since they'd probably just send more commoners and gentry. Do what you want tho op.

>> No.9187416

>>9185974
>Starts silently questioning his faith after seeing all the bloodshed. He can't believe that the same benevolent god he read about in the bible could give the order to spill the blood of others that also believe in him
>he begins to ponder why god would have them kill for the holy land if it belonged to them.
Have you read the bible?

>> No.9187512

I am still working on the ideas and haven't written anything 'hard' yet but here goes. Basically, it's a number of small novellas cemented together, set in a fantasy world. Sorry for formatting, on my phone.

>A pantheon of gods forms, similar to the Greek gods in terms of personality, rivalries, alliances, power and human qualities. There are roughly 800 of them.
>They are not omniscient, omnipotent, etc; some do come rather close however.
>Initially, they create for themselves a paradise to live in. They give themselves physical humanoid forms.
>After a very very long time of doing whatever they want - whether it be getting astronomically drunk, inventing things, quarrelling, or spending years having crazy sex - the gods discover they are incredibly bored.
>This boredom is common between them all so in a very rare occurrence they work together to find a solution.
>The result is a tabletop role-playing game.
>It is immense in size and complexity. The board is a simulated solar system, complete with an earth-sized planet. The rules consist mostly of the laws of physics and chemistry, among other things. The planet is in constant evolution from prehistory to the equivalent of the Middle Ages which is where our stories take place.
>There is no DM - the world is self-sufficient and in the eyes of its populace the real universe. It has its own history, countries, monsters, and nature. All gods have agreed to play by the rules or be kicked for thousands of years.
>Each God can control any character they like. Some choose animals, others take kings, others take soldiers. Everything else in the world is considered to be an NPC in the eyes of the pantheon.
>The book's plot revolves around the rivalries between two God-blocs within the pantheon as they attempt to thwart each other inside the game. More specifically, most of the book is short stories about many different player's characters and their adventures.
>As its really a board game, it comes complete with players being asses and doing stupid shit, while the simulated world tries to cope and comprehend it. Other times good-willed players will help the inhabitants in their problems and wars.

It sounds cheesy when I put it like this but within the world it exists in the same way as Tamriel, Middle Earth etc do. It isn't a clusterfuck of 'le game references!!!'.

>> No.9187526

>>9180379

A sort of traveling "televangelist" but set in a fantasy world where gods do exist but pay very little attention to this guy.

>> No.9187621
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9187621

A serie of stories happening during one warm autumn day in Helsinki
>First: A deeply religious and demented old man taking care of his paralyzed son, the tone is light and comical
>Second: A man is woken up hungover in the betonsuburbs by a talking hedgehog and they discuss their differences and lifechoices with the hedgehog coming on top in the discussion and in the end burying the man under leaves for winter as a man watches the scene from a street
>Third: Two men are are having extremely pseudo discussions, mostly comprised of quotes by wiser men, but they also show creativeness by telling eachother stories in a café, until the other tells a story which has a story inside it which has a story inside it etc. until a story told is their reality, and after realizing that, the cafe goes quiet and they notice that all the people have gone away from the restaurant after which the other man also disappears, leaving the other man alone to walk home
>Fourth: A con man considers what he has seen and done today (he sold fraud insurance to the jolly dementic of the beginning, saw a man buried by a hedgehog, people behaving abnormally) and decides to take a walk
>On his walk through the centrum of the city there is a huge traffic and a lot of people walking around hastily and looking worried, but it is strangely silent.
>A man is selling religious things (candels with Jesus etc.), but nobodies buying so the seller stops the con man for a chat.
>They discuss the happening and religion, showing that the "messenger of god" is a fraud too and the fraud also notices that the con man is not really an insurance man either.
>They take a walk to the Olympic stadium and note many more things happening around them, such as birds dying from flight and dropping down, making the fraud nervous.
>The frauds nervousness spreads to the con man, but he grows furious with the weakness that the fraud is showing and kills him by hitting his head with a metal pipe until it's pulp, then, calmly goes to Kaivopuisto, strips naked and goes to swim in the ocean.
>Fifth: A lonely and emotionless cashier gets off his work, gets drunk, harasses people that have been kind to him and goes to his home fortifying himself in by blocking the windows and doors with planks and furniture.
>Through the night he remembers times when he, in his private social games, won over other people and between puking and short sequences of sleep he grows increasingly cold and clinical about himself, his surroundings, things that are happening and things that have happened, building a certain cold nihilistic feel.
>When he wakes up, it is absolutely dark and he cannot tell what the time is and as he feels his way through the darkness he starts to notice that things aren't the way they used to be in his room. In the end he tears out the planks from the windows but everything is black and cold outside too, he can only see his reflection in the window

>> No.9187639
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9187639

A story of an average guy, living his last high school year (not my diary desu, pinky promise)

He is pretty silent and values humility, which gives him an air of honor which others respect
It's mostly because he sees himself as a shepherd and tries to handle other people without being condescending while behind his words he feels he is slightly superior to others
However, his role has created him obstacles. He is too cold and calm to enjoy parties or to establish close relationships, despite attemps at befriending people. When an intelligent girl he has grown fond of is picked right from under his nose by a small, moustached man with strong glasses, he comes to revalue his lifechoices and tries to prove himself that he wasn't wrong about who he was.
In school, the last tests are behind the corner and he must concentrate on them.
On the bus, he sees the most beautiful girl he has ever seen. Later he finds out they are in the same school and seeks her name.
A week before the test he goes to a party, where he finds the girl and goes to chat with her. He is absolutely lost with the girl, he has never felt like this. He hangs out with her and she shows signs of interest.
He rushes through the tests, not really caring about them.
Spring comes along and soon they will have the ending ceremonies. He finds the girl running off with many boys, pretending she doesn't even know him. He tries to take solace in his books, but with the sun out, he feels drawn to the outside world. The test results come and he has barely passed them.
In the spring ceremony, after which they are relieved high school, there are titles given out (Best teacher, hottest girl etc.) and when there are titles of titles of "Cleverest person" and "The schools nicest person" he secretly hopes he would be recognized, but he is served a humiliation as the girl he was fond picks the first and her boyfriend the latter.
During the evening parties there is shot chess and he ends up playing against the beautiful girls new partner, a popular and loud person whom the narrator has made many negative remarks throughout the book. He has considered himself an experienced player, but is completely outplayed in front of all the people in the school, who take it as a sort of victory for "their guy"
Filled with impotent rage over his revealed mediocrity, he drunkenly starts raving how shit everyone in their high school was and how he's glad he wont see any of them. Everybody is very condescending towards him "Don't take it so seriously", until he is thrown out by the only friend he got from the whole school. He passes out on the sidewalk in the cool spring rain.
The book ends with bitter remarks over how there is no dignified in humility and silence, as it is better to be arrogant and loud, hated and loved than to live as already dead. The narrator concludes that he has trapped himself in his character, which he continues to play with no determination in the worklife.

>> No.9187641
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9187641

>>9187512
Sounds interesting

>> No.9187644
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>>9187639
Bruh

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>>9187639
>he secretly hopes he would be recognized
I'm not gonna say I haven't felt this but seriously
Was it autism?

>> No.9187725

>>9187639
Is shot chess really a thing during HS parties ?

>> No.9187767

>>9187725
this, kek

just make him fuck up an all in bluff in poker or something

>> No.9187793

>>9187725
>pleb tier westerners don't play shot chess in high school
I bet you didn't even play it with your dad as a kid

>> No.9187814

>man tries to get into art school
>fails
>decides he would try a political career instead
>tries to force his way to the top but fails
>gets arrested
>writes a book describing his experiences, and the ideals of his nation
>gets released
>gets into power through democracy this time
>tries to conquer the world
>fails
>kills himself
Your thoughts?

>> No.9187816

>>9187814
he should flea to argentina instead

>> No.9187833

>>9187816
That's more than a short hop away.

>> No.9187848

>>9180586
I really wish that this book existed. Well written, this book could have been the YA novel of the millennia.

>> No.9187867

>>9181501
>>9181409
Loads of bullying happens in military institutions, even in medical military colleges. At least in my country.

>> No.9187875

>>9187814
i'd say he definitely did everything right

>> No.9187881

>>9182198
Sounds boring. What's the point?

>> No.9187893

>>9183417
how do people close doors if it's flesh you fucking retard. And if it's really long people would fall over due to the weight.

Make it non-physical otherwise it just sounds stupid

>> No.9187913

>>9187639
>He is pretty silent and values humility, which gives him an air of honor which others respect

>highschool

fucking lol

>> No.9187920
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9187920

>old guy who lived a shitty life (his kids avoid him, he was married 3 times but all his relationships failed, was a simple wage cuck all his life, had been drinking too much since early 20's, no substancial friendships, ends up being a grumpy and cynical fuck, etc)
>some silly nurse accidentially botches up his and some other care home inhibitants medication
>other inhabitant dies on the spot, prot starts to get younger the same pace as he was aging
>not long till he's no longer fitting for the care home and has to leave
>now he's confronted with not knowing wtf to do
>has no home, no family, no job, no social circle, nonidea if he will get younger forever or soon die
>goes to various medical experts and they all tell him that they donmt know what exactly happened or how long he will stay "like that"
>plot goes on about how he starts to live his newly gained life and how he comes to appreciate his "condition" and see it as a chance to try doing a bit better this time.
>shit will hit the fan once he has reached the age he will start to go back to being a teen - kid - baby
>unhappy ending

>> No.9187929

>>9187920
I don't know why, but the idea of ageing in reverse is more terrifying to me than normal ageing

>> No.9187942

>>9187929
it's a pretty uncomfortable experience, yes

it's supposed to make people go "oh HELL no"

>> No.9187946

>>9187881
GAY
DAD
PORN

>> No.9188057

>>9187946
what?

>> No.9188574

>>9186892
>d fuck, there isnt an anime thats already done something like this is there?
No (not that I know), it just sounds anime-y

>> No.9188760

>>9180811
>>9181643
>>9184091
>>9185019
>>9187848
Lit doesnt know memes.

>> No.9189734

>>9180379
wrong

>> No.9189749

>>9185908
>>9188760
I know it's pasta, homo-fellows. Everyone does. I even indicated it in my post.

>> No.9189873

>MC is a village peasant about to reach adulthood in middle ages
>As a child MC always dreamed about being something more.
>Has Introspective thoughts about assorted things.
>Finds out there's someone living in the forest that can take her as a apprentice
>Makes MC hopeful in leaving village
>A few weeks later a murder happens
>MC and her family is to be blamed for the murder

>> No.9190437

>friend dies
>goes home to hometown for funeral
>stays with parents
>nostalgia
>pedophilia
>return to work

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9190680

>>9190437
>>nostalgia
>>pedophilia

>> No.9190724
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9190724

Oh boy. This is really autistic. Basically I am writing out an autistic story from when I was 7 years old. I have written 330,000 words so far and lately I have been trimming the fat and trying to cut it down. But even so I have only covered about 5% of the plot.

Basically:

> two races, the "whos" and the "lice", are at war
> massive planet with trees miles tall, some trees are whos cities
> lice have mountain-range-sized superfortresses here and there
> combat is with effectively spaceships
> ships laying siege to giant tree cities, mountain-rock cities, fighter battles, et cetera
> basically most things in the real world i imagined as part of this story
> story starts out with peter and emily green living in a valley in a 1950s USA like of wholesome world
> lice attack and drive them away
> they join the war against a louse superfortress (which was my elementary school)
> eventually destroy it, become leaders of the whos
> do the same thing again (my middle school)
> have children, Orion and Cassiopeia
> Peter and Emily die in the escape from the middle school when it is destroyed
> this was the last day of seventh grade as i walked out to my bus
> also have myron as a character, friend of the family
> orion and cassiopeia succeed their parents
> their fleet wanders for months before finding Sarengarth, a new tree-city with powerful shields that can last through years of siege
> orion liberates sarengarth from its corrupt ruler
> prepares sarengarth for louse siege
> i imagine first snowstorm of age 13 as the louse fleet descending from the sky
> sarengarth eventually fends off a winter of siege
> go on vacation
> on plane, imagine orion looking out at the carpet of clouds, seeing swarms of louse ships moving east, millions and millions, and realizes the war is futile
> goes to distant ruined nation based on visions he had, finds cave where he has a vision of the whos creating the lice
> cassiopeia dies in a mission to destroy a louse super-cruiser (a vacation when i was 17)
> sarengarth eventually falls to the lice after years of attacks wearing it down
> orion is captured, myron goes into exile
> they eventually reunite after many adventures
> retake sarengarth with the help of whos living many miles underground in huge caves
> orion leads mission to stop louse plague-weapon
> changes it to kill the lice as well, then sacrifices himself to kill the main villain
> his children, leo and andromeda, succeed him
> andromeda is born weirdly and her family's kwisatz-haderach-rip-off powers are magnified in her
> she has full-on wallhacks/aimbot type of shit, and visions of the future
> essentially alia from dune, to be honest
> Leo rises to command of Sarengarth
> a new faction, the progenitors, who were hidden in the hollow center of the world, rise up temporarily
> Leo also infiltrates the louse capital in the deep south.

There's a shit load of stuff I left out. I know it's shitty and cliche but I don't care, I'm not writing it to publish.

>> No.9190913

>>9181626
Kinda like the Mouse Who Roared, too

>> No.9190939

>>9180379
>Story has two protagonists
>An aging BJJ master who moved to America after his sons violent death.
>A sixteen year old boy who studies under the former and is basically his adoptive son.
>The old man's story deals with his guilt over what he perceives as his failure as a father. He hates himself for not being able to protect his son from a reckless life in Rio and attempts to make up for it by caring for and guiding the second MC which he practically raised since he was nine.
>The boys story deals with the lingering influence of his father who was a violent bastard who nonetheless loved him and the extreme fear his mother and her wife have for him due to the similarities between them.
>Very hopeful story. Has a sort of happy ending.

>> No.9191296

>>9190913
I learned about that movie the first time I posted an excerpt here.

>> No.9192363

>>9180379
It is going somewhere, into wordpad files you can sell to the Hollywood writer's guild.
I don't understand how the fucks on this board has been giving away their ideas for free for years.

Back in 2011 when you pointed out that they trying to steal your shit the threads always dies. Now these tumbgay and redshitors continue working for self-publish authors and the writers guild FOR FREE. I guess until you have proof that they stealing (like what happened in /tv/ years ago) you won't stop.

>> No.9193138

>>9192363
>I don't understand how the fucks on this board has been giving away their ideas for free for years.

Because my ideas are shit.

>> No.9193154

>>9192363
>stealing ideas
>selling them to hollywood
Are you retarded? Stealing a fucking writing prompt? Those are free, they're just writing exercises. It's not even worth "stealing" a complete novel if you aren't putting in the effort to market it.

>> No.9193160

>>9180379
>those yellow as fuck teeth

>> No.9193294

>>9193154
Is this true

>> No.9193298

>>9180586
KYOANI DOES IT AGAIN

>> No.9193317

I just got a very nice idea from this thread
Don't worry, it's not yours

>> No.9193344

>>9193138
kys and stop bumping these gay threads (sage when you reply)

>> No.9194739

>>9180525
Reminds of Clive Barker's dickhead story.

>> No.9194782

>>9184870
Sounds boring desu.

>> No.9194840

I WILL finish my novel, and I WILL Get it published. Grow a spine, you self-deprecating cucks

>> No.9195045

>>9192363
wtf, I hate capitalism now!

>> No.9195066

>>9181074
I'm stealing this by the way.

Sounds like it could be good, funny in a morbid way of course.

>> No.9195076

Basically came up with futurama and didn't even realise it, jdimsa. Cryonic wakes up in 300 years time.

Thinking of making it much more political - perhaps 3 characters and their cultural struggles in a new world. Will contain psychology / futurology / political and economical science.

Thinking I might end it all with one bringing with them a deadly virus which new generations aren't immune to but that's horribly cliché I'd imagine.

Thoughts? I've never written a book, no bully but be honest.

>> No.9195083

>>9195076
>Thoughts? I've never written a book, no bully but be honest.
Doesn't matter what you come up with it's most likely it will turn out bad and you'll want to write something entirely different. Best thing to do is just to start writing, doesn't have to be what you just described, just starting with anything and going from there to get a feel for it and so on.

>> No.9195117

>>9195076
If the summary of your book is basically "it's like X but with..." you need to scrap it and start over

>> No.9195320

>>9183417
Too laborious a concept to work. Literary critics would rip it apart as childish and half-assed and no one would be interested in the first place
Its not worse than a mediocre idea in my opinion, but if the synopsis is bad, no one gives it the time of day.

>> No.9196449

>a hermit lives alone within a deep forest
>he possess a magical flask, full of a limitless liquid
>the liquid induces a crippling addiction into whatever living thing is exposed to it
>he has made the entire area dependent on him, grass, plants, trees and animals. they all require a daily dose from his flask
>he does this by pouring the liquid into the ground each morning, and it spreads throughout the entire forest
>eventually a traveler is moving through the forest and happens to eat a mushroom there, which inflicts him with the addiction
>the hermit comes across him and realises what has happened, takes him in and explains to the traveler that he will require to drink from the flask daily or face death
>what follows is a close quarters stand off between the two as the traveler wishes to simply take the flask with him so that he can leave, but the hermit cant grant this request because then the forest he loves would whither and die

>> No.9196486

>>9180586
i never got this meme

>> No.9196489

>>9196486
its an /a/ thing

>> No.9196494

Probobly Google life matter propaganda.

Who cares.

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I got 2. First one's first draft is already done but I'll be rewriting it completely. Second one's first draft is 65% done.

>A soldier within a huge military base is quarantined along with others
>Meets some interesting people in the internment camp but everyone speaks a different language, one of the people is a translator who gets him out
>The soldier figures out that the reason all this is happening that there is a mind controlling entity that the army soughts to understand/use
>He escapes with this entity and grows balls on the journey through exotic jungles and deserts and eventually tundra and disappearing cities
>Tries to figure out if he should continue working with the entity, do shit for just himself or rat out everything to the army
>The entity and the soldier eventually resent each other as it turns out everyone lies
>He can't decide which fate for the world is worse - if the army's status quo where the army lies to everyone and there aren't even any free civillians - or if the entity has enough knowledge to dabble within the world's matrix to do better
>so he fucks the world up for good because he's a fucking retard after all lmao

The other one:
>A failure of a dude in the present is stalked by two ghosts
>They coerce him to rob a bank
>It fails and the dude ends up in a hospital, can't even walk or anything
>Eventually the ghosts return to haunt him once again
>This wreck of a person has to rob the bank again so the ghosts can be alive again
>He does
>The doctor who said he could resurrect them pockets the money but is a scammer
>Protagonist kills him
>Doctor is now a ghost that haunts him too
>fin
>Also featuring: Big gay dude raping the protag, the protag massaging legs of his comatose boss to extract info from him, blackouts, sucking on gasoline, pathologic self-limitations, homelessness, muslamic angels, failed dreams

I like the second one more because it's just a better story. I learned a lot.

>> No.9196768

>>9180379
>2 farmers settle a land dispute
>an old priest tries to convince people that god still exists
>a young man feels emasculated because he hasn't "defended his home"
>a woman buys a derelict fishing trawler and tries to repair it so that she can escape the hellhole that she lives in.
>all of this takes place in a small town the west of Ireland, during the post-apocalypse.

>> No.9196809

>man leaves his abusive wife
>starts trying to get his life together
>has to start from scratch again
>things start going well for him
>starts feeling guilty about leaving her
>starts missing her
>ends up going back, as if drawn to the abuse.
>she beats him to death with a cast iron pan
>that's how she shows her love.

>> No.9196841

>>9196449
I'd read it

>>9196616
I like the sound of the first one but the second seems oddly fetishistic.

>> No.9196894

>>9196809
(CONT'D)
>Neighbors hear screaming.
>they call 911
>police arrive
>wife is staying in her room not saying anything.
>police arrive and arrest the man
>he is taken to the police district to give a statement
>says he doesn't want to testify
>is forced to anyways, due to it being attempted murder
>he goes to his small apartment.
>he loses his job
>drops out of school
>he commits suicide before the trial begins
>wife gets set free, due to her claiming that the husband was unstable, abusive, and controlling of her, and that when he came back she felt threatened by him since he had been abusive in the past
>she cries during the trial
>jury finds her not guilty
>she stops crying and goes home
>she makes the man's family pay for the funeral
>she never attends

>> No.9196959

>>9196841
It isn't supposed to be.

>> No.9197000

I have one nearly completed and ready for publication but keep wavering between two completely different endings, help me decide which way to go /lit/:

>story about man's estranged wife being dead, leaving all sorts of issues unresolved
>plot happens, husband winds up at her point of death

>she is actually alive and we get some sense of closure
or
>she is really dead and their issues will never be resolved

I feel like I've seen plenty of stories about someone losing a person they love unexpectedly but I rarely see those stories examine this angle if the relationship is horrible. I worry that if I have the wife turn up at the end she is too much of a Maguffin, not to mention going against the main concept of the book, but I like the idea of her injecting life into the final bit in addition to getting some closure. Keeping her dead the whole time I have the book start out with their very first meeting, which is vibrant and lively, and then the rest is intentionally drab by comparison.

HELP ME LIT BROS

>> No.9197157

>>9197000
If you want a best seller, choose the happy ending.

I'd you want something meaningful, choose the tragedy.

>> No.9197915

>>9181074
This sounds like it has a lot potential. I agree that there are more interesting ways to end than him just dying. A lot to be talked about in terms of our current situation. The power and surrealness of the media, existential shit, meaning, etc. Go for it.

>> No.9198053

I'm working on two, but the first I've put on hold as to focus on the other one.

book one
>Sci-fi total war on a foreign planet
>hordes upon hordes of ruthless aliens attack another alien planet
>Federation of Planets is sent to fight against them
>story delves into 4 characters: two friends in infantry and two pilots in the airforce, and they have to fight the war in two different eyes
>so far stop at civilian life

book two
>set within same universe as book one
>set in the eyes of the first character
>it's first person and written like a memoir
>still working

>> No.9198090

>>9187867
>forced, confined spaces.
>forced to live with these people for years; can't really quit job

Military is basically highschool+; same kind of environment just a whole lot more stressful

t. Submariner

>> No.9198705

>>9198053
So how close is the first one to finished?

>> No.9198772

>>9198705
Not even close, I just recently checked and I randomly stopped in the middle of a firefight.
What's even funny is that compared with the other works I've done when I was younger, this is one of the longest works it has taken me roughly around 6 years and still running. I stopped writing it because I was still trying to understand the characters. At the same time, I was busy with life, trying to pass community college and trying to find work, and eventually I just dropped it.

>> No.9198832

>guy waits for a nice stormy day to take a hike
>gets to hike without saying hey to strangers constantly
>feels all alone and jumps off the cliff

>> No.9198846

>>9198832
>Ethereal voice sounding remarkably like his father compels him to jump

>t. Kafka

>> No.9198905

>>9180414
Holy... I want more

>> No.9199124

>>9190939
what's BJJ?

>> No.9199128

>>9199124
blow job jockey

>> No.9199319 [DELETED] 

>>9199303
>my friend has a pretty incredible and elaborate sci-fi story in his head that he's been creating since he was a kid. unfortunately he has no writing skills and suffers from psychopathy and ADHD and is barely a functional human.

>> No.9199335

my friend has a pretty incredible and elaborate sci-fi story in his head that he's been creating since he was a kid. unfortunately he has no writing skills and suffers from psychopathy and ADHD and is barely a functional human.

>> No.9199649

>>9199335
would read

>> No.9199689

>>9199335
Then steal it and write the story yourself. It would be a waste of a good idea if it's just gonna stay bottled up in some dipshit's head otherwise.

>> No.9199704

>>9199335
interview him and record what he tells you about it, sounds like gold

>> No.9199708

>A young man named Norfael lives at a breakwater stemming from a small island
>Weird light appears from the windows
>He loses a flask, a fishing net and other necessaries like plants during that night
>Finds another person called Dreanseay. The world's very disparate and it is rare to see other people. They are excited and share their experiences
>Meets with another man named [something], who wants to write a book about people's behaviour in the future
>People from the present get together to write about how people in the future should behave, and why. This includes Norfael
>Norfael turns away from them for increasingly longer periods of time; he is followed through the pastoral wasteland of the small island
>A familiar light from earlier shines upon him, while he was outside and travelling
>The man's a decadent designer who remains anonymous
>Designer is looking for books on mechanics
>Norfael has none of those books, but gives him a draft of the document he and his acquaintances were creating to shape the future.
>Designer has drastically different plans that don't concern people at all.
>Wants to build a cairn and an artificial hill to landmark the anthropocentric victory over time, and states that sea levels are rising
>Discomfort for Norfael
>Meets another man who wants to erase anthropocentric effect entirely.
>Norfael refrains from telling him anything about the novel he and his acquaintances are making
> The two haven't met each other, but Norfael has the sensitivity that the two meeting would cause both of their ideas to be negated
>Norfael begins writing a book on the dangers of having people from the past dictate what people in the future should do, but hides it
>Period of desolation of Norfael
>Meets with acquaintances. They were travelling around and looking for him
>I don't k n o w w h a t happens next

>> No.9199717

>>9199708
What

>> No.9199722

>>9199708
Oh, I know
>Norfael finds a book from the past that dictates what should happen in the present.
>It is really far away from prophecy and almost everything written in the book is the complete opposite of current behaviour

>> No.9199766

>>9199722
Hold on...
>Norfael tells them about the two people of inverse wills
>They have all agreed that they will write a passage for what they do in the future, and plan to pre-determine much of what they will do with the rest of their lives
>Norfael doesn't participate in this, but starts acting in accordance with the past-book

>> No.9199769

>fall of the persian empire
>since this isn't /his/: combo of a long war with byzantium, internal coups and strife, and conflict with the muslims lead to them getting conquered by islamists
>historical tragedy
>last king is 14-17 years old for the final years of events
>everyone fucking dies, and dies horribly
>betrayals, coups, assassinations, lies, rape, and good old pillage and burns
>also, persian heavy cavalry

>> No.9199866

>>9197915

Thanks for the feedback, dude. I don't necessarily feel dead-set on the ending so I can think about other possibilities.

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9199984

>Tale of a southern family
>Used to be a successful but tragedy destroys it from within
>One chapter told from retarded man's point of view
>One chapter told from frustrated romantic, suicidal man's point of view.
>Another told from /pol/ user point of view
>No temporal continuity, uber confusing.
>Illustrates the curse and demise of the American south.

>> No.9199989

>>9181626
very archaic and familiar man...sorry :/ hope you can modernize it in some way

>> No.9199996

>>9199984
qt pupper

>> No.9200165

everyone here sounds like an unoriginal talentless hack

>> No.9200180

>>9181703
Sounds kind of cliche but the story in general is not bad, if narration it's good, could be very alegoric in a good way, I'm thinking in something like The Tartar Steppe, sadly, something like that requires top tier writing skills

>>9187512
Sounds good, but I'm curious of how you plan to set up the whole pantheon introduction thing, if it is the conventional way, you will waste a lot of pages on something you don't really want to describe, and will also affect the structure of the disconnected short stoires you want to paint. In the other hand, if you do it very quickly it will prolly sound very stupid or will lack crucial information. So what's your plan?

>>9189873
hardly a plot, just a starting point / opening. Not bad btw but gotta listen to the rest

>>9196449
More like a short story and also very childish and pointless, however it's not THAT bad, and if you're trying to go after easy YA moneys, then you prolly should write it

>>9196768
ignoring the last greentext which is fucking retarded, this is actually pretty good,I'd read it if the prose is good.

>> No.9200239

>>9199984
>/pol/ poster
lol, actually Jason is far from being that fucking retarded

>> No.9200253
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9200253

>>9200165
Brilliant contribution

>> No.9200567

>>9200180
With regards to the post-apocalyptic Irish town, that's more or less something that I'm using for thematic purposes only. It's never outright stated that something serious has changed in the world, just that things are more dilapidated, more weathered than they aught to be. I considered simply setting it in an earlier era, say the 1910s, but I ran into roadblocks with the trawler and the priest plot lines. It's hard to justify a lack of faith in the era of "good old catholic Ireland."

If you've ever read Martin McDonagh's Leenane trilogy, or The City of Bohane, that's more or less the feel I'm going for.

>> No.9201673

>>9196489
I know the origin but i still dont get it.

>> No.9201740

>Young man joins SS in 1936
>Training and then camp guard
>Transfers to Gestapo and fucks around with Christians
>Sent to Waffen-SS in the opening of the Eastern Front
>Observes and participates in killings of Jews, Communists, mentally ill, etc in cooperation with death squads
>Injured and transferred to Adolf Eichmann's department where he helps deport Jews from numerous countries, all while smoking his favorite brand of cigarettes
>Blah, blah, more executions, interrogate those who tried to kill the Fuhrer, bla blah, Warsaw uprising
>In Berlin during the oncoming Soviet Siege
>Breaks out of Berlin and is captured by Americans
>Interrogated and eventually identified
>Thousands of live are put under his responsibility but testifies at Nuremberg and only receives 3 years
>Ends with him traveling back to Berlin to find his family

>> No.9202091

>>9180535
i want to spit shine her asshole,
3 times a day at least,
for the next decade or so.

>> No.9202485

>>9201740
>is a Nazi
>stop-tour of nasty shit the SS did
>"ve vas only following orders!"

So what makes your story unique? What's the interesting, incisive observation you're trying to convey?

>> No.9203122

>>9180379
>A Vampire has an existential crisis after reading some assorted philosophers and discovering that he's just a spook for whatever society fears at that moment in time.

>> No.9203129

>>9180379
>a female cute bounty hunter who has absolutely no sign of badassness, is just a cute girl that happens to be a bounty hunter

>> No.9203236

>>9203129
she'll get raped and her remains dumped in some sewer her first "hunt".

>> No.9203489

>>9196486
it's a weeb thing with subtle cuckold fetish

>> No.9203509

>>9203236
imagine being this cucked

>> No.9203720

>>9202485
Well of course he does observe and participates in a lot of the usual business of genocide and such other atrocities, but he never blames others or pins responsibility on someone higher up. He accepts responsibility yet does little to provide remorse over his actions. At the same time of accepting his actions, he takes the choice of doing little time and fading into oblivion than actually take a death sentence which is most certainly would have been given to him had he not fallen into American hands. One of the main things I want to show is of course the banality and neutrality and ordinariness that the mass killers and organizers of the mass killers had in themselves as they were only human too. There will be no bias at all as just about every major player in the war did some nasty actions. For the German that I let tell his story and the Germans around him in the story, I wish to show not the stereotype of the horrible beast that with depravity killed because Hitler showed them the so-called evils of Judiasm or that the master race must prevail against all, etc. No, I want to show that the Germans, especially those who took part in genocide and war crimes during the course of the Third Reich, didn't kill for pleasure or for achieving a goal. At that time, mass killers under the Third Reich killed because it was their job, something they figured had to be done and would get rewards at the end of the day, beer, cigarettes, etc. And those who glumly killed and suffered from suicidal tendencies or breakdowns right after. In short, I want the story to be an exhausting, unflinching, unforgiving, long one, and not just about those who killed under the Reich but also about the humanity, the ordinariness, inside them all as they were just the same as those they shot or burned or gassed. I feel like a faggot for writing all this

>> No.9204496

>>9201740
>testifies at Nuremberg and only receives 3 years
Where's the part where is he tortured, castrated, forced to sign a false confession and then hanged unceremoniously? I thought you were going for historical acuity.

>> No.9204550
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9204550

>tfw you realize your novel is literally just Don Quixote

>> No.9204565

>>9204550
Jankon Betoni :DDDD

>> No.9204566

>>9204496
You haven't read a lot of SS memoirs or studied any documents of either German, English, American, or French documents have you? Yes torture was used with SS but only if they were proven to be major criminals and were usually deprived of food, not allowed to sleep for a few days and maybe beaten with a hose nozzle in a few cases where the SS men were spitting at their captors and such. But, for the most part, SS captured and interrogated by the British and Americans were treated like well you know captured prisoners. Many SS officials were happy to provide any information so long as they don't get extradited to any Eastern country, thus deals were usually struck. In exchange for not being swapped prisoners and sent to Russia, SS officers provided useful information ranging from observations of massacre to files on the Russians or simply how their departments and offices functioned. Take the case of the SS general Eich von dem Zelewski, the man who commanded the killings of Poles in the Warsaw uprising. In exchange for testifying against his superiors in Nuremberg, he was given a small sentence and left prison 1949. The man who had responsibility over 100,000 dead Polish lives and tens of thousands of Belorussian peasants killed by his troops during partisan raids,and whom it was proven he did, was allowed such a small sentence and let go. So, are you going to continue using Stormfront or reading book by revisionists to study the history of the Third Reich or actually read some very fine material like the Rise and Fall or The Nuremberg Trial or even Raul Hillberg's the Destruction of European Jewry

>> No.9204687

I'm writing a video game (Total conversion, not lore friendly), it will have 12 different endings but this is the main idea of it:

>Game starts in a Renaissance Italian-like city, the player has a distinct marking on face
>Find out the local Religion finds the marked people of the city holy
>Upon death, some people change into creatures, they start as rabid carnivores but become more intelligent and deadly over time
>Only the marked men can become doctors, a role that involves normal physician jobs like finding ingredients and creating cures.
>Doctors are also expected to track and kill any corpse that disappears
>Player joins the doctors, but quickly finds out there are many conflicting stories and opinions in the city, and to 100% trust a witness or book can lead to certain death
The game will have you going to 4 large parts of the city, each stage itself is larger than the vanilla cities. Gameplay will consist of detective work, stealth, research for dialogue, and resource management, for yourself and for bribes. Story can be approached in almost anyway, serious roleplaying.
>Navigate the highs and lows of the cities politics, crime, games, and choices as you solve a mysterious string of deaths
>At the end of the game, the player discovers blood from a marked mans death needs to be ingested to prevent turning
>Based on the choices you make over the course of the game, the ending will reflect your mistakes.
>Most endings are gruesome, from being executed while watching your home burned, being exiled to a faraway land, to overthrowing the republic and using the undead to cleanse opposition in the city
Trying to use the medium to my advantage, the gameplay itself will be most of the story, your choices reflect on the people around you.

>> No.9204862

>>9199769
>Fall of the Sassanids
>Historical tragedy

Pick one

Sounds interesting though, I would read it

>> No.9204963

>Man lives isolated in the middle of nowhere, at a small breakwater
>Loses most of his useful possessions in the night and can no longer survive out there
>Travels in search of the thief, and meets a woman called Dreanseay and a man called [not sure yet].
>[not sure yet], Dreanseay and Norfael begin to work on a project together, to recommend and promote behaviour to people who aren't born yet and advise them
>Norfael, a bit homesick, once leaves without a goodbye to look for his stuff
>Finds a decadent designer who lives in the prairies and lives off the fat of the land. He wants to design something that will be significant of human existence long after when they go
>Norfael also meets another man who wants to make sure the shameful legacy of humans is abolished and humiliated. He is a studier, digging up holes, lifting ivy from trees, and recycling man-made items
>[not sure yet] finds Norfael and cajoles him to come back. With reluctance Norfael agrees
>He observes that no longer are they writing the behavioural book to people in the future, but concerning themselves as well.
>The novel ends with everyone but Norfael, the designer and the studier following the behavioural guide they have made for themselves restlessly.
>Norfael isn't a victim of following the book as he found tome from the past that also outlines what actions he should take under what circumstances. It is much more various than the guide the others created
>Norfael becomes convinced that everyone's minds are moving in a deterministic line except him, despite their invention of a frustrator such as the behavioural book, allowing them to do what they told themselves to do

>> No.9205365

>>9204566
>only if they were proven to be major criminals
Torture is used specifically because you can't prove guilt.
>But, for the most part, SS captured and interrogated by the British and Americans were treated like well you know captured prisoners. Many SS officials were happy to provide any information
How about some historical facts to shed light on how post-WW2 german prisoners were treated.
>The prohibition of hear-say evidence was suspended. Second and third-hand testimony was admitted. Prisoners were kept in solitary confinement for up to five months. Many of the German defendants had teeth knocked out. Some had their jaws broken. All but two of the Germans, in the 139 cases we investigated, had been kicked in the testicles beyond repair.
Source: JUDGE EDWARD L VAN RODEN, Chief of the Military Justice Division for the European Theater, official investigator of the Dachau War Crimes program. Just to make matters clear: that's 137 crushed testicles out of 139 investigaed case. But by all mean, go write your book about the souless and bored WW2 german murderer who admits all his crime and receives a slap on the wrist.

>> No.9205470

>>9192363
Is there any quick round down on the /tv/ incident?

>> No.9205508

>>9205365
>Torture is used specifically because you can't prove guilt.
I should have rephrased, many major war criminals were already documented in the big list called CROWCASS which already had tens of thousands of names of big and small time offenders. When I mean't proven I talked of identity
>How about some historical facts to shed light on how post-WW2 german prisoners were treated.
Oh don't worry, there will be plenty of post-war observation of the treatment of POWs, I am working on a scene right now. It is true Waffen-SS regular infantry were treated worse than their officers and beaten and slapped and so on by the allied, a lot of the time the British. And of course there will be the the rape of German women and children which is not so much accounted for in other books
>The prohibition of hear-say evidence was suspended. Second and third-hand testimony was admitted. Prisoners were kept in solitary confinement for up to five months. Many of the German defendants had teeth knocked out. Some had their jaws broken. All but two of the Germans, in the 139 cases we investigated, had been kicked in the testicles beyond repair.
Yes that did occur in the Malmedy trial, but you understand most of the defendants were below officers and many of them noncoms which refers back to where I said it was mostly those who were not officers who got it the worst.

As said before, I will do as much as I can to show the brutality of all sides. It might not be to your own liking, but I assure you I have not bias to anyone. The Americans after the war let mass murders and organizers of mass murders go free and even recruited or collaborated with them, the British did the torturing of the POWs in their own jails in the Netherlands, the Germans and Russians are self explanatory, and the French, well, they just shot a shit load of people for simply not giving resistance to the Germans out of fear for their lives. Arguably though, German POWs were treated pretty badly by the Americans when left in huge shitty rundown camps without shelter and little food and water. And yeah American investigators had a nasty way of interrogating their captives,often sending them to the Brits at the torture centers. But, for officers, especially those with vast knowledge and willingness to stab their former superiors in the back, they were, like my character, were yes, given a slap on the wrist and they usually went on with their lives. One war criminal who had tens of thousands of Poles killed even became mayor of a town. Fuck I am really annoying for writing all this shit aren't I?

>> No.9205644

>>9205508
So first it's only high profile prisoners who are tortured and now it's only the low profile regular prisoners who are tortured. Your character just happens to be in that magical sweet spot that allows you to write a book about a bored soulless german monster who destroys live by the thousands and gets off with a slap on the wrist. And your main argument is that it totally happened to one guy. Okay. We don't need any other tl;dr post. I feel we've said everything necessary here.

>> No.9205670

>>9192363
>>9205470
I'd like to hear about that incident too.

>> No.9205795
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9205795

>a man who is charming yet without true empathy
>goes through life using people an manipulating
>one day he has to make a choice, one that will effect the populous
>it's his chance at redemption and he knows it
>he doesn't take it
>for the first time he feels
>for the first time he understands
>but its too late.

first lines:

If at first you don't succeed; cheat. That was the legacy left to Thomas. That was the legacy that Thomas left to the Earth.

>> No.9205971

>>9200165
agree

>> No.9206092

>>9205644
I guess so. May the better man come out :^)

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>>9184965

>> No.9207161

>>9207152
maybe israel deserves "greater israel"
>tfw my /pol/ is showing

>> No.9207163

brb, stealing all your ideas

>> No.9207184

Okay heres mine. A short story to build an origins lore for a trilogy. Rip me apart. Feel.free.to steal, it's supposed to be mythological so I don't care.

>Be in the first cycle of the universe
>Be a race of conscious autotrophic creatures of negligible senescence
>Live hedonistic for the first millenium
>No one dies out of age and Very little die from sickness
>Practically immortal
>Start to wonder what is beyond life
>Phase of ascstism where they explore ways to die
>Find out they can live up to 1500 years
>Suddenly they have a goal post
>They begin a crude form of meditation by watching sulfur oceans ebb and flow
>Become spiritually attuned
>Collectivism for the sake of the individual
>The individual lives for the sake of himself and then the collective
>Practically no evil brethren
>Have a long range view of life, where day to day matters
>They enjoy life for the first 300 years and become depressive or feel the existential void creeping up
>Older folks help them by passing on the truths of life

>Be merry and living ethically and blameless
>Suddenly an advanced species of insects (akin to space pirates in Metroid series) plunder parts of their world
>They for first time experience fear
>They make like a tree and observe for 20 years
>Insects never went away
>Wait 30 years, still the same
>Realize insects are mortal after 80 years
>Finally after much deliberation they decide to wake up and talk to the head insect
>Insects were startled that there's conscious life
>They magically communicate using mindstreams
>The insects were both scared and happy they aren't alone
>Insects were surprised they stood patiently for a 100 years while their planet was being plundered
>They offer their spiritual wisdom to insects
>Insects offer their technologies
>Become one master race spreading the ultimate philosophies of trees using the technology of insects
>Be the first civilization to have multiple galactical settlements
>Be the longest living civilization in the universe history

>> No.9207531

>>9207163
>tfw people think he is being ironic

>> No.9207672

>Ever since the death of her Grandfather the MC is troubled by nightmares as she approaches adulthood.
>As days goes by the Nightmares become more and more vivid and far more violent than the last.
>One night she awakens to the sound of a cloaked individual in which they offer their help for a price.
>She agrees before the price could be named
> Each night, she visits a memory from someones past to help her understand her nightmare. She will visit four in total for that will be the price.
>Each Memory will have a introspective meaning to her situation
>She struggles to find the true meaning to the memories and how it reflects to her nightmares
>As she goes thru the four memories she starts to remember her own memories as well
>Its at this point she understands her own situation and the meaning of her nightmares, but is shocked and disgusted that she pushes them back subconsciously
>As they near the end she must pay the price for the help she needed.

>> No.9207690

>>9207163
ok, but as long as you're RIGHT BACK

>> No.9207765

>>9207163
And? If you can turn a general idea into a good story then more power to you.

>> No.9208232

>>9207161
Well they are our greatest ally

>> No.9208260

>Set in São Paulo
>Zombie outbreak forces all the rich out of the city and into the Favelas

it's a horror/comedy

>> No.9209887

>>9208260
Meh

>> No.9210382
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>Small town in Mid-West/Southern United States
>Strange phenomena where trees are bending dramatically begins
>Grass leaning almost perfectly horizontally
>Breezes begin to blow downward and shadows are slightly offset
>Locals react to this in various ways (not focusing on religious commentary)
>No more contact from outside world
>Town is cutoff from outside world because of paranoia, strong tornado like winds
>Protagonist can only cope with this ordeal by pretending it doesn't exist or just ignoring it
>Protagonist soon tries to escape town but only ends up in the same place every time
>Becomes passionate in setting the town free and makes various attempts to break free or get rid of the strange occurrences (the town begins to call it "the weather")
>Tornado shows up and everybody dies while being blinded (it is somehow very deep and philosophical)

>> No.9210415
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9210415

>>9207161

I'd be her good goy.

>> No.9210460

A pedo wakes up one day and discovers that he no is no longer attracted to children and has grown a conscience. He is then driven mad by guilt.

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9210882

>>9180586

YA trash. You'll go far.

>> No.9210939

>>9210382
I'm pretty sure I've heard this plot before somewhere.

>> No.9210991

>>9181367
It's very unrealistic for a girl to be bullied harshly unless she is horrifically ugly as well as socially autistic at the same time. And for that to be the case in your story, it completely unravels the "falling in love" part because no one would ever fall in love with her, not even a desperate nerd. Maybe make the main character have vision problems?

>> No.9211027

>>9210991
Remember Ciara / Eliza from /b/? She was damn nuts and also kind of cute, so I'm thinking on something like that for the character.

>> No.9211036

>>9190724
If you're not writing it to get published, then for what reason? Who will read it?

>> No.9211079

>>9211027
But she wasn't bullied. She had tons of male orbiters and I've spoken to her myself before. She has a lot of friends, and has had several boyfriends before. She's just a smart whore who knows how to manipulate low self esteem virgin betas into buying her stuff off of her amazon list and helping her stay relevant on r9k (not so much recently anymore as she's fallen out of favor because of better more good looking underage whores out there).

>> No.9211098

>>9211079
Well, correct me if I'm wrong but i remember her saying that she was bullied, and also told that she was fucking ugly at schoo,l even when she wasn't (this had prolly something to do with the fact that she went to a school for niggers lol), and that was precisely the reason that lead her to inmerse herself on the internet / 4ch. I think there were even a post about it on her blog a couple months ago.

>> No.9211138

>>9211098
She was lying man. She does that. Very often. But actually, this is a pretty good idea for you. When you write your novel, have the female character pretend to be bullied and hated, and warp the low self esteemed main character into falling for her lies. Then her death would actually make more sense, because then he would finally see the truth and cause him to snap.

>> No.9211262

>>9211138
haha fair enough man, that's actually a good idea, thanks for the advice.

>> No.9211582

>far, far future scifi
>universe is dying
>nothing but black holes left, and those are decaying
>humanity lives in small ships that are ultra-dense computers that simulate their minds
>trillions of people simulate their own universes under time-dilation while the universe succumbs to entropy around them
>they have a subjective eternity to live out their fantasies, simulate their own universes, do abstract mathematics just for kicks, whatever
>eventually people start deleting themselves out of sheer boredom
>moves between the perspective of a bunch of different characters
>eventually focuses on the last few lonely consciousnesses that haven't deleted themselves
>devolves into inane, senile ramblings on the nature of consciousness, what it means to be human, immortality, etc

I'm not going to write it because first off, I'm pretty sure it's actually a dumb idea and I'm an idiot, and second off I'm not smart enough to write anything interesting about the philosophical questions I want the characters to be thinking about.

>> No.9212380

SETTING For the Series (?)
>Fantasy world. post-war period.
>Major wars in which Various Magic Orders, were on the Brink or Rendered Extinct and the few Survivors are scattered thought various places in the continent.
>small number of Survivors who escaped the Various purgings(Which was initiated after the end of the Major wars) grouped together and became the Mage Collective
>Church Starts Forcing all those who are able to use magic Into Isolated Dwellings where the church will take care of them.
>now the Mage Collective travels from settlement to settlement, while various hunters (Bounty Hunters, Bandits, Robber Knights, People who hate them) trying to collect the reward
PLOT For the First Novel Possible Multiple P.O.V
First P.O.V of Four
>First Character is a Peasant who was discovered to be able to use Magic was Promptly Taken away by the church.
>Is getting used to the new life now. But Privately wants to leave.
>Starts to Question as to why she had to leave the Village (Not knowing of the purge)
>some of the other Inhabitants are getting getting adjusted, some are rowdy, a minority of them even resisting.
>At this Point during working the Fields, First P.O.V Spots a person that isn't part of the Dwelling or part of the Church.
>The Next day Same thing. This Goes on for about a week,
>A part of her wants to Talk to that person. Another Part wants to tell the Church's Knights, And another wants to Leave this be.
>Person spots her looking at him, Promptly tries to do her work.
>Other Person is having none of that, They Strike up a Conversation in which left her Curious
>This Talk and meeting up with one another goes for days until the person simply ask if she wants to leave.
>Eventually the People in the Camp rise up agaisn't the church go to far, Church is force to act
>limited fighting, but mostly her escaping

>> No.9212474

>>9180525
Le egyptian mummy curse.jpg

>> No.9212526
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>bunch of college students go to Armenia
>MC is one of them but starts to get alienated from them
>in Armenia he spends time with some qt he meets there
>decides to stay and just work at hotel with qt
>can't get along with her father
>qt and father get into massive argument and father gets shot
>they flee back to America
>live with MCs mother who is very argumentative and dismissive
>try to make it but she ends up getting paranoid and leaves him
>has an abortion, he returns to college

>> No.9212538

>>9212526
i like the ending

>> No.9212609

>>9180689
The antagonist should have King Crimson but he only erases time by half.

>> No.9212702

>>9183417
I'm digging this. Sounds unique.

>> No.9212709

>>9201673
In threads like this one where people post ideas for potential anime in the future, this one in particular just took off after one guy spammed it in every thread and other people starting trying to be the first to post it every thread.

>> No.9213374

>>9205795
Lol, touche my man, touche

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>>9211036
I don't know. I just feel a need to keep it somehow. This story means so much to me in such a strange way. Like my life is one long journey, but this story exists alongside it. Like having this stupid thing I did in elementary school, be something I imagined years later with the same character on a plane ride out west, looking out at the clouds imagining it was a huge fleet of ships moving through the sky to attack. Then years after that, I am at a college to volunteer with something, and one of the nights I am staying there I walk around outside with music in my ears and imagine a battle I've been building up to for months.

It's autistic as hell but I feel it. Most other stories I observe with a cold detachment but this one is mine and I care about it, as shitty and cliche and boring as it is.

>>9211582
Actually a good idea if you execute it well. Just write it with a sense of self-awareness, and make it interesting with some kind of plot people would care about. Maybe one is considering deletion suicide and the others are trying to talk him out of it.

>> No.9214170

>>9213675
>Actually a good idea if you execute it well.
Thanks anon. Problem is that I've never written anything before and I'm pretty sure I'd end up with a mess. I guess the right choice of action is to suck it up and start writing, worst case scenario is that it's terrible but I get some valuable experience.

>> No.9214382

>tfw you turn into a bug and your family just wants you to fucking die

>> No.9214503

>>9214382
>Reading some highly lauded "modern masterpiece" by some sniveling beta
>Aaaaannd...... KABLAM he turns into a bug hahhaha
fucking dropped

>> No.9214837

>>9214170
You can always post it here and people will shit on it for you until you either get better or kill yourself. Hopefully the first one.

My writing is shite too but I didn't throw it away I kept rewriting it. Now it's still shit but I am happy with it.

>> No.9215959

>Fantasy novel
>No idea what kind of world it'd be but there was a fuck load of magical beasts that roamed about, humans hunted them to extinction for sport and to make magical clothing or jewelry or to augment weapons.
>Plot largely follows a group of people who once worshiped God of this world in the wrong way, via human sacrifice, God got pissed at them and sent everything imaginable to make them stop but the worshipers considered it their sacrifices were unfavorable so they killed a girl in their village who happened to be God's favourite. God got pissed at them and cursed them with immortality. The book largely follows them as they go on a quest to end their immortalities

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>people are better at job
>wife seems to be depressed
>no ambition to change
>wife leaves
>feel indifferent
>mfw

>> No.9216357

>19th century
>there's a big man
>works on merchant ships
>keeps to himself
>contracts anew each time he alights, doesn't want to be grounded
>dies in foul weather at the end

>> No.9216463

Hey guys, I'm not really sure how all this works and I'm curious. Let's say I get off my ass and write my book, and I edit it aggressively and try to get it to a state where it isn't a total abortion. How do I go about the process of getting it published? What are my chances? I hear about authors having to send out their books to tons of different publishers before they get their break. Is this because it's a crapshoot, or because their books were actually kind of terrible? How are the odds for your average author if they're really dedicated to getting it published?

>> No.9216538

>>9216463
write under a chinese or african name

>> No.9216666

>>9216463
Ideally, the one thing you should do it's get a literary agent to reprenst you (one as good as possible ofc), but, obviously, first you will need to send your to work to him and convince him that it is worth publish, then he will get you in contact with publishing houses and try to get your work in light. There's also this other way that you send yourself your work to different editors, but unless it is a YA big money potential, you will likely be rejected, more so considering the anon patron that tend to think that their first work can be a 1000 page novel rambling about pretentious edgy shit with a pseudoposmodernist tecnique.

>> No.9216823

>>9216666
nice quads m8
>1000 page novel rambling about pretentious edgy shit
yeah but MY pretentious rambling is actually good

In all seriousness, thanks for the advice. I don't really know why I ask - I don't even have anything written and I doubt it'll come to fruition, but I'm curious nonetheless.

>> No.9216848

>>9216357
Mmhm

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ANON
Yes, you. The anon reading this right now.
write a page of your novel now
drop whatever you're doing (unless it's super important I guess) and just bang a page out. Doesn't matter if it's terrible, just do it anyways. Edit it afterwards. The only way you'll write this book is by starting.

>> No.9219000

>>9187512
I actually came up with a separate idea while reading this. How about:
>Same premise, bored gods in humanoid form
>decide to play table-top game
>however, each god's solar system is a separate universe.
>so in essence, our own world is one of 800 in a table top game basically for the fun of the gods
>god with the most successful universe wins
>manipulation is allowed, but not interfering with free will.
Is this good? feel free to take it

>> No.9219060

>>9219000
>manipulation is allowed

I don't understand what that means , i understand that the beings that aren't manipulated have free will but for the ones that get manipulated that would be predestination which conflicts with free will , explain how that works?

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>set on an island like Easter.
>document the background of the island as belonging to a primitive, barbaric folk.
>White invaders come to the island and express surprise over encountering the natives, which the natives feel when seeing the whites.
>We do not know why the whites have come.
>The story focuses on the interaction between the two groups, showing how the whites come to place themselves in a position of leadership over the natives.
>Tensions rise, with each faction planning to oust the other in some way. The whites use the natives for slave labor and decorate the island grandiosely.
>The white leader should be murdered by a more ruthless leader who threatens extermination of the natives wholesale, believing that the population of the natives threatens the existence of the whites, who will inevitably become extinct if something is not done.
>Everyone is opposed to him, and yet he is able to hold sway over everyone through the use of fear.
>He casts himself as a god to the natives and takes advantage of their primitive cultural practices in order to get them to venerate him as such.
>Many relics, idols, and ritual structures are created for this purpose.
>He creates an opulent palace intricately carved out of stone and resources imported from old world traders.
>Most of the native population serves him in this capacity, while most of the whites continue to conduct trade and work as taskmasters.
>They are in contact with others from the land they came from. It's from there that they are able to import the kinds of supplies and materials that aren't found on the island indigeneously.

That's where I am so far. Now to start..

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Makoto discovers a message written on a blackboard at her high school, she inadvertently falls upon a walnut-shaped object. On her way home, Makoto is ejected into a railroad crossing when the brakes on her bicycle fail and is hit by a train. She finds herself transported back to the point in time when she was riding her bicycle right before the accident. Kazuko explains to Makoto that she has the power to "time-leap", to literally leap through time. At first, Makoto uses her powers to avoid being late, getting perfect grades, and even relive a single karaoke session for hours, but soon discovers that her actions can adversely affect others.

Consequently, Makoto uses most of her leaps frivolously, to prevent undesirable situations from happening, including an awkward love confession from her best friend Chiaki. Makoto realizes that she has a numbered tattoo on her arm indicating the limited amount of times she can time leap. Using her remaining time leaps, Makoto attempts to make things right for everyone. When Chiaki calls Makoto to ask if she has been time-leaping, she uses her final time leap to prevent Chiaki's call. In the meantime, Makoto's friend Kōsuke Tsuda and his new girlfriend, Kaho Fujitani, borrow her faulty bike. Makoto attempts to stop them, but because she had just used her final leap, she arrives too late to the crossing only to watch them get hit by the train.

A moment later, Chiaki freezes time, telling Makoto that he is from the future. He explains that the walnut-shaped object is a time-traveling device, and he used it to leap through time hoping to see a special painting that is being restored by Kazuko, as it has been destroyed in the future. While walking with Makoto in the frozen city, Chiaki also explains that he stayed longer in her time frame than he originally planned. Consequently, he has used his final leap to ensure Kōsuke's existence and has stopped time only to explain to Makoto what the results will be. Having revealed his origins and the nature of the item that allowed Makoto to leap through time, and now unable to return to his own time period, Chiaki must leave. Makoto then realizes that she loves him.

True to his words, Chiaki disappears once time resumes. Initially distraught by Chiaki's disappearance, Makoto discovers that Chiaki's time-leap had inadvertently restored her time-leap: Chiaki had leaped back to the time before Makoto used her final leap. Makoto uses it to safely leap back to the moment right after she gained her powers, at which point Chiaki still has one remaining time-leap, and recovers the used up time-travel device. Makoto explains her knowledge of everything and shows the device to Chiaki. Makoto vows to ensure the painting's existence so Chiaki can see it in his era. Before Chiaki departs, he tells Makoto that he will be waiting for her in the future. When Kōsuke asks her where Chiaki went, she says that he went to study abroad, and that he made a decision about his own future.

>> No.9219393

>>9180586
nice meme friend

>> No.9220787

>>9194739
Cock head rex?