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5136567 No.5136567 [Reply] [Original]

Where can I share my poetry so that a lot of people will see and rate it?

>> No.5136607

No one likes poetry anymore. Share it here and the 5 people that come to this board might read it.

>> No.5136654

>>5136607
5 people lel

>> No.5136695

>>5136607
Ok.

Oh him, he died lately,
Seized by floods amid a hike,
But woe not, he left sedately,
'Cause he told me what it was like,

Enticing, he said, the end came quick,
It spared me from all you useless pricks,
I'll long for the tree's, the hills the blunts,
But now I'm spared a sphere of silly fucking cunts,
Sobriety sucks, society's fucked, my essence went to dirt,
Now I'm free of anguish, there's no such thing as hurt,
No loathing, fatigue, or cemented system chains,
But a placid refuge of silence, it sometimes even rains,

Aghast I was to hear it, this is what I said,
In harmony you are, not having to fucking get out of bed,
You fortuitous little prick, help me to transcend,
Why not ask if you could've taken a friend?
You see the frost was your benevolence,
Your death was your glee,
Demand it not our severance,
And instead our ecstasy,

Alas, don't be assured, leave my quarrel aside,
Bitter of me to concede, but I have terribly lied,
Before I continue to tale, or I run too far ahead,
Relent my misgiving, I only wish I could talk to the dead,

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5136713

>>5136695
>But now I'm spared a sphere of silly fucking cunts,

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5136719

>>5136567

And sadly did he shake his head
poetic verse taken for dead
by plebs patrician only in name
illiterate readers making /lit/ lame

Oh! I'd yet to discover
this board's like most - bored with the lover
for in their hearts passion had died
in their mothers' basements along with their pride

>> No.5136731

>>5136713
ya man, i wrote that beacues that's what he called us.

>> No.5136742

>>5136719

actually aimed at
.
>>5136607

>>5136695
You're perhaps a bit too angry and it messes with your verse.
You're taking out anger, and it sounds a tad juvenile. I'm sorry I've not much helpful to say, I'm no poet or analyst. I think you've potential, the concept isn't bad.

Work on execution.

>> No.5136745

>>5136695
I wouldn't write that shit on here you'll just get tons of trolls. It's good, but poetry is dead. Turn it into something else. Sorry for your loss if the poem is true.

>> No.5138245

>>5136567
Facebook.