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[Anonymous No.4313906]

rate this super random poem i wrote about my ex-girlfriend, if it doesnt belong here let me know where it does!
I never really had a doubt that you were the only one for me. Now I’m one 2 knees begging you please. I was the boy you adored only to be the man you destroyed. I tried my hardest to keep the flame alive, but you inconsiderably put it out. I was with you and you separated me, I was by you and you disowned me, I was yours and left me out at sea to drown. I was yours to hold but you let your hand slip. Call it a change of heart, call it what you want, call it a crushing blow to a first loves promised kiss. Smashing to pieces all expectations of what love was supposed to be. Lost in a labyrinth of despair and dismay. The only light guiding the weary traveller is the hope of a warm embrace that will never come. What was once his now belongs to the next man, feelings passed on without any warmth or heart. He now watches as the one flame he kept lit for longer then all others, not possible by any heart without the length of loves he kept under lock and key. Stretched and compressed he no longer is motivated to continue his quest for the love that was never his to keep. Instead he tumbles even further into the abyss that is his mind, losing his way. For the mind is the darkest place in any human. Blinded by the ignorance of what love was supposed to be, knocked on his side by the comfortably placed seat he thought he would never fall off, made oblivious to those around him. Brought to his knees by the one he trusted the most, made a fool by the one he thought would never laugh, made heartbroken by the one he thought would never leave. Now as he tumbles deeper into the pit that is loss, He sees no way out. Then to find out she will forever be in arms reach but in another man’s arms. Forever gone, forever lost, forever remembered. ps justin vernon

[Anonymous No.4313914]

This doesn't belong here. It belongs on /hm/

[Anonymous No.4313947]

>>4313914

[Soup !!LK/t/ZGKXY4 No.4314047]

cringeworthy

[Anonymous No.4314101]

you tried too hard in bad directions

3/10

[Anonymous No.4314112]

Pretty bad op. Love poem general I guess to save this thread. Here's one I wrote recently.

you hooked your arm into the space
between my soft torso and my rigid
elbow and i let my hands dangle
and collapse
i wondered why i did that

you stood up on the curb
commanding kisses from above
and i kissed you but felt like
i didn't want to
i wondered why i felt that

you laid down nuzzling your face
into my chest, running fingers
across my stomach
i wondered why you did that

no one else had

[Anonymous No.4314128]

I wrote a song after my ex-girlfriend broke up with me... but I don't feel like the lyrics are that great on their own, they hold up much better with the music.

But in the interest of helping to salvage this thread, I'll post them anyway:

Years ago, I saw you laughing, lookin' up at me
Remember when we went rowing, you were lost at sea

Chorus:
I saw it the moment you left me
I knew when you walked out the door
The silence inside will infect me
Your lovely would fall through the floor

It's childish to think I deserve it when I can't imagine that life anymore
But nothing can help me to find my way out of this beautiful hole in the floor

Still asleep, I can still, hear you, calling me
I lie awake, and I can still, feel you, caressing me
But then it's 10am, and I don't, see you, feel you
Let the day sleep in, 'til I've got nothing at all left to do

[instrumental]

Let me have this dream...

Chorus two:

I saw it the moment you left me
I knew when you walked out the door
The silence inside will infect me
Your lovely would fall through the floor

It's childish to think I deserve it when I can't imagine that life anymore
But maybe I think you can help me to find my way out of this hole in the floor

[Anonymous No.4314317]

>>4314112
Yey.

The seats, you noted, were still down by the side.
“Have you just given up,” you laughed,
“On taking passengers?”
In good faith, you asked the question of me;
Serendipity,
that rubbery old mistress, made it yours in accusation.

[Anonymous No.4314508]

"Your love is like bad medicine
Bad medicine is what I need
Shake it up just like bad medicine
There ain't no doctor that can cure my disease"
Bad medicine