Evidentally chickentown

[Anonymous No.4226091]

rate my poem.

the fucking cops are fucking keen
to fucking keep it fucking clean
the fucking chief’s a fucking swine
who fucking draws a fucking line
at fucking fun and fucking games
the fucking kids he fucking blames
are nowehere to be fucking found
anywhere in chicken town
the fucking scene is fucking sad
the fucking news is fucking bad
the fucking weed is fucking turf
the fucking speed is fucking surf
the fucking folks are fucking daft
don’t make me fucking laugh
it fucking hurts to look around
everywhere in chicken town
the fucking train is fucking late
you fucking wait you fucking wait
you’re fucking lost and fucking found
stuck in fucking chicken town

[Anonymous No.4226092]

the fucking view is fucking vile
for fucking miles and fucking miles
the fucking babies fucking cry
the fucking flowers fucking die
the fucking food is fucking muck
the fucking drains are fucking fucked
the colour scheme is fucking brown
everywhere in chicken town
the fucking pubs are fucking dull
the fucking clubs are fucking full
of fucking girls and fucking guys
with fucking murder in their eyes
a fucking bloke is fucking stabbed
waiting for a fucking cab
you fucking stay at fucking home
the fucking neighbors fucking moan
keep the fucking racket down
this is fucking chicken town
the fucking train is fucking late
you fucking wait you fucking wait
you’re fucking lost and fucking found
stuck in fucking chicken town
the fucking pies are fucking old
the fucking chips are fucking cold
the fucking beer is fucking flat
the fucking flats have fucking rats
the fucking clocks are fucking wrong
the fucking days are fucking long
it fucking gets you fucking down
evidently chickentown

[Anonymous No.4226096]

>that revolutionary rhyming scheme
>that subtle use in the repetition of the word "fucking"
>that mindblowing symbolism
Submit this to a publisher now and become the new poetry wizard, OP.

[Anonymous No.4226101]

I like it a lot.

[Anonymous No.4226100]

>>4226091
>>4226092

[Anonymous No.4226105]

that was great op

[Anonymous No.4226106]

>>4226091
>the fucking drains are fucking fucked
>the colour scheme is fucking brown
>everywhere in chicken town
>the fucking pubs are fucking dull
>>4226092
Go to bed John Cooper Clarke

[Anonymous No.4226111]

>>4226105
U got bamboozled

[Anonymous No.4226119]

I actually enjoyed this a lot. 8/10
Got anything else to share?

[sMk !ArcH9WpopA No.4226126]

honestly gr8

[Anonymous No.4227564]

>>4226091
8/10 from me as well, i had a genuine laugh!

[Anonymous No.4227577]

best thing i've read today
not even kidding

[Anonymous No.4227587]

Its legit good.

[Anonymous No.4227591]

I enjoyed reading this

[Anonymous No.4227597]

Fun.

[Anonymous No.4227603]

>>4226091
Good poem, good rhymes, good rhythm, -- but only considered as a character monologue. It's Larkinesque, though the visual parts of the poem aren't up to Larkin's level.
You need to give it a good title, indicating the character. Also punctuation or stanzas might help, the block it's in is too much with all the repletion.

[Anonymous No.4227608]

Are you people so dumb that you don't even realise that this is a poem by John Cooper Clarke?

[Anonymous No.4227614]

>>4226091
chickentown is Kairo in Egypt!!

[Fandroid !p6ktXMpsfc No.4227627]

>>4227608
Figures.

Way too good to be something written by a /lit/izen.

[Anonymous No.4227630]

Did anybody else read this with the cadence of Sober by Tool?

[Anonymous No.4227637]

>>4226091

It reminds me of like a modern-age "We Real Cool" by Brooks. It's got that simplistic, urban feel to it.

[Anonymous No.4227645]

>>4226091
>anywhere in chicken town
wat

[Anonymous No.4227657]

>fucking fucking fucking fucking fucking fucking

[Anonymous No.4227668]

>>4227627
hey. i've seen some decent stuff around here.

[Anonymous No.4227681]

>>4227608
People are so smart they're recognizing the quality without the name. Intelligence isn't about being able to link up content to source.

[Anonymous No.4227684]

Impressive. I think your next step should be to flog McCains chips.

[Anonymous No.4227686]

like it's not great, it doesn't blow me away. but it's legitimate good

[Fandroid !p6ktXMpsfc No.4227689]

>>4227657
fucking is now an edgy word?

[Anonymous No.4227721]

>>4226092
>the fucking beer is fucking flat
>the fucking flats have fucking rats

I fucking liked that.

[Anonymous No.4227735]

>>4226091
a bit repetitive bro

[Anonymous No.4227746]

pretty horrible, but edgy enough for most of /lit/ folks to like it.

[Anonymous No.4227750]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ulIOrQasR18

[Anonymous No.4227810]

I never got the appeal of John Cooper Clarke

[Anonymous No.4227958]

I'm Russian and a sometimes visit this board.
I have a pre-intermediate English, so I cant catch the point of songs(reading poems), and I cant say anything about smartness of it.

But OPs poem sounds fucking good.

[Anonymous No.4228135]

>>4226091
It's flawed and obvious. yet, in spite of my better judgement, it's working for me.

[Anonymous No.4228142]

>>4226091

[Anonymous No.4228150]

I actually think it's bretty good. Would make a good semi-spoken-word song.

[Anonymous No.4228168]

>>4226091
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=alkM5RCIHuw

[Anonymous No.4228173]

Is this a joke thread?

[Anonymous No.4228401]

>>4226091

I felt like this line needed more syllables.
>don’t make me fucking laugh
perhaps, don't try to make me fucking laugh?

[Anonymous No.4228522]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rBcbc8eWz6U

[Anonymous No.4228530]

SO randum OP! xD

[Anonymous No.4228606]

beautiful

[Anonymous No.4229659]

>>4226091

fucking lol'd and fucking loved

[Anonymous No.4229813]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OGWhjojt5dw

[Anonymous No.4230188]

>>4226091
>>4226092
I actually related to parts of this a lot. This is actually pretty good OP. It has a nice rythym

[Anonymous No.4230217]

>mfw Amerifats can't into John Cooper Clarke

[Anonymous No.4230277]

Cant tell if, trolls trolling trolls or that im embarrassed using my time here