/lit/ - Literature

[Anonymous No.4216500]

Hello everyone, what do you think of my poem?

I’ll push your shit in and stuff your face--
Aurelius, you cocksucker; Furius, you little bitch--
since you think that my little poems
have gone soft and I must not be too upright!
It’s true; the devoted poet should stand erect
in his values, but not necessarily in his little
poems, which are truly witty and charming
when they're a little soft, and not too stiff,
but can still cause a little tingling--
I don't just mean for youth, but for hairy men
who can't make their own loins stand upright!
You! You read about my "many kisses"
and doubt I'm fully a man?
I’ll push your shit in and stuff your face.

[demiurge No.4216506]

sounds more like dialogue than poetry

[Anonymous No.4216507]

Quid Scaepus tuus est, mea columba?

[Anonymous No.4216516]

>>4216500
it reads like something that was translated from latin.

[Anonymous No.4216517]

It just seems angsty, with no value given to the reader or the writer.
I read some /lit/ poems on here and I think you should all go back to the basics. Learn to write structured poems to learn rhythm and develop word play. I find sistinas a good place to start.